Mr.X796
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ha ha ha...... wah kya gazab ki line pesh ki hai... hanste hanste aankh mein paani aa gaya... par majboori ye hai ki subha ke 5 baje gala phad kar hans nahi sakta, nahi to ghar wale sochenge ki muzhe subha - subha pagalpan ka daura pada gaya hai.![]()





Bhai kya gajab ka review diya he. Meri yo bolti hi band hongayi he. Sahi me. Wo 3 boonde khoon ki wah kya cheel ki najar payi he. Sanjeev bhai ke bare me itni sateek jankari lekin bhai me yaha ye bhi clear kar du ki 1998 me nur lkg aur ukg nahi hote the jyada tar jagaho par balki sirf nur hoti aur usake baad seedha 1st class. Isliye 2 saal bach gaye apne sanjeev bhai ke aur yaar PANDIT JI ka naam hi kafi he aur us par Shankar ji ka sar par haat. Wo to sukar manao ki sirf field officer hi dikhaya he warna jis tarah se shanker ji ka rutba he mujhe to laga tha ki koi bahut bada gangsters hi dikhate sanjeev bhai koiss baar bhi 3 - 4 paheliya chod di gayi hai jo ki shayad agle update mein clear ho payegi.
1. raat ke andhere mein wo do ajnabi aankhein.... par wo 2 aankhein hum paathako ke liye hi anjaan ho sakti hai par ve shayad Arjun se na chupi ho. kaun ho sakta hai lets deduce that Ritu - Rekha ji ke saath, Komal - Roopali ke saath, Tara thak kar so chuki hai, Alka ke saath ya to Priyanka soi hogi ya fir Aarti, Lalitha ji upar aa nahi paayengi kyon ki Arjun ne jeene ka darwaaza band kar diya hoga, to le de kar upar Priyanka ya Aarti mein se koi ek hogi. Abb jo bhi koi hoga wo saboot bhi dhundega aur Maadhuri ki khatiya bhi khadi kar sakta hai kyon ki Arjun to mama ke gaanv chala jayega.
2. khoon ki ve 3 boonde jo gadde par giri, jis par shayad Arjun aur Maadhuri didi ka dhyaan nahi gaya.
3. Ritu ke saamne apni maa ke vakshsthal se doodh ka reesna aur chupchaap unmein se doodh ko grehn karna, kahi na kahi ye Ritu ke dimaag mein shak paida kar sakta hai kyonki jis prakaar Arjun pichle kuch dino se Rekha ji ke aas - paas jyaada mandra raha hai, aur rekha ji ke haav - bhaav bhi badle - badle se hai.
4. ek vo ladka kaun hai jisse Tara ki shaadi ki baat chal rahi hai, kahi wo Renuka ji ki rishtedaari mein se to nahi.... dheere - dheere iska bhi pata chal hi jayega.
5. Arjun ka sone ka intezaam kiske saath rahega....... maama ke yaha se aane ke baad, Maadhuri, Rekha ji ya fir Lalitha ji ke maje aane wale hai kyon ki aage se jo arrangement set hua hai us hisaab se teeno hi akele hongi apne - apne kamron mein.
6. Arjun apni ikloti bigdail aur nakchadi bua ko handle kaise karega ye bhi dekhna interesting rahega.
7. Arjun ki hone wali policiya bhaabi kaun hogi...... jo ki officer hai.
8. Sanjeev sirf 25 saal ki umar mein Indian Services ka Senior commisssioned officer kaise ban sakta hai... lets say usne first trial mein hi UPSC ka exam clear kiya hoga wo bhi graduation ke final year ke saath hi jab uski age 20 saal rahi hogi..... phir uske baad 1 saal ka selection procedure aur 2 saal ki academy mein training... uske baad 5 saal ki kisi thaane mein DSP equivalent posting rahi hogi, ya fir as an undercover agent raha hai. ye sab mila kar 8 saal bante hai. Par yaha par to DSP Yadav agar Sanjeev ko salute maar raha hai iska matlab ye Suprintendent of police ke equivalent post par hai........ ha ye ho sakta hai ke isko piche se sifaarish lagi ho aur Sanjeev ne koi high profile case solve kiya ho.... but still first promotion is quite diffucult kyon ki first promotion sirf timely basis par hi hota hai.... ya fir constitutionally President of India ko power hai kisi ko untimely promote karne ka.
Enigma bhai apne dimaag par jyaada load mat lena ye sab meri personal observation hai.... and I am not trying to throw all these facts on your face, I am mearly stating these loopholes in your story just so you can bring perfection in your already written masterpiece novel.
Although, loved the moments between Arjun and Maadhuri didi. And you have very beautifully portrayed the intimate emotional exchange among the duo, The mother and her beloved daughter, which is a very rare occurance on this forum. No writer dares to write about an intimate moments between mother and daughter which you did and kudos for that.
both the previous updates have been best in expressing the dynamics among all the characters, considering all the future events that are yet to be unfold.
Well I have made a lot of speculations based on these previous updates and it will be interesting to see how you are going to constitute all this with your nonfrivolous wit.
as always admired your work.
Bhai kya gajab ka review diya he. Meri yo bolti hi band hongayi he. Sahi me. Wo 3 boonde khoon ki wah kya cheel ki najar payi he. Sanjeev bhai ke bare me itni sateek jankari lekin bhai me yaha ye bhi clear kar du ki 1998 me nur lkg aur ukg nahi hote the jyada tar jagaho par balki sirf nur hoti aur usake baad seedha 1st class. Isliye 2 saal bach gaye apne sanjeev bhai ke aur yaar PANDIT JI ka naam hi kafi he aur us par Shankar ji ka sar par haat. Wo to sukar manao ki sirf field officer hi dikhaya he warna jis tarah se shanker ji ka rutba he mujhe to laga tha ki koi bahut bada gangsters hi dikhate sanjeev bhai ko. Aur wo tara wala ladka sayad wo hi sadi wala na ho. Bua ki sasural ki taraf ka jise us inspector he hadkaya bhi tha.iss baar bhi 3 - 4 paheliya chod di gayi hai jo ki shayad agle update mein clear ho payegi.
1. raat ke andhere mein wo do ajnabi aankhein.... par wo 2 aankhein hum paathako ke liye hi anjaan ho sakti hai par ve shayad Arjun se na chupi ho. kaun ho sakta hai lets deduce that Ritu - Rekha ji ke saath, Komal - Roopali ke saath, Tara thak kar so chuki hai, Alka ke saath ya to Priyanka soi hogi ya fir Aarti, Lalitha ji upar aa nahi paayengi kyon ki Arjun ne jeene ka darwaaza band kar diya hoga, to le de kar upar Priyanka ya Aarti mein se koi ek hogi. Abb jo bhi koi hoga wo saboot bhi dhundega aur Maadhuri ki khatiya bhi khadi kar sakta hai kyon ki Arjun to mama ke gaanv chala jayega.
2. khoon ki ve 3 boonde jo gadde par giri, jis par shayad Arjun aur Maadhuri didi ka dhyaan nahi gaya.
3. Ritu ke saamne apni maa ke vakshsthal se doodh ka reesna aur chupchaap unmein se doodh ko grehn karna, kahi na kahi ye Ritu ke dimaag mein shak paida kar sakta hai kyonki jis prakaar Arjun pichle kuch dino se Rekha ji ke aas - paas jyaada mandra raha hai, aur rekha ji ke haav - bhaav bhi badle - badle se hai.
4. ek vo ladka kaun hai jisse Tara ki shaadi ki baat chal rahi hai, kahi wo Renuka ji ki rishtedaari mein se to nahi.... dheere - dheere iska bhi pata chal hi jayega.
5. Arjun ka sone ka intezaam kiske saath rahega....... maama ke yaha se aane ke baad, Maadhuri, Rekha ji ya fir Lalitha ji ke maje aane wale hai kyon ki aage se jo arrangement set hua hai us hisaab se teeno hi akele hongi apne - apne kamron mein.
6. Arjun apni ikloti bigdail aur nakchadi bua ko handle kaise karega ye bhi dekhna interesting rahega.
7. Arjun ki hone wali policiya bhaabi kaun hogi...... jo ki officer hai.
8. Sanjeev sirf 25 saal ki umar mein Indian Services ka Senior commisssioned officer kaise ban sakta hai... lets say usne first trial mein hi UPSC ka exam clear kiya hoga wo bhi graduation ke final year ke saath hi jab uski age 20 saal rahi hogi..... phir uske baad 1 saal ka selection procedure aur 2 saal ki academy mein training... uske baad 5 saal ki kisi thaane mein DSP equivalent posting rahi hogi, ya fir as an undercover agent raha hai. ye sab mila kar 8 saal bante hai. Par yaha par to DSP Yadav agar Sanjeev ko salute maar raha hai iska matlab ye Suprintendent of police ke equivalent post par hai........ ha ye ho sakta hai ke isko piche se sifaarish lagi ho aur Sanjeev ne koi high profile case solve kiya ho.... but still first promotion is quite diffucult kyon ki first promotion sirf timely basis par hi hota hai.... ya fir constitutionally President of India ko power hai kisi ko untimely promote karne ka.
Enigma bhai apne dimaag par jyaada load mat lena ye sab meri personal observation hai.... and I am not trying to throw all these facts on your face, I am mearly stating these loopholes in your story just so you can bring perfection in your already written masterpiece novel.
Although, loved the moments between Arjun and Maadhuri didi. And you have very beautifully portrayed the intimate emotional exchange among the duo, The mother and her beloved daughter, which is a very rare occurance on this forum. No writer dares to write about an intimate moments between mother and daughter which you did and kudos for that.
both the previous updates have been best in expressing the dynamics among all the characters, considering all the future events that are yet to be unfold.
Well I have made a lot of speculations based on these previous updates and it will be interesting to see how you are going to constitute all this with your nonfrivolous wit.
as always admired your work.
Badi he umda baat kahi Bhai ki UPSC clear karne ke baad itna samay lagta hai. Lekin hum baat yaha Kar rahe hai ek aise vyakti ki Jo 25-26 saal ka nau-jawan hai aur 4 saal se undercover he hai. HCS ke baad police me DSP post rehti hai aur directly DIG, IG level interference rehti hai usme. Yaha kirdaar ko thoda spasht karte hue kahunga ki 4 saal me kuch itne kaam kiye gaye honge ki 2 step promotion definitely mili hogi. Abhi bhi posting nahi mili hai Matlab ki charge onrole sirf documents me Hain. Let's see ki open field joining kis position par aur kab hoti hai. Baaki sawalo me se kuch toh gambhir hai unhe baad me kholenge lekin 3-4 ka jawaab jarur milega abhi next update meiss baar bhi 3 - 4 paheliya chod di gayi hai jo ki shayad agle update mein clear ho payegi.
1. raat ke andhere mein wo do ajnabi aankhein.... par wo 2 aankhein hum paathako ke liye hi anjaan ho sakti hai par ve shayad Arjun se na chupi ho. kaun ho sakta hai lets deduce that Ritu - Rekha ji ke saath, Komal - Roopali ke saath, Tara thak kar so chuki hai, Alka ke saath ya to Priyanka soi hogi ya fir Aarti, Lalitha ji upar aa nahi paayengi kyon ki Arjun ne jeene ka darwaaza band kar diya hoga, to le de kar upar Priyanka ya Aarti mein se koi ek hogi. Abb jo bhi koi hoga wo saboot bhi dhundega aur Maadhuri ki khatiya bhi khadi kar sakta hai kyon ki Arjun to mama ke gaanv chala jayega.
2. khoon ki ve 3 boonde jo gadde par giri, jis par shayad Arjun aur Maadhuri didi ka dhyaan nahi gaya.
3. Ritu ke saamne apni maa ke vakshsthal se doodh ka reesna aur chupchaap unmein se doodh ko grehn karna, kahi na kahi ye Ritu ke dimaag mein shak paida kar sakta hai kyonki jis prakaar Arjun pichle kuch dino se Rekha ji ke aas - paas jyaada mandra raha hai, aur rekha ji ke haav - bhaav bhi badle - badle se hai.
4. ek vo ladka kaun hai jisse Tara ki shaadi ki baat chal rahi hai, kahi wo Renuka ji ki rishtedaari mein se to nahi.... dheere - dheere iska bhi pata chal hi jayega.
5. Arjun ka sone ka intezaam kiske saath rahega....... maama ke yaha se aane ke baad, Maadhuri, Rekha ji ya fir Lalitha ji ke maje aane wale hai kyon ki aage se jo arrangement set hua hai us hisaab se teeno hi akele hongi apne - apne kamron mein.
6. Arjun apni ikloti bigdail aur nakchadi bua ko handle kaise karega ye bhi dekhna interesting rahega.
7. Arjun ki hone wali policiya bhaabi kaun hogi...... jo ki officer hai.
8. Sanjeev sirf 25 saal ki umar mein Indian Services ka Senior commisssioned officer kaise ban sakta hai... lets say usne first trial mein hi UPSC ka exam clear kiya hoga wo bhi graduation ke final year ke saath hi jab uski age 20 saal rahi hogi..... phir uske baad 1 saal ka selection procedure aur 2 saal ki academy mein training... uske baad 5 saal ki kisi thaane mein DSP equivalent posting rahi hogi, ya fir as an undercover agent raha hai. ye sab mila kar 8 saal bante hai. Par yaha par to DSP Yadav agar Sanjeev ko salute maar raha hai iska matlab ye Suprintendent of police ke equivalent post par hai........ ha ye ho sakta hai ke isko piche se sifaarish lagi ho aur Sanjeev ne koi high profile case solve kiya ho.... but still first promotion is quite diffucult kyon ki first promotion sirf timely basis par hi hota hai.... ya fir constitutionally President of India ko power hai kisi ko untimely promote karne ka.
Enigma bhai apne dimaag par jyaada load mat lena ye sab meri personal observation hai.... and I am not trying to throw all these facts on your face, I am mearly stating these loopholes in your story just so you can bring perfection in your already written masterpiece novel.
Although, loved the moments between Arjun and Maadhuri didi. And you have very beautifully portrayed the intimate emotional exchange among the duo, The mother and her beloved daughter, which is a very rare occurance on this forum. No writer dares to write about an intimate moments between mother and daughter which you did and kudos for that.
both the previous updates have been best in expressing the dynamics among all the characters, considering all the future events that are yet to be unfold.
Well I have made a lot of speculations based on these previous updates and it will be interesting to see how you are going to constitute all this with your nonfrivolous wit.
as always admired your work.

aise hi main aur mere cousins ek saath so rahe the..tabhi humare mama aaye waha pe sone ke liye. aur maine unke mobile me ipl adult ringtone laga di...jab maine new number se unke isme call kari to ipl tune uske sath during sex ahh aah o yes bajne lagi.bhai mama ki jo gand fati thi thi..na main bata nahi sakta





Dekho bhai.. कहत कबीरा सुन भाई साधु । संसार में भाँति भाँति के लोग कुछ होत मादरचोद कुछ बहुत ही मादरचोद ।
Bhai mama ki he maar li.. hadd Kar di Bhai![]()


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