bhai apki writing skill mast h bahut bdia bdia likhte ho bs bhai apko ek suggestions deni h
ki jab kisi ke sath sex scene likhte ho tu usko thora romantic touch diya kro bhai thora main character ka ruthna ek ek dusre se double meaning talk krna etc ek dusre se ruthna mnana in short romantic lage pehle ishtra story me interest rehta h only sex ni bdia lagta
ma apki (parivartan story) read kr raha hu abhi usko me apne ek min sex scene start krte ho aur fir khatam bhi thora ajib lagta baki story bdia h
bhai as a reader apko suggestion diya h kiu ki maximum people romantic touch jyada pasand krte h
agge apki mrzi jaise apko likhna h