Thriller RAAZ..... (Completed)

[Naina]

itne saalo baad padhne k baad bhi aisi feelings aaye ki new thriller story read kar rahin hoon....... kahani ki ant mein hi asli raaz ka pardaphash karta hain writer...... yahin toh vampire sir k khasiyat hain...
narrations aur language ki pakad kaafi majbut hain...... masterpiece story line with awesome writing skill....
Thank you Immo ji... is kahani ko share karne ke liye......

 

[Rahul]

wonderfull story hai ye

 

[Vikram Bhosle]

WHat A Story man
hat's off
one of the greatest story

 

[Genius]

Hello, Ladies  & Gentleman, 
We are so glad to Introduce Ultimate Story Contest of this year.

Jaise ki aap sabhi Jante Hain is baar Hum USC contest chala rahe hain aur Kuch Din pahle hi Humne Rules & Queries Thread ka announce kar diya tha aur ab Ultimate Story Contest ka Entry Thread air kar diya hai jo 10th, June 2020, 11:59 PM ko close hoga.

Khair ab main point Par Aate Hain Jaisa ki entry thread aired ho chuka hai isliye aap Sabhi readers aur writers se Meri personally request hai ki is contest mein aap Jarur participate kare aur Apni kalpnao ko shabdon ka rasta dikha ke yaha pesh kare ho sakta hai log use pasand kare.
Aur Jo readers nahi likhna chahte wo bakiyo ki story padhke review de sakte hai mujhe bahut Khushi Hogi agar aap is contest mein participate lekar apni story likhenge to.

Ye aap Sabhi Ke liye ek bahut hi sunhara avsar hai isliye Aage Bade aur apni Kalpanao ko shabdon Mein likhkar Duniya Ko dikha De.

Ye ek short story contest hai jisme Minimum 800 words se maximum 6000 words tak allowed hai itne hi words mein apni story complete Karni Hogi, Aur ek hi post mein complete karna hai aur Entry Thread mein post karna hai.
I hope aap mujhe niraash nahi Karenge aur is contest Mein Jarur participate Lenge.

Rules Check Karne k Liye Ye Thread Use karein :- Rules And Queries Thread

Entry Post Karne k Liye Ye thread Use Karein :- Entry Thread
Reviews Post Karne K liye Ye thread Use karein :- Reviews Thread
On Behalf of Admin Team
Regards :- Xforum Staff..

 

[Punnu]

The Immortal Bhai ....thnks ye story post krne ke liye and dil se thanks Vampire bhai ko jisne aisi jabardast story likhi.....sach me yr beginning se end tak story me Uttar chhadav dekhe pr yr isne to dimag ka bh**da hi kr diya .....itne Raaz itne suspense ....khas kr he update me ek Raaz khul rha tha or dusri taraf ek nya question ban rha tha jo end me solve ho hi gya....or jo isme beech-2 me Abhay ki life dikhayi hai wo bhi kabeel-e -tarrif hai yr ....kamini bhi bahut chaalu chhez nilkli....Abhay or renuka ...dono ka bewakoof bana ke .....unke rishton ke duriyaan krti rhi ....and end me usne hi maara ....renuka ye Raaz bahut bhaari pada Abhay jispe itna trust kiya usne hi break kiya.....ending awas superb....
Such a masterpiece story .....bahut jayada damdaar story hai ....
Brother agar aisi or bhi story ho to please post kr dijiye....mja aa gya padhkar ...is par to movie banni chhaiye....
And again thanks ise yha post krne ke liye....

 

[Sauravb]

Story dimag hila dena wala hai jisko accha mante ho work bahut bura he .kamini kya chal chali pyar ko hasil karne k liye lekin fas gayi.sharma policewala hoke bhi chor see batar tha.bra great story The Immortal bhai.

 

[The Immortal]

Story dimag hila dena wala hai jisko accha mante ho work bahut bura he .kamini kya chal chali pyar ko hasil karne k liye lekin fas gayi.sharma policewala hoke bhi chor see batar tha.bra great story The Immortal bhai.

Go for dark girl

 

[The_InnoCent]

Credit goes to the original writer The Vampire.

If I want to say something in detail about this story, I may not find words that can better praise the story. So all I would say is that it is an excellent and very beautifully written story,,,

Thanks immo bhai for posting this story of The Vampire bhai. I think if he was on this forum, I would have read more beautiful stories written by him,,,,

 

[SANJU ( V. R. )]

What a altimate story ! Superb & Outstanding .

एक ही स्टोरी के अन्दर दो तरह के सस्पेंस बना दिए थे राइटर ने । एक अद्भुत और रोमांच से भरपूर कहानी थी यह ।

The Immortal जी आप का बहुत बहुत धन्यवाद । आप की वजह से एक खुबसूरत कहानी पढ़ने को मिला ।

कहानी में जहां राणा फेमिली के बारे में नायक की छानबीन पढ़कर खुब मजा आया वहां नायक की पत्नी और महबूबा की मौत ने मन को व्यथित कर दिया ।
शक से बड़ी बिमारी दुनिया में और कोई भी नहीं है । काश ! नायक ने एक बार अपने पत्नी से बात कर लिया होता तो उसकी शादीशुदा जिंदगी भी सही सलामत रहती और न ही किसी लड़की की जान गई होती ।

एक बार फिर से आपको बहुत बहुत धन्यवाद ।

 

[The Immortal]

The Immortal Bhai ....thnks ye story post krne ke liye and dil se thanks Vampire bhai ko jisne aisi jabardast story likhi.....sach me yr beginning se end tak story me Uttar chhadav dekhe pr yr isne to dimag ka bh**da hi kr diya .....itne Raaz itne suspense ....khas kr he update me ek Raaz khul rha tha or dusri taraf ek nya question ban rha tha jo end me solve ho hi gya....or jo isme beech-2 me Abhay ki life dikhayi hai wo bhi kabeel-e -tarrif hai yr ....kamini bhi bahut chaalu chhez nilkli....Abhay or renuka ...dono ka bewakoof bana ke .....unke rishton ke duriyaan krti rhi ....and end me usne hi maara ....renuka ye Raaz bahut bhaari pada Abhay jispe itna trust kiya usne hi break kiya.....ending awas superb....
Such a masterpiece story .....bahut jayada damdaar story hai ....
Brother agar aisi or bhi story ho to please post kr dijiye....mja aa gya padhkar ...is par to movie banni chhaiye....
And again thanks ise yha post krne ke liye....

Story dimag hila dena wala hai jisko accha mante ho work bahut bura he .kamini kya chal chali pyar ko hasil karne k liye lekin fas gayi.sharma policewala hoke bhi chor see batar tha.bra great story The Immortal bhai.

If I want to say something in detail about this story, I may not find words that can better praise the story. So all I would say is that it is an excellent and very beautifully written story,,,

Thanks immo bhai for posting this story of The Vampire bhai. I think if he was on this forum, I would have read more beautiful stories written by him,,,,

What a altimate story ! Superb & Outstanding .

एक ही स्टोरी के अन्दर दो तरह के सस्पेंस बना दिए थे राइटर ने । एक अद्भुत और रोमांच से भरपूर कहानी थी यह ।

The Immortal जी आप का बहुत बहुत धन्यवाद । आप की वजह से एक खुबसूरत कहानी पढ़ने को मिला ।

कहानी में जहां राणा फेमिली के बारे में नायक की छानबीन पढ़कर खुब मजा आया वहां नायक की पत्नी और महबूबा की मौत ने मन को व्यथित कर दिया ।
शक से बड़ी बिमारी दुनिया में और कोई भी नहीं है । काश ! नायक ने एक बार अपने पत्नी से बात कर लिया होता तो उसकी शादीशुदा जिंदगी भी सही सलामत रहती और न ही किसी लड़की की जान गई होती ।

एक बार फिर से आपको बहुत बहुत धन्यवाद ।

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https://xforum.live/threads/xossip-to-xforum.801/post-77411
Ye kuch short stories hai The vampire sir . 1st wali chhod ke baaki unhone ne hi likhi hai .
Padhe aur enjoy Karen .