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Update no. 119 जब भावना वीर के पैर में गिड़गिड़ा कर वीर को रुकने के लिए कह रही होती है लेकिन वीर नहीं रुकता है। भावना इस वक्त समझ जाती हैं की वीर को emotional करके बहलाना नामुमकिन है।Bhai wohi to jaisa ki tumne kaha , 20 sal m jo dono me bond bnna chaiya tha wo nahi ban paya.
Aapki baat sahi h ki wo ek din me hi Sara pyar nahi jata sakti hai , ekdum sahi h
Aur bhai terrace wale scene me wo raat k 2 baje aayi thi ye konsa payar h use to phle hi aana chaiye tha ki uska beta thand me so rha h , pyar to tez ka hai jo wo phle hi aa gyi , bhai bura mat manna par ek maa to kabhi aise bolti hi nahi ki jao aise thand me uper Jake so jao kabhi nhi bolti,
ye puri duniya janti h bro, aur agr bol bhi deti to wo khud bhi uper Jake thand me soti
Isliye to bhai ye bhavna ka kuch smj hi nhai aa rha
Aur haa bilkul sahi hai ki usne 20 salo me isi job ki wajah se sab kuch kharcha kiya tez ko padhaya, par tab baat alg thi
Ab to veer usko 20 sal bad mil gya hai ab to use veer ke pass rahana chahiye ,uska beta sab se phle hona chahiye kaam se
Usko bhi to sochna chahiye ki mai apne bete se 20 saal bad Mili hu ,muje uske paas hi rahane chahiye,
Aur chlo koi na , wo apna kam kre koi dikkat nhi par use aise har bar uspe gussa to nahi Karna chaiye, uska sath dena chahiye
Wo to maa kahi se bhi nahi lg rhi balki ek baap ke jaise behave kar rahi
Aur ekdum se veer ko bhi usse itna soft nhi hona chahiye, use abhi thoda thoda rude ti hona chahiye ek to usse wo 20 sal bad mili hai uper se aise behave krti hai mana ki uski majboori thi par ab to koi majboori nahi hai
Bhai at the end bhavna to kahi se bhi maa ki tarah behave nahi kr rhi , please yarr thoda ho ske to sochna
Aur bhai kaira wala scene to ekdum mast chl rha h use abhi thoda jalna chaiye veer ko kisi aur ke sath dekh kar tabhi maza aayega
Nahi! Tum galat fehmi me ho. Zaroori nahi hai ki har insaan ek hi tarah se pyaar jataaye. Tej Veer se adhiktar samay chipak ke pyaar jataati hai. Spasht roop se kehti hai sab kuchh. Lekin, Bhavna utna straightforwardly pyaar nahi jataati har waqt. Aisa nahi hai ki woh bilkul hi nahi jataati. Samay samay par woh bhi bahut prem jataati hai. Terrace waale scene ko hi dekh lo. Kaise usne Veer par pyaar jataaya tha.
Bhavna Veer se bahut pyaar karti hai. Aisa kaise keh sakte ho ki woh pyaar nahi karti? Favorability nahi dekhi kya uski system me? System jhooth bolega kya? 100 ke paar hai favourability. Aur, kaam toh karegi hi woh. Jab koi nahi tha tab isi kaam ki wajah se, iski aamdani ki wajah se hi usne Tej ko padhaya likhaya. Isi kaam ne uski rozi roti chalayi hai. Toh laat kaise maar sakti hai woh ise? Tej ka samajh me aata hai. Woh toh abhi nayi nayi thi. Isliye uska job chhorna chal jaata hai. Par bhavna toh bilkul bhi nahi ye chhoregi.
Ye uska passion raha hai shuru se. 20 saal baad mili hai toh ab aisa toh hoga nahi na ki ekdum se saara pyaar umad aaya. Ye bhi toh dekho ki usne 20 saal khoye hai. 20 saal me jo ek mas bete ke beech bond bann sakta tha woh nahi bann paaya. Woh adhoora reh gaya. Toh ab woh bann raha hai.
Bhai wohi to jaisa ki tumne kaha , 20 sal m jo dono me bond bnna chaiya tha wo nahi ban paya.
Aapki baat sahi h ki wo ek din me hi Sara pyar nhi jata sakti hai , ekdum sahi h
Aur bhai terrace wale scene me wo raat k 2 bje aayi thi ye konsa payar h use to phle hi aana chaiye tha ki uska beta thand me so rha h , pyar to tez ka hai jo wo phle hi aa gyi , bhai bura mat manna par ek maa to kabhi aise bolti hi nahi ki jao aise thand me uper Jake so jao kabhi nhi bolti,
ye puri duniya janti h bro, aur agr bol bhi deti to wo khud bhi uper Jake thand me soti
Isliye to bhai ye bhavna ka kuch smj hi nhai aa rha
Aur haa bilkul sahi hai ki usne 20 salo me isi job ki wajah se sab kuch kharcha kiya tez ko padhaya, par tab baat alg thi
Ab to veer usko 20 sal bad mil gya hai ab to use veer ke pass rahana chahiye ,uska beta sab se phle hona chahiye kaam se
Usko bhi to sochna chahiye ki mai apne bete se 20 saal bad Mili hu ,muje uske paas hi rahane chahiye,
Aur chlo koi na , wo apna kam kre koi dikkat nhi par use aise har bar uspe gussa to nahi Karna chaiye, uska sath dena chahiye
Wo to maa kahi se bhi nahi lg rhi balki ek baap ke jaise behave kar rahi
Aur ekdum se veer ko bhi usse itna soft nhi hona chahiye, use abhi thoda thoda rude ti hona chahiye ek to usse wo 20 sal bad mili hai uper se aise behave krti hai mana ki uski majboori thi par ab to koi majboori nahi hai
Bhai at the end bhavna to kahi se bhi maa ki tarah behave nahi kr rhi , please yarr thoda ho ske to sochna
Aur bhai kaira wala scene to ekdum mast chl rha h use abhi thoda jalna chai
ye veer ko kisi aur ke sath dekh kar tabhi maza aayega
हर किसी का अपना अपना तरीका होता है प्यार है जताने का, and obviously भावना expressions से नहीं अपने कामों से वीर को अपना प्यार जता देती है और वीर भी ये बात अच्छे से समझता है।
अब अपडेट no तो याद नहीं but भावना और तेज के बीच एक conversation में तेज भावना से पूछती है की वो वीर के जल्दी करीब कैसे जा सकती है तो जवाब में भावना उस से कहती है natural रहो बनावटी बनने की कोशिश मत करो।
अब जो चीज करने से भावना तेज को रोक रही है वो काम भावना खुद थोड़ी ना करेगी।
बिल्कुल स्वेता ज्यादा expressive हैं क्योंकि वो भावना को अपना compition मानती है, इसीलिए वो ये कोशिश करती है की वो जता सके की वो वीर की असली मां से ज्यादा प्यार करती है इसलिए कभी कभी वो वीर की गलत बातों का भी समर्थन कर देती है।
पर भावना, श्वेता को अपना compition नहीं समझती क्योंकि उसे पता है वीर उसी का बेटा है उसे कोई छीन नही सकता। बल्कि वीर के छोटी सी उम्र में इतना successful होना और इतने बड़े बड़े लोगों से पहचान होने के कारण थोड़ा डरती है की कही वीर किसी गलत रास्ते पर ना चलने लग जाए।
इसलिए strict तो नही कहूंगा लेकिन हां थोड़ी serious जरूर रहती है की कही उसका बेटा गलत रास्ते पर ना चलने लगे।
और ये बात वीर अच्छे से समझता है।
और आदमी ज्यादा expressive कब होता है जब उसे खतरा महसूस होता है किसी को खोने का। भावना को पता है की अब इस दुनिया में और कोई नही है जो उसके और उसके बेटे के बीच आएगा इसलिए वो chill करती है।
वैसे भी वीर के जीवन में एक भी आदमी ऐसा नहीं था जो उसे गलत रास्ते पर जाने से रोके या फिर वीर को थोड़ा बहुत उस से डर लगता हो, पर भावना के आ जाने से ये कमी पूरी हो गई।
और श्वेता को ज्यादा expressive दिखाना जरूरी भी है क्योंकि वीर धीरे धीरे उसके साथ incest की ओर बढ़ रहा है। So इतना तो दिखाना ही पड़ेगा।
वीर भी कहा ज्यादा expressive हैं,इस मामले में वो अपनी मां पर गया है। वो निधि को छोड़ कर और किसी के लिए अपनी feelings usually नही open करता है।
क्योंकि उसे डर ही नहीं किसी के छोड़ कर जाने का।
हां जब भावना अपने duty पर जाने वाली थी तब उसने अपने feelings बताए थे और अभी जब तेज जाने वाली थी तब tej को रोकने के लिए share किए थे।
निधि वीर का पहला प्यार है और obviously वो उसे खोने से डरता है इसलिए कोशिश करता है की ज्यादा से ज्यादा उसे उसको feelings की जानकारी हो।
वीर ने भले ही तेजल को कहा है की वो उस से झूठ नहीं बोल पाता पर सच ये भी है की वीर भावना से झूठ तो क्या गलत होने पर नजर भी नहीं मिला पाता और इस कहानी में भावना इकलौती ऐसी character हैं जिसके साथ वीर ऐसा करता है।
वीर तेज को भले ही झूठ नहीं बोलता पर फिर भी अपनी बातों में फसा कर बात घुमा देता है पर भावना के case में तो वो ऐसा भी नहीं कर पाता
क्योंकि उसे पता है वो झूठ बोलेगा तो उसकी मां पकड़ लेगी और अगर कुछ नही भी बोलेगा तो भी समझ जायेगी इसलिए जब कोई बात उसे share ना करनी हो तो वो भावना के सामनें चुप हो जाता है और आंखे भी नहीं मिलाता।
रही बात वो punishment के रूप में छत पर सोने की और आधी रात में आने की तो, मुझे लगता है की भले ही वीर तेज से कम समय तक अपनी मां के साथ रहा है पर फिर वो तेज से ज्यादा better अपनी मां को समझता है इसीलिए उसे तुरंत पता चल गया की भावना बस उसे punish करने का नाटक कर रही है।
Nope! Not at all!
Hazaro readers me se ab tak kisi ne bhi ye complain nahi jataayi hai ki Bhavna ek maa ki tarah pyaar nahi kar rahi Veer se, which means — you're totally confused.
Ab tumhe Shweta isliye pasand aa rahi hogi kyunki woh overly possessive hai. Kise pasand nahi aayega ki koi female aapki taraf possesive rahe. Tum uss way me dekh rahe ho.
Har character possesive hoke apna pyaar nahi dikhaate. Rahi baat Bhavna ne Veer ko terrace pe bheja? Toh uska poora haq tha. Veer jhooth bol bol ke ghar se gaayab ho raha tha. Woh uski maa hai aur agar thappad bhi maare toh bhi uska poora haq hai Veer pe. Toh terrace pe bhejne se kya ho gaya? Just for your information — Mumbai me thand nahi padti bhai.Woh ek coastal region hai. Waha ki thand thand ke naam pe mazak hai. Isliye, Bhavna ne upar jaane kaha tha saza ke roop me.
Ab yahi pe toh difference aa gaya. Readers se leke in-story characters bhi bhavna aur Veer ke beech ki ankahi baato ko jaan nahi paaye. Veer pehle hi samajh gaya tha ki ye saza ke roop me bas ek mazaak tha. Tej turant upar isliye aayi kyunki woh desperate thi. Bhavna Tej aur Shweta ki tarah desperate nahi hai.
Rahi baat woh 2 baje late kyu aayi? Kyunki woh nahi chaahti thi ki koi bhi use dekhe. Usne Veer ko saza di thi. Ab baad me agar woh khud hi upar chali jaati turant toh sabhi dekh lete. Fir saza ka kya matlab?
Wo wait karti rahi sabke sone ka aur baad me gayi but unfortunately sabhi jaag rahe the aur sabhi ne bhavna ko terrace par jaate dekh liya tha.
Ab woh kaam chhor Veer ke saath kyu nahi rehti? Toh kisne kaha ki woh Veer ke saath nahi hai? Woh toh har roop se Veer ki madad karne ke liye taiyaar hai. Lekin, uske liye apne passion ko chhorne ki kya zaroorat? Ye kisne keh diya ki kaam chhoregi tabhi uske pyaar ka saboot milega?
Veer khud nahi chaahega ki uski maa kaam chhore. Rahi baat wo gussa kyu karti hai? Mujhe toh nahi lagta ki usne abhi tak gussa dikhaya bhi hai. Banawti gusse aur asli gusse me zameen asmaan ka antar hota hai. Ye yaad rakhna.
Bhavna jo aksar kehti hai, unn shabdo ka arth asal me kuchh aur hi hota hai.
Baaki yaha pe bahut se behatreen tamaam readers hai. Unse khud hi poochh lo ~
Samar_Singh Silent_killer Suraj13796 dododo Damha
Inn reader ka kehna hai ki Bhavna Veer se ek maa ki tarah pyaar nahi karti. Ya uss tarah se nahi jataati jis tarah se jataana chahiye. Kripya iss par prakaash daale.
बस ये बात मुझे नहीं पचती की श्वेता की favourability वीर के प्रति भावना से ज्यादा कैसे है। I mean ठीक है की वो वीर को प्यार करती है, लेकिन अगर कभी भूमिका और वीर में choose करने की बारी आए तो वो भूमिका को ही choose करेगी, क्योंकि भूमिका उसकी सगी बेटी है,
पर भावना को यदि तेज और वीर में से किसी को चुनना हो तो वीर को चुनेगी क्योंकि इतने साल उस से दूर थी।
Overall मेरा कहना बस इतना ही है की इस दुनिया मे कोई भी इंसान किसी बच्चे को उसकी सगी मां से ज्यादा प्यार नहीं कर सकता specially तब जब उसकी मां उसके पास ही हो।
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Ekdum sahi kaha bhai"Page 4079:
Werewolf said
"Bhavna ko readers bahut achhe se samajhte hai. You look like quite amateur. Aur, mein tumhari age ka bhi andaza laga sakta hu"
Here you labeled me as 'immature.'
"It's as I've said above. Ye personal khunnas, kahi aur nikaalna. Ye kahani chudaayi ke liye nahi banayi gayi hai unlike most of the stories that are written here"
You've made inaccurate statements about the storyline and this forum particularly...
(Yaha tumse better bhi writers hai
RAJ : HERO OF THE FAMILY PADHI HAI KABHI) leave it
Let's talk regarding Veer and Kavya's interactions. Was their behavior acceptable? (Kavya ne veer ka lund chusa tha bhul gaye ? Vo seen kyu?)
Bhavana's actions seem inconsistent, prioritizing Tej's safety over Veer's. Did Bhavana expel Tej from the house like Veer's family?
( Do You remember jab veer first time purvi ke ghar gaya tha jaha bhavana ne Mumbai aane ke baad first time veer se baat ki next day vo village jaane wale the!!
Bhavana ..... Veer ab tum ab ghar jaao raat bohat ho gayi hai
Veer ko kitna bura laga tha vo vaha rukna chahta tha
Veer ke jaane ke baad jhuthe aasu dikhaye the us bhavana ne)
Veer's dignity is consistently disregarded. Bhavana dominates the narrative, even taking credit for Shweta's willingness for Veer.
Treat Veer with respect, as the supreme male lead.
Ensure responsible character development to avoid spoiling the story.
Mai shingh hu kabhi jhukta nahi hu sach bolta hu werewolf bhaiya !!
Is forum ke aap ek best writer ho ek reader ki request hai mard ka character jhukne mat do mai akela nahi hu jo ye sab aapko bol raha aise
Apne comments deko bohat logo ne bola hai aisa
Thankyou
Regards
Your virtual brother
Bhavna veer se sahi tarah se behave nahi kr rhi , bhavna ka role muej bhi kuch sahi nahi lag raha , wo bus veer ko dominate kar rahi h , usse veer se pyar se behave karna chahiye
Bhavana bhle hi uski asli maa ho lekin filhal Sweta jis tarah se uski care kr rhi h uska itna dhyan rakh rah h , asli maa to wahi lg rhi h
Par koi smj hi nahi rha ye baat bus ye kuch log pata nahi kya hi khne me lge pde h
Support you bro
And werewolf bhai u r great writer,
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Amateur and immature are two different words my nigga
You do have Google on your phone. Please, search their meanings.
What are those statements? What inaccurate statements I've made about the story line and the forum?
Damha Please let me know if I've said anything regarding forum or I made a statement. Because, this one thinks I made inaccurate statements regarding my own storyline and the forum.
Just to let you know. Tum jinki kahani padhte ho. Mostly, wo meri story padhte hai.
I never stated I'm the best writer in the entire world. Or on forum. But stats do speak facts.
You see the USC award in my profile? You know when and why it is awarded? Well, leave it.
Are you on drugs my friend?
There is a prefix 'incest' attached before the title. You do know what incest is, right? Story is progressing towards the intimate incest relationships. What are you not able to comprehend in this?
Go and read Village arc from starting. Another proof you just skimmed through the chapters.
There's a whole ass arc which explains why Bhavna left Veer.
Why the hell Bhavna will expel her own daughter from her house?
Veer was expelled by Brijesh. Not Bhavna. Bhavna left him for a reason. Again, read village arc.
Of course. Aur, woh apni taraf se ekdum sahi thi. Iska ye matlab thodi hua ki usne Veer ko dhutkar diya. Yahi toh interpretations hai jo tum log galat way me lete ho aur fir baad me aake question karne lag jaate ho.
Bhavna was afraid of Harikiran and his goons. Yahi reason tha ki woh Veer se directly nahi mili ghar jaa ke. Usne Purvi ke ghar pe ye sab kiya. Lekin, fir bhi kahi na kahi woh dar toh rahega hi na. Kya pata ab bhi Veer ki jasoosi me lage ho woh? Momentarily khushi ke liye woh apne bete ke liye risk nahi utha sakti thi.
Use pata tha ki Harikiran waala matter samapt hote hi... Woh Veer ke saath reh payegi. Toh Veer ko ghar bhej ke kya galat kiya? Ye toh uski hi safety ke liye tha.
Iska matlab ye kaha se ho gaya ki ab Bhavna uss se pyaar nahi karti?Maa ke saamne kya dignity?
Compare karoge kya dignity ko? Woh sagi maa hai. Woh haq rakhti hai. Shweta desperately sab kar rahi hai. Use andar se bhook hai. Aur, ye dikhta hai. Jis din Shweta apni approach badal degi uss din khud dekh lena ki Veer kaise uske aur qareeb aata hai.Possessiveness doesn't work for everyone always. Tej ke liye work kar gaya. Zaroori nahi Shweta ke liye bhi work kare.
I AM THE ONE WHO CREATED VEER. I KNOW HOW TO TREAT MY PROTAGONIST.
And, I hate Beta Males.
English me likhne se baat fact me nahi badal jaati bhai.
Aur na hi true sound karti hai.Update 1 - Veer was thrashed by Ajay for just glancing at Pragya.
Update 186 - You see it for yourself where does Veer stands now.
This is called character development. Don't make false accusations.
No! Veer ko leke aisa mujhe nahi lagta kisi aur ne bola hai, except you. Veer already bahut aage aa chuka hai aur abhi aur bhi aage jaana hai. This is not the end. Abhi bahut safar baaki hai. End tak jaate jaate sirf mujhe hi pata hai ki uska kya rutba rahega. Lekin, mein abhi spoil nahi kar sakta.
I do respect your criticism. But you seriously need to revisit a few arcs. Especially, the village arc. You seem way too confused with all that Bhavna, Tej and Veer's matter.Thankyou
Regards
Your virtual brother
Abhi mein tumhe sahi se bataata hu.
According to you... You don't like Bhavna and she's the worst, right?
But this guy said that he doesn't like that Bhavna's behaviour. Her way of loving his son.
Both are different issues. Keep that in mind. You dislike Bhavna. He dislikes Bhavna's way of showing love.
Now right after a few minutes, he agrees with whatever you said.
You see the problem? Or do I have to explain it?Maine kaha tha na? There are only two of them who dislikes Bhavna. One is you, and the other is this guy.
Saral shabdo me... You both share the same problem. Because, everyone except both of you are totally loving Bhavna's character. Hence, it's confirmed that problem isn't with Bhavna. But with your way of thinking. Her character is just not aligning with your ideologies or principles. And, I can't do anything with that.
Damha kahi ye...
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भाई अभी तुमने काव्य वाले विषय पर कहा था कि ये अनाचार कहानी एच, बस मैं भी यहीं बताना चाहता हूं कि ये अनाचार कहानी एच टीआई इसमे लोगो को इतना हाइपर होने की जरूरत नहीं है
भैया दूसरी बात कि हमें जैसा लगा वैसा हमने आपको बताया, भावना के बारे में
बेशक आप ज्यादा ही जानते हों बस भाई पर हमने हां तो बस के लिए रिक्वेस्ट ही की थी, अगर वो वीर से थोड़ा प्यार से रह लेगी तो क्या घाट जाएगा,
कुछ लोग कह रहे हैं कि भावना ही एक परिपाकव किरदार है यहां तो उनके लिए पूरी बात है तो ये अनाचार कहानी है और दूसरी बात है कि वो काम एक बाप का होता है हां, नकी एक मां का, बाप ही अपने बच्चों को दुनिया बना लेता है वजह यह है कि वह उन्हें सिखाते हैं और सज़ा भी देते हैं। .
, तो दूसरा और इसको बैलेंस करने के लिए माँ अपने बेटे को प्यार करती है, उसका साथ देती है
पर यहाँ तो उल्टा हो रहा है
मन की अब वीर बड़ा हो गया है काफी समझदार लेकिन भावना उसे 20 साल बाद मिली एच से किमी से किमी थोड़ा तो वैसा प्यार होना चाहिए, ऐप एसएमजे लिखूं मैं क्या खाना चाहता हूं,
लेकिन लोग तो पता ही नहीं हमें भावना का दुश्मन समाज रहे हैं
वो बस एक बाप के किरदार को माँ के किरदार से रिप्लेस करके सोच रहे हो
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भाई अभी तुमने काव्य वाले विषय पर कहा था कि ये अनाचार कहानी एच, बस मैं भी यहीं बताना चाहता हूं कि ये अनाचार कहानी एच टीआई इसमे लोगो को इतना हाइपर होने की जरूरत नहीं है
भैया दूसरी बात कि हमें जैसा लगा वैसा हमने आपको बताया, भावना के बारे में
बेशक आप ज्यादा ही जानते हों बस भाई पर हमने हां तो बस के लिए रिक्वेस्ट ही की थी, अगर वो वीर से थोड़ा प्यार से रह लेगी तो क्या घाट जाएगा,
कुछ लोग कह रहे हैं कि भावना ही एक परिपाकव किरदार है यहां तो उनके लिए पूरी बात है तो ये अनाचार कहानी है और दूसरी बात है कि वो काम एक बाप का होता है हां, नकी एक मां का, बाप ही अपने बच्चों को दुनिया बना लेता है वजह यह है कि वह उन्हें सिखाते हैं और सज़ा भी देते हैं। .
, तो दूसरा और इसको बैलेंस करने के लिए माँ अपने बेटे को प्यार करती है, उसका साथ देती है
पर यहाँ तो उल्टा हो रहा है
मन की अब वीर बड़ा हो गया है काफी समझदार लेकिन भावना उसे 20 साल बाद मिली एच से किमी से किमी थोड़ा तो वैसा प्यार होना चाहिए, ऐप एसएमजे लिखूं मैं क्या खाना चाहता हूं,
लेकिन लोग तो पता ही नहीं हमें भावना का दुश्मन समाज रहे हैं
वो बस एक बाप के किरदार को माँ के किरदार से रिप्लेस करके सोच रहे हो
Phle story ka tag padhe phir us nazariya se soche"incest"
Thank you , I just shared my thoughts , overall besides this it's a fabulous amazing super great story werewolf bhaiya
Next update ka intzar h pata nahi kab 200 like honge
Waiting for next update
Veer ke dushman ab bhot bdh gye h ek tarf wo Rebeka, mr.X aur ab yaha police bhi aur wo aadesh singhaniya bhi ab veer ko bhot alert rahna hoga,
Bhai renshu bhot acaha laga
Dekhte h ab kay hoga
भैया दूसरी बात कि हमें जैसा लगा वैसा हमने आपको बताया, भावना के बारे में
बेशक आप ज्यादा ही जानते हों बस भाई पर हमने हां तो बस के लिए रिक्वेस्ट ही की थी, अगर वो वीर से थोड़ा प्यार से रह लेगी तो क्या घाट जाएगा,
कुछ लोग कह रहे हैं कि भावना ही एक परिपाकव किरदार है यहां तो उनके लिए पूरी बात है तो ये अनाचार कहानी है और दूसरी बात है कि वो काम एक बाप का होता है हां, नकी एक मां का, बाप ही अपने बच्चों को दुनिया बना लेता है वजह यह है कि वह उन्हें सिखाते हैं और सज़ा भी देते हैं। .
, तो दूसरा और इसको बैलेंस करने के लिए माँ अपने बेटे को प्यार करती है, उसका साथ देती है
पर यहाँ तो उल्टा हो रहा है
मन की अब वीर बड़ा हो गया है काफी समझदार लेकिन भावना उसे 20 साल बाद मिली एच से किमी से किमी थोड़ा तो वैसा प्यार होना चाहिए, ऐप एसएमजे लिखूं मैं क्या खाना चाहता हूं,
लेकिन लोग तो पता ही नहीं हमें भावना का दुश्मन समाज रहे हैं
वो बस एक बाप के किरदार को माँ के किरदार से रिप्लेस करके सोच रहे हो
Phle story ka tag padhe phir us nazariya se soche"incest"
Thank you , I just shared my thoughts , overall besides this it's a fabulous amazing super great story werewolf bhaiya
Next update ka intzar h pata nahi kab 200 like honge
Waiting for next update
Veer ke dushman ab bhot bdh gye h ek tarf wo Rebeka, mr.X aur ab yaha police bhi aur wo aadesh singhaniya bhi ab veer ko bhot alert rahna hoga,
Bhai renshu bhot acaha laga
Dekhte h ab kay hoga
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Apna bhi kuch karlo yaar
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Amateur and immature are two different words my nigga
You do have Google on your phone. Please, search their meanings.
What are those statements? What inaccurate statements I've made about the story line and the forum?
Damha Please let me know if I've said anything regarding forum or I made a statement. Because, this one thinks I made inaccurate statements regarding my own storyline and the forum.
Just to let you know. Tum jinki kahani padhte ho. Mostly, wo meri story padhte hai.
But stats do speak facts.
You see the USC award in my profile? You know when and why it is awarded? Well, leave it.
Are you on drugs my friend?
There is a prefix 'incest' attached before the title. You do know what incest is, right? Story is progressing towards the intimate incest relationships. What are you not able to comprehend in this?
Go and read Village arc from starting. Another proof you just skimmed through the chapters.
There's a whole ass arc which explains why Bhavna left Veer.
Why the hell Bhavna will expel her own daughter from her house?
Veer was expelled by Brijesh. Not Bhavna. Bhavna left him for a reason. Again, read village arc.
Of course. Aur, woh apni taraf se ekdum sahi thi. Iska ye matlab thodi hua ki usne Veer ko dhutkar diya. Yahi toh interpretations hai jo tum log galat way me lete ho aur fir baad me aake question karne lag jaate ho.
Bhavna was afraid of Harikiran and his goons. Yahi reason tha ki woh Veer se directly nahi mili ghar jaa ke. Usne Purvi ke ghar pe ye sab kiya. Lekin, fir bhi kahi na kahi woh dar toh rahega hi na. Kya pata ab bhi Veer ki jasoosi me lage ho woh? Momentarily khushi ke liye woh apne bete ke liye risk nahi utha sakti thi.
Use pata tha ki Harikiran waala matter samapt hote hi... Woh Veer ke saath reh payegi. Toh Veer ko ghar bhej ke kya galat kiya? Ye toh uski hi safety ke liye tha.
Maa ke saamne kya dignity?
Possessiveness doesn't work for everyone always. Tej ke liye work kar gaya. Zaroori nahi Shweta ke liye bhi work kare.
I AM THE ONE WHO CREATED VEER. I KNOW HOW TO TREAT MY PROTAGONIST.
And, I hate Beta Males.
English me likhne se baat fact me nahi badal jaati bhai.
Update 1 - Veer was thrashed by Ajay for just glancing at Pragya.
Update 186 - You see it for yourself where does Veer stands now.
This is called character development. Don't make false accusations.
No! Veer ko leke aisa mujhe nahi lagta kisi aur ne bola hai, except you. Veer already bahut aage aa chuka hai aur abhi aur bhi aage jaana hai. This is not the end. Abhi bahut safar baaki hai. End tak jaate jaate sirf mujhe hi pata hai ki uska kya rutba rahega. Lekin, mein abhi spoil nahi kar sakta.
I do respect your criticism. But you seriously need to revisit a few arcs. Especially, the village arc. You seem way too confused with all that Bhavna, Tej and Veer's matter.
Abhi mein tumhe sahi se bataata hu.
According to you... You don't like Bhavna and she's the worst, right?
But this guy said that he doesn't like that Bhavna's behaviour. Her way of loving his son.
Both are different issues. Keep that in mind. You dislike Bhavna. He dislikes Bhavna's way of showing love.
Now right after a few minutes, he agrees with whatever you said.
Maine kaha tha na? There are only two of them who dislikes Bhavna. One is you, and the other is this guy.
Saral shabdo me... You both share the same problem. Because, everyone except both of you are totally loving Bhavna's character. Hence, it's confirmed that problem isn't with Bhavna. But with your way of thinking. Her character is just not aligning with your ideologies or principles. And, I can't do anything with that.
Damha kahi ye...
Ye jo so called "mai" wala ghamand haina ye sochne samjhne ki takat ko chin leta hai
Mai is foram ka best writer hu
!!!!?Khair jab ye takat hi chin chuki hai toa syad tum nahi samaj sakte!!
Best wishes continue rakho "meri story"
And by the way immature and amature have different meanings in sense of terms
But both of them indicate lack of devlopment
(An act which can't be accomplished directly doesn't mean it can be done indirectly)
I can't call you illiterate so can I call you unschooled?
English coaching chaiye bhaiya?
Khair good day baa bye bro
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Khair isko jyda mat khicho vo mera pov tha baaki aapki marziAmateur and immature are two different words my nigga
You do have Google on your phone. Please, search their meanings.
What are those statements? What inaccurate statements I've made about the story line and the forum?
Damha Please let me know if I've said anything regarding forum or I made a statement. Because, this one thinks I made inaccurate statements regarding my own storyline and the forum.
Just to let you know. Tum jinki kahani padhte ho. Mostly, wo meri story padhte hai.
But stats do speak facts.
You see the USC award in my profile? You know when and why it is awarded? Well, leave it.
Are you on drugs my friend?
There is a prefix 'incest' attached before the title. You do know what incest is, right? Story is progressing towards the intimate incest relationships. What are you not able to comprehend in this?
Go and read Village arc from starting. Another proof you just skimmed through the chapters.
There's a whole ass arc which explains why Bhavna left Veer.
Why the hell Bhavna will expel her own daughter from her house?
Veer was expelled by Brijesh. Not Bhavna. Bhavna left him for a reason. Again, read village arc.
Of course. Aur, woh apni taraf se ekdum sahi thi. Iska ye matlab thodi hua ki usne Veer ko dhutkar diya. Yahi toh interpretations hai jo tum log galat way me lete ho aur fir baad me aake question karne lag jaate ho.
Bhavna was afraid of Harikiran and his goons. Yahi reason tha ki woh Veer se directly nahi mili ghar jaa ke. Usne Purvi ke ghar pe ye sab kiya. Lekin, fir bhi kahi na kahi woh dar toh rahega hi na. Kya pata ab bhi Veer ki jasoosi me lage ho woh? Momentarily khushi ke liye woh apne bete ke liye risk nahi utha sakti thi.
Use pata tha ki Harikiran waala matter samapt hote hi... Woh Veer ke saath reh payegi. Toh Veer ko ghar bhej ke kya galat kiya? Ye toh uski hi safety ke liye tha.
Maa ke saamne kya dignity?
Possessiveness doesn't work for everyone always. Tej ke liye work kar gaya. Zaroori nahi Shweta ke liye bhi work kare.
I AM THE ONE WHO CREATED VEER. I KNOW HOW TO TREAT MY PROTAGONIST.
And, I hate Beta Males.
English me likhne se baat fact me nahi badal jaati bhai.
Update 1 - Veer was thrashed by Ajay for just glancing at Pragya.
Update 186 - You see it for yourself where does Veer stands now.
This is called character development. Don't make false accusations.
No! Veer ko leke aisa mujhe nahi lagta kisi aur ne bola hai, except you. Veer already bahut aage aa chuka hai aur abhi aur bhi aage jaana hai. This is not the end. Abhi bahut safar baaki hai. End tak jaate jaate sirf mujhe hi pata hai ki uska kya rutba rahega. Lekin, mein abhi spoil nahi kar sakta.
I do respect your criticism. But you seriously need to revisit a few arcs. Especially, the village arc. You seem way too confused with all that Bhavna, Tej and Veer's matter.
Abhi mein tumhe sahi se bataata hu.
According to you... You don't like Bhavna and she's the worst, right?
But this guy said that he doesn't like that Bhavna's behaviour. Her way of loving his son.
Both are different issues. Keep that in mind. You dislike Bhavna. He dislikes Bhavna's way of showing love.
Now right after a few minutes, he agrees with whatever you said.
Maine kaha tha na? There are only two of them who dislikes Bhavna. One is you, and the other is this guy.
Saral shabdo me... You both share the same problem. Because, everyone except both of you are totally loving Bhavna's character. Hence, it's confirmed that problem isn't with Bhavna. But with your way of thinking. Her character is just not aligning with your ideologies or principles. And, I can't do anything with that.
Damha kahi ye...
Bye bye bro
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Well, kaafi bhasad ke baad kaafi kuchh clear ho gaya hai. Past me humne aise kayi incidents dekhe hai aur aaj bhi ye kuchh naya nahi tha. People will come no matter what to bring down this story. It starts with jealousy, then to hatred and then to assault.
The timing was a bit too perfect for both of them to arrive at the same day, isn't it?
I'm stating some points now.
1) Bhavna's character will proceed as per my imagination and however I see fit. The way I want her character to be... That is how I'll portray her throughout the end. No questions asked. This stays true for not only Bhavna's character but for the entire story as well.
2) I can accept Bhavna being disliked but to hate her? To hate her so much that you even abuse her? Indirectly, you are not only abusing her but also me. She's my creation. A creation I gave months to write her down and then to present her in front of you guys. Once you abuse her, you're actually abusing the creation of a writer. I can agree that you may come to dislike her. That's totally fine. But abuse? Nah! There's something wrong with you, seriously.
3) Updates will only come when you guys will achieve the target. A writer has his demands. Once you fail to fulfill his demands, writer himself will slack off and start focusing on his personal life more instead of sacrificing his crucial time to write here. Do consider this very seriously. Don't demand updates before the target is achieved.
4) What happened today will happen in the future too. As we are getting closer to break every record on xf, people will come with their aliases and start creating conflicts unnecessarily to spread hatred. They will use illogical topics for discussions that don't even make sense. If you are a true reader, you'll realise that how illogical such questions can be. These guys come with an agenda. I can already smell the jealousy. You guys know that I never claim to be the best writer. But I do assure you that what I'm writing... will be a masterpiece in its own league. But to do that... I do require you guys to act faster. Faster you achieve the target, faster I give the updates. It's purely give n take.
That's it. Bacterias are roaming all around the forum. It's my job to tolerate them to a certain extent on my thread. And, when it comes to them being a total hypocrite. Then, again it's my job to prevent my thread from being attacked.
Be wise.
Well, kaafi bhasad ke baad kaafi kuchh clear ho gaya hai. Past me humne aise kayi incidents dekhe hai aur aaj bhi ye kuchh naya nahi tha. People will come no matter what to bring down this story. It starts with jealousy, then to hatred and then to assault.
The timing was a bit too perfect for both of them to arrive at the same day, isn't it?
I'm stating some points now.
1) Bhavna's character will proceed as per my imagination and however I see fit. The way I want her character to be... That is how I'll portray her throughout the end. No questions asked. This stays true for not only Bhavna's character but for the entire story as well.
2) I can accept Bhavna being disliked but to hate her? To hate her so much that you even abuse her? Indirectly, you are not only abusing her but also me. She's my creation. A creation I gave months to write her down and then to present her in front of you guys. Once you abuse her, you're actually abusing the creation of a writer. I can agree that you may come to dislike her. That's totally fine. But abuse? Nah! There's something wrong with you, seriously.
3) Updates will only come when you guys will achieve the target. A writer has his demands. Once you fail to fulfill his demands, writer himself will slack off and start focusing on his personal life more instead of sacrificing his crucial time to write here. Do consider this very seriously. Don't demand updates before the target is achieved.
4) What happened today will happen in the future too. As we are getting closer to break every record on xf, people will come with their aliases and start creating conflicts unnecessarily to spread hatred. They will use illogical topics for discussions that don't even make sense. If you are a true reader, you'll realise that how illogical such questions can be. These guys come with an agenda. I can already smell the jealousy. You guys know that I never claim to be the best writer. But I do assure you that what I'm writing... will be a masterpiece in its own league. But to do that... I do require you guys to act faster. Faster you achieve the target, faster I give the updates. It's purely give n take.
That's it. Bacterias are roaming all around the forum. It's my job to tolerate them to a certain extent on my thread. And, when it comes to them being a total hypocrite. Then, again it's my job to prevent my thread from being attacked.
Be wise.
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Couldn't have explained better.
I agree with your vision. Logically dekha jaaye toh Bhavna ki favourability higher honi chahiye Shweta se, right?
But here's the reason why it is behind Shweta's for now.
Bhavna holds purely motherly affection towards Veer. While Shweta on the other hand not only hold motherly affection but also a sexual tension towards Veer. Her letting him suck her breasts, seeing him all grown up in an intimate manner to even touching his manhood after Suman's influence. That just adds up some extra points to her favourability.
Didn't toh ever wonder? Why does Suman's favourability is above 200? Bhavna ek maa hai toh uski toh Suman se definitely above honi chahiye na? Suman toh slave hai bas.
It's because of that sexual relationship. The lust she has for Veer and the way Veer satisfies her high sex hunger just intensifies her love towards him. Hence, her 200+ favourability.
I hope ab samajh aa gaya hoga. This isn't the final favourability list. Aage ye badlengi hi. We might see Bhavna's even crossing Shweta's favourability. Who knows what events are there to arrive yet.