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mistyvixen

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Miss vixen first of all wanna ask you a question.... "Kiski Alias ho" :D



Obviously you were a great Reader in the past thats why i can see you have all that needs to be in a writer of story in xforum.... Sabse pehle to muthhal logo ke liye tumne hawas element add kardia hai to views ki tension nhi lene ka :lol1: sirf views isiliye bola kyuki wo like nhi karte ...... secondary suspense and a solid plot for the story so likes ki tension nhi :approve: ........lekin lekin agar is story ko complete hona hai to sabse jaruri cheez hai good Reviews kyuki jaise abhi tum toj apni story ke views check karti or ek time baad nhi karogi kuch time baad likes bhi fascinating nhi lagenge....

Even kuch din baad updates likhne ka man bhi nhi hoga or us time jo cheez confidence degi wo hai reviews so your main task is to find people who gives you review jo tumhe motivate kare ...... (Generally im not this type of guy who talks shit like this shit means gyaan ki baatein par mujhe bahut time baad koi story acchi lagi hai to bas mujhe laga bolna chahiye :lollypop: )



As i Said in my last Review badi behna apne bhai or maa ko jail mein nhi daalegi wo suspence ka build up tha .....
Aage padhte hue pta chala ki karan ki maata shri gayab ho chuki hai vanrajya se or jo cheez notice karne wali thi wo thi mossi ka is baat se khush na hona jiska reason last update mein aakar pta chala ki mossi dushman desh ki raani sahiba se wafadaar hai or shayad wo nandini ko pakdna chahti thi par nandini ke gayab hone se plan fail hogaya ...... :roll:



Whi doosri taraf karan ki badi behen usko yuddh kala mein nipun banana chahti hai jiske liye karan bhi mehnat kar rha hai jaisa story mein bataya karan ne practice karte hue meher ko khush kia kyuki apni dimaag se usne talwaar mein urja ka sanchalan kia ....



Karan ki mossi ne karan ko rajya ka raaja ghosit karne ka socha hai or uske liye usne phele kuch sawal kie or bola ki karan ko ek mahila ko pregnant karna padega ..... Seriously mistyvixen !! :laugh: .....maybe mein stories ki hawas or sex wali side avoid karta hu to mujhe ye bahut bakchod test lag rha hai for being an Emperor of a State but shi hai after all this is fantasy......



Jayada isliye nhi bol rha kyuki mujhe pta hai is sex night ka kuch na kuch to impact hoga hi aage jaa kar or mein jarur dekhna chahunga ki wo kya hai .....shayad jis aurat ke saath karan ne :sex: ki usne kuch karan ki body mein implant kia ho ya "vishkanya" jaisa concept ho jaisa humari history mein hota aaya hai .....




Also The meher advice to the karan to use "Vayu Tatva".... so he didn't got out early on the bed :rolrun: Waise to bahut si or cheez hai kehne or batane ko par isse jayada likh skta to apni story ka update likh deta :p:




At Last your Ai pics are Awesome..... I have used Ai and feels your efforts to make those pics with same background but different gesture of body and reactions (meine notice kia sirf these muthhal people will not :sigh: )
Also you introduce our Hero with Pic for the first time :yay: but meine socha tha usse bilkul alag image hai tumhare man mein karan ki mein dua karunga jaisa tum apne liye ladka chahtti ho (karan) jaisa bilkul na mile or humesha bhagwan or khud ko kosti raho :thanks: :kiss1:



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OMG!!! *GASP* *GASP*

FOR A MOMENT I THOUGHT HOW YOU POSTED A CHAPTER ON MY THREAD !!! 🙃.

wait I'll make another post editing a starting post to pin down my favourite comments 💙. And this will be the 1st one!

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I'll reply properly to this later (I will need to think a lot hehe).

Can't thank you enough! 💜💙
 
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Chapter 4:

Bhai saab itna lamba update..... meri to saas ful gyi padhte padhte....aur achcha turn of story hai... kuch raaz to khule ke ye chal kya raha tha... warna to kahani Nandani ke figure aur mammo par aa kar ruki hui thi...hahaha 😂... mazak kar raha hu.... achchi chal rahi thi story....

Nandani (Haaiiiii kitni sundar hai yaar) aur Karan dono khane ke fish pakadte hain (ufff Nandani ke jhuke hue dekhne wala kya scene tha... Karan bhi apni mom ki gaand taadne se nahi bach saka aur hum bhi)... lekin wahi unka saamna Rakshas Mushroom Lal se hota hai aur hamara hero apni Talwar se baat krte hue Ghost Rider ban jata hai.... aur mushroom daitya ka khatma kar deta hai ....

Khair Nandani ne Karan ko puri history sunai... uska baap Maharaj Subhadra.... aur uski sautli maao ke baare mein bataya... aur rajya ke kuch gaddaro ke baare mein bhi.... aur Patal Lok ke villian Maharaja Traas ke baare mein.... (hoga villian apne patal lok ka .. apne hero ke paas bhi talwar hai) haha...

mast kahani chal rahi hai... abhi aagey kai patte khulne baaki hai... Keh nahi sakte ki bas chacha hi lalach ka bhuka hai ya baaki ki raaniya mein so koi aur bhi....

Karan ki mausi aur behen ko dekhne ke bekaraar ho raha hai mann ab....

onto chapter 5....
Yeah, 4th was the longest chapter I guess... I've toned down others a little bit. Good to know that you're enjoying it.

Yea, that scene was meant for that kind of horny stuff...smack smak.

But Traas is unbelievably strong...Karan would stand no chance against him till the majority of the story (I guess in the end too).

Yep, it would be a very long and tedious journey. But I hope you'd enjoy it with Nandani and others.

Read quickly if you want to meet them this soon!

Good luck 💙💜. And thanks a LOT.
 
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Shandar jabardast super hot 🔥update 🔥 🔥 💓
Karan ko ab dono taraf se dushmano ka samna karna padega dekhte hai kaya karega jab use akansha ki sachchai aur dokhe ka pta chalega .
Shayad nandani ko kuchh pata aur wo bhi apne mouke ka intzar kar rahi ho 😉
Thanksss 💙💙. I've planned some more surprises ahead before the final showdown! Keep reading
 
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Bahen apne bhai ko ek yodha banne wali training deker apna farz nibha Rahi h or idhar mausi us farz se Karan ko behka Rahi h saalo kameeni apni asliyat Bata di ki woh kaalRaani Vinashikha ke liye kaam kerti h
Woh bhala ho Maher ka Jo usne Karan ko sab samjha dia
Baherhal dekhte h aage kia hota h
Behtareen shaandar lajawab update
I would politely advise you to keep calm lol. This is not as simple 😁

Yes, Meher saved him there and he dodged a bullet.

THANKS 💙
 
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