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Thank you so much kingfisher bhai!Super awesome mind-blowing fabulous marvelous shandar amazing lajvab outstanding update
Veer Yani apni kahani Ka hero . Per jaisa use filhall dikhaya gya hai Uske according to zero lag rha hai ....sath hi ek innocent ladka nhi Jise Kisi se shikayat nhi par aisi kounsi vajah hai jiske chalte Uske parivar valo ne esse kinara Kar liya hai .... sayad eski vajah eski souteli mom ho ??
Ragging vo bhi Etna cruel tipe MC jante nhi ki ek kutte Ka din bhi ata hai par samne vala shakt bhle hi name ki trah veer na ho par vakt ke badalte vakt nhi Lagta bechare ki kya Galti thi yhi na ki samne mst mall dikh gai to thodi bahut apni ankhe shekk li kounsa use are aam nanga Kar Diya ... Khair jaisa inhone veer ke sath Kiya uska khamyaja vakt ane par enhe bhugtna hi Hoga ....
Let's see what happens next
Complete kiun RTT LGA rkhi hai Bai wo bita hua kal hai ajj ki baat kro 13 page update 1 kush too shrm kro yaarKonse zamaane me jee rahe ho bhai? Kaha dhyaan hai? Ek story likh ke complete bhi ho chuki hai.
Aur meine pehle hi likha hua hai, ki hafte me 3 updates aaenge.
Monday ko pehla update diya tha, dusra aaj aaega. Aur thread start hi Saturday ko hua hai. Mushqil se 4 din bhi nahi hue abhi...
Toh tum kya chahte ho bhai?! Harr 6 ghante me update likh ke du kya?Complete kiun RTT LGA rkhi hai Bai wo bita hua kal hai ajj ki baat kro 13 page update 1 kush too shrm kro yaar
Thanks dude!!!Welcome back bro
Very interesting concept & the character is bang on
Nice update
SHAANDAAR INTRO BHAI
Wonderful update....
Awesome Update
Jabardast starting hai yr.....bhai ye sach hai aaj bhi college me ragging hoti hai....pr yr sirf ladki ko ghurne se use itna marra gya.....yr ladki jab beautiful hogi to obviously use hr koi ghurega to ismeveer ki kya glti .....khair ajay bnda senior bhi hai ache se le li usne ....bde baap ki top lgta hai ye....veer koi talent nhi hai isme dekhte hai ye apna talent kaise lata hai ....rhi family member ki baat to mujhe lga hi tha iske saath kuch aisa hi hoga koi ise pasand nhi karega .....pr mujhe lga nhi tha iska khud ka baap ikse saath aisa behave krega ....mtlb iski family hai bs naam ki .....dekhte hai aage kya hota Majedar hota hai..and veer kaise badla lega ...Starting bahut osm thi yr....
Bs bhai yhi kahuga veer ko aisa na dikhana jisse wo sabko jldi maaf kde means sabki ach tarah bajaye koi raham nhi hona chahiye ..Jaisa ukse saath dusro ne kia waisa whi kre...jo uske saath acha hai ache se rahe ....or jo bura kare uski g***nd faad de....khair ye to abhi starting hai aage kya hoga wo to waqt bta dega....
behad sandar shuruwat mindblowing superbbb speechless update...........
keep posting bhai...........
waiting for next update............
superb Starting brooo..... Waiting for next update.....
Ek dum Dhaansu aur Shaandaar suruwat Werewolf bhai......
Excellent start
Kahani ki shuruaat mein hi veer ke halat ke baare mein bakhubi pata chalta hai na koi dost na parivaar ka sukh aur na hi koi humdum aur uske phone ke contacts mein bhi sirf 3 naam hain jisme uske baapuji uske sunte nahi aur baki dono ka koi sunta nahi ab pahle update mein veer ne apne lakshya bana li hai ke sab ko apne kiye ke liye regret karayega magar kaise ye dekhna wakai dil chasp hoga...waise college mein aksar senior boys juniors nkon dabate hain fir agar junior boy ne senior ladki ko aankh uthake dekh li toh in seniors ki jal jaati hai kuch toh bina ladki ke haan ke college mein uske pati banke ghumte rahte hain ab us bechari ladki prangya ko bhi pata na hoga aaj uske sundarata ko salam karte karte ek ladke veer ki khoob pitayi ho gayi hai,ab aage kya hota aur Veer kaise palatwar karta hai dekhna hoga... bahut hi khubsurat update tha bro ❤
Nice
Congratulations
Zabardast update
Bahut hi shaandar update diya hai bhai...
Nice and superb update..
For starting new story thread..
Nice and excellent update..
veer tan se bhale hi kamjor yuvak hain lekin man se nahin... college mein aksar aise koi group mil jata hain jisse kamjoro ko satane mein maza aata hain... veer jaise bachhe unke pramukh nishana hote hain jo chupchap sehte aate hain... wo tab tak nahin rukenge jab tak yeh virodh karna shuru kar deta haiin jaroori nahin yeh saririk ho mansik yukti ka bhi istemal kiya jaa shakta hain... akhir bhains se bari akal hi hoti hain....
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ab pragya thee hi aisi kee veer bina aagya ke taarne laga... sala maal hain toh kya registery karwa lee tune... bechara ab loot pit ke aa gaya... kismat ko kosne ke alawa bacha hi kya hain... na bahar dost hain na ghar mein pyar karne waale log... chachi sumitra aur chhoti behen kavya ke kareeb hain... lekin aisi stithi mein wo bhi koi madad na kar paate... aur shayad pita ka naam hain kyunki wo kehne ke liye baap hain akhir ussi kee kha raha hain abhi....
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ghar mein aur koi isse pyar na karta hain jahir hain bin maa ka bachha aksar anatho kee tarah palta hain... baap ke liye nayee maal hain aur uska hi pariwar apna hain... veer kamjor hain saririk roop se bhi aur padhai mein bhi toh baap aksar aur kathor hote hain aise bachho pe...
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veer ke nana nani ka pariwar ke kirdar toh honge... kya unhe apni beti kee nishani se lagaw nahin hain ya phir udhar bhi isse koi lagaw na hain...
aapke narration karne ka tarika badhiya hain bhai.... aaspass ke mahaul ko bhi shabdo se achhi tarah darsha dete ho... jisse kalpana aur jyada wastaweek prateet hoti hain... nice update...
for starting new thread
𝘽𝙞𝙟𝙡𝙞 𝘾𝙝𝙖𝙢𝙖𝙠 𝙧𝙖𝙝𝙞 𝙩𝙝𝙚 𝘼𝙘𝙝𝙖 𝙗𝙝𝙖𝙡𝙖 𝙢𝙤𝙠𝙖 𝙩𝙝𝙖 𝙇𝙖𝙜𝙬𝙖 𝙙𝙚𝙩𝙮 𝙖𝙞𝙠 𝙅𝙖𝙩𝙠𝙖 𝙤𝙧 𝘽𝙖𝙣 𝙟𝙖𝙩𝙖 𝘼𝙥𝙣𝙖 𝙑𝙚𝙚𝙧 𝙃𝙚𝙧𝙤
Bahot khoob shaandaar shuruwat bhai
शानदार जबरदस्त भाई
Awesome Story and Awesome update
Waiting for next update......
Nice Update bro
Waah bhai a66i shuruwat
Motivational story hogi
Pahle dukh dard
Baad mai badla
Jeene nhi doonga 3
Thik hai dekhta hu kidhar gym join karta hai ( just aise hi )
Between nice start bhai
College is name se hi pyaar hai
Pyaar ki mandir se
Nice update bhai ab veer ka badla kaise lete hai ye dekhte hai
Bhai thoda jaldi update dein
For completed 10k views on your story thread...
Waiting for this .
Nice start brother.
College me bhi sab bully karte he aur ghar par bhi.
Lagta he uski chachi aur uski behan kavya ko hi veer ki chinta he.
Dekhte he aage kya hota he.
Super awesome mind-blowing fabulous marvelous shandar amazing lajvab outstanding update
Veer Yani apni kahani Ka hero . Per jaisa use filhall dikhaya gya hai Uske according to zero lag rha hai ....sath hi ek innocent ladka nhi Jise Kisi se shikayat nhi par aisi kounsi vajah hai jiske chalte Uske parivar valo ne esse kinara Kar liya hai .... sayad eski vajah eski souteli mom ho ??
Ragging vo bhi Etna cruel tipe MC jante nhi ki ek kutte Ka din bhi ata hai par samne vala shakt bhle hi name ki trah veer na ho par vakt ke badalte vakt nhi Lagta bechare ki kya Galti thi yhi na ki samne mst mall dikh gai to thodi bahut apni ankhe shekk li kounsa use are aam nanga Kar Diya ... Khair jaisa inhone veer ke sath Kiya uska khamyaja vakt ane par enhe bhugtna hi Hoga ....
Let's see what happens next
Update has been posted guys!Welcome back bro
Very interesting concept & the character is bang on
Superb updateUpdate - 2 ~ Banished.
Ab tak...
Kuch derr pehle hui ghatna uske imaan, uske gaurav, uski izzat ko chhalli kar ke uske dimaag me ghum rahi thi.
Par wo ruka nahi. Yu aasu bahaate hue wo apne ghar ki orr gaadi badhaata raha jo ab bas kuch hi dur tha.
'Badla toh mein lunga. I'll make them pay. Chun chun ke... Ek ek se chun chun ke badla lunga.'
Ab aage...
Mumbai, jisse Mayanagri ke naam se bhi jaana jaata hai, uss sheher me ek boht hi aalishaan bangle me kuch log badi hi serious hoke ek kamre me dheemi awaaz me baatein kar rahe the.
"Aaj kese bhi karke uska patta saaf kar do. Samjhe?" Ek ladke ne bhaari awaaz me kaha.
Uske peeche khade ek naujavaan ladke ne uski orr dekha aur haa me gardan hilaayi, "Tension mat lo Bhaiya. Aaj uska patta saaf ho jaega. Mene bada hi tagda plan banaya hai hahaha!"
"Kesa plan?"
"Bhaiya! Aap bas dekhte jao. Aaj Dada jii ke decision lete samay hi sab kuch hoega. Mein show grand rakhna chaahta hu hahaha!"
"Shabaash chote! Bas dhyaan rahe koi gadbad na ho. Aur yadi hoye bhi toh tumhara naam bilkul bhi saamne na aaye. Samjhe?"
"Haa Vivek Bhaiya! Don't worry! Ye Pranjal jo bhi karta hai ekdum solid karta hai." Pranjal ne apni chhaati thap thapaate hue kaha.
Vivek : Good!
Muskuraate hue Vivek, Pranjal ka bada bhai uske kamre se nikal gaya.
Abhi wo nikla hi tha ki darwaaze ke baahar hi uski nayi naveli patni, Ragini usse dekhte hi bol padi. "Arre! Tum yaha ho? Chalo jaldi! Kuch derr me Dada jii apna decision dene waale hai. Sabhi hall me ikkhatta ho rahe hai."
Ragini ek boht hi gazab ki stree thi. Uska jism itna perfect tha maano bhagwaan ne badi hi fursat se usse banaaya tha. 27 saal ki Ragini ke stan kasse hue the aur saree me toh wo qayamat hi dhaa deti thi.
Uska gora rang, patle hontho me halki gulaabi lipstick, kamar tak latakte khule kaale baal jo neeche se curled the, uske husn par chaar chaand laga dete the. Ragini ka baap TVS ke 2 showrooms ka maalik tha. Paiso ki toh koi kami hi nahi thi uske paas. Aur Vivek ko aisi patni mili thi, uski kismat ke akhir kya kehne the.
Par Vivek bhi koi aera gerra nahi tha. Jab aisi patni usse mili ho toh andaaza lagaana mushqil nahi tha ki Vivek ka khud ka parivaar kitna ameer tha.
Ragini ki baat sunn Vivek ne kamre me jhaanka.
Vivek (chillaate hue) : Chote! Chal baahar jaldi.
Pranjal : Bhaiya! Aap jao mujhe toh important kaam hai. Haha!
Ragini prashn bhari nazro se Vivek ko dekhi, "Pranjal ko kya kaam bhala iss waqt!?"
Vivek : Tum chalo! Aaj toh behatreen show hone waala hai. Hahaha!
Aur hasste hue Vivek Ragini ko leke waha se chala gaya.
Par Ragini ki toh samajh me hi naa aaya ki akhir chal kya raha tha. Ab jab uske pati ne kaha tha kuch badhiya hone waala hai toh Ragini keval intezaar hi kar sakti thi.
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Veer ne apne ghar pohuch kar apni scooty se chaavi ghumaate hue gaadi band kari aur usse jeb me rakhte hue wo gaadi se utra.
Wo apne ghar pohuch chuka tha. Keval naam ke liye ghar tha. Ek ghar me ek aadmi khushiya paata hai, apno ka pyaar paata hai, ghar me ekta rehti hai par uske ghar ka ekdum alag hi scene tha.
Jaha aadmi apne ghar pohuch kar sukoon paata hai aur khush hota hai, Veer iss waqt andar jaane se hi katra raha tha aur darr bhi raha tha.
Shaam ke 7:30 baj chuke the. Aur wo paani se bheega, halke khoon se sana hua yaha khada hua tha. Usne apni scooty ke mirror me apni shaqal dekhi toh paaya uski ek aankh poori neel pad chuki thi. Itni buri tarah dhoya tha usse Ajay aur uske saathiyo ne.
"Aaarghhhh!" Karaahte hue usne apna ek haath apni pasli par ferra.
Wo apne qadam aage badhaate hue darwaaze ki orr badha. Uska ghar jo ki nark se kam nahi tha. Wo itna aalishaan tha ki jisse log dekhne ke baad tareefo ke pul baandhne lagte the.
Par unhe kya pata tha ki uss bunglow me andar rehne waale log kese the.
Veer abhi badh ke darwaaze par aaya hi tha ki itne me uske kaano me kisi ki awaaz padi.
"Arre!? Ye mein kya dekh raha hu? Tau jii ka eklauta beta iss haal me? Aur wo bhi aaj apne college ke second year ke pehle din?"
Awaaz sunte hi Veer ke perr wahi tham gaye. Saamne nazar daudaayi toh dekha ki uske chacha ka chota beta, Pranjal saamne khada hua tha.
Jii haa! Wo bungalow Veer ka hi tha.
Pranjal forun aage badh usse sahaara dene ke liye hua toh Veer ne uska haath gusse me jhatak diya aur apne perro par hi khada raha.
Pranjal : Arre!? Arre!? Mein toh bas tumhari madad kar raha tha chote bhai! Tumhari ye haalat kisne kii? Naam batao tum khaali, dekhna tumhara Bhai kya haal karega uss shaks ka.
Par Veer jaanta tha. Jo kuch bhi iss waqt Pranjal ke muh se nikal raha tha, jhooth ke alaawa wo aur kuch nahi ho sakta tha.
Uske jaisa kapti aur sayaana insaan shayad hi Veer ne apni poori life me kabhi dekha hoga.
Pranjal : Chote bhai! Dada jii ka janmdin hai aaj. Gussa thook do bhai. Chalo accha meri madad karwa do.
Par Veer toh jese kuch sunn'na hi nahi chaahta tha. Wo andar jaane laga ki ek baar fir Pranjal ne uska kandha thaam liya.
Pranjal : Bhai! Aaj Dada jii apna decision sunaane waale hai. Unhe kitna accha lagega yadi tum unhe apne haatho se unke janmdin par gift doge. Hai na? Apna gussa apne upar haavi hone mat do chote bhai! Chalo! Andar tumhara sab intezaar kar rahe hai.
Veer bhale hi gusse me tha, par wo apne Dada jii ki badi hi izzat karta tha. Aur unhe maanta bhi tha. Aaj uske Dada jii ka janmdin tha aur usne pehle se hi apne Dada jii ke liye ek gift taiyaar kar ke apne kamre me rakha hua tha. Jese tese Veer ne apna gussa nigla.
Veer : Aap chalo! Mein apne kamre se Dada jii ke liye gift leke aata hu.
Pranjal : Arre kya keh rahe ho Bhai? Dada jii aur baaki sab pehle se hi tumhara intezaar kar rahe hai aur aise me tum unhe aur intezaar karwaoge? Tum apni haalat ke baare me mat socho. Hum sab toh tumhaare apne hi hai hai na? Fir humaare saamne kesi jhijhak? Aao...
Aur Pranjal usse kheechte hue bangle ke andar le gaya. Chaahte hue bhi Veer uska virodh na kar paaya.
Andar ghuste hi ek mini hall tha jaha baahari vyaktiyo ko baithaaya jaata tha. Aur khaas logo ko hi uske andar waale Bade hall me entry allowed thi.
Abhi Pranjal aur Veer dono hi mini hall me the jaha ek khubsoorat sa flower vase maujood tha. Uske ird gird ek laal ribbon lipta hua tha aur Happy Birthday ka ek tag bhi laga hua tha.
Jab Veer ki nazar uspe padi toh woh usse dekhte hi chaunk gaya. Jo ki laazmi tha. Wo flower vase itna mehnga aur itna sundar prateet ho raha tha ki koi bhi usse ek baar dekhne ke baad dubaara zaroor dekhta.
Pranjal (khush hote hue) : Yahi hai wo gift chote bhai. Tau jii yaani ki tumhaare Dad ne khud isse mangwaaya hai. Aur yadi tum Dada jii ko apne haatho se ye gift doge toh woh kitna khush ho jaenge nahi!?
Par Veer jaanta tha ki ye Pranjal jo iss waqt bhed jesa maasoom prateet ho raha tha wo asal me bhed nahi balki bhed ke vesh me ek bhediya tha.
Veer ne naa chaahte hue bhi haa me sar hilaaya aur vase uthaake wo dono hi andar bade hall me pravesh kiye.
Bada hall itna bada tha aur lights se itna jagmaga raha tha ki dekhne waale dekhte hi reh jae. Upar na jaane kitna mehnga ek jhumar latka hua tha jisse dekh ke bas muh se tareef nikalti.
Andar ek single seat luxury waale sofe par Veer ke Dada jii baithe hue the. Aaj unka 80th Birthday tha. Aur unke agal bagal waale sofe par unke do bete baithe hue tha. Bada beta jiska naam tha Brijesh. Aur chota beta jiska naam tha Karunesh.
Karunesh : Papa jii aapko party rakh leni chahiye thi.
Manorath : Hmph! Kabhi bhi ye galti mat karna. Ye sab party jo tum log karte ho na issi ke kaaran tumhaare dushman badhte hai. Jitni raeesi logo ko dikhaoge, utne hi galat iraade logo ke mann me umadte hai.
Veer ke Dada jii ne hidaayat dete hue kaha.
Idhar andar jese hi Veer aur Pranjal aae, sabhi ki nazre un dono par jaa tiki.
Veer ke pita, Brijesh ne jese hi apne ladke ki haalat dekhi toh uski aankhein phati ki phati reh gayi. Usne sofe ke hatte ko itni zorr se bheencha maano usse ukhaad ke hi fek dega.
Kya Brijesh ka ye gussa apne bete ko iss haalat me dekh ke uska ye haal karne waale ke upar tha?
Bilkul bhi nahi!
Balki Brijesh iss waqt apne bete par gussa tha. Yadi abhi koi aur maujood na hota toh usne khade hoke pehle hi 2-4 jhaapad Veer ko raseed diye hote.
Uska beta wo bhi aise haal me? Veer ka ye roop maano Brijesh ki image par ek chaata tha. Na jaane uske baaki ghar waale kya soch rahe honge ab aise me.
Yahi sochke usse itna gussa aa raha tha par uske pita ka aaj janmdin tha aur wo kuch bhi bakheda khada karna nahi chaahta tha.
Nakli smile dete hue usne apne bete Veer ko dekha.
Brijesh : Aa gaye!? Kaha reh gaye the itni derr tak? Aur ye kya haalat bana rakhi hai apni? Kis se maar kha ke aa rahe ho?
Veer ki maano ye sawaal sunte hi sitti pitti gul ho gayi. Apne Dad ki bhaari bharkam awaaz sunte hi uske andar ka darr jaag utha. Uske haanth kaanpne lage the.
Iske pehle wo kuch jawaab de paata, bagal me khade Pranjal ne tapaak se bola.
Pranjal : Tau jii! Yahi baat mene Veer se baahar abhi puchi thi. Toh Veer kehne laga ki aaj usse ek senior ladki pasand aa gayi thi. Aur Veer uss ladki ko kahi le jaana chaahta tha par ladki ke premi ne virodh kia aur Veer ko ye bilkul bhi pasand na aaya aur wo dono ek dusre se jaa lade. Ye ussi ka parinaam hai Tau jii.
Pranjal ki baat sunte hi Veer ko ek zorrdaar jhatka laga. Usne apni phati aankho se palat ke Pranjal ko ghura toh paaya ki Pranjal bada hi masoom sa chehra banae waha khada hua tha, jese kuch hua hi na ho.
Pranjal : Mene Veer ko samjhaya bhi ki aise maar peet karna bilkul bhi acchi baat nahi hai. Veer ko toh fir bhi kam chot aayi hai. Na jaane Veer ne uss ladke ko kitni buri tarah peeta hoga.
Aisi vaani boliye, mann ka aapa khoye...
Auran ko sheetal kare, aaphu sheetal hoye...
Par Kabir ki ye panktiya iss waqt vyarth thi.
Pranjal ne jo madhur vaani boli thi wo Veer ko sheetal karna toh dur usse itna aag babula kar rahi thi ki yadi uski bas chalti toh wo issi samay Pranjal par toot padta.
Pranjal ki image ghar me ek boht hi sanskaari ladke ki thi, par wo asal me kesa tha ye baat sabhi nahi jaante the.
Brijesh (gusse me) : Tumhari itni himmat Veer!
Manorath : Shaant ho jao! Halla nahi!
Brijesh : Par Papa jii...
Manorath : Ssssshhhhhh!!!
Brijesh : Hmph!
Manorath : Veer! Tumhe pata hai kya kiya hai tumne?
Veer : Nahi! Dada jii... Wo mein...
Manorath : Jo hua so hua. Ab iski charcha koi nahi karega.
Aur sab shaant ho gaye.
Veer ne jab Hall me maujood sabhi logo par nazre firaayi.
Toh uski nazar apne Dada jii ke daayi orr rakhe sofe par gayi jaha uske Dad, Brijesh ke bagal se baithi hui uski sauteli Maa (Step-mom), Shweta usse bauhe sikode hue dekh rahi thi.
Fir uski nazar Shweta ke bagal se baithi hui Shweta ki ekmaatr eklauti beti, Bhumika par gayi. Jo usse dekhte hi apna muh ferr lii.
Jab Veer ne Dada jii ke baayi orr rakhe sofe par nazar daudaayi toh dekha ki uske chacha Karunesh aur unki patni Sumitra yaani ki uski chachi dono hi nazre gadaaye usse hi ghur rahe the.
Sumitra usse bauhe sikode uske chehre ko hi dekh rahi thi.
Unki hi bagal se uske chacha ke bade bete Vivek aur uski patni Ragini bhi baithe hue the. Wo dono bhi usse hi ghur rahe the.
Aur jab Veer ne stairs par nazre daudayi toh dekha ki uske chacha Karunesh ki badi beti Arohi aur choti beti Kavya dono hi saath me cake lete hue neeche aa rahi thi.
Wo dono hi neeche aayi aur cake ko saamne rakhi kaanch ki ek table par rakha aur side wahi sofe par baith gayi.
Jaha Arohi ne usse ek baar dekh ke apni nazre ferr lii, wahi dusri orr Kavya usse aisi haalat me dekh apni bauhe sikode usse badi hi hamdardi se dekh rahi thi par boli kuch nahi.
Kaha ek taraf uske parivaar waale jo naye kapde pehne, sajke baithe hue tha aur kaha wo jo pitne ke baad ekdum geela aur khoon ke nishaan aur ghaavo se bharpoor.
Manorath : Doctor ko dikhwa ke apni dawa karwana mat bhulna.
Veer : J... Jiii
Brijesh (zorr se) : Ab khade khade intezaar kya kar rahe ho? Aage badho aur apne Dada jii ko tohfa do.
Manorath : Aao Veer!
Aur apne Dada jii ki sahuliyat se Veer aage badhte hue apne Dada jii ko gift dene jaane laga.
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Aaj ke liye itna hi dosto!
Dhanyavaad!