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nice update
waiting for next update
Nayi kahani shuru karne k liye aapko badhayi.... Or intro bahut hi safayi se likha gaya he.
Bahut hi pyara or masumiyat bhara Update
Thank You So Much Dosto, Stay Tuned And Keep SupportingAwesome update
Intjaar
Guys, Update 3 Will Be Out Tomorrow At 9 P.M. Stay Tuned And Keep Supportingwaiting for next update
Thank You So Much Dosto, Stay Tuned And Keep Supporting ❤❤
Guys, Update 3 Will Be Out Tomorrow At 9 P.M. Stay Tuned And Keep Supporting ❤❤
Thank You So Much manikmittalme07 Bhai tarif ke liye... Baki to jabtak aap jese Readers ka saath he, tabtak Sirf Updates nahi.... Dher sari kahaniya bhi ati rahengi.... Stay Tuned And Keep Supportingaapke update ka intzaar rahega bhai...aap sach mein ek behatrin writer ho...aapki likhne ki shaili bahut achhi hai...waiting for your next update
sure @Qatil99 bhai aapki story hi itni interesting hai ke banda khud ba khud juda rehta hai...keep writing bro...we readers will definitely support you.Thank You So Much manikmittalme07 Bhai tarif ke liye... Baki to jabtak aap jese Readers ka saath he, tabtak Sirf Updates nahi.... Dher sari kahaniya bhi ati rahengi.... Stay Tuned And Keep Supporting ❤❤
Thank You So Much Bhai, Baki Update 9 baje post ho jayega Stay Tunedsure @Qatil99 bhai aapki story hi itni interesting hai ke banda khud ba khud juda rehta hai...keep writing bro...we readers will definitely support you.
For staring new story thread...
Congratulations for new story..bhai
Congratulations bro waiting for update
For new story
Congratulations for new story Qaatil bro
Jabardast introduction.bhai❤
For Starting New Story Thread
...for new story ...
Nice intro waiting for update
Bhai comments bharpoor milega...tum agla update post karo
Welcome back Qaatil bhai.........
Introduction padke hi aisa lagta hai story bahut hi faadu hone wali hai......
Update ka intezar mein.....
Fantasy me story dali h
Koi magic vagic aisi h kya story bhai
Congratulations for new thread
Fir thik h
Kyuki magic wali story apne matlab ki nhi
Nice introduction..
Sabse pehle new story ke liye apko bdhai aur apka shukriya hume ek aur khani dene ke liye
Gajab intro to bdiya rha
Is bar matlab story me teen character h lead role, triangle
Aksh, sakshi, mansi
Dar ke rehti h, aise kya badlaav aa gye aksh me interesting
Waiting for first update
Qaatil bta to dety laga di hy shuru atory
nice update
Kya hi baat bhai isme love triangle dikh raha he, or love triangle me to dard milna hi he dekhte he ab ye dard kise milta he, waiting for 1st Update.
nice intro
Bahut khub Qaatil Bhai, the intro ekdum dhasu he, mumbai se Surat ye kya soch rahe ho bhai? Eagerly waiting for updates
for the new story. I am sure this will much better than earlier story.
Congratulations for new thread Bhai & waiting for first update.
Congratulations bro for new story
Intro is fantastic
Keep writing we always with you
Ek nayi kahani shuru karne ke liye bahut bahut dhanyawad bhai aapka.
Ye kahani apne anjaam tak pahunche iske liye anant shubhkamnaye....
Baat introduction ki....
Aapne hero ka naam sabse hatkar rakha h अक्ष waah or jo do main character h unke nam bhi lajawab h साक्षी और मानसी .
Anoothe naam.
Behtareen raha introduction.
Or ab ,
Aage ka intjaar
Congratulations bro
Congratulations Qaatil bro for new story, ab ayega maza bhai ki new story Updates ka besabri se intzar rahega.
This time I liked your writing better than before. This story is about brother and sister. I liked the way you introduced us to the characters in the story. Now I eagerly await the first update of the story.
Thank You...
Bohot achha update bhai Waiting for next update ♥
lovely update
first update shandaar hai lekin aapne update ke suruaat me hi sad ending ki jalak dikhai hai ab kya kahun samjh na aa raha
Behad hi shandar or jabardast update bhai.
Bahut khoob superb.
Update ki shuruaat badi hi khatarnaak tarike se hui.
or fir bachpan se.
Aksh or sakshi ki badmashiyon ko aapne bahut hi sundar tarike se dikhaya h .
Mzaaaa aa gaya bhai waah
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Ghayal Kar Ke Mujhe Usne Poochha,
Karoge Kya Phir Mohabbat Mujhse,
Lahoo-Lahoo Tha Dil Mera Magar
Honthon Ne Kaha Beintha-Beintha....
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Lazavab Shurvath....Congratulation for the story
Bang on nice start, Characters Introduction well narrated, roles wisely chosen, jo kami (Narration ki) apke pehle story me thi, wo apne is story bahuth bakubi cover up kiya hai umeed hai aage bhi aise hi updates ayenge. Aur story ke pehle update se hi apna hero lime light me aachuka hai is ki waja uska character hai. Dekthe yeh story kya rang dikhati hai.....
Aur ek baath, ek chota sa suggestion personally i hate tragedy stories, movies etc., aur agar aap is story ko tragedic bannane ka soch rahe ho tho please meri request hai ki is story ko tragedy mat bannana.
Jab bhi mein kio stories ya fir koi movies dekhtha hun tho mein us story ke character ko apne aap se jod detha hun pata nahi yeh meri buri addat hai ya fir kuch aur but mein aise karne se apne aap ko rokh nahi saktha aur is ka natiza yeh hota hai ki jab koi tragedy scene ya fir story ko dektha ya fir padtha hun tho mujhe bahuth zada dard hota hai isliye mein aap se sirf request kar saktha hun kyun ki aapne is story pe bahuth mehanat kar ke likha hai aur changes shayad is story ki destiny badal sakthi jo shayad is story ke liye accha na ho so.
aur keep it up.....
Wating for the update
are Qaatil Bhai aapne to qatl kar diya
mind-blowing Start, yaar apne na middle class family ki ek baat bahut hi acche dhang se dikhayi he, ke ek middle class parents apne baccho ke liye koi taj mehel to nahi banwa sakte lekin unki choti si icchao ko pure dil se pura karte he jese yaha par Santosh ne apne baccho keliye jo gola banane ke liye Syrups laye.... Ye dikhata he the beauty of a Middle class Parents ❤
aise hi likhte rehna bhai, waiting for next Update
Nice update bro...
Just superb
Awesome update
Aise Update dete rehna bro Story bich me mat chhod dena bas
Aaj start Kiya h read Kar ke review deta hu
Gajab update bhai ji, pyara update tha
aksh ke rone ne to emotional kar diya
Middle class family ki life,pareshani,tangi bdiya tarike se describe ki h apne
Update jaldi khtm ho gya
Bache kya jane ab is bare me , agle mahine bol diya lekin aksh ko aaj hi chaiye
Lekin isiliye to unhe bache kehte h
Yha se hi aksh business man banne ka sochega
Jo ye conversation h na aksh aur sakshi ki, bas kya khu mujhe bhut jyada pyari lagti h
Meri story padne ki ye khas vjah h
Aise updates padkar jo sakoon milta h, pucho mat
Eagerly waiting for next update
Bhut shandar update biradar. Story track par aa rhi ha
Fabulous start
Keep posting
Childhood is very good and sweet, I miss my childhood while reading the story, we have no worries, playing and having fun all day long. From now on, Aksh and Sakshi are supporting each other, will have more fun later. I have also eaten a lot of ice balls during my school time and still eat occasionally. I liked the thinking of Aksh and some things are understood at the right time.
As always the update was great, You are writing very well, Now let's see what happens next, Till then waiting for the next part of the story.
Thank You...
Yaar Qaatil bhai kya hi likh rahe ho aap
Aapki writing pehle se zyada imrove hui he, keep it up bhai
Or aaj ke Update ki baat kare to kamal update tha, dono ka kisi ladke ko milkar marna
Sakshi ka itni buri halat me bhi gole ke liye pyaar ❤
Or wahi Aksh ke saaf dil par is pesa jesi khichad ki bunde lagg jana, ye bahut galat hua, dekhte he ab age kya hoga, eagerly waiting bhai.
Pyaara Update maza aya padhkar, or jo dono ne milkar us ladke ko mara bahut sahi kiya sare moments bahut hi pyare the, or ab aksh ke andar ye sawal agaya he, pata nahi kya hota he aagey waiting for next Update
Behad hi shandar or jabardast update bhai.
Bahut khoob superb.
Aksh or sakshi ka milkar apne se bade ladke ko pitna or ghar me ma ki dant sunkar bachpan ke din yaad aa gye.
Aap itna kamal ka update likhte ho ki main khud se jod leta hoon use.
Mzaaaa aa gaya bhai waah.
Or ab ,
Aage ka intjaar
Lovely update ek bahuth hi masumiyat see bara update or ek bahuth gheri baat bi pata chalti hai is update se ki maa baap ka pyaar tyag, samarpan, ki tulna kisi bhi cheez se nahi ho sakthi.. Aur kya is mamsum see ladke k man mein umad rahe swalon ka jawab melega ya nahi dekthe hai aage kya hot hai
Good waiting for next
Nice update bro
waiting for next update
Bahut hi pyara or masumiyat bhara Update
Awesome update
Guys Update 3 Posted, Check Outaapke update ka intzaar rahega bhai...aap sach mein ek behatrin writer ho...aapki likhne ki shaili bahut achhi hai...waiting for your next update