Erotica The Naughty "Office" Thing!

[Darkk Soul]

Awesome update but sad that its come to end anyways looking forward for more of your work...

Yeah, I too enjoyed it writing. But as it was a short story, I had to finish it sooner.

Thank You for your love and support. I appreciate it.

 

[kamdev99008]

Short but interesting

 

[Darkk Soul]

Short but interesting

धन्य भाग हमारे जो श्री श्री श्री कामदेव महाशय समय निकाल कर कहानी को पढ़ा और अब कमेंट किया.

बारंबार धन्यावाद, महोदय.

 

[Darkk Soul]

Short but interesting

वैसे छोटी कहानियों में अलग ही आनंद है.

 

[Clipmaster99]

Darkk soul,

Well written story. The English is impeccable. But the story line is a bit slender. Good to see a story written without annoying and meaningless pictures, interrupting the narrative.

 

[Darkk Soul]

Darkk soul,

Well written story. The English is impeccable. But the story line is a bit slender. Good to see a story written without annoying and meaningless pictures, interrupting the narrative.

Hello Clipmaster99, Thank you so much for your kind words. I appreciate it.

As stated earlier, I was and still am totally new to this "Erotica" zone. I just wanted to try my hands on such a story. I'd to begin from somewhere, right?

I'm happy to see that people are liking it with much less negative reviews. That's a "Win" for me.

 

[Clipmaster99]

I will be honest. I had not read the whole story earlier, just glanced through it. But since this story is featured in the XForum magazine, I have now read it.

Your statement "Comments and views are welcomed." prompts me to write a more detailed review.

The first thing I check is, if the story is a plagiarism. There are too many stories here which are copy+paste, without a remorse of guilt, and no acknowledgement of its duplicity. Your story passes this test.

Then, I found the grammar impeccable. If only more writers would use tools like grammarly to check errors and punctuation. The taste of the pudding is in the presentation.

Also, I have noticed that when a story does not have much substance, it is littered with annoying and meaningless pictures, obviously to add to the pages. Your story does not have any.

I am also a fan of short stories. While I do admit (being a story writer myself) that the story has to be written in advance, though it may be posted in parts at your pace. It is generally hogwash that readers contribute ideas to the story that you have visualized.

You also seem to have written a story in Hindi. (Not a language that I am comfortable with). But if you have written it as well there too, as you have in English, then hats off to you.

Would definitely like to read and share more English stories.

 

[amberclarke]

I usually like reading erotica stories, but this was a complete gem. Loved it. Keep writing.

 

[Darkk Soul]

I will be honest. I had not read the whole story earlier, just glanced through it. But since this story is featured in the XForum magazine, I have now read it.

Your statement "Comments and views are welcomed." prompts me to write a more detailed review.

The first thing I check is, if the story is a plagiarism. There are too many stories here which are copy+paste, without a remorse of guilt, and no acknowledgement of its duplicity. Your story passes this test.

Then, I found the grammar impeccable. If only more writers would use tools like grammarly to check errors and punctuation. The taste of the pudding is in the presentation.

Also, I have noticed that when a story does not have much substance, it is littered with annoying and meaningless pictures, obviously to add to the pages. Your story does not have any.

I am also a fan of short stories. While I do admit (being a story writer myself) that the story has to be written in advance, though it may be posted in parts at your pace. It is generally hogwash that readers contribute ideas to the story that you have visualized.

You also seem to have written a story in Hindi. (Not a language that I am comfortable with). But if you have written it as well there too, as you have in English, then hats off to you.

Would definitely like to read and share more English stories.

Thank you so much Clipmaster99 .

This is the kind of comment that really make first-time erotica writers like me try their luck & potential in specific or various genres.

I hope we’ll stay in touch to relish more of such stories.

 

[Darkk Soul]

I usually like reading erotica stories, but this was a complete gem. Loved it. Keep writing.

Thank you so much amberclarke . I appreciate it… And yes, I too am a lover of erotica.