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Thriller Chakravyuh:- Kaidiyon ka Khel [ Action, thriller Romance,Revenge ]

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Hello dosto well abhi mein Zombie apocalypse wali story likh rha hu unfortunately us par abhi Tak koi khaash response nahi aaya koi baat nahi well may be yaha ke liye nahi ho Abhi mein uss par 20 Tak update dal ke dekhta hu agar response aaya toh theek wrna band kar dunga.

Well leave it that topic Mein apni dusri kahani likhne wala hu ye kahani hogi 2 logo ke baare mein Jo jail mein milte hai aur Phir kaise dono ki zindagi ek mod leti jab woh jail se bhagne ka plan bnate hai kya woh safal ho payenge?

Intro kal deta hu saath update bhi pehli
 
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Hello dosto toh shuru karte hai iss kahani ke 2 Hero jo jail mein gunaho ki saza kat te huye milte hai. Aur saath mil kar plan bnate hai jail todne ka lekin rasta aasan nahi hone wala bohut mushkil aur musibaton ka samna karna hoga aur kya ye dono safal honge dekhte hai.

Vijay Pratap Singh:- ek dam shant saral aur samjhdar insaan hai lekin ek din ek aisa mod aata Jiski wajah se isse jail ho jati hai.vijay apne pariwaar ke liye chintit bhi hai aur iski sirf ek hi iccha hai jail se bhag kar apni zindagi sudharna.

Ajay Thakur :- ye bilkul Vijay ke opposite hai Vijay jaha shant hai wahi Ajay gussail hai aur Nirnay Bina soche samjhe le leta hai Ajay ka bachpan accha nahi guzra aur iski Zindagi Jo apradhon se bhari hai uski wajah se jail aaya. Ajay ko sirf apni life se matlab hai woh kuch bhi karne ke liye guzar jayega

Shreya Pratap Singh:- Vijay ki biwi iske Rishte Vijay ke saath bigad rhe the aur uske pati ke jail Jane se aur Bigad Gaye hai but phir bhi Puri koshish kar rhi hai shaadi bachane ki

Priyanka Thakur :- Ajay ki biwi ek strong aur indipendent woman hai Ajay ke Karnamo ke baare mein janti hai but usse sabse jyada pyaar karti hai.

Rudra Thakur :- Ajay ka beta

Mr. Rajeev Sinha :- ye kon hai ye baad mein pta chalega.

Shiny:- Pilot hai aur Vijay ki dost

Aur bhi characters aayenge toh introduction de dunga iska update aaj aana tha but thoda light ka issue tha toh late ho gya kal ya abhi karke bhejta hu saath mein zombie apocalypse wali ka bhi
 
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Disclaimer:- Ye kahani puri tarah se kalpnik hai. Kisi bhi vyakti, jeevit ya maut ke, ya ghatnaon se milti-julti koi bhi cheez bas ek co-incidence hai. Kahani ke characters ke views aur opinions unke apne hain aur mere views ko zaroori nahi represent karte. Reader discretion ki salah di jati hai.
 
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Update 1 :-

[ Present day ]

Badalo mein Ek bade cargo helipad upar udte huye dikh rha tha jise ek ladki jiska naam Shiny uda rhi thi.

Peeche do log Ek 40 ki Umar ka aur dusra 30 ke upar arm jacket pehne huye baithe hai jisme se dusra bolta hai.

Pehla:- hum pahuchne Wale hai lgta hai.

Dusra :- samay aa chuka hai iske baad aage kya karoge kya plan hai Vijay ?

Ji haan ye Ajay hi tha.

Vijay :- mujhe nahi pta sach bolu toh kuch socha hi nahi.

Ajay :- tumne nahi socha mazak kar rhe ho ye toh pehli cheez tumhe karni chahiye itna dimaag mein jo khoye jo rehte ho bohut sochte rehte ho.

Vijay :- dimaag mein khoye rehne aur buddhiman hone mein bohut antar hai Ajay.

Ajay :- tum kehna kya chahte ho mein samajhdaar nahi hu ?

Vijay :- tumne bola mene Aisa kuch nahi kaha.

Ajay :- suno shayad mein tumhari Nazar mein samajhdar nahi hounga lekin mujhe pta hota hai cheeze kaise karte hai.

Vijay :- iss par behas nahi kar skta.

Kuch saal Pehle.

[ Flashback ]

Mumbai ka din baarish ho rhi.

Bandra Detention Centre Jail ( fiction name ) Ki prison bus paani mein sadak par daud rhi thi.

Bus ek Board se guzarti hai jis par ( Ghusna mana hai likha tha jail ke naam ke saath ).

Bus jail ke bade darwaze ke samne rukti hai waha ek alarm sa baz rha tha jail bohut hi badi diwaro se tha aur bohut guards aur security thi jail bohut hi bada tha.

Bus driver apna I'd card dikhata hai jisse guard darwaza khol deta hai aur bus andar aa jati hai.

Samne ek Police officer wardi mein tha bus ko ishare se aage badhne ke liye bolta hai aur guard ko darwaaza band karne ke liye kehta hai.

Bus aage badh jati hai uss bus mein bohut se apradhi the jinhe shayad saza huyi hai.

Bus ek jagah aa kar ruk jati hai bagal.

Saari buses se log utarne lgte hai jinme se bohut se prisoner bahar aa rhe the jinko andar baari baari check karke andar bheja Jaa rha tha inme Ajay bhi tha jiska naam bola jata hai.

Vijay bus mein abhi tha baaki sab chale gye the.

Driver ( Vijay se ) :- bus se bahar nikal hero humare paas pura saal nahi.

Vijay bahar aa kar line mein lg jata hai jo aage Jaa rhi thi.

Ajay andar aa kar dekhta hai, kuch prisoner fight kar rhe hai ek dusre ko mar rhe hai.

Jailer guards whistle bjate huye unki taraf bhagte hai jo lad rhe the.

Vijay peeche ko peeche ke raste dusre le Jaya jaa rha tha aur Ajay ko dusre.

Ajay aage chal kar ek criminal ko dekhta hai jiske upar ghav the woh bolta hai :- Kuch nahi dost udhar jo ladai ho rhi usme mein bhi tha woh darawani thi meri haddiyan ke tootne ki awaz abhi bhi aa rhi hai.

Ajay:- yeh toh Roz ka hai Jail ki life aisi hi hoti hai yaha bohut se pagal janwar jo ghum rhe hai.

Prisoner Ravi :- shayad tum sahi ho par ye hadd se jyada hai mein pehli baar nahi aaya ji yaha sab bas ladai hi kar rhe hai jaise ek dusre ko marna chahte ho.

Ajay :- tum koi chhutiyan manane nahi aaye ho jail aaye ho

Ravi :- dekho mein koi musibat nahi chahta mujhe akela chor do.

Ajay :- chill kar mein sirf tujhe sakht bna rha tha.

Ravi :- yaar mein unn rowdy type nahi hoon

Ajay Sar hila kar aage badh jata hai jaha guards checking kar rhe the bohut se cell blocks the ek admi kuch baithe badbada rha tha.

Ajay :- tujhe kya hua sadma lg gya?

Mohit :- kuch nahi apni zindagi ka sabse bada din mana rha sabse best din.

Ajay :- Mera bhi londe.

Mohit :- sach mein tumhe bhi mara aur sab kuch loot liya?

Ajay :- Haan 2 baar ek subah.

Mohit :- sach mein.

Ajay :- bilkul nahi tu kya samjha ?

Guard :- oye idhar aa jaldi pura din nahi hai aur apne haath upar kar.

Ajay wesa hi karta hai aur guard uski Talashi karne lgta hai.

Guard :- thik hai tu clear hai andar.

Ajay upar jata hai jaha ek lohe ka darwaza tha Jo lock tha woh andar ek room ki window se Uss guard ko bolta hai gate kholne ke liye lekin woh nahi kholta.

Ajay :- Haan thik hai jitna samay Lena hai lo kaamchor kahi ka koi bhi nahi sunn rha.

Guard dheere se baahar aata hai aur chaabi ka guccha mein se chabi dalkar karta hai but konsi hai usme time lgta hai gate khol deta hai.

Guard darwaza kholkar kehta hai :- andar aao

Jaise hi Ajay aage jail mein badhta hai usse koi dhakka dekar diwaar se lga deta hai uska gala pakad leta hai.

Guard :- oye band Karo tum dono.

Woh Admi ( woh Jo ranga ka admi tha dheere se bolta ) :- Rajeev Sinha ne tere liye sandesh bheja hai.

Ajay :- tu aur tere Rajeev Sinha ki maa ka bh****a

Jaha Ajay gusse mein aage badh jata hai wahi Vijay bhi apne cell ki taraf badh rha tha.

Wahi Vijay:-

Vijay ko bhi ek criminal dikhta hai jo waha dara hua tha woh darte huye bolte hai :- ye jagah ek shraap hai bhai pta nahi kaise.

Shera ( rote huye ):- me- mene Aisa kabhi nahi dekha mujhe yaha nahi rehna mujhe Jana hai ye jagah bohut buri hai nark se battar hai.

Vijay :- suno mujhe yakin hai sab theek ho jayega himmat nahi harni.

Shera :- tum nahi samjh rhe hum gye kaam se.

Vijay :- aapne ap ki shaant karne ki koshish karo chinta karke bhi kuch nahi hone wala relax.

Shera :- Mujhe pta hai par mein nahi kar paa rha

Vijay ko ek guard andar dhakka deta hai jaha usse sign karna hota hai.

Guard :- Apne kapde utaro aur uss parde ke andar jao.

Vijay waise hi karta hai andar jaa kar uske upar paani feka jata hai.

Vijay nanga bahar aata hai usse jail ki uniform dete hai jise woh haath mein lekar line mein lg jata hai.

Jaha ek budha admi kuch hawaldaar ke saath aata hai sabko dekhta hai.

Budha adami :- mere naam hai Surya Prakash Sharma aur mein yaha ka jailer hu yeh meri jail hai koi sawaal? ( sabko dekhte huye ).

Ek Line mein bolta hai jiska naam Robin hai :- yaha pariwar walo ko milne ke liye kab bulate hai.

Surya prakash usko dekhta hai aur ek guard ko ishara karta hai guard sar hila kar danda lekar Robin ke pet par maar deta hai.

Jailer :- aur koi sawal?

Koi kuch nahi bolta.

Jailer:- badhiya aapke naye Ghar mein swagat hai mein khatam karta hu ab ye.

Guard:- suna naa chalo ab aage badho yaha aur bhi kaam hai.

Vijay Surya Prakash Sharma ko ghur ka kar apni uniform pakad kar aage badh jata hai.

Wahi dusri taraf Ajay :-


Ajay blocks mein jate huye jail ke andar kaidiyon ko dekh rha tha kuch usse ghur rhe the toh kuch usse warning de rhe the apne ishaaron se.

Ajay:- ye kya kar rha tu Munna ?

Munna ( aankhen khol kar ) :- meditation..

Ajay :- ye kya hota hai ?

Munna :- Ye tumhe sabse mukti dilati hai.

Ajay :- accha lg toh nahi rha tu mukt ho rha ?

Munna :- tu nahi samjhega Jab Tak try nahi karega wese mene suna hai tere bagal ki jail mein koi naya padosi aane wala?

Ajay :- kon ?

Munna :- pta nahi ek sharif 40 saal ka lg hai gora.

Ajay ko guard pakad ke andar cell 98 mein dhakka deta hai.

Ajay :- chill yaar jaa rha hu aaram se ?

Guard mic par 98 wala ka door band karne ko keh deta jiska control ek room mein tha door automatic band ho jata hai.

Wahi Vijay ko bhi guard cell mein dhakka de kar dal deta hai aur uniform pehne ko bol deta hai.

Aur upar Cell 99 ko band karne ko bol deta hai jo automatic lock ho jata hai.
 
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Update 1 :-

[ Present day ]

Badalo mein Ek bade cargo helipad upar udte huye dikh rha tha jise ek ladki jiska naam Shiny uda rhi thi.

Peeche do log Ek 40 ki Umar ka aur dusra 30 ke upar arm jacket pehne huye baithe hai jisme se dusra bolta hai.

Pehla:- hum pahuchne Wale hai lgta hai.

Dusra :- samay aa chuka hai iske baad aage kya karoge kya plan hai Vijay ?

Ji haan ye Ajay hi tha.

Vijay :- mujhe nahi pta sach bolu toh kuch socha hi nahi.

Ajay :- tumne nahi socha mazak kar rhe ho ye toh pehli cheez tumhe karni chahiye itna dimaag mein jo khoye jo rehte ho bohut sochte rehte ho.

Vijay :- dimaag mein khoye rehne aur buddhiman hone mein bohut antar hai Ajay.

Ajay :- tum kehna kya chahte ho mein samajhdaar nahi hu ?

Vijay :- tumne bola mene Aisa kuch nahi kaha.

Ajay :- suno shayad mein tumhari Nazar mein samajhdar nahi hounga lekin mujhe pta hota hai cheeze kaise karte hai.

Vijay :- iss par behas nahi kar skta.

Kuch saal Pehle.

[ Flashback ]

Mumbai ka din baarish ho rhi.

Bandra Detention Centre Jail ( fiction name ) Ki prison bus paani mein sadak par daud rhi thi.

Bus ek Board se guzarti hai jis par ( Ghusna mana hai likha tha jail ke naam ke saath ).

Bus jail ke bade darwaze ke samne rukti hai waha ek alarm sa baz rha tha jail bohut hi badi diwaro se tha aur bohut guards aur security thi jail bohut hi bada tha.

Bus driver apna I'd card dikhata hai jisse guard darwaza khol deta hai aur bus andar aa jati hai.

Samne ek Police officer wardi mein tha bus ko ishare se aage badhne ke liye bolta hai aur guard ko darwaaza band karne ke liye kehta hai.

Bus aage badh jati hai uss bus mein bohut se apradhi the jinhe shayad saza huyi hai.

Bus ek jagah aa kar ruk jati hai bagal.

Saari buses se log utarne lgte hai jinme se bohut se prisoner bahar aa rhe the jinko andar baari baari check karke andar bheja Jaa rha tha inme Ajay bhi tha jiska naam bola jata hai.

Vijay bus mein abhi tha baaki sab chale gye the.

Driver ( Vijay se ) :- bus se bahar nikal hero humare paas pura saal nahi.

Vijay bahar aa kar line mein lg jata hai jo aage Jaa rhi thi.

Ajay andar aa kar dekhta hai, kuch prisoner fight kar rhe hai ek dusre ko mar rhe hai.

Jailer guards whistle bjate huye unki taraf bhagte hai jo lad rhe the.

Vijay peeche ko peeche ke raste dusre le Jaya jaa rha tha aur Ajay ko dusre.

Ajay aage chal kar ek criminal ko dekhta hai jiske upar ghav the woh bolta hai :- Kuch nahi dost udhar jo ladai ho rhi usme mein bhi tha woh darawani thi meri haddiyan ke tootne ki awaz abhi bhi aa rhi hai.

Ajay:- yeh toh Roz ka hai Jail ki life aisi hi hoti hai yaha bohut se pagal janwar jo ghum rhe hai.

Prisoner Ravi :- shayad tum sahi ho par ye hadd se jyada hai mein pehli baar nahi aaya ji yaha sab bas ladai hi kar rhe hai jaise ek dusre ko marna chahte ho.

Ajay :- tum koi chhutiyan manane nahi aaye ho jail aaye ho

Ravi :- dekho mein koi musibat nahi chahta mujhe akela chor do.

Ajay :- chill kar mein sirf tujhe sakht bna rha tha.

Ravi :- yaar mein unn rowdy type nahi hoon

Ajay Sar hila kar aage badh jata hai jaha guards checking kar rhe the bohut se cell blocks the ek admi kuch baithe badbada rha tha.

Ajay :- tujhe kya hua sadma lg gya?

Mohit :- kuch nahi apni zindagi ka sabse bada din mana rha sabse best din.

Ajay :- Mera bhi londe.

Mohit :- sach mein tumhe bhi mara aur sab kuch loot liya?

Ajay :- Haan 2 baar ek subah.

Mohit :- sach mein.

Ajay :- bilkul nahi tu kya samjha ?

Guard :- oye idhar aa jaldi pura din nahi hai aur apne haath upar kar.

Ajay wesa hi karta hai aur guard uski Talashi karne lgta hai.

Guard :- thik hai tu clear hai andar.

Ajay upar jata hai jaha ek lohe ka darwaza tha Jo lock tha woh andar ek room ki window se Uss guard ko bolta hai gate kholne ke liye lekin woh nahi kholta.

Ajay :- Haan thik hai jitna samay Lena hai lo kaamchor kahi ka koi bhi nahi sunn rha.

Guard dheere se baahar aata hai aur chaabi ka guccha mein se chabi dalkar karta hai but konsi hai usme time lgta hai gate khol deta hai.

Guard darwaza kholkar kehta hai :- andar aao

Jaise hi Ajay aage jail mein badhta hai usse koi dhakka dekar diwaar se lga deta hai uska gala pakad leta hai.

Guard :- oye band Karo tum dono.

Woh Admi ( dheere se ) :- Rajeev Sinha ne tere liye sandesh bheja hai.

Ajay :- tu aur tere ranga ki maa ka bh****a

Jaha Ajay gusse mein aage badh jata hai wahi Vijay bhi apne cell ki taraf badh rha tha.

Wahi Vijay:-

Vijay ko bhi ek criminal dikhta hai jo waha dara hua tha woh darte huye bolte hai :- ye jagah ek shraap hai bhai pta nahi kaise.

Shera ( rote huye ):- me- mene Aisa kabhi nahi dekha mujhe yaha nahi rehna mujhe Jana hai ye jagah bohut buri hai nark se battar hai.

Vijay :- suno mujhe yakin hai sab theek ho jayega himmat nahi harni.

Shera :- tum nahi samjh rhe hum gye kaam se.

Vijay :- aapne ap ki shaant karne ki koshish karo chinta karke bhi kuch nahi hone wala relax.

Shera :- Mujhe pta hai par mein nahi kar paa rha

Vijay ko ek guard andar dhakka deta hai jaha usse sign karna hota hai.

Guard :- Apne kapde utaro aur uss parde ke andar jao.

Vijay waise hi karta hai andar jaa kar uske upar paani feka jata hai.

Vijay nanga bahar aata hai usse jail ki uniform dete hai jise woh haath mein lekar line mein lg jata hai.

Jaha ek budha admi kuch hawaldaar ke saath aata hai sabko dekhta hai.

Budha adami :- mere naam hai Surya Prakash Sharma aur mein yaha ka jailer hu yeh meri jail hai koi sawaal? ( sabko dekhte huye ).

Ek Line mein bolta hai jiska naam Robin hai :- yaha pariwar walo ko milne ke liye kab bulate hai.

Surya prakash usko dekhta hai aur ek guard ko ishara karta hai guard sar hila kar danda lekar Robin ke pet par maar deta hai.

Jailer :- aur koi sawal?

Koi kuch nahi bolta.

Jailer:- badhiya aapke naye Ghar mein swagat hai mein khatam karta hu ab ye.

Guard:- suna naa chalo ab aage badho yaha aur bhi kaam hai.

Vijay Surya Prakash Sharma ko ghur ka kar apni uniform pakad kar aage badh jata hai.

Wahi dusri taraf Ajay :-


Ajay blocks mein jate huye jail ke andar kaidiyon ko dekh rha tha kuch usse ghur rhe the toh kuch usse warning de rhe the apne ishaaron se.

Ajay:- ye kya kar rha tu Munna ?

Munna ( aankhen khol kar ) :- meditation..

Ajay :- ye kya hota hai ?

Munna :- Ye tumhe sabse mukti dilati hai.

Ajay :- accha lg toh nahi rha tu mukt ho rha ?

Munna :- tu nahi samjhega Jab Tak try nahi karega wese mene suna hai tere bagal ki jail mein koi naya padosi aane wala?

Ajay :- kon ?

Munna :- pta nahi ek sharif 40 saal ka lg hai gora.

Ajay ko guard pakad ke andar cell 98 mein dhakka deta hai.

Ajay :- chill yaar jaa rha hu aaram se ?

Guard mic par 98 wala ka door band karne ko keh deta jiska control ek room mein tha door automatic band ho jata hai.

Wahi Vijay ko bhi guard cell mein dhakka de kar dal deta hai aur uniform pehne ko bol deta hai.

Aur upar Cell 99 ko band karne ko bol deta hai jo automatic lock ho jata hai.
Mind blowing update Bhai, kahani ka intro bohot hi interesting lag raha hai! Vijay aur Ajay ka contrasting nature bohot accha se likha hai, aur in dono ka jail se escape plan ka suspense kaafi intriguing hai. Flashback scene bhi achha tha, especially jahan jail ka environment describe kiya hai. Jail ki life aur wahan ke characters ka portrayal kaafi realistic lag raha hai.Story mein jo tension aur mystery build ho raha hai, woh mujhe hooked rakhne wala hai. Ab aage kya hota hai Vijay aur Ajay ke plan mein, uske liye kaafi excited hoon. Keep it up, yaar! Update jaldi de.
 

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Update -2

Toh ab jaise Vijay aur Ajay dono apne cells mein aaj chuke hai.

Dusre din subah hoti hai Ajay dekhta hai jail mein guards aur officers cells baar aa kar check kar rhe the baahar bohut si lohe ki fences bni hai aur jail bohut badi thi chota sa maidaan Jo shayad prisoners ko bahar ghumne aur khelne ke liye bohut se watch tower the aur guards Nazar bnaye the camera aur guns lekar Mics aur bohut speaker bhi the.

Wahi cell blocks ki baat kare toh bohut chota tha ek bed aur toilet ek table chair thi jis par book aur pen thi jo shayad vichaar badalne ke liye thi.

Ajay baahar aata hai beech mein usse 2 prisoner milte hai jo ek guard ko dekh kar gaaliyan de rhe the kyunki usne unhe 3 weeks Tak Saza ke liye ek bohut choti jail Jo ki jameen par hoti hai usme dal diya tha.

Pehla prisoner :- mein isse marna chahta hu.

Dusra Prisoner :- woah bilkul nahi woh tumhe humesha ke liye waha dal denge.

Pehla prisoner:- mujhe farak nahi padhta mujhe bas manzoor hai.

Ajay unki taraf jata hai :- toh ruke huye kyun ho jao karo.

Pehla prisoner:- mein bas sahi mauke ki talash mein hu.

Ajay :- bakwaas tum Aisa kuch nahi karne Wale.

Pehla Prisoner:- accha tumhe kaise pta ?

Ajay :- ohh mujhe kaise pta aise ( woh ek mukka uski taraf karta hai jisse pehle prisoner Darr jata hai ).

Pehla prisoner :- hey durr rho.

Ajay :- aise pta hai mujhe aur koi sawaal.

Dusra Prisoner ( pehle prisoner ka haath pakad kar kheechte huye ) :- maaf Karo Bhai bas mazak kar rha hai ye.

Ajay sar hila kar aage chal deta hai.

Ajay Ravi ko dekhte huye Jo chupchaap baitha tha :- tujhe kya hua phirse un rowdy logo ne pareshan kiya ?

Ravi :- nahi woh mein pareshan hu mujhe neend nahi aati idhar.

Ajay :- bohut kismat wala kaash mujhe bhi nahi aati.

Ravi ( sar khujate huye ) :- Kya ?

Ajay :- soch aadhe log apni neend mein hi humesha so jate hai.

Ravi :- ye toh maine socha hi nahi.

Ajay :- isliye toh bola kismat wala hai tu.

Ajay Ravi ke bagal mein dekhta hai kuch prisoners table par dice se khel rhe.

Ajay:- kon Jeet rha hai ?

Buddha prisoner :- mein aur kon.

Ajay :- woh kaise.

Buddha prisoner :- meri skills aur Apne tazurbe ke badolat aur kya.

Ajay :- tumhe sach mein lgta hai ye tumhari skills se hai ye sirf ek dice hai.

Buddha Prisoner :- Ye tum kya bakwas kar rhe ho bilkul ye meri skills ke badolat hai.

Ajay :- ghante ki skills.

Dusra prisoner ( Jo uske saath khel rha tha woh gusse mein kehta hai ) :- Phek bhi de dice Raghav cheater kahi ka Kismat se jeet rha hai.

Ajay haath ghuma kar aage badh jata hai aur ek lohe ki zanjeer se bani fences se lg kar khada ho jata hai.

Waha Munna aata hai aur bolta hai :- hey Ajay tujhse koi milna chahta hai.

Ajay :- accha kon?

Munna:- Pata nahi woh waha Jo waha hai mujhe sirf itna hi pta hai.

Ajay uss taraf dekhta hai ek dadhi wala admi kuch logo ke saath baitha tha.

Ajay uss taraf jata hai jaise hi woh uss maidaan mein aata hai uss do logo pakad lete hai.

Ajay :- Oye chor mujhe.

Ranga :- toh tu aa hi gya chal khelne ka samay aa gya.

Ye bolkar ranga Ajay ke pet par mukka Marta hai.

Ajay dard mein cheekhta hai aur bolta hai :- tumhe kya chahiye mujhse.

Ranga :- isse koi farak nahi padhta mujhe kya chahiye farak padhta hai Rajeev Sinha ko kya chahiye Yaad aaya ?

Ajay ( gusse mein ) :- usko kaise bhul skta hu kayar khush hoga bahar Jo ghum rha hai.

Ranga :- Shayad woh bahar hoga aur usne mujhe acche paise diye hai tujhe tikhane lgane ke aur sach bolu mein tujhe pasand nahi karta toh mein shauk se karunga.

Ranga Ajay ko punch pe punch Marta hai. Ajay chutne ki koshish kar rha tha.

Scene change hota hai.

[ Kuch der pehle kahani ab Vijay ki side chalegi]

Wahi Vijay ek bench par baitha tha.

Samne bohut si workout ke liye samaan the jaise push-up ke liye lohe ke bade dande.

Ronny :- new Prisoner ? Mera naam Ronny hai tumhe Thodi workout ki jaroorat hai.

Vijay:- Mera naam Vijay hai aur workout ki jaroorat kyun ?

Ronny :- yaha agar Zinda rehna hai toh. Tumne iss jail ke rang nahi dekhe abhi.

Vijay :- shayad tum sahi ho kya sirf itne hi equipment hai koi dumble yaa kuch nahi ?

Ronny :- tumhe sirf itne hi equipment ki jaroorat hai yaha special Treatment sirf bade logo aur unke kutto ko milta hai, bura nahi hai ye dekho mere biceps ye dole mein hila bhi skta hu ( Apne dole dikhata hua).

Vijay :- shukriya show dikhane ke liye mein try karunga.

Vijay samne dekhta hai 2 prisoner ek ladke ko maar rhe hai Vijay unke paas Jaa kar dekhta hai jinme takla Prisoner jiska naam Monu tha bolta hai.

Monu :- kya yaha picture chal rhi hai yaha ? Apne kaam se kaam rakh.

Vijay:- kya yaha kuch chal rha hai.

Monu ( jor se chilla kar ) :- Haan toh yaha se chalta ban.

Vijay:- woah tumhe chillane ki jaroorat nahi hai mein behra nahi hu.

Vijay uss ladke ko dekhta hai jo maar khaa rha tha aur waha dukhi ho kar waha se chal deta hai usse kuch prisoner dikhte hai jo kuch dekh rhe the Vijay waha jata hai toh dekhta hai kuch logo ek admi ko pakad ke maar rhe the.

[ Ye koi aur nahi ranga tha Jo Ajay ko maar rha tha ]

Jaise hi Vijay ko kuch prisoners ne dhakka dekar prison yard mein dhakela, usne turant apne aas-paas ka jaayza liya. Ranga ne Vijay ko dekha aur ek muskaan ke saath apne ek aadmi ko ishara kiya ki usse maar giraye.

Woh aadmi Vijay ki taraf aage badhta hai, chehre par ek khatarnak smile ke saath, lekin Vijay shant raha.

Jab us aadmi ne pehla vaar kiya, Vijay jhuk gaya aur uske muh par ek zabardast mukka de mara. Woh thug peeche hichak gaya, aur Vijay ne us moka ka faayda uthate hue uska collar pakda aur ghutna uske pet mein jor se de mara, uska saans hi nikal gaya. Jab thug jhuk gaya dard se, Vijay ne apna matha uske mathhe se jor se takraya, aur woh thug zameen par gir gaya, behosh.

Dusri taraf, Ranga Ajay ko be-reham mukke maar raha tha, jab Ajay ko kuch prisoners ne pakad rakha tha. Lekin jaise hi un logo ne Vijay ko ladte dekha, unhone Ajay ko chhod diya aur Vijay par hamla karne bhag gaye.

Ajay ne moka dekhte hi apne aapko chhuda liya aur Ranga par toot para, use chain-link fence par zor se dhakka dekar chipka diya. Ajay ne ek ke baad ek punch maarne shuru kiye, har punch se Ranga hil gaya. Ranga ne desperate hokar block aur counter karne ki koshish ki, lekin Ajay ne har vaar ko bacha, aur Ranga ko waha nazdeek ki bench par zor se patak diya.Vijay ke paas do aur aadmi bhagte hue aaye. Pehla thug wild swing kar raha tha, lekin Vijay ne uska vaar chhoda aur uske chehre par zor se thappad jor se maara jo poore yard mein goonj gaya. Dusra thug Vijay ko kick maarne ki koshish karta hai, lekin Vijay uska paon pakad leta hai, ghumata hai aur zameen par gira deta hai. Phir Vijay ne tezi se punches maarne shuru kiye, har punch ek hammer jaisa tha, aur aakhir mein ek devastating Superman punch mara jo us thug ko seedha zameen par gira deta hai.

Ajay aur Ranga benches ke upar lad rahe the. Ranga apne gusse se Ajay ko overpower karne ki koshish kar raha tha, lekin Ajay har move ko precision ke saath counter kar raha tha, har punch aur throw ekdum deadly accuracy ke saath lag raha tha. Ranga, battered aur desperate, aakhirkar Ajay ko ek zor ka dhakka deta hai, jis se Ajay peeche Vijay se takra jaata hai. Dono ek second ke liye takrate hain, lekin turant apna balance wapas pa lete hain. Dono ek dusre ko ek nazar dekhte hain, samajh jaate hain bina kuch bole. Phir palat ke apne dushmanon ka saamna karne ke liye taiyyar ho jaate hain.Ab Vijay aur Ajay ek saath Ranga ke aadmiyon se ladne lagte hain, unki har move ekdum sync mein hoti hai. Vijay ek thug ke midsection mein ek zabardast kick maar kar usse Ajay ki taraf dhakka deta hai. Ajay us thug ko pakad ke seedha zameen par spine-buster de maar ta hai. Ranga, apne aadmiyon ko girta dekh, Ajay par vaar karta hai, usse kick maarne ki koshish karta hai, lekin Ajay waqt par hatt jaata hai, aur phir ek ke baad ek punches ki barsaat kar deta hai. Phir bina kisi hesitation ke, Ajay Ranga ko utha kar ek zabardast suplex de maar ta hai jo poore yard mein goonjta hai.

Ladai ko guardon ki seeti se roka jaata hai jo wahan dande utha kar daudte hue aate hain. Ajay aur Vijay dono thake hue, breathless, peeche hatt jaate hain, haath upar utha lete hain

.Guard: Bas! Isse pehle ki tum sabko 3rd degree saza doon, sab band karo aur abhi ke abhi jao!
Ranga, apne muh se khoon puchte hue, Ajay ko ghoor kar kehta hai: Bach gaya is baar, lekin hamesha nahi bachega.
Ranga ke jaate hi,

Ajay Vijay ke paas aata hai, bina uski taraf dekhe, bolta hai, Mujhe durr rehna samjha? Mujhe kisi ke sahare ki zaroorat nahi.
Ajay waha se chala jaata hai, aur Vijay bas uske peeche dekhta rehta hai. Apne chottil haath ko dekhta hai aur phir apne aapko sambhal kar ander chala jaata hai.Lunch ka alarm bajta hai, poore yard mein goonjta hai. Saare prisoners line mein lagte hain, haath mein plates lekar, ek machine ke tarah chal rahe hote hain. Chef plates mein khaana dalta ja raha tha, ek ke baad ek, jabki ladai ki tension hawa mein ab tak mehsoos ho rahi thi.


Aaj ke liye bas itna hi i don't know kaisi jaa rhi hai jaisi hai aise hi hai detailing mein dal rha hu taaki logo ko samajh aaye also mene dusri jagah sirf alag tarike se likhi hai Interractive toh mere liye Naya hai but agar acchi nahi lg rhi toh reply mein btaon mein hata dunga aur dialogues aur baaki cheezen bhi change kar dunga because it's readers choice.
 
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Toh ab jaise Vijay aur Ajay dono apne cells mein aaj chuke hai.

Dusre din subah hoti hai Ajay dekhta hai jail mein guards aur officers cells baar aa kar check kar rhe the baahar bohut si lohe ki fences bni hai aur jail bohut badi thi chota sa maidaan Jo shayad prisoners ko bahar ghumne aur khelne ke liye bohut se watch tower the aur guards Nazar bnaye the camera aur guns lekar Mics aur bohut speaker bhi the.

Wahi cell blocks ki baat kare toh bohut chota tha ek bed aur toilet ek table chair thi jis par book aur pen thi jo shayad vichaar badalne ke liye thi.

Ajay baahar aata hai beech mein usse 2 prisoner milte hai jo ek guard ko dekh kar gaaliyan de rhe the kyunki usne unhe 3 weeks Tak Saza ke liye ek bohut choti jail Jo ki jameen par hoti hai usme dal diya tha.

Pehla prisoner :- mein isse marna chahta hu.

Dusra Prisoner :- woah bilkul nahi woh tumhe humesha ke liye waha dal denge.

Pehla prisoner:- mujhe farak nahi padhta mujhe bas manzoor hai.

Ajay unki taraf jata hai :- toh ruke huye kyun ho jao karo.

Pehla prisoner:- mein bas sahi mauke ki talash mein hu.

Ajay :- bakwaas tum Aisa kuch nahi karne Wale.

Pehla Prisoner:- accha tumhe kaise pta ?

Ajay :- ohh mujhe kaise pta aise ( woh ek mukka uski taraf karta hai jisse pehle prisoner Darr jata hai ).

Pehla prisoner :- hey durr rho.

Ajay :- aise pta hai mujhe aur koi sawaal.

Dusra Prisoner ( pehle prisoner ka haath pakad kar kheechte huye ) :- maaf Karo Bhai bas mazak kar rha hai ye.

Ajay sar hila kar aage chal deta hai.

Ajay Ravi ko dekhte huye Jo chupchaap baitha tha :- tujhe kya hua phirse un rowdy logo ne pareshan kiya ?

Ravi :- nahi woh mein pareshan hu mujhe neend nahi aati idhar.

Ajay :- bohut kismat wala kaash mujhe bhi nahi aati.

Ravi ( sar khujate huye ) :- Kya ?

Ajay :- soch aadhe log apni neend mein hi humesha so jate hai.

Ravi :- ye toh maine socha hi nahi.

Ajay :- isliye toh bola kismat wala hai tu.

Ajay Ravi ke bagal mein dekhta hai kuch prisoners table par dice se khel rhe.

Ajay:- kon Jeet rha hai ?

Buddha prisoner :- mein aur kon.

Ajay :- woh kaise.

Buddha prisoner :- meri skills aur Apne tazurbe ke badolat aur kya.

Ajay :- tumhe sach mein lgta hai ye tumhari skills se hai ye sirf ek dice hai.

Buddha Prisoner :- Ye tum kya bakwas kar rhe ho bilkul ye meri skills ke badolat hai.

Ajay :- ghante ki skills.

Dusra prisoner ( Jo uske saath khel rha tha woh gusse mein kehta hai ) :- Phek bhi de dice Raghav cheater kahi ka Kismat se jeet rha hai.

Ajay haath ghuma kar aage badh jata hai aur ek lohe ki zanjeer se bani fences se lg kar khada ho jata hai.

Waha Munna aata hai aur bolta hai :- hey Ajay tujhse koi milna chahta hai.

Ajay :- accha kon?

Munna:- Pata nahi woh waha Jo waha hai mujhe sirf itna hi pta hai.

Ajay uss taraf dekhta hai ek dadhi wala admi kuch logo ke saath baitha tha.

Ajay uss taraf jata hai jaise hi woh uss maidaan mein aata hai uss do logo pakad lete hai.

Ajay :- Oye chor mujhe.

Ranga :- toh tu aa hi gya chal khelne ka samay aa gya.

Ye bolkar ranga Ajay ke pet par mukka Marta hai.

Ajay dard mein cheekhta hai aur bolta hai :- tumhe kya chahiye mujhse.

Ranga :- isse koi farak nahi padhta mujhe kya chahiye farak padhta hai Rajeev Sinha ko kya chahiye Yaad aaya ?

Ajay ( gusse mein ) :- usko kaise bhul skta hu kayar khush hoga bahar Jo ghum rha hai.

Ranga :- Shayad woh bahar hoga aur usne mujhe acche paise diye hai tujhe tikhane lgane ke aur sach bolu mein tujhe pasand nahi karta toh mein shauk se karunga.

Ranga Ajay ko punch pe punch Marta hai. Ajay chutne ki koshish kar rha tha.

Scene change hota hai.

[ Kuch der pehle kahani ab Vijay ki side chalegi]

Wahi Vijay ek bench par baitha tha.

Samne bohut si workout ke liye samaan the jaise push-up ke liye lohe ke bade dande.

Ronny :- new Prisoner ? Mera naam Ronny hai tumhe Thodi workout ki jaroorat hai.

Vijay:- Mera naam Vijay hai aur workout ki jaroorat kyun ?

Ronny :- yaha agar Zinda rehna hai toh. Tumne iss jail ke rang nahi dekhe abhi.

Vijay :- shayad tum sahi ho kya sirf itne hi equipment hai koi dumble yaa kuch nahi ?

Ronny :- tumhe sirf itne hi equipment ki jaroorat hai yaha special Treatment sirf bade logo aur unke kutto ko milta hai, bura nahi hai ye dekho mere biceps ye dole mein hila bhi skta hu ( Apne dole dikhata hua).

Vijay :- shukriya show dikhane ke liye mein try karunga.

Vijay samne dekhta hai 2 prisoner ek ladke ko maar rhe hai Vijay unke paas Jaa kar dekhta hai jinme takla Prisoner jiska naam Monu tha bolta hai.

Monu :- kya yaha picture chal rhi hai yaha ? Apne kaam se kaam rakh.

Vijay:- kya yaha kuch chal rha hai.

Monu ( jor se chilla kar ) :- Haan toh yaha se chalta ban.

Vijay:- woah tumhe chillane ki jaroorat nahi hai mein behra nahi hu.

Vijay uss ladke ko dekhta hai jo maar khaa rha tha aur waha dukhi ho kar waha se chal deta hai usse kuch prisoner dikhte hai jo kuch dekh rhe the Vijay waha jata hai toh dekhta hai kuch logo ek admi ko pakad ke maar rhe the.

[ Ye koi aur nahi ranga tha Jo Ajay ko maar rha tha ]

Kuch prisoners Vijay ko dhakka de dete hai andar.

Ranga vijay ko dekhta hai aur apne ek admi ko usse marne ke liye bolta hai.

Woh admi Vijay ko Marne ke liye aata hai par vijay jhuk kar avoid kar deta aur ek mukka muh par Marta hai aur pakad kar ghutna pet me Marta hai aur Vijay apna sar uske sar par mar kar usse gira deta hai.

Wahi dusri aur ranga Ajay ko mukke mar rha tha lekin Jo log Ajay ko pakde the woh Vijay ko Marne ke liye bhagte hai Ajay jab ke haath sab chor ke bhaage toh Ajay Ranga ko zanjeer fences par dhakkar dekar punches ki baarish kar deta hai. Ranga Counter karne ki koshish karta hai par Ajay reversal kar deta hai aur utha kar bench par patak deta hai.

Wahi Vijay par do log bhag kar hamla karne aate hai par Vijay dono ko marne ek ko big slap dusre ko big slap lgta hai ek kick Marne koshish karta hai par Vijay hatt kar back to back punch marne lgta hai aur end mein ek Superman punch jab tak woh gir naa gya ho.

Ajay aur ranga benches par lad rhe the ranga counter karni ki Puri koshish kar rha tha par Ajay moka nahi de rha tha.

Ranga finally Ajay ko dhakka deta hai jo Vijay ki peeth se dono thode takrate hai Vijay aur Ajay ek dusre ko dekte hai phir palat kar tayyar ho jate hai samne ladne.

Vijay aur Ajay ek saath ranga ke admi se ladne lgte hai Vijay usko kick marke ghutna mar kar Ajay ki taraf dhakka deta hai Aur Ajay usko pakad ke spine buster deta hai.

Ranga Ajay par vaar karne aata hai kick Marne ke liye par Ajay hatt jata hai back to back bohut punches dekar ek suplex deta hai.

Guards seethi Baja kar aate hai Ajay aur Vijay dard mein the aur tez saanse le rhe the.

Guard :- Bas isse pehle ki mein tum sabko 3rd degree saza du sab band Karo abhi ab jao.

Ranga jate huye Ajay se :- Bach gya lekin kab tak bachega ?

Ajay chalte huye Vijay ke paas aata hai aur bolta hai :- Mujhe durr rehna samjhe mujhe kisi ke sahare ki jaroorat nahi.

Aur Ajay waha se chala jata hai vijay apne choti haath ko dekhta hai Ajay ko jate huye dekhta hai phir sar hila kar andar chala jata hai.

Lunch ka Alarm baj jata hai sab log khaana khane ki jagah par aa rhe the sab log haath mein plate lekar line mein lg rhe the Khaana ek chef Plates mein dalte jaa rha tha.

Aaj ke liye bas itna hi i don't know kaisi jaa rhi hai jaisi hai aise hi hai detailing mein dal rha hu taaki logo ko samajh aaye also mene dusri jagah sirf alag tarike se likhi hai Interractive toh mere liye Naya hai but agar acchi nahi lg rhi toh reply mein btaon mein hata dunga aur dialogues aur baaki cheezein bhi change kar dunga because it's readers choice.
Kahani mein aapka detailing ka kaam accha hai, jo readers ko scene aur characters ke emotions samajhne mein madad karta hai. Lekin kuch jagah dialogues thoda aur impactful ho sakte hain, taaki characters ki personality aur unka mood aur clearly samajh aaye.Yeh thoda aur strong ho sakta hai,

Kuch dialogues mein aur dum dalne ki zaroorat hai. Jaise Ajay aur Vijay ke interactions mein thoda aur intensity lani chahiye, taaki readers ko unke beech ki tension aur relation ko aur deeply feel kar sakein.

Action scenes mein clarity aur flow ko thoda better karne ki zaroorat hai. Aap visual aur physical actions ko thoda aur clear aur engaging tarike se likh sakte hai,Ajay aur Vijay ke characters ko thoda aur explore karne ki zaroorat hai. Unke motivations aur backstory ko thoda aur develop karke readers ke liye aur interesting banaya ja sakta hai,Kahani ki pacing thodi uneven lagti hai. Kuch scenes mein aap thoda aur fast-paced approach le sakte hain, especially action sequences mein, taaki reader engaged rahe.Overall, kahani mein potential hai, aur agar aap kuch changes karte hain toh yeh aur bhi engaging ban sakti hai. Detailing ko maintain rakhe, lekin dialogues aur action ko aur impactful banane par focus karein.
 
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