Adultery Manhoos

[Vik1006]

Hello dosto mai killer apke liye apni story lekar aya hoon manhoos main hamesa Dusro ki story padke ye hi Sochta tha ki mai bhi apni story post karoon toh mera app sab se request hai ki app log meri story ko support kare.

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[Vik1006]

UPDATE1
EK ped ke niche ek 18 sal ka Ladka apni zindagi ke bare me soch raha tha ki uski zindagi aesi kyo hai kyo sab log log use manhoos Kehte hai aesi hi sochte sochte subah se rat ho jati ki kuch logo ki awaj se Uska dhyan Toota hai or woh apne ghar chala Jata hai Jaha Kahne ko toh bohot log the lekin uske liye wo Akela hi tha kisi ko uski pari nahi thi chahe jiye ya mare jese hi woh ghar meh ghusa uska kano me kuch meete shabd pare kyo re manhoos subah se kaha tha kha khana kon banayega yeh sabd bolne wali thi ladke ki maa uske side me uski bade been bhi thi jise koi fark hi nahi padta tha uske aane se woh ladka apni maa se manhoos sunny ke baad Rashoi me chala gaya or khana banana laga jab khana ban gaya or use like dinning table par aya waha par uske papa maa cha-chacha chachi badi bahan choti bahan chachera bhai chacheri bahan bethe the sab use ghrina se dekh rahe the jese woh abhi use jaan se mar de agar unka bus chale ladka unki aakho jyada der dekh nahi paya or chala gaya apne Kamre yani rashoi me

Nice Update...

 

[Vik1006]

UPDATE2
INTRODUCTION
FATHER - Sanjay singh rathore umar 45 sal height 5.8 dikhney mean kuch khas nahi businessman hai share main inka acha khasa nam hai apne bete se nafrat Karte hai.

Mother- sujata singh dikhney mei bomb hai umr 40 sal lekin ab bhi 30 se jyada nahi dikhti .

sister- neha umr 17 sal height 5.6 inch dikhney me Apsara jesy ek bar dekhey bister pe lana chahe.

Chacha- raghuveer singh laltchi kism ka hai umr 43 apne bhai se jalta hai . Tharti kism ka hai.

Chachi -shweta umr 38 dikhney mei aisi ki kisi bhi insane ka land khara kar dey.

Chacheri bahan -pooja umr 14 sal mome ki gudia apney hero se bohot pyar karti hai .

Chachera bhai- rahul umr 14 dono Judwa hai rang Gora.
HERO - veer umr 16 sal well maintain body hai blue akhey government school se abhi isn't 12 kia hai used is key 97 percent are hai is bhi ghar me ab kisi se matlab nahi raha bus pooja ki bajay se ruka hua hai par ab iska did ghar se bhagney ka kar raha hai.
Baki ka patro ki information unkey ane pe .

Harare hero ko subah kisi ne lat markey uthaya
Aur wo thi uski mom.
Mom - kyo re manhoos aise san se pada rahta hai karna dharma kuch hai nahi free ki rotiya torta rahta hai .
It a sunny ke bad woh ladka fresh honey chala jata hai.fresh honey samay woh soch raha tha bus ab or nahi aj hi ghar se chala jauga .
Fir woh Nashua banata hai or jab woh Nashta like aa raha tha toh neha ne rashtey me per ada dia jishkiy wajah se thoda sa Nashua gir gaya.
Yeh dekhey uskey pitashree ne use lath ghusho se pitna shuru kar dia pooja ye dekhey uski akho me asoo agayey ghar me sab veer ko dekhey has rahe they jesy woh insane hi na ho.
Pitney ke bad uskey dad aram se baithkey Nashta kearney lage aur wo agya rashoi aur jo baj gaya use kaha lia . Thodi def bad wo apna saman dekhta toh usme 15 hazar rupee the . Ab hamrey reader log soch rahe honey is key pads paisa kaha se aya toh bhaisahab ye 10 sal ki umr se air dhabey pe kam kartey the jiski wajay se I key pass paisey hai .
Phir woh rat ka intajar karta hai aur phir chal deta hai apney jindagi ke name safar me.

Ab se story mai se narrate hogi.

Nice Intro...

 

[Vik1006]

UPDATE3
Main ghar se Nikal kar sidha pocha railway station (man me ye hi chal raha tha ki mere Jane ke bad pooja ka kya reaction hoga baki logo ko toh lagega acha hai manhoos chala gaya) jo jo mere sath howa use sochke rona Araha tha ki itne me train agayi or me train me chad gaya mere samne ki birth pe ek khubsurat si ladki bethi thi kali akhe lame bal figure 34-26-36 use dekhey me apni sari pareshaniyan bhool gaya or use ghoorney laga (wese toh mene aaj tak kisi ladki ko dekha nahi tha par usme Alag hi Kashish thi )usne bhi notice kar liya me use ghoor raha tha usne gusse se mujhey aankhe dikhai par hum toh there majnu .Aise hi 10-15 minute Nikal gaye pata nahi achanak use kya ho gaya usne mere pass ake mujhe sidha Thapar mar diya 🗯 ( pata nahi àj kal ki ladkiya jhashi ki rani ban jati hai shareef ko samne or lafango ke same fat jati hai ).
Ladki- How dare you kab se dekh rahi hoo ghoore hi ja rahe ho tum jese ladko ki wajah se ladkiya safe nahi hai bloody rascal or na Jane kitne sabd bole porre compartment ke log jama hogaya or pata nahi kya kya boltey gaye sala mujhey toh adat thi phir bhi rona araha tha pata nahi sala mere sath hi aesa kyo ho raha hai.
Kher dhire dhire sab shant hogya or me gate ke pass ake phir se ghar ke bare me sochne laga jo kabhi mera tha hi nahi.

Udhar ghar me subah jab sujata subah rashoi me jati hai or dekhti hai manhoos waha pe nahi hai toh bolti hai phir se chal gaya Kamchor Sara kam mujhey karna parega aur woh nashta banana lagti hai jab dinning table pe woh nasta lati hai toh sanjay kehta hai jann tum kyo la rahi ho woh manhoos kaha gaya .
Sanjana - pata nahi jab dekho ghumta hi rahta hai wese acha hi huya din acha jayega .
Idhr pooja apna dimag dauraney lagti hai bhaiya kaha gaye kahi kal ki wajay se toh nahi nahi aisa nahi ho Sakta.
Veer side
Main apne khyalo me tha ki train platform pe pahuch gayi me train se utra saman toh kuch tha nahi mere pass . Maine apne dimag ka sara kachra bahar nikal aur socha chalo pehle kuch kha let hu phir nokari ki talash pe jauga.
Main station se bahar nikla samaj nahi aa raha tha kis taraf jayu me side chal para mujhey ek shop dikhi waha se mene bread kharidi or use kha liya .me job dhundhney ke liye nikal gaya bahut Jagah poocha lekin kam nahi Mila raat ho gayi thi toh Park me gaya or so gaya.

Subah meri aakh kuch logo ki awajo se Khuli jo subhay exercise karney aaye the.
Aaj ka din bhi aesy hi nikal gaya rat hogayi or mein park me sogaya.
Able din mujhey aik pizza boy ki nokari mil gayi . Mein usi samay se kam pe lag gaya. Sham ko chuti ke baad me me phir se park me Jake so
Gaya.
Able din mene apne liya kiraye ka kamra dhund liya jiska kiraya tha 3000 mere pass 14000 bache the mene kiraya de diya.

Isi sheher me aik ghar me 5 scientist kisi chiz pe research kar rahe the. Aisa lag raha tha inhe research Karter huye bohot time hogaya tha lekin ye Kamyab nahi ho parahe they.
Tabhi unme se eik ka phone bajta hai
(Mein us admi ko admi1 or dusre admi ko boss se describe karuga.)
Boss- kam huya ki nahi sir or wait nahi kar saktey.
Admi1- boss bus 2-3 haftey or apna kam ho
jayega.
Boss- ye hi tumhare liye acha hai tumhari zindagi ka phaisala bhi 2-3 hafto me hoga ki tum zinda rahoge ki nahi .
Admi1- boss pakka kam hojayega .
Boss- dekhtey hai
Or phir phone cut hojata hai or woh apne kam me lag jata hai.

Badhiya update...

 

[Killing bhai]

UPDATE4
Raat ka samay tha me apne kamre me tha or soch raha tha rahne ka hogaya nokari hogyi bus ab college ke lia form bhar deta hoo. (Ab readerlog yeh soch rahe hogey ye padega kese toh apko bata du mene 12 me 97 percent laye hai isliye mujhey scholarship mili hai.) Subah Jake owner se bat karta hoon. Yehi sab sochtey huye mein sojata hoon.
Agle din mei fresh hokey kam pe chala jata hoon.
Main- sir mujhey apsey kuch bat karni hai
Owner - ha bolo veer kya bat karni hai
Main - sir maine college me admission leliya tha toh kya main dopahar se aa sakta hoon me late night tak kam kar longa sir(sale motey haa kardey warna tera sar phod dunga)
Owner- thik hai lekin agar tum kam me dhyan nahi dongey toh tum samajh jao.
Main - nahi nahi sir mai bohut ache se kam karooga
Owner- yeh hi tumhare liye acha hoga
Itna kehney ke bad woh waha se chala jata hai.
Aur mein apna kam karney laga.
Chutti honey ke kuch samay pehley mujhey bataya jata hai ki muzhe aik address pe pizza deliver karna hai itna sunna tha ki mera pura dimag ubal gaya eik toh sala subah se bhag dour or uper se chuti ke time delivery owner ko man me galliyan deta huya mai nikal gaya
Mein jab address pe pahucha or mene Darwaje pe hath lagay hi tha ki woh apna ap khulata chala gaya.
Main- koi hai sala log bhi kamal hai ghar ka darwaja khula chor rakha hai or phir kehtey phirtey hai chori hogayi apne app me badbadta huya me idher or dekhney laga tha ki muze ek kamre se kuch azib si awaje sunai deti hai.
Main-sala yeh kesi awaje hai chalo dekhtey hai me jab kamre ke and are dekhta hu toh mere people tale zamin khisak jati hai.
Andar ek aurat godhi bani huyi thi or eik admi uske piche se uski choot mar raha tha.
Admi - aah mer--aai jaan tujhe jitna bhi chod lu man nahi Bharta aahhhhhh aahh
Aurat -toh kisne kahaaah maaaaa man bharo me tohhhh chahttti hooooon ki tumhara man bhare.

Yeh sab main apni aakhey phadkey dekh raha tha aesa nahi tha mujhey is key bare mein kuch pata nahi sarkari school me padney ki wajay se mujhey in sabkey bare mein bohut jankari thi school me ladko ke sath maine mobile me kabhi kabhi bluefilm dekh lia karta tha lekin live mein pehli bar dekh raha tha.
Aise hi kuch der unka chudai ka program chalta raha or me bahar muth marta raha.
Kuch der bad mei ghar se bahar aya or doorbell bajayi door usi aurat ne khola tha is samay usne maxi pehni thi use dekhtey hi mera land phir se khada hogaya usney bhi notice kar liya.
Main- Mam apka pizza.
Aurat- thik hai lao mei pese leke aati hu
Phir usne muze paisey diye aur mein apney ghar ki aur chal diya us aurat ke nange badan ke bare me sochtey huye abhi me soch hi raha tha ki muze 2 ladkey ek ladki ko chedtey huye dikhey.
Main - lo ji aik us train wali ladki ko dekho aur ek es ladki ko hum jesy sharifo ke samney hi enkey hath pao chaltey hai baki enki fat jati hai kya karu agar sidha ladne jauga toh pitney chances jyada hai 2 hai sale 1 ko toh phir bhi pel doo koi danda dhundta hu pehley eik ko Niptata hu phir me aas pas dhundney laga mujhey eik bad patthar dikha aur use uthake main un ladko ki tarf chal diya or eik ladke ke ser pe mar dia
Or woh apna sir padkey niche baith gaya
Ladka1- abe tune yeh kya kiya
Main - jab ladki ko cherega toh mei Teri àarti utaruga majne yeh kaha hi tha ki woh madarchod chillate huye mere upar jhapta mei pichey gira aur woh mere uper aya ese pehle mujhey woh marta mei Shambhal chuka tha aur ghum gaya ab woh mere niche tha aur mei upar meine use diye 10 -15 punch phir khare hokey di uski ribs pe 4 latey sale ki pakaa Haddi dheeley hogayi hogi mai hogaya side woh langake khada hi ho raha ki maine di uskey khopdey pe lat or woh hogaya chit. Use marney ke bad mei us ladki ti taraf dekha
Ladki- thanks apney meri madad ki ye log roj ladkiyo ko pareshan kartey rehtey the
Main - ji thanks ki koi Jarurat nahi app bhi inhe 2-3 thappad marti toh sab sahi hojata.
Ladki - kahna bohut asan hai lekin aisa nahi hota bydaway mera nam Sonam
Main - mera nam veer apse milke khusi huyi yeh toh nahi kehuga lekin acha laga
Sonam- app but achi bate kartey hai wese ham same age ke toh hum formality ke liye app kehna band kare ajeeb lag raha hai .
Main - sahi kaha ajeeb lag raha hai chalo mai tum ko tumhare ghar chor deta hu
Sonam- nahi thanks mera ghar pass me hi hai.
Main - ok as you wish
Sonam - bye
Main- ok bye
Uske bad woh woh chali gayi aur mei bhi ghar ate hi so gaya

 

[Killing bhai]

Nice intro.

Thanks bhai

 

[Killing bhai]

nice update

Shukriya apka

 

[Killing bhai]

Nice start

Thanks bhai

 

[Killing bhai]

Nice start

Thanks bhai

 

[Killing bhai]

plot toh achhi hain, ispe pehle hi bahut si kahanio padh chuke hain, ab aapne puri kahani ka plot agar pehle se apne man mein soch ke rakhha hoga, toh hi achhi banegi, kyunki aage jaa ke log doosre aisi milti julti kahanio se compare karna shuru kar denge.

Toh agar aap different honge tabhi log aayenge padhne ke liye, aapne start kiya hain toh uske liye congratulations, mujhe lagta hain kee story likhna ek bahut hi tuff job hain, kabhi-kabhi achhe se review dena bhi cumbersome lagta hain, toh aapke effort ke liye thanks, bas bhai itna hi kahoonga kee stereotype na bana de is kahani ko, kyunki aise same topics pe kahani toh bahut si aa chuki hain, ab aap ne iske emotions se hi different bana shakte hain, kyunki wahee alag banayega, aur is kahani kee ek flashback hain, toh obviosly wo tragic hogi, toh dekhte hain.

best of luck..

Thanks bhai mein apni puri koshish karuga ki story padke app logo ko maza aye