Thriller Kaun? (Completed)
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Kal tak aa jayega , first update define flow of storyCongratsHT bhai for new story
Will wait for 1st update
giving proper shape to that .
Chutiyadr
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HT bhai, issko zaroor follow karunga.Waiting for the very first update.
Weise kal raat ko aap ki contest entry ko review kiya hai main ne aur aap ne abhi tak dekha nahin, aaj subha ko cc thread par bhi aap se kaha wo bhi aap ne nahin dekha
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prologue
“ tumne ye kya kiya mere saath”
“ wahi jo tum dusro ke saath kar rahi thi”
“ main…..maine kisi dusre ke saath ye sab nahi kiya hai kabhi……”
“ tum sach nahi bol rahi ho aur aaj tak kabhi sach nahi bola, tum dagabaaaz ho…tum pe kisi ko bharosa nahi karna chahiye”
“ tumhe jo sochna hai soch lo lekin main waisi nahi hu jaisa tumne mere bare me soch rakha hai…aur agar kuchh bhi karu to tumhe kisne hak diya mere saath kuchh bhi galat karne ka..tumne jo aaj mere saath kiya hai, use main seh nahi sakti ..main sabko bataungi…tumko saza dilaungi ….tumhari himmat kaise huyi ye sab mere saath karne ki”
Dophar ka samay tha , aaj Wednesday tha aur dusre ghar me shayad hi koi aadmi hoga kyoki es society me har ghar me wife aur husband dono kaam karte hai aur es samay bachhe school me the ..ek tarah se security ko chhor de to shayad hi koi es apartment me hoga abhi.
Bed pe baithe huye lady jiske body pe ek kapre ke naam pe uski fati huyi bra aur panty bhar thi aur uske bagal me baitha aadmi bhi nanga hi tha usne upar to baniyan pehan rakhi thi lekin niche pura nanga tha.
Us room me charo taraf saman faila hua tha jaise kisi ne sab kuchh utha kar charo taraf feka ho, lady ke dono madmast ubhar uske fate huye bra se bahar ko nikle huye the aur uspe ek do jagah khoon ki bunde bhi najar aa rahi thi aisa lag raha tha jaise uspe kisi ne apne nakhoon ya daant gara diye ho. Uske hotho pe lagi huyi lipistic uske chehre pe bhi faily huyi thi aur uske hotho pe halki si khoon ki bunde thi jaise kisi ne uske hotho ko bhi kata tha.
Us aadmi ki halat achhi nahi thi, uske chehre ko jaise kisi ne apne nakhono se kharocha tha aur saath me uske peeth pe bhi charo taraf kisi ne apne nakhoono ka nishan chhor rakha tha. Uske chehre aur peeth pe bhi khhon ki kuchh bunde najar aa rahi thi.
“ aaj mujhe apne dil pe pathhar rakh ke ye kaam karna hi padega”
“ ab kya karna baki reh gaya hai tumse , jaise aadmi ho abhi bhi yehi ho”
“ main aj aise nahi jaoonga …..”
“ to ab aur kya karna hai tumhe….”
Vo aadmi apni jagah se utha aur kitchen ki taraf gaya aur jab lauta to uske hath me knife tha aur use dekh ke us lady ke chehre ka rang hi peela pad gaya.
“ tum ye kya kar rahe ho..please kuchh bhi mat karna aisa “
“ ab mujhe ye batao, ki tum tarap tarap ke marna chahti ho ya aaram se” usne hath me pakde huye knife ko ghumate huye kaha.
“ nahi….nahi…tum aisa nahi karoge….tum ko chahiye le lo….lekin please mujhe mat maro..please”
Us lady ne apne aapko us se dur karne ki bharpoor koshish ki lekin uske hath se dur na ja saki aur us aadmi ne apne hath me pakde knife ko us ladki ke gale se lagaya aur jor se dabate huye kheech diya, lady chhekh bhi nahi payi aur uske gale se khoon ki dhar beh nikli , uski aankhe jaise bahar ko nikalne k oho gayi thi aur bed pe girke tarapne lagi, uske muh se aawaj nahi nikal pa rahi thi..vo kuchh bolna chahti thi..jitni vo koshish karti utna hi uska khoon uske gale se bahar ko nikalne lagta.
Agle kuchh pal tak vo aadmi usko tarapte huye dekhta raha aur jaise hi use laga ki lady shant ho gayi hai usne apne hath me lage huye khoon ko uske kapde se saaf karne laga.
Uski izzat ke saath khelne ke baad jaan se bhi maar diya, aisa kyo kiya? Dono me aisa kya rista tha? Lady ka character achha nahi tha kya? Ye aadmi kya rapist tha ya koi killer? Dono ek dusre ko pehle se jante the kya?
Kaun hai ye aadmi ? Aur ye lady kaun hai?
“ tumne ye kya kiya mere saath”
“ wahi jo tum dusro ke saath kar rahi thi”
“ main…..maine kisi dusre ke saath ye sab nahi kiya hai kabhi……”
“ tum sach nahi bol rahi ho aur aaj tak kabhi sach nahi bola, tum dagabaaaz ho…tum pe kisi ko bharosa nahi karna chahiye”
“ tumhe jo sochna hai soch lo lekin main waisi nahi hu jaisa tumne mere bare me soch rakha hai…aur agar kuchh bhi karu to tumhe kisne hak diya mere saath kuchh bhi galat karne ka..tumne jo aaj mere saath kiya hai, use main seh nahi sakti ..main sabko bataungi…tumko saza dilaungi ….tumhari himmat kaise huyi ye sab mere saath karne ki”
Dophar ka samay tha , aaj Wednesday tha aur dusre ghar me shayad hi koi aadmi hoga kyoki es society me har ghar me wife aur husband dono kaam karte hai aur es samay bachhe school me the ..ek tarah se security ko chhor de to shayad hi koi es apartment me hoga abhi.
Bed pe baithe huye lady jiske body pe ek kapre ke naam pe uski fati huyi bra aur panty bhar thi aur uske bagal me baitha aadmi bhi nanga hi tha usne upar to baniyan pehan rakhi thi lekin niche pura nanga tha.
Us room me charo taraf saman faila hua tha jaise kisi ne sab kuchh utha kar charo taraf feka ho, lady ke dono madmast ubhar uske fate huye bra se bahar ko nikle huye the aur uspe ek do jagah khoon ki bunde bhi najar aa rahi thi aisa lag raha tha jaise uspe kisi ne apne nakhoon ya daant gara diye ho. Uske hotho pe lagi huyi lipistic uske chehre pe bhi faily huyi thi aur uske hotho pe halki si khoon ki bunde thi jaise kisi ne uske hotho ko bhi kata tha.
Us aadmi ki halat achhi nahi thi, uske chehre ko jaise kisi ne apne nakhono se kharocha tha aur saath me uske peeth pe bhi charo taraf kisi ne apne nakhoono ka nishan chhor rakha tha. Uske chehre aur peeth pe bhi khhon ki kuchh bunde najar aa rahi thi.
“ aaj mujhe apne dil pe pathhar rakh ke ye kaam karna hi padega”
“ ab kya karna baki reh gaya hai tumse , jaise aadmi ho abhi bhi yehi ho”
“ main aj aise nahi jaoonga …..”
“ to ab aur kya karna hai tumhe….”
Vo aadmi apni jagah se utha aur kitchen ki taraf gaya aur jab lauta to uske hath me knife tha aur use dekh ke us lady ke chehre ka rang hi peela pad gaya.
“ tum ye kya kar rahe ho..please kuchh bhi mat karna aisa “
“ ab mujhe ye batao, ki tum tarap tarap ke marna chahti ho ya aaram se” usne hath me pakde huye knife ko ghumate huye kaha.
“ nahi….nahi…tum aisa nahi karoge….tum ko chahiye le lo….lekin please mujhe mat maro..please”
Us lady ne apne aapko us se dur karne ki bharpoor koshish ki lekin uske hath se dur na ja saki aur us aadmi ne apne hath me pakde knife ko us ladki ke gale se lagaya aur jor se dabate huye kheech diya, lady chhekh bhi nahi payi aur uske gale se khoon ki dhar beh nikli , uski aankhe jaise bahar ko nikalne k oho gayi thi aur bed pe girke tarapne lagi, uske muh se aawaj nahi nikal pa rahi thi..vo kuchh bolna chahti thi..jitni vo koshish karti utna hi uska khoon uske gale se bahar ko nikalne lagta.
Agle kuchh pal tak vo aadmi usko tarapte huye dekhta raha aur jaise hi use laga ki lady shant ho gayi hai usne apne hath me lage huye khoon ko uske kapde se saaf karne laga.
Uski izzat ke saath khelne ke baad jaan se bhi maar diya, aisa kyo kiya? Dono me aisa kya rista tha? Lady ka character achha nahi tha kya? Ye aadmi kya rapist tha ya koi killer? Dono ek dusre ko pehle se jante the kya?
Kaun hai ye aadmi ? Aur ye lady kaun hai?
Waiting for the very first update.
Weise kal raat ko aap ki contest entry ko review kiya hai main ne aur aap ne abhi tak dekha nahin, aaj subha ko cc thread par bhi aap se kaha wo bhi aap ne nahin dekha
thanks chachu
sorry main cc pe nahi dekh paya, lekin review thread me dekha tha aur padha bhi...abhi reply kiya hai..sorry for delay. :thanks a lot wonderful review chachu
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