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me hamesha aisi kahani ko dundta hu jisme insect,fantacy,thriller,horror,romance,thodi bahut shero shayari,ye sub or sath hi saath usme main charecter hero naa hoke heroine ho aisi story abhi tak dhund raha hu nahi mila shayad koi likha hi nahi ho per koi age jaker koi likh bi sakte hai koi kya aap hi likh sakte ho mere paas itni akal nahi ki me ek fantacy story likh saku isliye her writer se mera nivedan hai ki wo koi aisi story jaroor likhe

 

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UPDATE-79​

Vo uss awaz ka pichha karte huye munish ke kaksh ke darwaje tak aa pahucha….awaz munish ke kaksh ke andar se hi aa rahi thi.

Vo awaz ka pata lagane ke liye darwaje ke chhed se andar jhankne laga…..andar munish aur madhvi poorna roop se nirvastra hokar sambhog me kriya rat the….ye awaz unke sambhog karne se hi uttapann ho rahi thi.

Ladka (mann me)—gurudev ne kaha tha ki jo ye kare vahi tum bhi karna….iska matlab madhvi ke sath mujhe bhi aisa hi karna hai.

Ab Aage…….

Vo ladka munish aur madhvi ko sambhog kriya me leen dekh kar khud bhi madhvi ke sath sambhog karne ki sochne lagta hai, aur tab tak un dono ko dekhta rahta hai jab tak vo iss dono iss baat se poori tarah anbhigya hokar ki vo ladka unhe dekh raha hai apni iss kriya me magan rahte hain.

Vo ladka lagatar madhvi ke atyant khubsoorat nange mansal jism ko ghur ghur kar uska netra chodan kiye ja raha tha aur sath hi apne vishalkaay sambhog ashtra ko bahar nikal kar hatho se sahlane ka kaam bhi karta ja raha tha.

Karib dedh do ghante ki iss utha patak ke baad madhvi aur munish skhalit ho jate hain….kuch der tak shanti se ek dusre ki baho me lipte rah kar apni oordhva gati se chal rahi saanso ko niyantrit karne me lag jate hain…Jab ye aaveg thanda ho jata hai tab dono punah vartalap me lag jate hain.

Madhvi—main iss ladke ko kya kah kar bulau….?

Munish—Ye ladka behad asadharan hai….Vo ek na hokar bhi ek hai……vastav me vo Bhoot (past) aur vartaman (present) ka sammishran hai vo jisse bhavishya (future) ka nirman hoga.

Madhvi—Thoda vistar se samjhao mujhe.

Munish—Uska pichhle janam ka naam Adirishi tha jisne parilok aur anya graho ke nirman me apna sahyog pradan kiya tha…..Kuch ghatnao ki vajah se Jab uska agla janam hua to uska naam Rishi tha jabki uske baad ke janam me Aditya…..lekin kuch ghatnakram ke chalte bhoot aur vartaman ko ek karke joda gaya hai…..arthat jo ladka ab hamare samne hai vo adii aur rishi dono hi hai isliye uska naam Adirishi hai ab.

Madhvi—Iska tatparya ye hua ki ye sab teeno ek hi hain.

Munish—haa, Kintu samasya ye hai ki abhi ki Adirishi ke dimag me 12 ghante adii ki yaade rahti hain to agle 12 ghante Rishi ki yaade….

Madhvi—iska matlab ki uski yaad dast chali gayi hai.

Munish—haa bhi aur nahi bhi…..mera matlab hai ki ek samay me usko sirf ek hi janam ki yaade rahti hain apne dusre janam ki yaad daast vo bhool jata hai.

Madhvi—to main usko kya naam se pukaru…..?

Munish—Rishi dimag ka tez tha to adii me shaktiya hain…..Rishi thoda chanchal,thoda batooni magar behad suljha hua tha jabki adii thoda dimag se jazbati hai,hamesha kuch na kuch ulta sidha karta rahta hai….uske vyavhar se usko asani se samjha ja sakta hai ki uss samay uski yaad daast kis roop me hai.

Madhvi—to kya vo hamesha aisa hi rahega……?

Munish—Nahi, uski yuddh shiksha ke uparant usko Rajnandini ke paas le jana hoga….tabhi kuch sambhav ho sakta hai ki vo poorn roop se adirishi ban jaye.

Madhvi—ye Rajnandini koun hai….?

Munish—Rajnandini uski aatma hai....uska pahla aur sachcha pyar hai vo.....Vo shuru se usse Rishi hi kahti thi..vo sab kuch bhool sakta hai kintu Rajnandini ko nahi.....uske samne aate hi dono ka dil apne aap dhadakna shuru kar hi dega.

Madhvi—bada hi dilchasp insan hai adirishi aur sundar bhi.... !

Munish (ghurte huye)—kahi tumhari niyat to uss par kharab nahi ho rahi hai.... ?

Madhvi (has kar)—aap bhi na…..chalo so jao ab.

Madhvi bistar se uth kar mootra visarjan karne jati hai jo ki kaksh ke bahar tha….kaksh se bahar nikalte hi uske pairo me kuch chip chipa pan mahsoos hota hai…vo jhuk kar ungli se chhu kar dekhti hai ..to usse samajhne me samay nahi laga ki ye veerya ki boonde hain.

Vo soch me hi doobi huyi thi ki tabhi uska dhyan adirishi ke kaksh ki taraf gaya jaha prakash phaila hua tha…. Vo jigyasa vash .uske kaksh ki oor badh jati hai.

Kaksh me lagi khuli huyi khidki se jaise hi madhvi andar jhaank kar dekhti hai to dekhte hi uski ankhe acharaj aur vishmay se khul kar badi badi ho jati hain.

Andar adirishi bistar me nanga leta hua tha aur madhvi ka naam lete huye apne hathiyar ko muthiyaye ja raha tha uske muh se apna naam sun kar madhvi ko ye samajhte der nahi lagi ki darwaje ke bahar pada veerya kiska tha. Sath hi uske mann me kayi sawal bhi paida ho gaye.

Madhvi (mann me)—Iska matlab adii ne hame sambhog karte huye dekh liya hai…..aur ye mera naam kyo le raha hai….? Lagta hai vo khyalo me mere sath sambhog kar raha hai…..chheee…ye main kya soch rahi hu…mujhe aisa kadapi nahi sochna chahiye…..par adii ka hai bhi kitna bada..‼ baap re, kisi insan ka itna bada aur mota bhi ho sakta hai, ye maine kabhi socha bhi nahi tha…..munish ka to iske aage aadha bhi nahi hoga….munish ka to adii ke hathiyar ke samne chuha lag raha hai aur adii ka kitna ekdam gora hai.

Madhvi (mann me)—Ye mujhe kya ho raha hai……? Main kyo baar baar bahak rahi hu….meri choot bhi poori geeli ho gayi hai….itni geeli niche se to main aaj tak kabhi nahi huyi thi…..mera mann mere niyantran me kyo nahi aa raha hai…? Jab adii ka hathiyar dekh kar hi mera ye haal hai to agar kahi adii ne sach much mere sath sambhog karne ka prayas kiya to tab kya hoga…..? kya main adii ko apne sath sambhog karne se rok paungi…? Shayad main adii ko apne sath sambhog karne se nahi rok paungi…..ab main kya karu…..? itna bada to main apne andar le bhi nahi sakti, itna bada meri choot me ghusega hi nahi aur agar kisi tarah se adii ne ghused bhi diya to tab kya hoga..? …tab to meri to poori phatt jayegi

Adii—haay madhvi tumhari choot kitni mast aur phooli huyi hai, kya chaudi phooli gaand hai tumhari aur choochiya to ekdam kadak hain….kitna kasa kasa jayega mera teri choot me… ek baar de do madhvi mujhe bhi apni choot.

Madhvi aadii ke muh se apne liye aise gande shabdo ka prayog sun kar gussa hone ki bajaye poori tarah se unmaad me kamottejit hokar apni ungli choot me jaldi jaldi chalane lagi…..Udhar adii lagatar jor jor se hath chalate huye madhvi ka naam le lekar antatah skhalit hone laga….uske veerya ki pichakari itni teevra thi ki khidki me ankhe lagaye muh phade taktaki lagaye madhvi ke sidhe muh ke andar ja kar giri.

Lekin madhvi ne na to apna muh vaha se hataya aur na hi muh band kiya balki ulta usne apna muh aur khol diya…adii ke lund se aisi hi tez pichakari nikalti rahi aur madhvi ke muh ke andar jati rahi….idhar madhvi bhi apni ungli se jhad gayi.

Jane kitni der tak pichkari nikalti rahi aur madhvi usko peeti rahi….uske baad vah vaha se alag hokar mootra visarjan karne ke baad apne kaksh me jake bistar me let gayi magar uski ankho se ab need ki khumari ojhal ho chuki thi….vo chah kar bhi abhi huye iss drishya ko nahi bhula pa rahi thi….uski poori raat yo hi ankho ankho me jagte huye gujar gayi.

Agle din subah adii raat ki khumari ki vajah se deri se utha…..munish ne uske paas aakar haal chaal pata karne laga

Munish—Aur dost kaise ho….? Raat badhiya gujari na…..?

Adirishi—maine aap ko pahchana nahi bhai….main kaha hu….?

Munish (mann me)—lagta hai ki ab ye rishi ban gaya hai…..(thodi der me) main tumhara dost hu, munish aur tum mere mahal me ho.

Adirishi—mahal….? Kaisa mahal…..? ye jagah koun si hai….. ? agar aap mere dost hain to mujhe yaad kyo nahi hai... ?

Munish—vo isliye ki ek durghatna me tumhari yaad daast kamjor ho gayi hai…tum behosh ho gaye the uss ghatna ke baad….jaldi hi sab yaad aa jayega…ye dev lok hai.

Rishi—haa kuch kuch dhyan hai, kuch hua to tha mere sath……Rajnandini kaha hai…? Mujhe uske paas jana hoga vo meri pratiksha kar rahi hogi.

Munish—abhi tumhara vaha jana khatre se khali nahi hai….vaha sab jagah par Azgar ka samrajya hai ab.

Rishi—Azgar..‼ lekin vo to qaid me tha….? Phir azad kaise hua vo….? Jarur Naravali ne hi kuch tikdam kiya hoga

Munish—Naravali mara ja chuka hai dost.

Rishi—kyaaaaaa..... ? kisne mara usse.... ?

Munish—tumne

Rishi—maineeeeeeee..... ? magar kab, mujhe to dhyan nahi

Munish—maine bataya na ki abhi tumhari yaad dast adhuri hai….Jaldi hi sab theek ho jayega.

Rishi—magar kaise theek hogi meri yaad dast….? Meri Rajnandini bahut bechain hogi mere bina.

Munish—kuch dino ke pashchat brahmarishi Vishwamitra tumhe yuddh koushal ki shiksha dekar poorn paarangat karenge uske baad tum Rajnandini se mil sakte ho….abhi tumhare vaha jane se sabhi ki jaan khatre me aa sakti hai.

Rishi—vaise main kitne ghante behosh tha…..?

Munish—ghante nahi dost….poore 100 saal se tum behosh the.

Rishi—kyaaaaaaa……100 saal…..?

Munish—haa bhai, ab ghumne chalna hai kya…?

Rishi—nahi main aram karunga….shaam ko chalenge

Munish—theek hai, tum aram karo

Munish vaha se chala jata hai aur rishi bhojan kar ke phir se so jata hai…..udhar Rajnandini rishi ki tasveer apne seene se lagaye usse baate kiye ja rahi thi.

Rajnandini—tum kab aaoge rishi….? Tumhe apna vada poora karna hi hoga…..main aaj bhi tumhara intazar unhi galiyo me kar rahi hu jaha tum mujhe chhod kar gaye the.

In Raaho par vo intazar zinda rakha hamne,
Badalte dour me vo aitabar zinda rakha hamne…

Sab kuch to hamne khud hi chhod diya tha,
Ek tujh par hi adhikar zinda rakha hamne…

Ehsaaso ko mere teri aadat si ho gayi hai,
Iss dil ko tera talabgaar zinda rakha hamne…

Ghut ghut kar jeene ke hum adii nahi the,
Ki inn saanso me tera khumar zinda rakha hamne….

Parakhne ko hamara zamir bahut log aaye the,
Khud ko hi ab talak vafadar zinda rakha hamne....

Nahi hai talab hame sone chandi ke bichhouno ki,
Imaan ko apne aaj asardar zinda rakha hamne...

Ae zamane teri bewafayi ka hame ab gum nahi,
Ki apne liye alag ek sansar zinda rakha hamne...

Muddate gujar gayi issi intazar me hamari bhi,
Iss dil me aaj bhi tera pyar zinda rakha hamne....
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Shakuntala (kamre me aate huye)—beti chal kuch kha le....do din se tune kuch bhi nahi khaya hai.....aise me to rishi ko bhi taklif hogi na.... ?

Rajnandini—ek rishi ki hi yaado ke sahare to aaj tak zinda hu maa....lekin aaj main jarur khaungi....aaj mera dil kah raha hai ki rishi jaldi hi aane wala hai...na jane kyo mere dil me aaj harsh aur umang ki tarange uth rahi hain.

Rajnandini apni maa ke sath dusre kamre me chali jati hai.....vahi akaal aur bakaal ne aaj bhi ek admi ko pakad laaye the jise azgar ke samne le jaya gaya.

Azgar ko dekhte hi uss admi ki jinda bachne ki ummid toot gayi aur vo thar thar kampne laga....azgar tha hi bahut bhayanak shakal wala....kamjor dil wala agar koi galti se bhi uski shakal dekh le to bina kisi ke mare hi heart attack se turant dum tod dega.

Kisi bade patthar jaisi do badi badi bilkul koyle jaisi kali ankhe.....poora sharir ekdam kala......baal ek dam safed aur bade bade......hathi daant jaise daant.....pair tak latakti lambi moochhe....bade bade nakhoon....vishaal sharir ye sab kisi bhayanak sapne se kam nahi tha.

Azgar—hahahahaha.....isko kyo pakad kar laye ho....mere paas.... ?

Akaal—pita ji, ye moorkh sabko apke khilaf bhadka raha tha.

Admi (kampte huye)—mujhe kshama kar do...mujhse bhool ho gayi.

Azgar—hahahahaha.....bhool.....ho gayiiii.....to kshama kar duuuu....hahahaha.....azgar marta nahi hai,apne shikar ko sidha nigal jata hai....mere khilaf logo ko bhadkayega.....hahahaha.....mujhse takrane ki himmat kisi me bhi nahi hai......tujhe nahi malum ki main amar hu......hahahahaha...amar hu main....hahahahaha......mujhse jyada shaktishali koi bhi nahi hai....samjha tu

Agle hi pal azgar ne apne singhasan par baithe baithe hi apni lambi jeebh bahar nikal kar uss admi ko lapet liya aur phir apne muh me bhar kar usse nigal gaya....vaha hasi ke thahako ke beech agar kuch sunayi diya to vo thi uss admi ki dardnak cheekhe jo ab shant ho chuki thi.

Azgar—Jao sab graho par phail jao aur vaha ki aurato, ladkiyo se sambhog kar ke hamare vansh ko aage badhao, hamari sena ka vistar karo.

Bakaal—Jo agya pita ji.....chalo sab log har jagah phail jao.....koi jagah bachni nahi chahiye

Akaal—sabse pahle pari lok chalo....suna hai ki vaha ki rajkumari sonalika bahut khubsoorat hai.....pahle uska hi bhog karunga main....hahahahaha

Azgar—Rajnandini ka kuch pata chala..... ?

Bakaal—nahi pita ji.....vo hame nahi mili kahi bhi

Azgar—mujhe Rajnandini chahiye har keemat par.....chahe iske liye poori duniya ko raakh ka dher hi kyo na banana pade to bana dalo lekin usko dhoodo

Akaal—vo apne ghar me chhupi hogi....uske ghar se pakad ke ghasit late hain

Azgar—Rajnandini koi bakri ka bachcha nahi hai bewaqoof……uske karib jane ka sidha matlab hai ki khoonkhar sherni ke muh me hath dalna…..aur vaise bhi uska ghar kisi Tilism se bandha hua hai jiska tod sirf Rishi janta tha jo ab iss duniya me hi nahi hai……Rajnandini ko kisi tarah se ghar se bahar nikalne par majboor karo phir main dekhta hu…..usse pakadna tum logo ke bas ki baat nahi hai

Bakaal—theek hai ais hi hoga pita ji

Sab vaha se chale jate hain…..idhar munish shaam ko taiyyar hokar ghumne jane laga....usne rishi ko bhi le jana chaha.

Munish—chalo dost kahi bahar ghum kar aate hain.

Adirishi (mann me)—lagta hai ki ye phir se mujhe kisi naye lafde me phasana chahta hai…..main ab iske bahkave me nahi aane wala.

Munish—kya sochne lage dost….?

Adii—nahi, meri tabiyat kuch theek nahi hai...tum ghum aao....main kal chalunga bhai

Munish (mann me)—lagta hai ye phir se adii ban gaya hai.....(thodi der me)..theek hai mitra, tum so jana bhojan kar ke, mujhe aane me kuch der bhi ho sakti hai.

Adii—theek hai bhai.

Munish der se aane ka madhvi ko bata kar bahar nikal jata hai….kafi raat beetne ke baad bhi jab munish nahi aaya to madhvi uska intazar karte huye uski need ki jhapki lag gayi.

Jabki idhar adii apne kaksh me aniyantrit hokar idhar se udhar ghum raha tha jaise ki kisi gahri soch me ho aur koi nirnay nahi kar pa raha ho ki kya karna chahiye.

Aise hi kuch der tak chintan karte huye usne mann hi mann kuch phaisla liya aur sidhe madhvi ke kaksh me ghus gaya aur jakar sidhe uske sath bistar me let gaya.

Madhvi (halki need me)—aap aa gaye munish….ye kya kar rahe ho…? Chhodo na……aaaaaaaaaaaa…..marrr gayiiiii

Udhar munish bhi apne mahal ke liye nikal chuka tha…….

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bhai health problem hote hue bhi anand bhai jald se jald jitna ho sake story ko aage ki taraf badhana chahte hai,
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Awesome update bhai,
behad hi shandaar, lajawab aur amazing update hai bhai,
bhai aapke update ki jitni tariff karoo utna hi kam hai,
aapke update ki sabse khaash baat ye hai ki har chij perfect hota hai, chahe vo shayari ho, kavita ho ya dialogue ho,
aaj ke update me jo kavita aapne dala hai,
usne dil ko chhu liya hai bhai,
raj nandani ke shaundarya ka aapne itna adbhut varnan prashtut kiya hai ki mai bata nhi sakta,
bhai prakriti varnan aur saundarya varnan me aapka koi jawab nhi hai,
aapki lekhani me chhayavaad ka spasht prabhav drishtigochar hota hai,
aapne gaav me azgar ki jis darindagi ko dikhaya hai, use dekh kar to kisi ki bhi rooh kaanp jayegi, aurato aur bachcho ke sath itna bura salook karne ka jald hi use dand milne wala hai,
kyonki jab dushtata apne charam par pahuch jati hai tab uska sanhaar avashya hota hai,
new characters ka entry dhamakedaar hai,
raj nandani ne deepa ko un gundo se bacha liya hai,
vahi dusri taraf aadi jin rishiyo ko nadi ke kinare mila hai, unke paas pahle se hi uska humshakl saalo se murchhit pada hai,
behad hi shandaar suspence aapne create kiya hai bhai,
dekhte hai ab aage kya hota hai,
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