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The story seems to be moving well, looking at the comments. But non hindi speakers unable to follow the Hinglish. Please do consider us too. If you are writing in Hindi, we may not comment. But you started in English.............. and left us half way while shaggingUpdate - 1
Swati & Anshul were a happily married couple. Anshul was working in a small IT Firm. Swati was 27 yrs old and Anshul was 30 years old. They were leading a pretty ordinary middle class life. Living in Mumbai. They had an arranged marriage. They had 2 kids, both daughters. The elder one was 4 yrs old. The younger was just born 2 months old. Here's where the story starts. One unfortunate day while Anshul was driving on his bike back from office, he met with a terrible accident. He was rushed to the hospital immediately.
Swati was all alone as her parents were no more. She rushed to the hospital to find Anshul completely shattered in bed. Her hopes of a good future and everything seemed to be fading away. With 2 kids, it was a disaster. It took 1 week for Anshul to regain his senses. When he was back to life, he was paralysed waist down completely. He couldn't move a limb below his waist. With the medical insurance he had, Swati took him to various hospitals in Mumbai, all with the same opinion that it's almost impossible for him to regain back his earlier strength. It would be a miracle if he can even move his legs, such was the impact of the accident. He was declared a paralysed person.
With heavy heart, and true to her duties of being a faithful housewife, she took the decision to take care of Anshul at their home. It was a rented 1 BHK Flat. With whatever savings they had she knew it would be difficult to sustain long, but she wanted to do everything she could for the sake of her kids.
She didn't have the qualification to get a decent job. She was 12th Pass, and just 1 year of Graduation and then dropped out for marriage.
Anyways days passed by and it was 1 month after the incident. Swati was getting a bit frustrated with the hardships. Though she tried hard not to let Anshul notice. Her elder kid Sonia was admitted to a normal School nearby. She got little help from her in-laws but even they were now trying to shrug off from them. Anshul's parents had died when he was very young. They both literally had no one whom they could turn to.
Swati was a petite woman by all means. She was very fair, but short heighted 5 feet 1 inches. She had a bit plump figure which comes with every Indian housewife. She used to wear normal cotton sarees which used to get crumpled due to her daily housework. She never wore her saree below the navel, always tried to wear it as conservative as she could. But then mostly the hem of the petticoat used to come and rest just on her navel. Her left side of the saree used to be a bit open, which made her blouse area visible and anyone could see the curve of a fully grown mother's breast and a bit of her belly. She never tried to be exposing herself. She was beautiful with beautiful eyes, nose, red lips and long flowing hair. Just that due to their financial conditions she could never take adequate care of herself.
Swati
It was a normal monday day and Swati was getting Sonia ready for her school. She used to go daily to drop her off in the school. As she was walking with her Sonia was playfully jumping around and the waterbottle got off her hand. Swati scolded her and tried to pick up her bottle. In the process she bent down and her saree pallu fell half way giving a view of her luscious cleavage through her tight blouse. Luckily not many people were there around. Unluckily for her the local goon and wannabe MLA of the area Jayraj was having a cigrette sitting on his bike. He saw Swati and immediately lightning stuck him. He knew Swati and Anshul living in his area but never ever cared about them. What he saw that morning was probably the best he had seen in his life. He had never seen such a beautiful cleavage of a young mother. He calculated in his mind, the cleavage must be around 4-5 inches long, a black thick line with milky white coloured mangoes on either side. He licked his lips and kept watching her. Swati noticed Jayraj and quickly covered her bosson and walked briskly to the school. Jayraj looked and walked briskly to the school. Jayraj looked at Swati. As she was trying to rush her hips were swaying left to right. Such a petite woman, so beautiful was what Jayraj was thinking. He rubbed his hairy chest looking at her rush towards the school. He waited for her to return back.
Jayraj was 45 years old. He was tall, much taller than average person, 6 Foot 1 inches. He had a well built athletic body and was dark coloured. But he was handsome. He had big black moustache with some beard occadinally. Always used to wear a big gold bracelet and a gold chain. He had huge muscles and hairy since he used to keep 2 buttons of his shirt always open. He was divorced. He never married after that. His wife couldn't bear kids and that's why he divorced her. That's what everyone knew. Some close sources knew that she couldn't bear the way Jayraj used to make love. As many mouths as many words.
Jayraj saw Swati returning alone after leaving Sonia to school. Swati was Jayraj and properly covered her pallu, looking at him to avoid him. Jayraj looked hungry for her. Just as Swati was about to enter her flat, Jayraj interrupted her.
Jayraj: Namaste Swati ji.
Swati: (confused) Namaste.
Jayraj: Anshul ji kaise hain?
Swati: Thik hain.
Jayraj: Koi dikkat ho to bataiyega.
Swati: ji, thanks.
Swati rushed to her apartment. She didn't know her rushing made her hips sway wildly. Her breasts were juggling. Jayraj saw all of that. He just wanted to put his mouth on those innocent wife's mellons.
Next day same thing happened. Jayraj was waiting for Swati. Swati avoided him. The conversation started by Jayraj, Swati politely replied and left. Swati could feel the sexual tension in Jayraj increasing. This started happening and continued for next 2 days. Jayraj was getting restless. He even touched her plump hand full of glass bangles one day just to show his strength to her and how a male approaches a female when Swait used to ignore his questions. Swati took his hand off but he was strong. He laughed in an evil manner and let Swati go
Swati used to come home and never discuss the humiliation to Anshul. Anshul was completely bed ridden. He could never do anything himself. Swati's financial woes were continuing. She tried but couldn't get a job for herself. She was feeling helpless. She didn't have the fees for Sonia's school for the next month. She was sitting wondering all this when the bell rang. She went to open the door and saw Jayraj standing there, tall and well built covered the entire door height. Swati's belly was visible from her saree as per pallu was crumpled. She quickly covered her stomach as she saw Jayraj looking there. Jayraj came in and wanted to meet Anshul.
Jayraj: Anshul ji se milna tha.. halchal puchna tha.
Swati: ji wo so rahe hain.
Jayraj: mai wait karta hu.
Swati understood his intentions and quickly wanted to make him go away. So she allowed him and took him to Anshul's room.
Jayraj: Namaste Anshul ji. Mai Jayraj hu. apka hal puchne aya hu.. yahi rehta hu.
Anshul: (Just managed to make some pleasantries)
Jayraj: Swati ji bahut achi hain.. apka itna seva karti hain.. mujhe dekh ke bahut acha laga.
Anshul: ji.. thanks..
Jayraj: Acha mai chalta hu.. kuch jarurat hoga to bataiyega.
Jayraj stood up and started leaving. Swati followed him to close the door.
Jayraj: aapki choti beti.. ?
Swati: wo so rahi he.. andar..
Jayraj: 2 mahine ki he na?
Swati: ji..
Jayraj: Swati ji bura mat maniye.. ek bat puchu?
Swati: ji.. (she was wondering how to make him go)
Jayraj: ghar ka kharch kaise chalta he?
Swati: bas kuch savings he.. koi dikkat nahi..
Jayraj: ji.. kuch jarurat ho to bataiyega..
Swati: ji..
Jayraj looked at Swati once again trying to see her cleavage and blouse from the left side. The cleavage he cudnt see but the curvacious red blouse from the left side of her saree was visible. He judged the size and smiled at her. She covered herself again and closed the door.
Jayraj visited again next day on pretext of meeting Anshul but spoke more with Swati. Swati tried to see him off in 2-3 minutes. Meanwhile Swati's financial conditions worsened. She was becoming helpless. Everyone she turned to was leaving her alone. Jayraj used to speak to her daily. She started feeling a little less scared of him, but still wary of him.
One day when Jayraj visited them as usual. After meeting Anshul he came out of the room.
Swati: Jayraj ji mujhe kuch kehna he..
Jayraj beamed.
Jayraj: ji Swatiji kahiye..
Swati: mujhe kuch paiso ki jarurat he..
Jayraj: paise? hmm.. dekhiye Swati ji.. yaha koi paise kisi ko aise hi nahi deta..
Swati: please meri madad kijiye..mujhe Sonia ki fees deni he.
Jayraj: kitni fees he?
Swati: 2000 Rs.
Jayraj: ye to thoda jyada he..
Swati: please... kuch kijiye..
Jayraj: Acha meri ek shart he..
Swati: Kya shart?
Jayraj: Mai apko 2000 de dunga.. par mujhe kuch chaie..
Swati: Kya?
Jayraj: Kya hum chat pe chal sakte hain? Waha koi nahi he.. mai wahi apko bataunga..
Swati: Please yaha bata dijiye..
Jayraj: Mai sirf apke blouse kholke 30 min choosna chahta hu.. uske badle mai apko 2000 Rs de dunga..
Swati: Kya??
Swati was embarassed. Her face went red. She was never so much humiliated. She politely asked Mr. Jayraj to leave.
Swati: Jayraji ji.. please aap jaiye yaha se.
Jayraj: Swati ji.. mai apke fayde ke lie hi keh raha hu..
Swati: Please jaiye..mujhe apse kuch bat nahi karni..
Jayraj understood it wasn't as easy as he thought. After all she is a homely housewife. He left without uttering a word.
Swati closed the door and kept thinking about the incident. How cheap can this man be. Trying to take advantage of a woman when she is helpless. She quickly went to her daily chores. She couldn't stand that situation and she wanted to take her mind off it.
Next day, Swati went as usal to drop her daughter to school. Jayraj was standing as usual, having his cigarette and smiling at her. She faced in another direction and briskly walked towards her school. This happened daily. This became a routine. Jayraj never stalked her. He never talked to her directly, but just kept looking at her from a distance whenever she went to pick and drop her daughter to school or if she had to go to a nearby Shop. Swati just started hating Jayraj more. Jayraj started lusting more for Swati. His animal instinct was growing more and more as Swati was ignoring him. Swati on the other hand feared if Jayraj tried to take some indecent step, that would be the end of her life. In this situation she cannot bear this level of insult in her life.
Days passed by. The finances Swati had were almost finished. It was more than 2 months that Anshul had his accident. He could speak but could barely get up from his bed even with support. His medicines took the major share of expenses. Swati did everything with a smiling face but she started to get extremely worried. . Her sarees started giving a weary look. She didnt have much money to buy clothers for herself or her kids.
One night while she was returning from a nearby grocery shop, she was interrupted by a bike. It was Jayraj. He came near her and asked her to sit on the bike, he would drop her till her apartment. Swati started walking completely ignoring him. Jayraj started following her from behind. The way Swati's hips were swaying under her saree, Jayraj was starting to loose control. He was having a huge errection. He sped a bit and he held Swati's hand very roughly. In the process one of her glass bangle broke. Swati stopped and pleaded him to leave her alone. He stopped.
Jayraj: mere sath baith jao.. aur to kuch keh nahi raha hu..
Swati: kyu aap mujhe pareshan kar rahe hain? mujhe jane dijiye.. mere bache ghar pe intezar kar rahe hain..
Jayraj: kyu..kya karogi.. dudh pilaogi kya unhe? (he grinned evilishly)
Swati fumed with anger. She said : aap jaiye.. nahi to mai chillaungi..
Jayraj: mujhe sach me koi farak nahi padega agar tum chillaogi to.. but mai chala jata hu..
Jayraj looked at her and sped away. Swati sighed a relief and rushed to her flat.
She went in and started feeling so insulted. Had Anshul not been in this situation, Jayraj wouldn't have dared to speak such filthy language. Swati goes to Anshul's room. Usualy Anshul sleeps alone as he needs a bit more space. She goes and touched Anshul's hand. Anshul wakes up.
Swati: Anshul, mujhe kiss karo na.
Anshul tries to slowly wrap his arms around her waist. Swati bends down and slowly kisses his lips. Anshul's also kisses but his response is not as exciting. This is the first time they are kissing after his accident. They kiss for about 2 mins, where mostly Swati takes the lead. Her hand reaches into his pants involuntarily, but she notices its not errect. Leave errect there is no sign of any hardness.
Swati: Kya hua Anshul? Kuch problem he kya. Tum thik se kiss nahi kar rahe ho mujhe.
Anshul: Nahi Swati. Kar to raha hu.
Swati kisses him for some more time. But the situation remains same. Defeated, she gets up from the bed, smiles at Anshul.
Swati: mai khana laga deti hu.
Anshul: thik he.
Swati leaves the bedroom and tears start rolling off her cheeks. She knows its difficult for Anshul but then its so frustrating to lead this kind of life. She wants to curse God, but she doesn't as she know God is there for her. She thinks to herself, Jayraj is behind her. But she is least interested in him. He looks like a proper goon. Her mind wanders to the expenses. Where would she get the money to sustain next month. Sonia's fees, Anshul's Medicines, the rent. She tried a lot to get a job, but she is not getting any respectable job anywhere. She thinks to herself that if God is there, he will do something. He won't make my kids starve. Inspite of everything, she still loves Anshul.
Couple of days pass by. Swati now has absoultely no money left in her account. Sonia gets a notice from the school to submit her fees or else she has to leave the school.
Sonia: Mummy, meri fees bhar do na.
Swati: Ha beta, bhar dungi.
Sonia: Wo Aashi keh rahi thi ki tere mummy papa ke pas to paise nahi hai.. tu kal se school mat ana.
Swati: Nahi beta, tum uski bat mat suno.. tum man lagake pado.. mai fees bhar dungi..
Sonia:yayyy... thik he mummy mai khelne jati hu..
Swati goes to the bathroom and starts crying. She cannot do anything for her kids. Is Jayraj the only option left? How can she allow that huge 6 foot tall, Dark coloured goon touch her. Her head starts spinning. But then there is no option left anymore. She has to speak to Jayraj and convince him to give her some money. If he has a change of heart all this while, then may be he won't touch her. She has to ask him again for the money.
Next day, after dropping Sonia to school, Swati looks at Jayraj. He is standing there as usual for her. After many days their eyes meet. Swati gets tensed up. She goes to him.
Swati: Aap ek bar ghar ayenge?
Jayraj: ji bilkul. kab aau?
Swati: thodi der ke bad aa jaiye..
Jayraj: mai aadhe ghante me ata hu..
Swati leaves, reaches home and starts her daily housework. In exactly 30 mins, the doorbell rings. With elevated heart beat, Swati opens the door. Jayraj is standing right there. She welcomes him in. As a formality he meets Anshul and asks his well being. Anshul starts explaining him how and where he fell and his 2 months story of pain. Jayraj is hardly listening to him and looking towards the door to see signs of Swati. Swati comes with a tea for him. This is the first time she is offering him tea. He drinks the tea, and thanks her. He then leaves Anshul and starts towards the door. Swati excuses herself from Anshul and goes to the door.
Swati: Jayraj ji.. please aap mujhe 2000 Rs de dijiye.. mai apko next month lauta dungi.. kahi job lag jayegi meri agar..
Jayraj: Swati.. tumhari job kaise lagegi? tumne itna try kia na..
Swati: please,, mujhe thoda udhar de dijiye.. nahi to Sonia school se nikal di jayegi..
Jayraj: mai bhi nahi chahta ki use School se nikala jaye.. islie mere option aapke lie wahi hain...sirf adha ghanta Swati ji..
Swati: kya is tarah aap kisi besahara ka fayda uthayenge?
Jayraj: Aap besahra ban rahi hain khud.. aapko sahara dene ke lie hi mai aapke lie aya hu mere sare kam chhod ke.. mujhe aaj agle chunav ki meeting ke lie jana tha..
Swati: kyu aap aisa chahte hain.. mai 2 bacho ki ma hu.. aap se 20 saal choti hu umar me..
Jayraj: dekho Swati.. mere pas time nahi he.. agar tumhe aise time waste karna he.. to mujhe kyu bulaya.. mai chahta to tumhe kabhi bhi car me bitha ke utha ke le jata.. par mai tumhari izzat karta hu.. mai neeche khada hu.. 10 min aur.. agar tumhe thik lage.. to khidki se mujhe ishara karke bula lena.. mai aa jaunga.. watchman se chat ki chabi maine already le rakhi he..
Jayraj leaves.
Swati starts to think seriously now. She has lost all her options and this is what is left. She looks from the window behind the curtains. She can see Jayraj standing looking up at her window. Why me of all the women in the colony? She keeps wondering. Dejected, she makes up her mind. She quickly goes and changes her saree. After 10 mins she opens the window, and with her eyes directs Jayraj to come up. Jayraj is elevated. He starts walking fast towards her flat. He rings the bell. Swati opens the door. Jayraj looks at her with a slightly open mouth. Swati wears a red coloured cotton saree and a black coloured cotton blouse. She doesnt wear a bra as she wants it to finish as soon as possible and without anyone seeing. A bra might become bit more complicated. Jayraj notices that as he can see her shoulders and no strap visible beneath the thin material of her black blouse. He tried to look at her navel, but unfortunately for him she has hid it beneath her saree.
Swati: sirf 30 mins?
Jayraj: bilkul..
Swati: mujhe dar lag raha he.. kisi ne dekh lia to?
Jayraj: koi nahi dekhega..
Anshul calls Swati. Anshul: Kaun he Swati?
Swati: ji mai aati hu thodi der mein.. Sharma aunty ke ghar se..
Anshul: Thik he.. darwaza band kar jao..
Swati tiptoes out of the house and closes the door. They both take the stairs to the roof. Jayraj opens the lock of the door to the roof, they both enter, and Jayraj closes the door back and applies the lock. Swati looks confused as to where he wants it to happen. She starts feeling dead nervous. Jayraj holds her hand and takes her to the a small room on the roof. It is there for keeping some old items and sort of a store room. He sees here and there and then opens the lock. He directs Swati to enter in the totally dark room. He switches a zero watt bulb on with a bit of dim light. He closes the door from inside. Swati starts to shiver, partly due to the nervousness and partly due to the dampness inside the room. Its a very small room with some chairs and building materials thrown here and there. Never Swati imagined she would be here.
Jayraj sits on the floor with his legs wide open. A tall and well built man, his legs look huge. Swati doesnt look at him.
Jayraj: Swati, aao.
Swati comes a bit closer to him. He holds her hand softly. He feels the soft palms. He makes her sit near him. Swati sits reluctantly.
Jayraj: Swati, tum bahut sundar ho.. itni sundar aurat maine ajtak nahi dekhi..
Swati: please Jayraj ji.. jaldi kijiye.. meri beti so rahi he..uth gayi to problem ho jayega..
Jayraj takes off his purse and takes out 4 - 500 Rs notes and gives it to her. Swati accepts it and keeps it in her small purse that she brought. She feels so embarassed to do this. Sorry Anshul, is all she could say in her mind.
There are many writers writing in Hindi but for us only some. We all are daily eagerly waiting for update
Agar writer or ya kisi ko lagta hay hum galat hay so maaf karna
I read this story a long time ago on xosip.com but not the ending part coz it was not came out that time, now I read the ending but not satisfied....there are few reasons I want to mention...
Bahut se readers ne is kahani ko pada or bahut pasand bhi kiya, hame khud pasand hay par kuch cheeje hay jo honi chaiye the
Ab jo main kahne ja raha hoon usko pad ke bahut se readers yeh kahenge ki yeh sirf manoranjan ke liyea hay toh serious kyun lena....par jab itna lambi kahani likhi or itna detail main sex diya toh kuch details or honi chahiye the
Is kahani main sari baat jo hui uska jimewar sab ka thikra anshul ke he ser par phord diya gaya,jab ki anshul he sirf jimwar nahi, swati bhi jimewar hay balke anshul se jayda...
Kahani ka tag fantasy nahi hay so kai sawal hay hamare, agar fantasy hoti toh hum yeh sab kabhi pooch te he nahi kyunki fantasy main toh sab possible hay chahe chand Suraj he kyun na ban jaye...or pani jameen or jameen pani ho jaye...
Kahani main na toh anshul or nahi swati ke background ke bare main bataya gaya, jayse dono asman se tapke ho or in dono ka koi Nate ristedar nahi, anshul or swati ne school phir collage or phir anshul ne office main job par dono ke koi friends circle ke bare main nahi bataya gaya jayse school se collage tak koi friends he na ho jo ajeeb hay, dono kiraye ke makan main Itne saalon se rah rahe par padosiyon se jaan pahchan nahi ye bhi ajeeb hay...
Kahani main aysa lagta hay jayse sirf in kuch kirdaron ko utha ke ek glass glob(woh hota hay na jo gift shop par milta hay glass ka round sa jismain kabhi koi Mahal ya koi building ya koi putla hota hay or jab usko hilaten hay toh usmain snow ya aysa kuch hota hay) main rakh diya gaya hay us chote se round glass glob main inki duniya hay jaha ye or kuch nahi kar sakte siwaye ek he raste par chalen ke.... Aysa bahuton ke saath hua hoga ki woh road par drive karte janrahe hoon or achanak kafi gadiya us road par wapas ati dikhen or koi aapse kahe ki aage traffic hay mat jao toh aap kya kartr hay? Rasta badal te hay ya seedhe jake us traffic main phas jate hay? Par is kahani main dosre raste open he nahi rakhe hay matlab seedhe jake traffic main phasna he hai chae kuch bhi karlo...
Ànshul ka accident hona, ab yaha kitno ko pata hoga ki agar on job, agar husband ko kuch ho jata hay toh uski wife ko uski jagah job dee jati hay agar qualification kam hoti toh koi or job de jati hay,
Kahani main le de ke bas jaiyraj he jaiyraj hay or koi nahi jise dono help mang saken...chalo yeh bhe maan liya....
Ek toh writer ji ne anshul or swati ke dono haat kat diye (matlab samaj gaye na is muhavre ka?)....Jab swati ne jairaj ke yaha jane se mana kiya toh anshul ne pucha par swati ne nahi bataya, ek baat kahna chata hoon ki koi bhi rishta ho chahe pati patni ya gf/bf ya bro/sis yaha tak ke parents or bachon ke beeche...bharosha or vishwaas ek aysa shabd hay jo bahut jaroori hay...chalo mana swati anshul se jayraj ke duara usko physically or sexual harkaten or paise de ke uske saath galat karne wali baat batane main sankoche kar rahe par mota-mota ye hi bata deti ki uski nazar gandi hay or woh usko galat tarike ke choone ki koshish karta hay...kya anshul koi dood peeta bacha hay jo sirf itna bhi na samjhe or uske baad bhi apni biwi ko musibat main dale....duniya ka kaun sa pati hoga jo itna sune ke bad bhi shant or aram se baita rahe jayse kuch matlab he nahi apni patni se chahe uske saath kuch bhi ho....
Jairaj ke ghar jane ke baad swati ka usko job ke liyea kahna...bhai toh kaun job dila ke apni haat ayei murgi jane dega...phir jairaj ka asli khel suru hua swati ke saath jo ki anshul ke khilaf bhadkana or emotionally or sexual usko or open karn apne liyea....swati ne usko apne pati or bacho ki liyea swikar kar liya chalo theek hay jindagi main bahut se aysa time har kisi ke saath ata hay jaha na chate hue bhe except karna parta hay....par phir swati ka khud hawas main jairaj ke saath sab karna or anshul ke liyea najariya badalna jayse woh koi cheej he nahi...usko ghrina ki najar se dhekna, uska anshul se chird kar bat karna jayse uska use baat karana koi tauheen ho....or anshul ka dono ke aysi awajen jo sirf sex ke waqt hi nikalta or bister ka waisa awaj karna jo sirf sex ke waqt he hota hay uske baad bhi miya smaj nahi pa rahe andar kya horaha, itna andha wishwas.... kya miya kamre main 3-4 aurat or mard hay jo samj rahe ki woh uski biwi nahi....bhai jab pata hay ki band kamre main sirf or sirf jairaj or swati hi hay toh or kya chahiye samjne ke liyea or kaise samjhoge!!!... Is ko toh koi bhi badi asani se samhnlega ki andar kya ho raha or oopar se itne sare khule indication diye gaye hay uske baad bhe kamal hay bhai....itna seedha or bhodu bana diya hay writer ne anshul ko....agar koi kahta hay ki swati ne woh sab majboori or apne pariwar ke liyea kiya toh galat hay.....haan suru main swati ne majboori or pariwar ke liyea kiya par baad main woh sab khud apni marji se kiya hawas main, tab koi majboori nahi the jo saaf pata chalta hay yaha tak ke usne apne bacho tak par dhayan dena kam kar diya ek maa ho ke....
Agar koi kahta hay ki jairaj he galat hay toh ye sahi nahi....mana swati suru main galat nahi the jo bhi kiya majboori main par baad main woh bhi utni he galat thi jitna jairay......swati ka khud ko jairay ki rakhail or randi kahna, apne pati ko neecha dikhana or jairaj ko importance dena...jairaj jab anshul ko namard kahna or swati ka apne pati ke defence main kuch na kah kar balke muskurana apne pati ko namard kahalwana ye jante hue bhi ki woh nahi hay or jo is waqt uske halat hay woh accident ki wajah se hay....or suru se end tak jairaj se sirf unprotected sex kiya swati ke saath par kabhi ye nahi dikya ki swati ne pills lena suru kiya ho or nahi uske periods ke bare main jo ki na ho ye namumkin hay is age main unless woh jairaj se pregnant ho gaye ho jo ki woh bhi nahi tha....
Ending bhi ajeeb hay, kitni jagah jahan swati ne khud besharamo ki tarhan bina dare anshul ke samne he kai harkaten ki, itna sab khule aam hone baad bhi yeh dikhaya gaya ki na anshul ko kuch pata or nahi swati ko ki uske pati ko sab pata hay uske or jairaj ke bare main bhai kamal hay itna shoor sharaba kiya dono ne raat-raat bhar or kai jagah toh khullam khula uske baad bhe kamal hay kamal hay
I read this story a long time ago on xosip.com but not the ending part coz it was not came out that time, now I read the ending but not satisfied....there are few reasons I want to mention...
Bahut se readers ne is kahani ko pada or bahut pasand bhi kiya, hame khud pasand hay par kuch cheeje hay jo honi chaiye the
Ab jo main kahne ja raha hoon usko pad ke bahut se readers yeh kahenge ki yeh sirf manoranjan ke liyea hay toh serious kyun lena....par jab itna lambi kahani likhi or itna detail main sex diya toh kuch details or honi chahiye the
Is kahani main sari baat jo hui uska jimewar sab ka thikra anshul ke he ser par phord diya gaya,jab ki anshul he sirf jimwar nahi, swati bhi jimewar hay balke anshul se jayda...
Kahani ka tag fantasy nahi hay so kai sawal hay hamare, agar fantasy hoti toh hum yeh sab kabhi pooch te he nahi kyunki fantasy main toh sab possible hay chahe chand Suraj he kyun na ban jaye...or pani jameen or jameen pani ho jaye...
Kahani main na toh anshul or nahi swati ke background ke bare main bataya gaya, jayse dono asman se tapke ho or in dono ka koi Nate ristedar nahi, anshul or swati ne school phir collage or phir anshul ne office main job par dono ke koi friends circle ke bare main nahi bataya gaya jayse school se collage tak koi friends he na ho jo ajeeb hay, dono kiraye ke makan main Itne saalon se rah rahe par padosiyon se jaan pahchan nahi ye bhi ajeeb hay...
Kahani main aysa lagta hay jayse sirf in kuch kirdaron ko utha ke ek glass glob(woh hota hay na jo gift shop par milta hay glass ka round sa jismain kabhi koi Mahal ya koi building ya koi putla hota hay or jab usko hilaten hay toh usmain snow ya aysa kuch hota hay) main rakh diya gaya hay us chote se round glass glob main inki duniya hay jaha ye or kuch nahi kar sakte siwaye ek he raste par chalen ke.... Aysa bahuton ke saath hua hoga ki woh road par drive karte janrahe hoon or achanak kafi gadiya us road par wapas ati dikhen or koi aapse kahe ki aage traffic hay mat jao toh aap kya kartr hay? Rasta badal te hay ya seedhe jake us traffic main phas jate hay? Par is kahani main dosre raste open he nahi rakhe hay matlab seedhe jake traffic main phasna he hai chae kuch bhi karlo...
Ànshul ka accident hona, ab yaha kitno ko pata hoga ki agar on job, agar husband ko kuch ho jata hay toh uski wife ko uski jagah job dee jati hay agar qualification kam hoti toh koi or job de jati hay,
Kahani main le de ke bas jaiyraj he jaiyraj hay or koi nahi jise dono help mang saken...chalo yeh bhe maan liya....
Ek toh writer ji ne anshul or swati ke dono haat kat diye (matlab samaj gaye na is muhavre ka?)....Jab swati ne jairaj ke yaha jane se mana kiya toh anshul ne pucha par swati ne nahi bataya, ek baat kahna chata hoon ki koi bhi rishta ho chahe pati patni ya gf/bf ya bro/sis yaha tak ke parents or bachon ke beeche...bharosha or vishwaas ek aysa shabd hay jo bahut jaroori hay...chalo mana swati anshul se jayraj ke duara usko physically or sexual harkaten or paise de ke uske saath galat karne wali baat batane main sankoche kar rahe par mota-mota ye hi bata deti ki uski nazar gandi hay or woh usko galat tarike ke choone ki koshish karta hay...kya anshul koi dood peeta bacha hay jo sirf itna bhi na samjhe or uske baad bhi apni biwi ko musibat main dale....duniya ka kaun sa pati hoga jo itna sune ke bad bhi shant or aram se baita rahe jayse kuch matlab he nahi apni patni se chahe uske saath kuch bhi ho....
Jairaj ke ghar jane ke baad swati ka usko job ke liyea kahna...bhai toh kaun job dila ke apni haat ayei murgi jane dega...phir jairaj ka asli khel suru hua swati ke saath jo ki anshul ke khilaf bhadkana or emotionally or sexual usko or open karn apne liyea....swati ne usko apne pati or bacho ki liyea swikar kar liya chalo theek hay jindagi main bahut se aysa time har kisi ke saath ata hay jaha na chate hue bhe except karna parta hay....par phir swati ka khud hawas main jairaj ke saath sab karna or anshul ke liyea najariya badalna jayse woh koi cheej he nahi...usko ghrina ki najar se dhekna, uska anshul se chird kar bat karna jayse uska use baat karana koi tauheen ho....or anshul ka dono ke aysi awajen jo sirf sex ke waqt hi nikalta or bister ka waisa awaj karna jo sirf sex ke waqt he hota hay uske baad bhi miya smaj nahi pa rahe andar kya horaha, itna andha wishwas.... kya miya kamre main 3-4 aurat or mard hay jo samj rahe ki woh uski biwi nahi....bhai jab pata hay ki band kamre main sirf or sirf jairaj or swati hi hay toh or kya chahiye samjne ke liyea or kaise samjhoge!!!... Is ko toh koi bhi badi asani se samhnlega ki andar kya ho raha or oopar se itne sare khule indication diye gaye hay uske baad bhe kamal hay bhai....itna seedha or bhodu bana diya hay writer ne anshul ko....agar koi kahta hay ki swati ne woh sab majboori or apne pariwar ke liyea kiya toh galat hay.....haan suru main swati ne majboori or pariwar ke liyea kiya par baad main woh sab khud apni marji se kiya hawas main, tab koi majboori nahi the jo saaf pata chalta hay yaha tak ke usne apne bacho tak par dhayan dena kam kar diya ek maa ho ke....
Agar koi kahta hay ki jairaj he galat hay toh ye sahi nahi....mana swati suru main galat nahi the jo bhi kiya majboori main par baad main woh bhi utni he galat thi jitna jairay......swati ka khud ko jairay ki rakhail or randi kahna, apne pati ko neecha dikhana or jairaj ko importance dena...jairaj jab anshul ko namard kahna or swati ka apne pati ke defence main kuch na kah kar balke muskurana apne pati ko namard kahalwana ye jante hue bhi ki woh nahi hay or jo is waqt uske halat hay woh accident ki wajah se hay....or suru se end tak jairaj se sirf unprotected sex kiya swati ke saath par kabhi ye nahi dikya ki swati ne pills lena suru kiya ho or nahi uske periods ke bare main jo ki na ho ye namumkin hay is age main unless woh jairaj se pregnant ho gaye ho jo ki woh bhi nahi tha....
Ending bhi ajeeb hay, kitni jagah jahan swati ne khud besharamo ki tarhan bina dare anshul ke samne he kai harkaten ki, itna sab khule aam hone baad bhi yeh dikhaya gaya ki na anshul ko kuch pata or nahi swati ko ki uske pati ko sab pata hay uske or jairaj ke bare main bhai kamal hay itna shoor sharaba kiya dono ne raat-raat bhar or kai jagah toh khullam khula uske baad bhe kamal hay kamal hay
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Now writer is not well. So such questions shouldn't be raised. If your version is true, then why story got so many views..
You did not understand what I said,the story is not new as I told I read this on other site 6 years ago that time this story don't had ending and that site shut down to, and now it's completed so I also know there is nothing writer can do, I did not said I don't like the story, I said I don't like the ending, the ending should not be like this, it should had different ending where readers can had something to learn...
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The ending looks to be sudden due to writer's illness. One should understand this also. Anyway everyone has own view.Sorry if it hurt you