beauty_lover11
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excellent story! bhai naina aur bhumi ka bhi thora eortic scene chlo kro shaalini aur naina ka bech sab khuch suraj sa pehla karwana! aur naina ki seal suraj ka laia hi honi chaie!...
pehla hi comment main bhut suggestion da dein, jis ki zarrorat nae thi ap bhut acha likh raha ho.
Bas aik request ha jisa bhumi aur suraj ka darmyain sab khuch bhut jaldi open ho gaia baki main character thora lamba scence chalna chaie main point tak pochana sa pehla.
pehla hi comment main bhut suggestion da dein, jis ki zarrorat nae thi ap bhut acha likh raha ho.
Bas aik request ha jisa bhumi aur suraj ka darmyain sab khuch bhut jaldi open ho gaia baki main character thora lamba scence chalna chaie main point tak pochana sa pehla.
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