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[Had]

Major Analysis:
I have read youur story thrice till your latest update[176]. Over all the story is good and mind grasping, but it could be more atractive and interesting. That i'll tell you how....
Desclaimer!!!!!
This comment is not for any hatred purpose, being a reader, it's my right ... So, let's start....
1: Start se story bohat achi pick up ki, scenes description or character ploting bhi bohat realistic thi. As the story progresses and veer found a system or phir pari or veer ki chemistry devalope hui. Everything was going good, but why this system is having Multiple personality disorder??
I... mean, system is not a human right? Or DID sirf humans ko hota hai na k virtual softwares ko. In the begening, veer was very curious to know about system's secrets. But now it seems like he doesn't have any interest in system, because ab pari level 10 par hai or she can answer veer's every possible questions about her. Bohat saray secrets still secrets hain jo abhi tak unfold ho janay chahyie thay or wo nai huay jinn mai system ka raaz top of the list hai...
2: Nidhi iss story mai key character hai, OK..... maan liya. She let veer stay at her home, she helped him every time for sake of veer's character devalopment. But yahan toh veer seems in love with her and wo ussay ghaas tak nai daal rahi. Means, come on buddy... Wolf bro you can do better then this. Nidhi's character is so stubbon. She is like in denile state every time, this element made your updates booring even when I was reading it for the very first time. Jab veer ne nidhi or shraya k sath kuch karna he nai hai toh wo ab tak plot mai kar kya rahi hain???
3: Now let's talk about some adultry stuff. I think this story is insest, but insest k naam par ab tak kya he hua hai... Aik devorced lirki k sath sex jo veer ki bhabi thii... Come on man this is not insest. Suman sunali or abha wo toh veer ki slaves hain na toh wo toh insest mai count he nai hoon gee or sath he baki parizaad ghar ki aurteen bhi..
Tej, Bhoomika, Arohi, ye insest element ka key element hain... But inn k sath halki phulki kissing k ilawa kuch bhi nai hua... kyou???
Kiara ko start mai verginity lose karnay k liye use kar liya or uss k baat say he uss k sath koi romantic scene he nai hai.. On the contrary, Sonia jo veer k sath itni close ho rahi hai thi uss ki bhi kuch samajh nai aa rahi, kabhi wo veer k bohatcloser hoti toh kabhi kahan hoti kdoubt hota hai k wo story mai hai bhi k nai...
I have also read your first story, Akhir kyou: uss mai jiss tarha aap ne aurtoon ka haram banaya tah or at the end ek sath bari bari rahul unhay use kar raha tha that was intance booring. Agar iss story mai bhi aap ki approach wohi honay wali hai toh bro I'm sorry to say but, your this story is going to be a big disapointment for readers....
Now let me make you understand in your way, jessay aap examples detay ho. Maan lo k aap ko nahana hai or shampoo ki bottle almost khali hai. Aap k paas new shampoo bottle hai, but aap purani wali mai paani daal kar ussay he recycle kar k use kartay ja rahay ho. Bhai jab new bottlre hai toh purani kyou recycle kar rahy ho??? SAme case with your characters. Jab itni females hain toh kyou baar baar sirf suman or abha ko sex doll bana k rakha hai? Why don't use Bhoomika, tej, arohi or kavia instead?.. Wo toh veer mai interested bhi hain... Sonia or suhana bhi bekaar mai ghoom rahi hain because aap unhay toh use karo gay nai. Right?
4: Veer ko kiara ka mission mila k use k emotions retrieve karnay hain. Agar nai kiye toh wo kabhi normal nai ho sakay ge or veer ussay kho bhi de ga.. Aik taraf kiara Julia se kehtay hai k I want veer to clame me or doosri taraf you say k she doesn't have any emotions. Or agar ye emotions, ye feelings uss mai diary padhnay k baad ayen hain toh veer ka mission abhi tak clear kyou nai hua kiara wala???? WTF is going on???
5: NOw let's come to main fighting scenes jo iss story ki jaan hain... First of all veer ka fighting style kyou defined nai hai? Martialart in genral is an amalgamation of various fighting sports. Like.. Karatee, BJJ, Taikondo, Judo, Kungfuand many more. Veer kis style or form ko carry kar ra hai????
NOw, What rationalism is this????.. Ab tak jitnay system holders show case huay hain unn k paas aik he categorie k legendary cards kyou hain? Means veer Indian region ka hai iss liye uss k paas genral cards hain, crimson america se tha iss liye uss k paas bhi genral category k cards hain like limb substitution, probability manipulation etc etc.. But on the other hand Jaolong k paas black magic walay cards hain jo ab tak disclose huay.. HOwww and Whyyy???? Legendary cards toh kismat se miltay hain na khud ki marzi se toh nai, toh phir uss k paas same categorie k cards kaisay? Waheen Ranchu k paas shaolin fighting based cards hain and so the case with rest of the system holders... aisa kyou nai k veer k paas koi black magic wala card hota ya Ranchu k paas Beo wolf blessings ya aisay he cards shuffle bhi toh saktay thay na... toh kyou nai???????
6: Crimson K paas koi buff card nai tha jaisa veer k paas veo wolf hai, right? If you say no then tis is your biggest blunder. Because crimson k marnay k baad uss k cards veer or Ava mai distribute huay thay or humay ye samajh aa gaya k kisi bhi system holder k marnay k baad uss k legendary cards he reward k roop mai miltay hain na k uss ki skils bhi, toh agar aisa hai k crimson k paas aisa koi card nai tha or wo veer se sirf apnaay stats or bertigo skil ki base par lad raha tha toh uss k stats kya 200+ thay kya? Because paris mai veer ki agility 140 par thi or kyou k full moon nai tha toh uss ki speed 50% he extra thi that means 140 orignal agility + 70 beo wolf blessings card ki agility = 210... Or iss k bavajood veer ko crimson ki agility match karna mushkil lag ra tha. uss time toh veer ki strength bhi 140 thi jo baad mai oceant island tak jatay jatay 150 tak pohanch gai thi, or iss k bavajood crimson was almost 3 times stronger then him. How????
First. crimson was fighting only with the help of his stats no buff card was involved phir bhi wo itna strong tha jab k ussay b system milay 1 ya 1.5 saal se zayada nai hua, so how can he be so much powerful???
Now comes the latest fight. Here... congratulations.... your oponent is blind... [claps, claps..] But, he has ora vission skil jiss ki help se wo human, animals or trees ka ora dekh sakta hai.. OK, no problem... But the problem is, how much insane system he is having???
Abhi tak yahi samajh aye hai k Mr.X or chchoor kar baki sab ko system milay 1 se 2 saal he huay hai. Or hum ye baat achi tarhan se samajhtay hai k itnay time system kahan tak upgrade ho sakta hai toh crimson or jaolong itna havvy system kaisy rakhay huay hain wo bhi kisi buff card k bina???? Or jaolong toh blind hai na, wo toh sirf veer ka ora he dekh sakta hai. so, wo veer k haath paun ki exact movement kaisy dekh paa raha hai???? He should not be able to see veer's movement but yahan toh scene he kuch or hai. Veer is not even able to touch him dispite of his blindness... Means, WtFFFF..

So, these were some mistakes which I remember.. In real, there are many more but unfortunatly I can't write them down. Agar aisa kia toh meri khud ki aik update ban jaye ge mistakes par.. hahaha
so this was it, hope you won't make further illogical mistakes.
Waiting for next update.. smiles..

Well, graphed but I guess he cares more for views and likes thats y dono stories he incest may hi hala kay this is a fantasy and not a formal story. Content is going down like the great taitanic. More questions and low answers bringing 0 logic to us.

 

[Death Kiñg]

Major Analysis:
I have read youur story thrice till your latest update[176]. Over all the story is good and mind grasping, but it could be more atractive and interesting. That i'll tell you how....
Desclaimer!!!!!
This comment is not for any hatred purpose, being a reader, it's my right ... So, let's start....
1: Start se story bohat achi pick up ki, scenes description or character ploting bhi bohat realistic thi. As the story progresses and veer found a system or phir pari or veer ki chemistry devalope hui. Everything was going good, but why this system is having Multiple personality disorder??
I... mean, system is not a human right? Or DID sirf humans ko hota hai na k virtual softwares ko. In the begening, veer was very curious to know about system's secrets. But now it seems like he doesn't have any interest in system, because ab pari level 10 par hai or she can answer veer's every possible questions about her. Bohat saray secrets still secrets hain jo abhi tak unfold ho janay chahyie thay or wo nai huay jinn mai system ka raaz top of the list hai...

You answered the question yourself - "Jinn me system ka raaz top of the list hai".. system's secret is the biggest secret in this story, it's revelation is going to take a significant amount of thrill and craze out of the story. Such secrets are unfolded completely only at the end. Rahi baat Veer ke interest na lene ki, uska intelligence 150 h, ab tak itna to use pata chal hi gaya hai ki jab bhi wo Pari ka koi raaz jaan ne ke liye qualified hoga, use puchhna nahi padega.

2: Nidhi iss story mai key character hai, OK..... maan liya. She let veer stay at her home, she helped him every time for sake of veer's character devalopment. But yahan toh veer seems in love with her and wo ussay ghaas tak nai daal rahi. Means, come on buddy... Wolf bro you can do better then this. Nidhi's character is so stubbon. She is like in denile state every time, this element made your updates booring even when I was reading it for the very first time. Jab veer ne nidhi or shraya k sath kuch karna he nai hai toh wo ab tak plot mai kar kya rahi hain???

She's a divorcee. She's hurt. She literally has two freaking kids. She lives in a society. Usne apni chhoti behen ko Veer ke gaal choomte hute dekha hai. Won't she think ki Shreya likes Veer? Aur jaisa uska nature h kya wo uske beech me aayegi? Above all, Veer ne use kaha tha "I need you", matlab baat sirf ek intimate relationship ki nahi balki prem ki hai, itna aasan hai ek do bacchon ki maa ka apne hi student ke pyaar ko accept karna????

3: Now let's talk about some adultry stuff. I think this story is insest, but insest k naam par ab tak kya he hua hai... Aik devorced lirki k sath sex jo veer ki bhabi thii... Come on man this is not insest. Suman sunali or abha wo toh veer ki slaves hain na toh wo toh insest mai count he nai hoon gee or sath he baki parizaad ghar ki aurteen bhi..
Tej, Bhoomika, Arohi, ye insest element ka key element hain... But inn k sath halki phulki kissing k ilawa kuch bhi nai hua... kyou???

Kyunki aage chalkar hoga? This story is still in it's 3rd innings. Lot left to explored. Kavya sang to incestuous journey ki shuruat ho bhi chuki hai aur jald hi Tej bhi is raah par badhti dikh rahi hai. Men, this forum has a lot of stories in which incest just happens, just like that, no base, no reasons. But it's fucking blood relations, aise hi thode hi na ho jaayega. Aarohi was stubborn towards Veer, ab uske sang do kisses ho chuke hain, it's taking time, but he's cooking these relationships well.

Kiara ko start mai verginity lose karnay k liye use kar liya or uss k baat say he uss k sath koi romantic scene he nai hai..

You wanted Veer to be romantic with a girl who didn't know about love?

On the contrary, Sonia jo veer k sath itni close ho rahi hai thi uss ki bhi kuch samajh nai aa rahi, kabhi wo veer k bohatcloser hoti toh kabhi kahan hoti kdoubt hota hai k wo story mai hai bhi k nai...

I guess Werewolf has already said ki Chinatown ke baad ek arc kaafi hadh tak Sonia ke ird gird hi ghumega. (Ghumna bhi chahiye Werewolf , 5 updates kewal Sonia par likho ).

I have also read your first story, Akhir kyou: uss mai jiss tarha aap ne aurtoon ka haram banaya tah or at the end ek sath bari bari rahul unhay use kar raha tha that was intance booring. Agar iss story mai bhi aap ki approach wohi honay wali hai toh bro I'm sorry to say but, your this story is going to be a big disapointment for readers....

Means ki jis story mein jald hi incest shuru ho gaya tha wo bhi boring thi? Jisme nahi shuru hua jaldi wo bhi boring hai??

Now let me make you understand in your way, jessay aap examples detay ho. Maan lo k aap ko nahana hai or shampoo ki bottle almost khali hai. Aap k paas new shampoo bottle hai, but aap purani wali mai paani daal kar ussay he recycle kar k use kartay ja rahay ho. Bhai jab new bottlre hai toh purani kyou recycle kar rahy ho???

They're women, not bottles lol. Veer isn't USING them, he's cherishing and loving them.

SAme case with your characters. Jab itni females hain toh kyou baar baar sirf suman or abha ko sex doll bana k rakha hai? Why don't use Bhoomika, tej, arohi or kavia instead?.. Wo toh veer mai interested bhi hain... Sonia or suhana bhi bekaar mai ghoom rahi hain because aap unhay toh use karo gay nai. Right?

Because they're are not his slaves? You can use your slaves but not your sisters or two freaking multi millionaires. Yeah, you can have the intimacy after they fall in love with you and love takes time.

4: Veer ko kiara ka mission mila k use k emotions retrieve karnay hain. Agar nai kiye toh wo kabhi normal nai ho sakay ge or veer ussay kho bhi de ga.. Aik taraf kiara Julia se kehtay hai k I want veer to clame me or doosri taraf you say k she doesn't have any emotions. Or agar ye emotions, ye feelings uss mai diary padhnay k baad ayen hain toh veer ka mission abhi tak clear kyou nai hua kiara wala???? WTF is going on???

Is it that difficult?? Ek bacche jaisi haalat thi us ladki thi. ZERO par thi wo emotions ke maamle mein. Mahine bhar mein sabhi emotions ko jaan jaye, samajh jaaye aur accept bhi kar le. Maana ki use robot hi maana gaya hai par hai to wo bhi insaan hi??? That diary ignited the sleeping fire inside her, the emotions have awakened but they'll obviously take some time to get neutralised. And "claim me" waali baat to of course she lost her virginity to him, ab usko thoda samajh aa raha hai in cheezon ka matlab, Veer saved her so many times, so beshaq wo use hi to chahegi? Aur yadi emotions stabilised hote to khud Veer se baat karti naa ki uske baat karne ka intezaar karti.

5: NOw let's come to main fighting scenes jo iss story ki jaan hain... First of all veer ka fighting style kyou defined nai hai? Martialart in genral is an amalgamation of various fighting sports. Like.. Karatee, BJJ, Taikondo, Judo, Kungfuand many more. Veer kis style or form ko carry kar ra hai????

More of a street fighting style. Mix of everything based upon the situation and opponent?

NOw, What rationalism is this????.. Ab tak jitnay system holders show case huay hain unn k paas aik he categorie k legendary cards kyou hain? Means veer Indian region ka hai iss liye uss k paas genral cards hain, crimson america se tha iss liye uss k paas bhi genral category k cards hain like limb substitution, probability manipulation etc etc.. But on the other hand Jaolong k paas black magic walay cards hain jo ab tak disclose huay.. HOwww and Whyyy???? Legendary cards toh kismat se miltay hain na khud ki marzi se toh nai, toh phir uss k paas same categorie k cards kaisay?

Kismat se hi mile honge na? Ab un cards ka use koi kaise karta hai aur khud ko kya banata hai ye to uske haath me hai na? Kya lagta hai ki agar uske paas Veer jaise cards hote to wo bhalayi karne nikalta? His soul was dark forever, just got the cards that were the reflection of his own self and he aligned them in the way he did.

Waheen Ranchu k paas shaolin fighting based cards hain and so the case with rest of the system holders... aisa kyou nai k veer k paas koi black magic wala card hota ya Ranchu k paas Beo wolf blessings ya aisay he cards shuffle bhi toh saktay thay na... toh kyou nai???????

Apne aap hi to upar kaha?? Kismat se milte hain lol???

6: Crimson K paas koi buff card nai tha jaisa veer k paas veo wolf hai, right? If you say no then tis is your biggest blunder. Because crimson k marnay k baad uss k cards veer or Ava mai distribute huay thay or humay ye samajh aa gaya k kisi bhi system holder k marnay k baad uss k legendary cards he reward k roop mai miltay hain na k uss ki skils bhi, toh agar aisa hai k crimson k paas aisa koi card nai tha or wo veer se sirf apnaay stats or bertigo skil ki base par lad raha tha toh uss k stats kya 200+ thay kya? Because paris mai veer ki agility 140 par thi or kyou k full moon nai tha toh uss ki speed 50% he extra thi that means 140 orignal agility + 70 beo wolf blessings card ki agility = 210... Or iss k bavajood veer ko crimson ki agility match karna mushkil lag ra tha. uss time toh veer ki strength bhi 140 thi jo baad mai oceant island tak jatay jatay 150 tak pohanch gai thi, or iss k bavajood crimson was almost 3 times stronger then him. How????
First. crimson was fighting only with the help of his stats no buff card was involved phir bhi wo itna strong tha jab k ussay b system milay 1 ya 1.5 saal se zayada nai hua, so how can he be so much powerful???

How are you so sure ki Crimson ke sabhi cards Veer/Ava ko mil gaye honge? How are you so sure ki uske stats ballistic nahi ho sakte. The more missions you complete the more you can increase them. He ran a whole group of deadly killers, kya lagta hai us dauran kitne mission hawa me uda diye honge usne?

Now comes the latest fight. Here... congratulations.... your oponent is blind... [claps, claps..] But, he has ora vission skil jiss ki help se wo human, animals or trees ka ora dekh sakta hai.. OK, no problem... But the problem is, how much insane system he is having???
Abhi tak yahi samajh aye hai k Mr.X or chchoor kar baki sab ko system milay 1 se 2 saal he huay hai. Or hum ye baat achi tarhan se samajhtay hai k itnay time system kahan tak upgrade ho sakta hai toh crimson or jaolong itna havvy system kaisy rakhay huay hain wo bhi kisi buff card k bina???? Or jaolong toh blind hai na, wo toh sirf veer ka ora he dekh sakta hai. so, wo veer k haath paun ki exact movement kaisy dekh paa raha hai???? He should not be able to see veer's movement but yahan toh scene he kuch or hai. Veer is not even able to touch him dispite of his blindness... Means, WtFFFF..

Kyun nahi dekh sakta? Grey scenery hai ye ek tarah se uske liye. Kya kehna chahte to men ki usko sab kuchh stationary dikhe? Without any movement? Agar Veer ka aura nazar aa raha hai to uske movements kyun nahi dikhenge?

So, these were some mistakes which I remember.. In real, there are many more but unfortunatly I can't write them down. Agar aisa kia toh meri khud ki aik update ban jaye ge mistakes par.. hahaha
so this was it, hope you won't make further illogical mistakes.
Waiting for next update.. smiles..

Honestly, every writer makes mistakes. Maine khud apne shuruati daur me boht khamiyan rakhi apni lekhan me jinhe ab dekhta hun to khud par hairangi aati hai. And of course, Werewolf is no different. Every writer remains in the learning period forever. Ho sakta hai ki Wolfie ne bhi kuchh galtiyan ki ho is kahani me. Par jo bhi aapne upar likha... That's blatantly baseless and unreal exaggeration of everything. He has answered these things so many times, go through his replies in the story to various reviews and comments, not just the updates and you'll see. Plus, even if he has made mistakes, I can bet ki uske ek update ke size ki real mistakes koyi nahi nikaal sakta is kahani me, haan real mistakes, not exaggerated ones.

 

[Werewolf]

You answered the question yourself - "Jinn me system ka raaz top of the list hai".. system's secret is the biggest secret in this story, it's revelation is going to take a significant amount of thrill and craze out of the story. Such secrets are unfolded completely only at the end. Rahi baat Veer ke interest na lene ki, uska intelligence 150 h, ab tak itna to use pata chal hi gaya hai ki jab bhi wo Pari ka koi raaz jaan ne ke liye qualified hoga, use puchhna nahi padega.

She's a divorcee. She's hurt. She literally has two freaking kids. She lives in a society. Usne apni chhoti behen ko Veer ke gaal choomte hute dekha hai. Won't she think ki Shreya likes Veer? Aur jaisa uska nature h kya wo uske beech me aayegi? Above all, Veer ne use kaha tha "I need you", matlab baat sirf ek intimate relationship ki nahi balki prem ki hai, itna aasan hai ek do bacchon ki maa ka apne hi student ke pyaar ko accept karna????

Kyunki aage chalkar hoga? This story is still in it's 3rd innings. Lot left to explored. Kavya sang to incestuous journey ki shuruat ho bhi chuki hai aur jald hi Tej bhi is raah par badhti dikh rahi hai. Men, this forum has a lot of stories in which incest just happens, just like that, no base, no reasons. But it's fucking blood relations, aise hi thode hi na ho jaayega. Aarohi was stubborn towards Veer, ab uske sang do kisses ho chuke hain, it's taking time, but he's cooking these relationships well.

You wanted Veer to be romantic with a girl who didn't know about love?

I guess Werewolf has already said ki Chinatown ke baad ek arc kaafi hadh tak Sonia ke ird gird hi ghumega. (Ghumna bhi chahiye Werewolf , 5 updates kewal Sonia par likho ).

Means ki jis story mein jald hi incest shuru ho gaya tha wo bhi boring thi? Jisme nahi shuru hua jaldi wo bhi boring hai??

They're women, not bottles lol. Veer isn't USING them, he's cherishing and loving them.

Because they're are not his slaves? You can use your slaves but not your sisters or two freaking multi millionaires. Yeah, you can have the intimacy after they fall in love with you and love takes time.

Is it that difficult?? Ek bacche jaisi haalat thi us ladki thi. ZERO par thi wo emotions ke maamle mein. Mahine bhar mein sabhi emotions ko jaan jaye, samajh jaaye aur accept bhi kar le. Maana ki use robot hi maana gaya hai par hai to wo bhi insaan hi??? That diary ignited the sleeping fire inside her, the emotions have awakened but they'll obviously take some time to get neutralised. And "claim me" waali baat to of course she lost her virginity to him, ab usko thoda samajh aa raha hai in cheezon ka matlab, Veer saved her so many times, so beshaq wo use hi to chahegi? Aur yadi emotions stabilised hote to khud Veer se baat karti naa ki uske baat karne ka intezaar karti.

More of a street fighting style. Mix of everything based upon the situation and opponent?

Kismat se hi mile honge na? Ab un cards ka use koi kaise karta hai aur khud ko kya banata hai ye to uske haath me hai na? Kya lagta hai ki agar uske paas Veer jaise cards hote to wo bhalayi karne nikalta? His soul was dark forever, just got the cards that were the reflection of his own self and he aligned them in the way he did.

Apne aap hi to upar kaha?? Kismat se milte hain lol???

How are you so sure ki Crimson ke sabhi cards Veer/Ava ko mil gaye honge? How are you so sure ki uske stats ballistic nahi ho sakte. The more missions you complete the more you can increase them. He ran a whole group of deadly killers, kya lagta hai us dauran kitne mission hawa me uda diye honge usne?

Kyun nahi dekh sakta? Grey scenery hai ye ek tarah se uske liye. Kya kehna chahte to men ki usko sab kuchh stationary dikhe? Without any movement? Agar Veer ka aura nazar aa raha hai to uske movements kyun nahi dikhenge?

Honestly, every writer makes mistakes. Maine khud apne shuruati daur me boht khamiyan rakhi apni lekhan me jinhe ab dekhta hun to khud par hairangi aati hai. And of course, Werewolf is no different. Every writer remains in the learning period forever. Ho sakta hai ki Wolfie ne bhi kuchh galtiyan ki ho is kahani me. Par jo bhi aapne upar likha... That's blatantly baseless and unreal exaggeration of everything. He has answered these things so many times, go through his replies in the story to various reviews and comments, not just the updates and you'll see. Plus, even if he has made mistakes, I can bet ki uske ek update ke size ki real mistakes koyi nahi nikaal sakta is kahani me, haan real mistakes, not exaggerated ones.

Thanks a lot for this post mortem.
You too know what are the intentions behind all of this. There's no need to explain. Meri Nazar pichle hafte se iss par thi. Aaj ye haath lag hi gaya hai. Aur, woh bhi mujhe jaana hi nahi pada. Khud aa gaya. Ab asli post mortem mein karunga.
Logo ko lagta hai ki mere peeth peeche baat karte rahenge mujhe bina mention kiye toh mujhe pata nahi chalega.
Harr thread ke baare me mujhe pata hota hai. Itne kasht se yaha aaya hai. Toh utne hi ke saath bhejna bhi toh meri zimmedari hai.

 

[Werewolf]

Major Analysis:
I have read youur story thrice till your latest update[176]. Over all the story is good and mind grasping, but it could be more atractive and interesting. That i'll tell you how....

Teen baar padhne ke baad bhi kuch samajh nahi aaya toh chullu bhar paani me doob maro Bhai. Story padhna tumhare bas ka nahi.
Apni retaining power badhao. Bahut zaroori hai.

This comment is not for any hatred purpose, being a reader, it's my right ... So, let's start....

Your comment was indeed for hatred purpose and was a publicity stunt as well. I'll tell the reason below later. Let's start! Shall we?

1: Start se story bohat achi pick up ki, scenes description or character ploting bhi bohat realistic thi. As the story progresses and veer found a system or phir pari or veer ki chemistry devalope hui. Everything was going good, but why this system is having Multiple personality disorder??
I... mean, system is not a human right? Or DID sirf humans ko hota hai na k virtual softwares ko. In the begening, veer was very curious to know about system's secrets. But now it seems like he doesn't have any interest in system, because ab pari level 10 par hai or she can answer veer's every possible questions about her. Bohat saray secrets still secrets hain jo abhi tak unfold ho janay chahyie thay or wo nai huay jinn mai system ka raaz top of the list hai...

See! This is what happens when you don't read anything carefully.100 baar bata chuka hu ki system ka raaz kahani ka last part hai. Mein unn writers ki tarah ek ek update soch ke nahi likhta. Ki haan pehle ye dikha diya... Fir agle din baith ke kuch socha fir woh dikha diya aur kahani chalti jaa rahi hai. Poora plot pen down kiya jaata hai pehle mere dwara. Sabse pehle ant hi likha jaata hai. Jab Maine kaha ki system ka raaz kahani ke ant me hai iske peeche koi reason hi hoga na?Usi ant se agli story linked hai. Ab agar wahi abhi mein disclose kar dunga toh matlab hi kya itni brainstorming ka? Update update bas padh lete ho, comments me mein jo details deta hu woh padhna nahi hai. Tumhare alawa kisi ne pichhle kayi mahino se ye nahi pucha ki system ka raaz kyu nahi khul Raha. Kyuki unko pata hai. Woh legit readers hai jo mere comments par dhyaan dete hai.

2: Nidhi iss story mai key character hai, OK..... maan liya. She let veer stay at her home, she helped him every time for sake of veer's character devalopment. But yahan toh veer seems in love with her and wo ussay ghaas tak nai daal rahi. Means, come on buddy... Wolf bro you can do better then this. Nidhi's character is so stubbon. She is like in denile state every time, this element made your updates booring even when I was reading it for the very first time. Jab veer ne nidhi or shraya k sath kuch karna he nai hai toh wo ab tak plot mai kar kya rahi hain???

Kisne kaha Nidhi ghaas tak nahi daal rahi? Kya padh rahe ho? Ye baat sabhi ko pata hai par tumhe nahi samajh aa rahi toh fir samjha deta hu. Nidhi ek divorcee hai. Veer se 8-9 saal badi hai. Veer uska student hai. Aur upar se woh do baccho ki maa hai. Inn lines ko dobara padhna ek baar. Divorcee! 8-9 years age gap! Student teacher relationship! And, 2 kids...!Matlab samajh rahe ho? Kaun si aisi stree hoti hai jo apne 8-9 yrs Age gap waale student ke saath, aur divorcee aur baccho ke hone ke baad uske pyaar ko asaani se accept kar le??Nidhi ki personality ko kayi baar updates me darshaya gaya hai. Woh reserved kind of person hai. Bhala woh kaise Veer ko accept kar sakti hai.Samaaj naam ki koi cheez hoti hai. Samaaj kaise dekhega, Veer aur uska parivar kaise unhe dekhega. Baccho par kya asar padega bade hoke ye baat pata lagne par? Nidhi koi chutiya nahi hai jo bas physical need ke liye ek young aadmi ko accept kar le. It's obvious ki woh ye sab deny karegi hi... Because she has some feelings for Veer too. Ye toh updates padh ke hi pata lag gaya tha. Baar baar uski saansein tez hona, Veer se nazre chura ke bhaag jaana ki kahi woh kuch galat na kar de. Obviously wo bhaagegi hi... aisi aurat ki sthiti aur uske dil ko nahi samjhoge to kuch nahi samajh paoge. And, plot me unka koi role hoga tabhi toh woh exist kar rahi hai na?

3: Now let's talk about some adultry stuff. I think this story is insest, but insest k naam par ab tak kya he hua hai... Aik devorced lirki k sath sex jo veer ki bhabi thii... Come on man this is not insest. Suman sunali or abha wo toh veer ki slaves hain na toh wo toh insest mai count he nai hoon gee or sath he baki parizaad ghar ki aurteen bhi..
Tej, Bhoomika, Arohi, ye insest element ka key element hain... But inn k sath halki phulki kissing k ilawa kuch bhi nai hua... kyou???

Pehle incest ki spelling sahi dhang se likho. Fir pucho ye sawal. Lekin fir bhi mein uttar de hi deta hu.Prefix maine daala hai. Incest hoga tabhi toh daala hai na? Suman, Sonali aur Aabha indeed slaves hai and wo incest me count nahi hongi. Haan! Toh kya galat hai isme? Matlab chaahte kya ho? Kya Veer bas Ghar me hi sab kuch karta rahe? Kya tumne kisi aur aadmi ko Veer ki slaves ke saath kuch karte dekha hai? Kya kisi ne uski partners par haath daala hai? Jab se Veer ne unke saath sabandh banaye hai tab se kisi bhi baahri mard ne unn mahilao ke saath kuch bhi nahi kiya. Isliye, yaha par woh adultery laagu nahi hoti. Kuch samjhe??? Agar mein yahi par kisi ek female ko kisi aur mard ke saath sex karwa du toh ye adultery consider ho jayegi. Know the difference first. Protagonist ka baahar sex karna isliye chal jaata hai because at the end use wife ghar me laani hi hai. Upar se majority readers males hai. Kahani ke points me bhi pehle hi bata diya gaya tha ki harem based hai kahani. Harem ka matlab jaante hi hoge I guess?Rahi baat Tej, Bhumika and Arohi ki... There's a huge difference. Suman toh slave hai. Upar se uski seva karne ke liye uska parivar baadhya hai. Updates nahi padhe kya? Tej Bhumika aur Arohi kab se slaves ho gayi? Tej toh aayi hi kitne updates ke baad hai. Bhumika ka ravaiyya change hone me kitne updates lage. Arohi ke saath at least 2 kisses ho gayi hai abhi. Woh uski sisters hai. Unka parivarik sambandh hai. Itni asaani se kaise ho sakta hai sab? Aur agar itni asani se hi sab kuch dekhna hai toh day 1 se bhai behan ki chudayi wali stories dhero uplabdh hai yaha. Go and read them. Ye story lambi story hai. Late romance based hai.

Kiara ko start mai verginity lose karnay k liye use kar liya or uss k baat say he uss k sath koi romantic scene he nai hai.. On the contrary, Sonia jo veer k sath itni close ho rahi hai thi uss ki bhi kuch samajh nai aa rahi, kabhi wo veer k bohatcloser hoti toh kabhi kahan hoti kdoubt hota hai k wo story mai hai bhi k nai...

Pehli baat... Woh Kiara nahi... Kaera hai. Dusri baat... Veer ne Kaera ka use nahi kiya. Kaera ne Veer ko seduce kiya tha woh sab karne ke liye. Baat fir wahi par aa gayi. Ki story dhang se nahi padhi hai. Kaera nashe me thi... Usi ne Veer ke saath pehle pahal ki. Poora dosh Veer pe kaise daal sakte hai hum? Sonia ek acchi friend thi. Lekin, gap hone ke chalte woh rishta kamzor pad gaya hai. It's as simple as that. Din bhar ki life me hamari zindagiyo me hi aise kitne log honge jinse hum short period of time ke liye kaafi baatein kiye par aaj unse touch khatam sa hai. Kyu?Kyuki woh consistency banayi hi nahi gayi. Jis tarah se baatein honi chahiye thi waha par samay ka gap aa gaya. Yahi reason hai ki Sonia Veer ke liye Aadesh ki hotel me uski madad karne ke liye sankoch me kyu pad gayi thi. It's because of that time gap... Accha woh pakke dost bhi nahi the. Sirf dost hi the... Toh ye hona toh zahir tha.Sonia is crazy about defeating Kaera. Uske liye woh kitna important hai ye bhi updates me bahut baar bataya gaya hai. Inferiority complex. It makes sense why she didn't want to lose that deal which later could have been grabbed by Kaera.

I have also read your first story, Akhir kyou: uss mai jiss tarha aap ne aurtoon ka haram banaya tah or at the end ek sath bari bari rahul unhay use kar raha tha that was intance booring. Agar iss story mai bhi aap ki approach wohi honay wali hai toh bro I'm sorry to say but, your this story is going to be a big disapointment for readers....

Tumhare shabdo ka chayan hi galat hai.
Use karne ka matlab jaante ho? Uska matlab hota hai koi Prem bhaavna na hona. Sirf matlab ke liye istemal kiya jaane waala...Rahul kab se matlab ke liye sex karne laga? Aur agar matlab ke liye hi karna tha... Toh unki itni parvah kyu karta tha? There shouldn't have been any care and love involved.Aur mujhe bataane ki zaroorat nahi ki meri kahani disappointment hone waali hai ya fir kuch aur...Maine already forum par kayi records break kar diye hai iss story se. So, that explains it all. Most liked post bhi yahi milegi jo ki update 175 aur upar top pinned comment hai. Views ke baare me toh jaante hai sabhi. Revos dekh lo page 1 se leke ab tak ke. Aur pages me top par hai kahani.Toh mere khayal se readers sab jaante hai. Siwae tumhare... (Ohh btw, akhir kyu bhi hit thi jab woh forum par aayi thi. )Ohh btw again... Ye kahani continuosly do baar scoop me google ranking par top pe reh chuki hai. Uske baad se Google rankings scoop me aa nahi rahi hai warna 4 baari ho jaata. umeed hai iss baar aa jayegi. Siraj bhau bole toh hai.

Now let me make you understand in your way, jessay aap examples detay ho. Maan lo k aap ko nahana hai or shampoo ki bottle almost khali hai. Aap k paas new shampoo bottle hai, but aap purani wali mai paani daal kar ussay he recycle kar k use kartay ja rahay ho. Bhai jab new bottlre hai toh purani kyou recycle kar rahy ho??? SAme case with your characters. Jab itni females hain toh kyou baar baar sirf suman or abha ko sex doll bana k rakha hai? Why don't use Bhoomika, tej, arohi or kavia instead?.. Wo toh veer mai interested bhi hain... Sonia or suhana bhi bekaar mai ghoom rahi hain because aap unhay toh use karo gay nai. Right?

Tumhare saath kuch brain problem hai bhai. Tum aurto ko istemal karne ki cheezon ki tarah dekh rahe ho. You have a serious problem with you. Veer Suman ko haq se isliye istemal karta hai kyuki Suman masochist hai. Ye baat bhi update me batayi gayi hai. Firse wahi baatein aa jaati hai. Woh seva karne ke lie baadhya hai, favorability bahut high hai. Toh fir kyu nahi?Itni females hai toh ka kya matlab? Matlab kisi ke paas bhi jaake uski choot me lund daal Diya jaaye? Yahi matlab hua na tumhara?Women are not for use. Get this thing in your head. Incestuous relations takes time. Veer ne jitna samay ghar par diya hai uss hisaab se uski progress badhiya hai. Kavya already kaafi aage aa chuki hai. Aur Tej aur Arohi bhi kiss ki hadd tak pahuch chuki hai. I don't have any sort of complaints here with myself. I know what I'm doing.

4: Veer ko kiara ka mission mila k use k emotions retrieve karnay hain. Agar nai kiye toh wo kabhi normal nai ho sakay ge or veer ussay kho bhi de ga.. Aik taraf kiara Julia se kehtay hai k I want veer to clame me or doosri taraf you say k she doesn't have any emotions. Or agar ye emotions, ye feelings uss mai diary padhnay k baad ayen hain toh veer ka mission abhi tak clear kyou nai hua kiara wala???? WTF is going on???

I will tell you what the actual fuck is going on... It's your brain which is not able to comprehend a simple time segments.Kaera Julia se kab kehti hai ki 'I want him to claim me?' It's after those segments where Veer has already given her that diary. Woh cheezein samajhne lagti hai but still... Fully grasp karne me thoda waqt lagega use.Tab woh kehti hai... Because she has started to feel something for Veer. She's clueless what it is.. but andar kuch toh ho raha hai.Rahi baat mission clear kyu nahi hua? Phir wahi baat... Itni baar comment me samjhaya gaya hai fir bhi padhna nahi hota hai aur fir apna assumption maan ke chale aate ho. Mein fir se wahi example dunga jo harr baar deta hu. Ek baar aur samjhaya tha tumko Maine shayad. Paani ka baandh jab khulta hai toh kya woh ek baar me poori sookhi nadi ko bhar sakta hai? Matlab palak jhapakte hi..!? Nahi na? Use hazaro kilometres ki uss Nadi ko bharne me samay toh lagta hoga na? Paani behte behte jaata hoga jab tak ki woh kisi samundar se na mil jaaye. Kuch samajh aaya? Hoshiyar vyakti ko itne me sab samajh aa gaya hoga.Kaera ke emotions uss baandh me fasse paani ki tarah hai jo abhi abhi release hue hai. It will take time to understand different types of emotions.

5: NOw let's come to main fighting scenes jo iss story ki jaan hain... First of all veer ka fighting style kyou defined nai hai? Martialart in genral is an amalgamation of various fighting sports. Like.. Karatee, BJJ, Taikondo, Judo, Kungfuand many more. Veer kis style or form ko carry kar ra hai????

It's as simple as it's sounds.
Maine kahi par bhi nahi likha ki uske paas judo ki martial arts hai, ya fir karate ki... Wahi Renshu aur Erica ke paas defined martial arts hai. Limited to only one style. Veer ke me kahi bhi ye nahi likha ki uski Martial arts style kisi ek style par based hai. Jaisa ki Death Kiñg ne kaha. Veer ki Martial arts Street fighting based hai. Aur ye sahi bhi hai par isme mein thoda add on karna chahunga.Veer shuru me goons se ladta aaya hai Mumbai me. Isliye style bhi uss hisaab se prapt Hui hai aur dhali hai. Wahi Renshu shuru se hi Shaolin ke prati dedicated raha hai. Zaahir hai uske paas uski style rahegi.Veer situations aur environments ka upyog bhi karta hai unlike other system holders. Veer isme maahir hai baaki sabhi se. Crimson ki fight lelo. Kaise Veer ne woh blade lagayi thi neeche stairs par lighthouse ke. Kaise woh bench periodic motion me roll ki thi bhaagne ke liye. He uses his environment to his best.Uski style defined nahi hai. Moves situation ke hisaab se baahar aate hai. Kisi ek style se stick hoke nahi chalta woh. His martial arts style is >>> Renshu and Erica's martial arts style.

NOw, What rationalism is this????.. Ab tak jitnay system holders show case huay hain unn k paas aik he categorie k legendary cards kyou hain? Means veer Indian region ka hai iss liye uss k paas genral cards hain, crimson america se tha iss liye uss k paas bhi genral category k cards hain like limb substitution, probability manipulation etc etc.. But on the other hand Jaolong k paas black magic walay cards hain jo ab tak disclose huay.. HOwww and Whyyy???? Legendary cards toh kismat se miltay hain na khud ki marzi se toh nai, toh phir uss k paas same categorie k cards kaisay? Waheen Ranchu k paas shaolin fighting based cards hain and so the case with rest of the system holders... aisa kyou nai k veer k paas koi black magic wala card hota ya Ranchu k paas Beo wolf blessings ya aisay he cards shuffle bhi toh saktay thay na... toh kyou nai???????

Pehla factor... Is luck...!But uss luck ko safal karne ke liye dusra factory hota hai insaan ki pravatti.
Bahut badi hint aur spoiler de diya hai maine yaha. Hoshiyar vyakti decode kar lega. Aur agar na Kiya toh mere liye accha hi hai kyuki ye sab baad me aane waala hissa hai.

6: Crimson K paas koi buff card nai tha jaisa veer k paas veo wolf hai, right? If you say no then tis is your biggest blunder. Because crimson k marnay k baad uss k cards veer or Ava mai distribute huay thay or humay ye samajh aa gaya k kisi bhi system holder k marnay k baad uss k legendary cards he reward k roop mai miltay hain na k uss ki skils bhi, toh agar aisa hai k crimson k paas aisa koi card nai tha or wo veer se sirf apnaay stats or bertigo skil ki base par lad raha tha toh uss k stats kya 200+ thay kya? Because paris mai veer ki agility 140 par thi or kyou k full moon nai tha toh uss ki speed 50% he extra thi that means 140 orignal agility + 70 beo wolf blessings card ki agility = 210... Or iss k bavajood veer ko crimson ki agility match karna mushkil lag ra tha. uss time toh veer ki strength bhi 140 thi jo baad mai oceant island tak jatay jatay 150 tak pohanch gai thi, or iss k bavajood crimson was almost 3 times stronger then him. How????

Kisne keh diya bhai ki crimson ke saare cards aur skills Ava aur Veer me distribute ho gaye??? kisne keh diya? Maine toh nahi kaha kabhi. Agar saare distribute ho gaye toh Vertigo kaha gayi??? Koi jawab hai?? Vertigo skill gayi kaha? Crimson ka toh full status hi nahi dikhaya tha maine. Tumne assume bhi kaise kar liya ki uske paas bas teen hi cards the??? Vertigo toh na hi Veer ko mili aur na hi Ava ko. Khud hi assume karna hai fir khud hi sawaal uthana hai. ab woh gayi kaha ye mat puchna kyuki woh last ka part hai kahani ka. System ke Raaz se juda hai.

First. crimson was fighting only with the help of his stats no buff card was involved phir bhi wo itna strong tha jab k ussay b system milay 1 ya 1.5 saal se zayada nai hua, so how can he be so much powerful???

Kisne kaha ki uske paas koi buff card nahi tha? Just because I didn't show his full status iska matlab ye nahi ki uske paas bas utne hi limited moves the. Uske paas bhi toh business se related koi skill rahi hogi? Swimming ya sharks se related koi skill? Kaha gayi woh sab? Inka jawab bhi dedo. Woh Ava aur Veer ko kyu nahi mili?Iska jawaab already update me diya hua hai wese Maine for your kind information. Update me jaha Veer island par hota Hai crimson ko haraane ka baad tab woh ye baat Ava se bolta hai ki uska guess hai ki ek system holder ko maarne ke baad uski 'KUCH' skills and cards shayad dusre system holder ke paas aa jaate hai. GO AND READ THAT UPDATE AGAIN.
Rahi baat why Crimson was powerful? Because he gained more missions than Veer. It's as simple as that. He invested more in system than Veer. Uska appearance bhi kam tha unlike Veer. Woh points usne baaki stats me daale the. Appearance ko lekar shayad Maine bataya hai waha par. Crimson ke stats show kiye hai shayad Maine. Full status toh nahi, par stats zaroor show kiye honge.

Now comes the latest fight. Here... congratulations.... your oponent is blind... [claps, claps..] But, he has ora vission skil jiss ki help se wo human, animals or trees ka ora dekh sakta hai.. OK, no problem... But the problem is, how much insane system he is having???

Probably a level higher than Veer? Kya ye obvious nahi?
Obviously Veer ke system ke level se uska system level higher hi hoga.

Abhi tak yahi samajh aye hai k Mr.X or chchoor kar baki sab ko system milay 1 se 2 saal he huay hai.

Ye kaise samajh aa gaya Bhai???
Maine toh kisi bhi update me aisa kuch nahi bataya ki sabhi system holder ko 1-2 saal pehle hi system mila hai aur mr.x ko uss se zyada saal ho gaye hai. Kaun sa assumption leke chal rahe ho?? Ko baat batayi hi nahi gayi hai usko beech me kaise laa sakte ho? Kis update me maine ye confirm likha hai? Zara mujhe bhi bata dena.

Or hum ye baat achi tarhan se samajhtay hai k itnay time system kahan tak upgrade ho sakta hai toh crimson or jaolong itna havvy system kaisy rakhay huay hain wo bhi kisi buff card k bina????

Are you nuts?
System ka level up poora ka poora EXP pe depend karta hai. Harr full status me neeche end me likha rehta hai ki kitni exp chahiye level up hone ke liye. Kabhi wo bhi dekha karo. Exp missions se milti hai. Jitne zyada missions succesful honge utni zyada exp milegi. Jitne jaldi ye missions milenge. Utni jaldi system level up hoga.6 mahine waala system holder bhi 1-2 saal waale system holder ko Hara sakta hai agar use zyada missions mile ho toh. Aur, ye baat bhi kahani me samjhayi gayi hai. Zahir hai Jaw Long aur Crimson dono hi kisi tarah ki clash me uljhe hue the. Jaw Long continuosly Order ke sath uljha tha, obviously na jaane use kitne missions mil gaye honge. Toh wahi Crimson uss unknown caller ke saath bhida hua tha aur apna house of the killers bhi bana raha tha. Again... More missions for him. Veer ek family person tha. Use mission tab hi milte the jab woh baahar ki duniya se zyada interact karta tha. Hope ab samajh aa gaya hoga.

Or jaolong toh blind hai na, wo toh sirf veer ka ora he dekh sakta hai. so, wo veer k haath paun ki exact movement kaisy dekh paa raha hai???? He should not be able to see veer's movement but yahan toh scene he kuch or hai. Veer is not even able to touch him dispite of his blindness... Means, WtFFFF

Siddh ho gaya ki tum na samajh ho.
Aura ek Bindu bann ke ya ek jwala bann ke nahi dikh raha hai insaan ke andar.Jaw Long can see the entire body filled with blue aura. Kuch samajh aaya? Each and every thing...! Body ko woh poora dekh sakta hai blue aura se bhare hue hai. Same is the case with other living things. Bas color different hai to differentiate between them.Ab yahi pe common sense aa gaya jo tumne lagaya hi nahi. agar use theek se nahi dikh raha hota toh woh kya chutiya tha jo apni aankhein ritual me sacrifice karta?

So, these were some mistakes which I remember.. In real, there are many more but unfortunatly I can't write them down. Agar aisa kia toh meri khud ki aik update ban jaye ge mistakes par.. hahaha
so this was it, hope you won't make further illogical mistakes.
Waiting for next update.. smiles..

Publicity stunt ki bhi ek Seema hoti hai. Readers ka pyaar mere liye kaafi hai ye jataane ke liye ki story kis level ki hai aur kis muqam ki hai. Galtiya toh har kisi se hoti hai. Ek galti jo abhi mere reader ne ginayi thi woh ye ki ek system holder apne system se dusre system ki favorability ke baare me puch sakta hai. Veer ne Ava ke liye Pari se pucha tha. Aur usne dikhaya bhi tha. Par Ava ke dhoka Dene ke baad se Veer ne system holders ki favorability check karna chorr diya hai.Yaha pe mein thoda ye bhool gaya ki baaki system holders Veer ki favorability apne liye check kar sakte hai. Jo ki mein ab aage dikhaya karunga. Iss se plot me koi dikkat nahi hai. Par readers ki request ke liye mein inhe add on kar sakta hu.Rahi baat tumhari... Tumhare intensions saaf nazar aa rahe hai aur sab kuch dikhayi de raha hu. Ek aakhiri post mortem karne do mujhe ..!Alias ID kaun si waali hai? Had waali ya fir Dark Rider69 waali? @Had story likhta hai. Aur tum uspe aise comments karte ho jaise Oscar award wali story script likh di gayi ho. Baar baar Mera naam leke comparison karte ho. Aur sabse bada joke toh ye tha.

I have already read the referred story Badshah, It's a running story and a good one indeed.
Pehly toh kisi or ki story ko extract kar k apna plot create karna or ussy interesting banana ye apny aap main bohat badi baat hai,

Kisi aur ki story ko extract kar ke apna plot create karna apne aap me bahut badi baat hai. Did I read that right? Death Kiñg Am I seeing things or he literally wrote that? Matlab scratch se plot apni imagination pe banana is actually lower than extractings someone else's plot. Nayi cheez pata lagi re baba.So? Which one is the real one? Had or Dark Rider69 ??Ab use aur siddh karne ke liye mein kuch aur hints de deta hu. 'Ise' ko tum dono hi 'issay' likhte ho. Uske baad... Turant hi turant Had ka yaha aa jaana. Ye dekho

Well, graphed but I guess he cares more for views and likes thats y dono stories he incest may hi hala kay this is a fantasy and not a formal story. Content is going down like the great taitanic. More questions and low answers bringing 0 logic to us.

For your information my dear. Content uss muqam pe hai jaha records break ho rahe hai. Mujhe batane ki bhi zaroorat nahi hai. Almost Harr story fantasy hi hoti hai. Kya jo incest, adultery, romance, thriller me chal rahi hai woh fantasies nahi? Kya woh aap beeti likh rahe hai?

Dark Rider69 ka comment subah 2:36 AM par aana. Tumhara use like karna aur fir tumhara hi comment subah 3:22 pe aana.

I don't think kisi ko bhi aur kuch samjhane ki zaroorat hai. Banda khud hi ki dusri Id se khud hi ki story par comment kar raha hai. aur upar se yaha gandh machayi jaa rahi hai.

I'll give one first and last fair warning to you. Apni story likho... Meri kahani me dakhal mat do. Of course as a reader everyone is welcomed. But as a mocker I won't tolerate such things. Apni kahani likhte raho, don't even think of collaborating or using any of my characters. Only I have that copyright. Iske peeche pehle bhi kayi stories band ho chuki hai. Woh bhi yahi kar rahe the. No one is allowed to use my story's characters or any other things without taking my permission. And of course, permision is no.

Apna plot socho, apna likhte raho apne readers ko entertain karte raho. I don't have any problem. Par agar iss tarah se yaha aake gandh machaana, readers ko gumraah karne ki koshish karna aur unhe apne thread par le jaane ka ek zariye dena... I can see through your every move. Haven't you read my tagline on my profile?

Samajhdar ko ishara kaafi hota hai. Mein controversies me nahi ghusta. But agar jaan boojh ke koi ghusede... Then I'll tore it apart. Consider this a very sweet warning to you.

 

[Had]

Teen baar padhne ke baad bhi kuch samajh nahi aaya toh chullu bhar paani me doob maro Bhai. Story padhna tumhare bas ka nahi.
Apni retaining power badhao. Bahut zaroori hai.Your comment was indeed for hatred purpose and was a publicity stunt as well. I'll tell the reason below later. Let's start! Shall we? See! This is what happens when you don't read anything

Dear sir first of all, om a blind writer or don't u dare link me with anyonwe. This is my only id. Itna famous writer ban k b you r a dum head. Or Jo apnay kaha k yea dono Meri ids hi to ankhay khol ker writing style follow kro. Sadly it was a waste reading such a dishraceful response by you. Famous means nothing if you r shit with your thoughts. I guess your social illness is in a surge
baar bata chuka hu ki system ka raaz kahani ka last part hai. Mein unn writers ki tarah ek ek update soch ke nahi likhta. Ki haan pehle ye dikha diya... Fir agle din baith ke kuch socha fir woh dikha diya aur kahani chalti jaa rahi hai. Poora plot pen down kiya jaata hai pehle mere dwara. Sabse pehle ant hi likha jaata hai. Jab Maine kaha ki system ka raaz kahani ke ant me hai iske peeche koi reason hi hoga na?Usi ant se agli story linked hai. Ab agar wahi abhi mein disclose kar dunga toh matlab hi kya itni brainstorming ka? Update update bas padh lete ho, comments me mein jo details deta hu woh padhna nahi hai. Tumhare alawa kisi ne pichhle kayi mahino se ye nahi pucha ki system ka raaz kyu nahi khul Raha. Kyuki unko pata hai. Woh legit readers hai jo mere comments par dhyaan dete hai.Kisne kaha Nidhi ghaas tak nahi daal rahi? Kya padh rahe ho? Ye baat sabhi ko pata hai par tumhe nahi samajh aa rahi toh fir samjha deta hu. Nidhi ek divorcee hai. Veer se 8-9 saal badi hai. Veer uska student hai. Aur upar se woh do baccho ki maa hai. Inn lines ko dobara padhna ek baar. Divorcee! 8-9 years age gap! Student teacher relationship! And, 2 kids...!Matlab samajh rahe ho? Kaun si aisi stree hoti hai jo apne 8-9 yrs Age gap waale student ke saath, aur divorcee aur baccho ke hone ke baad uske pyaar ko asaani se accept kar le??Nidhi ki personality ko kayi baar updates me darshaya gaya hai. Woh reserved kind of person hai. Bhala woh kaise Veer ko accept kar sakti hai.Samaaj naam ki koi cheez hoti hai. Samaaj kaise dekhega, Veer aur uska parivar kaise unhe dekhega. Baccho par kya asar padega bade hoke ye baat pata lagne par? Nidhi koi chutiya nahi hai jo bas physical need ke liye ek young aadmi ko accept kar le. It's obvious ki woh ye sab deny karegi hi... Because she has some feelings for Veer too. Ye toh updates padh ke hi pata lag gaya tha. Baar baar uski saansein tez hona, Veer se nazre chura ke bhaag jaana ki kahi woh kuch galat na kar de. Obviously wo bhaagegi hi... aisi aurat ki sthiti aur uske dil ko nahi samjhoge to kuch nahi samajh paoge. And, plot me unka koi role hoga tabhi toh woh exist kar rahi hai na? Pehle incest ki spelling sahi dhang se likho. Fir pucho ye sawal. Lekin fir bhi mein uttar de hi deta hu.Prefix maine daala hai. Incest hoga tabhi toh daala hai na? Suman, Sonali aur Aabha indeed slaves hai and wo incest me count nahi hongi. Haan! Toh kya galat hai isme? Matlab chaahte kya ho? Kya Veer bas Ghar me hi sab kuch karta rahe? Kya tumne kisi aur aadmi ko Veer ki slaves ke saath kuch karte dekha hai? Kya kisi ne uski partners par haath daala hai? Jab se Veer ne unke saath sabandh banaye hai tab se kisi bhi baahri mard ne unn mahilao ke saath kuch bhi nahi kiya. Isliye, yaha par woh adultery laagu nahi hoti. Kuch samjhe??? Agar mein yahi par kisi ek female ko kisi aur mard ke saath sex karwa du toh ye adultery consider ho jayegi. Know the difference first. Protagonist ka baahar sex karna isliye chal jaata hai because at the end use wife ghar me laani hi hai. Upar se majority readers males hai. Kahani ke points me bhi pehle hi bata diya gaya tha ki harem based hai kahani. Harem ka matlab jaante hi hoge I guess?Rahi baat Tej, Bhumika and Arohi ki... There's a huge difference. Suman toh slave hai. Upar se uski seva karne ke liye uska parivar baadhya hai. Updates nahi padhe kya? Tej Bhumika aur Arohi kab se slaves ho gayi? Tej toh aayi hi kitne updates ke baad hai. Bhumika ka ravaiyya change hone me kitne updates lage. Arohi ke saath at least 2 kisses ho gayi hai abhi. Woh uski sisters hai. Unka parivarik sambandh hai. Itni asaani se kaise ho sakta hai sab? Aur agar itni asani se hi sab kuch dekhna hai toh day 1 se bhai behan ki chudayi wali stories dhero uplabdh hai yaha. Go and read them. Ye story lambi story hai. Late romance based hai.Pehli baat... Woh Kiara nahi... Kaera hai. Dusri baat... Veer ne Kaera ka use nahi kiya. Kaera ne Veer ko seduce kiya tha woh sab karne ke liye. Baat fir wahi par aa gayi. Ki story dhang se nahi padhi hai. Kaera nashe me thi... Usi ne Veer ke saath pehle pahal ki. Poora dosh Veer pe kaise daal sakte hai hum? Sonia ek acchi friend thi. Lekin, gap hone ke chalte woh rishta kamzor pad gaya hai. It's as simple as that. Din bhar ki life me hamari zindagiyo me hi aise kitne log honge jinse hum short period of time ke liye kaafi baatein kiye par aaj unse touch khatam sa hai. Kyu?Kyuki woh consistency banayi hi nahi gayi. Jis tarah se baatein honi chahiye thi waha par samay ka gap aa gaya. Yahi reason hai ki Sonia Veer ke liye Aadesh ki hotel me uski madad karne ke liye sankoch me kyu pad gayi thi. It's because of that time gap... Accha woh pakke dost bhi nahi the. Sirf dost hi the... Toh ye hona toh zahir tha.Sonia is crazy about defeating Kaera. Uske liye woh kitna important hai ye bhi updates me bahut baar bataya gaya hai. Inferiority complex. It makes sense why she didn't want to lose that deal which later could have been grabbed by Kaera. Tumhare shabdo ka chayan hi galat hai.
Use karne ka matlab jaante ho? Uska matlab hota hai koi Prem bhaavna na hona. Sirf matlab ke liye istemal kiya jaane waala...Rahul kab se matlab ke liye sex karne laga? Aur agar matlab ke liye hi karna tha... Toh unki itni parvah kyu karta tha? There shouldn't have been any care and love involved.Aur mujhe bataane ki zaroorat nahi ki meri kahani disappointment hone waali hai ya fir kuch aur...Maine already forum par kayi records break kar diye hai iss story se. So, that explains it all. Most liked post bhi yahi milegi jo ki update 175 aur upar top pinned comment hai. Views ke baare me toh jaante hai sabhi. Revos dekh lo page 1 se leke ab tak ke. Aur pages me top par hai kahani.Toh mere khayal se readers sab jaante hai. Siwae tumhare... (Ohh btw, akhir kyu bhi hit thi jab woh forum par aayi thi. )Ohh btw again... Ye kahani continuosly do baar scoop me google ranking par top pe reh chuki hai. Uske baad se Google rankings scoop me aa nahi rahi hai warna 4 baari ho jaata. umeed hai iss baar aa jayegi. Siraj bhau bole toh hai.Tumhare saath kuch brain problem hai bhai. Tum aurto ko istemal karne ki cheezon ki tarah dekh rahe ho. You have a serious problem with you. Veer Suman ko haq se isliye istemal karta hai kyuki Suman masochist hai. Ye baat bhi update me batayi gayi hai. Firse wahi baatein aa jaati hai. Woh seva karne ke lie baadhya hai, favorability bahut high hai. Toh fir kyu nahi?Itni females hai toh ka kya matlab? Matlab kisi ke paas bhi jaake uski choot me lund daal Diya jaaye? Yahi matlab hua na tumhara?Women are not for use. Get this thing in your head. Incestuous relations takes time. Veer ne jitna samay ghar par diya hai uss hisaab se uski progress badhiya hai. Kavya already kaafi aage aa chuki hai. Aur Tej aur Arohi bhi kiss ki hadd tak pahuch chuki hai. I don't have any sort of complaints here with myself. I know what I'm doing.I will tell you what the actual fuck is going on... It's your brain which is not able to comprehend a simple time segments.Kaera Julia se kab kehti hai ki 'I want him to claim me?' It's after those segments where Veer has already given her that diary. Woh cheezein samajhne lagti hai but still... Fully grasp karne me thoda waqt lagega use.Tab woh kehti hai... Because she has started to feel something for Veer. She's clueless what it is.. but andar kuch toh ho raha hai.Rahi baat mission clear kyu nahi hua? Phir wahi baat... Itni baar comment me samjhaya gaya hai fir bhi padhna nahi hota hai aur fir apna assumption maan ke chale aate ho. Mein fir se wahi example dunga jo harr baar deta hu. Ek baar aur samjhaya tha tumko Maine shayad. Paani ka baandh jab khulta hai toh kya woh ek baar me poori sookhi nadi ko bhar sakta hai? Matlab palak jhapakte hi..!? Nahi na? Use hazaro kilometres ki uss Nadi ko bharne me samay toh lagta hoga na? Paani behte behte jaata hoga jab tak ki woh kisi samundar se na mil jaaye. Kuch samajh aaya? Hoshiyar vyakti ko itne me sab samajh aa gaya hoga.Kaera ke emotions uss baandh me fasse paani ki tarah hai jo abhi abhi release hue hai. It will take time to understand different types of emotions.It's as simple as it's sounds.
Maine kahi par bhi nahi likha ki uske paas judo ki martial arts hai, ya fir karate ki... Wahi Renshu aur Erica ke paas defined martial arts hai. Limited to only one style. Veer ke me kahi bhi ye nahi likha ki uski Martial arts style kisi ek style par based hai. Jaisa ki Death Kiñg ne kaha. Veer ki Martial arts Street fighting based hai. Aur ye sahi bhi hai par isme mein thoda add on karna chahunga.Veer shuru me goons se ladta aaya hai Mumbai me. Isliye style bhi uss hisaab se prapt Hui hai aur dhali hai. Wahi Renshu shuru se hi Shaolin ke prati dedicated raha hai. Zaahir hai uske paas uski style rahegi.Veer situations aur environments ka upyog bhi karta hai unlike other system holders. Veer isme maahir hai baaki sabhi se. Crimson ki fight lelo. Kaise Veer ne woh blade lagayi thi neeche stairs par lighthouse ke. Kaise woh bench periodic motion me roll ki thi bhaagne ke liye. He uses his environment to his best.Uski style defined nahi hai. Moves situation ke hisaab se baahar aate hai. Kisi ek style se stick hoke nahi chalta woh. His martial arts style is >>> Renshu and Erica's martial arts style. Pehla factor... Is luck...DeaBut uss luck ko safal karne ke liye dusra factory hota hai insaan ki pravatti.
Bahut badi hint aur spoiler de diya hai maine yaha. Hoshiyar vyakti decode kar lega. Aur agar na Kiya toh mere liye accha hi hai kyuki ye sab baad me aane waala hissa hai.Kisne keh diya bhai ki crimson ke saare cards aur skills Ava aur Veer me distribute ho gaye??? kisne keh diya? Maine toh nahi kaha kabhi. Agar saare distribute ho gaye toh Vertigo kaha gayi??? Koi jawab hai?? Vertigo skill gayi kaha? Crimson ka toh full status hi nahi dikhaya tha maine. Tumne assume bhi kaise kar liya ki uske paas bas teen hi cards the??? Vertigo toh na hi Veer ko mili aur na hi Ava ko. Khud hi assume karna hai fir khud hi sawaal uthana hai. ab woh gayi kaha ye mat puchna kyuki woh last ka part hai kahani ka. System ke Raaz se juda hai.Kisne kaha ki uske paas koi buff card nahi tha? Just because I didn't show his full status iska matlab ye nahi ki uske paas bas utne hi limited moves the. Uske paas bhi toh business se related koi skill rahi hogi? Swimming ya sharks se related koi skill? Kaha gayi woh sab? Inka jawab bhi dedo. Woh Ava aur Veer ko kyu nahi mili?Iska jawaab already update me diya hua hai wese Maine for your kind information. Update me jaha Veer island par hota Hai crimson ko haraane ka baad tab woh ye baat Ava se bolta hai ki uska guess hai ki ek system holder ko maarne ke baad uski 'KUCH' skills and cards shayad dusre system holder ke paas aa jaate hai. GO AND READ THAT UPDATE AGAIN.
Rahi baat why Crimson was powerful? Because he gained more missions than Veer. It's as simple as that. He invested more in system than Veer. Uska appearance bhi kam tha unlike Veer. Woh points usne baaki stats me daale the. Appearance ko lekar shayad Maine bataya hai waha par. Crimson ke stats show kiye hai shayad Maine. Full status toh nahi, par stats zaroor show kiye honge.Probably a level higher than Veer? Kya ye obvious nahi?
Obviously Veer ke system ke level se uska system level higher hi hoga.Ye kaise samajh aa gaya Bhai???
Maine toh kisi bhi update me aisa kuch nahi bataya ki sabhi system holder ko 1-2 saal pehle hi system mila hai aur mr.x ko uss se zyada saal ho gaye hai. Kaun sa assumption leke chal rahe ho?? Ko baat batayi hi nahi gayi hai usko beech me kaise laa sakte ho? Kis update me maine ye confirm likha hai? Zara mujhe bhi bata dena.Are you nuts?
System ka level up poora ka poora EXP pe depend karta hai. Harr full status me neeche end me likha rehta hai ki kitni exp chahiye level up hone ke liye. Kabhi wo bhi dekha karo. Exp missions se milti hai. Jitne zyada missions succesful honge utni zyada exp milegi. Jitne jaldi ye missions milenge. Utni jaldi system level up hoga.6 mahine waala system holder bhi 1-2 saal waale system holder ko Hara sakta hai agar use zyada missions mile ho toh. Aur, ye baat bhi kahani me samjhayi gayi hai. Zahir hai Jaw Long aur Crimson dono hi kisi tarah ki clash me uljhe hue the. Jaw Long continuosly Order ke sath uljha tha, obviously na jaane use kitne missions mil gaye honge. Toh wahi Crimson uss unknown caller ke saath bhida hua tha aur apna house of the dead bhi bana raha tha. Again... More missions for him. Veer ek family person tha. Use mission tab hi milte the jab woh baahar ki duniya se zyada interact karta tha. Hope ab samajh aa gaya hoga.Siddh ho gaya ki tum na samajh ho.
Aura ek Bindu bann ke ya ek jwala bann ke nahi dikh raha hai insaan ke andar.Jaw Long can see the entire body filled with blue aura. Kuch samajh aaya? Each and every thing...! Body ko woh poora dekh sakta hai blue aura se bhare hue hai. Same is the case with other living things. Bas color different hai to differentiate between them.Ab yahi pe common sense aa gaya jo tumne lagaya hi nahi. agar use theek se nahi dikh raha hota toh woh kya chutiya tha jo apni aankhein ritual me sacrifice karta? Publicity stunt ki bhi ek Seema hoti hai. Readers ka pyaar mere liye kaafi hai ye jataane ke liye ki story kis level ki hai aur kis muqam ki hai. Galtiya toh har kisi se hoti hai. Ek galti jo abhi mere reader ne ginayi thi woh ye ki ek system holder apne system se dusre system ki favorability ke baare me puch sakta hai. Veer ne Ava ke liye Pari se pucha tha. Aur usne dikhaya bhi tha. Par Ava ke dhoka Dene ke baad se Veer ne system holders ki favorability check karna chorr diya hai.Yaha pe mein thoda ye bhool gaya ki baaki system holders Veer ki favorability apne liye check kar sakte hai. Jo ki mein ab aage dikhaya karunga. Iss se plot me koi dikkat nahi hai. Par readers ki request ke liye mein inhe add on kar sakta hu.Rahi baat tumhari... Tumhare intensions saaf nazar aa rahe hai aur sab kuch dikhayi de raha hu. Ek aakhiri post mortem at karne do mujhe ..!Alias ID kaun si waali hai? Had waali ya fir Dark Rider69 waali? @Had story likhta hai. Aur tum uspe aise comments karte ho jaise Oscar award wali story script likh di gayi ho. Baar baar Mera naam leke comparison karte ho. Aur sabse bada joke toh ye tha. Kisi aur ki story ko extract kar ke apna plot create karna apne aap me bahut badi hai. Did I read that right? Death Kiñg Am I seeing things or he literally wrote that? Matlab scratch se plot apni imagination pe banana is actually lower than extractings someone else's plot. Nayi cheez pata lagi re baba.So? Which one is the real one? Had or Dark Rider69 ??Ab use aur siddh karne ke liye mein kuch aur hints de deta hu. 'Ise' ko tum dono hi 'issay' likhte ho. Uske baad... Turant hi turant Had ka yaha aa jaana. Ye dekho For your information my dear. Content uss muqam pe hai jaha records break ho rahe hai. Mujhe batane ki bhi zaroorat nahi hai. Almost Harr story fantasy hi hoti hai. Kya jo incest, adultery, romance, thriller me chal rahi hai woh fantasies nahi? Kya woh aap beeti likh rahe hai?Dark Rider69 ka comment subah 2:36 AM par aana. Tumhara use like karna aur fir tumhara hi comment subah 3:22 pe aana. I don't think kisi ko bhi aur kuch samjhane ki zaroorat hai. Banda khud hi ki dusri Id se khud hi ki story par comment kar raha hai. aur upar se yaha gandh machayi jaa rahi hai.I'll give one first and last fair warning to you. Apni story likho... Meri kahani me dakhal me mat do. Of course as a reader everyone is welcomed. But as a mocker I won't tolerate such things. Apni kahani likhte raho, don't even think of collaborating or using any of my characters. Only I have that copyright. Isle peeche pehle bhi kayi stories band ho chuki hai. Woh bhi yahi kar rahe the. No one is allowed to use my story's characters or any other things without taking my permission. And of course, permision is no. Apna plot socho, apna likhte raho apne readers ko entertain karte raho. I don't have any problem. Par agar iss tarah se yaha aake gandh machaana, readers ko gumraah karne ki koshish karna aur unhe apne thread par le jaane ka ek zariye dena... I can see through your every move. Haven't you read my tagline on my profile?Samajhdar ko ishara kaafi hota hai. Mein controversies me nahi ghusta. But agar jaan boojh ke koi ghusede... Then I'll tore it apart. Consider this a very

 

[Had]

How dare you drag me in with your dispute to someone?
I am here since a long time.
All mods know that I am blind.
Tumnay kaysi fazool bat ke halakay opinion dayna hamari merzi hi.
Waysay tum her time ro rahay hotay ho k mujay yea hua mujay wo hua.
Jaysay he thora sach bola kissy nay or usko maynay support kia to tumay mirchy lag gai.
Funny
Shit man
Totally bulshit.
I don't have any dread for u just replied a comment and u dragged ne in it too. Shame on you. How can you treat others like this before checking out your own self? Also, you said that ur story is from a scratch. Don't kid me. You just have taken a tale and befitted your character into it and nothing else. You r not supreme if u have pins for your brains. If you are contradicting someone come through with solid sense. Just timing is not enough to clame it out. Or koi b her time badshah nhi rehta there is always an emperor superior then that keep this In your mind. Meri story may mujay koi fake id laganay ke zaruret nhi it's going well because of its better content. Maybe you do it yourself that is why u feel for others too but your psychy should onlysfay with you. Understood? Don't feel that my blindness can resist me on getting to someone who thinks nothing but I'll for the weak onezs. I am not weak nor is my story. Baki tumara attitude he kafi hi readers ko scatter krnay k liathey don't acquire anything. Best of luck and do look to yourself before raising your nonsense logics. Especially to a blind one because we can tear your famous image down in no time. Samjay tum. Rip.

 

[hemya]

Teen baar padhne ke baad bhi kuch samajh nahi aaya toh chullu bhar paani me doob maro Bhai. Story padhna tumhare bas ka nahi.
Apni retaining power badhao. Bahut zaroori hai.

Your comment was indeed for hatred purpose and was a publicity stunt as well. I'll tell the reason below later. Let's start! Shall we?

See! This is what happens when you don't read anything carefully.100 baar bata chuka hu ki system ka raaz kahani ka last part hai. Mein unn writers ki tarah ek ek update soch ke nahi likhta. Ki haan pehle ye dikha diya... Fir agle din baith ke kuch socha fir woh dikha diya aur kahani chalti jaa rahi hai. Poora plot pen down kiya jaata hai pehle mere dwara. Sabse pehle ant hi likha jaata hai. Jab Maine kaha ki system ka raaz kahani ke ant me hai iske peeche koi reason hi hoga na?Usi ant se agli story linked hai. Ab agar wahi abhi mein disclose kar dunga toh matlab hi kya itni brainstorming ka? Update update bas padh lete ho, comments me mein jo details deta hu woh padhna nahi hai. Tumhare alawa kisi ne pichhle kayi mahino se ye nahi pucha ki system ka raaz kyu nahi khul Raha. Kyuki unko pata hai. Woh legit readers hai jo mere comments par dhyaan dete hai.

Kisne kaha Nidhi ghaas tak nahi daal rahi? Kya padh rahe ho? Ye baat sabhi ko pata hai par tumhe nahi samajh aa rahi toh fir samjha deta hu. Nidhi ek divorcee hai. Veer se 8-9 saal badi hai. Veer uska student hai. Aur upar se woh do baccho ki maa hai. Inn lines ko dobara padhna ek baar. Divorcee! 8-9 years age gap! Student teacher relationship! And, 2 kids...!Matlab samajh rahe ho? Kaun si aisi stree hoti hai jo apne 8-9 yrs Age gap waale student ke saath, aur divorcee aur baccho ke hone ke baad uske pyaar ko asaani se accept kar le??Nidhi ki personality ko kayi baar updates me darshaya gaya hai. Woh reserved kind of person hai. Bhala woh kaise Veer ko accept kar sakti hai.Samaaj naam ki koi cheez hoti hai. Samaaj kaise dekhega, Veer aur uska parivar kaise unhe dekhega. Baccho par kya asar padega bade hoke ye baat pata lagne par? Nidhi koi chutiya nahi hai jo bas physical need ke liye ek young aadmi ko accept kar le. It's obvious ki woh ye sab deny karegi hi... Because she has some feelings for Veer too. Ye toh updates padh ke hi pata lag gaya tha. Baar baar uski saansein tez hona, Veer se nazre chura ke bhaag jaana ki kahi woh kuch galat na kar de. Obviously wo bhaagegi hi... aisi aurat ki sthiti aur uske dil ko nahi samjhoge to kuch nahi samajh paoge. And, plot me unka koi role hoga tabhi toh woh exist kar rahi hai na?

Pehle incest ki spelling sahi dhang se likho. Fir pucho ye sawal. Lekin fir bhi mein uttar de hi deta hu.Prefix maine daala hai. Incest hoga tabhi toh daala hai na? Suman, Sonali aur Aabha indeed slaves hai and wo incest me count nahi hongi. Haan! Toh kya galat hai isme? Matlab chaahte kya ho? Kya Veer bas Ghar me hi sab kuch karta rahe? Kya tumne kisi aur aadmi ko Veer ki slaves ke saath kuch karte dekha hai? Kya kisi ne uski partners par haath daala hai? Jab se Veer ne unke saath sabandh banaye hai tab se kisi bhi baahri mard ne unn mahilao ke saath kuch bhi nahi kiya. Isliye, yaha par woh adultery laagu nahi hoti. Kuch samjhe??? Agar mein yahi par kisi ek female ko kisi aur mard ke saath sex karwa du toh ye adultery consider ho jayegi. Know the difference first. Protagonist ka baahar sex karna isliye chal jaata hai because at the end use wife ghar me laani hi hai. Upar se majority readers males hai. Kahani ke points me bhi pehle hi bata diya gaya tha ki harem based hai kahani. Harem ka matlab jaante hi hoge I guess?Rahi baat Tej, Bhumika and Arohi ki... There's a huge difference. Suman toh slave hai. Upar se uski seva karne ke liye uska parivar baadhya hai. Updates nahi padhe kya? Tej Bhumika aur Arohi kab se slaves ho gayi? Tej toh aayi hi kitne updates ke baad hai. Bhumika ka ravaiyya change hone me kitne updates lage. Arohi ke saath at least 2 kisses ho gayi hai abhi. Woh uski sisters hai. Unka parivarik sambandh hai. Itni asaani se kaise ho sakta hai sab? Aur agar itni asani se hi sab kuch dekhna hai toh day 1 se bhai behan ki chudayi wali stories dhero uplabdh hai yaha. Go and read them. Ye story lambi story hai. Late romance based hai.

Pehli baat... Woh Kiara nahi... Kaera hai. Dusri baat... Veer ne Kaera ka use nahi kiya. Kaera ne Veer ko seduce kiya tha woh sab karne ke liye. Baat fir wahi par aa gayi. Ki story dhang se nahi padhi hai. Kaera nashe me thi... Usi ne Veer ke saath pehle pahal ki. Poora dosh Veer pe kaise daal sakte hai hum? Sonia ek acchi friend thi. Lekin, gap hone ke chalte woh rishta kamzor pad gaya hai. It's as simple as that. Din bhar ki life me hamari zindagiyo me hi aise kitne log honge jinse hum short period of time ke liye kaafi baatein kiye par aaj unse touch khatam sa hai. Kyu?Kyuki woh consistency banayi hi nahi gayi. Jis tarah se baatein honi chahiye thi waha par samay ka gap aa gaya. Yahi reason hai ki Sonia Veer ke liye Aadesh ki hotel me uski madad karne ke liye sankoch me kyu pad gayi thi. It's because of that time gap... Accha woh pakke dost bhi nahi the. Sirf dost hi the... Toh ye hona toh zahir tha.Sonia is crazy about defeating Kaera. Uske liye woh kitna important hai ye bhi updates me bahut baar bataya gaya hai. Inferiority complex. It makes sense why she didn't want to lose that deal which later could have been grabbed by Kaera.

Tumhare shabdo ka chayan hi galat hai.
Use karne ka matlab jaante ho? Uska matlab hota hai koi Prem bhaavna na hona. Sirf matlab ke liye istemal kiya jaane waala...Rahul kab se matlab ke liye sex karne laga? Aur agar matlab ke liye hi karna tha... Toh unki itni parvah kyu karta tha? There shouldn't have been any care and love involved.Aur mujhe bataane ki zaroorat nahi ki meri kahani disappointment hone waali hai ya fir kuch aur...Maine already forum par kayi records break kar diye hai iss story se. So, that explains it all. Most liked post bhi yahi milegi jo ki update 175 aur upar top pinned comment hai. Views ke baare me toh jaante hai sabhi. Revos dekh lo page 1 se leke ab tak ke. Aur pages me top par hai kahani.Toh mere khayal se readers sab jaante hai. Siwae tumhare... (Ohh btw, akhir kyu bhi hit thi jab woh forum par aayi thi. )Ohh btw again... Ye kahani continuosly do baar scoop me google ranking par top pe reh chuki hai. Uske baad se Google rankings scoop me aa nahi rahi hai warna 4 baari ho jaata. umeed hai iss baar aa jayegi. Siraj bhau bole toh hai.

Tumhare saath kuch brain problem hai bhai. Tum aurto ko istemal karne ki cheezon ki tarah dekh rahe ho. You have a serious problem with you. Veer Suman ko haq se isliye istemal karta hai kyuki Suman masochist hai. Ye baat bhi update me batayi gayi hai. Firse wahi baatein aa jaati hai. Woh seva karne ke lie baadhya hai, favorability bahut high hai. Toh fir kyu nahi?Itni females hai toh ka kya matlab? Matlab kisi ke paas bhi jaake uski choot me lund daal Diya jaaye? Yahi matlab hua na tumhara?Women are not for use. Get this thing in your head. Incestuous relations takes time. Veer ne jitna samay ghar par diya hai uss hisaab se uski progress badhiya hai. Kavya already kaafi aage aa chuki hai. Aur Tej aur Arohi bhi kiss ki hadd tak pahuch chuki hai. I don't have any sort of complaints here with myself. I know what I'm doing.

I will tell you what the actual fuck is going on... It's your brain which is not able to comprehend a simple time segments.Kaera Julia se kab kehti hai ki 'I want him to claim me?' It's after those segments where Veer has already given her that diary. Woh cheezein samajhne lagti hai but still... Fully grasp karne me thoda waqt lagega use.Tab woh kehti hai... Because she has started to feel something for Veer. She's clueless what it is.. but andar kuch toh ho raha hai.Rahi baat mission clear kyu nahi hua? Phir wahi baat... Itni baar comment me samjhaya gaya hai fir bhi padhna nahi hota hai aur fir apna assumption maan ke chale aate ho. Mein fir se wahi example dunga jo harr baar deta hu. Ek baar aur samjhaya tha tumko Maine shayad. Paani ka baandh jab khulta hai toh kya woh ek baar me poori sookhi nadi ko bhar sakta hai? Matlab palak jhapakte hi..!? Nahi na? Use hazaro kilometres ki uss Nadi ko bharne me samay toh lagta hoga na? Paani behte behte jaata hoga jab tak ki woh kisi samundar se na mil jaaye. Kuch samajh aaya? Hoshiyar vyakti ko itne me sab samajh aa gaya hoga.Kaera ke emotions uss baandh me fasse paani ki tarah hai jo abhi abhi release hue hai. It will take time to understand different types of emotions.

It's as simple as it's sounds.
Maine kahi par bhi nahi likha ki uske paas judo ki martial arts hai, ya fir karate ki... Wahi Renshu aur Erica ke paas defined martial arts hai. Limited to only one style. Veer ke me kahi bhi ye nahi likha ki uski Martial arts style kisi ek style par based hai. Jaisa ki Death Kiñg ne kaha. Veer ki Martial arts Street fighting based hai. Aur ye sahi bhi hai par isme mein thoda add on karna chahunga.Veer shuru me goons se ladta aaya hai Mumbai me. Isliye style bhi uss hisaab se prapt Hui hai aur dhali hai. Wahi Renshu shuru se hi Shaolin ke prati dedicated raha hai. Zaahir hai uske paas uski style rahegi.Veer situations aur environments ka upyog bhi karta hai unlike other system holders. Veer isme maahir hai baaki sabhi se. Crimson ki fight lelo. Kaise Veer ne woh blade lagayi thi neeche stairs par lighthouse ke. Kaise woh bench periodic motion me roll ki thi bhaagne ke liye. He uses his environment to his best.Uski style defined nahi hai. Moves situation ke hisaab se baahar aate hai. Kisi ek style se stick hoke nahi chalta woh. His martial arts style is >>> Renshu and Erica's martial arts style.

Pehla factor... Is luck...!But uss luck ko safal karne ke liye dusra factory hota hai insaan ki pravatti.
Bahut badi hint aur spoiler de diya hai maine yaha. Hoshiyar vyakti decode kar lega. Aur agar na Kiya toh mere liye accha hi hai kyuki ye sab baad me aane waala hissa hai.

Kisne keh diya bhai ki crimson ke saare cards aur skills Ava aur Veer me distribute ho gaye??? kisne keh diya? Maine toh nahi kaha kabhi. Agar saare distribute ho gaye toh Vertigo kaha gayi??? Koi jawab hai?? Vertigo skill gayi kaha? Crimson ka toh full status hi nahi dikhaya tha maine. Tumne assume bhi kaise kar liya ki uske paas bas teen hi cards the??? Vertigo toh na hi Veer ko mili aur na hi Ava ko. Khud hi assume karna hai fir khud hi sawaal uthana hai. ab woh gayi kaha ye mat puchna kyuki woh last ka part hai kahani ka. System ke Raaz se juda hai.

Kisne kaha ki uske paas koi buff card nahi tha? Just because I didn't show his full status iska matlab ye nahi ki uske paas bas utne hi limited moves the. Uske paas bhi toh business se related koi skill rahi hogi? Swimming ya sharks se related koi skill? Kaha gayi woh sab? Inka jawab bhi dedo. Woh Ava aur Veer ko kyu nahi mili?Iska jawaab already update me diya hua hai wese Maine for your kind information. Update me jaha Veer island par hota Hai crimson ko haraane ka baad tab woh ye baat Ava se bolta hai ki uska guess hai ki ek system holder ko maarne ke baad uski 'KUCH' skills and cards shayad dusre system holder ke paas aa jaate hai. GO AND READ THAT UPDATE AGAIN.
Rahi baat why Crimson was powerful? Because he gained more missions than Veer. It's as simple as that. He invested more in system than Veer. Uska appearance bhi kam tha unlike Veer. Woh points usne baaki stats me daale the. Appearance ko lekar shayad Maine bataya hai waha par. Crimson ke stats show kiye hai shayad Maine. Full status toh nahi, par stats zaroor show kiye honge.

Probably a level higher than Veer? Kya ye obvious nahi?
Obviously Veer ke system ke level se uska system level higher hi hoga.

Ye kaise samajh aa gaya Bhai???
Maine toh kisi bhi update me aisa kuch nahi bataya ki sabhi system holder ko 1-2 saal pehle hi system mila hai aur mr.x ko uss se zyada saal ho gaye hai. Kaun sa assumption leke chal rahe ho?? Ko baat batayi hi nahi gayi hai usko beech me kaise laa sakte ho? Kis update me maine ye confirm likha hai? Zara mujhe bhi bata dena.

Are you nuts?
System ka level up poora ka poora EXP pe depend karta hai. Harr full status me neeche end me likha rehta hai ki kitni exp chahiye level up hone ke liye. Kabhi wo bhi dekha karo. Exp missions se milti hai. Jitne zyada missions succesful honge utni zyada exp milegi. Jitne jaldi ye missions milenge. Utni jaldi system level up hoga.6 mahine waala system holder bhi 1-2 saal waale system holder ko Hara sakta hai agar use zyada missions mile ho toh. Aur, ye baat bhi kahani me samjhayi gayi hai. Zahir hai Jaw Long aur Crimson dono hi kisi tarah ki clash me uljhe hue the. Jaw Long continuosly Order ke sath uljha tha, obviously na jaane use kitne missions mil gaye honge. Toh wahi Crimson uss unknown caller ke saath bhida hua tha aur apna house of the killers bhi bana raha tha. Again... More missions for him. Veer ek family person tha. Use mission tab hi milte the jab woh baahar ki duniya se zyada interact karta tha. Hope ab samajh aa gaya hoga.

Siddh ho gaya ki tum na samajh ho.
Aura ek Bindu bann ke ya ek jwala bann ke nahi dikh raha hai insaan ke andar.Jaw Long can see the entire body filled with blue aura. Kuch samajh aaya? Each and every thing...! Body ko woh poora dekh sakta hai blue aura se bhare hue hai. Same is the case with other living things. Bas color different hai to differentiate between them.Ab yahi pe common sense aa gaya jo tumne lagaya hi nahi. agar use theek se nahi dikh raha hota toh woh kya chutiya tha jo apni aankhein ritual me sacrifice karta?

Publicity stunt ki bhi ek Seema hoti hai. Readers ka pyaar mere liye kaafi hai ye jataane ke liye ki story kis level ki hai aur kis muqam ki hai. Galtiya toh har kisi se hoti hai. Ek galti jo abhi mere reader ne ginayi thi woh ye ki ek system holder apne system se dusre system ki favorability ke baare me puch sakta hai. Veer ne Ava ke liye Pari se pucha tha. Aur usne dikhaya bhi tha. Par Ava ke dhoka Dene ke baad se Veer ne system holders ki favorability check karna chorr diya hai.Yaha pe mein thoda ye bhool gaya ki baaki system holders Veer ki favorability apne liye check kar sakte hai. Jo ki mein ab aage dikhaya karunga. Iss se plot me koi dikkat nahi hai. Par readers ki request ke liye mein inhe add on kar sakta hu.Rahi baat tumhari... Tumhare intensions saaf nazar aa rahe hai aur sab kuch dikhayi de raha hu. Ek aakhiri post mortem karne do mujhe ..!Alias ID kaun si waali hai? Had waali ya fir Dark Rider69 waali? @Had story likhta hai. Aur tum uspe aise comments karte ho jaise Oscar award wali story script likh di gayi ho. Baar baar Mera naam leke comparison karte ho. Aur sabse bada joke toh ye tha.

Kisi aur ki story ko extract kar ke apna plot create karna apne aap me bahut badi baat hai. Did I read that right? Death Kiñg Am I seeing things or he literally wrote that? Matlab scratch se plot apni imagination pe banana is actually lower than extractings someone else's plot. Nayi cheez pata lagi re baba.So? Which one is the real one? Had or Dark Rider69 ??Ab use aur siddh karne ke liye mein kuch aur hints de deta hu. 'Ise' ko tum dono hi 'issay' likhte ho. Uske baad... Turant hi turant Had ka yaha aa jaana. Ye dekho

For your information my dear. Content uss muqam pe hai jaha records break ho rahe hai. Mujhe batane ki bhi zaroorat nahi hai. Almost Harr story fantasy hi hoti hai. Kya jo incest, adultery, romance, thriller me chal rahi hai woh fantasies nahi? Kya woh aap beeti likh rahe hai?

Dark Rider69 ka comment subah 2:36 AM par aana. Tumhara use like karna aur fir tumhara hi comment subah 3:22 pe aana.

I don't think kisi ko bhi aur kuch samjhane ki zaroorat hai. Banda khud hi ki dusri Id se khud hi ki story par comment kar raha hai. aur upar se yaha gandh machayi jaa rahi hai.

I'll give one first and last fair warning to you. Apni story likho... Meri kahani me dakhal mat do. Of course as a reader everyone is welcomed. But as a mocker I won't tolerate such things. Apni kahani likhte raho, don't even think of collaborating or using any of my characters. Only I have that copyright. Iske peeche pehle bhi kayi stories band ho chuki hai. Woh bhi yahi kar rahe the. No one is allowed to use my story's characters or any other things without taking my permission. And of course, permision is no.

Apna plot socho, apna likhte raho apne readers ko entertain karte raho. I don't have any problem. Par agar iss tarah se yaha aake gandh machaana, readers ko gumraah karne ki koshish karna aur unhe apne thread par le jaane ka ek zariye dena... I can see through your every move. Haven't you read my tagline on my profile?

Samajhdar ko ishara kaafi hota hai. Mein controversies me nahi ghusta. But agar jaan boojh ke koi ghusede... Then I'll tore it apart. Consider this a very sweet warning to you.

Vahi to main bolu, bhai publicity stunt hai , vaise main comments delete ke sakht khilaf hota hu , lekin aisi comments ka intention saaf najar aa raha hai.Un comments me mujhe ek bhi neat criticism nahi dikha . Jyada se jyada bass gumrah karne ke liye hai naye readers ko .

 

[Had]

Also you saw through my move haha. I think you afraid of losing your audience and you r totally social blind bud. Haha. Feel sorry for u itna famous writer itna derta hi wo b muj blind individual say. Yad rakho k mainframe system meray pass hi. Not you. So chill.

 

[wolf123]

Also you saw through my move haha. I think you afraid of losing your audience and you r totally social blind bud. Haha. Feel sorry for u itna famous writer itna derta hi wo b muj blind individual say. Yad rakho k mainframe system meray pass hi. Not you. So chill.

Bhai jitne tumari story pe views nhi he us se ziyada to wolf bhai ki story pe comments hain aur wolf bhai ki story subse achi he

 

[Werewolf]

How dare you drag me in with your dispute to someone?
I am here since a long time.
All mods know that I am blind.
Tumnay kaysi fazool bat ke halakay opinion dayna hamari merzi hi.
Waysay tum her time ro rahay hotay ho k mujay yea hua mujay wo hua.
Jaysay he thora sach bola kissy nay or usko maynay support kia to tumay mirchy lag gai.
Funny
Shit man
Totally bulshit.
I don't have any dread for u just replied a comment and u dragged ne in it too. Shame on you. How can you treat others like this before checking out your own self? Also, you said that ur story is from a scratch. Don't kid me. You just have taken a tale and befitted your character into it and nothing else. You r not supreme if u have pins for your brains. If you are contradicting someone come through with solid sense. Just timing is not enough to clame it out. Or koi b her time badshah nhi rehta there is always an emperor superior then that keep this In your mind. Meri story may mujay koi fake id laganay ke zaruret nhi it's going well because of its better content. Maybe you do it yourself that is why u feel for others too but your psychy should onlysfay with you. Understood? Don't feel that my blindness can resist me on getting to someone who thinks nothing but I'll for the weak onezs. I am not weak nor is my story. Baki tumara attitude he kafi hi readers ko scatter krnay k liathey don't acquire anything. Best of luck and do look to yourself before raising your nonsense logics. Especially to a blind one because we can tear your famous image down in no time. Samjay tum. Rip.

Angrezi nahi aati toh mat bola Karo.
Spellings nahi aati toh unhe seekho.
Mujhe 5 saal ho gaye hai iss forum par. Kisi bhi chutiyape ko dekh ke hi samajh jaata hu kya intention hai uska.

Ab tumhare double standards mein fir ek baar expose karta hu. Kitna khulwaoge aur?

Ek taraf tum kehte ho

yea wearwolf bai jaysi perfect to nahi hogi per its going to be my attempt to match the expectations of the readers.

Aur dusri taraf tum yaha aake ye kehte ho

Well, graphed but I guess he cares more for views and likes thats y dono stories he incest may hi hala kay this is a fantasy and not a formal story. Content is going down like the great taitanic. More questions and low answers bringing 0 logic to us.

Ab koi andha hi hoga jo use dekh ke ye samajh nahi payega ki akhir chal kya raha hai.

Batman ka two face bhi kuch nahi tumhare saamne.

Also, you said that ur story is from a scratch. Don't kid me. You just have taken a tale and befitted your character into it and nothing else.

Then I challenge you to please bring me that tale and disclose it in front of all of us.
3 saal se brainstorming kar raha hu. Aise hi nahi pahuchi hai ye iss muqaam par. Tum jaise log jab baatein halke me lete hai tab hi mujhe sabse zyada gussa aata hai.

I've invested almost 3 years into this story. Readers bhi saath bane hue hai. Tum sabko chutiya samajhte ho kya? You think we are fools?

Merae attitude ke baare me sabhi jaante hai. They know that... just don't poke me.. and everything will be fine. Sab acchi tarah se familiar hai mujhse. Ye kamaya jaata hai. Yuhi nahi mil jaata.

I don't care about your personal problems. Woh tumhari dikkatein hai. Mera unse aur tumse koi lena dena nahi.

Rahi baat meri image ki .. people just know. I don't have to give any explanation.

Also you saw through my move haha

Aur ye tumne qubool kar liya.

I think you afraid of losing your audience and you r totally social blind bud. Haha. Feel sorry for u itna famous writer itna derta hi wo b muj blind individual say. Yad rakho k mainframe system meray pass hi. Not you. So chill.

I don't have any fear. I know what I'm delivering and I know my readers. Ab ya toh tumhe stats nazar nahi aa rahe ya fir kuch aur hi maajra hai. Agar blind ho toh padh kaise rahe ho mere comments?

Kherr uske bhi dherro excuses bann sakte hai. Uss baare me koi charcha nahi karna mujhe. I don't give a fuck about any mainframe system. I only focus on my story... And my readers. Par tumhari iss harqat ko saamne Lana bhi utna hi zaroori tha. Maine enough hints de di hai. Readers hoshiyar hai. Unhe pata hai ki maajra kya hai. Baaki, mein toh yaha likhne aata hu .. wahi karta rahunga.