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सच बोलूं तो ये kalak गांव वाला हिस्सा ज्यादा रोचक था ।बहुत जल्दबाजी में खत्म किया गया ऐसा लगा मुझे । पर लेखक ज्यादा तरह से समझते है । जो किया सही किया । चोडमपुर वाला हिस्सा बस बोझ लग रहा है । जो सेक्स चल रहा है वो जबरदस्ती हो रहा है । लेखक से यहीं विनती है कि जिस तरह रोमांच और कथानक का विस्तार कलक गांव वाले हिस्से में था वैसे ही कथा पूरे हिस्सो मे हो ।

बाकी कहानी पहले अपडेट से ले कर आज तक जबरदस्त बनी हुई है । वैसे अंतर्मन के रहा था कि चित्रावती और कर्मा का प्रेम थोड़ा और बढ़ाया जाए । पर जैसा लेखक सही समझे ।


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Apni baat kahne ke liye bahut bahut dhanyawad dost, dono jagah ki hi plotting aur situation alag hai to sab usi ke according ho raha hai, aur Kalak Gaon ka jaldi ant nahi hua ab aage aur kuch tha nahi.. nahi to kheenchna hi kahlata, aur rahi baat Chitrawati ki to picture abhi baki hai mere dost, aisa khud Chitrawati ne bola hai
 

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in potliyon ko tabhi kholna jab upyog karna ho usse pahle nahi doosri aur bahut hi zaroori baat aap logo ne yahan ke sare karya to nipta liye par ek karya abhi bhi bacha hai jiske bina ye phal kisi yogya nahi honge...
Badi maa ki baat sunkar hum pareshan ho gaye...

UPDATE 143

KALAK GAON

Sala ab kya kaam rah gaya muqabla bhi jeet lia ab bhi kuch bacha hai kya, hum sab hairani bhari nazaron se badi maa ko dekh rahe the,
Badi maa- baat ye hai ki Maharani Kalak ko andesha tha ki bhavishya mein koi vyakti laalach vash aakar in falon ko pane ki koshish zaroor karega isliye unhone in falon ki shakti ko Sula diya, atah ye phal abhi upyog ke yogya nahi hain...
Mere man mein aaya ki bahut jaldi bata diya ye is sali ne agar raat ko iski chudai na ki Hoti to is baat par gusse mein ek baar aur chod deta, khair uska rajya tha hum sirf sun sakte the...
Maa-to phir ab kya hoga..

Badi Maa - in phalon ki shakti ko jagrit karna hoga..
Me - wo kaise..
Badi maa- teeno potliyon par dekho neeche ki taraf ek ek rang hoga..
Humne dekha to tha..
Badi Maa- to aage ka karya ye hai ki Kalak Gaon se Uttar Poorv aur Paschim teeno dishaon mein yahan se samaan doori par ek ek talaab hai. Jinhen Maharani Kalak ne banaya tha...
Potli ke neeche diye huye rang ke anusar apko usi disha mein jana hoga, jaise Neela rang yani Uttar disha, Peela Poorv aur Narangi Paschim...

Humne dekha to teeno potliyon ke neeche alag alag rang tva jaisa Badi maa ne bataya...
Me- phir
Badi Maa- uske baad Poiri shradha se Maharani Kalak ka dhyan rakhte huye 3 baar is potli ko lekar talab mein dubki lagani hai aur phir inki shaktiyan jagrat ho jayengi... Dubki lagane ke baad aap dekhenge to potli ke neeche ka rang gayab ho chuka hoga iska matlab hoga ki phal ki shaktiyan jaag chuki hain..

Me- therk hai badi maa hum log talaab mrin inhe dho lenge aap bas humein rasta bata dena.
Badi maa- bilkul par kyunki aap log teen jode mein ho to main yahi salah dungi ki teeno jagah ek sath jane ki jagah aap teeno jagah ek sath nikalein alag alag jodi mein jisse aap logo ka samay bhi bachega ..
Badi maa ki ye baat mujhe bhi sahi lagi..
Baki ki jankariyan lene ke baad hum log bahar aaye aur apane kaksh mein jakar vichar karne lage ki kaise kya karna hai..
Tai- phir kaun kaun kahan ja raha hai kaise kiske sath kya karein..
Anuj- isme sochna kya hai jaise ghar se jodiyan banakar aaye the usi hisab se chalte hain bai disha chun lein apani apani.
Jaggu- haan ye sahi rahega...
Maa- haan isse bekar mein samay bhi bekar nahi jayega
Me- to phir main aur Mausi uttar ki or jayenge Anuj aur maa Paschim mein chale jao Tai aur jaggu poorav mein..


Meri baat se sab log razi dikhe...
Me- aur jab apana kaam poora ho jaye to hum sab ko ek jagah milna hai aur wo jagah mere hisab se kalak ka dwar sahi rahegi... Jahan se humne Kalak mein pravesh kia tha..
Maa- haan wo sab ne dekha bhi hai aur dhoondhane mein bhi asaani hogi...
Jaggu- jo bhi wahan phuchta jayega wo baki sab ke liye intezar karega..
Mausi- haan par bina sab ke pahunche wahan se hilna bhi nahi hai....

Tai- to aisa karo abhi jaldi hi nikal lo ka pata kitni der lag jaye, andhera hone tak dwar pahunch jayenge to sahi rahega...
Me- haan sahi kah rahi ho tai ji...me aap sab log chalke badi maa se vidai lo main bhi bas 5 mint mein aata hun..
Maa- tu kahan jayega abhi..
Mausi- jaane do jijji abhi naav wali kahani poori karne jana hoga...

Main thoda hichakichaya par sab muskura rahe the sab chal gaye aur main Chitrawati ko dhoondhane laga...
Pahle uske kaksh meim dekha to wo wahan nahi thi phir bagh mein wahan bhi nahi mili..
Phir bas ek akhiri jagah thi dekhne ke liye jahan wo ho sakti thi..
Main andaruni raste se hota hua wohin Chitrawati ke jharne wali jagah pahucha to wahan bhi koi nahi tha nirash hokar mudne wala hi tha, ki meri nazar wahan humesha rahne wale dande par padi jiske neeche ek parcha sa tha.

Maine dande ke neeche se parcha nikala aur padhna shuru kia...

Karma, mujhe pata hai tum humein abhi dhoondh rahe hoge, par hum tumse nahi mil sakte ya kahein nahi milna chahte hain bas ye samjho ki nahi mil sakta kyunki hum tumhara samna nahi kar sakte tumhare jate huye,
Karma hum poore man se tumhe dhanyawad kahte hain, tumne humein kai baatein aisi sikhai hain jisse humari soch hi zindagi ko lekar kafi badal gayi hai.. hum bahut kuch karna chahte hain par apane tareeke se,
Tum humari liye kuch hi dino mein kafi kuch ban gaye ho, ek dost, ek sathi, aur shayad usse bhi zyada kuch isiliye hum tumhe aage jane ke liye bahut sari shubhkamanayein dete hain, tum bahut ache ho aage bhi isi tarah rahna..
Aur akhiri baat ye ki ye akhiri vidaai nahi hai hum phir milenge zaroor milenge kab kaise ye nahi bata sakti par milenge zaroor tab tak ke liye apana khayal rakhna.
Tumhari Sathi
Chitrawati

Chitrawati ka parcha padhne ke baad ek baar ko mera dimag ghoom gaya samajh nahi aaya ki wo ye sab samne aake kyun nahi kah sakti, khair par uski baatein padh kar man bhi bhar gaya, sach hi tha ki usse mujhe bhi ek gahra lagaw ho gaya tha na jane kyun Aisa lagta tha ki wo sath rahe, par abhi jo uski ichha uska samman zaroori tha maine uske parche ko mod kar apane paas rakh lia.. aur bapis jakar sabse mila badi maa ne vidai dete huye sir par hath pherkar aashirvad diya...
Aisa lag raha tha ki humare jane ka dukh kahin na kahin unhe tha..
Khair hum wahan se nikle to gaon ke bahar tak ek Sevak sath aaya aur usne humein teeno talaab ke raston se avgat karaya to zaroori samaan aur jankari lekar aur jaldi hi milne ka vaada kar hum log teen jodo mein bantkar nikal gaye..
Main aur mausi- Uttar ke talaab ki or, Maa aur Anuj- paschim, Jaggu aur Tai- poorav.
Aage dekhna tha ye safar kya kya naye naye anubhav karwane wala tha...


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Rajpal ne jab Apani bahu ko pakad kar uthaya to ek pal ko wo hairan rah gayi ab is haalat mein jab wo poore nange hain to kahan le jana chah rahe hain, Par Rajpal ne bahu ko kheench kar khada kar lia aur phir use pakadkar Prema aur bhaggu ke kamre mein le gaye, Rajpal ne andar pahunch kar andar se darwaze ki kundi laga di aur batti jala di to poora kamra roshni mein naha gaya aur usi roshni mein jab Rjpal ki nazar apani bahu ke nange madak chamakte badan par padi to Rajpal ki aankhein badi ho gayi wohin Prema is tarah sasur ke samne nangi hone ki wajah se sharma gayi aur usne apane muh ko hathon se chupa lia...
Prema ki ye harkat Rajpal ko bahut achi lagi wo dheere se aage badha aur Prema ke nange badan ko apani baahon mein lekar use bistar par bitha diya

Rajpal- aahhh bahu tu kitni sundar hai, aisa roop aisa yauvan aahh man karta hai bas dekhta hi rahun...
Prema- uhmmmm bas keejiye papaji humein sharam aa rahi hai...
Ye kahkar Prema ne apana chehra sasur ki nangi mardana chhati mein chhupa lia, bahu ki is harkat se Rajpal gangana gaye aur bahu ko baajuon mein jakad lia..

Rajpal- are isme sharmana kaisa bitiya rani.. sach hi to bol rahe hain..
Ek baar ki chudai ki garmi nikalne ke baad ab dono hi thode shant lag rahe the... Ab poore sanyam ke sath sasur bahu hawas ke is khel mein aage badh rahe the...

Rajpal ne ek hath se bahu ke chehre ko pakad kar upar ki taraf kia to dono Ki aankhein mili Prema ki aankhon mein sharam aur uttezna ka mila jula bhaw tha to Rajpal ki aankhon mein sneh aur hawas, dheere dheere dono aage badhe aur dono ke hi uttezna ki garmi se jalte honth aapas mein mil gaye, Bahu ke honthon ka ras apani juban par mahsoos kar Rajpal to jaise swarg mein pahunch gaye,halanki ek baar Bahu ki garam choot ko chod liya tha par tab sab jaldi jaldi hua tha, par abhi Rajpal poore sanyam ke sath apani bahu ke har maadak ang ko bhogna chahte the...



Dono ek doosre ke honthon ko pyason ki tarah choos rahe the na sasur kam tha na bahu, Sasur bahu ka aisa prem shayad hi kahin dekhne ko mile...

Honthon ke raste kab zuban ek doosre ke muh mein atkheliyan karne lagi dono ko hi pata na chala, bahu ki zuban ko chooste huye Rajpal ke dono hath uske poore badan par ghoom rahe the...

Kabhi uske gol gol matol chutadon ko masalte to kabhi unnat chuchhiyo ko,
Jab dono ke honth alag huye to dono buri tarah hanf rahe the, rajpal ne bahu ko peeche ki taraf dhakka dekar bistar par lita diya, aur khud uske upar aa gaye aur uske badan ko choomne chatne lage...
Pahle gardan ko choomna shuru kia to Prema sihar uthi, dheere dheere se har ek jagah par dhyan dete huye Rajpal ke honth bahu ki gardan se neeche fisalte huye uske seene par aa gaye,

Jaise hi Rajpal ke honth Prema ki chuchhiyon ke paas pahuche Prema ki saanse tez ho gayi apane sasur ki saanson aur phir Honthon ko apani chuchhiyo ki twacha par mahsus kar Prema uttezna se pagal hone lagi uska seena khud ba khud bistar se uth gaya peeth akad gayi apani chuchhiyo ko poore tanav je sath upar utha diya jaise khud se Rajpal ke muh mein ghusa dena chahti ho...
Rajpal ne bhi ache sasur hone ke nate bahu ko zyada prateksha nahi karwai aur apane honthon ko bahu ki ek chuchhi par rakh diya aur choosne lage..
Prema ke muh se ek gahri siski nikal gayi...
Uske sath sasur ke sir par chale gaye aur use apani chuchhiyo par dabane lage...
Prema-uhmmmm ahhhhhhhhhh papajiiii uhhhhhhhh peelooooo meriiiii chuchhiyon koooo aur zoor se..
Rajpal ne prema ki baat sunkar apana muh chuchi se hataya aur bole- bahu aaahhhh badi mast hai re teri ye chuchiyan aisa ras to aak tak nahi piyaaahhhh..
Aur ye kahkar turant doosri chuchi ko muh mein bhar lia...
Prema-haannnn papa jiiiihhhh aiseeeeeeee hiiiiiiiiii nichooodddd lo mera saraaaahhhh rasss..

Prema har siski ke sath Rajpal ka hausla bada rahi thi wohin Rajpal bhi aur uttezna ke sath bahu ki chuchhiyon ko peene mein lage huye the... Jis karan ek baar jhadne ke baad bhi Prema ki choot phir se ras bahaye ja rahi thi sath hi Rajpal ka sakht lund baar baar uski choot par takkar maar raha tha,


Kafi der tak chuchiyon ka sevan karne ke baad Rajpal ki zuban aur neeche phisli aur phir bahu ke pet ko chat aur choosne lagi... Jisse Prema ko bhi ek alag ehsaas ho raha tha kyunki ye aur koi nahi balki khud ka sasur tha jo uske badan ko choom raha tha...
Pet ko choomte huye Rajpal ki zuban Prema ki nabhi mein fisal gayi jiske sath Prema ki ek aur gahri siski nikali...
Prema-aahhhhh papaaaajiiii mainnnmnnn marrrrrrrrrr jaaaauniiiiii itna maza aa aa rahaaa hai...

Bahu ki nabhi ko ache se choosne chatne ke baad Rajpal thoda aur neeche ki or badhe aur unke samne bahu ki geeli garam choot aa gayi,... Jisme se ab bhi unka ras bahkar baahar aa raha tha, Rajpal ne paas hi pade kapde se choot ko poncha aur phir choot ke dane ko hath badhakar sahlaya to Prema sihar uthi...
Prema- aahhhhmmmm maaaahhhhhhhhhhhh... Ahhhhhhhhhh...

Rajpal- aaahhhh bahu kya sundar choot hai teri, aaahhhhh itni swadisht lag rahi hai ki man karta hai kha jaun...
Prema- uhmmmm aahhhhhhh Sasur jeee kha jao naa phir,
Prema ab itni garam ho chuki thi ki ab sharam waram sab bhool chuki thi...

Rajpal ke muh mein bahu ki choot dekhkar pani aa raha tha, aur Rajpal se aur raha bhi nahi gaya usne apane honth bahu ke nichale honthon par rakh diye aur phir jeebh nikal kar bahu ki choot ko kuredne laga...

Sasur ke is prahar se to Prema bilkul pagal si ho gayi uske hath Rajpal ke sir ko uski choot mein dabane lage, prema ki kamar upar neeche uchhalne lagi aur wo choot ko Rajpal ke muh par uchhal uchhjal kar ghisne lagi...

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Rajpal bhi ek baar ko bahu ki garmi dekhkar hairan rah gaya par apani jeebh par bahu ki choot ka swad pakar mast ho raha tha, Prema ki choot ke ras se Rajpal ke honth jeebh muh sab sana hua tha...
Isi beech Rajpal ne ek aur chaal chali, apani jeebh ko tikona karte huye usne bahu ki choot mein ghusa diya aur ek ungali se chhoot ke daane ko ghisne laga aur lagatar aisa karne laga...
Prema ki to jaise saanse hi atak gayi Rajpl ka lagatar prahar use saans tak nahi lena de raha tha aur usi ka nateeja hua ki kuvh hi palo Prema ka badan akad gaya uske muh se ek ghuti hui cheekh nikali aur wo jhadne lagi...

Rajpal ne bahu ka kanpta badan kaske pakad lia aur choot tab tak choosta raha jab tak ki Prema ki choot ne apana poora ras na chhod diya ho, aur phir use chaat gaya, apani bahu ki choot ka ras peekar Rajpal ko ek nayi jawani ka ehsaas ho raha tha...

Udhar Prema dheeli hokar bistar par gir gayi aur phir kuch pal baad uthi aur uthkar usne Rajpal ko bistar par peeth se lita diya aur khud uske ek taraf baith kar apane sasur ki aankhon mein dekhte huye jhukne lagi aur ek hath badhakar sasur ke kadak lund ko tham lia...
Rajpal ke muh se ek siski nikal gayi...
Prema apana muh sasur ke lund ke bilkul pass lakar use dhyan se dekhne lagi sath hi ek hath se use muthiyane bhi lagi... Rajpal to jaise jannat ka maza loot rahe the...
Prema ne aage badhate huye Rajpal ke lund ke phoole huye gulabi tope ko jeebh se chaat kar dekha to Rajpal ka poora badan kaanp gaya... Prema ne ek lambi saaans li aur phir gupp se sasur ke lund ko muh mein bhar lia... Aur phir ek achi bahu hone ke nate sasur ke lund ki seva karne lagi..
Rajpal to jaise pagal se ho gaye the apane lund par bahu ke garam muh aur jeebh ka jaadu dekh kar..
Unhe samajh nahi aa raha tha kya karein kabhi bahu ke sir ko dabate lund par to kabhi upar dekhte huye aahein bharte.. wohin Prema lagatar sasur ke lund par apana jaafu dikha rahi thi

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Prema Rajpal ke lund ko jitna hosake muh mein bhar ke choos rahi thi..

Rajpal - aaahhhh bahu kyaaaaahhh jadu hai teri jeebh mein haaay mazaaaaahhhh aaa raha haiii..
Prema soch rahi thi abhi isi bistar par bete ka lund choos rahi thi aur ab baap ka kya kya badal gaya hai meri zindagi mein kuch hi dino mein, khair Rajpal ne uska sir lund par dabakar uska dhyan phir se toda...
Rajpal ke lund par prema ke muh ka jadu chal raha tha par Rajpal ko laalach aa raha tha to wo utni jaldi nahi jhadna chahte the to unhone bahu ko roka aur use uthakar bistar par peeth ke bal lita diya aur khud uski dono tango ke beech aa gaye..
Rajpal ne apane sakht lund ko jo ki Prema ke thook se bilkul chikna ho gaya tha use pakada aur Prema ki geeli garam choot par rakh diya aur halka halka uske honthon ko kuredne lage...
Prema apane sasur ki harkat se tadap uthi... Baar baar uski kamat lund ko choot ke andar lene ke liye jhatke khane lagi...

Rajpal bhi utna hi utawla tha jitna ki unki bahu...
Rajpal- bahu daal dun kya...
Prema-aahhhhmmmm papaji ek baar to daal hi diya hai, aur waise bhi apki bahuuuuuuhhhh ki hai to apkaah to haq banta hai...

Rajpal-aisi bahu bhagwan sab ko de...
Aur ye kahkar Rajpal ne ek karara dhakk lagakar lund andar ghusa diya.. jiske sath hi dono ki ek aaahhhh nikal gayil
Prema-aahhhhhhh aisiiiiiii bahuuuuuuhhhh kyun chahiyeeeehhhhh kya sabkoo apaniiii bahuuuuuuhhhh chodni hai tumhariii tarah papajjiii...


Rajpal-ohhhhh bahhuuuu jiskiii sasur ki tere jaisi bahu hogi to bina chode chhod dega to namard hi kahlayega...
Prema- aaahhhh to papaji aapko maukaaah mila hai chhhodo mat...

Rajpal- bilkul nahi bahu, aisa mauka main kabhi nahi chhodungaahhhh
Aur isi ke sath Rajpal bahu ki choot mein danadan dhakke pelne lage...

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Prema to bas ab apani choot mein sasur ke lund ke ehsaas se mast ho hayi thi aur khoob maze le rahk thi...

Iske baad kya hua agali Update mein please comments karke zaroor bataayein kaisi lagi Update bahut bahut dhanyawad
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लेकिन पाठको की प्रतिक्रियाओ का लेखक की मान्सिकता पर जबरदस्त प्रभाव पड़ता है ,,,ऐसे मे जब लेख्क हमारे ठरकी भैया जैसा मासूम और कोमल दिल वाला हो तो :D

कलक गाव की कहानी जिस हिसाब से शुरु हुई थी तब मुझे भी नही जमी ,,,लेकिन मै भुल गया था कि ठरकी भाई का स्तर क्या है । गैंगबैंग के सीन देने इनसे बेहतर लेखक मैने देखा ही नही। अब जब ये कलक गाव का सीन अन्त पर है तो लगता है इसको और भी आगे ले जाना चाहिए ।

खैर कोई बात नहीं अब रिमझिम का परिवार आ गया :shag:
Bahut bahut dhanyawad bhai itni tareef ke liye aage bhi abhi bahut kuch hona hai jo mujhe poori ummeed hai pasand aayega...
Waise is baar pathakon ki pratikriya ka mere komal aur masoom dil par koi prabhav nahi hua ye pahle se hi aisa socha hua tha...😆😆😆

Aage dekhte hain kya kya hota hai bahut dhanyawad
 
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