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Fantasy AJNABEE 2-THE RISING(Completed)

Aapke hisab se story ki lead lady kise hona chahiye

  • Monica

    Votes: 19 76.0%
  • Rashmi

    Votes: 12 48.0%
  • Sheetal

    Votes: 7 28.0%

  • Total voters
    25
  • Poll closed .

Crocodile

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Till now story is running perfectly, every update is better then previous ,

I wish if Akash will give some supernatural training to yug but it’s my opinion it’s ur story u know how to make this perfect
 

Swaraj

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Monica and rashmi triangle maza aayega. Magar aage ki update badi confusia gayi hain bahao. Ek salah hain ki aisa likha karey to koshish kijiye ki pura likha kijiye ek hi update me bhaley hi 1 ya 2 din extra le ley taki baat samjh aa Jaye. Anyway yah sirf meray sochna ka nazariya hai baqi aap behtar jaantey hogey ki kaha kaisay story ko pesh karna hain.
Review ke liye thanks
Lekin update ko mai halki si incomplete chor deta hoon.
Taaki readers halka sa imagine kar story ko apne hisab se aage le jaaye
Update poora karne par interest khatam ho jayega
 

Swaraj

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Till now story is running perfectly, every update is better then previous ,

I wish if Akash will give some supernatural training to yug but it’s my opinion it’s ur story u know how to make this perfect
Bro review ke liye thanks
Aakash yug se bohut zyada powerful hai
Aur agar wo is story me aaya to yug ek side kick bankar reh jayega.aur sabhi aakash ko follow karenge.bohut readers ko wo character pasand aaya lekin is story me uski jagah nahi banti hai.agar wo is story me a jayega to yug sideline ho jaayega
Story interesting hoti jayegi saath rahiye
 

Hellohoney

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Bro aap ki dono story pe update kab de rahe ho byuty vali bhi ek alag leval pe lake aap hafteme 1 update derahe ho esa mat karo yar waiting for next update
 

RAAZ

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Hoshiyari shabash


Review ke liye thanks
Lekin update ko mai halki si incomplete chor deta hoon.
Taaki readers halka sa imagine kar story ko apne hisab se aage le jaaye
Update poora karne par interest khatam ho jayega
 
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Swaraj

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"aahh....."laashon ke dher se ek karahti hui awaz aayi

Yug waha gaya aur .....

RATATATA RATATATA

charo aur se goliyan chalne lagi.yug ka sharir chalni ho gaya

"Ha ha ha ye maara us naqab wale ko"honey ke khushi ka thikana nahi raha
Lekin uski khushi zyada der tak nahi reh saki

"Y ye kya us naqab wale ki jagah sirf lakdi ka patta hai.kahan gaya wo???

"Tere peeche"yug bola aur honey chaunkte hue peeche muda

DHADDD

punch ne honey ko door gira diya.

"M m mujhe mat maaro.mat maaro mujhe"honey darte darte bola

"Is poore supply ke peeche koun hai honey???koun is shahar ko is desh ko khatam kar raha hai??"yug ne poochha

SWOOOOOSHHHH SWOOOOOOOHHHH

do arrow yug ke kaan se guzar gaye.usne peeche dekha.ek shaks tha.jiska chehra hoodie se dhaka hua tha

"Is aadmi ko hamare hawale kar do"hoodie pehne aadmi bola

Yug ne do shuriken hawa me uchal diye.

SWOOOOOSH SWOOOOOSH
KHATT KHATT

dono shuriken ko apne dhanush se teer chorkar maara us shaks ne aur rok liya.kamal ka tez hai ye shaks

"Sura.sura naam hai mera,ab is aadmi ko mere hawale kar do agar marna nahi hai to"sura bola

Yug waha se hilte hi

Swooshhhhhhhh swooshhhhhhhh swooshhhhhhhh

Tere ki speed ke saamne uska hockey stick kaam nahi kar raha tha.majbooran yug ko peeche hatna pada.lekin kab tak???
Is shaks ke paas sirf ek dhanush aur tere hai.lekin goli ke raftaar se bhi speed chala raha hai teer ye
Aur ise honey kyun chahiye????

Yug ne apne aap ko sambhala aur fir kunai liya aur kuch sochkar hawa me uchal diya.
Ek kunai daayi aur ek banayi aur ek seedhi
Teeno ne apni disha badal di

"Bachkani harkat"muskuraya sura aur ..

Swooshhhhhhhh swooshhhhhhhh swooshhhhhhhh

Teen teer chod diye kunai ko rokne ke liye lekin tabhi..

DHADDD

"ahhh"apna pet pakadkar door hat gaya sura.yani sirf hamla karne ke liye kunai use kiya tha is ladke ne.vaar zor ka tha.lekin sura kam nahi tha.vaar jhel gaya

"Mere paas tere se ulajhne ka time nahi hai"bol sura ne ek tere chalayi

SWOOOOOSH

fir ek tere chalayi

SWOOOOOSH

Yug pehli teer se bach gaya lekin doosra tere pehli tere ko hawa me hi katkar do tukdo ki disha badal kar ek yug ke pair me doosra uske kandhe ma ghans gaya

"Ahhhh"yug karah utha

"Abhi neend aayegi.fir ek ghanta.uske baad sab normal.apna khayal rakhna fir milenge"kandhe par haath rakhkar sura hawa me dhanush ko lehrate hue honey ko ghaseet kar le gaya.honey chillata raha aur yug dheere dheere neend ki agosh me chala gaya

"Ha ha ha.hum bekar me dar rahe the.maine kaha tha na IAK galti se mara hai.isme dum nahi hai.sura ne hi bebas kar diya ise "kaala shaks sab kuch dekhte hue kubda se bola

Kubda ne koi jawab to nahi diya lekin yug ko kaafi der tak dekhta raha

"Chalo kaam khatam hua"bol kubda aur wo kaala shaks bahar aaye aur waha sura honey ko pakade hue tha

"Master ki beti ko hi drugs dena shuru kar diya ???"kubda bola

"M mujhe pata nahi tha ki wo master ki beti hai.maaf maar kar dijiye"honey chhatpatane laga

"Ghabrao mat.itne din ek saath kaam kiya hai tumne aur master ke client ne.tumhe aisi mout marenge ki dard kam hoga"kubda bola

KHACHHHHHHHHHHHH

sar alag ho gaya kaale shaks ki talwar se

"Us talwar ko khoon bhi mili to is kamzoro
aadmi ki."kaala shaks bola .machli ke sharir me jaise scales hote hai wahi scales us talwar me bhi thi.khoon dheere dheere talwar se gayab hone lagi.jaise talwar khoon pee rahi thi aur zinda thi

"Ab??"sura ne poochha

"Kaam khatam ab hamara yahan rukana thik nahi"bol kubda aur kaala shaks gayab hone lage

Wahi sura ne ek jump lagaya aur wo bhi gayab ho gaya

Yug ko jab hosh aaya tab sab khatam ho chuka tha.honey ka sharir bahar mila use gala kata hua.
Fir uski haar hui aaj
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"Sir har din kuch na kuch ho raha hai ek shahar me police kya kar rahi hai"reporter ne poochha

"Police apna kaam kar rahi hai madam.aur please unhen apna kaam karne dijiye"inspector prakash bola

"Police ka kaam to wo shaks kar raha hai sir,bas itne dino me kai drug dealers ko maar giraya hai usne"reporter fir bola

"Kanoon haath me lene ka kisi ko hak nahi hai mister.hamare samvidhan ki hisab se hi kanoon sabko saza deti hai"inspector prakash bola

"Lekin ab kya??ab police ka agala step kya hoga??kab tak us mysterious mask wala apna kaam karta rahega"reporter ne fir poochha

Inspector prakash ka man to kar raha tha ki us aurat ko dhakka dekar gira de.lekin wo kar bhi kya sakte the

"Mujh par gussa dikhane se kuch nahi hoga inspector pehle us shaks ko pakadiye"us reporter ne muskurate hue bola

Inspector prakash ne name tag dekha.asha

Asha muskurai aur waha se chali gayi cameraman ko lekar

Inspector prakash dekhte reh gaye unhen.
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Monica raat bhar soyi nahi.poora din room me thi.manjeet ko chorkar sabko laga ki tabiyat kharab hai

"Ander aaun??"manjeet bola

"Nahi"Monica boli
Lekin manjeet fir bhi ander a chuka tha

"To problem yug hai hai na??"manjeet haste hue bola

"Koi yug wug nahi hai.sahil ne jo kiya wo to tu jaanta hai"Monica boli

"Tujhe maine kabhi bhi sahil ke saath relationship ke liye support nahi kiya tha Monica iske bawjood ki wo mera dost hai pata hai kyun??"manjeet ne poochha

Monica ne manjeet ki aur dekha.lekin use kuch samajh nahi aaya

"Kyunki sahil ek lalchi insaan tha.use tujhe se nahi hamare paiso se matlab tha.jo tujhe kabhi nahi dikha.yug aisa hota to tere aas paas ab tak ghoomta rehta.lekin usne aisa kiya??nahi"manjeet bola

Monica chup thi abhi bhi

"Thik hai teri life hai.jis din use koi aur le jayegi tab pata chalega tujhe"bol.manjeet jaane laga

"To kya karun mai"Achanak muh se nikal gaya Monica ke

"Propose kar us idiot ko"bol manjeet haste hue kamre se bahar nikal gaya

Propose.achi baat hai.lekin kaise???Monica soch me doob gayi
 
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