Hlo ji umeed aa sare thik jovo ge me ek story pehli bar likh reha koi improvement ya suggestions hove ta comment karke jrur dsio. Sab to pehla main character bare das da. Story 1 munde di aa jisnu school time ch 1 kudi nal pyar ho janda, puri school time kuj ni hunda dona ch per last paper wale din dona da sabar tut janda ga us to pehla kise di v himmat nahi pendi kuj v karan di. Munde di umar 17 sal te kudi 18 di hundi aa...story kal nu start karage te odo tak koi suggestion dena ta das sakde ho. Munda kudi alag alag shehar to hunde ne par bus ch 1 ch hi jande hunde ne kathe school 1 pind ch