Fantasy SURYA (chapter 3) [THE DARK WORLD][Completed]

[Anky@123]

Behtareen update Rahul bahi
Awesome writing jese sab samne hi ho rha ho.jo bhi hai maja bahut aane wala hai aur kya yaha pe young generation ka romance bhi dikhai dega kya

 

[Akil]

Hmm toh ab Kaal ka bada bhai Vikraal aayega badla lene dekhte hain ki woh kya karega ab Surya and team ke saath wese is Vikraal ka band baap ki jagah bachche bajaaein toh mast rahega

 

[Htcw456]

UPDATE - 17
















Charo bache apne clg pahuch chuke the. Or class shuru hone me abhi waqt tha to vo canteen main hi time pass kar rahe the. Unke sath unke kuch dost bhi baithe hue the.



INTRODUCTION



KIRAN- ye ashk ki friend hai usi ki class me hi padti hai. Iski age ashk ke barabar hi hai. Or iske pita ek bade businessman hai. Kiran thodi Bold type ki ladki hai.kapdo se bhi or vicharon se bhi. Isse agar koi live in me rehne ko kahe to bhi ye mana nahi karegi. Lekin ye har kisi ko bhav nahi deti hai. Apne papa ki ladli hai. Or maa ki bhi kyuki ye eklouti hai.




Charu- ye bhi ashk or kiran ke sath unhi ki class main hai. Ye thodi natkhat type ki ladki hai. Iske dill me kuch bhi chhipa nahi reh sakta. Ye jaisi bahar hai vaisi hi andar bhi hai. Jise jo bhi kehna hota hai muh per hi keh deti hai. Iske pita ek govt. Job karte hai. Lekin dono hi apni beti per jaan chhidakte hai. Iska ek chhota bhai bhi hai. Jo filhaal school main hai.





Iske aalwa.
Inke group me 1 ladke or bhi hai.


Jatin- ye ladka samar ka dost hai. Or baaki sabhi ka bhi. Ye Samar or amar ka hi class mate hai. Ye subhav se normal hai. Na jyada gusse wala na hi jyada shant. Na hi jyada chanchal. Isme sabhi gun achhi khasi maatra main moujud hai. Baaki bharosemand hai. Samar ka khasa hai. Iske pita ek private job hi karte hai. Or maa bhi. Ye ghar ka ek louta bacha hai jis bajah se ise bahut laad pyar se pala hai. Lekin isne kabhi bhi us pyar ka galat fayeda nahi uthaya hai. Sayad ise bachpan se hi achhi sangat mili hai. Or yahi baat iske mata pita bhi jaante hai. Jis bajah se unhe is per or pyar aata hai. Or iske liye bina kahe hi gifts bagera laate rehte hai.







To ab kahani per aate hai.



Ye 7 log bahi per baithe hue the.



Charu- yaar tum log kaha gayab ho gye the. Pichhle kai mahino se clg me dikhe hi nahi. Na hi koi contact ho pa raha tha tum logo se. Kahi holiday per gye the kya.




Ashk- nahi yaar ghar gye the. Thodi problem chal rahi thi isi bajah se.





Kiran- baise us din se tumhare dad bhi nahi dikhe kaha hai aajkal vo.





Ashk- bas kar jyada laar mat tapka. Dad hai vo mere.






Avi- ha kiran kyu meri mom ka ghar todne per tuli ho.


Ye sunke kiran ne apna muh teda kar liya. Or baaki sabhi hasne lage.




Ashk- baise batao kya chal raha hai clg me. Koi khaas baat.





Charu- bahi same. Boring lacture. Or kuch excitement rahi hi nahi clg main.




Kiran- ha yaar




Jatin- baise tumhe kya exiting karna hai.




Kiran- kuch bhi jisme maja aaye.




Samar- theek hai ek kaam karte hai sham ko club chalte hai. Kya khayal hai.





Charu- club to jaate hi rehte hai.kuch or naya bolo na.




Avi- house party.




Amar- koi occasion bhi to hona chahiye.





Samar- baise 2 din baad hamare avi or ashk ka birthday hai. Isse badiya occasion kya hoga.





Amar- are ha. Main to bhool hi gya tha. Badiya hai.




Kiran- mere farmhouse per Chalke mast party karenge. Or clg se sabhi ko invite karenge. Sabhi milke dhamaal masti karenge.






Samar- idea achha hai lekin tumhare farmhouse per nahi. Hamare ghar per. Ek to tumhara farmhouse bahut dur hai. Jis bajah se jyada log aa nahi payenge. Or hamara ghar pass main hi hai to jyada log aayenge.





Charu- ha theek hai. Baise bhi hamne tumhara ghar dekha nahi hai. Isi bahane dekh lenge.




Kiran- yahi wala ghar na. Ya fir gaon wala.





Amar- yahi wala. Baise bhi hamara gaon ab gaon nahi hai. Balki is country ka sabse devloped mini city ban gya hai. Baha per airport bhi hai. Isliye use gaon kehna band kardo.





Insab ki baate avi or ashk sun rahe the.




Avi- ok theek hai behas band karo. Or us din clg ke notice board per notice laga dena or hostel main bhi. Taaki jyada se jyada logo ko pata chal sake or vo aa sake.




Samar- ho jayega dont worry.




Ashk- or ha hamare gifts bhi yaad se le aana.




Amar- vaise kya laaye inke liye.



Jatin- ashk ko to koi bhi gift chal jayega lekin is avi ko kya gift denge. Ye socho.




Samar- ha yaar.




Avi- no thanks mujhe kuch nahi chahiye.




Charu- aise kaise. Ham to denge.




Avi- to fir jo achha lage le aana. Chalo ab class ka time ho gya hai.




Uske baad sabhi baha se apni apni classes main chale gye.










Bahi earth se kai yojan dur ek chhote se grah per.




This is tha. HELL.


Ye ek chhota sa grah hai. Lekin yaha ke logo ke pass alokik shaktiya hai. Jiska pura control yaha ke raja ke pass rehta hai. Or technology ke mamle main bhi ye grah peeche nahi hai. Yaha per jadu or science ka adbhut taalmail dekhne ko milta hai.or kaal bhi isi grah ka nivasi tha. Isi bajah se vo prithvi per senoy ke kaafi kaam aaya tha. Nai nai technology ko banane main. Yaha ke raja ki kaafi jaankari aapko pehle hi dev ke dwara di ja chuki hai. Ki ye kya karte hai or kyu. Brahmand me rehne wale har ek jeev ko niyati khud unke hisaab se kaam sopti hai. Or yaha ka raja bhi unhi main se ek hai. Ise bhi niyati ne hi ye shaktiya or ye kaam diya hai. Lekin iska beta kuch alag hai. Vo niyati main yakeen nahi rakhta balki apni niyati khud banata hai. Or uski shaktiya bhi yaha ke raja ke control se bahar thi. Or isi soch ke tahat usne yaha ka takhta palat karne ki kosis ki. Or apne pita ko maarne ki bhi kosis ki. Taaki vo yaha se samast brahmand per apna raaj faila sake. Lekin uske pita ko uski is soch ki bhanak lag gyi. Or unhone apni saari shaktiyo ko laga kar black heart ki aatma ko qaid kar liya. Or uske bejaan sarir ko brahmand main chhod diya. Or jo bhi black heart ke samarthak the unhen qaid kar liya. Lekin kaal us samay baha per moujud nahi tha. Jis bajah se vo bach gya. Or use jab black heart ke baare me khabar lagi to usne sabse pehle uski body ko dhunda or use ek surakshit sthan per chhipa diya. Or fir vo nikal pada paras pathar ki khoj main. Vo black heart ke sabhi samarthakon ke sampark me rehta tha taaki vo use bata sake ki paras pathar use kaha mil sakta hai. Or isi tarah usne aadhe se jyada brahmand ko chhan mara lekin use vo nahi mila lekin prithvi per jaate hi use pathar ke hone ka ehsaas hone laga. Tabhi uska samana surya se hogya. Or surya ke hatho uski haalat buri hone ke baad uske aham ko chot lagi or usne tay kiya ki pehle surya ko maarega fir hi vo apna maksad pura karega. Or isi liye usne senoy ka sath diya. Taaki senoy bhi uske kaam aaye us pathar ko dhudne main. Lekin yaha sab ulta hota gya. Surya ne uske sabhi mansubon per paani fer diya. Or jab usne future me jaake dekha ki uski mout hone wali hai to usne khud ko bacha liya or john ko maarke uska rup leke senoy ke sath ho gya. Jiske bare me senoy ko bhi khabar nahi thi. Or vo jaan gya tha ki iska bhi ant najdeek hai isliye usna use bachane ka prayas nahi kiya or uske jaane ke baad usne apni hi ek aarmy banai or use gupchup tarike se pathar ko dhudne ka kaam sopa or sath hi surya se nipatne ki tayyari karne laga.jisme use kaafi samay bhi lag gya. Kyuki prithvi itni badi hai jaha use ghas main sui dhundna tha. Or isme time to lagna hi tha. Lekin jab use vo pathar mili to uske liye ye kahabat sach ho gyi ki hath ko aaya per muh na laga.


Khair ab aage dekhte hai kya hota hai.


Baha per moujud sabhi logo ko ye pata lag chuka tha ki kaal ab nahi raha hai. Yaha per sabhi logo ko kaal se ummid thi ki vo kuch bhi karke paras pathar le aayega or blackheart fir se jeevit ho jayega.



Raja ko keval uska beta hi kafi takkar de sakta hai. Or agar uske pass paras pathar aajtaa to fir raja ki mout nischit thi. Lekin filhaal raja bahut kush tha. Or jashn mana raha tha apni is jeet ka. Vo bhi kaal ko kai varshon se dhudnd raha tha lekin kaal har baar uske hatho se nikal jata tha. Lekin jab use pata chala ki kaal mar gya hau tabse pure Hell main jashn ka mahool hai. Kyuki unhe viswas hai ki ab sayad hi koi fir se black heart ko jinda karne ki kosis karega. Bahi raja ki najar surya per bhi pad chuki thi or use viswas ho gya tha ki surya sabki band baja dega.






Bahi jail main baithe black heart ke samarthak bahut hi mayus the. Lekin unme ek maha kameena bhi moujud tha jiske pass ek plan tha.
Or sabhi usi ki taraf dekh rahe the.





À1- tum itna kyu muskura rahe ho. Kaal mara gya or tumhe kushi ho rahi hai.




Takshak- ha mujhe dukh hai kaal ke jaane ka. Lekin main kush is liye ho raha hu kyuki mere pass ek yojna hai. Jisse hame fir se paras pathar mil sakta hai or blackheart fir se jeevit ho sakta hai.



Ye sunte hi sabhi ek tuk use dekhne lage.




A2- kya yojna hai tumhare paas.





Takshak- pehle to ye ki prithvi per jarur koi bahut hi powerfull shakti hai kyuki kaal ko maar pana behad hi muskil tha. Ye to sabhi jante hi hai. Isliye hame ab kaal se bhi jyada shaktishali yodha ko baha bhejna hoga. Taaki vo us insaan ko khatm kar sake or usse vo pathar bapis haasil kar sake.






A2- tumhara kehna sahi hai. Agar ham ka jail main na hote to hamare pass bhi asimit shaktiyan hoti. Fir hamme se koi bhi us dust insaan ko khatm kar sakta tha. Lekin is jail ke andar hamari shaktiya kaam hi nahi karti hai. To fir aisa konsa yodha hai jise ham baha bhej sakte hai.







Takshak- sayad tum vikraal ko bhul gaye ho. Jo ki kaal ka hi bada bhai hai. Or shaktiyo main kaal se kai guna jyada shaktishali hai. Or sabse jaruri baat ki vo bhi black heart ka khaas hai. Or agar ham usse kahenge to vo jarur baha per jayega or apne bhai ki mout ka badla bhi lega or usse paras pathar bhi le aayega.





Ye sunte hi baha moujud sabhi ke chehre per ek kameeni muskurahat fail gyi.





À1- tumne sahi kaha. Ham vikraal ko kaise bhul sakte hai.






Baha per kuch logo ko abhi vikraal ke baare main nahi pata tha lekin. Jab uski itni tariff vo sun rahe the to unhone apna ek sawaal kiya.





A5- agar vo itna hi takatvar hai to kyu na usse kaho ki hame hi yaha se bahar nikaal de. Baaki kaam to ham fir kar hi lenge.






Takshak- aisa nahi kar sakte. Kyuki vikraal ko yaha se niskashit kiya gya hai. Agar vo yaha pair bhi rakhega to uski shaktiya usi samay khatm ho jayegi. Or isi bajah se kaal or vikraal dono hi yaha ke raja se nafrat karte hai. Or blackheart ka support karte hai. Kyuki unhe yaha bapis jo aana hai.or sath main raja se badla jo lena tha.







A5- matlab hame keval blackheart hi aazad kara sakta hai.





À1- ha. Isiliye ham sabhi uske jeevit hone ki raah dekh rahe hai. Khair ye sab chhodiye. Aap turant hi vikraal se sampark keejiye or use saari baat bataiye or use jaldi hi prithvi per jaane ko kahiye. Kyuki ab or intjaar karna hamare bas main nahi hai.





Takshak- theek hai………..














To be continue……………………..

Mind blowing update hai dear

 

[Vk248517]

UPDATE - 17
















Charo bache apne clg pahuch chuke the. Or class shuru hone me abhi waqt tha to vo canteen main hi time pass kar rahe the. Unke sath unke kuch dost bhi baithe hue the.



INTRODUCTION



KIRAN- ye ashk ki friend hai usi ki class me hi padti hai. Iski age ashk ke barabar hi hai. Or iske pita ek bade businessman hai. Kiran thodi Bold type ki ladki hai.kapdo se bhi or vicharon se bhi. Isse agar koi live in me rehne ko kahe to bhi ye mana nahi karegi. Lekin ye har kisi ko bhav nahi deti hai. Apne papa ki ladli hai. Or maa ki bhi kyuki ye eklouti hai.




Charu- ye bhi ashk or kiran ke sath unhi ki class main hai. Ye thodi natkhat type ki ladki hai. Iske dill me kuch bhi chhipa nahi reh sakta. Ye jaisi bahar hai vaisi hi andar bhi hai. Jise jo bhi kehna hota hai muh per hi keh deti hai. Iske pita ek govt. Job karte hai. Lekin dono hi apni beti per jaan chhidakte hai. Iska ek chhota bhai bhi hai. Jo filhaal school main hai.





Iske aalwa.
Inke group me 1 ladke or bhi hai.


Jatin- ye ladka samar ka dost hai. Or baaki sabhi ka bhi. Ye Samar or amar ka hi class mate hai. Ye subhav se normal hai. Na jyada gusse wala na hi jyada shant. Na hi jyada chanchal. Isme sabhi gun achhi khasi maatra main moujud hai. Baaki bharosemand hai. Samar ka khasa hai. Iske pita ek private job hi karte hai. Or maa bhi. Ye ghar ka ek louta bacha hai jis bajah se ise bahut laad pyar se pala hai. Lekin isne kabhi bhi us pyar ka galat fayeda nahi uthaya hai. Sayad ise bachpan se hi achhi sangat mili hai. Or yahi baat iske mata pita bhi jaante hai. Jis bajah se unhe is per or pyar aata hai. Or iske liye bina kahe hi gifts bagera laate rehte hai.







To ab kahani per aate hai.



Ye 7 log bahi per baithe hue the.



Charu- yaar tum log kaha gayab ho gye the. Pichhle kai mahino se clg me dikhe hi nahi. Na hi koi contact ho pa raha tha tum logo se. Kahi holiday per gye the kya.




Ashk- nahi yaar ghar gye the. Thodi problem chal rahi thi isi bajah se.





Kiran- baise us din se tumhare dad bhi nahi dikhe kaha hai aajkal vo.





Ashk- bas kar jyada laar mat tapka. Dad hai vo mere.






Avi- ha kiran kyu meri mom ka ghar todne per tuli ho.


Ye sunke kiran ne apna muh teda kar liya. Or baaki sabhi hasne lage.




Ashk- baise batao kya chal raha hai clg me. Koi khaas baat.





Charu- bahi same. Boring lacture. Or kuch excitement rahi hi nahi clg main.




Kiran- ha yaar




Jatin- baise tumhe kya exiting karna hai.




Kiran- kuch bhi jisme maja aaye.




Samar- theek hai ek kaam karte hai sham ko club chalte hai. Kya khayal hai.





Charu- club to jaate hi rehte hai.kuch or naya bolo na.




Avi- house party.




Amar- koi occasion bhi to hona chahiye.





Samar- baise 2 din baad hamare avi or ashk ka birthday hai. Isse badiya occasion kya hoga.





Amar- are ha. Main to bhool hi gya tha. Badiya hai.




Kiran- mere farmhouse per Chalke mast party karenge. Or clg se sabhi ko invite karenge. Sabhi milke dhamaal masti karenge.






Samar- idea achha hai lekin tumhare farmhouse per nahi. Hamare ghar per. Ek to tumhara farmhouse bahut dur hai. Jis bajah se jyada log aa nahi payenge. Or hamara ghar pass main hi hai to jyada log aayenge.





Charu- ha theek hai. Baise bhi hamne tumhara ghar dekha nahi hai. Isi bahane dekh lenge.




Kiran- yahi wala ghar na. Ya fir gaon wala.





Amar- yahi wala. Baise bhi hamara gaon ab gaon nahi hai. Balki is country ka sabse devloped mini city ban gya hai. Baha per airport bhi hai. Isliye use gaon kehna band kardo.





Insab ki baate avi or ashk sun rahe the.




Avi- ok theek hai behas band karo. Or us din clg ke notice board per notice laga dena or hostel main bhi. Taaki jyada se jyada logo ko pata chal sake or vo aa sake.




Samar- ho jayega dont worry.




Ashk- or ha hamare gifts bhi yaad se le aana.




Amar- vaise kya laaye inke liye.



Jatin- ashk ko to koi bhi gift chal jayega lekin is avi ko kya gift denge. Ye socho.




Samar- ha yaar.




Avi- no thanks mujhe kuch nahi chahiye.




Charu- aise kaise. Ham to denge.




Avi- to fir jo achha lage le aana. Chalo ab class ka time ho gya hai.




Uske baad sabhi baha se apni apni classes main chale gye.










Bahi earth se kai yojan dur ek chhote se grah per.




This is tha. HELL.


Ye ek chhota sa grah hai. Lekin yaha ke logo ke pass alokik shaktiya hai. Jiska pura control yaha ke raja ke pass rehta hai. Or technology ke mamle main bhi ye grah peeche nahi hai. Yaha per jadu or science ka adbhut taalmail dekhne ko milta hai.or kaal bhi isi grah ka nivasi tha. Isi bajah se vo prithvi per senoy ke kaafi kaam aaya tha. Nai nai technology ko banane main. Yaha ke raja ki kaafi jaankari aapko pehle hi dev ke dwara di ja chuki hai. Ki ye kya karte hai or kyu. Brahmand me rehne wale har ek jeev ko niyati khud unke hisaab se kaam sopti hai. Or yaha ka raja bhi unhi main se ek hai. Ise bhi niyati ne hi ye shaktiya or ye kaam diya hai. Lekin iska beta kuch alag hai. Vo niyati main yakeen nahi rakhta balki apni niyati khud banata hai. Or uski shaktiya bhi yaha ke raja ke control se bahar thi. Or isi soch ke tahat usne yaha ka takhta palat karne ki kosis ki. Or apne pita ko maarne ki bhi kosis ki. Taaki vo yaha se samast brahmand per apna raaj faila sake. Lekin uske pita ko uski is soch ki bhanak lag gyi. Or unhone apni saari shaktiyo ko laga kar black heart ki aatma ko qaid kar liya. Or uske bejaan sarir ko brahmand main chhod diya. Or jo bhi black heart ke samarthak the unhen qaid kar liya. Lekin kaal us samay baha per moujud nahi tha. Jis bajah se vo bach gya. Or use jab black heart ke baare me khabar lagi to usne sabse pehle uski body ko dhunda or use ek surakshit sthan per chhipa diya. Or fir vo nikal pada paras pathar ki khoj main. Vo black heart ke sabhi samarthakon ke sampark me rehta tha taaki vo use bata sake ki paras pathar use kaha mil sakta hai. Or isi tarah usne aadhe se jyada brahmand ko chhan mara lekin use vo nahi mila lekin prithvi per jaate hi use pathar ke hone ka ehsaas hone laga. Tabhi uska samana surya se hogya. Or surya ke hatho uski haalat buri hone ke baad uske aham ko chot lagi or usne tay kiya ki pehle surya ko maarega fir hi vo apna maksad pura karega. Or isi liye usne senoy ka sath diya. Taaki senoy bhi uske kaam aaye us pathar ko dhudne main. Lekin yaha sab ulta hota gya. Surya ne uske sabhi mansubon per paani fer diya. Or jab usne future me jaake dekha ki uski mout hone wali hai to usne khud ko bacha liya or john ko maarke uska rup leke senoy ke sath ho gya. Jiske bare me senoy ko bhi khabar nahi thi. Or vo jaan gya tha ki iska bhi ant najdeek hai isliye usna use bachane ka prayas nahi kiya or uske jaane ke baad usne apni hi ek aarmy banai or use gupchup tarike se pathar ko dhudne ka kaam sopa or sath hi surya se nipatne ki tayyari karne laga.jisme use kaafi samay bhi lag gya. Kyuki prithvi itni badi hai jaha use ghas main sui dhundna tha. Or isme time to lagna hi tha. Lekin jab use vo pathar mili to uske liye ye kahabat sach ho gyi ki hath ko aaya per muh na laga.


Khair ab aage dekhte hai kya hota hai.


Baha per moujud sabhi logo ko ye pata lag chuka tha ki kaal ab nahi raha hai. Yaha per sabhi logo ko kaal se ummid thi ki vo kuch bhi karke paras pathar le aayega or blackheart fir se jeevit ho jayega.



Raja ko keval uska beta hi kafi takkar de sakta hai. Or agar uske pass paras pathar aajtaa to fir raja ki mout nischit thi. Lekin filhaal raja bahut kush tha. Or jashn mana raha tha apni is jeet ka. Vo bhi kaal ko kai varshon se dhudnd raha tha lekin kaal har baar uske hatho se nikal jata tha. Lekin jab use pata chala ki kaal mar gya hau tabse pure Hell main jashn ka mahool hai. Kyuki unhe viswas hai ki ab sayad hi koi fir se black heart ko jinda karne ki kosis karega. Bahi raja ki najar surya per bhi pad chuki thi or use viswas ho gya tha ki surya sabki band baja dega.






Bahi jail main baithe black heart ke samarthak bahut hi mayus the. Lekin unme ek maha kameena bhi moujud tha jiske pass ek plan tha.
Or sabhi usi ki taraf dekh rahe the.





À1- tum itna kyu muskura rahe ho. Kaal mara gya or tumhe kushi ho rahi hai.




Takshak- ha mujhe dukh hai kaal ke jaane ka. Lekin main kush is liye ho raha hu kyuki mere pass ek yojna hai. Jisse hame fir se paras pathar mil sakta hai or blackheart fir se jeevit ho sakta hai.



Ye sunte hi sabhi ek tuk use dekhne lage.




A2- kya yojna hai tumhare paas.





Takshak- pehle to ye ki prithvi per jarur koi bahut hi powerfull shakti hai kyuki kaal ko maar pana behad hi muskil tha. Ye to sabhi jante hi hai. Isliye hame ab kaal se bhi jyada shaktishali yodha ko baha bhejna hoga. Taaki vo us insaan ko khatm kar sake or usse vo pathar bapis haasil kar sake.






A2- tumhara kehna sahi hai. Agar ham ka jail main na hote to hamare pass bhi asimit shaktiyan hoti. Fir hamme se koi bhi us dust insaan ko khatm kar sakta tha. Lekin is jail ke andar hamari shaktiya kaam hi nahi karti hai. To fir aisa konsa yodha hai jise ham baha bhej sakte hai.







Takshak- sayad tum vikraal ko bhul gaye ho. Jo ki kaal ka hi bada bhai hai. Or shaktiyo main kaal se kai guna jyada shaktishali hai. Or sabse jaruri baat ki vo bhi black heart ka khaas hai. Or agar ham usse kahenge to vo jarur baha per jayega or apne bhai ki mout ka badla bhi lega or usse paras pathar bhi le aayega.





Ye sunte hi baha moujud sabhi ke chehre per ek kameeni muskurahat fail gyi.





À1- tumne sahi kaha. Ham vikraal ko kaise bhul sakte hai.






Baha per kuch logo ko abhi vikraal ke baare main nahi pata tha lekin. Jab uski itni tariff vo sun rahe the to unhone apna ek sawaal kiya.





A5- agar vo itna hi takatvar hai to kyu na usse kaho ki hame hi yaha se bahar nikaal de. Baaki kaam to ham fir kar hi lenge.






Takshak- aisa nahi kar sakte. Kyuki vikraal ko yaha se niskashit kiya gya hai. Agar vo yaha pair bhi rakhega to uski shaktiya usi samay khatm ho jayegi. Or isi bajah se kaal or vikraal dono hi yaha ke raja se nafrat karte hai. Or blackheart ka support karte hai. Kyuki unhe yaha bapis jo aana hai.or sath main raja se badla jo lena tha.







A5- matlab hame keval blackheart hi aazad kara sakta hai.





À1- ha. Isiliye ham sabhi uske jeevit hone ki raah dekh rahe hai. Khair ye sab chhodiye. Aap turant hi vikraal se sampark keejiye or use saari baat bataiye or use jaldi hi prithvi per jaane ko kahiye. Kyuki ab or intjaar karna hamare bas main nahi hai.





Takshak- theek hai………..














To be continue……………………..

Nice updates bro

 

[Ayush2017]

Awesome

 

[Xabhi]

Superb update bhai sandar

 

[Rudrathakur]

Aakhir kaar kaal mrr hi gya srry kal update pdhne ke baad review nhi de ska neend bahut tez aa rhi thi to update pdhte me hi so gya tha fir mrng me kaam me lg gya tha...
To kaal overconfident aur ek dum surprised hone ke karan mara gya ...agr wo turnt sambhal pata to sayd mrta nhi khair jo bhi hua achha hi hua..ab paras patthar surya and team ke paas h dekhte h wo isse kya kr paate h aur kaise isko surakshit rkhne ke liye intzaamat krte h...
Wahi hell me bhi sbko khabar lg chuki h kaal ke mrne ki aur ye takshak naam ka susra kaal ke bde bhai ko bhadka kr yaha earth pr bhejne wala h..aur. Wo bhi kaal ki maut ki khabar sunte hi yaha tabahi machane aur paras patthar lene jald hi aayega dekhte h kya hota h ab aage...
Waiting for the next brother..

 

[Reza]

Superb Update Bro...
Waiting For Next

 

[jitutripathi00]

UPDATE - 16
















Kaal baha per hi khada tha or apne gusse ko kabu karne ki kosis kar raha tha. Or soch raha tha ki jisne bhi ye kiya hai. Vo yaha tak pahucha kaise. Tabhi uske kaano me ek aawaj padti hai.





Kaal- achha hua tum yaha aagye veer. Aaj tumhe bhi tumhare bhai surya ke pass pahucha dunga. Lekin usse pehle bas itna bata do ki vo pathar kaha hai. Or agar nahi batana chahte to mat batao. Kyuki us pathar ke liye main tumhare pure khandan ko itna tadpaunga ki vo khud mujhe vo de denge. Or uske baad main sabhi ko maar dunga. Ab faisla tumhe karna hai.




Uski ye baat sunkar mujhe gussa aana chahiye lekin main ek dum shant tha. Or us per has raha tha.





Main- kya baat hai. Aaj tujhe is haalat me dekhkar kitna maja aaraha hai main bata nahi sakta. Or rahi baat mujhe surya ke pass pahuchane ki to tere liye ek surprise hai.



Ye kehke maine apna mask hata diya. Or uske saamne aaya mera real face jise dekhte hi vo char kadam peechhe hat gya.




Kaal- ye impossible hai. Tu jinda kaise ho sakta hai. Jarur ye bhi tune mask pehna hai surya ka.





Main- tere is sawaal ka mere pass ek hi jawab hai.




"JAAKO RAAKHE SAIYYAN

MAAR SAKE NA KOI"






main- ummid hai tu iska matlab samajh hua hoga.





Kaal- achha hai. Baise bhi maine tujhe apne hatho se maarna chahta tha. Na ki baise jaise maine tujhe us black hole me pahuchaya tha. Ab meri vo ikchha bhi puri hogi.





Main- to fir der kis baat ki aaja.




Ye kehke maine doud laga ke uske chehre per ek punch mara. Punch kuch jyada hi power wala tha. Jisse udta hua vo laga ek ped se. Or vo ped beech me se toot gya.or isse pehle ki vo uthta main uske pass gya or use apne hatho se hawa me utha liya. Or us tute hue ped jo ki kisi nukile bhale ki tarah ho gya tha. Usper patak diya. Or uske sarir me vo ped aar paar nikal gya. Ek tarah se vo usi me fas gya tha.




Or use ab ho raha tha bhayankar dard jiski bajah se vo bahut hi bhayank chilla raha tha.or uthne ki kosis kar raha tha. Lekin vo uth nahi pa raha tha kyuki uska sarir aadhe ped me ghusa hua tha. Or use uthne ke liye koi saport nahi mil pa raha tha.




Main- uth saale ab dikha apna gussa. Sale mujhe black hole me bhejega. Maine kaha tha na ki main tujhe aisi mout marunga ki tu bas sochta hi reh jayega ki ye hua kaise. Tabhi maine apni sword se uske dono kandhe kaat diye. Or uska garden or kandhe wala hissa neeche ja gira lekin vo abhi bhi ped me ho fasa hua tha. Isse pehle ki vo fir se judta maine uske andar hath dala or uska dil nikaal liya. Or vo dil nikalne me hi bahut takat lagani pad rahi thi. Kyuki uski body use apne pass kheech rahi thi. Uski puri body me bhayankar kampann hone laga tha.


Maine apni talwar ko uske dil me fasa diya jisse uski body bhayankar jhatke lene lagi. Uske baad maine lighter se bahi sukhi ghaas per aag lagai or uske dil ko kabab ki tarah usme daal diya.


Meri talwar mere hath se chhutne ki kosis kar rahi thi uske dil ki bajah se lekin meri pakad kaafi majbut thi. Or dil nikaal lene ki bajah se uska sir jo neeche pada hua tha vo bhi nahi jud pa raha tha.




Or aise hi karib 30 min. Ki bhunai ke baad uska dil puri tarah se rakh me badal gya. Or uske dil ke khatm hote hi uska sarir bhi kisi pathar ki tarah toot kar bikhar gya.or fir apne aap hi punchtatva me vileen ho gya.




Or yaha per kaal ka ant ho gya puri tarah se. Bina koi bhi jokhim uthaye.



Saale ne bahut paresaan kiya tha. Lekin akhir kaar ye apne anjaam tak pahuch gya.




Maine apni talwar aag se bahar nikali or aag me dekha to uske dil ka bhi namo nishan nahi bacha tha.


Main puri tarah sure hona chah raha tha ki ye mar gya hai. Kahi aisa na ho ki ye sala fir se kaise bhi jinda ho jaye. Or mera time barbaad kare.




Jab main puri tarah se sure ho gya. To baha se chala gya seedha airport. Jaha harry ne mera plane bapis bhej diya tha. Darashal main isi plan se yaha aaya tha plan bhai ko le ke chala gaya or main yahi jungle me aake iski raah dekhne laga. Or Harry ne us per kadak najar rakho ki kahi ye fir se apne kisi clone ko yaha na bhej de. Lekin aisa nahi hua.




Sayad use mere yaha hone ki ummid bilkul bhi nahi thi. Or yahi iski sabse badi bhool thi. Or dusri baat. Mere black hole me jaane ke baad usne overconfident main time travel nahi kiya Verna pakka ye is samay meri band baja deta. Lekin kehte hai na. Ki geedad ki jab mout aati hai to vo sehar ki taraf jata hai. Or jab is kaal ki mout aai to ye jungle ki taraf aaya.



Lekin aaplog thode confuse jarur honge ki bhai ne jab uske kuch sathiyo ko maar diya tha to ye khabar kaal tak kyu nahi pahuch paai. Kyuki agar ye khabar use pata chal jaati fir to hungama pakka tha. Or us gufa me alarm bhi baje the. Iski jaankari bhi kaal ko nahi di gyi. Akhir kyu?


To iska jawab ye hai ki. Sabse pehla kaam to Harry ne kiya. Us area ke saare signals ko jam karke. Jis bajah se vo log kaal ko inform nahi kar pa rahe the ki yaha per kya hua hai. Or dusri baat unhe bhi nahi pata tha ki yaha per ye sab jo hua hai ye kisne kiya hai. Or agar unki security me itni badi galti vo khud hi kaal ko batate to sabse pehle to kaal unhi ko maar deta. Kyuki vo apne kaam me itni laparwahi bardast nahi karta hai. Or isi liye jab signal janm hone ki bajah se kaal ka contact nahi hua to unlogo ne socha ki jab hame vo pathar mil jayega tab ham kaal ko ye sab batayenge. Kyuki us samay uska mood achha hoga or usi kushi me sayad vo in sabko na maare. Bahi in 3 dino me kaal bhi us gufa ki taraf Bapis nahi gya tha. Kyuki vo nahi chahta tha ki kisi ki najar us per pade ki ye achanak se kaha chala jata hai. Isliye jab tak kuch khaas kaam nahi hota hai tab tak vo baha nahi jata hai. Or dusri baat ye ki veer har samay uske sath hi rehta tha. Din me use ek min. Ke liye bhi akela nahi chhodta tha. Kisi na kisi kaam se uske aas pass hi rehta tha. Jis bajah se vo apna kaam nahi kar pa raha tha. Vo raat me baha ja sakta tha. Lekin vo khud hi baha nahi jata tha.


Bahi sabse imp baat. Ki kaal to time travel karke dekh sakta tha ki uske sath kya hone wala hai or kya nahi.

To usne surya ko black hole me pahuchane ke baad time travel kiya tha. Or usne pure 1 saal aage tak ka future dekh liya tha. Jisme use surya kahi nahi dikha. Or uske bhai bhi ek dum hatash or nirash hi dikhate the. Jis bajah se vo sure ho gya tha ki ab surya kabhi Bapis nahi aane wala hai. Isiliye usne apna sara dhyan keval paras pathar per hi focus karna suru kar diya. Or usne past me time travel karna start kiya. Or paras pathar ko trace karne laga. Halaki pehle bhi usne trace kiya tha. Lekin uski exact jagah use abhi tak pata nahi chali thi. Isliye usne firse past me travel kiya or use is baar jagah ka pata chal gya. Or usne fir Kohima ke jungalo me paras pathar se nikalne wali reading ko pakadna start kar diya. Jisme use 3-4 mahine lag gye. Us pathar ki jagah dhudne me. Use exact location per 0.01% reading mil gyi. Jo ki kaafi thi baha per khudai karne ke liye. Or bas usne fir bahi ke ACP ka roop liya or apna kaam karne laga. Bahi beech beech me vo 1-2 mahine ka time travel bhi karta rehta tha taaki aage agar kahi kuch gadbad ho to vo uska pata laga sake. Bahi use pura confident tha ki uska pata surya ke bhai kabhi nahi laga payenge. Kyuki usne 1 saal aage tak ka future dekha tha surya ke parivar ka or use pata chal gya tha ki inse na ho payega. Or isi overconfident ne aaj uska kaam tamam kar diya. Halaki surya ki planning kuch khaas nahi thi. Lekin yaha per kaal khud apni galti se mara gya.



Khair ghar aake maine sabko kush khabri di. Jise sunke sabhi bahut kush ho gye.


Ab rahi baat us paras pathar ki to iska kya karna hai mujhe nahi pata tha. Filhaal isko safe rakhna tha. Taaki ye kisi or ke hath na lage. Or jaha tak baat rahi blackheart ki to meri sixth sense mujhse keh rahi thi ki usko jinda karne ke liye aage bahut log aane wale hai. Isliye saabdhan to rehna hi padega.




Agle din se ham sabhi ki normal life shuru ho gyi. Bache bapis clg jaane lage or sunny rishi Aarav or aadil apne apne city bapis chale gye. Bahi bhai main or Rony apne business me lag gye.






(Yaha per surya ki kahani ka ek chapter close ho chuka hai. Or ab agla chapter shuru hota hai. Jisme kai supernatural shaktiyo se surya or uske pariwar ka saamna hoga. Jinme ek eham role yuva peedi bhi nibhayegi. Or next update se kahani ka focus hoga bacho ki clg life per. Or jaise jaise story ki aage badhegi baise baise naye dushman aate jayenge. Bas apna sath banaye rakhe.)









To be continue………………….

Behtareen update bhai,
waise to mujhe lga tha ki surya aor kaal ki ladai bahut romanchak hone wali hai, but aisa nahi hua.
Waiting for next update

 

[Nevil singh]

UPDATE - 17
















Charo bache apne clg pahuch chuke the. Or class shuru hone me abhi waqt tha to vo canteen main hi time pass kar rahe the. Unke sath unke kuch dost bhi baithe hue the.



INTRODUCTION



KIRAN- ye ashk ki friend hai usi ki class me hi padti hai. Iski age ashk ke barabar hi hai. Or iske pita ek bade businessman hai. Kiran thodi Bold type ki ladki hai.kapdo se bhi or vicharon se bhi. Isse agar koi live in me rehne ko kahe to bhi ye mana nahi karegi. Lekin ye har kisi ko bhav nahi deti hai. Apne papa ki ladli hai. Or maa ki bhi kyuki ye eklouti hai.




Charu- ye bhi ashk or kiran ke sath unhi ki class main hai. Ye thodi natkhat type ki ladki hai. Iske dill me kuch bhi chhipa nahi reh sakta. Ye jaisi bahar hai vaisi hi andar bhi hai. Jise jo bhi kehna hota hai muh per hi keh deti hai. Iske pita ek govt. Job karte hai. Lekin dono hi apni beti per jaan chhidakte hai. Iska ek chhota bhai bhi hai. Jo filhaal school main hai.





Iske aalwa.
Inke group me 1 ladke or bhi hai.


Jatin- ye ladka samar ka dost hai. Or baaki sabhi ka bhi. Ye Samar or amar ka hi class mate hai. Ye subhav se normal hai. Na jyada gusse wala na hi jyada shant. Na hi jyada chanchal. Isme sabhi gun achhi khasi maatra main moujud hai. Baaki bharosemand hai. Samar ka khasa hai. Iske pita ek private job hi karte hai. Or maa bhi. Ye ghar ka ek louta bacha hai jis bajah se ise bahut laad pyar se pala hai. Lekin isne kabhi bhi us pyar ka galat fayeda nahi uthaya hai. Sayad ise bachpan se hi achhi sangat mili hai. Or yahi baat iske mata pita bhi jaante hai. Jis bajah se unhe is per or pyar aata hai. Or iske liye bina kahe hi gifts bagera laate rehte hai.







To ab kahani per aate hai.



Ye 7 log bahi per baithe hue the.



Charu- yaar tum log kaha gayab ho gye the. Pichhle kai mahino se clg me dikhe hi nahi. Na hi koi contact ho pa raha tha tum logo se. Kahi holiday per gye the kya.




Ashk- nahi yaar ghar gye the. Thodi problem chal rahi thi isi bajah se.





Kiran- baise us din se tumhare dad bhi nahi dikhe kaha hai aajkal vo.





Ashk- bas kar jyada laar mat tapka. Dad hai vo mere.






Avi- ha kiran kyu meri mom ka ghar todne per tuli ho.


Ye sunke kiran ne apna muh teda kar liya. Or baaki sabhi hasne lage.




Ashk- baise batao kya chal raha hai clg me. Koi khaas baat.





Charu- bahi same. Boring lacture. Or kuch excitement rahi hi nahi clg main.




Kiran- ha yaar




Jatin- baise tumhe kya exiting karna hai.




Kiran- kuch bhi jisme maja aaye.




Samar- theek hai ek kaam karte hai sham ko club chalte hai. Kya khayal hai.





Charu- club to jaate hi rehte hai.kuch or naya bolo na.




Avi- house party.




Amar- koi occasion bhi to hona chahiye.





Samar- baise 2 din baad hamare avi or ashk ka birthday hai. Isse badiya occasion kya hoga.





Amar- are ha. Main to bhool hi gya tha. Badiya hai.




Kiran- mere farmhouse per Chalke mast party karenge. Or clg se sabhi ko invite karenge. Sabhi milke dhamaal masti karenge.






Samar- idea achha hai lekin tumhare farmhouse per nahi. Hamare ghar per. Ek to tumhara farmhouse bahut dur hai. Jis bajah se jyada log aa nahi payenge. Or hamara ghar pass main hi hai to jyada log aayenge.





Charu- ha theek hai. Baise bhi hamne tumhara ghar dekha nahi hai. Isi bahane dekh lenge.




Kiran- yahi wala ghar na. Ya fir gaon wala.





Amar- yahi wala. Baise bhi hamara gaon ab gaon nahi hai. Balki is country ka sabse devloped mini city ban gya hai. Baha per airport bhi hai. Isliye use gaon kehna band kardo.





Insab ki baate avi or ashk sun rahe the.




Avi- ok theek hai behas band karo. Or us din clg ke notice board per notice laga dena or hostel main bhi. Taaki jyada se jyada logo ko pata chal sake or vo aa sake.




Samar- ho jayega dont worry.




Ashk- or ha hamare gifts bhi yaad se le aana.




Amar- vaise kya laaye inke liye.



Jatin- ashk ko to koi bhi gift chal jayega lekin is avi ko kya gift denge. Ye socho.




Samar- ha yaar.




Avi- no thanks mujhe kuch nahi chahiye.




Charu- aise kaise. Ham to denge.




Avi- to fir jo achha lage le aana. Chalo ab class ka time ho gya hai.




Uske baad sabhi baha se apni apni classes main chale gye.










Bahi earth se kai yojan dur ek chhote se grah per.




This is tha. HELL.


Ye ek chhota sa grah hai. Lekin yaha ke logo ke pass alokik shaktiya hai. Jiska pura control yaha ke raja ke pass rehta hai. Or technology ke mamle main bhi ye grah peeche nahi hai. Yaha per jadu or science ka adbhut taalmail dekhne ko milta hai.or kaal bhi isi grah ka nivasi tha. Isi bajah se vo prithvi per senoy ke kaafi kaam aaya tha. Nai nai technology ko banane main. Yaha ke raja ki kaafi jaankari aapko pehle hi dev ke dwara di ja chuki hai. Ki ye kya karte hai or kyu. Brahmand me rehne wale har ek jeev ko niyati khud unke hisaab se kaam sopti hai. Or yaha ka raja bhi unhi main se ek hai. Ise bhi niyati ne hi ye shaktiya or ye kaam diya hai. Lekin iska beta kuch alag hai. Vo niyati main yakeen nahi rakhta balki apni niyati khud banata hai. Or uski shaktiya bhi yaha ke raja ke control se bahar thi. Or isi soch ke tahat usne yaha ka takhta palat karne ki kosis ki. Or apne pita ko maarne ki bhi kosis ki. Taaki vo yaha se samast brahmand per apna raaj faila sake. Lekin uske pita ko uski is soch ki bhanak lag gyi. Or unhone apni saari shaktiyo ko laga kar black heart ki aatma ko qaid kar liya. Or uske bejaan sarir ko brahmand main chhod diya. Or jo bhi black heart ke samarthak the unhen qaid kar liya. Lekin kaal us samay baha per moujud nahi tha. Jis bajah se vo bach gya. Or use jab black heart ke baare me khabar lagi to usne sabse pehle uski body ko dhunda or use ek surakshit sthan per chhipa diya. Or fir vo nikal pada paras pathar ki khoj main. Vo black heart ke sabhi samarthakon ke sampark me rehta tha taaki vo use bata sake ki paras pathar use kaha mil sakta hai. Or isi tarah usne aadhe se jyada brahmand ko chhan mara lekin use vo nahi mila lekin prithvi per jaate hi use pathar ke hone ka ehsaas hone laga. Tabhi uska samana surya se hogya. Or surya ke hatho uski haalat buri hone ke baad uske aham ko chot lagi or usne tay kiya ki pehle surya ko maarega fir hi vo apna maksad pura karega. Or isi liye usne senoy ka sath diya. Taaki senoy bhi uske kaam aaye us pathar ko dhudne main. Lekin yaha sab ulta hota gya. Surya ne uske sabhi mansubon per paani fer diya. Or jab usne future me jaake dekha ki uski mout hone wali hai to usne khud ko bacha liya or john ko maarke uska rup leke senoy ke sath ho gya. Jiske bare me senoy ko bhi khabar nahi thi. Or vo jaan gya tha ki iska bhi ant najdeek hai isliye usna use bachane ka prayas nahi kiya or uske jaane ke baad usne apni hi ek aarmy banai or use gupchup tarike se pathar ko dhudne ka kaam sopa or sath hi surya se nipatne ki tayyari karne laga.jisme use kaafi samay bhi lag gya. Kyuki prithvi itni badi hai jaha use ghas main sui dhundna tha. Or isme time to lagna hi tha. Lekin jab use vo pathar mili to uske liye ye kahabat sach ho gyi ki hath ko aaya per muh na laga.


Khair ab aage dekhte hai kya hota hai.


Baha per moujud sabhi logo ko ye pata lag chuka tha ki kaal ab nahi raha hai. Yaha per sabhi logo ko kaal se ummid thi ki vo kuch bhi karke paras pathar le aayega or blackheart fir se jeevit ho jayega.



Raja ko keval uska beta hi kafi takkar de sakta hai. Or agar uske pass paras pathar aajtaa to fir raja ki mout nischit thi. Lekin filhaal raja bahut kush tha. Or jashn mana raha tha apni is jeet ka. Vo bhi kaal ko kai varshon se dhudnd raha tha lekin kaal har baar uske hatho se nikal jata tha. Lekin jab use pata chala ki kaal mar gya hau tabse pure Hell main jashn ka mahool hai. Kyuki unhe viswas hai ki ab sayad hi koi fir se black heart ko jinda karne ki kosis karega. Bahi raja ki najar surya per bhi pad chuki thi or use viswas ho gya tha ki surya sabki band baja dega.






Bahi jail main baithe black heart ke samarthak bahut hi mayus the. Lekin unme ek maha kameena bhi moujud tha jiske pass ek plan tha.
Or sabhi usi ki taraf dekh rahe the.





À1- tum itna kyu muskura rahe ho. Kaal mara gya or tumhe kushi ho rahi hai.




Takshak- ha mujhe dukh hai kaal ke jaane ka. Lekin main kush is liye ho raha hu kyuki mere pass ek yojna hai. Jisse hame fir se paras pathar mil sakta hai or blackheart fir se jeevit ho sakta hai.



Ye sunte hi sabhi ek tuk use dekhne lage.




A2- kya yojna hai tumhare paas.





Takshak- pehle to ye ki prithvi per jarur koi bahut hi powerfull shakti hai kyuki kaal ko maar pana behad hi muskil tha. Ye to sabhi jante hi hai. Isliye hame ab kaal se bhi jyada shaktishali yodha ko baha bhejna hoga. Taaki vo us insaan ko khatm kar sake or usse vo pathar bapis haasil kar sake.






A2- tumhara kehna sahi hai. Agar ham ka jail main na hote to hamare pass bhi asimit shaktiyan hoti. Fir hamme se koi bhi us dust insaan ko khatm kar sakta tha. Lekin is jail ke andar hamari shaktiya kaam hi nahi karti hai. To fir aisa konsa yodha hai jise ham baha bhej sakte hai.







Takshak- sayad tum vikraal ko bhul gaye ho. Jo ki kaal ka hi bada bhai hai. Or shaktiyo main kaal se kai guna jyada shaktishali hai. Or sabse jaruri baat ki vo bhi black heart ka khaas hai. Or agar ham usse kahenge to vo jarur baha per jayega or apne bhai ki mout ka badla bhi lega or usse paras pathar bhi le aayega.





Ye sunte hi baha moujud sabhi ke chehre per ek kameeni muskurahat fail gyi.





À1- tumne sahi kaha. Ham vikraal ko kaise bhul sakte hai.






Baha per kuch logo ko abhi vikraal ke baare main nahi pata tha lekin. Jab uski itni tariff vo sun rahe the to unhone apna ek sawaal kiya.





A5- agar vo itna hi takatvar hai to kyu na usse kaho ki hame hi yaha se bahar nikaal de. Baaki kaam to ham fir kar hi lenge.






Takshak- aisa nahi kar sakte. Kyuki vikraal ko yaha se niskashit kiya gya hai. Agar vo yaha pair bhi rakhega to uski shaktiya usi samay khatm ho jayegi. Or isi bajah se kaal or vikraal dono hi yaha ke raja se nafrat karte hai. Or blackheart ka support karte hai. Kyuki unhe yaha bapis jo aana hai.or sath main raja se badla jo lena tha.







A5- matlab hame keval blackheart hi aazad kara sakta hai.





À1- ha. Isiliye ham sabhi uske jeevit hone ki raah dekh rahe hai. Khair ye sab chhodiye. Aap turant hi vikraal se sampark keejiye or use saari baat bataiye or use jaldi hi prithvi per jaane ko kahiye. Kyuki ab or intjaar karna hamare bas main nahi hai.





Takshak- theek hai………..














To be continue……………………..

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