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[riya singh]

But jyada samay mat lagana kyunki fir pichli story bhul Jaye waise bhulne wali story nahi hai aapki but fir bhi maja bana rehta agar jaldi start ho jaye toh ok

Nhi jyada time nhi lagaungi, jaise hi dusri story ka plot set ho jayega, uska dusra part likhna shuru kr dungi

 

[riya singh]

Super duper hit h boos

Thanku ji

 

[Motojaan]

Jitne din aapki story chali aur koi story read hi nahi ki sach me kabhi itni achi story nahi read ki aap to super ho boss

 

[SANJU ( V. R. )]

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[kamdev99008]

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Tushar se bach kr goli sidhe sohan ko lagi jo piche se tushar ko marne ke liye aa rha tha, goli lagte hi sohan bas mom hi bol paya aur jameen per padte hi mar gaya, soniya jor se dahad kr sohan ki taraf bhagi, idhar deepa aur seema rajesh ko lekar nikal gaye,

Sohan ke marne per alka ka dil dukha usse uski maa ka rona bardast nhi ho rha tha, uski maa jaisi bhi thi per maa to thi sohan aur kamal bhai the, nandani ke face per alag hi gussa sa tha,

Soniya dahade mar kr roye jar hi thi,

Anjali- teri wajah se meri maa mujhse dur hui teri wajah se mere nana mar gaye, teri wajah se hi tera bhai kamal mara gaya rajesh ji ke hatho, teri wajah se tera beta kamal mara gaya aur teri hi wajah se tere hatho tera beta sohan bhi mar gaya, kya mila tujhe kya paya tune kitni dolat paai tune, na tu apne pati ki ho saki dusre mardo ke sath soti rahi, na apni betiyo ki ho saki unhe hi unke baap aur bhai ke sath sex karwana chahti thi,

Na hi apne beto ki ho saki jinhe tune galat raste per bhej diya, ye jante hue bhi ki crimenals ke sath kya hota, na tu apni bahuo ki ho saki, aur meri to tu kabhi thi hi nhi, kisi ek ki to ho jati,

Soniya bas roye ja rhi thi, tabhi waha police aa gai, commisnor bhi sath tha, police ne sakeel suresh aur soniya ko giraftar kr liya,

Anjali sabko lekar hospital pahuchi jaha rajesh ki halat bahut kharab thi, goli lagne aur ilaj milne me bahut der ho chuki thi, doctors ne goli to nikal di thi lekin wo pairo ko thik nhi kr pa rhe the,

Anjali aaj bahut ro rhi thi,

Anjali- meri wajah se aaj fir unhe dard jhelna pad rha h, bahut takleefe di hain maine unhe, main khud ko kabhi maaf nhi kr paungi, tushar unhe bacha le, bacha le unhe chahe kuch bhi ho jaye unhe kuch nhi hona chahiye,

Tushar- kuch nhi hoga maa kuch nhi hoga,

Tushar turant doctor ke pas gaya aur baat ki amreica transfer karne ki, mantri ki pahuch se turant air ambulance mil gai, jiska pura kharcha anjali ne uthaya,

Agale din news thi ki suresh ne kamal ko jail se bhagaya aur kisi baat per sakeel aur suresh ka jhagda hua aur sakeel ne sohan aur kamal ko mar diya,

Soniya apne beto ke gum me pagal ho gai, rajesh ka America me ilaj ho gaya wo apne pairo per chalne firne laga, is sab me 1 month gujar gaya, is 1 month tushar America me hi rha,

Jab wo rajesh ko lekar wapas aaya to yaha sab kuch badal chukka tha, ab ranga ka control tha jo tushar ke liye bade bhai jaisa tha, wahi alka kahi chali gai thi kisi ko nhi pata wo kaha chali gai thi, varsha Mumbai chali gai thi, usne kisi ko apna address bhi nhi diya tha usne khud ko sabse dur kr liya tha,

Rinky aur anita America chali gai thi, waha unka ghar tha to unhone wahi rhene ka faisla kiya, waha unse koi ye puchne wala nhi tha ki ye bachhe kiske hain pati kaha h sath kyo nhi h, shadi ki ya nhi ki, dono sakoon se waha rhene lage,

kapil aur sachin ne pura business samhal liya tha, aashima aur rashmi bhi dono ke sath lag gai,

Rajesh ne gaon me rhene ka faisla kiya use shahar me rhena pasand nhi aa rha tha,

Anjali deepa seema aur ruchi ne chandigad chod diya aur sabse dur himachal me ek ghar khareed liya, jisme charo ne sath milkr rhena shuru kr diya, wahi nandnai chandigad me hi ruki, uski bahut ichha thi ki wo anjali ke sath rhe lekin anjali ne uske bhale ke liye use wahi rakha,

Anjali aur tino bheno ko sabse alag hi rhena tha taki unke aur tushar ke rishto ki jankari kisi ko na ho jaye,

Tushar ki jimmedari thi wo time time per sabse mil aata tha, nandani, anita rinky sabko ek dusre ke bare me pata tha to koi bhi tushar per apna adhikar nhi dikhati thi,

Rajesh ka ilaj karwa kr wapas aaye hue 15 din ho chuke the, anjali seema aur deepa himachal ki pahadiyo me ek bahut hi khubsurat ghar me baithe hue the,

Tino ke hath me chai thi,

Seema- maa ab kya ab to sab dushaman khatam ho gaye, ab hum kya hamesha aise hi rhenge

Deepa- ha maa humara kya bhavishya h, kya sari jindagi hum aise hi sabse dur rhenge, jab ye bachhe paida honge hum inke baap ka naam kya batayenge, samaj me kaise face karenge,

Anjali- beta waqt sab karwa dega, jab tum sab paida hue the mujhe bhi nhi pata tha kya karna h, kaise samaj me tumhari phechan bataungi, lekin aaj tum sabki phechan h, to ye bachhe bhi apni phecha lekar aayenge,

Seema- maa hum waise hi reh rhe hain jaise aapne kaha h, lekin sachin aur kapil hamesha yaha aana chahte hain unhe kaise rokoge, future me ashima aur rashmi bhi yaha aane lagi to kaise batayenge unhe kaise samhalogi sab,

Anjali- abhi jaisa maine btaya h waise hi chalna h, yaha ke logo ke liye ruchi tushar ki patni hogi, aur tum dono bahan hi ho aur main maa,

Seema- lekin wo h kaha kal raat se ghar nhi aaye hain, bahar itni thand h baraf pad rhi h aur wo log gayab hain,

Deepa- aaj unhe thand nhi lagne wali, aaj dono ke jism aag me tap rhe honge, ruchi ki tapshya uske pyar ka fal tushu uski chut me barsa rha hoga,

Anjali- deepu kitni gandi ho gai h tu

Deepa- main kuch galat thodena bol rhi hu aaj uski chut ki dhajiya uda rha hoga, use aaj ahsas ho rha hoga tushu se pyar karke wo kitna dard deta h,

Seema- aur maja, uska nhi btaya maja kitna deta h

Deepa- ha maja dikh rha h hum tino ki kok me,

Tino hasne lagi,

Wahi..

Himachal ki pahadiyo me, baraf gir rhi thi, ek sumsan jagah jaha bas baraf hi baraf thi, insano ko waha jane ki permission nhi thi,

Ek nange badan bala ki khubsurat ladki jiski chuchiya kisi pahadi ki trha tani khadi thi, wo baraf per nanagi leti thi,


uske upper ek sand jaisa nojawan mard ladki ke pairo ke bich tha,


Ladka-Teyar h na dal du

Ladki- daal do, main to kab se teyar hu ise lene ke liye

Ladka- dard hoga, thand me waise bhi jyada sukhi ho rhi hogi

Ladki- main tumhari baki premikao ki trha nhi hu, aaj tumhe jannat na dikha di to mera naam bhi ruchi nhi,

Ye dono tushar aur ruchi the, jinhone apna phela sambhog karne ke liye khuli pahadi aur upper se girti hui baraf ko chuna tha,

Tushar ne lund ruchi ki chut per lagaya aur dabaw bnane laga, pheli baar me lund fisal gaya, jisse ruche hasne lagi, tushar ne fir koshish ki lekin fir wahi hua lund fisal gaya,

Is bar tushar ne lund ko pakde rakhha aur dabaw bnaya lund ka topa ruchi ki chut me ghus gaya,

Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

Tushar- dard hua na

Ruchi ki aankho me aansu the lekin face per smile thi,

Ruchi- is dard ke liye hi to maine itna sabar kiya h, tum ruko nhi ab awaj nhi aayegi,

Tushar ne fir jor lagaya, aur lund chut ko chirta hu aaadha ghus gaya, ruchi ki aankho se lagatar aansu bhe rhe the lekin face per se smile gayab nhi hui, jise dekh kr tushar bhi shocked tha, tushar ko pata tha uske lund ko jhelna kisi gadhi ke baske nhi h aur ruchi itni aasani se she rhi thi,

Tushar ne halke halke dhake lagane shuru kiye,

Ruchi- pura daal do

Tusahr- bahut dard hoga

Ruchi- koi baat nhi bas daal do

Tushar ne ek jor dar dhakka mara aur lund lagbahg pura ghus gaya tha, ruchi ke muh se ahhhhhhhhhhhhh nikli aur ek pal ke liye pheli bar uske face se smile gayab hui, lekin agale hi pal wahi smile fir uske face per thi,

Tushar ne halke halke dhakke lagane shuru kr diye the, thand me dono ke shareer ek dum sunn ho rakhe the, jisse ruchi ko dard ka ahsas kuch kam ho rha tha, niche se ruchi ki chut se nikalne wala khoon safeed baraf ko lal kr rha tha, 20 minutes tak tushar aise hi halke halke dhakko se ruchi ko chodta rha, ruchi bhi niche se kama hila kr uska sath de rhi thi,

Kuch der baad ruchi ne tushar ko ulta aur use niche litaya khud uske upper aa gai, pheli bar me hi ruchi tushar ke lund per sawari kr rhi thi,


people encouraging people
bahut himmat thi ruchi me, tushar ko double maja aa rha tha, aaj koi uski takkar ki mili thi, aaj tushar nhi chod rha tha balki ruchi tushar ko chod rhi thi, tushar ki halat kharab ho chuki thi, wais eis bich me ruche ek bar jhad chuki thi, lekin ruchi ki jagah koi aur hoti to 2-3 bar jhad chuki hoti, dono ki chudai 40 minutes tak chali jisme ruche 2 bar jhadi,

Tushar- main aa rha hu

Ruchi- ander mat karna mujhe abhi maa nhi banna

Tushar ne turant lund bahar nikal liya, aur pura ras ruche ki chuchiyo per nikal diya,

Dono aise hi baraf me let gaye,

Ruchi- uuuffffffffffffffffffffffff maja aa gaya, jindagi ka asali maja aaj aaya h

Tushar- tumhe abhi maa nhi banna

Ruchi- agar main bhi abhi maa ban gai to jo tino ghar me gyabhan hokr baithi hain unke bachhe kon palwayega

Tushar- ohhh badi dur ki sochi,

Ruchi- chalo ab niche chalte hain baki wahi karenge warna agar tumhe thand lag gai to wo tino meri jaan le lengi,

Fir dono ne kapde phene, baraf per apna khoon dekh kr ruchi muskurai,

Fir dono niche ek guesthouse per aa gaye,

Jaha dono ne fir chudai ki aur sham ko ghar pahuche,

Ghar me anajli ne aarti utar kr dono ka swagat kiya,

Ruchi- ye sab kis liye maa

Anjali- tum dono ka greh parwes nhi kr pai thi, aaj tum spni jindsgi ks ek aur padaw paar karke aai ho isliye swagat kr rhi hu,

Fir sabne ek sath khana khaya,

Time badi teji se beet rha tha, ab sabke pait bahar dikhne lage the, anjali ka 9 mahina chal rha tha, aur seema deepa ka 8th,

Sabse phela phone jail se aaya tha, komal ne ek beti ko janam diya tha, ghar me sabse pheli beti ne kadam rakha tha, lekinsabse bura ye tha ki wo jail me paida hui thi, ruchi aur tushar dono nikal gaye komal se milne,

Komal bahut khush thi, tushar bhi bahut khush tha uska phela bachha jo aaya tha is duniya me, waha pata chala ki komal ko agale mahine chod diya jayega uske kuch mahine maaf kr diye gae hain achhe vyavhar ke karan,

6 din baad nandani ki call aai usne bhi ek beti ko janam diya h, tushar aur ruche waha bhi pahuche,

Nandani- aunty nhi aai

Ruchi- wo aayengi baad me abhi unki tabiyat thik nhi h,

Tusahr- nandani mere liye ek kaam karogi

Nandani- keh do bas

Tushar- komal ko apne sath rakho wo bahut tanav me h wo bachhe ko sahi disha shayad na dikha paye,

Nanadani- tum chinta mat karo main uske jail se niklte hi use lekar London chali jaungi,

Tusahr- America chali jao mere liye thodi rahat rhegi

Nandnai- hasi thik h America chali jaungi, humare bachhe wahi rhenge, bas tum milne aate rhena,

Tusahr- jarur aaunga

Anjali rinky aur anita tino ko kabhi bhi bachhe ho sakte the, tushar pareshan tha agar rinky ya anita ko bachha hua to wo anjali ko akele chod kr kaise jayega,

Lekin kismet ne sath diya phele anjali ko beta hua, jise dekh kr tusha rki khushi ka thikana nhi tha, wo bahut khush tha kyoki anjali hi uske liye pheli aur sabs emhetvpurn insane thi,

Do din baad rinky ka call aaya ki mummy ko pain hone shuru ho gae hain kabhi bhi doctors ke pas jana padega, tushar ne turant America ke liye fligt pakad li,

Anjali ne rinky ko call kya

Anjali- rinky beta tum dono ki delevry ek sath ek hi din honi chahiye,

Rinky- aisa kyo aunty

Anjali- time aane per bata dungi

Rinky- thik h

Tuhsar waha pahuch gaya to pata chala dono maa beti hospital me hain, rinky ne khud ki delevry bhi plan kr li h sath me,

Dono ko betiya paida hui, tushar bahut khush tha, bahut khubsurat thi dono, waha dono bachho ke pita ka naam tushar diya gaya,

Waha se tushar nikal gaya wapas india aane ke liye, lekin wo ghar nhi pahucha,

Seema- maa tushu waha se aa chukka h ghar kyo nhi aaya,

Anjali- kuch jaruri hoga isliye ruke honge aa jyenge

Anjali ne bol to diya lekin use bhi chinta ho rhi thi,

Anjali ne pata karwaya to pata chala ki tushar ne America se fight Mumbai ki lit hi,

Anjali ka matha thanka aise me wo Mumbai kyo gaya h,

Tushar pahucha tha varsha ke pas, jo mumbai me akel I reh rhi thi sabse dur, industry se bhi usne connection khatam kiya hua tha, tushar ne sachin se bol kr ek office Mumbai me khulwa diya tha jaha varsha ne samhal liya tha, varsha bhi maa banne wali thi aur usne bhi ek beti ko janam diya, tushar ke charo taraf betiya hi betiya thi,

Tushar waha se wapas ghar aaya,

Anjali- kaha reh gaye the

Tushar- ek kaam tha

Anjali- Mumbai me kya kaam

Tushar- kisi se milna tha

Anjali- aapko mujhse chupane ki jarurat nhi h, mujhe yakeen h ki jo main soch rhi hu wais ahi hoga isliye na to jhut bolne ki jarurat h na hi chupane ki

Tushar- sry main chupana nhi chhata tha, lekin us time halat aise the ki kuch bata nhi paya fir batane ki himmat nhi hui, lekin ab chupa nhisakta

Varsha ne meri beti ko janam diya h,

Anjali- ahhhhhhhhh bas wahi bachi thi, main hamesha sochti thi wo kaise bach gai use pyar kyo nhi hua aapse, lekin main galat thi mujhe khushi h lekin aapko chupana nhi chahiye tha,

Tushar- is bar maaf kr do aage se galti nhi hogi,

Tushar- maa pichle 15 din me main 6 bachho ka baap ban chukka hu aur shayad agale 15-20 din me 3 aur aa jayenge,

Tabhi deepa a gai

Deepa- tin kaise hum to 2 h na

Anjali- alka

Deepa- kya wo bhi maa banne wali h lekin wo h kaha us hadse ke baad to wo kabhi aai hi nhi milne na koi wasta rakha

Seema aur ruchi bhi wahi aa gai,

Anjali- usne nhi rakha to kya hua hume to rakhna tha na, main usse milne nhi ja sakti pait ki wajah se lekin ye hamesha milte rhe hain usse,

Deepa- wo h kaha

Tushar- gaon me

Sab ek sath kya, lekin kyo hume to aaj tak pata hi nhi, papa ne bhi nhi btaya kabhi

Tushar- ye usi ka faisla tha kisi ko is bare me janakri na di jaye,

Seema- lekin kyo

Tusahr- us hadse ke baad alka buri trha tut gai uski puri duniya badal gai, dono bhai mar gaye maa pagal ho gai pita jail chale gaye, pati jasper use sabse jyada visvas aur pyar tha uske affairs ke itne kisse samne aa gaye ki uska visvas puri trha tut gaya, wo sab chod kr chali gait hi, badi mushkil se use dhunda fir varsha aur main euse smajhane ki koshish ki, tab maine varsha aur alka ko puri kahani sunai kaise mujhe wo sab karna pada aur komal aur nandnai ke sath kin halato me karna pada,

Tab jakr wo kuch shant hui lekin uski ek sharat thi ki wo sabke smane nhi aana chahti, aur samaj ke smane wo meri patni ki trha rhena chahti h, yaha to use sab jante the lekin gaon me koi nhi janta tha, aur mere liye to mera gaon hi samaj h, isliye usne gaon me rhe kar papa ki sewa karne ka faisla kiya,

Gaon me wo meri patni ki trha reh rhi h, gaon walo ko ye hi pata h alka meri patni h, aur main shahar me kaam karta hu, baki family maa ke sath kahi bahar rheti hain, aur baki bheno ki shadi ho chuki h,

Ruchi- maa aapko pata tha ye sab

Anjali- ha mujhe pata tha,

Deepa- to kab aa rhi h waha se khush khabri

Tushar- aap dono ke sath hi kyoki tum tino ko ek hi din me pregnant kiya tha,

Seema- dekh rhi ho maa tino ko ek hi din me maa bana diya isne, kya kha kr paida kiya aapne ise

Anjali- ab main kya kahu ye chahe to hum sab ko ek sath ek hi bar me pregnant kr sakte hain

Ruchi- maa agale mahine alka maa banegi gaon walo ki najar me wo tushar ka hi bachha h, to hum sab kaise ja payenge ye socha h aapne

Anjali- jana to hoga, tab tak main kuch thik ho jaungi, aur tu chalegi humare sath

Ruchi- agar deepa aur seema di ki bhi tabhi dlevery hui to kya karogi,

Anjali- adjust karna padega sabko,

Ruchi- hum sab to adjust kr lenge lekin aashima aur rashami ki bhi khabar kabhi bhi aa sakti h, unka kya karogi waha to aapko jana padega,

Anjali- kaise musibat me fasa diya h,

Ruchi- tension na lo main aur tushu samhal lenge isiliye maine baby plan nhi kiya abhi phele aapke bachhe to paal lu,

Sab hasne lage,

Fir kuch dino me hi aashima aur rashmi ne ek ek ladki ko janam diya, ruchi aur tushar dono waha gaye, tushar ne anjali ki tabiyat kharab ka bahana bana diya,

Fir aaya din jab alka ne ek beti ko janam diya, anjali ruchi tushar sachin waha pahuche, uske do din baad seema aur deepa dono ne betiyo ko janam diya,

Ab tushar 9 bachho ka baap tha,

Jisme sabse badi beti

• komal – kamya beti
• Nandani- naina beti
• Anjali- Hardya beta
• Anita- anya beti
• Rinky- riya beti
• Varsha- vanya beti
• Alka- avya beti
• Seema- shnaya beti
• Deepa- diya beti

aur do

Aashima- aashna beti

Rashmi- raina beti

Total 11 bachhe the jinme ek akela beta tha HARDAY

Uska naam bhi isi liye HARDAY rakha tha kyoki wo in sabka harday hi tha,

Sab kuch bahut badhiya ho gaya tha,

America me rinky tushar ki patni thi, anita ne jugad laga kr apne bachhe ke birth certificate me anita ki jagah rinky likhwa diya, dono ka ek hi din aur ek hi time tha lagbhag to record ke hisab se rinky ne judwa bachho ko janam diya tha, ye anjali ne hi idea diya anita ko,

Wahi nanadani aur komal ne khul kr samaj ke samne bol diya ki unke pati criminals the isliye wo bachho ko apne patiyo ka naam nhi denge, unke bachho ke baap ke naam ki jagah khud ka naam hi likhwaya, mantri ki beti thi to wo tusahr ka naam nhi le sakte the, warna media me tushar ka naam aa jata aur media tushar ke piche lag jati khojbeen karne,

Alka ne khul ke naam likh hi diya tha, Mumbai me varsha ne apne bachhe ke pita me tushar ka naam likhwaya,

Idhar deepa aur anjali ke bachho ki maa ban gai deepa, dono ke naam me maa ka naam deepa likhwaya gaya aur pita ka naam tushar ka,
sab bahut badhia chal rha tha, fir 1 saal baad ruchi bhi pregnant ho gai, aur uski delivery ki date thi 17 march, anjali ke birthday ke din, 16 march ki raat ko tushar ke pas ek phone aaya aur wo nikal gaya bina kisi ko kuch btaye hue,












20 saal baad ek bade se hall me gadde biche hue the, jisper 11 jawan ladke ladkiya baithe the, jisme 10 ladkiya aur 1 ladka tha, samne do bujurg 60-60 saal ki aurte baithi thi, khene ko to bujurg thi lekin unki sundarta aur chere ki chamak aisi thi ki koi jawan bhi unke samne fail ho jaye,

Ek ladki – Badi maa fir wo chale kaha gaye aisa kya hogaya ki wo tino hi lapata ho gaye, jis ladke ko itne sare gunde kuch nhi kr sake, wo aise kaise gayab ho gaye, kisi ko to pata hoga kya hua

Aur maa bhi sath thi,

Aurat- beti avya

Ye ladki thi avya alka aur tushar ki beti, aur jis aurat se wo baat kr rhi thi wo thi anjali aur anita

Anjali- beti avya ye hi raaj h ki waha hua kyat ha aur wo tino gaye kaha, alka tushar aur ruchi tino ek sath unko gayab hue aaj 18 saal ho chuke hain, aur ruche us time pregnant thi,

Kamya ( komal ki beti)- is sab me humare sabke pita ka pata kaise chalega wok on h kaha h aaj tak hum sabki maao ne humare pitao ke bare me kuch nhi btaya, bas ye pata h ki tushar ji ne hume apna naam diya,

Diya (deepa ki beti)- wo important nhi h humare pita kon h kyu h kaha h, tushar ji ne hume apna naam diya h to wahi humare pita saman h, hum apni maao per koi iljam nhi lagayenge, lekin alka ruchi aur tushar jig aye kaha aur kaise, jaisa badi maa ne btaya unka dimag bahut tej tha, wahi tushar ji dimag aur shareer dono hi bahut tej the, fir un logo ko koi aise kaise gayab kr sakta h,

Anjali- visvas beta visvas dikha kr kuch bhi krwaya ja sakta h, mujhe yakeen h kisi apne ne hi visvas ghat kiya h unke sath,

Hardya- last jankari kya h unke bare me badi maa

Anjali- bas itna ki delhi ke bahar ek farmhouse per 60 logo ki lashe padi hui thi, jinhe kisi ne kisi dhardhar hatiyar se kaat diya tha, us time ruchi, alka aur mera tushu wahi the,

Lekin wo log waha kyo the aur waha se wok aha chale gaye kisi ko nhi pata, kyoki ye btane ke liye waha koi jinda hi nhi bacha, aaj tak pure desh ki police cbi koi bhi ajency ye jankari nhi nikla pai h,

Vanya( varsha ki beti)- hum dhundenge unhe, meri maa kheti h wo unke liye bahut khas the, aur jo meri maa ke liye khas h wo mere liye khas h,

Harday- ab chahe dharti unhe nigal gai ho ya asmaan utha kr le gaya ho, main unhe dhund kr launga, ye mera wada h

Tabhi ek aawaj aai

Tujhe hi karna h tujhe hi karna hoga, tujhe maine bnaya hi aisa h kit u ye kr sake, teri parvarish hi maine aisi ki h ki duniya ki koi takat tujhe nhi jhuka sakti,

Ye awaaj thi deepa ki

Harday- maa aap chinta mat kijiye main le aaunga

Waha komal, nanadani, rinky, anjali, anita, varsha, seema, aur deepa sab khade the jinke face per ek chamak ek gussa aur ek umeed ki kiran dikha de rhi thi,

Harday- aap sab mere liye maa ki trha h main aap sabk kasam khakr kheta hu main unhe dhund kr launga

Waha baithi sab ladkiya- hum sab tumhare sath hain

Seema- maa aaj to cake kaat lo, ab to harday ne bol diya h wo le aayega, aapne pchle 18 saal se janamdin nhi bnaya h

Anjali- aaj ke din mera beta aur 2 betiya chali gai main kaise janam din mana sakti hu,

Harday- badi maa aapke agale janamdin se phele wo aapke pas hone,

Anjali ne harday ko gale se laga liya,

END OF FIRST PART​

Kahani ka phela part yahi khata karti hu, jaldi hi iska agala part aayega,

बहुत बढ़िया कहानी है
अगले भाग का इंतजार रहेगा

वो अफसाना जिसे अन्जाम तक पहुंचाना ना हो मुमकिन
उसे एक खूबसूरत मोड़ देकर छोड़ना अच्छा

 

[RK5022]

Mujhe laga tha sab ek saath rahenge 1-2 update laga kar sabko manaya jayega par ye to kabhi socha nahi tha, plan sahi hai sabko group me bant ke alag alag rakhna jam bhi raha hai, khass kar Rajesh aur Alka ka ganw me rahna

Pata nahi par last me mujhe jabardasti wala khincha taani pashand nahi ayi, mere khayal se ye kahani ka end yahi pe ho jaana chahiye tha par ye apki story hai to apki marzi, readers ka demand hai to sab chalega.

Well mere liye ye kahani bahut dil ke pass hai kyunki is tarah ki suspense bassed story is forum me bahut likhe gaye hai lockdown ke baad par complete bahut kam hi hua hai, jinme se mere liye ye top par hai, kahan main aya tha is story ko padh ke hilaane ke liye par ye to kuch aur hi nikal gaya,

Kahani ki shuruaat hadd se jyada erotic par concept iska bakiyo se alag tha, kahani ke Title ke hisaab se Ek Maa ne hi is kahani ki shuruaat ki aur aur maa ne hi end kiya halanki last last me Tushar main lead role me lag raha tha par itna chalta hai, character add hote gaye kahani complicated hota gaya beech me aisa laga tha writer character ke beech confuse hoke kahani adhura chhod dega par aisa bilkul na hua
Mere liye regular update ke bina suspense story bakwas hoti hai ye bhi ek kaaran hai jo is kahani se itna lagaaw raha mera aur bakiyo ka, kul milakar dekha jaaye to ye ek koyala tha jo erotic way me suru hua tha par writer ne bahut khoobsurati se sajakar isko heera banaya hai, ek alag hi level ka suspense bhara masterpiece story thi ye

 

[kasturimgm]

Bahut hi achhi Rochak kahani hai. Thanks
Waiting for next

 

[riya singh]

Jitne din aapki story chali aur koi story read hi nahi ki sach me kabhi itni achi story nahi read ki aap to super ho boss

Bahut bahut dhanyawad ji

 

[riya singh]

400 पेजेज और बेशुमार लाइक , रिव्यू के साथ इस कहानी का ' द एंड ' हुआ ।
यह एक सफलतम स्टोरी की पहचान है । इसके लिए निस्संदेह आप बधाई के पात्र है ।

वैसे क्लाइमेक्स मे आपने एक सस्पेंस रख दिया जो एक इशारा था इस स्टोरी के सेकेंड पार्ट के लिए ।
मुझे लगता है बेहतर होता कि इस स्टोरी को सिर्फ एक पार्ट मे ही रहने दिया जाए । एक सक्सेस स्टोरी के साथ छेड़छाड़ करने से क्या फायदा !

क्लाइमेक्स के सस्पेंस के साथ ही इस स्टोरी का ' द एंड ' कर दीजिए ।

एक सफलतम स्टोरी के लिए आपको फिर से धन्यवाद रिया जी ।

Bahut bahut dhanyawad ji
Pahle maine is story ko yahi khatam karne ka socha tha lekin bahut readers ki demand thi ki next part hona chahiye,
To bas ek suspense daal Diya, us suspance ke liye bahut lambi story abhi dimag me h bhi nhi par umeed karti hu aapko niras nhi karungi,
Dusri story start ho chuki hain us per bhi apna pyar aur kimati vichar jarur dena

 

[riya singh]

बहुत बढ़िया कहानी है
अगले भाग का इंतजार रहेगा

वो अफसाना जिसे अन्जाम तक पहुंचाना ना हो मुमकिन
उसे एक खूबसूरत मोड़ देकर छोड़ना अच्छा

Bahut bahut dhanyawad ji