Incest Devtaa A story of a hero (fantasy , adultery, horrible)

[Baap Ji]

Haan ye to sachhai...
waise writer sahab ki stories badhiya hoti hai, bas ek problem hai... wo ye ki ek bhi story complete nahi..

Naina ji ab karunga na complete

 

[Baap Ji]

Sabse pehle Ema ko bhi ek lead character role dijiye story pe....
aur ye request nahi kar rahi hun balki bata bata rahi hu....

hmm... I think ye college wale jarur koi chaalbaaz, dhokhebaaj, kutte, kamine criminals honge... isliye un students ko bina permission liye hi us island pe bhej rahe hai, shayad maanav taskaree karte ho ye college wale udhar criminals ke sath milke....
jay ke sath sath vini ka bhi naam liya gaya hai us island pe jaane ke liye...ye to kaafi pareshaani wali baat ho gayi hai...agar us island mein kkuch golmaal hua to udhar jay khud ko bachaye ya vini ko...well ye achha socha jay ne ki us island jaane ke bare mein apne master se advice lega... ki jana thik rahega ke nahi..

udhar sneha ke piche to hath dhoke pad gaya jay.... are jaan na pehchan wo uska mehmaan... sidha shaadi ka proposal rakh diya uske saamne... even tharki jay jab se jon bana usne to sneha ka hath hi kas ke pakad liya bich raste mein.... wah re kya sanskar mile hai iski foreigner maa baap se
Are uska baap bhi kam mann mauji hai kya.... abadi badhane mein expert jo thehra..

khair..mujhe kya .. jiski jo marzi kare tulsi is sansar mein bhaanti bhaanti ke story characters

shaandaar update, shaandaar lekhni, shaandaar shabdon ka chayan...

let's see what happens next..
Brilliant update with awesome writing skills

Ema ka role hai age jakar aayega hero sacche pyar par beliv karta hai isliye ek saal se sirf dekhta hi Raha jab use laga uska love usse bichad jayega to usne himmat dikhayi . Lekin age Kya hoga ye to wo nahi janta na .hero sanskari to hai lekin lover boy bhi age dekhte hai kitni heroine ati hai

Well thanku

 

[Baap Ji]

us island mei bari garbadi hai... kuch to aisa hai jiske liye ye college wale bina permission liye hi selected students ko waha bej rahe hai... actually ye college wale bas puppet hai, asli culprit shayad wahi us island mein chupa baitha hai jo students ko waha aane ke majboor karta hai.... bahot bada swarth chupa hai shayad iske piche...
in fact select ek hi college se hone ke baad bhi jay & vini ko alag alag jagah se pick karne wale hai weh log.. dono ki manjil to ek hogi par journey us island tak alag alag... aisa kyun? Shayad waha group bana diye jaaye ...
waise jay ka dil yun nahi ghabra raha... kyunki ab to fully doubt hai ki us island ke chalte hi inlogo ki jindagi badalne wali hai .. shayad bahot bura bhi ho sakta in logo ke sath... hope ki vini & jay saavdhaan rahe...

shaandaar update, shaandaar shabdon ka chayan aur sath hi dilchasp kirdaaro ki bhumika bhi...

Let's see what happens next
Brilliant update with awesome writing skills

Thank you so much

 

[Baap Ji]

ye kya ajeebogareeb update tha
sneha akele hi us flat mei chhod ke chala gaya... ye bhi nahi socha ki wo surendra kahi inka picha karke uske flat tak aake kahi chupa baitha ho.. aur mauka dekh hamla karne ke firak mein ho....
baaki ye bhootiya sapna, sneha pe attack .. udhar sandy ka lash fat jana wo pagalpan se bharpoor letter.. blah blah Yeh sab kya hai ? aur is story pe ye sab unnecessary topics add karne ka kya matlab hai

ek baat jab sandy ne letter mein kaha ki locket jay ko surakshit rahne mein madadgaar sabit ho... phir bhi fek aaya udhar us locket ko.... Btw sandy ki lash fat gaya aur wo manager itna normal hoke baatein kar raha jaise kuch hua hi nahi ...

waise bura mat maaniyo par is update update mein kayi topics ajeebogareeb ke sath sath boring bhi hai...

..... baaki.... let's see what happens next...

Uh ke review ke bad hi mujhe Meri galtio ka pata Chala Jo Maine story me ab Tak ki .

Jiske pas log nahi aate Kya sach me koi manager uske pas kam karega storyke nam ke sath hi hai horror aur bhi Kai wajah thi flashbacks ke bad us manager ka bhi roll ayega fir uski sachai pata chalegi

 

[Baap Ji]

kahani kaha se suru huyi aur ye kaha pahuch gayi
ye kahani to koi bhootiya film lag rahi hai meko ab...
are wo film thi na 1920 ..haan thik uski tarah . . . .
sandy Rosey jaise kirdaaro ko add Kyun kiya story mein iski bhi koi thoj wajah ab tak na dikhi ....

Khair...
Let's see what happens next
Nice update...

Aage aayenge ye inki bhi khas wajah hi ane ki lekin Jo uh soncha vaisa kuch nahi hoga.

Mujhe horror dark nahi karna chahiye tha vaise ye lamba jata lekin readers ke kehne par flashbacks ki taraf aa rahe Jiski kafi jyada update hongi lekin jahan mauka milega story ko age badha dunga .

 

[Baap Ji]

Nice intro... btw baaki sab to thik hai lekin is sunaina madam ke muh pe kya laga hua hai gobar jaisa

waise ek baat to hai sabhi kirdaaro ki aankhein mendak ki aankhein jaisi hai..

Intro jyada dene se kirdar visible ho jate isiliye sabka nahi Diya


Aur sunaina madam ek worrior hai ek liquid ke nishan hai unke mooh par gobar nahi

 

[Naina]

Aur sunaina madam ek worrior hai ek liquid ke nishan hai unke mooh par gobar nahi

Us sunaina ki to aisi ki taisi.. . ek baar entry to le wo story pe

 

[Naina]

Aage aayenge ye inki bhi khas wajah hi ane ki lekin Jo uh soncha vaisa kuch nahi hoga.

Mujhe horror dark nahi karna chahiye tha vaise ye lamba jata lekin readers ke kehne par flashbacks ki taraf aa rahe Jiski kafi jyada update hongi lekin jahan mauka milega story ko age badha dunga .

Horror likhna galat nahi hai...balki yehi to hai jo heavy thrill aur suspense ko leke aaye story pe...bas yaha presentation jis hisap se karna chahiye us hisap nahi hua... koi bhi nayi topic add karne se pehle kuch hint dene chahiye... ki haan shayad aage kuch aisa ho bhi sakta hai ... readers ko anuman lagane dena chahiye... tabhi jigyaasa badhegi story line ke prati ...
ishi point pe kuch alag hi mod deke readers ko chounka bhi sakte hai.. Bas shart ye hai ki dono topic ke bich ek link ho... ek lay vadh tarike ke sath ...

 

[Baap Ji]

Arohi aur Jon urf Jay
Us manhoos story ka hero actually mein manhoos nahi tha manhoos to jay aur arohi hai....
Jaha bhi rehte hai dono apne aas paas rehne walo pe manhoosiyat failaye ye dono... in fact arohi to wo hai jo ek ladki hoke dusri ladki ki ijjat ke sath khele.
ek bhai ke saamne hi ek bahan k sath chii..
agency ... shayad ye koi criminals ka koi adda hai.. arohi parwati etc us agency ke criminals hai.. jinke dil mei koi daya mamta nahi....
dusri taraf... jay urf jon.. jaise ki maine pehle hi bata rahi thi ki... kya sanskaar mile hai isko firangi maa baap se ki ek bhali ladki ko khichhad mein girne se bachakar ab kunwe mein marne faink diya...
Kya galti thi sneha ki... wo nahi aayi thi jay ki life mein balki jay khud dakhal andaazi ki uski jindagi mein... ab Dekho jay ki chutiyappa aur manhoosiyat ke chalte kya ho gaya us bichari sneha sang

Waise ek aur wajah ke chalte writer sahab ne rosy aur sandy naam ke do kirdaaro ko isliye laya Story pe taaki jay ko turu insects lober bana sake uski bahno ke sath
.......
aaj bach gayi arohi roast hone se, koi na next time is tarah roast karungi us arohi ki wo kirdaar shayad ye story hi chhod bhag jaaye

well shaandaar update, shaandaar lekhni, shaandaar shabdon ka chayan...

Let's see ...ye kamina jon kab turu insects lober banta hai
Brilliant update with awesome writing skills

Ab Mai Kya bolu uh ne to hero ki watt laga Kar rakh di wo to esa kuch hoga janta hi nahi tha aur bottle ko open Karne wali sneha thi . Jiska character itna hard ho achai me wo galat kam kaise Kar sakta hai Bina kisi reason ke well ye guess uhka galat bhi ho sakta hai .

Jaisa kaha ki story reality ke pas hogi so isliye aarohi is tarah ki hai aur real agencies isse bhi jyada bhayanak hai .

 

[Baap Ji]

so finally ek taraf jahan sneha ki life barbaad karne ke baad jon nikla us island ki aurr....
wohi dusri taraf jon ki badi bahan haaraman arohi chali delhi..dipty aur jedi ke ghar ki aurr... un do masoomo ko maarne....
waise lagta hai shreya arohi ke pyar mei gir chuki hai... bas is story mein yehi hona baaki reh gaya tha ... bhoot pret, turu insects lob, haaraman arohi ke kaarname, jon ki manhoosiyat ab lesbo... ponggg...
.......
hmm.... so us boat pe safayi karne wala wo budhau hi wo insaan jo ab jon ko dimag control karne ki technique sikhane wala hai....
gaur talab baat ye hai ki vini kis haal mein hogi is waqt.. coz jo haal abhi is boat mein hai... wohi haalat udhar bhi to hogi... Vini kaise face karegi un halaato ko.... kya us budhau ki madad se contact kar paayega jon vini ko...

well shaandaar update, shaandaar lekhni, shaandaar shabdon ka chayan...

Let's see what happens next
Brilliant update with awesome writing skills

Aane wali update me yahi khulasa hoga
And yar Kya kahu vaise Meri pichli stories me esa tha ki sabko lagta ye lesss hongi lekin esa kuch nahi hua .ab dekhte Kya hota hai .
Bhut dhanyabd