O teri ki villan tayar betha ha hamle ka liyeUpdate 9
Dosri traf
Sidra please sorry yaar maaf ker deye na
Aliya: ja ja dafa ho ja muje sai baat maat ker woh jo tera sub kuch lagta hai us keye pass ja
Sidra: please Aliya tu maaf ker deye meri ek dost hai or tu be muje ko nehi samjti woh be meri child friend hai na pyaar see
Aliya : na baba na hum tuje ko samjtey he nehi mein koi pyaari nehi maska laga kesi or ko kasam sai tu meri bachpan kee dost na hoti na mein tuje ko kabhi bolti be na
Sidra: ok phir kal sai mein uni nehi jana ab tu khush rehna mein socha tera sath 4 5 din guzaro gee ab mein chalti ho ghar
Itney mein aliya kee ami sanam waha a jati hai or woh janti hai ya dono asey he larti hai or dono ko a ker manati hai or aliya ko dant deti hai keye meri beti sidra sai aj ka bade mazaq na kerye uni mein sidra us ko kyu charti hai meri bachi ko or dono apni ma ko hug kerti hai
Aliya do bheny hai aliya or sana or aliya ka baap chief minister punjab hai jo kamran ka he dost hai bachpan ka
Yaha hamra hero ghar a chuka tha
Apny room sai fresh hony ka bade bahir ata hai tu hina us ka pass jati hai
Hina: a gaya meray beta
Mein : gee
Hina: kesa guzra aj ka din
Mein: Bhute acha
Hina: koi passand ayee
Mein: app be na ma mein aisa larka nehi
Hina kee battien farah sune rahi the pass a ker woh be bolti hai kesa larka hai tu
Mein : sharama jata hoon
Hina: wesy babhi ya sidra sai ulta hai woh sharmti nehi ya sharmta hai or dono hass deti hai
Farah: keya benyy ga bachry ka hitler kee nani hai woh tu
Hina: ya tu theek kaha app naye
Mein: ma ya keya baat ker rahy hai
Farah: kuch nehi chal kahan kha laye
kesi jaga ek banglay per admi boss us ka waris a gaya hai
Boss: maar dalo ga sarau khandan ko haroon kamran arslan ko
Admi: boss kesy woh tu full security mein hai
Boss: tu keya hova us kee biwi or beta ko phly be mara tha na ab us ka dosray beta ko be maro ga
Admi: boss ya dosra nehi wohi beta hai
Boss: nehi ya nehi ho sakta
Admi: ya hova hai
Boss: ab nehi bachy ga woh us khandan keye sary mardo ko maar ker us khandaan kee sari aurtoon ko apni rakheel bano ga suna sai sali sub ek sai ber ker ek hai or dono hasney lagty hai hahahhahahahaahahhahahaa
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Nice story but spell ki bohat mistake hai and har character ke dialogue mix hai please improve these.
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dosto mobile sai write ker raha hoon jo adat nehi hai or ya spell auto correction ker dyta baaz dafa ise reason sai or professional writer nehi mein
Are bhai auto correction wala option off kar do mobile sa or khud sahi likh lo mobile phir koi masla nhi hoga
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Update 10
city mein ek news ayee ek gang jo gharo mein daka dalty hai or logo ko maar dety hai ya news naye tabahi macha ker rakhi hovi thee her traf yahe news thee phly be 10 jaga aisa ho chuka tha itne beri city mein her koi khuf zada tha baat ya nehi thee choriya nehi hoti baat ya thee keye us ka sath qatal or rape ho raha tha
Haroon: ya news dekh raha tha Haroon ek call kerta hai
Captain Aslam: aslam allikum
Haroon: wallikum salam
captain: kesy yaad keya aj haroon tu naye
Haroon or aslam dono class fellow they or ise waqat Aslam isi mein be kaam ker raha tha
Haroon: Ya jo daku hai in ka patterns same hai na
Captain: bahi tu tension na laye or bhool ja
Haroon: bus itna bata same hai na
Captain: Same hai
Haroon: choro ga nehi us ko mera ek kaam kerya ga
Captain: keya
Haroon : Muje ko Crime scene dekna hai
Captain: chal mein tuje ko addres send kerta hoo tu a ja
Ali Uni sai aya he tha Hello baba
Haroon: han beta kesy hoo kesa raha din
Mein: thek hoon baba kaha ja rahy hai
Haroon: phly kuch nehi bolta hai phir us sai kehta hai sath chalo
Lahore city ka area gulberg jaha ya crime ek banglay mein hova tha waha haroon Ali banglay ka samney kahry theey Haroon call kerta hai Captain bahir ata hai
Captain: kesa hai bahi
Haroon: mein theek ya dekh tera betija be sath aya hai
Captain: wah kesy hoo Ali beta bhute suna hai tummray baba sai tummray barey mein aj finally mile be rahy hai tum yaha ruko hum aty hai
Haroon: nehi ya be sath chaly ga
captain: woh abhi bacha hai
Haroon: bus kaha na sath jaye ga
Cpatain chalo phir
Crime scene kee halat bhute buri thee waha per 5 lasshey thee jin kee ankh tek nikal lee gaye thee Ali phly ya dekh ker shock tha bade mein us ke ankho mein ek gusa a gaya tha gusa sai us ka ansoo nikal rahy they 2 bachy be they 3 lasho ka qeema bena samney per tha Ali ab apni eyes sai sub kuch scan ker raha tha ise waqat Ali ko ek dum sai crime scene per hovy images nazer anay lagy ya be Ali kee ability thee woh past dekh sakta tha lekin wohi past jo us ko had sai zayda dard deye gusa dard ka ajeeb combination tha or Ali ka mind bhute active tha jo koi ker nehi sakta ab woh easily ker sakta hai Ali scene mein dekhta hai kuch mask man ghar mein entry kerty hai ek larki or aurat ka rape kerty hai bacho ko maar ker qeema bena dyte hai mard or larki aurat kee eyes nikal ker sath laye jatey hai laasho kee halat bhute buri ker dety hai Ali dekh raha tha Ali woh scene bardast na ker saka or behoosh ho gaya
Cpatain: Ali beta keya hova haroon bola tha na woh bacha hai nehi dekh paye pa
Haroon: janta hoon chal us ko uto or car tek laye chalo captain kee madad sai Ali ko car ka pichy leta deya jata hai haroon us ko laye ker ghar nikal jata hai
Kuch hours bade Ali ko hosh ata hai or woh ek dum chilla ker ute jata hai hai ya cheekh itni teez thee keye sara ghar kamray mein a gaya tha
city mein ek news ayee ek gang jo gharo mein daka dalty hai or logo ko maar dety hai ya news naye tabahi macha ker rakhi hovi thee her traf yahe news thee phly be 10 jaga aisa ho chuka tha itne beri city mein her koi khuf zada tha baat ya nehi thee choriya nehi hoti baat ya thee keye us ka sath qatal or rape ho raha tha
Haroon: ya news dekh raha tha Haroon ek call kerta hai
Captain Aslam: aslam allikum
Haroon: wallikum salam
captain: kesy yaad keya aj haroon tu naye
Haroon or aslam dono class fellow they or ise waqat Aslam isi mein be kaam ker raha tha
Haroon: Ya jo daku hai in ka patterns same hai na
Captain: bahi tu tension na laye or bhool ja
Haroon: bus itna bata same hai na
Captain: Same hai
Haroon: choro ga nehi us ko mera ek kaam kerya ga
Captain: keya
Haroon : Muje ko Crime scene dekna hai
Captain: chal mein tuje ko addres send kerta hoo tu a ja
Ali Uni sai aya he tha Hello baba
Haroon: han beta kesy hoo kesa raha din
Mein: thek hoon baba kaha ja rahy hai
Haroon: phly kuch nehi bolta hai phir us sai kehta hai sath chalo
Lahore city ka area gulberg jaha ya crime ek banglay mein hova tha waha haroon Ali banglay ka samney kahry theey Haroon call kerta hai Captain bahir ata hai
Captain: kesa hai bahi
Haroon: mein theek ya dekh tera betija be sath aya hai
Captain: wah kesy hoo Ali beta bhute suna hai tummray baba sai tummray barey mein aj finally mile be rahy hai tum yaha ruko hum aty hai
Haroon: nehi ya be sath chaly ga
captain: woh abhi bacha hai
Haroon: bus kaha na sath jaye ga
Cpatain chalo phir
Crime scene kee halat bhute buri thee waha per 5 lasshey thee jin kee ankh tek nikal lee gaye thee Ali phly ya dekh ker shock tha bade mein us ke ankho mein ek gusa a gaya tha gusa sai us ka ansoo nikal rahy they 2 bachy be they 3 lasho ka qeema bena samney per tha Ali ab apni eyes sai sub kuch scan ker raha tha ise waqat Ali ko ek dum sai crime scene per hovy images nazer anay lagy ya be Ali kee ability thee woh past dekh sakta tha lekin wohi past jo us ko had sai zayda dard deye gusa dard ka ajeeb combination tha or Ali ka mind bhute active tha jo koi ker nehi sakta ab woh easily ker sakta hai Ali scene mein dekhta hai kuch mask man ghar mein entry kerty hai ek larki or aurat ka rape kerty hai bacho ko maar ker qeema bena dyte hai mard or larki aurat kee eyes nikal ker sath laye jatey hai laasho kee halat bhute buri ker dety hai Ali dekh raha tha Ali woh scene bardast na ker saka or behoosh ho gaya
Cpatain: Ali beta keya hova haroon bola tha na woh bacha hai nehi dekh paye pa
Haroon: janta hoon chal us ko uto or car tek laye chalo captain kee madad sai Ali ko car ka pichy leta deya jata hai haroon us ko laye ker ghar nikal jata hai
Kuch hours bade Ali ko hosh ata hai or woh ek dum chilla ker ute jata hai hai ya cheekh itni teez thee keye sara ghar kamray mein a gaya tha
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Farah: Keya hova beta woh bed ka pass a ker us ko galy laga ker us ka sir per hath pherna start kerti hai Ali kee eyes mein ek ajeeb sai gusa tha jise ko kamran arslan haroon or hina naye dekh liya tha kamran or arslan tu dekh ker he dar gaye they gusa mein woh beyank he lag raha tha waha per haroon khmosh tha woh janta tha Ali na sub apni powers sai dekh dekh liya hai Haroon sub ko bahir janey ko kehta
Farah : Bahi sahab mein nehi jo gee mein Ali ka pass he raho gee
Haroon: Farah please app thori time bade a jana room mein finally farah ko haar mana perta hai kamran be bolta hai chalo abhi bahir sub chaly jatey hai Room mein Ali or haroon they Ali bagh ker Haroon ko galy laga lyta hai
Mein: baba koi itna be zalim ho sakta hai woh insaan nehi janwar hai mein un ko ise sai be buri mout doon ga choro ga nehi un ko
Haroon: kitny admi they woh sub
Ali: 10 admi they or 2 ladies thee un ka sath
Haroon : Tum naye shakal tu dekh lee hai na ?
Ali: nehi woh mask lagya hova tha sub naye or black colors ka kapry they sub keye
Haroon: apny gusa per control kerna seekho beta tummra gusa masoom logo ko be nuqsaan deye sakta hai
Mein: sorry baba lekin meri bardasht sai bahir tha woh bachy ro rahy they darey hovy they un zalim logo ko un per taras nehi aya or woh bachri larki bus 16 saal kee the woh kaminey logo ko nehi choro ga
Haroon: tu janta hai beta ya wohi hai jin jino naye teri ma or bahi ko be mara hai
haroon ka ya words Ali ko out of mind kerny ka liye bhute they Ali ka gusa ab bardasht sai bahir tha us naye apny baap sai hude ko churvya or bahir nikal gaya ga haroon awaz dyta raha lekin us naye nehi suni bahir jab woh nikla sub us kee traf dekh rahy they woh ghar sai bahir nikla guards pichy ana lagy
Mein: Baat suno saray meri tum daily meray pichy rehty hoo muje peta pai aj muje ko kise kee zaroorat nehi bus tum aj meray pichy maat ana so akela chor doon mein wapis aoon ga ghar baba ko bol dyna lekin ager picha keya tu muje sai bora koi na ho ga yaad rakna
Security chief: Ali kee eyes or reaction sai sub guards ke bolti band thee woh ek masoom.sai larkey ka bayank roop dekh rahy they un ko Ali sai darr lag raha tha woh kuch be na bola
Mein: ab road per tha Raat ka 1 :00 am ka time tha mein ek big mall mein jata hoon waha sai ek mask purchase kerta hoon ek bag or ek new balck dress buy kerta hoon apny dosray cloths bag mein dal ker new dress phen ker nikal ata hoon bahir or ab mein mask laga lyta hoon face per or bus pori city mein full speed sai run start ker dyta hoon meri speed itni fast thee keye mein 10 minute mein sari city ka chaker be laga lyta hoon asey he mein kabhi kesi area mein kabhi kesi area mein wait kerta hoon ek dum meray samney ek car kuch faslay per kheri thee or 4 bikes waly us ko rokay khery they .......
Farah: Keya hova beta woh bed ka pass a ker us ko galy laga ker us ka sir per hath pherna start kerti hai Ali kee eyes mein ek ajeeb sai gusa tha jise ko kamran arslan haroon or hina naye dekh liya tha kamran or arslan tu dekh ker he dar gaye they gusa mein woh beyank he lag raha tha waha per haroon khmosh tha woh janta tha Ali na sub apni powers sai dekh dekh liya hai Haroon sub ko bahir janey ko kehta
Farah : Bahi sahab mein nehi jo gee mein Ali ka pass he raho gee
Haroon: Farah please app thori time bade a jana room mein finally farah ko haar mana perta hai kamran be bolta hai chalo abhi bahir sub chaly jatey hai Room mein Ali or haroon they Ali bagh ker Haroon ko galy laga lyta hai
Mein: baba koi itna be zalim ho sakta hai woh insaan nehi janwar hai mein un ko ise sai be buri mout doon ga choro ga nehi un ko
Haroon: kitny admi they woh sub
Ali: 10 admi they or 2 ladies thee un ka sath
Haroon : Tum naye shakal tu dekh lee hai na ?
Ali: nehi woh mask lagya hova tha sub naye or black colors ka kapry they sub keye
Haroon: apny gusa per control kerna seekho beta tummra gusa masoom logo ko be nuqsaan deye sakta hai
Mein: sorry baba lekin meri bardasht sai bahir tha woh bachy ro rahy they darey hovy they un zalim logo ko un per taras nehi aya or woh bachri larki bus 16 saal kee the woh kaminey logo ko nehi choro ga
Haroon: tu janta hai beta ya wohi hai jin jino naye teri ma or bahi ko be mara hai
haroon ka ya words Ali ko out of mind kerny ka liye bhute they Ali ka gusa ab bardasht sai bahir tha us naye apny baap sai hude ko churvya or bahir nikal gaya ga haroon awaz dyta raha lekin us naye nehi suni bahir jab woh nikla sub us kee traf dekh rahy they woh ghar sai bahir nikla guards pichy ana lagy
Mein: Baat suno saray meri tum daily meray pichy rehty hoo muje peta pai aj muje ko kise kee zaroorat nehi bus tum aj meray pichy maat ana so akela chor doon mein wapis aoon ga ghar baba ko bol dyna lekin ager picha keya tu muje sai bora koi na ho ga yaad rakna
Security chief: Ali kee eyes or reaction sai sub guards ke bolti band thee woh ek masoom.sai larkey ka bayank roop dekh rahy they un ko Ali sai darr lag raha tha woh kuch be na bola
Mein: ab road per tha Raat ka 1 :00 am ka time tha mein ek big mall mein jata hoon waha sai ek mask purchase kerta hoon ek bag or ek new balck dress buy kerta hoon apny dosray cloths bag mein dal ker new dress phen ker nikal ata hoon bahir or ab mein mask laga lyta hoon face per or bus pori city mein full speed sai run start ker dyta hoon meri speed itni fast thee keye mein 10 minute mein sari city ka chaker be laga lyta hoon asey he mein kabhi kesi area mein kabhi kesi area mein wait kerta hoon ek dum meray samney ek car kuch faslay per kheri thee or 4 bikes waly us ko rokay khery they .......
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