Thriller Dastan-ae-aladdin=》X~FORUM no.1 Thriller story

[Suryaa]

Awesome update
Kiya kaise ye sab
Keep posting

Thanks arjun bhaiya
Aapke sabhi question ka answer aapko aglay update mai milega
And thanks for supporting

 

[Black water]

Nice update bhai

 

[Suryaa]

for new story suryaa
Story read krke review deti hun

Fantastic story suryaa
But Ali ne ye blast kiya kaise
Waiting for next update

Thanks sona ji kahani padhnai k liye
Aur apna support es kahani ko daine k liye
Ese hi sath bne rahai aur shayog karti rahai and aapke question ka answer aapko aglay episode mai milega

 

[Suryaa]

Bahut Badhiya....
Lukha aur Aslam Gaye......

Jail se bhi Azaadi mil gayi.....
Ab sister se milna hai....

Aur Ab hoga Intekaam ka elaan...??

Thanks hayaan bhaiya
Aapka comment padh kr hmesa accha lagta hai umeed krta hu aapka sath u hi bana rahai ab jalde hi sister se milna hoga
And aapke questions ka answer aagay aane walay episode mai milayga
And ha

 

[Suryaa]

Nice update bhai

Thanks bde bhaiya
Support karne k liye
Aapka comment padh kr accha laga
Aur umeed karta hu aapka sath aagay bhi esay hi bana raheyga

 

[Suryaa]

Nice update bhai

Zabardast awesome update
So Ali ne Aslam or lukha k parkhche ura diye
Or Kabir ko ly k frar ho gia good

firefox420 kamdev99008 ji @Drchutiya.... Rahul.. brego4 sir ji... Studxyz sandy ji.... Pritam.bs dada.... nain11ster aka3829 ji..... Casinar sir janu2016 ji...... Aakash..... Plz is story ko padhiye ek baar..... aur Suryaa ji ko kahani aage likhne ke liye motivation ke roop mein ek review dijiye plz....

Thanks bde bhaiya
Aapke comment k liye
Ese hi shayog karte rahi

Thanks asif bhaiya
Aapka detailed review dekh kr accha laga
Aise he sath bane rahi aur
Shayog karte rahi

Thanks naina

wonderfull update jail se nikal gaye dono lukha brothers ko bhi maar diya ap apni didu ko bachao jaldi karo wo pareshan hai yaal

Thans janu bhaiya
Story read karnai k liye
Jb read kr le to comment jarur karna

Thank you

Thank you

Ok raat ko update pad kar apni pratikriya deta hu. Filhal to ek salah hai ki story me itni badi pic ka istemal na kare to behtar hai. Pic se jyada update par dhyan de.

Thank you pritam dada

Agar Yahan reply ish story pe reviews naa mili toh..
... mujh se bhi apni story pe rebu expect mat kario.....samjhla..

Nice update

Unique intro style...
next....
Haan bhai ye he hota h..
Ek kahawat h...
'Kawwa chala hans ki chaal aur apni chaal bhi bhul gaya.'

To bhai jia bhi writer ne apne tarike se kahani likhi h wo kamyaab rahi h.
Apna tarika apnao aur kamyaabi pao

Update 1
Brilliant
To bhai shahb per full family ke murder charges hai...
Ali ka gusse mein dimag kaam kar gaya...

Ab tarika aur maloom chal jaye

Update 2

Jail ke bahar tazi hawa ek saath ek imandaar policiya free
next

Waiting next....

rebu

update Suryaa ji....... Extraordinary

anandsngh12 ji ek review plz

Bahut badhiya start hai dost..
Kahani ka plot achchha hai..
Ali ne lukkha aur aslam ko vajib saza di...
Ab aage dekhte hain ki vo kaise bahar nikalta hai jail se..?

Surya bhai spellings par thoda dhyan do..mistakes bahut jyada hain..jiski vajah se read karne me kafi dikkat jati hai..agar kisi tarah read kar bhi liya to uska arth samajhne me problem hoti hai..

Dusri baat short words ka use kam se kam karo...kyon ki short words use karne se kayi words aise ban jate hain ki writer ne vo likha kisi aur maqsad se hota hai parantu padhne wale ko uska arth kuch aur hi samajh me aata hai..

Third problem pronunciations ki hai...aap male ko female aur fenale ko male sambodhit kar rahe ho...isse samajh me nahi ayega ki ladka koun hai aur ladki koun...?

Ek baat aur kahna chahunga dost...updates me picture add karne ki jagah story par jyada focus karo...kyon ki badhiya writer vahi hai jo apni kahani aur usme likhe shabdo se reader's ke dil aur dimag par uss ghatna ka sketch bana de..

Otherwise, aapki story mast hai...
Meri wishes aapke sath hain...aapki kahani har pathak ke dil par ek amit chhap chhod kar jaye.

Sure..

Thank you

badiya surya bhai

Awesome update
Kiya kaise ye sab
Keep posting

for new story suryaa
Story read krke review deti hun

Fantastic story suryaa
But Ali ne ye blast kiya kaise
Waiting for next update

Bahut Badhiya....
Lukha aur Aslam Gaye......

Jail se bhi Azaadi mil gayi.....
Ab sister se milna hai....

Aur Ab hoga Intekaam ka elaan...??

Nice update bhai

Thanks for being so supportive

Aap sabhi k support k liye aapka tahey dil se suhkriya

 

[Suryaa]

And 3rd episode bhi 1 2 dine mai release ho jae ga
Ummed karuga k usko bhi aapka esa hi support milega

 

[Naina]

Intezaar......

 

[nain11ster]

firefox420 kamdev99008 ji @Drchutiya.... Rahul.. brego4 sir ji... Studxyz sandy ji.... Pritam.bs dada.... nain11ster aka3829 ji..... Casinar sir janu2016 ji...... Aakash..... Plz is story ko padhiye ek baar..... aur Suryaa ji ko kahani aage likhne ke liye motivation ke roop mein ek review dijiye plz....

Ji bilkul aap ne kah diya ... hum suru ho jate hain

 

[Suryaa]

Ji bilkul aap ne kah diya ... hum suru ho jate hain

thanks bde bhaiya