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First of all, I would like to appreciate you for the efforts you've been putting in this story, for more than an year now. The last update, it was huge, let's not talk about the quality right now, but the length was fucking insane. Around 8k words, as you mentioned there, deserves a lot of appreciation.
And when you talk about quality!? Well, that's one word which has become synonymous to this story now. Every update revolves around multiple scenes, multiple locations and explores multiple emotions, but the way you weave each of them together through that superb narration makes it even more special. The last update proved it yet again, that the way you present all those emotions and feelings in a single update, makes you different from so many other writers. The Bhavna & Tejal scene, Arohi's shyness and Kavya being Kavya, the little conversation between Ava & Veer, Veer saving Eric & Terashima and finally, that insane fight scene... As I said in my last comment, proper goosebumps!!
It was understood that Veer was not going to have an easy time facing Crimson. There were quite a few reasons for it. Firstly, the writer & the story.. Aatish, Slogan, House Of Killers.. Looking at the sequence, it was clear that the next enemy of Veer is going to be something else. What happened in Las Vegas was enough to clarify that the next negative prospect of the story will have to be way ahead of all those who faced Veer in the past, but at the same time, he'll have to be, maybe even better than Veer to make the story rise a level above from where it was. Secondly, Ava is a counterpart of Kaera, so obviously her coming closer to Veer needs some huge reason, her coming into the picture like Kaera is, needs a solid platform and Crimson, provides that too. Third, Pari wasn't able to fetch any kind of information about Crimson but Crimson knew a lot about Veer, even when he was in Vegas. All these things pointed to one fact only, and that's, Crimson's system is a level or two ahead of Pari, or maybe even more...
And after the two fight scenes, it's clear that Crimson, currently can beat the shit outta Veer, anytime, anywhere. Despite investing in agility and strength recently, Veer was brutalised completely by Crimson. The thing which caused most chills was that launcher, he fucking destroyed a whole building...
This man is something else! He removed his own hand!!! 
Well, the kind of things that happened recently are too much to process, tbh. Crimson got injured in Ushant, that too badly. He cut his own hand, after he was attacked by Veer with the blade, and later on he was shot by an unknown person as well. But what surprised me was the first case. Why did he cut his own hand? I mean whatever the situation is, no one would take away his own hand... This guy is a psycho for sure, but this act has pushed him behind in the ring, when Veer will collide with him next time... Ek haath se kitna hi ladd lega bhai? Ava ka mission bhi poora ho gaya hai, yaani Veer ko aur bhi rewards milenge, he can improve his stats, and maybe a card too... So, aise mein Crimson won't be having an easy time, facing Veer with only one hand.
But the big question right now is, Why Ava? What has Ava got to do with Crimson? Why is he after that beautiful lady?
I somehow believe that Grace Martin might be the reason for him being after Ava. But the questions will be answered only after a detailed flashback of Ava and Grace is shown. Her father is also dead, was it a natural death or a conspiracy is there as well? When Veer landed in France, a scene of Crimson was there when he exclaimed that he has found Grace, or he has found where she is. Is she safe currently? Cuz Ava was abducted herself, so it's plausible that Grace too, might have been kidnapped or something, and in the current situation, obviously Ava didn't get any information about her. After this Ushant face-off, Crimson is like a wounded lion. He lost his hand because of Veer, he was shot by an unknown person, Ava is safe for now, DGSI too got to the Island... All these have been like a slap on his face, and I'm sure the next thing he'll do, will blow everyone away... Maybe Veer too!! 
The DGSI is after Veer currently, I'm not sure what they're actually doing. I don't think that they currently are after Crimson. Abhi tak aisa hi laga hai ki wo log kewal Veer ke hi pichhe hain, and I'm not sure whether they even know about Crimson or not. There has been a misunderstanding but what? Jahaan se Ava kidnap huyi thi, I mean in the allies, wahaan Veer aur Ava ko saath to dekha hi tha na un teeno agents ne? They were actually recording it, kya unhe tab samajh nahi aaya ki Veer actually Ava ko jaanta hai, and Ava is also comfortable around him. I mean, iske baad bhi they're suspecting Veer for kidnapping Ava? Kya Crimson hi hai is sabke pichhe bhi? Has he done something like providing false information and creating a manipulation in front of DGSI to make them go after Veer? Ya koyi teesra shakhs bhi juda hua hai is khel se? Ya ye sab kewal Veer ki buri qismat hi hai? But jo bhi ho, abhi ke liye Veer par kayi khatre ek saath mandra rahe hain.
Firstly, the Crimson threat, then Ava's security, possibly Grace's security as well, then this DGSI, then the unknown person who shot Crimson (no idea if he/she'll be against or with Veer)... I think in sabmein se sabse pehle Veer should deal with DGSI, anyatha har baar uski aur Crimson ki bhidant ke beech ye log kood jaayenge and maybe they'll end up messing it completely. He saved Terashima despite she shot him, and currently he's in a very - very bad condition, kya itna kaafi hoga un sabko samjhane ke liye ki Veer wo nahi hai jo wo log samajh rahe hain. Mike & Divya decided to help Veer and I felt ki Nolan bhi kahin na kahin raazi ho hi gaya tha ki kisi prakaar ki sahayta wo Veer ko pradaan kare, and if they'll tell the DGSI about Veer's past deeds, Vegas chapter, then there's a strong chance that DGSI will end up accepting that they messed it up. But kya Nolan Veer ki madad karega? He has his own reasons, use galath nahi thehraya jaa sakta, Veer par terrorism ke charges lage hain, and these charges are indeed big. Aise mein wo reluctant hoga hi kuchh bhi karne ko lekar, but let's see...
Idhar Suhana Veer ko lekar kaafi pareshaan hai aur ho bhi kyun na, is baar kaand hi itna badhiya hua hai uske saath... Ashita ko poora doubt ho gaya tha ki Suhana ke dil mein Veer ke feelings panap rahi hain, aur pichhle kuchh samay mein jo hua hai, poore aasar hain ki Prakash ko bhi is baat ka gyaan ho jaaye. Suhana ki chinta Veer ke liye jaayaz hai but she needs to remember ki uske aas - paas ke logon ki raaye use lekar kya ban rahi hai aur kya ban sakti hai. Prakash is loyal towards her, but Suhana ke behaviour ko dhyaan mein rakhen to zyada samay nahi lagega sabhi ko ye pata lagne mein ki Suhana has fallen for Veer. Her care, her words, her being tensed about him.. kaafi hai ye bataane ke liye. Abhi ke liye wo France jaa rahi hai along with Prakash, kya hoga jab Sonia ko pata chalega ki Suhana France mein hai, aur Veer bhi wahi hai? Suhana's husband? Uska kya reaction hoga ye jaan ne ke baad? Suhana helped Veer in a massive way by providing him the Helicopter and Eric too, would love to see the conversation between them when the meet next time...
Ava... She was rescued, but by DGSI. She saw Veer in pitiful condition there, but yadi Veer ne hi use chhudaya hota to baat hi alag hoti. Yahaan ye sochne waali baat hai kiis mission ke baad Veer ko poore rewards aur points milenge ya nahi? Because Ava ko rescue to DGSI ne hi kiya hai. Khair, jo bhi ho par Ava ke mann mein Veer ko lekar jo thoda bhi sandeh ya doubt tha, ya shayad uncomfort tha, wo ab poori tarah se door ho hi jaayega. Veer ko us condition mein dekhna aur uske baad jo kuchh Veer ne kaha, definitely we can expect a good rise in her favourability. But ek cheez jaan na chahunga ki kya Ava DGSI, arthat Terashima/Chris ya Andre ke baare mein pehle se jaankari rakhti thi? Did she know ki DGSI uske maamle mein shuru se hi intrested hai? Don't know why, but mujhe laga ki wo pehle se hi in agents ko jaanti thi. Khair, abhi ke liye wo surakshit hai, aur ye sabse achhi khabar bhi hai, but kab tak wo safe hai, ye zaroor ek sawaal hai!
So, finally Veer! Pehle face-off mein to uski pooro tarah se durgati hi kar di thi Crimson ne. He can fucking dodge the effect of Hawkeye! Wasn't it a diamond tier skill !? If yes, then this guy isn't going anywhere for quite some time now. He surely is going to give Veer a lot of pain and testing... Crimson definitely kuchh skills use kar raha tha jismein se Pari kewal ek ko hi identify kar paayi, Vertigo!! The description of Vertigo was enough to describe ki wo apne arsenal mein kis tarah ke hathiyaar liye baitha hai. Abhi ke liye, Veer ki haalat theek to bilkul bhi nahi hai. Crimson sang huyi ladaayi mein buri tarah se durgati hone ke baad use ek goli bhi lag chuki hai. On top of that, pattharon ke neeche daba hai is waqt Veer, aise mein samjha jaa sakta hai ki kitni chotein aur injuries use huyi hongi. Thanks to Bone Reaper, uski haddiyan surakshit hongi, but still I think to recover completely, use samay lagne waala hai... Wahin Crimson ki bhi haalat theek nahi hai, arthat recovery time use bhi chahiye... Aise mein interesting hoga ye dekhna ki agli bhidant in dono ki kitne samay baad hogi! I still think ki DGSI waala maamla inki agli bhidant se pehle Veer ko nipta lena chahiye...
Idhar India mein Ragini ke ghar bhi kuchh interesting cheezein huyi... Obviously that badi Tai Ji & Chhoti Tai Ji, waala matter... Lambi chalne waali hai Bhavna aur Shweta ki ye cold war. I don't see them ending it anytime soon. But on the other hand, It looks like Tejal can soon come out of the chaos she's in. Bhavna is indeed a very - very intelligent woman, as I said in my last review too! Her understanding on everything is crazy... The way she explained it to Tejal was absolutely mesmerizing, and I think Tejal will be giving that 'sibling's love' to Veer soon! Sahi bhi hai, sage bhai - behen ka pyaar wo ek bhaavna hai jo Veer kabhi experience nahi kar paaya. Saalon tak to use apne cousins tak ka pyaar bhi praapt nahi hua tha. Aise mein yadi Tejal wo pehla kadam uthaayegi, aur jaisa Bhavna ne kaha, bilkul naturally behave karegi, to uske aur Veer ke madhya use jo doori mehsoos ho rahi hai, wo samaapt hoti chali jaayegi... This conversation between Bhavna & Tejal was one of the most beautiful scenes of this story till now! Love this character of Tejal to bits!
Khair, ab dekhna ye hai ki Veer aur DGSI ke beech jo bhi misunderstanding create huyi hai uski hawa kahaan tak pahunchegi. I'm assuming ki Kaera ko potentially is baat ka pata chal sakta hai. Maybe Kishor too! But Veer ke ghar tak kya ye sab baatein pahunchengi? Yadi kisi tarah se aisa hua to kaafi zyada bawaal hone ke chances hain, but I don't think ki aisa hoga... Ab jo points agle updates mein khaas dhyaan mein rahenge unmein sarvpratham Ava hi hai. What will be her reaction after knowing what DGSI did? After all, use hi kidnap karne ka ilzaam laga tha Veer par. Would love to see her reaction on it. Grace ki sthiti bhi sandehaspadh hai.
Doosra, Suhana kab pahunchegi France? Aur pahunchegi tab kya hoga? Ava se saamna hona nischit hai uska.. arthat aur zyada kheenchtaan ki sambhavna. Third, Divya kya karne waali hai aage, Mike too! Veer saved Terashima, so it would be interesting ki DGSI ki spch badlegi uske prati ya nahi. I hope Terashima hosh mein rahe, kahin wo behosh huyi to use maarne ka ek aur charge na lag jaaye Veer par. And of course, Crimson ka agla step, and also, mission completion ke baad Veer ko milne waale rewards...
But above all.. Who shot Crimson? Pahaadi waali ladki? Sweetie? Priya? Ya koyi aur hi? I'm sure agle do updates kuchh na kuchh bada reveal karne waale hain, probably about Pari too!!!
Teenon hi updates boht hi, boht hi, boht hi shaandar the men! Outstanding stuff! The way you've elevated the fight scenes is mental, absolutely mental! From Aatish, to Slogan, to HOK, to this... The last scene especially, completely blew me away! So kudos to you for all the efforts you've put in...
Waiting for the next one...
And when you talk about quality!? Well, that's one word which has become synonymous to this story now. Every update revolves around multiple scenes, multiple locations and explores multiple emotions, but the way you weave each of them together through that superb narration makes it even more special. The last update proved it yet again, that the way you present all those emotions and feelings in a single update, makes you different from so many other writers. The Bhavna & Tejal scene, Arohi's shyness and Kavya being Kavya, the little conversation between Ava & Veer, Veer saving Eric & Terashima and finally, that insane fight scene... As I said in my last comment, proper goosebumps!!
It was understood that Veer was not going to have an easy time facing Crimson. There were quite a few reasons for it. Firstly, the writer & the story.. Aatish, Slogan, House Of Killers.. Looking at the sequence, it was clear that the next enemy of Veer is going to be something else. What happened in Las Vegas was enough to clarify that the next negative prospect of the story will have to be way ahead of all those who faced Veer in the past, but at the same time, he'll have to be, maybe even better than Veer to make the story rise a level above from where it was. Secondly, Ava is a counterpart of Kaera, so obviously her coming closer to Veer needs some huge reason, her coming into the picture like Kaera is, needs a solid platform and Crimson, provides that too. Third, Pari wasn't able to fetch any kind of information about Crimson but Crimson knew a lot about Veer, even when he was in Vegas. All these things pointed to one fact only, and that's, Crimson's system is a level or two ahead of Pari, or maybe even more...
And after the two fight scenes, it's clear that Crimson, currently can beat the shit outta Veer, anytime, anywhere. Despite investing in agility and strength recently, Veer was brutalised completely by Crimson. The thing which caused most chills was that launcher, he fucking destroyed a whole building...
This man is something else! He removed his own hand!!! Well, the kind of things that happened recently are too much to process, tbh. Crimson got injured in Ushant, that too badly. He cut his own hand, after he was attacked by Veer with the blade, and later on he was shot by an unknown person as well. But what surprised me was the first case. Why did he cut his own hand? I mean whatever the situation is, no one would take away his own hand... This guy is a psycho for sure, but this act has pushed him behind in the ring, when Veer will collide with him next time... Ek haath se kitna hi ladd lega bhai? Ava ka mission bhi poora ho gaya hai, yaani Veer ko aur bhi rewards milenge, he can improve his stats, and maybe a card too... So, aise mein Crimson won't be having an easy time, facing Veer with only one hand.But the big question right now is, Why Ava? What has Ava got to do with Crimson? Why is he after that beautiful lady?
I somehow believe that Grace Martin might be the reason for him being after Ava. But the questions will be answered only after a detailed flashback of Ava and Grace is shown. Her father is also dead, was it a natural death or a conspiracy is there as well? When Veer landed in France, a scene of Crimson was there when he exclaimed that he has found Grace, or he has found where she is. Is she safe currently? Cuz Ava was abducted herself, so it's plausible that Grace too, might have been kidnapped or something, and in the current situation, obviously Ava didn't get any information about her. After this Ushant face-off, Crimson is like a wounded lion. He lost his hand because of Veer, he was shot by an unknown person, Ava is safe for now, DGSI too got to the Island... All these have been like a slap on his face, and I'm sure the next thing he'll do, will blow everyone away... Maybe Veer too!! The DGSI is after Veer currently, I'm not sure what they're actually doing. I don't think that they currently are after Crimson. Abhi tak aisa hi laga hai ki wo log kewal Veer ke hi pichhe hain, and I'm not sure whether they even know about Crimson or not. There has been a misunderstanding but what? Jahaan se Ava kidnap huyi thi, I mean in the allies, wahaan Veer aur Ava ko saath to dekha hi tha na un teeno agents ne? They were actually recording it, kya unhe tab samajh nahi aaya ki Veer actually Ava ko jaanta hai, and Ava is also comfortable around him. I mean, iske baad bhi they're suspecting Veer for kidnapping Ava? Kya Crimson hi hai is sabke pichhe bhi? Has he done something like providing false information and creating a manipulation in front of DGSI to make them go after Veer? Ya koyi teesra shakhs bhi juda hua hai is khel se? Ya ye sab kewal Veer ki buri qismat hi hai? But jo bhi ho, abhi ke liye Veer par kayi khatre ek saath mandra rahe hain.
Firstly, the Crimson threat, then Ava's security, possibly Grace's security as well, then this DGSI, then the unknown person who shot Crimson (no idea if he/she'll be against or with Veer)... I think in sabmein se sabse pehle Veer should deal with DGSI, anyatha har baar uski aur Crimson ki bhidant ke beech ye log kood jaayenge and maybe they'll end up messing it completely. He saved Terashima despite she shot him, and currently he's in a very - very bad condition, kya itna kaafi hoga un sabko samjhane ke liye ki Veer wo nahi hai jo wo log samajh rahe hain. Mike & Divya decided to help Veer and I felt ki Nolan bhi kahin na kahin raazi ho hi gaya tha ki kisi prakaar ki sahayta wo Veer ko pradaan kare, and if they'll tell the DGSI about Veer's past deeds, Vegas chapter, then there's a strong chance that DGSI will end up accepting that they messed it up. But kya Nolan Veer ki madad karega? He has his own reasons, use galath nahi thehraya jaa sakta, Veer par terrorism ke charges lage hain, and these charges are indeed big. Aise mein wo reluctant hoga hi kuchh bhi karne ko lekar, but let's see...
Idhar Suhana Veer ko lekar kaafi pareshaan hai aur ho bhi kyun na, is baar kaand hi itna badhiya hua hai uske saath... Ashita ko poora doubt ho gaya tha ki Suhana ke dil mein Veer ke feelings panap rahi hain, aur pichhle kuchh samay mein jo hua hai, poore aasar hain ki Prakash ko bhi is baat ka gyaan ho jaaye. Suhana ki chinta Veer ke liye jaayaz hai but she needs to remember ki uske aas - paas ke logon ki raaye use lekar kya ban rahi hai aur kya ban sakti hai. Prakash is loyal towards her, but Suhana ke behaviour ko dhyaan mein rakhen to zyada samay nahi lagega sabhi ko ye pata lagne mein ki Suhana has fallen for Veer. Her care, her words, her being tensed about him.. kaafi hai ye bataane ke liye. Abhi ke liye wo France jaa rahi hai along with Prakash, kya hoga jab Sonia ko pata chalega ki Suhana France mein hai, aur Veer bhi wahi hai? Suhana's husband? Uska kya reaction hoga ye jaan ne ke baad? Suhana helped Veer in a massive way by providing him the Helicopter and Eric too, would love to see the conversation between them when the meet next time...
Ava... She was rescued, but by DGSI. She saw Veer in pitiful condition there, but yadi Veer ne hi use chhudaya hota to baat hi alag hoti. Yahaan ye sochne waali baat hai kiis mission ke baad Veer ko poore rewards aur points milenge ya nahi? Because Ava ko rescue to DGSI ne hi kiya hai. Khair, jo bhi ho par Ava ke mann mein Veer ko lekar jo thoda bhi sandeh ya doubt tha, ya shayad uncomfort tha, wo ab poori tarah se door ho hi jaayega. Veer ko us condition mein dekhna aur uske baad jo kuchh Veer ne kaha, definitely we can expect a good rise in her favourability. But ek cheez jaan na chahunga ki kya Ava DGSI, arthat Terashima/Chris ya Andre ke baare mein pehle se jaankari rakhti thi? Did she know ki DGSI uske maamle mein shuru se hi intrested hai? Don't know why, but mujhe laga ki wo pehle se hi in agents ko jaanti thi. Khair, abhi ke liye wo surakshit hai, aur ye sabse achhi khabar bhi hai, but kab tak wo safe hai, ye zaroor ek sawaal hai!
So, finally Veer! Pehle face-off mein to uski pooro tarah se durgati hi kar di thi Crimson ne. He can fucking dodge the effect of Hawkeye! Wasn't it a diamond tier skill !? If yes, then this guy isn't going anywhere for quite some time now. He surely is going to give Veer a lot of pain and testing... Crimson definitely kuchh skills use kar raha tha jismein se Pari kewal ek ko hi identify kar paayi, Vertigo!! The description of Vertigo was enough to describe ki wo apne arsenal mein kis tarah ke hathiyaar liye baitha hai. Abhi ke liye, Veer ki haalat theek to bilkul bhi nahi hai. Crimson sang huyi ladaayi mein buri tarah se durgati hone ke baad use ek goli bhi lag chuki hai. On top of that, pattharon ke neeche daba hai is waqt Veer, aise mein samjha jaa sakta hai ki kitni chotein aur injuries use huyi hongi. Thanks to Bone Reaper, uski haddiyan surakshit hongi, but still I think to recover completely, use samay lagne waala hai... Wahin Crimson ki bhi haalat theek nahi hai, arthat recovery time use bhi chahiye... Aise mein interesting hoga ye dekhna ki agli bhidant in dono ki kitne samay baad hogi! I still think ki DGSI waala maamla inki agli bhidant se pehle Veer ko nipta lena chahiye...
Idhar India mein Ragini ke ghar bhi kuchh interesting cheezein huyi... Obviously that badi Tai Ji & Chhoti Tai Ji, waala matter... Lambi chalne waali hai Bhavna aur Shweta ki ye cold war. I don't see them ending it anytime soon. But on the other hand, It looks like Tejal can soon come out of the chaos she's in. Bhavna is indeed a very - very intelligent woman, as I said in my last review too! Her understanding on everything is crazy... The way she explained it to Tejal was absolutely mesmerizing, and I think Tejal will be giving that 'sibling's love' to Veer soon! Sahi bhi hai, sage bhai - behen ka pyaar wo ek bhaavna hai jo Veer kabhi experience nahi kar paaya. Saalon tak to use apne cousins tak ka pyaar bhi praapt nahi hua tha. Aise mein yadi Tejal wo pehla kadam uthaayegi, aur jaisa Bhavna ne kaha, bilkul naturally behave karegi, to uske aur Veer ke madhya use jo doori mehsoos ho rahi hai, wo samaapt hoti chali jaayegi... This conversation between Bhavna & Tejal was one of the most beautiful scenes of this story till now! Love this character of Tejal to bits!
Khair, ab dekhna ye hai ki Veer aur DGSI ke beech jo bhi misunderstanding create huyi hai uski hawa kahaan tak pahunchegi. I'm assuming ki Kaera ko potentially is baat ka pata chal sakta hai. Maybe Kishor too! But Veer ke ghar tak kya ye sab baatein pahunchengi? Yadi kisi tarah se aisa hua to kaafi zyada bawaal hone ke chances hain, but I don't think ki aisa hoga... Ab jo points agle updates mein khaas dhyaan mein rahenge unmein sarvpratham Ava hi hai. What will be her reaction after knowing what DGSI did? After all, use hi kidnap karne ka ilzaam laga tha Veer par. Would love to see her reaction on it. Grace ki sthiti bhi sandehaspadh hai.
Doosra, Suhana kab pahunchegi France? Aur pahunchegi tab kya hoga? Ava se saamna hona nischit hai uska.. arthat aur zyada kheenchtaan ki sambhavna. Third, Divya kya karne waali hai aage, Mike too! Veer saved Terashima, so it would be interesting ki DGSI ki spch badlegi uske prati ya nahi. I hope Terashima hosh mein rahe, kahin wo behosh huyi to use maarne ka ek aur charge na lag jaaye Veer par. And of course, Crimson ka agla step, and also, mission completion ke baad Veer ko milne waale rewards...
But above all.. Who shot Crimson? Pahaadi waali ladki? Sweetie? Priya? Ya koyi aur hi? I'm sure agle do updates kuchh na kuchh bada reveal karne waale hain, probably about Pari too!!!
Teenon hi updates boht hi, boht hi, boht hi shaandar the men! Outstanding stuff! The way you've elevated the fight scenes is mental, absolutely mental! From Aatish, to Slogan, to HOK, to this... The last scene especially, completely blew me away! So kudos to you for all the efforts you've put in...
Waiting for the next one...
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Shukriya man!Mind blowing bhaya !!
Dil khush ho gya padh kar
Update pe like thokna nahi bhulne ka.That was fucking awesome deadly fight itne raat bhi hamare liye update Dene keliye dhanyavad. Wo bi mega update
Thanks btw! Keep supporting!
Prakash toh Suhana ke sang hai na. Woh yaha kaise aa jayega!?Bahut hee Adbhut update..
Crimson ko bullet kisne maari ye dekhne wala hooga aagle update mei ...maybe prakash ne ..
Thanks btw! Keep supporting!
Shukriya bhaaya. Keep supporting!
Thanks man!
Keep supporting! Obviously.
Jab update 139 ke update 138 jitne likes pohuch jayenge tab apun likhna start karega next update.
Ek diya na abhi.Bhai aaj sabko surprise kardo ek aur update de ke…
Dhanyavaad.
Thanks
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Dhanyavaad
Dekhte jao bas man.
Bohut bohut dhanyavaad bhai.Fabulous excellent fantastic outstanding performance update
Kya hi bhayankar fighting dikhaya hey bhai gajab ka scene the...
Kya hi veer ne fight di crimson ke sath लाजवाब thi...
Kya uska ek hath kat hone ke bad bhi ohh uth ke vaha pey agya tha...
Aur usko kisne goli mari hey
Kya ohh Mar gya hey या jinda hey
Aur ye France vale yede hey galat info leke innocent logo ko hi pakd rahe hey..
Kya Inka source Itna kacha hey
Ab sab ava ke statement par sab dipend hey ki Veer uska bodygard hey ye sabit kr dega.....
Ab dekhte hey age kya hota hey...
Goli kisne maari ye aage pata chalega. Abhi nahi. Crimson zinda hai bhai. Aise kaise ek goli se marr jayega. Keep supporting!
ThanksAwesome jabardast update
Haha! Thanks man!Wow, wow! Dhamakke pe dhamakke, padte padte tension aur excitement badte rahe, bro., Phew, yeh kya tha Yaar! Josh hi ud Gaye
Ava toh already safe hai. Veer ko khud ko bachana hoga.Goli lagne par bhi Crimson Bach nikla. Pilot Eric aur Terashima ko bhi bacha liya Veer ne
. Bahut hi bada aur badiya update tha bhai
. Veer ab kaise Ava aur khudko Bach nikalta hai, yeh dekhna hai agle updates mein
. Dhoom macha Diya Aapne toh is toofani update mein, badhaai ho
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Usne already lamba revo pel diya hai.Aur Ghar mein kisiko Kuch khabar ya bhanak bhi nahin hai Veer kin haalaton Ka saamna Kar Raha hai France mein. Death King Bhai nazar Nahi àa rahe Hain aur unka is update par kya kehna Hain yeh Jaan ne ke liye, waiting
Thanks man
Veer se strong hai toh bajayega hi na.
Kuch misunderstanding hui hai.
Basically Veer ka mission tha Ava ko chhudaana. Lekin Ava ko Chris logo ne chhudaaya hai. Kya aise me mission fail hoga!?
Aage pata chalega. Thanks a lot btw. Keep supporting!
Shukriya
Dhanyavaad
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super artwork bhai
Akhir kyu? se ek puraane aur khaas reader ne mujhe message kiya (after a very long time.) Aur usne kuch artworks banaaye hai out of love jisme se ek ye Kaera ka digital artwork hai.
So all the credit goes to Diplomatic Gladiator
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Dhanyavaad.
shukriya bhai.
Aise ek aad goli se thodi marr jayega bhai woh. Lagi toh Veer ko bhi hai goli. But Both of them are alive. Dekhte hai hum aage kya hota hai. Keep supporting!
Lagataar chot lagti gayi to Veer critical condition me aa jayega.Shukriya bhai.
:ThankThe best update of the story till now. Goosebumps, proper goosebumps!
Jaldi uodate chahiye to Last update pe like thokne ka.
Ava bach gayi hai par Veer ne usse nahi bachaya. Kya hoga then?OMG
Buhat hi ziyada thriller bahara update tha bro amazing maza agya veer aur crimson ki fight mind blowing thi,
1 baat samjh nhi arhi ke ye kon he jo crimson ko dusri bar peche se attack kar ke bhagne pe majboor kar diya koi to aisa he jis se crimson bhaag raha he varna crimson dar ke bhaagne walo me se lagta nhi he,
Also ava save he but kiya veer ka mission complete hua he,
Terashima unfortunately behosh ho gayi hai. To wo Veer ke liye koi safayi nahi de sakti.
Thanks a lot bhai.Let's see aage kiya hota he,
Baqi as expected update mind blowing tha bhaaya maza agya,
Lot's of love and respect
Keep supporting as usual. Thanks man. Bane rehne ka.Mega update= Blockbuster
Werewolf bhai itni detailing ufff...
Aage ka update alag hone waala hai. Kuch aur dikhaya jayega. Jo ek bohut bada raaz hai. Wo saamne aayega.
Thanks
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Yahi to bhaaya agar mission fail hota he to itni mehnat bekar jaye gi aur veer ko points nhi mile ge aur dursa penalty bhi he to veer kiya kare gaAva bach gayi hai par Veer ne usse nahi bachaya. Kya hoga then?
monster@23
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Han abhi to sb yahi smjhe ge ke veer ne hi use behosh kiya he
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Wese to mein updates ko hamesha raat me padhne ke liye hi recommend karta hu. But this is good too. Since morning me shaanti rehti hai, to wo bhi acchi baat hai.
Haha
Aise kaise!?
Kahani apun ki hai. Pheeki kaise ho sakti hai!?
Shuru se ant tak hype rahegi. Woh baat alag hai ki jabse ads aane lage hai to forum pe traffic kam ho gaya hai. Fir bhi quality me koo compromise nahi hoga. 
Thanks.
I'm glad you noticed the different layers in it.
Yes! Scene start hi uss se hota hai. Tej ko hum tired aur dhool mitti se sane dekhte hai jo batlaata hai ki Veer ke liye sabhi kaam me lag gaye hai.
Hmm! Jab bhi family scenes aate the. Usme koi na koi ye zaroor kehta tha ki bhai aapne usko nahi dikhaya. Isko nahi dikhaya.2. The brilliance how you brought each and everyone from Veer's family into the scene.
Sonali, Bhumika, Ragini and Suman were not shown yet they were mentioned in the scene. We got to know Ragini was out for her eyebrowing, Sonali and Bhumika were into their respective fields of work. Suman was in the kitchen.
This whole segment was so good that I absolutely adored it.
This time I made sure to mention each and everyone at least. Bhale hi sab waha na maujood ho lekin kam se kam unka zikr hona chahiye. Woh kya kar rahe hai aur kaha par hai. That's what I did.
Ohh! I'm glad you noticed it.
Of course. Badi tai ji wala scene pending pe tha. Aur usse turant dikhana sahi banta hai. So I chose this family segment to show that scene.Bhavna was in her usual tranquil state with a peace of mind. Tej being again in distress and tension about the relationship with Veer. Shweta being the same, trying to showcase how Veer is her son, flaunting all the way and having a staredown with Bhavna.
Kavya being the cutest one among them all. She's the little angel. Not having clue what to say and what not to say. Aapne yaha badi tai ji wala scene complete kar dia. You showed what will happen if kavya call shweta badi tai...
True true!
Veer ko sibling ka pyaar kabhi nahi mila hai. Tej veer ke saamne extra behave karne ki koshish karti hai jisme wo khud ki asli pehchaan ko dhakte chali jaati hai. That's what Bhavna said ... Just be yourself. Treat him like how you would treat your brother. Don't be extra. Be genuine. Converse with him normally. Eventually, things will work out.
Mene jo khud visualise kiya. Usse shabdo me likha. That's it.NEXT SECTION pe aate h...
This is where the action starts. Veer island pe land hota h... With Eric...
But at the same time he was not the only one to enter that island. Yaha pe jo transition aapne kia h... To show that Chris and his team were also inside the plane. The cockpit scene in night. The helicopter picture. Absolutely fantastic.
Koi bhi cheez faaltu thodi hoti hai kahani me. Ju meri story padh rahi ho.
Yup!Ye read karne k baad pata chala ki Lighthouse ki detail aise hi ni show ki aapne...
Aur wo aadmi jo maara gya tha. Jise Crimson ne kick maar k sea me gira dia tha. Sharks ne use kha kia tha. Wo yahi lighthouse keeper tha.
My mind was...
The very first guy who was pushed off. That's the reason why Crimson was able to roam in the islands freely without any hindrance from the govt.Because no one knew that the Lighthouse has been captured. No signal was sent to the Department since last three days.
Thanks a lot dear.It's all connecting together.
The action sequenc was just...
Yes I can relate. But meri kahani me aisa nahi hoga. Action itna vivid hoga ki ju ko koi dikkatein nahi aayengi usse visualise karne me.Basically jab action scenes and fight scenes likhe jaate h to as a reader mujhe itna pasand ni aate... Samajh ni aata kon kise maar rha h... Kon sa punch kaha se kidhar aa jata h...
But this have changed my mind and thinking completely.
Thanks a lot.Aapne jo imagination ko words k through dikhaya h... Each and every scene were playing in front of my eyes. Ye karna extremely tough hota h sir...
It seems easy but it's extremely tough. Poore update me mujhe kahi goosebumps aa rhe the, kahi gussa, kahi hassi, kahi smile ki, kahi anxiety ho rhi thi, to kahi rona.
what a roller coaster ride this update was.
He even cut his own arm.
Exactly!Wo poora helicopter wala action scene. At the same time aap scenes switch kar chris and teams ki activities bho dikha rhe the... This was like a movie.
At first I was confused ye veer ne blade kyu use ki lighthouse me.... And then at climax we get to know the reason... My mind was short circuited.
veer pre planned the fall for a safety reason. He knew Crimson was here. A gut feeling perhaps???? My goooodddd!!! This guy Veer...
He had a hunch. His sixth sense told him that somehow Crimson might show up here. And he was right. To isliye Veer ne apni fall pre plan ki. The fucking intelligence here.
Somehow it worked for him. Chopper ke through wo Lighthouse me usse gira saka.
That's why He's different. Isliye to Pari uski tareef karti hai. There's a reason why she says Veer has the most kind soul.He not only fought Crimson, saved Eric and then terashima from getting hurt too. What a hero.
Ye aage pata chalega.Unfortunately veer is under the rocks. Please... Let him be safe...use kuch ni hona chahiye... He's doing his utmost.
Crimson is being shot from someone unknown. Who's helping Veer? Is he/she our ally? Kahi sweetie to nhi? Maybe she's with crimson as a spy? Aur wahi to nhi pahadi wali ladki?
just a guess
For now Veer is really in trouble.
Arre bohut bohut thanks.There's so much nore to say for this update. But I'll wrap it up here. Thank you so much for writing this and giving back to back hit episodes Sir ...
We are very lucky to have you as a writer here. Now I think I must pay for this content. It makes me feel guilty for reading it for free.
It's too good to recieve it for free. But thank you that you aren't demanding anything from us except for our reviews and likes. And you deserve much more than that....
Keep writing Sir.
Just your revos and these kind gestures are enough for me. I only want responses from you guys. Nothing else.
Keep supporting dear.
Mast update tha bai 
I read this more then 3 time ...
I read this more then 3 time ...