mgaya
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Go with something which you can justify with this much perfection.. we will read anything you write
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Adultery Amita: Ek Ameer Shy Girl
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Sumit1990
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It was a fantastic update. I won’t lie, a thrilling update. Just what I expected from a writer of your caliber. Amazing.
I won’t lie, I delayed in reading the last update as it was saddening to see it end.
Yes, the end may have been near but it would of been more amazing to finish it off in another 2-4 updates to make it look like as close to reality. It just gave a sense that you finished it off by implying that the rest should be left on imagination as to what may have happened next.
Just couple of points I want to highlight.
1. She cannot just break off her marriage with her fiancé and elope with Fardeen just because she loved her first hardcore fuck.
2. She can’t come out in open and express her desire for Fardeen, just not possible. Her status and family reputation is on the next level.
3. She should go ahead with marriage while accept Fardeen as her fucker, and must do everything she and him desire in private. They can be as nasty, kinky, dirty as they want. But this should be in private.
4. After marriage, there could be an update where they are full on fucking while her husband is on some business trip. Something like fast forward in future. And that is where you can end it to make it an unfinished imaginary erotica.
5. As you have noted in your first update, “Note: ye ek long detailed descriptive type ki story h, to jo quick sex scene wali story padhne k shaukeen h wo es story ko padhne se avoid kre...”.
Therefore, we were expecting this story to be a long erotica with full on kinky sex in upcoming updates but unfortunately after the first sex session, the story ended. That’s just how I felt.
Anyways, good luck for your future writing. Hope to see you come back soon.
I won’t lie, I delayed in reading the last update as it was saddening to see it end.
Yes, the end may have been near but it would of been more amazing to finish it off in another 2-4 updates to make it look like as close to reality. It just gave a sense that you finished it off by implying that the rest should be left on imagination as to what may have happened next.
Just couple of points I want to highlight.
1. She cannot just break off her marriage with her fiancé and elope with Fardeen just because she loved her first hardcore fuck.
2. She can’t come out in open and express her desire for Fardeen, just not possible. Her status and family reputation is on the next level.
3. She should go ahead with marriage while accept Fardeen as her fucker, and must do everything she and him desire in private. They can be as nasty, kinky, dirty as they want. But this should be in private.
4. After marriage, there could be an update where they are full on fucking while her husband is on some business trip. Something like fast forward in future. And that is where you can end it to make it an unfinished imaginary erotica.
5. As you have noted in your first update, “Note: ye ek long detailed descriptive type ki story h, to jo quick sex scene wali story padhne k shaukeen h wo es story ko padhne se avoid kre...”.
Therefore, we were expecting this story to be a long erotica with full on kinky sex in upcoming updates but unfortunately after the first sex session, the story ended. That’s just how I felt.
Anyways, good luck for your future writing. Hope to see you come back soon.
waiting for continuation.. what about aakansha family females and in laws family
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ritu2000
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Sorry bro it was my first attempt to write an story on forum, if you feel the ending was too early but I wrote it only for a shy girl and how she get eloped with a totally unmatched person.
Ok I am going to write 2 more updates till the Akaansha marriage and one update going to post today's evening for sure, hope that can make you little bit happy as I always like your comment and appreciation. Thanks and keep loving
