Incest Baadshah ~ The Tales of Debauchery

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Bhai..kal Tak AA jayega..had not really seriously expected it to come..so chill guys..beer and IPL may be sahi option filhal..check again at night..if so anxious

 

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Bhai..kal Tak AA jayega..had not really seriously expected it to come..so chill guys..beer and IPL may be sahi option filhal..check again at night..if so anxious

Nope man! Meri neend lag gayi thi. I was very tired. Uske baad subah job. And abhi lunch hua.

 

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Update - 148 ~ Demise​

Ab tak…

Veer ki aankhein aisi phati hui thi jaise maano usne nangi taar ko haath me le liya ho.

Toh wahi woh akela nahi tha.

Ava use utne hi aashcharya me dekh rahi thi. Kyuki uske mann me bhi ek notification aaya tha aur woh tha -

*Ding*

[You have gained - Healing Factor.]

Ab aage…

'It's over!'

Veer apni saansein durust karne laga. Adrenaline rush dheere dheere kam ho raha tha. Woh apni dono hatheli khol unhe ghoorne me laga tha.

Crimson ab iss duniya se jaa chuka tha. Par ye sab kya tha? Crimson ke marte hi Veer ko mission ke points toh mile hi saath hi anya cheezein bhi praapt hui jo mission ke rewards me mentioned bhi nahi thi. Inka toh zikr hi nahi tha dur dur tak.

Limb Substitution? Probability Manipulation? Fir ye sab kya tha? Ye toh Crimson ke cards the. Iska matlab-!?

Veer ki aankhein hairaani ke maare fel gayi.

'Toh kya isliye-! Isliye Crimson mujhe maarna chaah raha tha?'

Uske haath kaanp rahe the. Ek aur nayi khoj uske haath lagi thi. Renshu ki kuch din pehle kahi gayi baat uske mann me goonji,

'Sansaar me sirf 30 system dhaarak log the. Par ab sirf-! 18 bache hue hai.'

Uski baat yaad aate hi ek aur bodh hua usse. Ab 18 nahi the. Crimson jaa chuka tha. Matlab ab sansaar me keval 17 hi system owners bache hue the.

'Kya isliye baaki ke 12 system owners maare gaye?'

Veer ke dimaag me vibhinn prakaar ke vichaar janm le rahe the. Kahi yahi wajah toh nahi thi jiske chalte baaki system owners maut ke muh me jaa gire? Kyuki 12 system owners yu hi marr jaaye? Baat hazam hone waali nahi thi.

System dhaarak vyakti apne aap me hi kitna shaktishali hota hai ek aam insaan ke muqaable. Aur aisa vyakti yadi marr jaaye, toh ye baat kayi sawaal khade karti hai. Woh abhi apne gehre chintan me tha jab-

Ek awaaz use hosh me laayi,

"Veer?"

Veer ki nigaahein turant hi uske bagal se khadi uss ladki par tik gayi. Khubsoorti ki woh bala use chintit nazro se dekh rahi thi.

Veer (frowns) : You-!!!

Ava : V-Veer! I-

Woh tezz qadmo ke saath aage badha aur usne ek jhatke me Ava ko uske gale se jakad liya. Aur, island ke chhor par lage ped me le jaake use bhida diya.

*Thud*

Ava : Nngh~

Veer chotil tha. Baahar se bhi aur…! Andar se bhi. Iss ladaayi me use bhi chot pahuchi thi. Crimson se mile ye baahri zakhm aur Ava ki di hui wo andhruni ghaat. Apni wahi haalat liye woh Ava ko daboche hue tha.

Kintu, urja jaise uske shareer se ab apne antim charno me thi. Adhkhuli aankhein liye woh Ava ki aankhon me ghoor ke dekh raha tha. Jaise batlaana chaah raha ho ki, 'ghayal zaroor hu, kamzor nahi.'

Ava ne apne aap ko chhuraane ka prayaas nahi kiya. Uske dono haath Veer ki chotil chhathi par tike the. Veer ki pakad uske gale par badhti jaa rahi thi. Lekin, Ava bas apne hontho ko daanto tale dabaye Veer ko dekhti rahi. Dard bardaasht karti rahi.

Ava : V-Veer!!!

Uski aankho se aansu ki kuch boonde nikli. Aur yaha Veer tabhi ladkhada gaya. Pakad dheeli hui aur woh saamne girne hi waala tha jab Ava ne turant hi use thaam liya.

Ava : Veer???

*huff* *huff*

Veer lambi lambi saansein le raha tha. Thakaan ke maare haafi aa rahi thi use.

Ava (frowns) : Y-You are hurt!

Jab apne aap ko Ava ke sahaare usne paaya toh ek jhatke me Ava ke haatho ko jhatkaar kar usne alag kar diya,

Veer : …

Woh kuch kehna toh chaahta tha, magar thakaan ke chalte shabd uske muh se baahar na nikle.

Ava wo celebrity thi jiski ek nazar ke liye log taraste the. Agar woh kisi ko sirf dekh hi leti thi toh aadmi apne aap ko khush kismat maanta tha.

Kintu, aaj wahi Ava jab Veer ko apne haatho se thaam use sahaara de rahi thi toh Veer ne uske komal haatho ko jhatkar kar use dur kar diya.

Na jaane kyu par ek ajeeb si peeda Ava ke dil me hui. Ek ajeeb sa dard. Ye kisi heartbreak se bhi zyada dardneeya tha. Kehne to woh hazaar shabd chaahti thi. Par kaha se shuruat kare? Uski samajh nahi aa raha tha.

Veer ped ke sahaare apni peeth tikaate hue Island ki uss ret par hi baith gaya.

Veer : T-Tum-!!! *huff* *huff* Let me guess! Fir se kisi fayde ke liye yaha aayi ho. Am I right?

Ava turant hi uski orr chalte hue aayi aur uske bagal se baith gayi. Kuch derr tak bas khamoshi chhaayi rahi. Saamne samundar ki lehro ka shor aur upar aasmaan se neech gir rahi halki halki baarish ki awaaz. Bas yahi sunayi de raha tha.

Nazaare ke roop me dur beech samundar me diesel me lagi aag ki wo lapte jo ahista ahista baarish ke chalte shaant ho rahi thi, agal bagal ret aur ghane lambe ped paudhe jo Island ki sateh ki shuruaat se hi lage hue the, aur saath dene ke liye kuch thandi baarish ki boonde.

Kuch shan baad Ava ke honth khule,

Ava : Y-You knew I have a system? Kab pata chale tumhe?

Veer (frowns) : Of course! When you killed me! Par mein khush kismat tha-! Jo zinda bach nikla.

Veer ki tone aur uske shabd, harr ek cheez Ava ko andhruni peeda pahucha rahi thi.

Lag raha tha jaise khanjar se uske dil ko ghaayal kiya jaa raha hai. Farq bas itna tha ki khanjar shabdo ke behroopiye me the.

Ava : V-Veer mein-! Y-Yes! Tum sahi ho. I have a system. Lekin, tum galat bhi ho.

Veer : ??

Ava : Ye baat sach hai ki mujhe tumhe assist karne ka mission mila tha abhi. Rewards me kuch bhi mentioned nahi tha. Lekin, mein yaha sirf mission complete karne ke liye nahi aayi thi. I-I came here to help you. Really!

Veer : What a nice routine huh!? Pehle khud hi maut ke muh me dhakelna aur fir khud hi madad ka haath aage badhana. You think I'm a fool???

Veer ki awaaz achanak hi oonchi ho gayi. Ava ki aankhon se aasu bahe aur uski nazre neeche jhuk gayi.

Ava : I-It was all my fault. I agree. I admit to it. T-Tumhe mujhe maaf karne ki zaroorat nahi. I don't deserve an apology Veer.

Perr modte hue woh sikud ke baith gayi. Uski awaaz bhi ekdum dheemi pad gayi.

Ava : K-Kya mein jaan sakti hu tumhe kya mila? Kya tumhe mission mila tha? Crimson ko maarne ka?

Veer chup chaap tha. Usne apni nazre ferr li. Agar koi aur hota toh Veer ne ab tak uska thobda hi phod diya hota. Parantu, Ava ke khubsoorat mukhde ne use aisa karne na diya. Aur aaj khud par hi kheejte hue usne apna muh hi mod liya.

Uski khamoshi ko Ava ne 'haan' samjha. Yaani, Veer ko mission mila tha.

Ava : K-Kya bata sakte ho kya rewards mile tumhe?

Woh ahista se uss se puch rahi thi. Jaise maano woh ek teacher ki tarah kisi kindergarten me pehle din aaye bacche se baat kar rahi ho.

Veer abhi bhi chuppi saadhe baitha tha. Aur uski khamoshi saaf jawaab de chuki thi ki use Ava pe zara bhi vishvaas nahi tha.

Ava : I-It's okay! If you don't want to tell. M-Mujhe…! Mujhe Healing Factor mila hai. It's…! It's a card.

Woh apni harr baat bata rahi thi. Kintu, Veer nahi. Wo bas sunn raha tha.

Ava : I still don’t understand a few things. Aisa pehli baar hua jab mission me rewards ke liye bas question mark banke aaya tha.

Veer ko tabhi dhyan aaya ki uske me bhi toh yahi tha. Crimson ko maarne ke mission me rewards ke saamne bas prashn chinh hi bane hue the.

Veer : Ek system owner ko jab dusra system owner maarta hai. Toh use maare gaye vyakti ki kuch skills aur cards milte hai. This is what I have assumed for now.

Ava : I-I see!

Ab paari palat chuki thi. Ab Veer kisi teacher ki tarah prateet ho raha tha aur Ava kisi bacchi ki tarah jo apne teacher se notes le rahi thi.

Ava : Toh isliye woh tumhare peeche tha? Mujhe bataya gaya tha ki…! Tumhari aur uski purani dushmani thi. Am I-

Veer : We were strangers! Wo mujhe isliye maarna chaahta tha taaki use mere cards aur skills mil sake.

Ava : …

Veer : Also, there are…! Total 17.

Ava : Total 17?

Veer (glances) : Total 17 System holders.

Ava : Whaaattt???

Ava ye toh jaanti thi ki ek se adhik system waale log hai iss sansaar me. Lekin, ye nahi jaanti thi ki itne saare honge. 17 ank bhi kam nahi tha.

Jab 2 ke bhidne me ye haal tha toh saare 17 jab aamne saamne aa jaaye aur aapas me bhid jaaye toh kya hoga? Samast dharti hi kaanp uthegi.

Ye khabar uske liye kaafi hairat-angez kar dene waali thi.

Ava : 17? P-Par ye kaise mumkin hai? K-Kisne bataya?

Veer (frowns) : Do I have a reason to tell you?

Ava : B-But-!!?

Veer ne use ye khabar isliye di kyuki Ava apne aap me ek system owner thi. Use kam se kam ye pata hona chahiye tha ki kitne system dharak log hai duniya me. Par, Renshu ke baare me jankari dena Veer ne uchit nahi samjha.

Aur kyu de woh bhala? Ava, ek baar use dhoka de chuki thi. Woh dobaara uspe vishwas nahi kar sakta tha.

Ava ko apni jagah ka bodh hua. Woh uss sthaan par thi hi nahi jaha woh Veer se jawaab ki maang rakh sake. Pehle glaani ke uss patthar ko apne upar se hatana tha. Woh ye turant hi samajh gayi aur isliye,

Ava : Tum sahi ho, Veer! Tumhe mujhe kuch bhi bataane ki zaroorat nahi! P-Par- Mein tumse kuch kehna chaahti hu.

Veer na hi uski baat sunn’na chaahta tha aur na hi use ab dekhna. Usne apni saansein durust kar li thi. Samay aa chuka tha ki ab woh yaha se nikle. Woh turant hi uth khada hua,

Veer : I must leave-

Ava : W-Wait!!!

Parantu, Ava ne uske haath ko thaam fauran hi use wapas neeche baitha diya.

Veer (frowns) : You-!!!

Ava : P-Please! Please, listen to me Veer! Meri baat sunn lo. Uske baad tum chale jaana. Mein tumhe nahi rokungi. But please- Please meri baat ek baar sunn lo!

Koi dekh ke keh sakta tha ki ye wahi famous singer Natalia Martin thi? Ek ladke ko yu thaame uss se gidgida ke minnat maangne waali ye ladki kya wahi Natalia thi? Wahi Natalia, jo kabhi ameer se ameer celebrities ko ghaas tak nahi daalti thi, kya ye wahi thi?

Ava jitna Veer ke saamne ro rahi thi, Veer ko utni hi kheej uth rahi thi. Kyuki, baar baar uske saamne Ava ki purani yaadein taaza hone lagti. Maatha garam hota, aur fir use apni bhadaas nikaalne ki woh urge paida hoti.

Ava : V-Veer! Please! Kya jaan’na nahi chaahoge ki maine aisa kyu kiya tumhare saath? Kya tum-

Veer : Talk!!

Usne beeche me hi Ava ki baat ko kaatate hue rukhepann se kaha. Ava ne ek gehri saans li aur bolna shuru kiya,

Ava : Tum naraaz ho! Gussa ho! Aur hurt bhi…! I know. Mein maafi nahi maangungi Veer. Lekin, akhir tak-! Meri baat sunn’na! Please!

Veer : …

Ava : You know…! Ye sab paisa, popularity, ye sab abhi ka hai. But actually...! We were broke Veer. Hum gareeb the. *smiles*

Veer : ???

Ava : Yes! Is it surprising? Lekin, pehle aisa nahi tha. Jab hum India me the. Sonia, Kaera…! Meri sabse achhi dost. Dad ka business tab uth raha tha. Mein unse mila karti. Unke saath khela karti. *smiles* Sweet memories. But unfortunately, kismat ko kuch aur hi manzoor tha. Everthing which begins must come to an end.

Veer : …

Ava : Dad, mom ke kehne par India chhor videsh chal diye. Mujhe bhi unke saath aana pada. Kaera aur Sonia…! Dono se mera touch khatam ho gaya. Abhi abhi nayi dosti ki dorr banayi thi. Par, woh ek jhatke me toot gayi. Mein use thaam hi nahi paayi. India chhor hum sab Vegas aa gaye.

Veer : ???

Ava : Vegas me business tezzi me upar utha. Par, kehte hai na juaa achhi cheez nahi. Woh sach baat hai. Vegas me hone ke baad agar insaan casino aur gambling se influenced na ho aisa kaise ho sakta tha bhala? Dad was the same!

Veer : He Lost!?

Ava (nods) : Yes! Aisa nahi tha ki casino se paisa nahi kamaya jaa sakta. Bilkul kamaya jaa sakta hai. Magar…! Dad ek galat casino owner ki deal me fass gaye. Na sirf unhone huge amount gawaya balki, business fund se leke building bhi gawa di. Dad ke paas power khatam ho chuki thi.

Veer : …

Ava : Mein unhe dosh nahi dungi! Galti insaan se hoti hai. Aur, usi ke liye woh Vegas se judi baaki cities me kaam dhoondhne lage. Unhone meri studies, ya mom ki life me kabhi kisi cheez ki kami nahi hone di. In fact, ye baat bhi ekdum end me jaa ke hamaare saamne aayi thi. Woh humse chhipaaye hue the. Taaki, hume koi tension na ho. That alone won my heart.

Veer : At least you had a fine dad…! Unlike mine!

Veer ne dheere se apni nazre ferrte hue kaha, jise Ava ne sunn liya. Woh samajh gayi thi. Veer ko ek shan dekhi, par uss baare me boli kuch nahi.

Ava : Yes! Dad was great. *smiles* Casino waalo se wo jaan boojh ke nahi bhide taaki hum par koi khatra na aaye. Lekin, inn cities me rehna koi asaan baat nahi Veer. Dheere dheere dad ki earning kam padne lagi. Aur, tab mom ne bhi kaam dhoondh liya. Woh bhi work karti, dad bhi…! Meri studies aur kharcho ke liye.

Veer : …

Ava : And, then one day suddenly, a voice resounded in my head. System has been awakened.

Veer : !!!?

Ava : Then, I knew…! Ki ab mein sab kuch theek kar dungi. Dad aur mom ki life ab mein better kar paungi. Aur, tab mujhe meri awaaz mili. *smiles*

Veer : Huh!?

Ava : Siren Rose!!! Meri singing skill. *smiles* Jiske zariye, mene iss glamour ki duniya me qadam rakha. Dekhte hi dekhte mujhe popularity milne lagi. System hone ki wajah se mujhe pata tha kaise aage badhna hai. Dad aur mom bohut khush the. Woh car se mujhse milne Vegas hi aa rahe the jab…!

Veer : …

Ava ki awaaz achanak hi dheemi pad gayi.

Ava : Jab…! Woh accident hua. Police ka call aaya. Aur, unhone mujhe hospital bulaaya. I went there…! Aur udhar…! Dad ki body meri aankhon ke saamne padi hui thi. Aur mom head injury ki wajah se coma me jaa chuki thi.

Veer shaant hoke sab sunn raha tha. Kahi na kahi uska gussa thanda ho chuka tha.

Ava : Kabhi kisi apne ko khoya hai Veer?

Veer : …

Ava : Apne khoon ke kisi insaan ko? Uss raat…! Mene toh jaise dono ko hi kho diya. Dad to gaye hi even mom…! Tab se wo usi state me hai. And, you know what the saddest thing is? *sniff*

Achanak hi Veer ko Ava ke subakne ki awaaz aayi. Usne mud ke jab use dekha toh paaya ki Ava ki aankho se aasu jhar-jhar kar ke beh rahe the.

Ava (cries) : The saddest thing is that… Mom ko pata hi nahi hai ki Dad iss duniya se jaa chuke hai. *sniff* He is no more! Unke liye toh jaise waqt tham gaya hai. Woh toh abhi bhi apni beti Ava ke singer bann’ne ki khushi me Vegas jaa rahi hai. She doesn’t know that- *sniff*

Woh poori tarah se toot gayi.

Veer : *frowns*

Ava : *sniff* M-Mujhe bataya gaya tha ki ye sab ek accident tha. Lekin, mein jaanti hu ki ye accident aise hi nahi hua tha. I checked my Dad’s car. Mere haath ek info lag gayi thi ki ise jaan boojh ke bheda gaya tha. And, I needed to find that person.

Veer : …

Ava : Aur tab, Ava se mein…! Natalia Martin bani! Ava was no more! Only Natalia existed! I trampled on the casino which robbed my dad. Destroyed it! Owned it! Remodeled it into my own label record company. But tab ek cheez aur hui-

Veer : ??

Ava : Ek unknown caller ki taraf se mujhe call aaya. Use pata tha ki mere paas Death Flag skill hai. Woh ye bhi jaanta tha ki mein apne dad ke killer ko dhoondh rahi hu. Aur woh ye bhi jaanta tha ki mere dad ka hatyaara kaha milega.

Veer : Unknown caller!?

Ava : Yes! Usne mujhse do maange rakhi. Badle me woh dad ke killer ke baare me bataane wala tha.

Veer : And you trusted him?

Ava : Toh kya karti? Use ye tak pata tha ki mere paas kya skills hai. Kaise nahi trust karti? Kam se kam woh mujhe aage badhne ke liye ek raasta de raha tha. Mere haath kuch toh lagta.

Veer : What did he ask for?

Ava : Mujhe yaad hai! Uski pehli farmayish thi ki mein India jau. Mera pehla kaam tha Slogan naam ke aadmi ke upar Death Flag lagana!

‘Slogan’ naam saamne aate hi, Veer ke badan me ek sihran daud gayi.

Veer : S-Slogan!?

Ava : Y-Yes! You know him?

Veer agle hi pal shant ho gaya. ‘Know him?’ Know him kya Veer hi toh tha jisne Slogan ko maara tha.

Ava : Mera kaam tha ye dekhna ki woh zinda hai ya nahi. Death Flag ki initial range sirf 1 km ki rehti hai. Uss range ko follow karte hue mein ek pahaadi par se uss par nazar rakhe hue thi. Jab finally, mujhe notification aaya ki Slogan marr chuka tha.

Veer (glances) : Then?

Ava : Then- Then I texted him. Kaam ho chuka tha. Usne kaha ki mein laut jau. Aur mein wapas aa gayi. I still don’t understand ki woh kya farmayish thi. Lekin, fir dekhte hi dekhte samay guzra aur iss Crimson ne…! Ye pata laga liya tha ki mere paas system hai.

Veer : !!?

Ava : Camouflage! Ye woh skill hai jo-

Veer : I know! Aage kya hua?

Ava : You know? Ohh! I- I see! Crimson-! That guy! *frowns* Mein uske saath koi collaboration nahi karne waali thi. Lekin, tabhi uss unknown caller ne dusri maang rakh di.

Veer : Huh?

Ava (glances) : Aur woh thi ki mein usi Crimson ke saath collab karu. My shitty luck! Aur tumhe pata hai uss Crimson ka plan kya tha?

Veer (frowns) : To frame me!!!

Ava : Y-Yes! Yes Veer! He targeted my mum too! Snipers! Pata nahi usne kab ye kiya tha. But I needed to save my mum. I had to undergo into a false camaraderie! *sniff* I-It was all my fault!

Veer : …

Ava : *sniff* Maisie’s cure! Veer!

Veer : ???

Ava : Ek Legendary scroll! Jo mujhe tab mila tha jab mein singing ki duniya me famous ho rahi thi. Fame points ki barsaat ho rahi thi Veer. I played scroll hunt. And luckily I was able to get this-

Veer : Maisie’s cure…!

Ava : Hmm! It can cure any coma patient. Magar, use istemal karne ke liye I need 20,000 points. Right now, I only have 18,000.

Veer : Unknown caller ka kya? Tumne dono maange uski poori kar di. Did he tell you who was the killer?

Ava : Usne kaha tha woh aaj batayega. I have sent him text regarding-

*Buzz*

Woh itna boli hi thi ki uska phone vibrate hua. Ek jhatke me Ava ne use apne jeb se nikala aur screen par dekha toh usi unknown caller ka message aaya hua tha.

“Hello there little girl! So? What’s the news? Kaun jeeta? Crimson? Ya Veer?”

Veer bagal se baithe screen par aa rahe message ko bhali bhaati dekh paa raha tha. Anjaan vyakti uske baare me bhi jaanta tha.

Renshu ke kahe gaye bol uske dimaag me fir goonj gaye,

‘Koi toh hai-! Koi hai jo hume iss shatranj ke khel me pyaade ki tarah istemaal kar raha hai Veer! Aur, filhaal use mein Mr. X keh ke bulaata hu. Jo hamari peeth peeche ye sab game khel raha hai.’

Veer : X..!?

Ava Veer ko apne qareeb dekhi aur fir screen par. Pata nahi kyu, par uske haath thar-thar kaanp rahe the. Thand iski wajah nahi thi. Darr tha asli kaaran!

Usne apne kaanpte hue haatho se Veer ko apna phona thama diya. Jaise woh chaah rahi thi ki Veer uss aadmi se baat kare.

Veer ne phone lete hue type kiya -

"Crimson is dead."

Aur message send kar diya.

Uss orr se fir ek message kuch hi shano me aa gaya.

"As expected. Anyways! Mene tumhe promise kiya tha. Right? Don't worry! I'm not that bad! I'll definitely tell you who your father's killer was."

Veer ne Ava ko dekha aur Ava ne use. Ava ke dil ki dhadkane behad tezz thi. Woh apne pita ke hatyaare ke baare me jaan'ne jaa rahi thi. Na jaane kitne din kaise guzaare the usne iss naam ko paane ke liye. Aaj woh naam uske samaksh aane waala tha.

"You father's killer was-"

Message aaya. Ava aur Veer dono hi screen par apni nazre gadaaye the. Aur agle hi pal, ek naam capital letters me saamne aa gaya.

"CRIMSON!"

*Silence*

Ek ghana sannata chha gaya.

Veer ke badan ke ruye khade hue. Toh ab tak? Ava usi aadmi ke saath collab kar rahi thi jo uske dad ko maare baitha hua tha? Bodh hote hi Veer ke badan me ek sihran daud gayi.

Darr iss baat ka nahi thi. Darr iss baat ka tha ki iss caller ne Ava ko Crimson ke saath kaam karne ko kaha ye jaante hue bhi ki Crimson hi Ava ke pita ka hatyaara tha.

Ava jaise sudh budh kho chuki thi. Iss khabar ko pachaaye kaise akhir?

Wait! Woh jhooth bhi toh bol sakta hai?

Ye khayal use aaya. Parantu, unknown caller ne jaise Ava ke mann ki baat padh li aur turant hi ek aur message bhej diya,

"If you don't believe me...!? See Crimson's past. Good night, little girl!"

Veer : Crimson's past!?

Veer ke muh se shabd nikle hi the ki uske mann me ghanti baji aur awaaz aayi,

*Ding*

[Past Illustration has been invoked.]

[Do you want to see Crimson's Past?]

Veer apni kasi hui bauhe liye Ava ko dekh raha tha aur Ava use. Ava ki aankhein jaise minnatein maang rahi thi. Veer jaanta tha use kya karna hai.

'Yes!'

Aur agle hi pal, Veer ki aankhein band ho gayi.

***

Samudra ke chhor ke paas ret pe ek naujavan baitha hua tha. Sooraj dhal chuka tha. Beach par maujood sabhi bache log apne apne gharo ki orr laut rahe the. Unme se kuch couples the toh kahi kuch family ke log. California ke iss beach par thodi kam hi bheed rehti thi. Woh bas yu hi logo ko jaate dekh raha tha.

Bina Maa Baap ke pala bada, Carlos ek aisa insaan tha jo apne aap ko zinda tab hi mehsoos kar paata tha jab jab woh maut ke ekdum qareeb hota tha.

Warna uski zindagi kisi naali ke keede samaan thi. Na parivaar, na pyaar, na ghar, na thikaana, California ki streets par sona, aur paise chura ke khaana khareedna, yahi uski zindagi thi.

Kabhi beach par aake lifeguard ki duty mil jaati thi toh woh kar liya karta. Aur jab nahi milti, toh yahi loot paat hi uska sahaara hota tha.

Aur inhi sab me uski jaan kayi baar maut ke itne qareeb hoti ki pal bhar ki chook bhi yadi ho jaaye galti se toh uski maut pakka thi. Kayi baar jiska paisa churaate toh woh maarne daud padta tha, toh kabhi streets me reh rahe khatarnak logo se panga ho jaata tha jo usse maarne aa padte the.

Ek chuhe ki zindagi thi uski. Idhar se bhaago toh uss bil me ghus gaye aur udhar se bhaago toh iss bil me. Aur beech me jaha jo jo khaane ka samaan mila woh utha liye.

Lekin yahi sab usse aur zinda mehsoos karwata tha. Ye jo thrill tha apni jaan bacha ke bhaagna aur akhir me zinda baahar nikalna. Yahi usse ehsaas karwata tha ki woh zinda hai.

Jitne bade risks woh leta tha utna hi zyaada use adrenaline rush mehsoos hota tha apne andar.

Log kehte hai na aksar ki gaand me gooda hai toh ye karke dikha. Carlos wahi banda tha. Confidence uska hamesha hi high rehta tha. Aur kyu na rahe? Jab aap hazaaro baar maut ke muh me jaake baahar aa jao toh maut bhi ek mazaak sa lagne lagti hai. Woh jese mrityu ke saath khel khelta tha.

Woh abhi soch hi raha tha ki aaj ka guzaara kaise kiya jaaye jab uske dost ki awaaz uske kaano me padi.

"Carlos!!!"

Carlos : Hmm?

Usne bagal se dekha toh paaya ki uska dost bhaagte hue uski orr aa raha tha.

Carlos : Jayden!?

Jayden! Uska sabse khaas dost. Bas yahi ek tha. Jo uski hi tarah tha. Ekdum anaath. Dono ek dusre ke saathi the. Dono ki zindagi ek samaan thi. Agar Jayden na hota toh Carlos shayad aaj zinda na hota. Jayden ne hi ek din use maut ke muh se bachaya tha jab mafia gangs ke beech woh galti se fass gaya tha.

Aur tab se, dono hi ek dusre ke saath the.

Carlos : Kya hua?

Jayden (smiles) : Ek badi party mil gayi. Chal! Baitha kya hai be. Raat ho rahi hai. Jugaad toh karna padega na!

Jayden ne uske kandho ko thap-thapaya aur bade hi josh me woh waha se aage badh gaya. Carlos utha aur Jayden ke peeche peeche chal diya.

Carlos : Kaha hai party?

Jayden : Yahi! Yahi par aayegi.

Carlos : Tujhe kaise pata?

Jayden : Pakki khabar hai be. Kal mene do logo ko baat karte hue sunn liya tha. Unse baat bhi ki thi mene-

Carlos : Kya baat ki?

Jayden : Yahi ki kya hum bhi shamil ho sakte hai?

Carlos : Toh kya kaha unn logo ne?

Jayden : Mujhe upar se neeche dekha aur fir muskuraaye. Bole ki kyu nahi! Bilkul!

Carlos : Accha? Aur kaam kya hai?

Jayden : Abe tu sabr toh rakh. Saara maza kirkira ho jayega agar mein hi sab bata dunga toh. Dekhte jaa bas tu.

Carlos ne apna sarr haar me hilaaya. Jayden ko samjhana matlab bhains ke aage been bajaane jaisa tha. Use kitna hi samjha lo, woh hamesha apne mann ki hi karta tha. Par jaisa bhi tha, bada hi accha tha.

Carlos use dekh andar hi andar muskura diya. Raat hui aur tabhi samudri tat par ek ship aake lag gayi.

Carlos : Ye kya hai? Ship?

Jayden : Haha! Chaunk gaya na? Yahi toh hai be badi party. Chal jaldi!

Woh use kheechte hue aage badha. Aur dono ship ke liye seedhiyo se upar chadh diye.

Jaise hi ship me qadam rakhne ki baari aayi, unn dono se pooch taach kari jaane lagi. Par unn do logo ne jaise hi Jayden ko dekha use andar aane ke liye allow kar diya.

Carlos ne dekha ki harr ek aadmi, aurat waha masks pehni hue the.

'Huh?'

Carlos : Ye kisi tarah ki party ho rahi hai kya yaha?

Jayden : Haan! Shayad! Sab ameer log hai be. Dekh! Ship me help karwayenge. Aur saath hi-

Carlos : Beech beech me mauka dekh ke kuch mehnga samaan bhi maar lenge. Right?

Jayden : Hahaha! Yes my boy! Safar ka safar! Lazeez khana! Aur upar se fayda hi fayda! Bol? Pasand aaya na?

Carlos : Interesting!

Jayden aage badh unn do logo se baat karne laga. Woh do log use samjha rahe the ki kya kya kaam hai ship me karne ko.

Toh wahi Carlos raat me iss light se jagmag ship ke harr kone ko bade hi dhyaan se dekh raha tha. Ek ajeeb si anubhooti ho rahi thi use. Kuch theek nahi lag raha tha. Bhala ye kis tarah ki party thi?

Tabhi Jayden ne use awaaz lagaate hue apne paas bulaaya. Woh Jayden ke paas jaake khada ho gaya.

Jayden : Ye Sir log hume ameero ka parichay de rahe hai. Bata rahe hai ki inka hume khaas dhyaan rakhna hai.

Carlos ne haami bhari. Aur, itne aankhon par mask lagaaye ek khubsoorat mahila kareeban 40-45 umr ki unn dono ke saamne aayi.

Badan par behad mehngi ek red dress aur laal hontho par reshesyamayi muskaan.

Woman in red : Hooo~ Such fine young men!!!

Aadmi : Ye toh bas additional hai Miss.

Woman in red : Toh kya hua?

Woh aage aayi aur usne Carlos ki chin ko apne komal haatho me liya,

Woman in red : What's your name, baby boy huh?

Magar, Carlos ko ye sab bilkul bhi pasand na aaya. Woh chup raha. Jayden ke maathe par paseene ki boonde jhalakne lagi. Isliye, woh tapaak se bol pada.

Jayden : Umm! M-Ma'am mein Jayden hu aur ye-

*Chataaaaaaakkkkkk*

Usne itna bola hi tha ki ek zordaar ulta thappad aake uske gaal pe pada. Chaate ki goonj poore ship me fel gayi. Carlos ki aankhein ye dekhte hi hairat me badi ho gayi.

Woman in red : Mene tumse jawaab nahi maanga tha, right?

Jayden (nods) : J-Jii!

Carlos (gurraate hue) : Y-You-!!!

Woman in red (smiles) : See! This is what happens when you try to act smart with me.

Kehte hue woh palat ke waha se chali gayi aur aas paas ke log unn dono ke upar hasste reh gaye.

Jayden apna gaal pakde use sehlaane me laga hua tha. Aur Carlos ko kos raha tha,

Jayden : Abey saale! Seedhe seedhe naam bata deta toh kya chala jaata? Tere chakkar me...! Mere ko thappad raseed diya usne. Haaye! Lekin, haath bada hi soft tha yaar! Uff! Bas zorr se maar gayi saali.

Carlos (frowns) : Uska mujhe uss dhang se chheena pasand nahi aaya. Saath hi uske woh shabd. Mein koi khilauna nahi.

Jayden : Abey toh theek hai na. Thodi derr kar leta naatak. Dekh, mera gaal kaise laal pad gaya. Ahn! Fuck!!!

Woh dono kuch hi sanag baad apne apne kaamo me lag gaye. Kahi Carlos deck ki safaayi karta toh kahi Jayden khaane ki plates ko utha ke unhe sink tak le jaata.

Kahi, Carlos unn dishes ko dhota toh kahi Jayden mehmaano ki servings me laga rehta. Kul milaake, dono bhaiyankar vyast ho chuke the.

Mauka dekh ke kuch na kuch chota mota item bhi maar lete. Jaise kisi ki anguthi ya kisi ki ghadi. Magar, zyada bada item nahi. Uski chori toh tab hi hoti jab ship land se ekdum kareeb rahe.

Filhaal, woh samundar ke beecho beech the. Kahi bhaag bhi nahi sakte the.

Woh dono hi abhi mauka dekh ke kuch lootne ki soch rahe the jab,

*Thud* *Thud*

Do zordaar vaar unke sarr par hue aur dono hi apne hosh kho baithe.

Na jaane kitna waqt guzar chuka tha. Magar, shor sharaabe ke chalte Carlos ko hosh aa gaya. Usne apne aas paas dekha toh paaya ki sangeet baj raha tha aur saare log aankhon par mask lagaaye naach rahe the.

Koi wine pee raha tha toh koi khaane me laga hua tha.

'Huh?'

Usne turant hi uthne ki koshish ki magar...!

'What???'

Uske haath bandhe hue the. Peeche mud ke dekha toh paaya ki Jayden ke haath bhi uske haatho se bandhe hue the.

Woh dono hi aapas me bandhe the. Aur tabhi Jayden ki awaaz uske kaano me padi,

Jayden : We got trapped!

Carlos : What?

Jayden : I-I'm sorry Carlos! Sab meri galti hai. Mujhe nahi pata tha ki ye aisi party niklegi.

Carlos : What do you mean?

Jayden : Look for yourself!

Uske ishaare ko follow karte hue Carlos ne jab deck ke chhor par dekha toh uske badan me raungte khade ho gaye.

Ek aadmi tha, uske haath perr aur muh sab bandha hua tha. Uske saath kya kiya jaa raha tha ye batlaane ki zaroorat nahi thi.

Agle hi pal sabki nazro ke saamne use peeche se laat maar ke dhakel diya gaya. Jaha Jayden aur Carlos ki haalat patli ho gayi thi ye drishya dekh ke toh wahi baaki sabhi enjoy kar rahe the.

Samudra me sharks ka jhund tha neeche. Uss aadmi ka kya haal hua hoga, ye sochne ki zaroorat hi nahi thi.

Jayden : And we are the next!

Carlos : Wh-Whaaaaatttt??

Qadmo ki awaaz aayi, aur wahi woman in red unn dono ke saamne thi. Unn dono ko pakad ke uthaaya gaya. Woh aurat unn dono ke chakkar lagaayi aur unhe upar se neeche tak dekhi.

Jayden ki chin pakadte hue usne pucha,

Woman in red : What's your favourite colour?

Jayden ne aurat ki dress dekhi aur tareef karne ke liye tapaak se bol diya,

Jayden : R-Red!!! Crimson Red!!!

Woman in red (smiles) : Good!

Woh ahista se Carlos ke paas aayi aur firse usne uski chin ko thaama,

Woman in red : And what's your baby boy?

Baby boy shabd sunn ke hi Carlos ka dimaag kharab tha. Woh uttar dena toh chaahta tha magar uski pride ne muh khulne na diya.

Jiska nateeja,

*Chataaaaaaakkkkkk*

Jayden : Ahhhn!!

Carlos : You fuckerssss!!!

Jayden ke muh pe firse ek thappad aake pada. Woh aurat Carlos ko nahi maarti. Jab jab wo jawaab dene se mana karta toh Jayden ke gaal laal kar deti.

Woman in red (smiles) : This look! This is what I like...! Hahahahaha!

Aadmi : Kya karna hai inke saath miss?

Woman in red (smiles) : Of course! Kill both of them. Hatte katte hai. Show will be long lasting. Fufu~

Aur sabhi aas paas thahaake lagaane lage.

Jayden : Fuckkkk! T-Toh ye isliye uss din mujhe upar se neeche dekh rahe the? Taaki mein sharks ke liye accha chaara bann saku? Inki maa ki choot!!!! Fuckkkkk!!!

Carlos : Jayden!

Jayden : Yeah!?

Carlos : I... I have an idea.

Jayden : Ohh?

Unn dono ko deck ke kareeb laaya gaya. Dono ke girne ke samay aa chuka tha. Aur yahi woh waqt tha jab Carlos ko apne andar kuch mehsoos hua aur mann me ek ghanti baji,

*Ding*

[System has been awakened.]

[You are now the owner of the system.]

[Analysing French language from the owner's mind...]

[Processing...]

[Process completed.]

[French language has been recognised.]

[I can help you!!!]

Awaaz sunn Carlos buri tarah se darr gaya.

Carlos : Whaaaaatttt? K-Kaun ho tum?

Jayden : Huh? Abe kis se baat kar raha hai? Wtf? Ye plan hai tera?

[Shhh! Stay calm! Sirf tum hi mujhe sunn sakte ho. Apne mann me baat karo!]

'I-I see! But-!'

[Sawaal kyu puchte ho? Kya tumhe yaha se bach ke nahi nikalna? Agar nikalna hai, toh ye bhul jao ki madad kaha se mil rahi hai aur kaise mil rahi hai. Iss baare me baad me bhi socha jaa sakta hai. Right?]

'A-Alright then!'

Jayden : Abey tu marrne ke darr se kahi paagal toh nahi ho gaya?

Carlos : Tujhe darr nahi lag raha?

Jayden (smiles) : Ab nahi lagta maut se darr.

Carlos : H-Hey!

Inn dono ki baatein ho rahi thi par kismat ko jaise kuch aur hi manzoor tha.

Unhe mauka tak nahi mila, jab unhe zorr se seedhe neeche dhakel diya gaya. Woh dono aapas me bandhe seedhe samundar me jaa gire.

[I will tell you how to open these rope knots. Follow my command.]

Paani me dono ko hi terrna aata tha. Dono apna santulan banaaye the. Magar...! Sharks kaha unhe samay dene waali thi.

Jaise hi knots khuli, Carlos ko mehsoos hua jaise kisi ne use peeche se dhakka diya ho. Palat ke dekha toh woh kisi murti ki tarah jamm ke reh gaya.

Jayden ko shark chaba chuki thi. Uske aadhe shareer ko nigal chuki thi.

Aur waha wahi crimson red blood samundar me fel gaya. Upar decks se cheh-chahaane ki awaazein aa rahi thi.

"Jaaaaaayddddeeeennnn!!!!"

Carlos chillaaya. Par Jayden jaa chuka tha.

[Save yourself first. Move to other side, quick!]

System ki baat maante hue woh neeche hi neeche ship ke dusre side aa gaya. Log waha deck se uss orr dekh rahe the aur Carlos iss orr aa chuka tha.

Badi hi mushqil se woh ship me pakad banaate hue chadha aur upar ko aa gaya. Poori tarah se bheega hua tha woh. Log waha uske paani me gaayab hone ke baare me baat kar rahe the aur torch maar ke use dhoondh rahe the.

Carlos ne dekha ki wahi woman in red muskuraate hue apne andar ke cabin me jaa rahi thi. Woh apni gusse se laal aankhein liye uske peeche peeche chal diya.

Apne cabin me aake woh aurat red wine ka ek glass liye wine pee rahi thi.

Ki tabhi,

*Khach*

Kuch nukeela sa uski gardan me mehsoos hua. Aur fir dard utha, fir atyant hi asaheneeya dard hua aur usne palat ke dekha.

Uski aankhein felti chali gayi. Saamne Carlos tha. Aur, usne wine ke glass ko tod ke jo sirf dandi waala hissa rehta hai, woh seedhe uske gale me ghused diya tha.

Agle hi pal, usne woh hissa nikaala aur ek naya glass lete hue usne uss aurat ko jhukaaya. Gale se khoon kisi nal ki tarah nikla aur glass me bhar gaya.

Aur wahi khoon se bhare glass ko usne aurat ke muh se laga diya. Aurat ki aankhein aisi feli hui thi jaise usne maano bhoot dekh liya ho.

Carlos : You wanted to know my name, right? Remember it in your afterlife. It's Crimson!!!

Jayden ki akhiri yaad ke roop me usne apna naam yahi rakh liya.

Carlos was dead. Crimson was born. Uss raat, ship par bas khoon hi khoon felta chala gaya. System ne na sirf Crimson ko waha se zinda nikala, balki baakiyo ko maut ke ghaat bhi utaar diya.

Aur unhi ke ship ke zariye woh land tak aa gaya. Ab uska maqsad bann chuka tha. Inn fetish waalo ko chun chun ke maarne ka.

Jayden ki jaan inki wajah se gayi thi. Uska aim clear tha. Par aise hi nahi. Woh aise hi nahi maarne waala tha inhe. Inhe inke bil se nikaal ke pehle inka saara paisa hadpega woh. Uske baad hi inhe maarega. Uska uddeshya spasht tha.

Par abhi sab khatam nahi hua tha. Usne ek car ko jaise taise khol chaalu kiya aur waha se bhaag nikla.

California se Vegas ki orr jaane waala ye raasta tha. Raat me sab kuch sunsaan tha. Use laga tha ki woh ab ek chenn ki neend le payega par nahi,

*Vrrrrooooooommmmm*

Ek car tezz gati me theek uske bagal se nikli.

'Huh?'

Par sirf ek nahi thi. Theek uske baad ek aur car utni hi speed me uska peecha karte hue nikli.

'What the-!?'

Crimson ne apni car unn do cars ke peeche laga di. Ek car sabse aage thi jisme koi tha aur woh tezzi se bhaag raha tha.

Toh wahi uske theek peeche ek open car thi. Jisme ek yuvak baitha hua tha aur woh uska peecha kar raha tha.

Crimson ne car uss peecha kar rahe yuvak ke bagal se lagaayi.

Crimson : H-Hey!!!

Usne awaaz lagaayi toh uss yuvak ne Crimson ki orr dekha. Aur aaj pehli baar Crimson ko darr ka ehsaas hua.

Uss aadmi ke chehre par ek kaala mask tha. Uska poora chehra dhaka hua tha.

Hosh uske tab ude jab,

'Check!'

*Ding*

[No information available.]

'Huh??'

Crimson (frowns) : You...!

Aadmi (smiles) : Ohh! System huh!

Crimson (baffled) : Wh-What? H-How? Tumhe kaise pata?

Aadmi (smiles) : Raaste par dhyaan do! Warna-

Crimson uski baat sunn jaise hi saamne dekha, uski aankhein phati reh gayi. Ek truck aa raha tha. Ek jhatke me usne apni car side ki aur truck uske bagal se nikal gaya.

Usne firse apni car uss aadmi ke bagal se lagaate hue uss se pucha,

Crimson : Tum system ke baare me jaante ho? Kaise? Kya tumhare paas bhi-!?

Aadmi kuch nahi bola.

Crimson : Aur woh aadmi kaun hai aage? Uska peecha kyu kar rahe ho tum?

Sabse aage waale aadmi ki haalat kharaab thi. Woh khoon se sana hua tha aur bhaybheet bhi tha.

Aadmi : Woh mera shikaar hai. I'm trying to kill him.

Crimson : Whaaaattt?

Aadmi : Chaunk kyu rahe ho? Tunhare khud ke kapdo me khoon laga hai. Tum iss kaam me naye nahi ho. Right?

Crimson ne apne kapdo par dhyaan diya. Uske kapde khoon se sane the.

Usne aage bhaag rahe aadmi ko dekha aur,

'Check'

*Ding*

[No information available.]

'What???'

Raaste me teeno cars tezz gati se badh rahi thi.

Aadmi : I have a deal for you!

Crimson : Huh?

Aadmi : Why don't you become my right hand man?

Crimson : !!!?

Aadmi : Chalo ek offer deta hu! Kill that man!

Crimson : Whatttt?

Aadmi : Kill him! Aur tumhe ek naya raaz pata chalega. *smiles*

Crimson : ...

Aadmi : Why fear now? Haath toh tumhaare wese hi khoon se sane hai. Don't you want to know the secret?

Crimson : Mujhe kya milega?

Aadmi (smiles) : Jo milega woh tum khud dekh lena.

*Vrrrrooooooommmmm*

Crimson ne gaadi aage badhaayi aur theek aage bhaag rahe aadmi ke peeche laga di.

Woh aadmi bohut hi buri tarah ghayal tha. Idhar Crimson ke peeche woh mask waala aadmi bade hi itminaan se gaadi chala raha tha, jab uske bagal se ek gaadi aayi.

Gaadi me ek aadmi aur ek aurat sawaar the. Aur ye dono koi aur nahi wahi the.

Jayesh aur Grace! Ava ke mata pita.

Jayesh : Y-Ye! Ye sab chal kya raha hai beech sadak me?

Grace : You! Please! Dear! Drive slow.

Jayesh : Haan! Don't worry! I'm here! You there-!!!

Masked man (in hindi) : Ohhh! Mein?

Jayesh : Huh? Tunhe Hindi aati hai?

Masked man : Bilkul!

Jayesh : Woh aage ki do gaadiyo ka kya chakkar hai? Itni speed me kyu bhaag rahi hai?

Masked man : Darasal, baat ye hai Uncle. Mein kab se ye sab rokne ki koshish kar raha hu. Par ye aadmi jo hai, uss aage bhaag rahe hai aadmi ko jaan se maarna chaah raha hai.

Jayesh : Whatttt??

Grace : Ahn!! Dear! Call the police!

Masked man : Police? Unhe aane me hi yaha ghanto lag jayega ma'am. Aapne kapde dekhe uss aadmi ke? Kaise khoon se sane hai. Uncle! Kya aapko nahi lagta ki hume ye sab hone se bachana chahiye?

Jayesh : Kahi woh dono...! Criminals wagarah toh nahi.

Masked man : Jo sabse aage bhaag raha hai, woh toh nahi hai. Lekin, iss peeche waale aadmi ka mujhe nahi pata. Hume jaan bachaani chahiye uski.

Jayesh : Toh ab kya?

Masked man : Ek upaay hai uncle. Aap waha se overtake kariye aur mein yaha left se karta hu. Hum dono hi car uski car ko agal bagal se bhed dheere dheere rok lenge. Kya bolte ho aap?

Jayesh (nods) : Alright! Fir bhi police ko khabar kar dena bhi behtar hoga. Grace!!!

Grace (nods) : Mene call laga diya hai.

Jayesh : Good!

Masked man : Speed badhaaiye uncle! Seat belts zaroor baandh lijiyega.

Crimson yaha uss aadmi ke peeche pada tha. Use nahi pata tha ki uske peeche ab ek nahi do cars aa rahi thi.

Jayesh ne jaise hi gaadi tezz kar Crimson ke bagal se lagaayi. Udhar se masked man ne bhi Crimson ke baayi orr gaadi laga di.

Masked man (in Hindi) : Uncle! Maariye left mod ke. Mein right modunga.

Kintu, Crimson ke kuch palle nahi pad raha tha. Uska system abhi upgrade hi nahi hua tha. Bhaasha keval woh French hi jaanta tha. Yaha woh mask waala aadmi Jayesh se Hindi me baat karne me laga hua tha.

Masked man (in French) : Hey! Ek sarfira buddha tumhe rokne ki koshish kar raha hai. Kya karoge tum? *smiles*

Crimson : Whattt???

Jayesh : Ruk jaa! Mein kehta hu rukk jaa abhi! Aur peecha karna chhor uss gaadi ka.

Grace : D-Dear! Uske kapde!!! Unme toh kh-khoon laga hai.

Jayesh : Ye aadmi theek nahi. Ye jaan ke peeche pada hai. Ise rokna hoga.

Grace : Be careful dear!

Crimson : Tum madarchodo!!! Chorro mujhe-!!!

Aur jo nahi hona chahiye tha wahi hua. Crimson ne apni gaadi itni zorr se daayi orr kar ke bhedi ki Jayesh ki gaadi road track se hi hatt ke baahar aa gayi.

Grace : Aaaahhhnnn!!!

Jayesh : Grace-!!!

Steering sambhaalna chaaha magar-

*Boooooooooooooooommm*

Woh jaake ped me zorr se bhid gayi. Jayesh on the spot maara jaa chuka tha toh wahi Grace head injury ke chalte wahi behosh ho chuki thi.

Aur idhar,

*Vrrrrooooooommmmm*

Masked man : Hoooo~ You did it!

Crimson ne saamne bhaag rahe aadmi ko bhi car se overtake kar daboch liya tha. Aur ant me,

"Aaaaaarggghhhhh!!!!"

Ek cheenkh uss sunsaan raaste me goonj gayi.

*Ding*

[You have gained the skill Vertigo!]

'Huh!??'

*Screech*

Uske peeche masked man ki gaadi aake ruki. Par woh utra nahi. Andar hi baitha hua tha.

Masked man (smiles) : Pata chala raaz ke baare me?

Crimson : Yes! Ek sawaal puchna hai.

Masked man : Ohh? Pucho!

Crimson : Kaun ho tum? Aur apne chehre pe ye mask kyu pehna hua hai?

Agle hi shan, uss masked man ke muh se kuch shabd nikle~

"Kyuki koi hoga...! Jo ise baad me dekhega!!"

Aur ek kapti muskaan uss mask ke peeche uske hontho par saj gayi.

Crimson : Huh?

***

Aankhein khuli, aur Veer ne khud ko sambhaalne ke liye ped ka sahaara liya. Uska badan kaanp raha tha.

"Kyuki koi hoga...! Jo ise baad me dekhega!!!"

Uske dimaag me woh shabd goonj rahe the. Poore shareer me raungte khade hue the.

Usne Ava ko dekha jo use hi tab se dekh rahi thi. Jaise sach jaan'ne ke liye uske kaan betaab the. Veer ne ek gehri saans li aur sab bata diya,

Veer : It's true. Your dad was killed by Crimson!

Ava : !!!??

Veer : B-But-!!! Koi aur bhi hai. Ek masked man! Jisne Crimson ko uksaaya tha!!

Ava : Huh!?

Veer : My purpose is done here! I'm leaving now!

Woh utha aur aage badha hi tha ki uski kalaayi Ava ne kass ke pakad li. Ek haath se ped ko pakde aur ek haath se uski kalaayi thaame Ava use rote hi dekh rahi thi.

Ava : V-Veer!? A-Are we still the same?

Veer : Not anymore! Tum apne raaste! Aur mein apne! Humare beech ab koi rishta nahi. And, don't you dare ever cross paths with me. You are on your own from now on.

Ava (tezz awaaz me) : What would you have done? Agar tum meri jagah hote...! *sniff* Toh kya kiya hota tumne? *sniff* Answer me!!!

Veer ne peeche mud use dekha. Hske rote hue mukhde ko jo aasuo se sana hua tha.

Veer : I wouldn't have killed you! Fir chaahe meri maa hi kyu na-

Aur itna bol, Veer ne apni kalaayi ek jhatke me Ava ki pakad se churra li!

Aur jaate jaate kuch kathor shabd aur rakh diye usne,

"And don't show me your face ever again!!!"

Woh island ke andar ki orr jhaadiyo me gaayab ho gaya.

Ava ki aankhein stabdh hone ke chalte phati ki phati hui thi.

Did he really mean it? Kya Veer agar uss situation me hota toh uski jaan bachaata? Even if his own mother would have been at gunpoint???

Veer uski aankhon se dekhte hi dekhte ojhal ho gaya.

Helicopter hawa me uda, Ava ke baal helicopter ki udti pankhi ke chalte zorro se hawa me lehra rahe the.

Aur woh waha se ravana hone laga. Veer ne palat ke Ava ki ek jhalak bhi nahi li. Woh bas ped se amar bel ki tarah lipti use jaate hue dekhti rahi.

'Lily!'

[Yes?]

'Upgrade Death Flag's range!'

[What?]

'Suna nahi tumne? Maximize the range.'

[Jaanti ho na upgrade ke liye kitne points lagte hai? First upgrade will take 5000 points. And second upgrade will take 10,000 points. Total 15,000 points.]

'Yes! Jaanti hu! Do it!'

[My dear Miss! Why are you so determined? Kis liye itne points ikhatta kiye the? Ab jab hum itna close hai Maisie's cure ke liye, you want to waste them on Death Flag's upgradation?]

'Lily!!!'

[Fine then!]

*Ding*

[Death Flag's range has been upgraded.]

[5000 points have been deducted.]

*Ding*

[Death Flag's range has been maxed out.]

[10,000 points have been deducted.]

[You are now left with 3000 points.]

'Good!'

[Sirf iske liye-]

Lily apni baat aage kehti ki tabhi Ava ke mann me ek notification aaya jise dekh woh wahi jamm ke reh gayi.

*Ding*





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Aaj ke liye itna hi guys.
This update consists of 8.2 k words. Late aaya hai but I think length bilkul sufficient hai. In fact more than enough hai. Kaam mere yaha ho gaya hai. Fittings ho rahi hai bas. So, hum wapas se wahi schedule pe aa jayenge apne waale. Thanks for being patient. Baaki, likes thok ke jaane ka aur revos rakhne ka. Target same hi hai apna. 150. 2 more updates to go. Uske baad arc finish.
Dhanyavaad!

 

[Werewolf]

Crimson mar to gaya lekin maza nahi aaya maza to tab aata jab pure City ke samne wo use saza deta...

Jabardast update bhai

Behtarin update bhai ladai vakey majedar thi lekin crimson to gaya or uske pas jo bhi trick thi vesi hi Veer ko mili matlav Crimson bas ek leval upar tha veer se or Eva ko bhi use jo chahiye tha vo mila lekin bhai Eva ke mamle me pighal mat jana

Fantastic superb update.. Bhai..

Jabardastttt Updateee

Romanchak aur shandar update bhai

Mindblowing update sir g

Kya bro sari mehnat veer ne ki asli chij Ava uda le gayi healing factory description se to baap of legendary card lag raha hai bro ek Supreme card bhi bol sakte hai.Ab veer Ava ko tame karle bas fir to kand asli kand hoga

Bro crimson ki vertigo,Shark taming or baki skill kaa kya hua kyuki veer ko sirf Aquatic breathing mili...

Ab ayega maza asli fight or action ab hoga sare or at least ek or villen like crimson, means ek our System user dekhne mile in Chinatown ark mai....

Baki padke maza aya......

Zabardast update bhai aakhir kar crimson ka kissaa khatam hua

Bhaii mene kha tha n ki aisa ho skta hai kya ki crimson ki skill veer ko mil skti h kya pr apne btaya n tha isliye hi n btaya tha n??
SPOILER

Bro jabardast dhamekdar update bro mana aagaya bro

Awesome update !!
Marr gaya madarch*d la la la lalala

Ye skill Veer ko mili toh sahi laga usne work bhi kiya uske liye. Par iss Ava (bitch) ko kyu mili, shayad usne assist kiya Veer ko, ya phir vo vaha par thi jaha Crimson ki mout hui and lastly shayad marne ke baad bande ki cheeze sab mei bant jati ho (system owners)
Baaki update mast tha
Aur agle update ka intezaar hai ki ab Veer family se milega koi pyaar karega, koi daantega, koi maarega. Shayad Renshu bhi dekhne ko mil jaaye

Nice

Bhai bahot dhamakedar Update tha ,, crimson ke marne se ye pata chalta ki veer agar kisi system wale bande ko marega to uski sari ability veer ke pass aa jayegi right ,,, kya yeh theory sahi hai Werewolf bhai and kuch abilities nahi aai hai veer kya pass

Gajab update

Mind blowing update

Super update bhai super mann gye just awsmm. What can i say , every fucking update is on another level just so impressive.

Mera Jane ka program cancel hui gawa kuch baten nonstop aisi hui ki ab kahin noi jana hai filhaal ishiliye araam se update dijiye mitra

Gajab Ka Shandar action seen dikhaya hai...

To Crimson ke dwara Manaya Jaane wala Crimson festival bhi system dwara Diya gaya ek task tha ... jismein use UN Sab Ki Bali Deni thi Jo Bhi is festival ko dekhta tha ya maje Leta tha logon ko marte hue Dekhkar.. jahan tak mera anuman hai....

Gajab Ki fight Hui bhai aquatic medium mein Lekin Veer ne apne Presence of Mind ka use karte hue aquatic medium ko bhi apne liye thoda bahut Hi Sahi Lekin Dushman ko harane ke liye use kar liya....

Sala batao Crimson ke pass legendary cards ki bharmar thi Uske pass teen Aise card the Jiske Dam per use harana lagbhag Namumkin tha..
Veer bhi use tabhi Hara Paya Jab use bhi bahar se madad Mili thoda bahut Hi Sahi..

Veer ko Crimson ko Maar kar teen Aise legendary cards mile Jinke dam par Crimson vijeta bana hua tha...

Lekin lagata hai use kewal uske cards hi mile uska koi skills nahi mili ..kyu ki crimson ki fighting skills bahut hi shandar aur premium quality ki thi ..jinse veer kabhi bhi par nahi pa pata..

System ka level bhi upgrade ho chuka hai dekhte hain is bar Pari ke behaviour Mein Koi change Aata Hai Ki Nahin ....kya hame dubara se wo flart karne wali Pari dekhane ko milegi ya koi naya version????

Maybe Eva ke system ne bhi use Koi mission Diya hua tha Jiske Karan Crimson ke Marne per use Bhi Ek legendary card prapt hua...

HEALING FACTOR..... kya is card ko use kar kar Ava apni Maa Ko theek kar payegi?? Ya FIR yah card sirf iske liye hi faydemand hai jo Kisi bhi Prakar ki injury Se Khud Ko hil kar payegi??

Ava ko card kyu ??
And veer ko crimson ka saari cards Milgaya bcuz he killed a player so he got all his cards as a loot, so uske hissab se veer ko ek alag card bi milna chahiye bcuz system mentioned a card as a reward in mission so it has to be seperate and what about the tamer card and the oxygen separation card wo sab kaha ?
Maybe uska utna use nahi ? Isliye nahi Diya well i think the reward veer got is not enough compared to the mission difficulty

Mind-blowing update tha bhai waah. Dil khush. Kar Diya Aapne toh. Aakhir Crimson Apne dushkarmon Ka nateeja bhog chuka Veer ke haathon. Ava bhi isme Veer ki sahaayata ki, acchi vast thi. Do Baar pass tha is update ko tha ki mujhe yakeen hue ki Crimson Ka ant hua aakhir. Dhanyawaad Bhai

Msst update bhai
Mzza aw gya
Waiting to see ava and veer convo

Nice update

Bhai jabardast update...... Crimson k pass skills, technic or power sab Veer k comparison m jyada thi....lekin Veer n use ek tarah se basic science ki madat se haraya...."Akal bari ki bhanss"...m Veer n pakka Akal ko chuna hoga or Crimson n bahut bari bhanss....maza aa gaya.....or es bar Veer ko points k sath sath Crimson ke sare skills v mil gaye...lekin ab Ava ka kya hoga....apna Hero to saf Dil ka Banda hai to uske sath kuch bura to karega nahi...uski dard bari kahani sunke usse Jane hi dega....dekhte hai agle update m.....

Amazing update bro
Veer ko teen Skill mil gayi bahot badhiya Aquatic Breathing pani me sas lene me upyogi he
Limb Substitution: body part ko regrowth ke liye istamaal me ati hai jyada se jyada teen din tak hi upyogi hai iske liye dusre kisi same age ke insaan same gender ka hona chahiye
Probability Manipulation: teen jan leva hamlo se bacha sakata hai lekin din me sirf teen bari istemaal kar sakte hai
Veer ke liye teen naye trump card mill chuke hai ab maja ayega na bidu
Veer bhai ne kya fight kisi hai bhai hila ke rakh diya

Next veer ki help ke reward ke rupme ava ko healing abilitie mil gayi sayad ava dusro ko bhi heal kar sakti he but conditions he killed samne vala blood relation me hona chahiye
Dekhte hai kya ava apani ma ko ise bacha pati help ya Or kisi ko marne ka mission legi

Finally crimson got killed brutally and also veer got new skills. Loved the update

Just super marvelous aur one of the best action packed sequence Werewolf bhai...

Fan Fucking Tastic Update
Ab dekhte hain ke Veer yeh Ava wali situation kaisey handle karta hai ???
I am really curious to see ke kia hoga agaye

Amazing update bro.... Now waiting for the reactions of family and especially Suhana...

Fantastic bro maja aa gaya yaar
Bhai mere hisab se dhokhebajo se Veer ko door rahna chahiye dhokha dhokha hota hai fir chahe use kese bhi karo

waiting waiting waiting

kahan hai update bhai abhi dhundhta hun dhyan na diya sorry

Bahut hi shaandar update diya hai Werewolf bhai....
Nice and awesome update....

jabardast update bro.....

Ok, तो finally crimson मारा गया और सच कहूं तो अब जाके थोड़ा अच्छा लगा की आगे crimson नही आयेगा, काफी irritat कर दिया था उसने, al though एक बेहतरीन arc देके गया है अपने नाम पर। और उस से भी अच्छी बात जिस शौक से वो दूसरो को मारता था ठीक वैसे ही वो भी मारा गया।

शायद system holding host के मरने के बार जिसने भी host को मारा है उसको opponent की सारी power या फिर precious card's transfer हो जाती है, जैसे वीर और ava को crimson को मिला है just like pubg, opponent को मार कर उसकी चीज़ लूट लो, लेकिन यह लूटने की नौबत नहीं पड़ी। वीर को केवल वो ही चीज मिली है जो crimson ने उसके against use किया था तो शायद जो जो चीज़ opponent fight में use करेगा बस वही transfer होगा ।

क्या ava को भी crimson को मारने का task मिला था, अगर नहीं तो फिर उसे वो card reward के रूप में क्यों मिला और अगर उसे target मिला था तो उसका task तो अधूरा ही रह गया क्योंकि crimson को वीर ने मारा or maybe बस वीर की help का task मिला था शायद

खैर ava ने वीर की help की थोड़ा guilt कम हुआ होगा, and wolfie जो चाहते थे उसकी image को clean करना वो भी शुरू हो गया, और सच कहूं तो अब मैंने उसे माफ कर दिया। जब मालूम है की वो story में continue बनी रहेगी तो जबरदस्ती का hate करके story का मजा कम करनें का कोई फायदा नही है।
Al though my musculin urge that fuck this bitch so hard that her screams can be heard throughout the peris city

उम्मीद है की अगले अपडेट में दिव्या के साथ एक conversation देखने को मिलेगा, उसका वीर के लिए care करना एक अलग ही feeling देता होगा उसे, vegas में इतने साल रहते जो कभी बेवफा नही उसे अपना character loose करने के लिए को मजबूर कर दे अपने आपने खास तो होगा ही।
वैसे curiosity तो इस बात की भी की सुहाना के साथ क्या हुआ, क्या वो होश में आई है या depression में चली गई, या फिर कुछ और, क्योंकि अभी भी वो गोलीकांड से ठीक नही हुई ऐसे में mental problem और दिक्कत create करेंगी उसे

Crimsom almost हर चीज में वीर से अच्छा था, ज्यादा better cards ज्यादा better stats और ज्यादा better experience लेकिन 2 चीज जो उसे ले डूबी,

पहला उसकी खुद की गलती, की उसने वीर को understimate किया, वो लगभग मान ही लिया था की वीर के लिए वो invincible हैं और यहीं वो मात खा गया


और दूसरा लड़ने के लिए जो जिगरा चाहिए होता है वो वीर में ज्यादा हैं। I mean system और उसके cards के साथ तो कोई भी लड़ लेगा, लेकिन ऐसी स्थिति में जहा system भी आपकी कोई मदद ना कर पाए उस स्थिति में लड़ने की जो हिम्मत वीर दिखाता है जिस शांत दिमाग के साथ वो सोचता है वो दूसरे system के host में नही दिखता (वो अपने ही खिलाफ limbo use करना,literally mind-blowing था)

और ये obvious भी है मतलब कुछ तो difference होगा ही वीर और बाकी के सारे लोगो में afterall he is the lead character of this story

आज वीर ने दिखाया की जीतने के लिए उसे cards की जरूरत नहीं है Beowulf’s Blessings के बिना भी वो जीत सकता है उसका most powerful card,अगर आज Beowulf’s Blessings on रहता तो crimson शायद इससे भी बुरी मौत मरता

खैर सारे के सारे मर गया बस sweety जिंदा बच निकली अब इसके तो 2 ही reason होंगे, पहला या तो वो जाकर किसी नए antagonist से मिल जायेगी और या तो आगे उसके लिए वीर
"स्वीटी स्वीटी स्वीटी, तेरा प्यार चाहीद" गाएगा और अपने हरम में शामिल कर लेगा, लेकिन क्या crimson आज सबके साथ स्वीटी को निपटा दिया होता? ये राज भी crimson के साथ चला गया।


तो system भी upgrade हो गया, और 10,000 पॉइंट्स भी मिल गए, सच कहूं तो अब तक कहानी में जितनी भी परी आई है उसके सबसे अच्छी मुझे ये लगी, कई बार उसने इतनी बेहतरीन intelligence दिखाई जिससे वीर को बहुत फायदा हुआ, जैसे वो crimson के attack के just पहले Beowulf’s Blessings के जगह ribs cage को on करना ताकि उसके हड्डियों को टूटने से बचा सके,

System बहुत से लोगो के पास है लेकिन शायद ये परी ही है जिसके वजह से वीर इतना खास है, शायद परी दूसरे system के मुकाबले अपने host के लिए ज्यादा dedicated हैं, और शायद यही कारण भी है mr.x वीर को एक बड़े threat के रूप में देख रहा है।

Crimson के system के साथ क्या हुआ क्या इसका राज खुलेगा?

Ava की कहानी में वापसी शायद grace martin के ठीक होने के बाद होगी, वही से ये चीज़ clear होगी की जयेश के साथ क्या हुआ था और शायद mr.x से जुड़ा राज भी शायद जयेश के throug पता चले।

यहां से जाने पर पहले तो वीर को अपनी family को जवाब देना होगा, फिर सुहाना को और जब वापस जायेगा तो finally फिर renshu का debt pay करने जायेगा तो क्या excuses देगा। वीर ये mission पूरा कर पाया तो एक बड़ा reason renshu था। उम्मीद है की आगे renshu और वीर की अच्छी जमेगी

एक खुशी ये भी है की जल्दी ही kaira वाला episode भी देखने के लिए मिलेगा, पर मेरा इंतजार 2 चीज़ों के लिए है पहला सुहाना और वीर को intimate होते देखना है और दूसरा वीर को kaira के लिए अपना love confession करते देखना है। I mean कहानी में कोई लड़की तो होनी चाहिए जिसके ऊपर वीर भी crush खाए, अब सारी ही लड़कियां खुद ही वीर को propose करेंगी या crush रखेंगी तो मजा थोड़ा कम हो जायेगा।

So Crimson के खत्म होने के साथ ही ये arc भी almost खत्म ही हो गया है, अपडेट late होने के वजह से कुछ readers impatience हो जाते है i hope आप उन्हे mind नहीं करते होंगे, क्योंकि 2–3 से अपडेट का wait करते है और जब नही आता तो obviously निराशा में लिख देते होंगे बाकी आप अपना time लेके ही अपडेट दो क्योंकि हर आदमी की personal life होती है।

Thanks for the update, एक उम्दा अपडेट
Waiting for next update

vary nice update werewolf bhai! Akhir kar crimson ka the end ho gaya! Jate jate crimson ko jhatka bhi laga 10000pts deduct ho gaye! Definitely Ava ki help ki wajah se veer crimson ko hara paya but kuch pts bhai hai
1. Crimson ke marne pas uske system ka kya hua?
2. Crimson ki kuch skills card veer ko mili but ava ko healing legendary card matlab system help karne walo par bhi meharbaani karta hai
3. Pari ka status bhi change hoga lagta hai kuki crimson ko uska system he pooch tah tha matlb pari abb veer se rai legi, suggestion dena band ya kuch aur yeh aage clear hoga
4. Chinatown arc main jo mr X uska system toh ek aale darze ka hoga(abhi se jyada sochna nahi )
vary good update diya aapne, thoda late update tha but aap busy bhi the but this update abb tak ka dhadu update tha, hope next update will come soon!

Wah maja aaya gajab update

Nice update

Excellent update bro..kya fighting seen hai maza agaya ...what a brilliant thinking power Mind blowing

I hope ki next update me crimson ki past story btayi jayegi.. Ki kese use systm mila tha

Superbly written....
Action scene koi Hollywood movie se kam nehi tha....
Yeh update likhne ke bohot sari cheezon research karna pada hoga, jo yeh update mein saf dikhayi de raha hai....
Wohi wala part bohot khas tha jahan par Veer ne crimson ki skill (water se oxygen separate) ko uski majboori mein tabdeel kar diya ....
Woh bohot bohot kaabile tareef tha..
Last mein Veer ko sab skill mil gaye jo skill Crimson ke pass tha ...
Mujhe lag raha hai ki aesa iss liye hua kyun ki Veer ko Crimson ka death ka mission mila tha.....
Agar ek insan ke pass system ho , aur dusre insan jiske pass bhi system ho usse marne mission milta ho , agar mission mein jis bhi system ki jeet hoti hogi, usse mout wale ki insan legendary skill mil raha hoga....
Yeh wajah thi ki Crimson ne mission milne tak veer ko marne ka intezar kiya, Agar Crimson apne maqsad par successful hota toh, Veer ki legendary skill Crimson ko mila hota.....
You are one of the best writer....
Thanks a lot bhai....

Nice

Good work bro rated r appreciates u

Aree baba mne padh lia tha...
online ni aayi thi. Normally site open ki nd read kr lia tha. Mere ghar me guests aye hue h... So unke saamne time ni milta... Cousins nd all... Aap to jante hi hoge busy hona kise kehte h aap se better aur kon samjhega...

But but but... First and foremost... Congratulations for winning the story contest sir.

party to bnti h

Update 146 pe review ni dia tha shyd...
Nd ye 147 now... Dono ka ek sath hi de rhi hu...

Ab aur kitni tareef karu sir? Main seriously thak gyi hu tareef karte karte

Update 146 shows that Veer isn't the former Veer anymore. Personally I think veer har aspect me crimson se strong tha. Crimson just us time strong tha. Uske pas bs strength nd all veer se zyada thi. Just a bit...

Isliye veer struggle kia... But personally according to me veer always had the upper hand. Like in Mahabharata... Where Kauravas had more army in numbers. Their army was huge. But they didn't have lord Krishna with them. And that's why they lost.

similarly here Veer had Pari and his wits which Crimson always lacked. And that's why he lost too. Also not having a good heart is a drawback too.

Update 147.

Who the hell does that sir? Seriously? Chemistry? Compounds? Molecular breakdown? Chain reaction? Formation of gases?

Mne ye baat ushant island Wale episode me bhi kahi thi... That there's no one else who utilizes the story environment like you.

Kisne socha tha ki wo sinking cruise bhi utilize kia jayega? I did not see that coming...

Diesel, engines, diesel ka chemical formula. Then breakdown. Formation of carbon monoxide. Jaise hi mne ye gas ka naam padha...

i knew crimson was done... Nd the best thing

Veer! Oh my god! Veer! Pari said it right. He's a fucking genius. He used crimson's aquatic breathing for his own advantage.

I swear i could hear veer saying 'bahut saas le rha h na andar pani ke. Bahut maja aa rha h na. Le ab ye le.'

the sharks. We got to know why crimson preferred the name crimson. Why he kept sharks. He had a shark Taming skill.

and probability manipulation. You again connected it with the last fights. The reason why Crimson couldn't dodge Veer's blade in ushant. my godddd!! Proper goosebumps.

His words echoing in his mind...

'Tay kr lena ki ye meri body h.. otherwise buri maut dunga.'

Everthing was phenomenal. It's beyond our thinking now. Who the hell thinks like that?

see this is why I read this story. Because writer sahab hi itne anokhe h aapka processor ki clock speed normal h hi nhi... Boosted se bhi boosted h wo ...

My god! Veer! He'sy favourite protagonist of all time. Period. There... I said it...

Nd Suhana... I want to see 3 meetings as soon as possible.

Veer nd suhana.
Veer nd Tej
Veer nd arohi.

In teeno meetings ka wait h... Plz jald se jald show kijiyega... This whole crimson arc. My god! What a fucking fabulous ride it was. Absolutely phenomenal...

waiting for the new new update sir. Keep writing.

Unbelievably outstanding nd thrilling marvelously amazing update

Mast update bhai ji

Wow kya update diya veer ne crimeson ko mar diya uske pahle uska misdon bhi fail kiya aur usko gussa dillaya veer ki madad ava ne ki janha crimson ke sabhi skill veer ko prapt hui vanhi ava ko sabse important skill healing factor prapt hui ab dekhte hai kya hota hai agle kuch updates me

bahut hi exciting update hai bhai maja aa gaya. veer ko 2 card mil gaye aur i think ki aquatic breathing ek skill hai jo use mili ava also get a card may be uske system ne bhi uski mission diya ho veer ko help kerne ke liye jis wajah se usko ye card mila. lets see aage kya hota hai

Wonderfully written update


Great work bro

fantastic update bro

ab to hme lga rha hai ki veer ava ko b nipta de aur uski skill b aa jaye veer k pss lekin....
ak side se dekha jaaye to ava innocent b hai kyuki crimson ne usse forcefully work karaya tha isliye shyd veer use n maare and abhi to usne ava lo litaya bhi n h....

Zabardast update

Bhaii y HEALING FACTOR kon sa card hai??

Block blaster update…eagerly awaiting next…

Mast update h bhai...

nice1

Wo wo wo
Finally Crimson is dead
Veer ko legendary card mile hey
Awesome

Superb update bro...
Waiting for next

Hmm Aakhir kaar crimson ka Gaand mara hi gya....

Oh sorry uske to tukde ho gye naa ek sark nai kiya or ek apne hero nai koi baat nahi mai line badal deta hu

Hmm Aakhir kaar crimson ki gaandiya fhaad gaand marai gawa.....

Ab dekhna hai Ava ki gaand veer kese marta hai..?

Imagine Wo scenes kesa hoga jab ek system dusre system se bhidega hm logo nai to "crimson system vs veer system" ki ladai dekh liya hai

Ab "Ava system vs veer system" ki chudai dekhna baaki hai ab dekhte hai hamare Lekhak babu Silks use chudai karwaate hai yaa nahi....

Thok di







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Super update

nice butifull update / best broo
watting next update

Ekdum zakkas.... Update, chapter of Crimson is end, now what will of AWA? Veer ne Crimson era ko samapt karke 10000 points ke sath bahut hi achchhe cards bhi kama liye he, jis se vo aur adhik shaktishali ho jayega.

having fever, probably heatstroke. will give detail comments later.

Nice update

Thrilling update, Lagta hay Crimson k merny k baad os ki skills Veer k pass aany lagi. Good update

Waah guruji tussi toh cha gye maza aa gya padkar fantastic Fabulous mazedaar lajawab excellent thadakedaar awesome mind-blowing Jo Bach gya woh sab kuch sir shabd hi kam par jayenge tarif karte hue....

Awesome narration warewolf Bhai. The story is getting Interesting day by day. I will wait for a week for your next . Thank you for your story and time. It's a nice experience of thrill .

Chud gyi na maa bhen k laude crimson ki...bhot shaana bn ra tha rndii..bc fas gya tha bura but whi h na k gaand fate to fate lekin nawabi na ghate.. Ab lele mza... Likin ye kya uski sbse bdi skills to veer ke paas aa gyi.. Or ava ko b ek nyi skill mili.. Well dekhte h next update me kya hota h or sb thoda veer ki family pe thoda nazar dalna.. Waiting for the next update

Supper fantastic update janab

Jabardasttt Updateee

Toh aakhirkar iss Crimson ka anth hua aur saath hi Crimson Arc ka bhi. Veer ne bilkul usi tarah maara Crimson ko jaise bheem ne Jarasandh ko maara tha Mahabharat mein.
Aur idher Crimson ko maarne ke Veer ko bahot saari nayi abilities mil gayi hai jo Crimson ke paas bhi thi. Yaani Veer ab ek tarah powers ke mukable mein Crimson ki tarah ban gaya hai.
Idher Ava ne Crimson ko goli maarke aur Veer ko bacha ke tarah se apna prayschit kiya hai. Aur ab yeh Veer ke upar hai ke woh uski majburi samaj ke usse maaf karta hai yaa phir naraz hi rehta hai.


Par mera ek sawaal hai. Jaise Veer ka system Veer ko har chiz ke warn kar raha tha usse samjha raha tha waise hi Crimson ka system usse warn kyo nhi kar raha tha usse samjha kyo nhi raha thaa.

Aur ab jab Crimson marr gaya hai toh uske andar jo System thaa uska kyaa hogaa. Mujhe aise kyo lag raha hai Crimson ka system kisi aise insan ke andar jaayega jo Veer ka kattar dushman hai. Jaise Pranjal aur uska baap, Nidhi ka pati, yaa phir woh Niharika yaa phir koi aisa jisse main miss kar de raha hu.

Par mujhe aisi feeling aarahi hai ke woh System Veer ke kisi apne ke paas hi jaayega. Phir chahe woh dushman ho yaa phir pyaar karne wala.

Veer pehle se bahot smart or samajdar ho gaya hai uska mind bhi bahot tej chalne laga jiske chalte usne pani ko hi jhehrila bana diya dimang ka use karke..

Crimson ki mout ho gay or Ava ne help bhi kar di last me...

Crimson ke paas jo cards the skills ke woh ab veer ko bhi mil gaye or ek skill ava ko bhi mil gay. .. iss mission se veer ko bahot kuch mila hai system ka level bhi par ho gaya hai..

Superb update bhai..

Bhai ji shandar or romanchak update bahut badia God bless you

Bohot hi shandar update bhai.... Samundar mein fight woh v kya kehne... Or camical reaction ka jo byan kiya hai... Har koi kr nhi skta soch nhi skta.... crimson ki mait byanak or khaufnak.... Ik dafa lga werewolf off hone ke baad shayed crimson aaj bi bach jaye lekin sahi time pe Ava ki help or limbo ka istemal crimson ko nihatha kr gya ...Abb Ava ke sath kuch Romantic ho jaye.........

NICE UPDATE BHAI THANKS ❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤

Wonderful update Bhai

Werewolf Ava ko bistar par kab leta raha veer

Nice and beautiful update

Finally veer ne crimson ko maar dala h ye seen bilkul aatish ke jesa hi h jisme veer ne aatish ko usi ke paaltu janvar se marvaya tha usi tarah crimson ko bhi usi ke paltu janvar Jo sark tha bhale hi vo real wala pet nhi tha lekin shark ko control karke pet ki tarah tret krata tha crimson.

Ab aage pata lagega ki kon deaman bankar samne aata h
Next update ka intjar h.

Behtreen update
Par ava ko kyo mila card
Usne to kuch kiya bhi nhi balki usne to dhoka diya tha esi ladki ko to .................khud hi samjh jaooo

Me samjh gya ye chal kya rha he . ye game us ek system dhari ka he jo baki systam dhari ko nishana bna kar marva rha he or unke card eksath upne under lene ke liye ji last me system vala bche ga use vo systm vala mar kar sare card rkh lega or vo ban jaye ga world ka power full man...........

Omg bhayankar update tha bhaaya maza agya,
To finally crimson ka end hogya he but arc ka end abhi nhi hua he to kuch suspense to abhi bacha hoga jo aane wale 1 2 update me sare readers ke hosh ura dega aisa mujhe lagta he kyu ke aap ka har update mind-blowing hota he,
Veer aur crimson ki fighting kafi interesting thi veer ne apne intelligence ka bharpur istamal kiya he,
Pari ka veer ko puri situation ko foran samjhna aur situation ko deal karne ka tareqa batana buhat amazing tha,
Bro 1 baat ki tareef to banti he aap ki aap ne jo scientific baaton ko buhat details me likha he wo waqai buhat amazing tha,
Veer ka cruise ke diesel aur engine jo fight me use karna tha wo part bhi buhat zabardast tha,
Aur veer ne jo crimson ko shark ka shikar banaya aur apna wada pura kiya waqai crimson ko aisi maut di veer ne jo kisi ko nhi mili hogi jin shark ko crimson apne entertainment ke liye use karta tha usi shark ka shikar ban gaya ye scene dekh ke mujhe aatish ki yaad agai us ne bhi magarmach pala hua tha apne entertainment ke liye aur end me veer ne aatish ko usi magarmach ka shikar bana diya tha,
Ava ne veer ki jeet me buhat important role play kiya he agar wo crimson pe goli chala ke use distract nhi karti to veer us pe limbo apply nhi kar pata to mujhe personally ava ka veer ki help karna kafi acha laga aab dekhte he ke ava kese veer ke dil me apni nafrat khatam karti he,
Crimson ke sath sath crimson ke sare bure kaam bhi veer ne khatam kar diye,
Veer ko crimson ko marne ka mission complete karne pe 10000 points to mile hi us ke sath sath jo use skills mili he wo to buhat amazing he aur buhat useful bhi,
Bro agar me galat nhi hu to veer ko jo skills mili he wo crimson ki skills he to kiya hum ye samjhe ke agar 1 system owner dusre system owner ko marta he to us ki skills marne wale system owner ko milti he?
Aab pari bhi level us hogai he to definitely hume pari ki 1 aur personality dekhne ko mile gi,
Aur ava ko jo skill mili he wo bhi koi legendary skill lag rahi he us ke bare me bhi details aage batana bro,
Baqi aur kiya hi kahe jese jese story aage barhti jaarhi he story aur bhi amazing aur mysterious hoti jarhi he aur maza bhi utna hi aarha he aab story parhne me,
Keep it up bro
Lot's of love and respect

Crimson ka to game ho gaya Bhai mja aa gya

bahut badhiya update hai,,,,,,,,crinson fastivel ka owner ka death ho geya sath me jahaj par majud log vhi,,,,,,,,,,,,,ab aage kya arch aarahe hai dekhte haiiiii.
waiting for next updat

Werewolf
मित्र बहुत ही शानदार मजा आ गया है, अद्भुत..
क्रीमसन तो पति गयो....

भिड़ंत के दृश्य को सजीवता के साथ मेहसूस कर पढने मे मजा आ गया है...
अंततः ऐवा ने वीर की सहायता कर दिया है.
अगले अंक की प्रतीकात्मक प्रतीक्षा में

Veer is smart. Sirf system hone se kuchh nahi hota. Stress situation me calculated decision lena bhi jaruri hai. Veer ne wahi kiya.

Werewolf भाई
आपकी लिखी यह कहानी सच कहूँ तो थ्रिलर थ्रेड में होनी चाहिए थी l हर घटनाक्रम पर आपने बड़ी बारीकी से ध्यान दिया है l
स्पाइडर मैन फिल्म की एक वाक्य है
ग्रेट पावर ग्रेट रिस्पंसीबिलीटी
क्रीमसन के पास अद्भुत शक्तियाँ थी पर उसने अपने अंदर की पौसाचीक मनोवृति को पुरा करने के लिए उपयोग किया l जैसा कि होता है भला कीजे भला होगा बुरा कीजे बुरा होगा वही हुआ l
सब कुछ था इन तीन अंकों में
आभा की विवशता
वीर की आक्रमकता
सिस्टम की आत्मीयता
भाग्य ने आभा को मौका दिया अपनी भूल को सुधारने के लिए पर वीर अभी भी उससे नाराज है
अंत में वीर की उपलब्धियां वह सारे शक्तियाँ जिसके दम पर क्रीमसन क्रूरता व बीभत्सता भरी हुई थी l
एक पाठक को क्या चाहिए सत्य का असत्य पर विजय
नायक का खलनायक पर जीत
वीर ने जो वादा खुद से व क्रीमसन से किया था उतना ही बीभत्स मौत दी क्रीमसन को उसकी सल्तनत को पूर्णतः समाप्त कर के
पर अब एक स्वाभाविक प्रश्न उठ रहा है पेरिस में जितना बड़ा कांड हुआ है, आम जनता जो वीर पर खार खाए हुए हैं, उनकी भावनाओं को वीर कैसे शांत कर पाएगा
क्यूंकि सारे सबूत तो समाप्त हो गए हाऊस ऑफ किलर की समाप्ति की कहानी अब दुनिया के सामने कैसे आएगी
वीर की बेगुनाही सबके सामने कैसे आएगी
क्या आभा वीर की बेगुनाही की कहानी सबके सामने लाएगी
आभा के प्रति वीर का व्यवहार कैसा रहेगा
सुहाना जब वीर से मिलेगी उसकी हालत कैसी रहेगी
ऐसी सैकड़ों प्रश्न अब मन में अंकुरित हो रहे हैं
कोई संदेह नहीं यह कहानी इस थ्रेड की सबसे ज्यादा लोकप्रिय, पढ़े जाने वाली और सबसे ज्यादा समीक्षा एवं विश्लेषण पाने वालीं कहानी है l
सारे पाठकों में हम भी एक अदने से पाठक हैं
आपके लेखन के कायल हैं
आशा है कि वीर आभा को समझेगा माफ करना ना करना अलग विषय है
अंत में Werewolf भाई एक लाजवाब प्रस्तुति रही है

Next update please

माशाल्लाह बेह्तरीन नजरे अंदाज में पेश किया है

Lajabab kahani please update

Awesome bhai...
Lagta hai crimson ne bhi dusre system holders ko marke hi itna sara abilities collect kiya tha...

Awesome bhai...
Lagta hai crimson ne bhi dusre system holders ko marke hi itna sara abilities collect kiya tha...

क्रिम्पसन की शक्तियां पौराणिक कथाओं के असुर सम्राट के शक्तियों की याद दिलाता है। ऐसा लगता था जैसे यह असुर युद्ध मे कभी परास्त हो ही नही सकते , उनकी मृत्यु हो ही नही सकती। लेकिन कुदरत का नियम ही है कि कोई कितना भी शक्तीशली हो जाए , कितना भी अमरत्व का वरदान प्राप्त कर ले , अन्ततः उन्हे मिट्टी मे ही मिल जाना है।

जैसा अपेक्षित था बिल्कुल वैसा ही इस अपडेट मे देखने को मिला। क्रिम्पसन आखिरकार मारा ही गया।
वैसे इम्पोरटेंट यह नही था कि क्रिम्पसन मारा गया , इम्पोरटेंट यह था कि वो कैसे मारा गया। साइंस थ्योरी का इस्तेमाल किया वीर ने । अपनी पुरी शारीरिक शक्ति लगा दी थी उसने। इसके साथ ' परी ' ने भी वह भुमिका निभाई जो कुरूक्षेत्र के मैदान मे प्रभु कृष्ण ने निभाई थी।
इसके अलावा ' एवा ' ने भी क्रिम्पसन पर गोली चलाकर एक तरह से वीर का कार्य आसान कर दिया था।

एक बार फिर से क्रिम्पसन और वीर के इस फाइटिंग सीन्स को आपने अपने जादुई लेखनी से अद्भुत बना दिया।
सच कहा जाए तो क्रिम्पसन अध्याय , पुरा का पुरा , रोंगटे खड़े कर देने वाला अध्याय था। आउटस्टैंडिंग वोल्फी भाई।

क्रिम्पसन के मृत्यु के साथ साथ उन सभी पैसेंजर की भी मौत हो गई जो विकृत मानसिकता के शिकार थे। लेकिन यह भी समझ आया कि इन सभी पैसेंजर की मौत पहले से ही तय थी। सिर्फ एक पैसेंजर स्वीटी को छोड़कर जो वहां से बच निकलने मे कामयाब हुई। शायद इस लड़की को आगे चलकर फिर से हम देखें !
क्रिम्पसन का मौत वास्तव मे बेहद खौफनाक और वीभत्स था। जिस जानवरों को अपने इशारे पर नचाते रहता था , उसी जानवर के जबड़े के भीतर उसकी समाधि बनी।

क्रिम्पसन के मौत के बाद उसकी अविश्वसनीय शक्तियां वीर मे समाहित हो गई। यह वीर को और भी अधिक सक्षम और ताकतवर बनाएगा। इसके साथ ' एवा ' ने भी वो हासिल कर लिया जिसकी उसे अत्यंत ही आवश्यकता थी। शायद हीलिंग स्किल के माध्यम से वो अपनी मां को पुरी तरह स्वस्थ कर सके !

बहुत ही खूबसूरत अपडेट वेयरवोल्फ भाई। आउटस्टैंडिंग एंड जगमग जगमग अपडेट।

Ding such a horrible death system ne crimson ke legendry cards veer ko gift diyeab dekhna hai Ava ka kya karega veer nice combustion update werewolf bhai

Werewolf Ava ka kya scene hai

Awesome update

Ava ko bhi skill mil gayi jo skill crimson ki thi wo sab mil gayi ava ko kyon mili

Great one
the end of crimson

Waiting for next update bhai

Waiting for your next update... Bouth din app ka story padh Raha hu parke maja aaya bouth comments karne k liye sirf new account banaya sirf app k liye dost.. keep it up..

Nice

i think dimag is sansaar me sabse bada wepon hai. i hope ki past view me veer ko crimson ke stats dekhne ko mil jayein because i want to see the intelligence of crimson, ki wo veer se jyada hai ya nahin kyunki crimson ki strength definitely veer se jyada thi per kahte hain jiske paas dimag ho wo kuch bhi ker sakta hai aur wo hi hua crimson ko apni aquatic skill per pura bharosa tha per veer ne ussi ko apna hathiyaar bana liya. ab shayad ava aur veer ki team ban jaye kyunki next arc jo bhi aayeinge usme jo opposite me hoga wo aur jyada strong enemy hoga aur veer ko bhi madad ki jaroorat hogi. bas ek baat aur clear ho jaye jisko jaane ka bahut mann hai about the system ki veer se pahle pari kiske paas thi kyunki renshu ne kaha tha 30 log the jo ab 18 ho gaye hain per veer ko to baad me mila system to wo un 30 me nahin tha to mere khayal se veer se pahle pari kisi aur ke pass rahi hogi aur shyad uske marne ke baad wo veer ke paas aayi per veer hi kyun ye bhi raj aage pata chal hi jayega to abhi kafi kuch bacha hua hai jo kafi interesting hai.

Weating too next update

Waiting for next update bhai

Bhai aj update ka koi chance hai kya..

यहां रोल ही चेंज किया ava ने अपना, इर उसका फायदा भी उठा लिया कार्ड के रूप में नही शक्ति जो मिल गयी।

हीरो ने बहुत अच्छा दिमाक यूज किया।

साथ ही साथ, बहुत से चांस बने फाइट में दोनों ओर ही,

स्वीटी फुर्ररर हो गयी।

ओर इन दोनों के बीच की शांति क्या गुल खिलाएगी ये भी देखना होगा।
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Superr update bro finally crimson got what he deserved waiting for next update

Nice one.

W8ing for next update

Anghuthi kiya bhai puri ki puri Rolls Royce gift kar di us ne ab aage kiya kiya gift kare gi pata nhi.

Queen to rahe gi but jesa hum ne pehle dekha he ke kaera veer ke sath bilkul alag ban jati he jb us me emotions bhi nhi the tb bhi wo veer ke sath alag feel karti thi wo alag baat he ke use us feeling ke bare me pata nhi hota tha ke ye kiya he but wo apne nature se alag behave karti thi us ke sath aur aage jb us me emotions ajye ge to kiya hoga us ka besabri se intezar he

waiting for update bro

bhai next update kal aayega ya parso ???

Wait for next update

Wait for next update werewolf Bhai

Another excellent update. Jo ladayi Paris ki alleys se shuru huyi, Ushant Island me aage badhi, ant me samunder me jaker khatam huyi. Jahan per pehli do me Veer thoda kamzor dikha tha, is baar weh Crimson per havi ho gaya tha. 'AGAR AAJ MEIN MARTA HU, TOH MERI LAASH KO DEKH KE SUNISHCHIT KAR LENA KI WOH MERI HI LAASH HAI…!' kahe gaye bol Veer ke mann ki sthiti ko sahi darshate hain.
Fighing to bahut padhi hain, per unme ye nayi tactics, naye ideas, shark tamer, pani me saans lena, aur phir uska counter, diesel aur petrol se bani CO, puri chemistry formule ke saath, werewolf bhai, maan gaye aapki creativity ko aur isme kafi research bhi karni padi hogi. Hats off to you. Pari ne sahi kaha 'you are a genius.'
Ab tak ke villians me Crimson subse jyada cruel tha, cruise ke saare mehmano ki bali chadhane ja raha tha, not that they do not deserve it, per phir bhi, keval paison ke liye. Accha hua, khud hi shark ki bhent chadh gaya. Shark ki yeh wali picture badi bhayanak thi.
Ab apna hero bahut strong ho gaya hai, 3 cards, aage ke arcs me kaam ayenge.
Ab kuch relaxing, romantic, ho jaye. Ava has shone her allegiance with Veer, dekhte hain ki Veer kab use maaf katega. Ab jab weh Suhana ke pass jayega, tab ka scene dekhne kabil hoga. Aur jab apni family se milega, tab maza aa jayega. Antar bas itna hai, family ko pata hai ki weh jinda hai jabki Suhana ko nahi.
Kaera, ab to apne cocoon se bahar aa jao. Tumhari company bhi doob rahi hai, and after Suhana, she was the one who was ready to help Veer, in a professional way.
Mere khyal se Sonia bhi kafi sideline me rahi hai, ab usko bhi center stage per aana chahiye.

Update kab tak aayga

Ava ki shadi Kara do veer se

Beautiful update bhai

I know he takes week to get update perhapes more than that....even though he Post verry professionally...

Fabulous Bhai, action scene description is unique in this forum,I felt like enjoying a fantastic action flim.Akhir Crimson ki sare rang fika pad hi gaya.

So let me guess when veer kills a player he can get the cards as a reward bcuz they are like an dropped items in a game, but as for skills it has to learned, skills can't be equipped as the cards so veer can't get skills. am i right ?? Maybe no i guess agar ye theory sahi hetho veer ko aquatic breathing skill nahi milna chahiye par Mila so iska matlab Mera theory aadha wrong or poora galat hai ?
And Ava ko card Mila par kyu ?
Usko mission Mila ? Veer ko help karne ki ? Agar mission Mila tho wo shock nahi hogi par wo shocked thi iska matlab usko mission nahi aaya so veer ka system gave a unexpected reward bcuz another player helped veer complete the mission. Like splitting reward according to their accomplishments in mission completing. Which one is it ? Iam confused Bhai and ek doubt aaya bhai skill sharing Aisa koi card hai ? Like player uske skills ko share kar sakta he for limited time period? Aisa kuch hai system ke paas
Eagerly waiting for your next update
Kab aayega next update?

Bhai,Slogan ka death scene dobara kiu? Or,Ye naya ladki aur phone pe unknown admi kaun hei?

Mast story hai sir ji

Beautiful update nice

Bhai ab me Jan gaya,phone pe admi aur woh Ladki kaun tha,Veer ko dhoke se Paris bulwaya.Lekin Veer ki aisa ending itni achhi story ke sath bahut nainsafi hogi.So,Bhai I am waiting for a miracle.

Waiting for next update

Ava has proved,90% ladki selfish hoti hei.

Bhai badiya update magar ek sawal tha
Story ki ending votes pe depend
Hy ya kuch aur socha hyy hatt kar

Bhai aj update ayega kya

Waiting for the update....

Nice update bhaii bhit Awla Maza Aya gya par Kar ab new update Ka intazar ha

Bhai wo Banda jisne veer ko gun di usme me bhi 3 hi bullet thi or crimson bhi 3 hi manipulation wali skill mili kya jo gun dene wala Banda tha use ye baat pta thi ?

bhai carimson k past dikhay ga hamain?

Bhai update kabtak ayega

waise ek baat hai pari ki jo different personality hain wo veer ki life me jo ladies hain unse match kerti hain shant aur gambhir arohi ki tarah badmaash kavya ki tarah bahut jyada caring nidhi ki tarah kafi ineteresting hain pari ki ye different roop. lets see next personality kaisi hai maja aayega

Bhai kam se kam week ke 2 se 3 update to do yr

sandar update

Bhai update

Update 148 please

Han to bhai lao update milega kya

Waiting for update

Das saal pehle wahi bakchodiyon ke chakkar mein chemistry mein dhyaan nahi diya tha aur tab se aaj tak yahi soch raha hu ki jab mera bacha ya bhanja bhatija school jayega to usse padhate time saare doubt clear karunga. Aise mein mujhe koi bhi agar halki si bhi chemistry ki jhalak dikhata hai na to i get impressed, even if it is basic, but brother your research and knowledge about various subjects that you use in your stories is really admirable. Bahot badiya kaam karta hai tum wolfie bhai

bhai next update kab aayega ???

Editing........

y word kb likh k aayega bhaii...?​

Feeling lucky bro. ,,

Is series ka sabse dhasu and important update thaa yaani ke kai sarey system hai aur crimson ki halat unknown ke samney aisi ho thee jaisi veer ki crimson ke aage ab veer in sab se kaisay nikalta hai aur system ki sacchai kaisy samne aayi hai.
In sab se badi baat system ka RAAZ khul pata hai ki nahi shayad asli villan bhi is story ka mil gaya hai unknown caller.

To ab is arc me veer ke family members bhi jud rahey hai aur is arc ka end shayad veer ke liye nayi opportunities khol de.

Jabardast mind blowing

Kamal Dhamal Chappar phad zabardast arc tha yah story ka aur isne Puri story ki tone set kar di hain. Maza aa gaya Boss qasam se. Ab review per aatey hai.
Aakhir kaar sabit ho gaya ki power hi sab cheez nahi hoti warna crimson kabhi nahi harta coz woh power ka khazana thaa. Yaha jeet hui veer ki kyuki
woh sachai ke liye aur doosro ke bhaley ki ladta thaa tabhi usay renushah jaisa helper mila. Aur yahi bhalai ne Ava ko bhi jhinjhod diya aur aakhir me woh uski madadgar sabit Hui.
Sath me uske pass ek pariwar aur uska pyaar thaa jo ki crimson ko lack kar raha thaa.Log kahtey hai pariwar kamzori hota hai jabki woh ek taqat Banta hai jiske liye insaan kuch bhi kar guzarta hai.
Aakhir apne dar pe qabu pana jo ki veer ne kiya jab pehli baar Mila to andar se dar Gaya isiliye pehli fight me buri tarah pita phir woh dar jab Kam hua to usne crimson ko aghat Diya chahe thoda hi sahi aur phir jab yah dar nikal gaya to woh khud crimson se bhid e chala aaya aur uski taqat ko hi uski kamzori bana diya agar woh shop pe nahi jaata to usko atamvishwash nahi milta ladne ke liye.
At last but not least use and presence of mind jo usne engine ko tod ker crimson per hamla kiya.
Ab 18 me se 17 system bachey hai 3 ka to veer ko pata hai aur 4th one racheta hai iska ab dekhna hain aur kaun kaun isne shamil hota hai coz aane waley bhavishya me ab Jung hogi system negative and positive team aur uske baad hi racheta ka koi surag milega.
Hats off to your imagination and make them ink. Lajawab maza aagaya.
Awaiting for the next but family commitments pehlay hai har cheez Sai so take your time then write next update with fresh mind.
Tab Tak hum is update ka sawad lete rahenge.

Take your time brother!

Ekdam bejod or dhakad update yaara....
MAzaaa aa gaya bhai waah....

Bhai story itni lambi ho gai hai aur 1 lakh times story bahut achi ja rahi hai lekin abhi tak veer ki koi gf ya true love ke baare me aapne kuch ni likha ya btaaya

Intejaar

Waiting for next update

Waiting...

Kay irada hyy app ka

Werewolf when can we expect the next update...

Good job we are waiting with curiosity

Br0 uPdAt3 Dy dEty bahUt diN h0 gAyE aPki St0rY k uPDatE k0 pArhy h0wY,,,,,,,,,,,!!!!!

AMAZING AWESOME FANTASTIC UPDATE HA BHAI THANKS CRIMSON MARA GAYA ABB NEXT DEKHDE HA AVA KA RECATION

AND UPDATE PLAESE BHAI

Story Bhut intresting hoti ja rhi h har update mein kuch na kuch naya hota h jo previous story se link krta h jese ek moti ki mala hoti h vese hi aap har update ko purani chizon se link krte ho

Just want more and more , I read it in 2 days and now cannot wait any more , what writing skil werewolf brother has , you have made me imagine the action sequences in story that are equivalent to the that of animes , great work keep it up

Chalo y sun k kux rahat mili

Bhai log..update to weekend mein hi aata hai..so wait for Saturday/ Sunday..aa jayega

AS EXPECTED KI AVA BHI SHAMIL HAI IS PURE SET UP MAI AUR IS KA EK KARAN YE HO SAKTA HAI KI AVA KI MOTHER CRIMSON KE KABJE ME HAI JIS KE CHALTE YE PURA SETUP BANA GAYA AVA KO CENTER ME RAKH KAR

Intezaar rahega Werewolf bhai....

Waiting

Waiting for update sir g

Editing...... Waiting

waiting for next updates..........?

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Sabhi so BHAi log update morning me dekh Lena ......
Sorry #Werewolf bro kafi time idhar aaya hu toh sabhi update ko study karna muskil baki koshish karunga lekin I'm damn sure ki abhi Aisa nahi kar paunga toh milte Hain morning

Waiting.......,........

Everybody go to sleep, there is no update today.

Waiting.......

Aur kitna wait karna padega

Since last 2 days you are telling today night update will come but there is no update..... Brother plzzz don't do like others author.... Tell us one time only bro...

Werewolf bhai Kab ayega update kal rat ko kaha tha 2 hours me ayega lekin abhi tak nai aya subah ke 12 hone ko aye hai bhai

Wait kro sabi kyu ki Aaj Bhai mega update denge

Waiting

Kab tak

Update 148 has been updated.