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Boring aisa concept bahut aye hai pehle ...aate he maa ko kisi doosre ke aage paros diya...sorry but agar parivar ko hero ke sath he rakhte jeyada intresting hota....sorry bura laga ho toh
Fantasy ALADIN KA JINN? (LOOSER?)
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bhai...bss thoda wait...ye kahani hero ke upar hi rhegi...bss kuch time lgega....kahan ko uss mod tak lane m....baqi jab maine kahani start ki h.....toh kahani ke baare m kuch socha b hoga....
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SETH APNE VIRYE SY BHRNE ko hoTA ki tbhi achank gate khulta h....
gate khulte hi aladin ghar m ghusta h...ghar m ghusne ke baad vo sabse phle seth.ke admiyo ko udhr KHDA pata h...lkin jaise hi vo apni nazar apne bayi or ghumata h....uska khoon khol utha h....aankho sy aansu niklne start ho jate h....uske dil ko ye dekhkr dhkka sa lgta h ki uski ammi seth ka loda chus rhi h....uska dimag ghum jata h...uski sochne samjhne ke shakti bilkul khtm ho jati h....vo daye dekhta na baye...chl pdta h seth ki trf gusse sy...or jate hi seth ko naak pr ek gussa jad deta h..
seth ke naak sy khoon bhna start ho jata h...lkin jaise hi vo dusra gussa marne ko hota h....kalu or abdul usko pkd lete h....
aladin-salo kutto m tumhara khoon pi jaunga....
seth(ghusse m)- mujhpr haath uthakr tune sahi nhi kiya...kutte ke pille.
ALADIN- teri himmat kaise hui meri ammi ke saath krne ki....
rihana b lgatar ro rhi thi...
seth--kalu!!!bande is harami ke pille ko..
abdul aladin ko puri trh sy jakad leta h...ALADIN chutne ki bhut koshis krta h...lkin vo nhi chuut pata...kkalu uske haath pair bandh deta h.....
seth---kalu zra goli toh nikal.
ye mc mujhpr haath uthayega...ab dikhata hu ki m kya kr sakta hu....kalu seth ko gun de deta h....rihana ye sab dekhkr dar jati h...or seth ke pairo m gir jati h...
rihana -seth g maaf kr dijiye isko...ye bccha h abhi nadan h...
aladin--ap iss harami ke aage mt royiye ammi...m sab sahi kr dunga...
seth-isko mere upar haath uthane ka fal toh jrur milega....or seth ghusse sy aladin ko5_6 ghusse lga deta h...kuch pet pr toh kuch muh pr...aladin ke muh sy khoon bhna start ho jata h.....
or jab seth ka ghussa itne sy b nhi bhrta ...toh vo aladin ke sar pr...gun ki bett marta h...jiske lgte hi aladin niche gir jata h....uski saans b bnd hone lgti h...dekhne sy lg rha tha ki..ye mar gya...
ye dekhkr lala ki halat b khrab ho jati h...
ALADIN ki aesi halat dekhne ke baad vo udhr sy niklne m hi bhlai samjhta h...
udhr rihana aladin ka yu behosh hona dekhkr...khud b behosh ho jati h....
tbhi uski bdi beti rukshar aati h....lala b usko bss ye bolkr nikal jata h---ki bss 1 mhine ke andar mujhe mere saare paise vps chahiye....
lala ke jane ke baad...vo doudkr apni ammi ke pass jati h...or usko joro sy hilati h...magar rihana koi jwab nhi deti.
vo aese hi behosh rhti h...phr rukshar uske muh pr pani ki boonde girati h...toh rihana...ye bdbdate hue uthti h...ki mere bete ko chhod do.m sab kuch krungi...phr uska dhyan aladin ki trf jata h.
vo doud kar jati h....or aladin ke haath pair kholti h....aladin ke sar sy abhi b khoon bah rha tha. ...vo apna duppta utarkr uske sar sy bandhti h....
vhi dusri trf uski bhn rukshar apne bhai ki ye halat dekhkr b...apne room m chli jati h.......
ALADIN ki saanse lgatar kam ho rhi thi.....
tbhi rihana ko kuch khyal aata h....vo apne room m jakr kuch dhunti h...10 min ki mhnt ke baad vo kuch potlinuma cheej layi or...usme sy jadibuti type ki pattiya nikalkr....aladin ke sar par lga di....
2-4min ke baad hi aladin ka khoon bhna bnd ho gya....uski saans b normal ho gyi....or aladin behoshi ki hi halat m kulbulane lga....ammi m sab sahi kr dunga....
ammmi m sab sahi kr dunga...
or isi ke saath aladin ne apni akhe khol li.......
TO BE CONTINUED. .....
NOTE.....dosto story m kuch suspens chhoda ki...akhir vo chij kya ...jisse aladin itni jldi thik ho gya...or uski ammi ke pass kaha sy aayi...?
ye sab toh jaise jaise story bdhegi waise waise hi clear hogi...
kuki...ye toh abhi trailor h...picture toh abhi baqi h mere dost.....
OR HAA PHLE B BTA CHUKA HU M FRST TYM KOI STORY LIKH RHA HU...TOH KOI EXPERIENCE NHI H....AB JAISE JAISE LIKUNGA....KHUD KA HI EXPERIENCE LE LUNGA.....OR BAQI AP LOG TOH HO.HI......
gate khulte hi aladin ghar m ghusta h...ghar m ghusne ke baad vo sabse phle seth.ke admiyo ko udhr KHDA pata h...lkin jaise hi vo apni nazar apne bayi or ghumata h....uska khoon khol utha h....aankho sy aansu niklne start ho jate h....uske dil ko ye dekhkr dhkka sa lgta h ki uski ammi seth ka loda chus rhi h....uska dimag ghum jata h...uski sochne samjhne ke shakti bilkul khtm ho jati h....vo daye dekhta na baye...chl pdta h seth ki trf gusse sy...or jate hi seth ko naak pr ek gussa jad deta h..
seth ke naak sy khoon bhna start ho jata h...lkin jaise hi vo dusra gussa marne ko hota h....kalu or abdul usko pkd lete h....
aladin-salo kutto m tumhara khoon pi jaunga....
seth(ghusse m)- mujhpr haath uthakr tune sahi nhi kiya...kutte ke pille.
ALADIN- teri himmat kaise hui meri ammi ke saath krne ki....
rihana b lgatar ro rhi thi...
seth--kalu!!!bande is harami ke pille ko..
abdul aladin ko puri trh sy jakad leta h...ALADIN chutne ki bhut koshis krta h...lkin vo nhi chuut pata...kkalu uske haath pair bandh deta h.....
seth---kalu zra goli toh nikal.
ye mc mujhpr haath uthayega...ab dikhata hu ki m kya kr sakta hu....kalu seth ko gun de deta h....rihana ye sab dekhkr dar jati h...or seth ke pairo m gir jati h...
rihana -seth g maaf kr dijiye isko...ye bccha h abhi nadan h...
aladin--ap iss harami ke aage mt royiye ammi...m sab sahi kr dunga...
seth-isko mere upar haath uthane ka fal toh jrur milega....or seth ghusse sy aladin ko5_6 ghusse lga deta h...kuch pet pr toh kuch muh pr...aladin ke muh sy khoon bhna start ho jata h.....
or jab seth ka ghussa itne sy b nhi bhrta ...toh vo aladin ke sar pr...gun ki bett marta h...jiske lgte hi aladin niche gir jata h....uski saans b bnd hone lgti h...dekhne sy lg rha tha ki..ye mar gya...
ye dekhkr lala ki halat b khrab ho jati h...
ALADIN ki aesi halat dekhne ke baad vo udhr sy niklne m hi bhlai samjhta h...
udhr rihana aladin ka yu behosh hona dekhkr...khud b behosh ho jati h....
tbhi uski bdi beti rukshar aati h....lala b usko bss ye bolkr nikal jata h---ki bss 1 mhine ke andar mujhe mere saare paise vps chahiye....
lala ke jane ke baad...vo doudkr apni ammi ke pass jati h...or usko joro sy hilati h...magar rihana koi jwab nhi deti.
vo aese hi behosh rhti h...phr rukshar uske muh pr pani ki boonde girati h...toh rihana...ye bdbdate hue uthti h...ki mere bete ko chhod do.m sab kuch krungi...phr uska dhyan aladin ki trf jata h.
vo doud kar jati h....or aladin ke haath pair kholti h....aladin ke sar sy abhi b khoon bah rha tha. ...vo apna duppta utarkr uske sar sy bandhti h....
vhi dusri trf uski bhn rukshar apne bhai ki ye halat dekhkr b...apne room m chli jati h.......
ALADIN ki saanse lgatar kam ho rhi thi.....
tbhi rihana ko kuch khyal aata h....vo apne room m jakr kuch dhunti h...10 min ki mhnt ke baad vo kuch potlinuma cheej layi or...usme sy jadibuti type ki pattiya nikalkr....aladin ke sar par lga di....
2-4min ke baad hi aladin ka khoon bhna bnd ho gya....uski saans b normal ho gyi....or aladin behoshi ki hi halat m kulbulane lga....ammi m sab sahi kr dunga....
ammmi m sab sahi kr dunga...
or isi ke saath aladin ne apni akhe khol li.......
TO BE CONTINUED. .....
NOTE.....dosto story m kuch suspens chhoda ki...akhir vo chij kya ...jisse aladin itni jldi thik ho gya...or uski ammi ke pass kaha sy aayi...?
ye sab toh jaise jaise story bdhegi waise waise hi clear hogi...
kuki...ye toh abhi trailor h...picture toh abhi baqi h mere dost.....
OR HAA PHLE B BTA CHUKA HU M FRST TYM KOI STORY LIKH RHA HU...TOH KOI EXPERIENCE NHI H....AB JAISE JAISE LIKUNGA....KHUD KA HI EXPERIENCE LE LUNGA.....OR BAQI AP LOG TOH HO.HI......
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Aankhe kholte hi aladin rona shuru kr deta h....Rihana b lagatar roye jaa rhi h...Rihana ke aansu uske hotho sy hote hue..Apne bete ke galo pr gir rhe h....
Rihana---chup hoja beta...Sab sahi ho jayega....M din rat mahnt krke iss seth ka Sara karz chuka dungi?
Aladin--ammi jaan aap mere hote hue preshan mt hoyiye(siskte hue)
M ab tak anjaan tha..Mujhe nhi pta tha ki ye sab yha tk aa jayega...
Ap bss chup ho jayiye....
YE BOLKR VO RIHANA KE AANKHO SY AANSU POCHTA H...
Ye sab dekhkr rihana ko uspr bhut pyar aata h...Vo uske gaal ko chum leti h....
ALADIN AB KHDA HO JATA H....
or rihana sy bolta h-- ammi ap preshan mt hoyiye...Inshallah hmara tym b aayega...
Or vo Siskta hua bhr nikal jata h....
RIHANA PHR APNI BDI BETI KI OR CHL DETI H....Jha RUKHSHAR LGATAR RO RHI THI....Vo bolti h-- ki ammi ye seth yha kya kr rha tha....?
Or aladin ko kyu maar rhe the...??
PHR RIHANA USKO SARI BAAT BTATI H...Uski b aankho sy dobra aansu niklna shuru ho jate h....RUKHSAR APNI AMMI KE GALE LG JATI H....Or aladin ko bura bhla khne lg jati h....
RUKHSAR-- YE SAB USS ALADIN KI WJH SY HO RHA H...Pura din bss mstii krta rhta h....
Usko toh ghr ki koi fiqr nhi h....
Rihana-- nhi beta aesa nhi h....Vo abhi bcha h...Dheere dheere apni sari zimmedariyo ko samjh jayega...
Rukhsar-- pta nhi kb hoga vo din?..
UDHR DUSRI OR ALADIN GHR SY NIKLNE KE BAAD EK PASS KE HI GHNE JUNGLE M NIKAL JATA H......Bhut dur chlne ke baad vo beech jungle m phuch jata h......
VO JUNGLE M ITNI DUR AA GYA USKO KHUD HI PTA NHI CHLA...
Vo toh bss apni ammi or seth ke uss pal ko yad krke abhi b lgatar ro rha tha.....Vo syd hi apni puri zindgi m itna roya ho....
Vo toh BSS HMESHA APNI MOJ MSTI M MASHROOF RHTA THA...Usko ghar ki toh koi fiqr nhi thi.....
AB SAMJH AAYI...Ki sab log usko LOOSER,LOOSER KYU KAHA KRTE THE......
Khair inhi baato ko sochte sochte vo ek bhut bde vishal sy ped ke niche baith jata h....Or rote hue sochne lg jata h ki....Ab aage kya krna h...Vo seth ka karz kaise utarega???
Vo inhi baato m gum tha....Tbhi achank kuch ajib hua. .....???
TO BE CONTINUDE.....
Khi mat jayiyega dosto....
I know update thode chote h....Pr ragular honge....
Next update 3.00 pm
Rihana---chup hoja beta...Sab sahi ho jayega....M din rat mahnt krke iss seth ka Sara karz chuka dungi?
Aladin--ammi jaan aap mere hote hue preshan mt hoyiye(siskte hue)
M ab tak anjaan tha..Mujhe nhi pta tha ki ye sab yha tk aa jayega...
Ap bss chup ho jayiye....
YE BOLKR VO RIHANA KE AANKHO SY AANSU POCHTA H...
Ye sab dekhkr rihana ko uspr bhut pyar aata h...Vo uske gaal ko chum leti h....
ALADIN AB KHDA HO JATA H....
or rihana sy bolta h-- ammi ap preshan mt hoyiye...Inshallah hmara tym b aayega...
Or vo Siskta hua bhr nikal jata h....
RIHANA PHR APNI BDI BETI KI OR CHL DETI H....Jha RUKHSHAR LGATAR RO RHI THI....Vo bolti h-- ki ammi ye seth yha kya kr rha tha....?
Or aladin ko kyu maar rhe the...??
PHR RIHANA USKO SARI BAAT BTATI H...Uski b aankho sy dobra aansu niklna shuru ho jate h....RUKHSAR APNI AMMI KE GALE LG JATI H....Or aladin ko bura bhla khne lg jati h....
RUKHSAR-- YE SAB USS ALADIN KI WJH SY HO RHA H...Pura din bss mstii krta rhta h....
Usko toh ghr ki koi fiqr nhi h....
Rihana-- nhi beta aesa nhi h....Vo abhi bcha h...Dheere dheere apni sari zimmedariyo ko samjh jayega...
Rukhsar-- pta nhi kb hoga vo din?..
UDHR DUSRI OR ALADIN GHR SY NIKLNE KE BAAD EK PASS KE HI GHNE JUNGLE M NIKAL JATA H......Bhut dur chlne ke baad vo beech jungle m phuch jata h......
VO JUNGLE M ITNI DUR AA GYA USKO KHUD HI PTA NHI CHLA...
Vo toh bss apni ammi or seth ke uss pal ko yad krke abhi b lgatar ro rha tha.....Vo syd hi apni puri zindgi m itna roya ho....
Vo toh BSS HMESHA APNI MOJ MSTI M MASHROOF RHTA THA...Usko ghar ki toh koi fiqr nhi thi.....
AB SAMJH AAYI...Ki sab log usko LOOSER,LOOSER KYU KAHA KRTE THE......
Khair inhi baato ko sochte sochte vo ek bhut bde vishal sy ped ke niche baith jata h....Or rote hue sochne lg jata h ki....Ab aage kya krna h...Vo seth ka karz kaise utarega???
Vo inhi baato m gum tha....Tbhi achank kuch ajib hua. .....???
TO BE CONTINUDE.....
Khi mat jayiyega dosto....
I know update thode chote h....Pr ragular honge....
Next update 3.00 pm