Thriller GaLaTH...(THE WRONG THAT MADE EVERYTHING RIGHT)

[Ashish120]

Waiting

 

[vj4u]

Ek prashn tha vj4u bhai.. Jab starting updates mein ek Delhi ka scene aaya tha, jahaan kuchh reporters baat kar rahe the G.O.D. ke baare mein, udhar aapne is acronym ka matlab Genesis Of Destruction bataya tha aur is update mein Guardians Of Destruction.

Bohot acha point pakda hai brother...

Is point ka bhi apna ek point hai... aage chalkar clear ho jaayega...

 

[vj4u]

Pichhle kuchh updates mein do baar ye siddh ho chuka hai ki abhi ke liye, Sanvy is just a kid in front of G.O.D.! Abhi tak humne G.O.D. ki fighting skills athva baudhik shamtaon ke baare mein kuchh nahi jaana hai, but jahaan tak main aapki lekhni ko pehchanta hun, aur jis prakar ka aura G.O.D. ka darshaya gaya hai, I can say that even in the climax, G.O.D. would be better than Sanvy, when it comes to capabilities and fighting skills, majorly because of his twisted mind and experience of bloodshed! Aisa nahi hai ki Sanvy achanak se hi kamzor ho gaya hai, parantu satya to ye hai ki jitno ke saath bhi Sanvy ka mukabla hua hai abhi tak, unki haisiyat us future war, ko trial ball banne tak ki bhi nahi thi!!

I don't think ki Jaiden se pehle koyi bhi strong negative prospect kahani mein aaya tha... Arif was the best of all, but again Sanvy treated him like a kid! Par ab, Jaiden aur Hawker ne dikha diya hai ki Sanvy ka safar kitna lamba hai, par saath hi behad romanchak bhi hone waala hai... Pichhle do Updates ki highlight Hawkers hi the, Hawkers yaani G.O.D. naamak us syndicate ke lower level members, jinka kaam ek spy jaisa hi hota hai... Everytime I read that fight between the Hawker & Sanvy, and then read the line, that they're at lower levels in G.O.D., I literally get goosebumps thinking about what this story holds for the future!

G.O.D. dwara Uttarakhand ke teen cities, Godi, Okhalson & Dharchula, ek sandesha tha Veronica ke liye that he's coming for Sanvy! We know that Saneel was killed by G.O.D., or we can say that he was put in a situation where suicide was the only option... Waisa hi kuchh shayad Veronica ke saath bhi hone waala hai, Veronica ne Ranjana se kaha tha ki Saneel ke samay saikdon laashein giraayi thi G.O.D. ne, aur waisa hi kuchh is baar bhi kar sakta hai... I think, the Prologue scene, that's coming up, will unfold some big secrets about Veronica, Saneel and maybe G.O.D. too...

Ek aur baat saaf ho gayi ki Sanvy ko G.O.D. ke baare mein basic knowledge bhi nahi hai, doosre shabdon mein, Veronica ne use abhi tak in sab cheezon se door rakha hai... This is a common practice in most of the stories, that the protagonist doesn't have complete knowledge & information about his environment and most often, his close one's hide things from him, for a very dumb reason, that they don't want him to be killed or injured... Despite knowing the fact that, whether they tell him the complete story or not, one day he'll know everything, and the consequences might he worse because of no prior precautions or preparations...

But in this story, which is actually one of the best writings I've ever come across, I expect something different... Yadi Veronica Sanvy se ye sab chhipa rahi hai, to definitely uska ek solid reason hoga Veronica ke paas... Iska seedha sa kaaran yahi hai ki usne apne haathon se Sanvy ko banaya hai is ladayi mein shaamil hone ke liye, to obviously wo us se bina kisi badi wajah ke to saari hakikat chhupayegi nahi... One reason I can think of is Sanvy's emotional issues, regarding Saneel's death... Dekha hi humne, ki uspar kitna impact padta hai jab use Saneel ki us phone call conversation ki yaad aati hai, baaki asal kaaran kya hai, ye to pata chal hi jaayega...

Ab mukhya sawaal ye hai ki Veronica ne Hawkers se fight kis uddeshya se ki? Jaisa ki Veronica ne kaha ki Hawkers kewal stalking ke liye hi recruit kiye jaate hain, to obviously kisi bhi prakar ka khatra to the nahi wo, kisi bhi aam insaan ke liye... Aise mein kya kaaran tha ki Veronica unse uljhi? Veronica jaisi shaksiyat ka koyi bhi action bewajah nahi ho sakta, kya Sanvy ki nigrani athva uspar nazar rakhne ke uddeshya se aaye the wo Hawkers? Ya unke zariye,seedhe G.O.D. ko challenge kar rahi thi Veronica? Veronica ne ant mein kaha ki wo apna ant mehsoos kar paa rahi hai, that was heart breaking to read but at the same time, it shows how big G.O.D. is..!!

Pichhle updates mein Ranjana ke pati Sudhir ko jab Veronica ne Sanvy ke liye pita – tulya, like a third father more appropriately, bataya tha, tabse hi ye speculation ban ni shuru ho gayi thi ki who could be the second man? Prologue Update mein Advocate Anupam ko jis vyakti ne phone par instructions di thi, Sanvy se judi, us se ye to pata chal gaya tha ki wahi shakhs hoga, wo second father! Par is update ne kuchh aur baatein bhi clear ki hain uske baare mein... He loves Sanvy a lot, respects Veronica a lot and he's a big name/personality too... G.O.D. ke un hamlon ko lekar chinta zaahir ki thi Ranjana ne ki iske baad wo shakhs chup nahi baithega, let's see ki kaun sahi hota hai, Ranjana ki chinta ya Veronica ka vishwas...

Beharhal, us Smoothie Bar mein huyi ghatna par bhi prakash daala gaya is update mein... Aarna ko god mein liya tha Sanvy ne wahaan jispar uske friends chouk gaye the, wahin Anjali kuchh hadh tak samajh gayi thi... Us bachi ko god mein lene ka kaaran uska naam tha – Aarna! Aarna, yaani us shakhs ki beti jise Sanvy apne pita samaan maanta hai aur Veronica apni beti ki tarah... Shayad Chapter – 2 aur 3 mein dikhayi degi Aarna, par sawaal ye hai ki kya Anjali uske baare mein jaanti hai? Chunki, us Smoothie Bar waale update mein kaha gaya tha...

Clearly, agar koyi Sanvy aur us se judi cheezon/baaton/logon ke baare mein sabse zyada jaanta hai to wo Anjali hi hai...

Khair, future mein ek aur important cheez jo honi hai wo hai, Dimple would try to backstab Sanvy! I love the future glimpses in a story, but usually they're a saddening part to read too.. Dimple jitna pyaar karti hai Sanvy se, I don't think ki kahin se bhi wo pyaar us se kam hoga, jitna Sanvy Dimple de karta hai, bhale hi us se zyada chahe ho... Aur mujhe nahi lagta ki kabhi bhi ye sawaal tha ki Dimple Sanvy se pyaar karti hai ya nahi, sawaal ek hi tha aur ab bhi hai, ki kya use apna pyaar kabhi mil paayega..?

After Veronica's death, will we see an emotional Sanvy in the story? Mujhe nahi lagta ki ghrina aur dard ke atirikt koyi aur emotion kabhi hum dekh paayenge Sanvy ke character mein, aise mein jo daava Dimple ne thoka hai, ki Sanvy ek din use New Girl kehkar zaroor pukarega, uske poore hone ke chances kitne bachte hain..? We've seen in the previous two stories of yours, that the protagonist and his female counterpart's relationship isn't a simple one, they're against each – other for a considerable amount of time in the story, but thankfully, at the end, they're together... Dekhna hoga ki kya is kahani mein aisa ho paayega? The simple reason for this question is Sanvy, the boy seems to be so, so different, when compared with Vikram or Raaz, that we just cannot assume anything about his future, especially his love's future...

Veronica khush thi Dimple ke Republic Day ke performance par, inke friend circle ne bhi Dimple ko ab neutral way mein dekhna shuru kar diya hai, at least there are no hard feelings for her... Sam ke case mein bhi aisa hai, kaha nahi jaa sakta... Baaki meri nazar mein Dimple ne jo kiya wo shayad galath nahi tha, considering what she chose & why she chose, we just cannot blame her... I hope that she'll be able to make Sanvy confess his feelings for her, one more time, but I hope that she'll not be on the death – bed at that time!

Both the Updates were really outstanding & amazing! Your stories contain various elements that make this story special, like, suspense, thrill, emotions, love, action, adventure and much more! But what's really – really special is your way of narration.. I haven't seen anyone putting those minor details about each & everything in every single update... This time it was about The Republic Day, I don't think there could've been a better way to present the scene, literally got goosebumps when Dimple's song's part came...

Outstanding Updates Bhai & Waiting For Next...

Wow...Just saying brilliant review would be an understatement...

Jis baariki se aap puri kahani ko padh rahe hain,agar kabhi mai past ke updates bhula toh yaad karne ke liye un updates me jaane ke bajaye agar aapke reviews padh lun toh i am sure ki sab yaad aa jaayega...

Now coming to the important points mentioned in your review...

firstly G.O.D...

Waise toh G.O.D ek CABAL hai,ek tarah ka syndicate...par iska jo sargana hai,he is something i am sure ki waisa koi kabhi nahi padha aapne...

Jab maine characters develop kar raha tha mai toh jo idea mujhe G.O.D ke liye aaya tha,woh sirf socha nahi tha maine...the idea of G.O.D had hit me so hard ki literally us raat i dreamt that imaginary character...

Character maine banaya hai...woh kaisa hoga,socha hua hai maine but trust me on this...jab likhunga mai usse,i am very nervous ki jo socha hai uske baare me, would i be able to justify that character...!!!

Hamare indian sanskriti me,agar koi negetive character aaya hai jiska impact sabse zyada raha hai, toh woh RAAVAN ka raha hai...

I ensure you,G.O.D is going to be better than that character kyunki jo flaws the RAAVAN ke,woh G.O.D me nahi honge...

He is a mad genius jiske scenes likhte waqt mere brain ka har nerve khudko squeeze karne waala hai...

Aur kamal ki baat ye hogi ki aapko pata bhi nahi chalna hai ki ho kya raha hai...

Just wait for it...bohot time tak ye story and more importantly,G.O.D yaad rahega aapko...

Secondly, VERONICA ka SANVY se G.O.D ke baare me chuppana...

The most obvious reason is SANVY'S brain...

2+2 ko har angle se 4 kaise banana hai,he knows it... agar thoda sa bhi speculation laga liya usne toh woh G.O.D ke piche jaayega jiske liye jaisa ki padha hai aapne, woh laayak kahin se bhi nahi hai...

ek aur bhi bada reason hai... actually main reason jo second chapter me pata chal jaayega aapko...

Thirdly, DIMPLE...

Abhi ke liye itna jaan lijiye ki jo VERONICA SANEEL ke liye rahi,usse zyada DIMPLE SANVY ke liye rahegi...ek aisa chehra jisse dekh bhar ke har haari baazi ke baad apna jhuka confidence wapas paayega SANVY...

Aur ye hona bohot zaroori hai kyunki bohot baar mooh ki khaani padne waali hai SANVY ko...

Ye koi normal kahani nahi hai ki hero ne kuch saal training kar li aur ban gaya villain ke takkar ka...

Naa... SANVY ka takkar ek aisa pahad se hai jiske aage himalay bhi chota sa chattan lage...

Dekhte hain,us pahad ko todta hai yaa phir khud toot kar chur chur ho jaata hai...

Saath bane rahiye...

 

[vj4u]

ME IS STORY KO PICHLE 30 DIN SE THODA THODA PADH RAHA THA MAST STORY HE EK UNIQUE STORY JO WITHOUT SEX KE BHI LOGO KO PADHNE ME MAZA AA JAYE PAR PEHLE PEHLE STORY KE KUCH PAGE'S ME UPDATES MIL JAYA KARTA THA PHIR COMMENT THODI BADHI TOH PAGE'S BADHNE LAGE PAR ABHI AISA LAG RAHA HE JESE LOG KE WAITING WAITING ME HI PAGE'S BADHA RAHE HE.

ME 5,6 DIN SE WAIT HI KAR RAHA THA KOI NEW UPADTE KA PAR NHI MILA ESLIYE AAJ COMMENT KAR DIYA MUJHSE KOI GALTI HUI HO TOH CHOTA BHAI SAMJH KE MAF KAR DENA

Bura maanane jaise kuch bhi nahi likha hai brother...aur haan,agar sahi shabdon ka chayan karkar aap criticize karen tab bhi bura nahi maanunga mai...kyunki hakh hai aapka...

Rahi baat update ki toh ab kahani first chapter ke end ki taraf badh rahi hai... isiliye bohot dheeme soch samajh kar likh raha hun...

Time lagega hi...next update yaa toh kal dunga aur agar kal pura nahi hua toh parso pakka...

 

[Rohit1988]

Waiting

 

[Pradip purohit]

Bura maanane jaise kuch bhi nahi likha hai brother...aur haan,agar sahi shabdon ka chayan karkar aap criticize karen tab bhi bura nahi maanunga mai...kyunki hakh hai aapka...

Rahi baat update ki toh ab kahani first chapter ke end ki taraf badh rahi hai... isiliye bohot dheeme soch samajh kar likh raha hun...

Time lagega hi...next update yaa toh kal dunga aur agar kal pura nahi hua toh parso pakka...

OHHH SORRY BHAI PAR ME KOI CRITICIZE NHI KAR RAHA THA MUJHE TOH STORY ETNI PASAND HE KI JALDI KHATAM NA HO ESLIYE STORY KO THODA THODA KAR KE PADH RAHA THA.

DUSRI BAAT MUJHE NHI PATA THA KI 1ST CHAPTER KHATM HONE WALA HE !! WARNA ME KUCH NHI BOLTA

I KNOW KISI STORY KI LAST PART KO LIKHNE ME SAB SE JYADA TIME LAGTA HE KISI CHOTI SI GALTI KELIYE WRITER APNI PURI STORY KO DAAV PAR NHI LAGATA BAS APKI TARAF SE ETNE DIN SE KOI REPLY NHI AAYA THA TOH PARESHAAN HOGYA THA ME.

BAKI ME TOH CHAHTA HU STORY JITNI LAMBI HUM LOGO KO UTNA MAZA AYEGA.


THANKS❤

 

[Shani khan]

Bhai kya review dia death king bhai ne

Story hum b prhty h lkn ye bhai toh story jee rhy h

Mera toh yehi h k dimag ziada nae chalana q k mae VIDEOUS k dimag pae he PATAKHA mar gaya tha ab ka kaya ho ga pata nae toh ab ap k DHAMAKY k lye FRESH raho wo thk h ziada maghz mazi kari toh SURPRISE nae rahy ga mae jo james bond bn rha pta h thora sa b ap k dimag braber nae phch skta toh
Apny ko bs update mangta
Q k RAAZ ki b kam WAT nae lagi the

Or

I miss "MAHI"

WAITING

 

[Hell Strom]

Bura maanane jaise kuch bhi nahi likha hai brother...aur haan,agar sahi shabdon ka chayan karkar aap criticize karen tab bhi bura nahi maanunga mai...kyunki hakh hai aapka...

Rahi baat update ki toh ab kahani first chapter ke end ki taraf badh rahi hai... isiliye bohot dheeme soch samajh kar likh raha hun...

Time lagega hi...next update yaa toh kal dunga aur agar kal pura nahi hua toh parso pakka...

We know vj4u bhai your quality of update never disappoint us ...

we will wait ...

 

[Dar]

Waiting bro

 

[Golu]

Intzar rahega bhai