Rajesh Sarhadi
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Adultery MASTI........... JINDAGI KI( story of a watchman)- BEGINNING...
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Very poor story....ek aurat apne pati k samne ek gair mard se jism k khilawad kar rahi hai baate kar rahi hai...aur iske pati ko pata NH chalta e to put of imagination...
Kya uska pati andha hai kya..jo Rafiq ki moujudgi itni der se dekh pa nh raha....story aise likho...jise padakar thoda to sach Lage...this is very poor story ever I read
Kya uska pati andha hai kya..jo Rafiq ki moujudgi itni der se dekh pa nh raha....story aise likho...jise padakar thoda to sach Lage...this is very poor story ever I read
Though agreeing to some extent.. with your point of view considering the scenes of Erotic encounters in the presence of Anu's husband Anuj.. I also feel that it looks weird.. And expect from Rajkumar to kindly avoid such situations in future.. I am OK with Anup is in the hall and Anu and Rafiq on the terrace or something like that but not in his physical presence...
But what I will appreciate is.. writer's skill to narrate such long scenes with constant actions and erotic dialogues.. and this is the unique quality of Rajkumar...no doubt about that..
Good Going.. Ok am very much engrossed with two main characters. Anu and Rafique.. in this update.. Anu asking Rafiq.. Khana Lagaduu... Ohhh Myy.. what an erotic line.. for me.. how mentally usne apne aap Rafiq ki biwi ke roop me dhaal liya hai.. aur abhi aage bhi usje pati se hui anniversary ki baat uase bataati hai aur kuch adjustment karne ka bolti hai.. I love these characterization and coversation and whatever they do.. both ..
Keep it upp....
Keep it upp....
Thanks for comment..
Mere ek chote se suggestion hai aap ke liye sir.. Ek chote se story likho aap.. Jo sach lage.. To muje bhi idea aa jayege ki sach lagne wali story kaise hote hai .. Usse muje bhi kuch guidance mil jayega. Fir mera jaisa chota writer aap se kuch sikh jayega
3XXX
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Then write a story for us so that we can compare who is the Boss of this forum.
Ghosthunter
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It is one of most erotic and extremely exciting interfaith adultery I have ever read. Our cherished fantasy in being materialized by this great writer.
Very bakwas story...isme ek pal kahi b sachayi nazar nh aati...mere life padi sab se bakwas story me iska number pehle aayega.......Great,fantastic,sexy and of course a very thirsty update.