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Agli subah yeh dono ready hoke wapas gharrr aate hai. Jaha sab thode tension mein thee. Rishi aur Natasha abhi aaye nhi theee.
Sangeeta Deepak aur Shanaya ki aarti utarti hai aur unka grahpravesh karwati hai.
Deepak waha se sidha Sam aur Vishal ke paas chala jaata hai. Sangeeta bhi apne kaam mein chali jaati hai.
Idher saari ladkiyon ne Shanaya ko gherrr liya aur usko room mein le jaane lagiii.
Shanaya thodi langda ke chal rahi thiii.
Soniya: Kyaa baat hai meri jaan tum langda kyo rahi ho. Kahi chott lagi hai kyaaa.
Sab hasne lagte hai. Shanaya bas sharmaaye jaa rahi thi.
Ritika: Dekho toh kaisee sharmaa rahi hai. Kyaa raat ko bhi aiseee hi sharmaa rahiii thiii.
Mahi: Areeee mujhee toh lagta hai raat ko soyi hi nhi hogii yehhh.
Neha: Achha sirf aage hi chottt khaayi hai yaa pichheee bhiii.
Shanaya bas apna chehra chupaa ke sharmaaye jaa rahi thiiii.
Mahi: Areee bolo bhiii humse kyaa sharmana. Humare paas bhi wohi hai jo tumhare paas hai. Humare saath bhi wohi hua tha jo tumhare saath hua hai.
Shanaya: Woh woh actually dono.....
Soniya: Kyaaaa dono tarafffff seee. Matlab front door se saath backdoor bhiiii. Tumhare toh mazeeee haiiiii. Yeh bol uski chuchiyon ko thoda daba deti hai.
Jisse Shanaya chikhhh uthi hai.
Neha: Areee kyaa huaaa.
Shanaya: Wohh meriii chuchiyon mein bahottt dardd horaha hai.
Ritika: Ab saari raat masalwaogi toh hogaa hi naaa.
Phir sab hasne lagte haiii.
Shanaya: Natasha nhiii aayiii.
Mahi: Shayad Suhagraat se mann nhi bhara isiliye suhagdinn bhi mana rahi hai.
Sab jor jor se hasne lagte hai. Tabhi waha Natasha aajati hai. Woh bhi langdake hi chal rahi thiiiiii.
Ritika: Aao aao Janemannn. Kyaaa suhagraat se mann nhi bhara jo suhagdin bhi bana rahi thi.
Natasha sharmake baithh jaati hai.
Mahi: Areee humse kyaa sharmanaaa. Bolo bhiiii. Kyaaa tumhara bhi dono taraf seeee.
Natasha: Tumhara bhi matlab. Matlab Shanaya ka dono taraf seeeee.
Neha: Jiii haaaa madam se control nhii huaa isiliye dono taraf se opening karwa li.
Shanaya: Meri choro tum batao. Tumhara kyaaa huaaa.
Natasha: Sharmaake. Meri bhiii dono taraf seeee.
Mahi yeh sunte hi Natasha ki gaand mein thappad maar deti hai.
Mahi: Ooo tumne bhi dono taraf seee karwaaa liyaaa.
Natasha: Aaahhhhhhhh maaar mattttt. Upar niche aage pichhe har taraf dardd haiiii.
Sab jor jor se hasne lagte hai.
Natasha: Achha yeh sab choro pehle batao ab kyaa socha hai.
Natasha ki baat sunte hi sab tension mein aajate hai.
Shanaya: Kyaaa baat hai tum sab tension mein kyo ho. Kuch hua hai kyaaa.
Sab: Haaa ek bahot badi garbar hui hai kal raat ko.
Dono: Whattttttt kyaaaa huaaaaa haiiiii aur kaiseeee huaaaaa. Kaaal thaaa naaaa. Aurrr tumloggg bhiii tohhh theeeee.
Sab: Haaaa par uss Marcus ne bahot bada gameee khelaaa jisme humare saath saath Kaal bhi fhasss gaya.
Dono: Whatttttttttttt. Aakhir hua kyaa hai. Puri baat bataooooo.
Phir yehlog unndono ko sabbbb batateeee haiiiiii jo kall raat kooo huaaaa.
Unki baat sunkeeeee innn donoo kooo bhiii bahottt badaaa shockkk lagaaaa.
Natasha: Isssss Kajalllllll kiiii tohhhhhhhhhh. Isneeee itnaaa badaaaa dhokhaaaa diyaaaaa.
Shanaya: Aurrrr papajiiiiii aisaaaaaa kaiseeeee karsakteeeee haiiiii. Unhoneeeee hiii tohhhh Sammmmm koooo powerssss diiii thiiiii.
Soniya: Yehi toh samaj nhiii aaraha haiiiii. Unhone aakhirrr humheee itnaa badaaa dhokhaaa kyooo diyaaaaa.
Mahi: Didiiii yaad haiii naaa kal Sam ne kyaa kaha thaa.
Soniya: Ooo haaa.
Natasha: Kyaaa kaha thaaa.
Phir Mahi unndono ko Vishal ke kamre wali baay batati hai.
Shanaya: Kaashhh jaisaaa hum sochhh raheee haiii waisaaa hiii hoooo.
Natasha: Mainnn unheee jyaada tohh nhiii jaantiii par Deepak bhaiii ke daddd aisaaa nhiii kar sakteeee.
Shanaya: Hmmmmm. Toh chalo chalkee pata lagate hai.
Phir sab waha se Sam Rishi Deepak aur Vishal ke paas aate hai.
Shanaya: Deepakkkk tumne sunaaa papajiii aur Kajalllllllll.
Deepak: Hmmm sunna parr mujhee ab bhi yakeen nhi horaha haiii dad aisa kar sakteee haiii. Aurrr usss Kajallll ko humne ek baar maaf kiyaaa thaaa par woh sudhriii nhiiii.
Soniya: Usss Kajallll kooo hummm dekhlengeee. Par pehle uncle ko dekheee.
Deepak: Hmm. Par karengee kaiseeee.
Vishal: Humhe unhe aisiii position mein lana hogaa jisse humhe unke pairr ke talwe dikhee.
Neha: Par Vishal kaiseeee.
Natasha: Kyo naa hum unke ek baar zameen mein giraa deee phir unke pairrr ke talwee dekhhh lee.
Shanaya: Natasha agar sach mein woh papaji hue toh.
Sam: Buraa naa manna Deepak Shanaya par unhe unke kiye ki saza dungaa. Unhone Marcus se haath milake bahot badi galti kardiii.
Deepak: Jantaa hu bhaiii. Par mere dad aisaa nhii kar sakteee.
Sam: Yehi toh main bhi chahtaa hu.
Ritika: Tohhh kyaa karee.
Shanaya: Jo Natasha ne kaha wahi karte haiiii.
Deepak: Thikkk haiii.
Phir sab haa mein haa milate hai.
Rishi: Par baby unko girayenge kaisee.
Natasha: Sam jara pata karo woh abhi kaha hai.
Sam: Kaal.
Kaal: Woh abhi apne room mein hai.
Natasha: Greatttt. Neha tum thoda tell le aao aur unke room ke bahar gira do. Phir unhe bahar bulayenge aur kaam khatam. Ekdum purani Indian film styleee.
Neha: Parr achanak unke room ke bahar tel hone se unko shaqq hosaktaa hai.
Natasha: Areeee haaa yehhhh hosaktaa hai.
Shanaya: Toh bol dengee galti se girr gaya hogaaa kisi seee.
Neha: Parrr Marcus hai yaa agar uncle unke saath hai toh usko shaqq hojayegaa.
Ritika: Toh unko bed mein sula de toh usse bhi humhe dikh jayegaaa.
Deepak: Haaa yehhh easy hogaa. Par bina wajah unhee sulayengee kaisee.
Mahi: Bina wajah nhiii. Agar hum unke uss pairr mein kuch gira de yaa halki si chott lagwa de do.
Sab: Matlab.
Mahi: Matlab mere paas idea aagaya hai unke talwe dekhne kaa.
Sam: Kaiseeee.
Mahi: Deepak tum haath mein kuch leke unko paas ghumo aur jab woh aaye toh thik tabhi unke paas woh gira dena jisse woh pichhe honge. Tabhi Sam tum thikk unke pichhe apne shoe layes bandhne ke liye jhuk jaana jisse woh tumse takra ke girne wale hongee. Tabhi Vishal bhaiyaa aap unhe pakad lijiyegaa aur uss waqt pakdiyegaa jab unka talwe hawa mein ho. Tab main woh dekh lungiii.
Ritika: Waaahh Mahiii kyaa idea hai.
Sab: Haa Mahii idea achha hai.
Mahi: Par girayengee kyaa.
Natasha: Pehle baar kisi ko girane mein itna sochna padh raha hai. Kuch bhi gira dengee. Nhii toh Deepak bhai thoda tezz chalke aayengee aur unke pairon ko apne pairr se thoda jorr se masal dengee. Dard hoga uchalenge aur pichhhe jayenge phir act as a plan.
Sab Natasha ki baat sunke muhh khole usko dekhh raheee theeee.
Natasha unsab ko aise ghurte dekh kar puchti hai.
Natasha: Whatttt. Aiseee kyaaa dekh rahe hoo.
Rishi: Itnaaa dimaag kaha se aayaaa. Pehle toh nhiii thaaa.
Natasha: Bekhayali mein. Ab jo hai so hai.
Phir jab usse Samaj aaya Rishi ne kya bola toh.
Natasha: Kyaaaa bolaaaa tumneee. Mere paas dimaag nhiii haiiii. Shaadi hue 24 ghantee nhiii hueee aur biwi ki burayiii suruuuu.
Rishi: Ghabraa ke. Nhii nhii baby main aisaa bol saktaa huuu kyaa. Main toh tumhare plan ki tareef kar raha thaa. Yeh bol usko bahon mein le ta hai.
Natasha: Main sab samajti hu. Tummm choro mujheee. Yeh bol Natasha Rishi se alag hoti hai. Aur bolti hai. Tum ab 2 din tak mujhe touch nhiii karogeee aur raat ko bhi room ke bahar sogeee.
Rishi: Kyaaaaaaa. Nhii nhiii I am sorry babyyy. Aisaa mattt karooo.
Natasha: Ab aisa hi hogaaa. Sam bhai chaliyee. Yeh bol Natasha neeche jaane lagti hai.
Sab Rishi ki halat dekh kar jor jor se hasne lagte hai.
Rishi: Iss Marcus ki toh. Saala uski wajah se shaadi ke dusre din hi biwi se panga hogyaa. Aur ab 2 din room mein nhi so saktaa. Saale ko chorungaaa nhiii.
Sab wapas hasne lagte hai.
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