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Ab tak ham ne jana ki rockey, uss tillasmi jungle ke bhram jaal me poora fas chuka hai, wahan usse uski hi ma aur bahan dikhti hai, jiska bhog karne jungli log usse laaye hote hai. Rohan bhi ab rudrapur pahonch chuka hai.
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Ab aage ---
Trimathpur (sharda devi ka ghar)
Madhyam peeli roshni, jo ki study table me lagi study lamp se aarhi thi... Uss peeli roshni me Neha , jo ki study chair pe baithi huyi ek kitaab padhne me ekdam magn thi, uska chehra kisi peeli chameli ke fool jaisa chamak rha tha. Uske chehre ka bhav batana to samay ki barbadi hi hogi, kyonki jis pustak ko wo padh rhi thi, uske har palatate panne ke sath hi uske chehre ke bhav bhi badalte jaa rhe the... Kabhi kabhi uske chehre pe aise bhav aate ki wo kisi drishya ko yad kar ke khush ho rhi hai, to kabhi kabhi uske bhav se aisa lagta jaise ki usne kuchh aisa padh liya ho jo kalpanao se pare hai, kabhi mayush chehra, kabhi khile honth, kabhi krodhit aankhe to kabhi rudan ki shor...
Har palatate panne ke sath, Neha ke bhav me parivartan dekha ja sakta tha.
Kintu, ye haal shirf Neha ka hi nahi tha, apitu Neha ke ghar ke theek samne baale ghar me bhi ek ladki apne kamre me bed pe leti huyi ussi pustak ko padh rahi thi, aur iske chehre pe bhi barabar wohi bhao dikh rahe the jo Neha ke chehre me dikhayi de rha tha.
Ye ladki thi meera, Neha ki best friend, meera ek halki kapde ki pazama aur patla sa halke kapde ki tshirt pahne huyi thi. Baal saleeke se guth kar, ek koop se samet kar sar me lapete huye thi taaki kitab padhne me pareshani na ho.
Neha bhi, ek patle kapde ka short aur tshirt pahne huye thi.
Trin trin, trin trin..... Ki ghanti ke sath Neha ka phone bajta hai, jisme meera ka naam flash ho rha tha.
Wo turant phone uthati hai, aur Neha ke kuchh bolne se pahle hi udhar se meera bolti hai.
" Neha yaar, sachi sachi bata na... Tu bhi wahi saval poochhi thi, jo mai poochhi... Par mujhe samajh nhi aarha ki aakhir tune bhi wahi point kyun , mera matlab hai ki "
" Agar mai bhi yahi bolu to, jaannti ho mujhe bhi yahi point ke baare me sar se kuchh janana tha, par mere kuchh puchhne se pahle hi tumne ye poochh liya. Ab Tu bata ki tune ye kyu poochha ki tujhe sapne ke baare me janna hai "
" Yaar, bahul lambi kahani hai... Kal sunday hai, mai tujhse mil kar tujhe bataungi... Aur tu bhi vada kar ki tu bhi mujhe batayegi ki tu kyu sapne ke baare me itna janana chahti hai "
" Theek hai, waise tune wo book padhi, jise sir ne hame padhne diya hai? "
" Ussi ko to padh rhi hunn, aur sach batau to mere savalo ka kuchh kuchh jabab mujhe mil bhi rha hai.. Par abhi to puri kitab padhni baaki hai "
"Hmm, chal theek hai... Aaj iske pahle chapter ka ek bhag complete kar dete hai.. Tu bhi kar le... Bye "
"Bye"
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Aaiye jaante hai ki baat kya hai,
Darasal, jab meera aur neha ne jay singh se swapn ke baare me jaanane ke liye apni baat rakhi tab , jay singh ji pahle to pure class ko sapne ke baare me kuchh kuchh basic baate batate hai, kuch scintific baate bhi batate hai. Aur unki baat ko sun saari class satisfied bhi ho jaati hai. Sibay 2 log ke, neha aur meera ko unka jabab abhi tak nahi mila tha. Jay singh ji ne jo jo bataya tha wo sab baate neha aur meera pahle hi jaan chuki thi internet ke madhyam se. Usse unn javabo se koi fayda nahi hua tha. Dono ke chehre pr mayushi bani rhi, jab class khatam huaa, to sab apne apne ghar jaane ko huye. Neha aur meera bhi ghar jaane ke liye nikal hi rhi thi. Tabhi jay singh ji usse apne cabin me bulate hai. Aur wahan bula kar unn dono ko ek jaise kitaabe dete hai.
Kitaab ka title tha SWAPNA SARSWATHA.
aur issi kitaab ko padh rahe the meera aur neha.
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" Mmmaaa, simmmraann..... Meri maa ko... Meri maa ko chhod do bhai... Ye ladki ( snif) meri chhoti bahan hai... Meri bahan chhod do bhai.... Ye dobara kabhi bhi iss jungle me nhi aayegi bhai... "
Rockey ko jaise hi malum padta hai ki jin mahilao ko ye jungli balatkaar karne utha laaye hai wo aur koi nhi balki uske hi maa aur bahan hai. To uske pairo tale zameen khisak gayi. Wo daudte huye apniaa aur bahan ke paas jaane laga jo paas hi zameen pe besudh padi huyi thi.
Taazub ki baat thi ki ussi pal ka intezaar shayad wo sabhi jungli kar rhe the. Rockey ne jaise hi apni ma aur bahan ko pehchana tha waise hi sabhi jungli apne apne kaam ko chhod kar rockey ko dekhne lage the. Wo bhi ek shaitan mushkaan ke sath
Aur rockey ne jaise hi apne kadam apni maa aur bahan ke taraf badhaye waise hi jungli bhaiyo me se sabse chhota bala rockey ko pakad leta hai.
Jisse rockey rote huye gidgidate huye , uss jungli ke paao pakad leta hai, aur uske samne apni maa bahan ko chhodne ki guhar lagane lagta hai. Jispar Sare jungli including mahilaye bhi rockey pe hasne lagte hai.
" Ohh, kya ye tumhare maa aur bahan hai mushafir... Wah kya sanyog hai... Aaj to ek bete ke samne uski maa ka cheer haran karne ka anubhav milega, aur ek bhai ke samne uski bahan ka bhi bhog karne ka saubhagya prapt ho rha hai. Waise tumhari bahan to kumaari hi hogi na abhi tak. are koi baat nhi agar hogi bhi to aaj uska sheel bhang ham charo bhai kar denge kyun bhaiyo... Ha ha ha ha ( charo haste hai) "
Rockey ki baat ko sun kar, bada jungli bhai, usse dekh kar haste huye usse bolta hai, aur bolne ke sath sath wo apni patni ko kuchh ishare bhi kar deta hai.
" Nahiiii, plss inhe kuchh mat karo , tumhe jo kuchh bhi karna hai mere sath karo, bhale hi badle me meri zaan le lo, lekin inhe chhod do plss... "
Rockey khud ko aaj bahot kamzor mehsus karne laga tha, aaj usse ehshas ho rha tha ki uske life me uski maa aur bahan ka kya mahate hai, aur usse ye bhi pata chal rha tha ki jab kisi ke ma aur bahan ke sath galat hota hai to uske bhai pe kya bitati hai. Rockey bhi to apne college me aise hi bahuto ke zindagi ke sath khel chuka tha, kuchh ne to suciede tak kar chuki thi Rocky ke karan.
Khair, jungli ladke ki patni, jo ki khud bhi kisi aam stri se 1 ft lamba aur chauda thi, wo ek baalti me paani lekar jaati hai air rockey ki maa aur bahan ke chehre pe poora galti paani udhed deti hai.
Unn dono maa beti ko hosh aajata hai, aur wo dekhti hai ki wo ek kasbe me kuchh jungli logo se ghiri huyi hai.
Simran dar se apni maa ke ek hath ko pakad leti hai,
Tabhi , uski maa ko ek taraf kuchh jungli ladke dikhayi dete hai jo ki kisi ladke ko berahmi se jakde huye the, aur jaise hi un dono ki nazar uss ladke pe padti hai, deno ke muh se ek sath nikalti hai...
"Bhaiiii...... "
" Rockey.... "
" Kon ho tum log, kyun kar rhe ho aisa, dekho agar mere bete se kuchh galti huyi hai to mai aap sab se maafi mangti hunn, isse chhod do... Mere bete ko chhod do "
Rockey ki maa bilakhte huye unn logo se bolti hai wahin simran bhi apni maa ko kas ke pakad kar roye ja rhi thi.
Tabhi un jungli logo me se ek ladka, paas me pada hua ek mota briksh ka tahni uthata hai, aur rockey ke pairo pe de marta hai, jisse rockey cheekhte huye neeche gir jata hai.
" Nahiiii,. Plss plss mere bhai ko chhod do... Plss.... Aisa... Aisaa mat karo... Tumhe jo chahiye wo mai dungi... "
" Nahi nahi... Mere bacho...mere bacho ko jaane do... Plss... Mai tumhari dadi ban kar tumhari seva karungi... "
" Ha ha ha ha.... Kitna pyaar hai tum keedo me....
Are tum to sanyog se hamare beech aagyi... Ham roj kisi na kisi aurat ko yahan lakar uska bhog karte hai, aur aaj wo saubhagya tumhe prapt hua hai. Rahi baat iss ladke ki jo tumhara beta hai. To ab ye bhi apni maa aur bahan ko nanga hokar chaar mard se chudate huye dekhega... Socho... Jara... Tumhe kitna aanand aayega... Jab tum dono... Apne hi bete, aur apne hi bhai ke samne hamare sath kaamkreeda karogi... Are mere matlab hai chudayi karbaogi... Aur meri chunta mat karna... Jaise tumhe chudte huye tumhara beta anand lega, waise hi jab ham tumhe chod rahe honge tab meri bahan , patni aur maa bhi aanad legi... Ha ha ha.... "
Uss rakshas jaise ladke ki baat sun kar simran aur uski maa ke pairo tale zameen khishak gayi.. Uske chehre ke bhao badal kar gusse baale ho gaye, tabhi uski nazar uske bete rockey pe gayi jo zameen pe ghutno ke bal pada dard se tadap rha tha , aur baar baar unn logo se apni maa aur bahan ko chhod dene ki guhayi kar rha tha.
Aur waise hi simran aur uski maa ke chehre ke bhaw badal kar shakt ho gaye...
" Tum jo bologe mai wo karungi, lekin is sab me mere dono bacho ko kuchh nhi hona chahiye... Mai tumhari saari baate manungi... Hamesha tumhari gulami karungi... Lekin pahle mere bacho ko chhod do. "
Simran ki maa, sisakte huye bolti hai... Jisse sunn kar rockey ka dard aur badh gya...
" Bachho... Iss " Bachho " Shabd se kya matlab hai tumhara... Ye ek hi to ladka hai tumhara... Mai isse aazad kar dunga "
" Nahi, Mai apni beti ki bhi baat kar rhi hun'
" Pagal ho kya tum... Tumhe kya lagta hai, Mai haath lagi iss jabani ki murat ko aise hi jaane dunga... Bhale hi iske liye mujhe muhare bete ko marna pade... Par Mai isko kahi jaane nahi dunga.. "
" Nahi... Mere bhai.. Mere bhai ko mat marna... Mai .. Mai bhi taiyaar hun.. Tum jo karna chahte ho wo karo... Lekin pahle mere bhai ko chhod do "
Bas itna sunana.... Rockey ka sar thanak gaya....
Wo guraate huye utha aur...
"Saalo, tumhari itni himmat.... Aaj mai jaan se maar dalunga tum san ko... Aaagggghhhhhhh.......... "
Aur wo apni poori takat laga kar uthaaa... Aur wahi danda jis se kuchh samay pahle uske pairo pe mara gya tha... Usse utha kar tezi se ghumata huaa paas khade huye ladke ko marta hai... "
Uss ladke ke sar pe wo danda lagta hai, jiske karan uska sar fat jata hai. Aur wo wahin apna sar pakad kar baith jata hai...
Wo jungli itna bhari tha ki usse takrane ke baad danda bhi repal hokar door feka jaati hai, aur uske wave se rockey bhi door feka jaata hai..
Tabhi wahan baaki ke teen bhai bhi aage badh kar rockey ko pakad lete hai, aur usko gusse me uske gaal par lagatar teen chaar chamate marte hai jisse rockey kaa gaal fat jaataa hai...
" Plss chhod do mere bhaiiii ko... Pllllsssssss...... Unghhh unghhh.... Chhod do..... "
" Aaaahhhh.... Kitni mithi aawaj hai tumhari... Ab to bahot maza aayegaa.... Jab tumhare iss keede bhai ke samne tumhari jism ko nichodenge ham sabhi bhai... Ha ha ha...
Aur tu be keede, madharchod tujhe hamari himmat dekhni thi na to ab dekh...
'Leeeela....... ' (uski bibi ka naam hai) ... Pilao in dono ko wo kadha... Jiske peene ke baad vashna shakriya ho jaati hai...
Aur jitna sab ko pilati thi usse 4 guna adhik inn dono ko pilaanaa.... Tab khud b khur randi ki tarah dono mera loda mangne aayenge... Ha ha ha.....
Uski patni, apne jhopde me jakar, ek mitti ke bartan jo ki ek ghada type the, wo laati hai, uss se wo kuchh gadha, sa neela neela padarth nikalti hai, wo uss padarth ko 2 bade glass me dalti hai aur jakar simran aur reena ( rockey ki ma) ke samne rakh deti hai,
Wahin, un ladko ka chhota bhai, jiske sar pe rockey ne vaar kiya tha, wo uthta hai aur apne kamar me khonse huye bade se chaku ko nikal kar rockey ke gale pe laga deta hai.
Rockey ka halat ab aisa ho chuka tha, jaise maano usse ab aage jo hone vala hai uss drishya ko dekhne se achha maut pyari lagne lagi thi.
Wo ladka jaise hi apna chaku rockey ke gardan pe lagata hai waise hi rockey bhi apna gardan tezi se aage kar deta hai, matlab saaf tha ki wo bhi marna chahta tha. Par uske bal ko baaki ke do bhai pakad lete hai aur upar kheench lete hai.
" Dekh kya rahi ho , chalo... Isko piyo.. Wo bhi jaldi... Nahi to ye khanjar... Aaj tumhare bete aur bhai ke gale se aara paar ho jayegi... "
Bas itna sunte hi... Reena aur simran... Ek saans me uss gaadhe padarth ko pee jaate hai....
"Thadak...... "
"Bhaiiiiiiiii..... Rockeyyyyyyy"
Un dono ke wo padarth peeya abhi kuchh samay huaa hi tha ki...
Un jungliyo me se ek bhai... Rockey ke sar pe ek ped ka mota sakha de marta hai.. Jis se rockey behosh ho jata hai.
Aur ye hota dekh reena aur simran ke bhi cheenkh nikal jaate hai, aur wo rockey ko pakadne ke liye aage daudti hai.. Par kuchh hi kadam chalne ke baad wo bhi behosh hokar neeche gir jaati hai.
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Raat gehri ho chuki thi...
Rockey abhi bhi ek ghayal avstha me pada huaa tha, tabhi aasman me zordaar baadal garzaaa... Wo bhi chamak ke sath.. Aur ussi ke sath rockey ka nind bhi khul gaya...
Wi apne aas pass dekhta hai to usse koi bhi nazar nhi aate hai...
Achanak usse apni maa aur bahan ki yaad aati hai....
Uske andar jaise gamo ka sailaab umad jaata hai... Uska shareer bhale saath nhi de rha tha par... Uske andar jo uske maa aur bahan ke prati chhupa pyaar samne aaya tha wo bahot mazboot tha, aur ussi ke shakti ke sath wo khada hota hai...
Wo idhar udhar... Apni maa aur bahan ko dhundane lagta hai...
Wo abhi wahin pe mauzood tha jahan par ussne kuchh ladkiyo ko nange khelte dekha tha, ussi jhule pe abhi wo behosh pada huaa tha...
Usse ye gyaat tha ki kis disha me usse wo basti mili thi...
Wo lagbhag bhagte huye uss basti ke nazdeek pahuncha...
To dekha 7 me se 6 jhopde me andhera ho rkha tha aur ek jhopde me mashal jal rhi thi...
Wo daudte huye jhopde ke nazdeek pahunchaa...
Aur usse kuchh avaaje sunaayi deni lagi...
Do mahilao ki, ji haan ye reena aur simran ki hi aawaje thi...
" Aah...aaah... Dheere..malik...aah ah aah aah aah... Aah.. Ummm aahh maalik.... Maaaaa..... Uuhh unnh... Unnh.. Aahhh..... Aaaaaa aaa.... Maalik.... "
Aise hi moaning ki aawaje... Rockey ke kaano ke chadar fadne ke liye kaafi thi... Uska kadam aage nhi badh paa rha tha.. Bas ye kalpana maatra se ki wo kaise samna kar paayega apni maa aut bahan ka....
Tabhi usse bahar ek talvaar dikhayi deti hai, aaj rockey nirnay kar liya tha ki... Usne saari zindagi to galat kaam kiya hi... Lekin aaj wo inn bhediyo ke bhes me inshano ko maar kar hi rhega...
Taaki aage wo kisi aur ke sath aisi harkat nahi kare... Uske baad wo agar bacha to khud ko bhi maar lega...
Yahi soch kar rockey talvaar utha leta hai...
Aur daudte huye uss jhopde me chala jaata hai....
Usse dikhta hai ki uski maaa , ek jungli ke lund pe kud rahi hai, aur ek jungli uske muh me apna bada sa lund ghusaye huye hai, aur wahin... Uski bahan simran... Bhi ek jungli ke lund pe chadh kar jhuki huyi thi, aur peechhe se uske gaand me bhi ek jungli apna bada sa loda daale huye tha...
Ussee nazar aata hai ki jahan ye sab ghrit karya ho rha tha wahan bahot saare khoon gire huye the...
Abhi jo aavaje usne sune the wo uske hi bahan ke the...
Darvaaje ke paas hi wo teen jungli aurate nange hokar... Ek dusre ko chaat rahe the...
Rockey dekhta hai ki uski maa aur bahan ke badan pe sainkado ghaw lag chuke hai.
Wo gusse me andar jaata hai aur ek jhatke me hi pahle darvaje ke paas baithi wo teeno aurato ka sar kaat deta hai...
Aur bina ruke wo ...
Unn ladko. Ke paas jaata hai.... Aur ek ke gale me wo talvaar ghusa deta hai...
Ki tabhi... Un ladko me se ek.... Ji simran ki gand maar rha tha, wo paas me pada huaa khanjar se... Rockey ka gala ret deta hai....
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"Chhapaaakkkkkk........"
Rockey, Rockey..... Are uth yaar....
" Maaaaaaaaaa.............. Simiiiiiiiiii..... Maa mujhe maaaf kar dena maaaa..... Unnhhh... Mujhe maaf kar dena meri bahan mai tumhe bacha na saka.... "
"Rockeeyyy.... Kya hua tumhe... Rockeyyy.... "
Rockey ko ek ladki, awaaj laga kar utha rhi thi... Jisse rockey sadak pe pada hua mila tha... Ab wo kon se sadak pe pada hua mila tha... Par kaise, kahan... Kon se sadak pe ye aage pata chalega...
" Kalpanaa...., tum yahan iss jungle me kya kar rhi ho... Chali jao.. Chali jao kalpana... Ye jagah bahot bura hai.. Yahan inshan nahi sab bhediye rahte hai kalpana... Aur ho sake to maine jo tumhare sath kiya uske liye mujheaaf kar dena kalpana... Aaj mujhe pata chala ki mai kitna gira hua inshan hunn"
"Rockey, ye tum kya bol rhe ho... Dekho pahle ye lo paani piyo.. Aur khud ko shant karo... "
Rockey bhi paani peeta hai, uske baad wo lambi lambi sabse lekar khud ko shant karta hai...
Tabhi usse yaad aata hai ki kal raat to usse un jungliyo ne maar diya tha.. To wo aaj zinda kaise hai...
Tabhi wo aas paas dekhta hai...
Usse pata chalta hai ki wo abhi ek national highway ke kinare pada hua hai...
" Ab theek ho... "
" Hmm"
"Achhaa bolo ab... Kya huaa hai tumhare sath... Itne dare huye kyun lag rhe ho, aur sabse jaruri saval... Yahan sadak ke beech me kya kar rhe ho wo bhi aisi halat me... Jaise kahin se ladayi kar ke aaye ho. "
"Pahle tum batao ki tum yahan kya kar rhi ho, aur ye hai kon si jagah.... Mai to kal raat apne gao ke paas baale jungle me tha "
Rockey ke itna bolte hi kalpana usse gaur se dekhti hai, aur fir usse bolti hai
" Jara ek baar apne peechhe dekho "
Rockey peechhe mud ke dekhta hai to usse wohi jungle ka ek sima dikhayi deta hai jiska ek sima uske gao me tha, matlab saaf tha... Ki ye sadak bhi iss jungle ke kinare hi tha...
"To tum yahan kya karne aayi ho, tumhe pata nhi ki yahan aana khatre se khali nhi... Aaye din yahan ladkiyo ka kidnap kiya jaata hai... Kal hi... Meri maa....... "
"Itna bolte bolte rockey rone lagta hai.."
"Kya... Hua unty ji ko.... Unhone mujhe to kuchh nhi bataya... Nahi simi ne kuchh bataya... Abhi ussine to mujhe call kar ke apne ghar blaya hai, aur mai tumhare ghar hi jaa rhi thi....kyonki tumhare ghar me kuchh guest aaye huye hai shayad... Aur tum kal raat se kahi gayab the issiliye tumhare dad aur maa.. Bahot pareshan ho rhe the... "
Rockey to itna sunte hi achambhit ho utha....
" Kyaaa.... To wo sab kya tha jo maine jungle me dekha "
" Tum pagal ho kya rockey... Tum iss jungle me kya karne gaye the... Iski kahaniya nhi pata hai kya tumhe... Jarur tumhe kuchh bhram dikha hoga wahann... "
Rockey itna sunte hi khushi se rone lagta hai, aaj usse pata chala tha apni maa aur bahan ke liye uske andar kitna pyaar tha...
Wo khushi khushi me kalpana ke gale lag jaata hai... Aur uski khushi itni hoti hai ki wo bina soche samjhe kalpana ke gaalo ko choom leta hai...
Aur jaise hi usse ehsaah hota hai ki usne kya kiya waise hi wo kalpana se alag ho jata hai...
Aaj pahli baar kalpana ko rockey ke chehre me sachayi dikhayi de rhi thi, usse dikh rha tha ki rockey aaj usse sharma rha hai....
Jaante hai ye kalpna kon hai...
To kalpna rockey air simran ki bachpan ki dost hai, wo shahar me hi rahti hai.. Kalpana tab se rockey ko pyaar karti hai jab se usse pyaar ka sahi matlab bhi nhi pata tha...
Suruaat me rockey bhi uska sath pakar bahot khush rahta tha...
Par badale waqt ke sath rockey jab aiyashiya katne laga tab.. Kalpna sochi ki rockey ko sudharne ke liye uske sath karibiya aur aage badhana chahiye...
Aur wo rockey ko propose lar di,
Rockey ko bhi kalpna pasand thi issliye usne bhi uska proposal maan liya...
Par rockey ki aiyashiya kam nahi huyi...
Ek din kapna rockey ko range haath, apne college ke ek ladki ke sath jabardadti karte dekh li...
Uske baad unndono ke beech ladayi ho gayi thi...
Aur dono break up bhi kar liye the....
Uss incident ke baad aaj inn dono ki mulakat ho rahi thi....
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Aaj ke liye itna hi... Agla ansh.... Rudramandir ke kuchh rajashyo ko dikhayega... To bane rahiye....
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Aur update bht hi achcha tha par shayad mujhe पीछे me kuch updates dobara पढ़ने hoge पूरी tarah से समझने के लिए इस update को rocky का arc मैंने ध्यान से नहीं पढ़ा h lgta h main toh rohan और rocky me hi confuse ho gya tha इसके पहले वाले update me किशन के around जब tk story chl rhi thi toh sb clear chl rha tha pr last कुछ update को thoda aur ध्यान से पढ़ना होगा मुझे
BTW आप अपने character को भरपूर time दे रहे हों जो कि bdiya है और बीच बीच मे other character की Jhalak bhi dikha rhe ho story building के लिए बस एक बात कहूँगा ki कभी कभी lgta h story me kya ho rha h समझ नही आता h mtlb Achanak से random character पर highlight चली जाती है जो smjne के लिए bht गौर से पढ़ने की जरूरत h की chl क्या rha है बस इसे ठीक कर लेंगे तो रीडर को आसानी हो जाएगी स्टोरी समझने के लिए
Aur update bht hi achcha tha par shayad mujhe पीछे me kuch updates dobara पढ़ने hoge पूरी tarah से समझने के लिए इस update को rocky का arc मैंने ध्यान से नहीं पढ़ा h lgta h main toh rohan और rocky me hi confuse ho gya tha इसके पहले वाले update me किशन के around जब tk story chl rhi thi toh sb clear chl rha tha pr last कुछ update को thoda aur ध्यान से पढ़ना होगा मुझे
BTW आप अपने character को भरपूर time दे रहे हों जो कि bdiya है और बीच बीच मे other character की Jhalak bhi dikha rhe ho story building के लिए बस एक बात कहूँगा ki कभी कभी lgta h story me kya ho rha h समझ नही आता h mtlb Achanak से random character पर highlight चली जाती है जो smjne के लिए bht गौर से पढ़ने की जरूरत h की chl क्या rha है बस इसे ठीक कर लेंगे तो रीडर को आसानी हो जाएगी स्टोरी समझने के लिए
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Awesome update with great writing skillsUpdate 15Ab aage..
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"Bahot bahot badhayi , sunile, mere yara,.. Bhabhi ji ko ek bahut hi cute, sundar ladka hua hai ....
Abhi to bhabhi ji nind ki injection ki vajah se behosh hai par unhe 1 se dedh ghante baad hosh aajayegi,par tum apne bete ko dekh sakte ho...
Aur chachi aaj to aapko warish mil gaya na tab to aap bahot khush honge...
Aur cornal chacha ji nazar nhi aarhe hai, agar wo ghar pe hi hai to unhe telephone kar ke ye shubh samachar de dijiye,chach ji to bahut khush honge... "
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Shalini aur sunil ka beta jaise janm liya waise hi poora mosam saf ho gya tha, aur charo taraf ek shukhmay watavaran fail gya tha, operation theater se ek doctor bahar nikla jiske chehre par ak badi hi sundar mushkan thi, usne sunil aur sharda devi ji se khushi me haste huye kaha ... Ye doctor sunil ke bachpan ka mitra rajesh tha jo ki ek sarkari doctor tha, aur shambhu ji se baat kar ke apni posting gao ke hi aspatal me karawa liya tha... Rajesh ka makan shambhu ji ke makan ke just saamne tha, ....
Baaki iski family ke baare me aage samay aane par bataya jayega...
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Wahin idhar jungle me yag poori tarah se samapt ho chuka tha , fir bhi rishi surajdev agni kund ke paas baith kar apne dhyan me magn the, wahi unke pichhe jaisimha ji bhi apne sinh roop me bilkul shant baithe huye the...
Undono ko shant dekh kar shambhu pratap ji ko bhi himmat nhi ho rhi thi ki unhe dhyan se jagaye...
Kuchh minto baadn rishi surajdev ne apni aankhon ko khola, unke chehre par ek shanti aur dar dono ke mile jule bhav dikh rahe the jise shambhu pratap ji aur jaisimha ji dono hi dekh rahe the.. Par shambhu pratap ji ko rishisurajdev ke chehre ke bhavnao se kuchh bhi samajh nhi aarha tha par pareshan wo bhi hogye the ..
"Mere sath chalo putra tumhe kuchh mahtwapurn jankari deni hai hame jo ki yahan batana sambhav nhi hai uske liye ek gupt sthan ki aawashykta hai....
Jaisimha chaliye aap bhi mere sath... "
Itna bol kar surajdev ji apne sath sath shambhu pratap aur jaisimha ji ko lekar khndhar ke pichhe mojud apne kutiya ke paas chale gaye kutiya ke pas pahunchte hi ek sarsari nigah jaisimha ji pe dalte huye unhone jaisimha ji se fir kaha...
"Aap yahi thahre aur hamari pratichha kare jai simha, ham kuchh der me wapas laut aayenge...
Aur ek baat,... Koi bhi andar aane na paye.. Iska khash dhyan rakhiyega.... Maine kaha koi bhi.... Thik hai...
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Jaisimha- thik hai mitra.
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fir surajdev ji, shambhu pratap ji ke kandhe pe haath rakh kar aur mushkurate huye unhe apni kutiya me le jaate hai.... Aur idhar jaisimha ji kutiya ke bahar lag jaate hai pahre daari karne....
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Lagbhag 2 ghante baad kutiya se surajdev aur shambhu pratap ji sath nikle, par jahan jate waqt shambhu pratap ji ashant the wahi wapas aate waqt wo ab poore shant lag rhe the...
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"Maine jo jo baate batayi hai wo apne tak hi simit rakhiyega putra, ye bate usse hi pata chalni chahiye jisse ye sambandh rakhta hai,. Aur meri ek baat hamesha yad rakhna putra abhi jo tumhare ghar janm liya hai uski suruaati zindagi bhin bhin prakar ke chunautio aur parikshao se bhara hoga, jab tak wo balak apne 21 basant nahi dekh leta tab tak usse pariksha deni hi hogi....
Yahi bidhi dwara uske bhagya me likha gya hai...
Aur ye lo.. Ye devadhidev ke 108 rudraksh ke mala me shri hari ke kamlamani ... Shakshat dono shaktiyo ka pratik hai jisse aap uss balak ko uske 21 varsh ke umra me padne wale pahle hi suryoday me pahnana hoga...
Aur usse jo ye pehnayegi ... Wo hi aapki pote ki pahli premika, patni.... Aur us balak ki ek mahtwpurna shakti ki ek zariya banegi...
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Present time...
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Jis din shambhu pratap ji ke gao se sabhi log bijendra singh ji ke gao shadi me shamil hone jane wale the ussi din sharda devi apne pariwar aur pati ke ek vishwashi sevak raaju ke sath ussi jaungle ke trimath mandir ke paas pauch chuki thi.... Par yahan ab pahle jaisa kuchh nhi tha....
Jahan khandhar ke andar maujud mahakali ki mandir me mata ki ek vishal murti hua karti thi waha ab bas us murti ka avshesh hi bacha tha. .. Jahan bade bade stambh hua karte the wo sab ab toot kar ek dusre par gire pade huye the, waise khandhar to pahle bhi veeran aur tuta futa hua hi tha par khandhar ke andar mozud ye mandir aaj se kuchh saal pahle tak bilkul sahi tha, par ek din iss mandir me aisi ghatna ghati thi jisse iss mandir ke bidhwansh ke sath sath swargiye shambhu pratap ji ke khushhaal pariwarik zivan ko bhi ek tarah se barbaad kar diya tha , iss din jo ghatna ghati thi ussi ke karan swargiye shambhu pratap ji ke pote KISHAN ko uske hi pariwar baale manhush manne lage aur nafrat karne lage...
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Aaj ussi mandir me sharda devi poore 15 warsh baad wapas aayi thi, kyonki yahin par 15 varsh pahle uss vidhwanshak ghatna ke ghatne ke baad shambhu pratap ji ne apni dharmpatni sharda devi se kaha tha ki kishan ke 21 varsh poore hone ke 6 maah pahle unhe yahan aana hai, yaha par koi mahan tezpurush jinka naam rishi surajdev hai , unse milna hai...
Kyonki ye unhi mahan tezpurush surajdev ka aadesh tha.
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Aur jab shambhu pratap ji apni antim sanse gin rahe the tab unhone apni dharmpatni sharda devi ko wo saare raaz jo kishan aur uske zivan se sambandhit thi wo bata diye. Aur sath hi sath jo unhe bhavishya me aage rishi surajdev ke aadesh pe karna tha , apni patni par un kaamo ko saup kar iss dharti se vida le liye the....
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Unhi kaamo me se ek kaam tha aaj sharda devi ji ko rishi surajdev se milne ka,
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Sharda- raju, yahan par to poora khandhar ho gya hai, yahan koi akela kaise rah sakta hai, 15 saal pahle bhi to mai aayi thi tab bhi yaha koi nahi mila tha aur aaj bhi yahan koi nahi hai to ham milnege kisse.
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Abhi raaju sharda devi ji ke sawalo ka koi jabab hi dene wale the ki ek jordar dahad sun kar we doni sakte me aagye, ye aur kisi ka nhi balki jaisimha ji ki dahad thi jo har kisi ke samne nhi aate hai,
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Jaisimha ji abhi ek chhote se sher ke bachhe ki roop liye huye the aur khandhar ke pichhe se inhi dono ki or dhire dhire chalte huye aarhe the, par sher to sher hi hota hai na, ovios si baat hai ki sharda devi ke sath sath raju bhi darne laga tha, par ye dar bhi maano kshnik hi tha ki agle hi pal jaisimha ji ek insaani aawajme bolte hai,...
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Daro mat putri, ham yahan tumhe haani pahunchane nhi aaye hai, apitu mujhe mere mitra rishi surajdev ne bheja hai tumhe unki kutiya me lane ke liye,..
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Yahan inn dono ka bhi wahi haal ho rha tha jo ki aaj se 20 varsh pahle shambhu pratap ji ka ho rha tha, inn dono ko vishwash hi nhi ho rha tha ki wo ek bolne wale sher ke samne khadi huyi hai, wo bhi zinda... Khair jaisimha ki baat sun kar bina kuchh bole darne huye we dono khandhar ke pichhe bane kkutiya ke saamne aa pahunche...
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. Jahan ek tapashwi apni dhyan mudra me baith kar om ki jaap kar rha tha, sharda devi ji ko inn tezpurush ke chehre pe mozud tezz ko dekhte hi malum pad gya ki ye wahi mahan hai jinke baare me aksar unke pati baate kiya karte the, . . .
Pata nhi kyu par sharda devi, rishi surajdev ki dekhte hi apne ghutne ke bal baith kar rone lagi... Jisse wahan mozud raaju unhe jaise hi uthane gya waise hi jaisimha ji ne unhe rok liya, aur kaha...
Jaisimha- ruk jao putra, ro lene do isse.... Bahut varsho se apni pida ko apne hriday me chhipaye ghut ghut kar ji rahi thi,... Ro lene do...
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Tab tak sharda devi apne ghutne ke bal baith kar roti rahi jabtak rishi surajdev ne unhe uthaya nhi...
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"Utho putri, utho.... Uss ghatna ko lekar kab tak apne hriday me pida lekar yun hi andar hi andar khud ko pida deti rahogi tum...
Wo ghatna vidhi ka vidhan tha jo ki badla nahi ja sakta tha, haa ham se jitna ho paya utna us ghatna ko rookne ki koshis maine kiya par honi ko to koi taal nhi sakta hai na putri.... Issliye rona band karo aur un kartavyo ko purn karo jisse tumhare pati ne apne uplaksh me tumhare hawale kiye hai... "
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Sharda devi- (rote huye) baba, par ye mere sath hi kyu hua, aakhir mere pati ki galti hi kya thi... Kaise bhool jaaun mai uss raat ko... Aakhir kaise bhool jaaunn baba....
Ussi raat ko mere pati poore khatam ho jaate.... Babaaa...
Par aapki vajah se unhe jyada chot to nhi aayi par unka Sharir andar se poori tarah se kamzor ho gya tha aur 1 saal ke andar hi ve chal base the baba 1 saal ke andar hi....
Issi karan mere kaleze ka tukra KISHAN aaj tak sabke taane sunta hai baba.... Sab log usse manhush mante hai.. Sab log..... Aakhir mai kaisee bhool jaau uss syah raat ko baabaa.. Kaise...
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Surajdev ji pahle to sharda devi ke baato ko sun kar khamosh ho gaye uske baad unhone kaha....
Surajdev - jaanti ho putri, shri krishna jab avtaar liye the ......
tab unke janm ke pahle unke 6 bhaiyo ka kansh ne hatya kar diya tha...
Ye jaante huye bhi ki kansh uske bache ki jaan se maar degi, devi devki ne 6 bache jane, kyonki jab aakashwani me kansh ko chetavni diya gya tha ki devki ke satve putra uska vadh karega to ye baate devki bhi sun rahi thi...
Usne apne 6 bachho ki balidan de diya, jankalyan hetu kyunki uski kokh se hi janm lene wala satwa santan kansh ko marne wala tha....
Jab bhi vishesh karya hetu bhagwan ko ya phir bhagwab ke ansho ka janm mrityulok me honta hai tab balidaan bhi dene padte hai putri.........
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Ek baat aur, tum jaanti ho putri mai kon hunn.... "
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Surajdev ki baate sunne ke baad sharda devi kuchh sant huyi, par unke ant me puche amgaye sawal ko sun kar wo surajdev ji ko jabab di....
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Sharda devi- ji baba, aap wahi hai jinhone mere pati ko abhi ka sabse aonmol tohfa, bhagwan ke ansh ke roop me ek pota diya. Mai kaise bhool sakti hun aapko, wo hamesha hi aapki baate kiya karte the ...
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Sharda devi ki baat ko sun kar surrajdev mushkurane lage aur fir bole...
" Ye to mera kshnik parichay hua putri, vashtavik nhi, .
mera vashtavik parichay.........
(Kuchh der khamosh rah kar)
Mera pariwar aaj se 1300 varsh pahle veerpur namak ek rajya me purohit ka karya kiya karta tha , mere pita wahan ke raj darbaar ke raajpurohit the....
Mera vashtavik naam pandit surajdev hai...
Mai 1300 barsho se bhatak raha hunn putri...
Maine to tumhaare pote ki janm ke liye apne 1300 varsh balidan kar diye, aur usse bhi jyada....maine ek aur balidan aur kasht sahe hai putri.... Maine apni priyatama.......ANUPAMA....ka balidaan diya hai...
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Tum jaante ho tumhare pote ka janm kyo huaa hai....
Innsabhi balidaano ko hak dilane ke liye putri....
. Jaisimha se to tum mil hi chuki ho... Unhone apne pure vansh ka balidan diya hai....
Aur tum apne pati ke bichhobh ko hi sahan nhi kar par hi ho.....
Aise me tum kaise apne pote ko daksh bana paogi putri... Kaise wo inn balidano ko aaya nhi jaane dega...
Tumhe majboot hona hoga putri.... Bahot majboot......
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Sharda devi, surajdev ji ki baato ko sun kar dang rah gayi thi jaise jaise suraj dev apna vastavik parichay aur apne balidan ka jikra kar rahe the waise waise sharda devi ke chehre ke bhao badal rahe rhe the... Aur ant me wo apne dimaag se un saare vicharo ko nikalne me safal ho gyi jo uske aage ke kartavyo ke sammukh aarhe the....
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. Sharda - mujhe kshama kare baba, mai apne pati ke moh me ye bhi bhool gayi thi ki unka balidan ti swayam bhagwaj dwara racha gya ek khel hi tha, ab jo wo chahenge wahi hoga... Mai apne kartavyo ko bakhubhi nibhaungi baba... Mai sapath leti hunn ki ab se mai inn bekaar ke khayalo ko kabhi bhi nhi apne man me aane dungi.....
Waise baaba, unhone apne ant samay me mujhe kishan ke 21 janmdin ke 6 mahine pahle aap se milne ko kaha tha, aur unhone kaha tha ki ye aap hi ka adesha hai... To mujhe adesh de baba...
Ki ab mai kya seva karu aapki.....
Kya ab kishan ki zindagi me kuchh parivartan aane wala hai baba... Ab to wo 21 ke hone hi bala hai...
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Aaj ke liye itna hi dosto...
Agar update pasand aaye to like kar ke jana..
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abhi mai lagatar update nhi de sakta hunn... Ab agla update yaha mere ghar me shradh karya purn karne baad likhunga.... Kyonki yahan meri bahot jyada jarurat hai,..
Khali samay mila to update bhi likhta rahunga, jaise ki iss update ko likha...
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