Incest AARYAN (EK PAHELI)

[KING ARYANS]

Zabardast update yar ya anjan shaks to kafi mystery ha

Thanks bhai

 

[KING ARYANS]

Awesome update

Thanks bhai

 

[Harry rocks]

Thanks dost appki story to puri padi bus mujhe appki hi esi story mili jisme heroine ko sath mein best dikhya gaya or mein apni galtiyoo ko jaror sudhaarunga thanks bhai

Ok thanks, ager padte ho to review bhi diya kero

 

[KING ARYANS]

Ok thanks, ager padte ho to review bhi diya kero

Sir ji meine kal se hi log in kiya hai comment bhi kiya tha ab dhree dhree sab kuch doonga bus thoda sa apni story pe dhyaan de doo bus uske baad to appki story hi padoonga qki i like it very much bro

 

[rnarock]

New story ke liye bahut2 mubarak dost

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[Niks96]

First of all congratulations for the new story...par mujhe aesa lga ki mene ye story shayad Xossip par phele padhi ho...kher ho sakta hai wo koi aesi hi dusri story ho...

Secondly, mujhe story me kuch issue lge jo agr aap dhyan rakhenge to story superbbb hogi.

1. Aryan aur ayesha ki age 21 btai gai hai aur wo dono is age me School khatam karke college ja rhe hai...jo thoda illlogical hai.

2. Story ka narration acha hai par uske saat agr aap characters ke dialogue presentation par dhyan de to story aur achi ho jayegi...jaise jab koi character dialogue bole to uske naam ke baad teen dots na lgakar : aur - lgaye to acha lagega.

3. Story me proper space de taki readers ko padhne me dikat na ho ki konsa dialogue kisne bola aur narration kha se start hua.

Iske alawa story line strong hai aur aage aur bhi bhetreen hoti jayegi.

PS - agr time lge to meri stories bhi read karke apne valuable reviews de.

 

[Arjun Singh 72]

Awesome update

 

[Vinod1368]

Nice story. Awesome updates.
Keep it up.

 

[KING ARYANS]

New story ke liye bahut2 mubarak dost

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Thanks bhai

 

[KING ARYANS]

Nice story. Awesome updates.
Keep it up.

Thanks bhai