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Nope! Poll wahi rahega. It shows the number of total voters.Bhai ekk faltu sa opinion hai ... Ki abb yeh poll change kardo .. Bcz know everyone khow ki .. In the end veer badshah banega ... Abb koi or poll hona chahiye
Bilkul! Ava ko uski saza mil gayi hai. Ab dekhna ye hoga ki woh kaise Veer ke saamne apne aap ko prastut karti hai. Jitne acche dhang se woh ye karegi, maafi utni hi jaldi milegi use. Let's see. Thanks and keep supporting.Fantastic update bhai ji
Bharosa bahut muskil se hota hai
Ava ne jo kiya use uska natija apnj maa ko kho ke mil gaya is liye kabhi kisi ka bura nahi karna chahiye ab Ava ko veer ka piche se saath dena chahiye kyuki vo samjh gai hogi ki jisne bhi ye kiya hai vo veer ke bare me janta tha sayad bhavish ki chije dekhna ka ya kuch esa card hai uske pass jisse use pata chal raha hai ki kya hone wala hai use apne mom dad ke hatyare ko pakrna hai to use veer ko protect karna hoga kyuki jo bhi hai vo ab Veer ke piche aayega or Ava ko veer ka bharosa jeetna bhi hai
Not possible. Sabse pehli baat toh ye ki kahani shuru se hi Hinglish me likhi gayi hai. Beech se font change nahi hoga.Great! Only one request hai, if possible Hindi font me post karne ki . Translator ki help le sakte ho.
Kuchh drashya Jo kahani me jyada important nahi hon unko bewajah lamba karne se Bach sakte ho. Jisse aap important part par jyada focus ka sakte ho. Sex scene bhi jaroori Hain beech beech me.
Ab uske paas kya hai aur kya nahi ye toh abhi disclose nahi hone waala. Lekin hum ye zaroor anumaan laga sakte hai ki Mr. X koi badi planning me laga hai. Kuch bohut hi badi.bahut hi shaandaar update hai bhai worth to wait for such a nice update. what like me most in this update " kyunki koi hoga jo is baad me dekhega" wow iska matlab Mr. X ko pahle se hi ye pata hai. mujhe lagta hai uske paas ya to koi skill hai ya koi card jisse wo future ki kuch baatein jaan sakta hai per use shayad apne bare me future nahin pata chal sakta usse aur usse sba kuch bhi nahin pata hoga nahin to wo baki system walon ko maar ker akela bach jata, ye to pakka hai ki wo un sabhi ko marna chahata hai jinke paas system hain aur wo uske saath nahin hain taki wo akela rule kare
Yaha se ye pata laga sakte ho ki system logo ko alag alag time pe hi mila hai. Like Ava ko Crimson se pehle mil chuka tha. Woh famous ho rahi thi isliye uske mata pita uss se milna Las Vegas jaa rahe the. Lekin, Crimson ko ab jaake mila tha system jaha usne Jayesh, Ava ke pita ko gusse ke chalte maar diya.abhi tak story me ye nahin pata chal hai ki jo 30 log the initially unko sabko ek saath system mila tha ya alag alag time per mujhe lagta hai ki alag alag time per mila ho kyunki jo aadami jail se bhaga tha usne crimson se kaha tha ki u r also my experiment to ho sakta hai ki alag alag time per system transfer hua ho kyunki abhi tak teen logon ke system milne ketime ko dikhaya gaya hai jisme crimson aur veer dono hi marne wale the jab system mila per ava ke saath aisa nahin tha to system kisi ko kaise choose kerta hai ye jaana waqi interesting hoga.
Woh kuch aur hi chaal chal raha hai bhai.marne wale aadmi ki skills aur cards tansfer ho jate hain ho skata hai ki jitni bhi skills aur cards hain wo baki bache hue sabhi system walon ko transfer hoti hon per jisne mara ya jisko usse related mission mila unko jyada fayda hota hoga isme jaise ki veer ko hua aur ava ko bhi. ek tarah se ek ki shakti sabme divide ho rahi hai aur isse Mr. X ko fayada ho raha hai bahut sare cards aur skills ke liye bahut jyada mission kerne padeinge aur time aur points bhi bahut lageinge aur inte sare points ko kamane ke liye risk bhi bahut jyada hoga to ye aasan rasta hai ki baki syatem walon ko maar ker unke cards aur skills ko lena aur jo last me akela bachega uske paas sari power hogi aur uske baad aur skills aur cards na bhi mile to bhi wo itna jyada powerfull hoga ki koi usko maar nahin payega
Shukriya bhaaya.ye to just mere dimag me aaya to meine likh diya asli khel to writer ko hi pata hai. bahut hi jabardast story hai ek ek baat ko soch ker likhe ne aur usse bahut aage tak relate kerne me bahut jyada time lagata hai aur jab sahi se sab match hota hai tabhi maja aata hai to bhai aapke update agar late bhi aaye to chalega aap apna pura time leker hi update likhate hain aur wo hi sabse accha hai![]()
Kahani ka ant pehle likhta hu mein. Aur jab ant pata ho toh kahani ka sheershak aur genre, sabhi settings ka chayan aap kar sakte ho. Isliye kahani me baadshah ka sheershak bhi hai, theme incest bhi hai. Kyu hai? Ant tak pohuchiye. Sab pata lag jayega. Dhanyavaad.Har Raaz parat dar parat khulta Jaa Raha hai. Ab samajh aaya ki is story ka title 'Baadshah' kyun hai. Shayad Veer hi last surviving system holder rahega ya phir Jo bhi system holders honge unka leader banega.
Next update me disclose ho jayega.I think grace Martin ko masked man ne hi marra h
And now I'll like to see grace Martin sch me marri h ya jese ava ko veer ke lie bhi notification Aya tha but vo bach gya tha
Yes 2 aur updates baaki hai. Jisme agle waale me hum meet up dekhenge. Aur uske agle me Kaera ka haal. Aur wahi arc finish ho jayega.Ye to confirm h ki masked man hi h in sb ke piche but now I'll have to see ki kya kya aur planed h
And abhi bhi is arc me 2 updates
Ek to veer apni family ko suhana ko kese face kre ga
And ab ava ka koi ni bacha Is duniya me so it will be interesting to see what's happen next
Nahi! Ye nahi hoyega. Ab alag se koi system activate nahi hoyega. Jitne aane the utne aa gaye. Ab kitne? 17 bache hai. Crimson toh gaya. Toh yahi 17 rahenge. Alag se koi system paida nahi hoga ab. Aage pata chalega ki aisa kyu hai.And I think abhi system walle aur log bhi bhar aye ge
And kuch aur logo ka system active hona abhi bakki h
I think kaera un me se 1 ho skti h
Because uske stats
So it will be interesting to see
What happen next
Itna samay kaha bhai ki udhar try karu. Samay ke abhaav ke chalte hi toh yaha aaye hai. Aur web series ke liye level aur upar jaana chahiye. Woh sab toh time pass ki baatein hai. Kherr, dhanyavaad aur yu hi saath bane rehne ka.A lot to think about and a lot to come
Bhai agr is script pr web series bne to super hit hogi
Kbhi.movies aur web series me script writer ka try kro
Acha scope h
Wahi toh sabse zyada rehesya me hai abhi. Kherr, abhi bas uski harqato ko notice karte jao. Abhi anumaan mat lagao. Laga sakte ho par thoda aur jaan lo uske baare me pehle. Fir badhiya rahega.BHAI update badhiya raha
padhne me mazza aya ,
kuch batie clear ho chuki hai jaisa ki maine assume kiya tha ki koi to hai jo sysytem ke har ek vyakti ko janta hai aur uski skills ke bare me bhi usko maloom hai aur vo hi vyakti kisi na kisi tarah se har ek ko control kar raha hai .
par yaha par kuch swal jo ubhar kar ate hai,
kyu vo system ke vykti ko maarna chahta hai ?
sirf card ke liye ?( ye sabse least possibilites ho sakti hai , kyuki uska maksad sirf itna hi nahi ho sakta jis tarahse wo sabkuch achse plane karke kar raha hai) .
Woh jo plan kar raha hai woh bohut bhaari plan hai.to baaat saff ho jati hai ki wo kuch bada plan kar raha hai .
kya use kuch aisa maloom hai system ke bare me jo aur system owner nahi jante ?
Bilkul! Bohut bohut dhanyavaad bhai. And keep supporting.sawal bahot sare ho sakte hai par javab waqt ke sath milenge ....
shandar update ke liye dhanyawad.![]()
ShukriyaBhut hi shandar
Out of the world update bro
Pari ki new personality ho sakta hai mext update me dikhe. Ho sakta hai. I'm not promising anything. Agar nahi dikhi toh fir seedhe business arc me hi dekhne ko milegi.Cant wait to see .. Ki pari ka new avtar kaisa hoga .... Or woh masked man hi main villain hai ... To fight him veer ko or bhi system owners ka sath chahiye hoga i think ... Abhi tak veer ke locket se usse koi power nahi milli ... Ya koi fayeda nahi hua ... May bhi agge jake wahi bhramashtra nikle ... Dekhtein hai agge kya hota hai
Bann sakta hai. Agar woh dono milte hai toh. Ab ju anumaan lagao ki woh dono kab milenge. Koi solid wajah honi chahiye. Befaaltu me Divya nahi aayegi aur na hi ab Veer vegas jeyega sirf uss se milne. Toh socho socho.Ekk random question kya aage jake veer ka phirse divya ke sath koi scene banega ????
Ye toh waqt ho batayega.Hmm to satranj ka baadsha wo jisnai Ava ko unknown call kiya tha jisne crimson or wo chaina man ko call kiya jise X naam diya gya hai
Ye unknown call X or wo maskman kahi dono to ek hi payaale nhi hai....?
Dekhte hai hum. Kya hota hai finale arc me.System ke es khel mai koi apne aap ko es game ka master samjh raha hai or game bhi wahi bana rha hai Lekin last mai apna Baadsha hi Baadsha banega.......![]()
Dekhte jao bhai. Abhi bhi kaafi kuch bacha hai. Lekin, disembowler's arc ke baad shayad finale arc hi rahega. Finale arc last arc hai. Uske baad kahani khatam. Abhi business, Chinatown disembowler's line se aane waale hai. Baaki agar kuch raha toh disembowler's ke baad koi arc add kar dunga. Uss waqt ke reader ke attention par based rahega woh. Agar readers chaahenge toh ek aad arc aur aa jayega. Warna disembowler's ke baad finale arc hi final hai. Dekhte hai.Aap nai story mai maskman add kar ke kaafi suspension peda kar diya hai ab ye story + point hoti jaa rahi hai
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Bechari ke saath dhoka ho gaya tum maje le rahe uske...Shandar update bro maza agya,
Ava aur veer ka conversation amazing tha,
To ava apne pita ke qatil ko dhond rahi thi aur crimson hi tha ye to wohi baat hogai ke bagal me chora aur pure shehar me dhindora![]()
Survival ke liye kuch na kuch karna hi padta hai man.Veer ne crimson ka past dekha aur crimson ke past se yahi pata chalta he ke wo shuru se hi bure raste pe tha chahe majboori me hi sahi lakin wo galat kaam hi karta tha,
Yes! Usne fir yahi kaam shuru kiya kyuki woh inn sab saanpo ko bil me se nikaal ke unhe khokla karna chaahta tha pehle. Choos ke inka paisa nikaalta aur fir inhe maarta. Jo ki ant me woh maarne hi wala tha, mission mil gaya tha use. Lekin veer ne ... Haha...!Aur bhai crimson ke past se yahi pata chala ke jo kaam crimson karta tha ameer logo ko marna wo kaam pehle bhi hota arha he aur crimson ye kaam apne dost ke marne ki waja se karta tha kyu ke wo in ameer logo ko us ki maut ka zimedar manta he jo ke sahi bhi he,
Next update me jaanenge hum.Ava ne veer ko apna pura past btaya jo ke kafi emotional tha but us ne jo veer ke sath kiya he veer use itni asani se to maaf nhi karne wala,
Aur jb ava ne veer se pocha ke tum meri jaga hote to kiya karte us pe veer ka jawab qasam se goosebumps agye bhai,
Aur end me ye kiya hogya bhaaya grace martin mar gai kese bhai achanak ye kese hogya,
Bilkul. Itna sab kiya uske baad bhi sab gawa diya. Karma bhai karma...!Matlb ava ka itna sab karne ka koi faida nhi hua veer ki nazro me bhi gir gai suhana ki nazro me bhi aur jis maa ke liye itna sab kiya wo maa bhi nhi rahi ab to ava bilkul hi akeli hogai he,
Dekhna ye he ke aage ava kiya karti he,
Kyuki wahi log system ka sabse acche se upyog kar payenge. Jinke paas sukh hai, samriddhi hai unhe system ki kya zaroorat?Bro 1 baat mene observe ki he ke system unhi logo ko milta he jo bilkul akele par jate he ya jinki life me buhat problems hoti he ye meri observation thi,
Next update meAur is sab ke peche koi buhat bara raaz he jo maybe aage pata chale ke kyu he aisa,
Ab intezar he veer ke begunah sabit hone ka ke wo kese in sb se bhar nikalta he aur veer ka apni family aur specially suhana se milne ka suhana ka kiya reaction hoga veer ko dekh ke,
Thanks a lot bhai and keep supporting!Baqi update har bar ki trha amazing tha aap har baar sabit kar dete ho ke aap 1 behtareen writer ho,
Lot's of love and respect bro![]()
Shukriya!Bhai kya tariff karu aapki what a update aapka likhne ka style lajawaab he aadmi kho jata he usme aisa lagta he sab humare aankhon ke samne ho raha he. Mind-blowing superb jabardast..
Bhai bas ek request he jitna jaldi ho sake Veer ka Bhavna & Tej ke sath sex relation romance ho..
Its my request Bhai![]()
Log badh rahe hai par log ghat bhi toh rahe hai. Dekhte hi dekhte kayi log ghat jayenge. Dekhte jaiye. Bohut bohut dhanyavaad, saath bane rehne kaWerewolf![]()
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अद्भूत एक से बढ़कर एक सिस्टम है... क्रीमसन भी एक मोहरा ही निकला... अब येनकाब बाला क्यूँ है... लोग बढ़ाते जा रहे हो. अब तो सिस्टम को सिस्टम के साथ कई युद्ध होंगे...
वीर ने जो भी एवा के साथ किया सही किया...
डेथ फ्लैग वो भी एवा की माँ.... पर...
बहुत ही बढ़िया फ्लैश बैकिं रहा....
जय हो...
अगले अंक में अब तो इस पर कई नए खुलासे होगे...
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इन्तजार रहेगा
Are you sure? Dekhte hai.Another super duper Update....
See. Mne kaha tha ava ko balidan dena hoga some sort of... Grace passed away. Ab veer k heart me bhi Ava k liye soft corner aa jaega... Veer nd ava ki chemistry ab better turn legi.
We'll come to know later.Nd that masked man. A new person? Or he's the same unknown caller? I'm confused...
Update 150Want to see 2 more updates now as soon as possible. I Want to know about kaera... Uski kya situation h? Is she okay or not? Waiting eagerly for the business part to start... Keep writing sir...![]()
Yupaur ye kya supreme ho gyi apki id? Mne abhi notice ki...![]()
Thread me swagat hai aapkaMai kaafi waqt se silent reader rahi hoon xossip and abhi xforum me bhi kabhi maine koi reply nahi ki but abhi aapka yeh story padhkar baas laga likh du bahut hi bhadiya story hai best... Waiting for the next updatewarewolf bhai ur so awesome.
Aaj late night aa jana chahiye nost probably. Abhi 1k words hi likhe hai.Zabardast update yaar
Ab next update kab Tak aayega ye bhi bata dijiye Zara please
Aisa ek inaan hai. Pure evil. Aage aaega woh.Mera yeh kehne ka mtlb tha ki inn sabhi logo ki majburi thi, inn logo ne duniya hee aisi dekhi inke sath galat hua toh inhone aisa kiya (galat kiya par phir bhi...) Evil toh ye sab bhi hai par jaise kuchh insaan hote hai na krur har kisi ke liye waise hee kisi insaan ki entry ho
Ye toh bass aise hee fan request hai story toh aapke dimaag mei hee fit hai jo ki boht achchi chal rahi hai![]()