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garma garam tandoor.....maza aajataYeah.. thadi ki shaadi jayada sahi lagti apan ko..
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''We suffer more in imagination than in reality"
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Shivani guptaa
''We suffer more in imagination than in reality"
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Tane khane se pet bhar lenaapan ko jaana padta hai.....
nahi jaane pe jab muhalle mein nikalte hai to taane maarte hai ye log....
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Black shandar kahani bhai. 
Thoda hatt ke thi. Koi sci-fi, horror, suspense, mystery, thriller nahi. Bas purely ek sadharan jeevan par adhaarit jisme emotional aspect kaafi zyada tha.
Pacing badhiya thi. Kuchh jagah par thoda zyada fast lagi, par baaki jagah ekdum sahi thi. Different POVs bhi the. Aman ka POV bhi mere khayal se hona chahiye tha kyunki, beginning me poori kahani uski wajah se hi chal rahi thi. But again, word limit ne ise limit kar diya hoga.
Ek aadh jagah hi mujhe grammatical errors mile nahi to aise koi major errors nahi the. Ek jagah ju ne Paridhi ki jagah priya likha hai. Bas wahi tha. Baaki sab to sahi tha.
Kahani aaj ki generation ko bhi reflect karti hai ki kaise bacche apne hi maa baap ko chhor ke chale jaate hai. Paridhi jaisi ladkiyon ka shikaar ho jaate hai aur unke gulaam bann ke reh jaate hai.
Arjun ka modest nature aur humility bakhoobi darshaaya hai. Mere liye wahi sabse badhiya character tha. Narration ne ise heavily carry kiya hai. Dialogues me thodi Kami nazar aayi mujhe. Shayad isliye, first person perspective chuna gaya hai.
Overall, ek behatreen kahani. Emotional ride zaroor karwa degi ye.
Thoda hatt ke thi. Koi sci-fi, horror, suspense, mystery, thriller nahi. Bas purely ek sadharan jeevan par adhaarit jisme emotional aspect kaafi zyada tha.Pacing badhiya thi. Kuchh jagah par thoda zyada fast lagi, par baaki jagah ekdum sahi thi. Different POVs bhi the. Aman ka POV bhi mere khayal se hona chahiye tha kyunki, beginning me poori kahani uski wajah se hi chal rahi thi. But again, word limit ne ise limit kar diya hoga.
Ek aadh jagah hi mujhe grammatical errors mile nahi to aise koi major errors nahi the. Ek jagah ju ne Paridhi ki jagah priya likha hai. Bas wahi tha. Baaki sab to sahi tha.
Kahani aaj ki generation ko bhi reflect karti hai ki kaise bacche apne hi maa baap ko chhor ke chale jaate hai. Paridhi jaisi ladkiyon ka shikaar ho jaate hai aur unke gulaam bann ke reh jaate hai.
Arjun ka modest nature aur humility bakhoobi darshaaya hai. Mere liye wahi sabse badhiya character tha. Narration ne ise heavily carry kiya hai. Dialogues me thodi Kami nazar aayi mujhe. Shayad isliye, first person perspective chuna gaya hai.
Overall, ek behatreen kahani. Emotional ride zaroor karwa degi ye.
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sorry dost......Aasmqqni bhaiya humri story per review kab doge
abhi j dekh leta hu
SKYESH
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LINK bhej de na.... sarkarAasmqqni bhaiya humri story per review kab doge
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Hamesha hi imtehaan chalteJu ke exam kab khatam honge aakhir.
Aakash. , Adirshi , Mr. BERLIN , Ristrcted , Werewolf Raj_sharma , Black
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Kidhar suna?
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