Fantasy Meri ansulji jindgi(adventure +fantasy+incest)

[Saddemon]

hello dosto me ek reader rha hu muje writing skill or writer hone ka thoda sa bhi experience nhi he pr me ap logo ke sath jyada se jyada jud sku or jyada se jyada dost bna sku or ap logo ka pyar pa sku yh sb isi platform ke chlte muje mil sakega isliye me ek story likhne ja rha hu me apni tarf se best dene ki kosis krunga bas ap writers or reader meri gltiyo ko sudharne me help kijiyega or meri mistakes ko fresher smj kr maaf kr dijiyega.vese to me hu ap logo ka dost and host saddemon pr ap log muje pyar se kuch bhi naam de skte he.me ab apni rachna share krne ja rha hu .
thank you

 

[Raj]

FIRST TOH CONGRATULATIONS FOR NEW THREAD .

BHAI HAR KAAM KI SHURUWAAT HAR KOI FIRST TIME HI KARTA HAI .PAR SAFALTA AUR ASAFALTA OSS VYAKTI KE UPER NIRBHAR RAHTA HAI.
ABHI AAPNE 2 UPDATE DIYE HAIN AUR KAHANI KI PRISHTHBHOOMI ABHI TAIYYAAR HO RAHA HAI.

PAR IN UPDATES SE KAHANI KUCH INTERESTING TOH LAG RAHI HAI .
BAKI KA AAGE DEKHATE HAIN KYA HOTA HAI.

KEEP POSTING
KEEP WRITING
KEEP ROCKING

 

[Sum3]

Jindgi bhi kitni ajib he ek pal me happiness a jati he to kbhi ek pal me dukh to kbhi itna jyada akelapn feel krati he jese world ki hr cheeg hr matter duniya ka dhikhawa lgte he par khte he na hr problem ka ilaj samay he jo hr sajeev prani ko kisi na kisi trh se effect krta he or use koi na koi goal jine ke liye de hi deta he.kisi ne khub kha he

Sirf sanhse chlte rhne ko hi jindgi nhi khte ,
aankho me kuch khvab or dil me kuch umide hona chahiye​

meri life bhi kuch asi hi kuch ansulje trike se shuru hui or usko bhi bhut intjar ke baad raah mili. Khani ki neev city me rhne vali ldki se hoti he jiska sb se bda gun unki salinta or sistachar me falifulit hone ke karn patience se bhra hua tha vo hard work krke muskilo ka smna kr ne me believe rkhti he un dino shadi km umr me ho jaya krti thi jis karn uski shadi km umr me ek gaav me ho gyi.family bhut bdi thi phir bhi km umr me hi usne parivar ki jimedari bhut shi se nibhayi par purane jmane ke khyalat or sasural ki bhut si problem unke samne aayi khi baar unhe buri alochna shni pdi kher us pal unke life partner ne kafi sath diya .

ldki ->geeta

ldka ->dev

par family me unke efforts ki koi srahna nhi krte .Dev or Geeta parivar ki jimedari utane ke sath study bhi krte he usme dev geeta ka bhut sath deta he.dev or geeta or aage pdna chate the pr ghr vale sath nhi dete family problem ke chlte dev ki maa ko unhe nikalne ke chlte dev ko geeta ko lekr ghr chod kr jana pda pr ghr se nilne ke baad un ke samne sb se bdi problem thi vo jaaye kha kyuki vo ghr se khali hath aaye the tb dev geeta ko kuch dino ke liye uske piyr chod deta he or geeta se khta he ki vo bhut jld hi use lene aayega or nam aankho ke sath city me nikl jata he or job dundne lgta he us smy dev ko ek luhar ke yha job mil jati he.( luhar jyada age ka hone ke karn vo dopar ko 12:30 se evening 5:00 pm tk hi kaam krta tha)ab use rhne ke liye arrangement krna tha or uske pas abhi utne pese nhi the vo decide krta he ki vo kuch din uski bua ke ghr rukenge jo usi city ke bhar rhti thi jha unke khet khaliyan the ab dev vha se daily updown krta job ke liye or khali smay pdta vhi geeta bhi aage ki study krti he us doran dev private tution bhi deta bacho ko taki jld se jld pese ikatee kr ske or bua ke yha khet se sbji todkr use dhokr belgadi me rkhne me bhi mdad krta he ase dekhte hi dekhte 2month nikl gye ab dev city me ek chota sa kmra kiraye pr leta he or khane bnane ke kuch sman khrid kr lata he or bistar vgera sari jrurat ke saman khridta he phir geeta ko lekr ata he geeta yh sb dekh kr use dev pr bhut proud feel hota he ab dev geeta ko khud bhi pdate he or tution bhi lete he or khud bhi pdta he ase hi dev ki job bank me lg jati he jo pas ki hi city me thi ab dev vha se daily updown krta he or kuch smy baad geeta ka govt. teacher me selection ho gya pr geeta ka posting kafi dur ek kasbe me hota he usi bich geeta pet se bhi ho gyi thi jis karn dev bhut khush tha pr problem yh thi ki ab unko alg 2 jgh rhna pdega or geeta ab ma bhi bn ne vali thi to dev ko alg 2 rhna manjur nhi tha is vjh se vo apni bank ki govt job geeta ko bina btaye chod deta he or geeta ka full support dete huye us posting vali jgh ko rhne ke liye ek room dundte he kiraye se or dev geeta ki puri care krne lgta he jb geeta ko dev ki bank ki job chodne ka pta chlta he to vo bhut naraj hoti he kyuki dev ne apne aatmsamman ki prvah kiye bina geeta ki job ko continue rkha us smy ladkiyo ka job krna shi nhi mante the pr dev ne us smy bhi geeta ko duniyadari se utkr shi mayne diye or geeta ko bhut smjaya ki vo tension nhi le vo private job hi kr lega vese bhi use bank ki job achhi nhi lgti thi khi bate khi dev ne geeta ko shaant krne ke liye pr geeta to sirf yhi soche ja rhi thi ki dev ne uske liye kitna bda kdam uta liya ab parivar vale kya khega vhi dev geeta ke ase udas chahere ko dekh kr use bhut bura feel hota he vo geeta ko apne gle lga leta he or smjata he ki tumhare dev me bhut talent he yh tum janti ho me koi dusra exam clear kr ke dusri job le lunga pr is smy to muje meri jan ke pas rhna he uske sath masti krni he uske nkhre utane he use us ka hak dilana he uske sare sapne pure krne he to me apni angel ko asi situation me akela kese chod skta hu jb family ke hote huye bhi family na ke brabr he yh khte huye dev ki aankhe nam ho gyi jise dekh kr geeta turnt topic change kr deti he kyuki dev ki aankho me vo nami brdas nhi kr skti thi to vo muh bnate huye khti he asa na ho jaye ki baad me pta chle ki mere hisse ka pyar bhi hmare is baby ko dene lge ap or me abhi se kh deti ho ki muje hmesha isi trh beintha mhobaat krna chahe kuch bhi ho jaye is pr dev khta he jan tum meri life partner ho sirf khne ke liye hi nhi sach me hi ho me tumahre bina adhura hu ase hi bhut si romantic baate hoti he dev or geeta ke bich or time apni gati se chlta rhta he is doraan dev private teacher ki job krta he uski pdane ki skill or knowledge ke chlte bhut sare students aate. geeta ek khubsurat si ldki ko janm deti he or apni job bhi continue rkhti he or family ko bhi khubsurat taike se savarti he kuch time baad phir se ek ldki janm deti he geeta ki chah thi ki use dev jesa ek ldka bhi ho iske liye vo kafi maannte bhi ki par ab usko misscarige or pta nhi kya 2 problem aane lgi jis se bachaa to garbh me bnta he par vo aage ki process succeed nhi kr pata khi doctor ko dikhaya pr report normal aati.dev ne khud ka ghr bhi khrid liyaa tha or dev ko govt job bhi lgti he forest officer ki pr posting dur hone ke karn or family or bachoo ke karn vo use bhi accept nhi krta dusri trf geeta udas rhne lgi jis dekh kr dev ko bhut dukh hota.

Mere pyare readers bhaiyo or bhano jis jgh dev or geeta rhte he vo ek tahsil he or vo ek tapu ki trh he kyu ki vo charo or nadiyo se gira hua he jo bhut hi khubsurat he jiska naam manohar tapu he jise puliya state se jodti he.

Ek din dev geeta manohar tapu ki nadiyo ke bich stith (place) shiv mandir me gye the vha drashn ke pashchat ek dhrmatma mile jo chndan ka tika lga rhe the sbhi shrdaluau ko usi bich jab dev ne or geeta ne unka ashirvad liya tb unhone dev or geeta se kha ki ase niras kyu ho tum ko bhagvan bholenath ki kripa hui he tum ko ab se 1sal bad varsha ritu me jb yh ndi ufan par hogi or maohar tapu ka jamini contact dusri jgh se nhi rhega tb tumhare ghr me ek shishu jnam lega jo kafi medhavi or guni hoga or vo duniya me pyar barsayega or asahay ki madad krega.

First of all congratulations for the treadmene aapke story ka title aur "
Sirf sanhse chlte rhne ko hi jindgi nhi khte ,
aankho me kuch khvab or dil me kuch umide hona chahiye " se bahuth prabhavith hua hun kyo ki aaj kal mere life ki situation bhi aise hi hai. Yeh ek coincidence ho saktha hai, magar fir bhi mein apne aap ko is story ko padne se nahi rook paya. Yun tho aap ki story wo dusri story hai jis pe mene comment kiya hai. My personal opinion, i only read stories which are unique and involve no sex scenes in it. I hope aap ke story mein bhi aise nahi hoga. Bhey rahal, baath kuch update hojaye.
Agar aap ko story likhna pasand hai tho please mere suggestions positively lene warne koi baath nahi. Dekhiye mere mannana hai k, story jo padtha hai wo sirf shabd nahi balki ek jasbaath dekh tha hai wo uss story se jud jatha hai isliye story ka sahi tarah se likha jana pure jasbath ke saath likha jana important hai.
chaliye baath karte hai aap ke update ke bare mein, mein aap ko suggestions point wise mein dunga taki aap ko clearly samaj mein aa sakhe.
1. Aap story mein app ko language pe zada dhyan dene chayiye. Bahuth sare mistakes hai ya fir yun kahunga aap ke words or sentence ko samajhne ke liye baar baar padna pad raha hai jo mere khyal se borring ho jata hai . So please aap uspe toda dyan de.
2. With correct language comes comas and spacings and full stop. Also, format (font size, highliting important sentences in different color, font style etc) bahuth important hai taki jo aap kehna chahathe ho wo clearly logon ko feel ho sakhe. So please aap uspe dhyan de.
3. Aap ki story bahuth fast thi, aise lag raha tha k mein , ek short story pad raha hun. Eleboration is the moat important part, jab tak aap properly eloberate nahi karoge tab tak aap kahani k character ke feelings ko justify nahi kar sakhoge. So please aap uspe dyan de.
4. Lastly, i would suggest you read some good stories of this forum like pyare rishthe, attitude, laal ishq, gods and demons there are many more i have suggested you a few which will not only give you and idea to express things but also increase you interest in writing. (If you love writing).
Thank you

 

[Saddemon]

First of all congratulations for the treadmene aapke story ka title aur "
Sirf sanhse chlte rhne ko hi jindgi nhi khte ,
aankho me kuch khvab or dil me kuch umide hona chahiye " se bahuth prabhavith hua hun kyo ki aaj kal mere life ki situation bhi aise hi hai. Yeh ek coincidence ho saktha hai, magar fir bhi mein apne aap ko is story ko padne se nahi rook paya. Yun tho aap ki story wo dusri story hai jis pe mene comment kiya hai. My personal opinion, i only read stories which are unique and involve no sex scenes in it. I hope aap ke story mein bhi aise nahi hoga. Bhey rahal, baath kuch update hojaye.
Agar aap ko story likhna pasand hai tho please mere suggestions positively lene warne koi baath nahi. Dekhiye mere mannana hai k, story jo padtha hai wo sirf shabd nahi balki ek jasbaath dekh tha hai wo uss story se jud jatha hai isliye story ka sahi tarah se likha jana pure jasbath ke saath likha jana important hai.
chaliye baath karte hai aap ke update ke bare mein, mein aap ko suggestions point wise mein dunga taki aap ko clearly samaj mein aa sakhe.
1. Aap story mein app ko language pe zada dhyan dene chayiye. Bahuth sare mistakes hai ya fir yun kahunga aap ke words or sentence ko samajhne ke liye baar baar padna pad raha hai jo mere khyal se borring ho jata hai . So please aap uspe toda dyan de.
2. With correct language comes comas and spacings and full stop. Also, format (font size, highliting important sentences in different color, font style etc) bahuth important hai taki jo aap kehna chahathe ho wo clearly logon ko feel ho sakhe. So please aap uspe dhyan de.
3. Aap ki story bahuth fast thi, aise lag raha tha k mein , ek short story pad raha hun. Eleboration is the moat important part, jab tak aap properly eloberate nahi karoge tab tak aap kahani k character ke feelings ko justify nahi kar sakhoge. So please aap uspe dyan de.
4. Lastly, i would suggest you read some good stories of this forum like pyare rishthe, attitude, laal ishq, gods and demons there are many more i have suggested you a few which will not only give you and idea to express things but also increase you interest in writing. (If you love writing).
Thank you

Thank u dost apka suggestion mere liye improvement krne me help krega.....I hope next update me ap ko shikayat ka moka nhi milega...be patience

 

[Saddemon]

FIRST TOH CONGRATULATIONS FOR NEW THREAD .

BHAI HAR KAAM KI SHURUWAAT HAR KOI FIRST TIME HI KARTA HAI .PAR SAFALTA AUR ASAFALTA OSS VYAKTI KE UPER NIRBHAR RAHTA HAI.
ABHI AAPNE 2 UPDATE DIYE HAIN AUR KAHANI KI PRISHTHBHOOMI ABHI TAIYYAAR HO RAHA HAI.

PAR IN UPDATES SE KAHANI KUCH INTERESTING TOH LAG RAHI HAI .
BAKI KA AAGE DEKHATE HAIN KYA HOTA HAI.

KEEP POSTING
KEEP WRITING
KEEP ROCKING

Thank u bro .. confidence ke liye ... I'll try to give my best

 

[Naik]

Jindgi bhi kitni ajib he ek pal me happiness a jati he to kbhi ek pal me dukh to kbhi itna jyada akelapn feel krati he jese world ki hr cheeg hr matter duniya ka dhikhawa lgte he par khte he na hr problem ka ilaj samay he jo hr sajeev prani ko kisi na kisi trh se effect krta he or use koi na koi goal jine ke liye de hi deta he.kisi ne khub kha he

Sirf sanhse chlte rhne ko hi jindgi nhi khte ,
aankho me kuch khvab or dil me kuch umide hona chahiye​

meri life bhi kuch asi hi kuch ansulje trike se shuru hui or usko bhi bhut intjar ke baad raah mili. Khani ki neev city me rhne vali ldki se hoti he jiska sb se bda gun unki salinta or sistachar me falifulit hone ke karn patience se bhra hua tha vo hard work krke muskilo ka smna kr ne me believe rkhti he un dino shadi km umr me ho jaya krti thi jis karn uski shadi km umr me ek gaav me ho gyi.family bhut bdi thi phir bhi km umr me hi usne parivar ki jimedari bhut shi se nibhayi par purane jmane ke khyalat or sasural ki bhut si problem unke samne aayi khi baar unhe buri alochna shni pdi kher us pal unke life partner ne kafi sath diya .

ldki ->geeta

ldka ->dev

par family me unke efforts ki koi srahna nhi krte .Dev or Geeta parivar ki jimedari utane ke sath study bhi krte he usme dev geeta ka bhut sath deta he.dev or geeta or aage pdna chate the pr ghr vale sath nhi dete family problem ke chlte dev ki maa ko unhe nikalne ke chlte dev ko geeta ko lekr ghr chod kr jana pda pr ghr se nilne ke baad un ke samne sb se bdi problem thi vo jaaye kha kyuki vo ghr se khali hath aaye the tb dev geeta ko kuch dino ke liye uske piyr chod deta he or geeta se khta he ki vo bhut jld hi use lene aayega or nam aankho ke sath city me nikl jata he or job dundne lgta he us smy dev ko ek luhar ke yha job mil jati he.( luhar jyada age ka hone ke karn vo dopar ko 12:30 se evening 5:00 pm tk hi kaam krta tha)ab use rhne ke liye arrangement krna tha or uske pas abhi utne pese nhi the vo decide krta he ki vo kuch din uski bua ke ghr rukenge jo usi city ke bhar rhti thi jha unke khet khaliyan the ab dev vha se daily updown krta job ke liye or khali smay pdta vhi geeta bhi aage ki study krti he us doran dev private tution bhi deta bacho ko taki jld se jld pese ikatee kr ske or bua ke yha khet se sbji todkr use dhokr belgadi me rkhne me bhi mdad krta he ase dekhte hi dekhte 2month nikl gye ab dev city me ek chota sa kmra kiraye pr leta he or khane bnane ke kuch sman khrid kr lata he or bistar vgera sari jrurat ke saman khridta he phir geeta ko lekr ata he geeta yh sb dekh kr use dev pr bhut proud feel hota he ab dev geeta ko khud bhi pdate he or tution bhi lete he or khud bhi pdta he ase hi dev ki job bank me lg jati he jo pas ki hi city me thi ab dev vha se daily updown krta he or kuch smy baad geeta ka govt. teacher me selection ho gya pr geeta ka posting kafi dur ek kasbe me hota he usi bich geeta pet se bhi ho gyi thi jis karn dev bhut khush tha pr problem yh thi ki ab unko alg 2 jgh rhna pdega or geeta ab ma bhi bn ne vali thi to dev ko alg 2 rhna manjur nhi tha is vjh se vo apni bank ki govt job geeta ko bina btaye chod deta he or geeta ka full support dete huye us posting vali jgh ko rhne ke liye ek room dundte he kiraye se or dev geeta ki puri care krne lgta he jb geeta ko dev ki bank ki job chodne ka pta chlta he to vo bhut naraj hoti he kyuki dev ne apne aatmsamman ki prvah kiye bina geeta ki job ko continue rkha us smy ladkiyo ka job krna shi nhi mante the pr dev ne us smy bhi geeta ko duniyadari se utkr shi mayne diye or geeta ko bhut smjaya ki vo tension nhi le vo private job hi kr lega vese bhi use bank ki job achhi nhi lgti thi khi bate khi dev ne geeta ko shaant krne ke liye pr geeta to sirf yhi soche ja rhi thi ki dev ne uske liye kitna bda kdam uta liya ab parivar vale kya khega vhi dev geeta ke ase udas chahere ko dekh kr use bhut bura feel hota he vo geeta ko apne gle lga leta he or smjata he ki tumhare dev me bhut talent he yh tum janti ho me koi dusra exam clear kr ke dusri job le lunga pr is smy to muje meri jan ke pas rhna he uske sath masti krni he uske nkhre utane he use us ka hak dilana he uske sare sapne pure krne he to me apni angel ko asi situation me akela kese chod skta hu jb family ke hote huye bhi family na ke brabr he yh khte huye dev ki aankhe nam ho gyi jise dekh kr geeta turnt topic change kr deti he kyuki dev ki aankho me vo nami brdas nhi kr skti thi to vo muh bnate huye khti he asa na ho jaye ki baad me pta chle ki mere hisse ka pyar bhi hmare is baby ko dene lge ap or me abhi se kh deti ho ki muje hmesha isi trh beintha mhobaat krna chahe kuch bhi ho jaye is pr dev khta he jan tum meri life partner ho sirf khne ke liye hi nhi sach me hi ho me tumahre bina adhura hu ase hi bhut si romantic baate hoti he dev or geeta ke bich or time apni gati se chlta rhta he is doraan dev private teacher ki job krta he uski pdane ki skill or knowledge ke chlte bhut sare students aate. geeta ek khubsurat si ldki ko janm deti he or apni job bhi continue rkhti he or family ko bhi khubsurat taike se savarti he kuch time baad phir se ek ldki janm deti he geeta ki chah thi ki use dev jesa ek ldka bhi ho iske liye vo kafi maannte bhi ki par ab usko misscarige or pta nhi kya 2 problem aane lgi jis se bachaa to garbh me bnta he par vo aage ki process succeed nhi kr pata khi doctor ko dikhaya pr report normal aati.dev ne khud ka ghr bhi khrid liyaa tha or dev ko govt job bhi lgti he forest officer ki pr posting dur hone ke karn or family or bachoo ke karn vo use bhi accept nhi krta dusri trf geeta udas rhne lgi jis dekh kr dev ko bhut dukh hota.

Mere pyare readers bhaiyo or bhano jis jgh dev or geeta rhte he vo ek tahsil he or vo ek tapu ki trh he kyu ki vo charo or nadiyo se gira hua he jo bhut hi khubsurat he jiska naam manohar tapu he jise puliya state se jodti he.

Ek din dev geeta manohar tapu ki nadiyo ke bich stith (place) shiv mandir me gye the vha drashn ke pashchat ek dhrmatma mile jo chndan ka tika lga rhe the sbhi shrdaluau ko usi bich jab dev ne or geeta ne unka ashirvad liya tb unhone dev or geeta se kha ki ase niras kyu ho tum ko bhagvan bholenath ki kripa hui he tum ko ab se 1sal bad varsha ritu me jb yh ndi ufan par hogi or maohar tapu ka jamini contact dusri jgh se nhi rhega tb tumhare ghr me ek shishu jnam lega jo kafi medhavi or guni hoga or vo duniya me pyar barsayega or asahay ki madad krega.

CONGRATULATIONS for new story
Very nice start

 

[Naik]

Part-2

Geeta ki bdi ldki->shalu ,jise meera pyar se chanu di kh kr bulati he

Choti ldki -> Meera

dev or geeta bhut khush huye rishivar ki baat sunkr,aage rishivar ne kha apko sbr rkhna hoga.uske incident ke baad geeta bhut khush rhne lgi or apni ladli betiyo ke sath vo bhi bachiyo ki trh natkhtpna krne lgi.jis se parivar ki ronak phir lot aayi. Ab dev bhi khush tha kyuki us ki jan ke chahere pr smile lot aayi thi . Rojana ki trh jb dev morning me uta to use gana gun gunane ki avaj aa rhi thi jb usne dekha to kichen me geeta gana gun gunate huye tea bna rhi thi. Dev dhire se jakr geeta ko piche se hug de deta he or geeta us touch ko feel kr ke muskurate huye khti he ki aj bda pyar aa rha he dev khta he pyar to hme daily aata he par ap to notice hi nhi krti ho.asa kh kr dev geeta ke kano(ear)pr bite kr deta he jis se geeta hdbda jati he or khti he oh my dear husband ab to sudhr jaw 2 bachiyo ke baap bn gye ho phir bhi masti suj rhi he shalu meera kbhi bhi aati hi hogi ap bhar jayiye me breakfast ready kr ke lati hu dev khta he jan aj mosam bhi achaa he or meri jan ka mood bhi kyu na aj kabadi kheli jaye yh sunkr geeta shrma kr khti yh bhi koi time he jayiye ap meri gudiya ko utakr aw abhi tk kese nhi uti dev geeta ko piche se jldi se gaalo pr kiss kr ke apni ladli betiyo ko utane chl deta he vhi jb dev shalu meera ke kmre ka gate open krta he to dekhta he uski betiya kitni masum or khubsurat lag rhi he vo jakr unhe utata he vhi shalu to ut jati he pr meera nhi ut rhi thi jis se dev utakr thak jata he par vo tas se mas nhi hoti tab shalu khti he papa yh ase nhi utegi is par yh jag ka pani dal do. Yh sunkr meera turant ut gyi or khti he chanu di ap bhut buri ho mere papa ko galat galat raay deti ho yh kh kr apna muh fula leti he jise dekh kr shalu or dev mushkurane lgte he phir shalu meera ke galo ko pyar se kheechkr aale aale meli pyari gudiya to rut gyi.phir ase hi hasi mjak krte huye shalu or meera daily routine work se ready ho jati he or dev terrace pr jakr apne garden me pani dene lgta he phir geeta ke avaj dene par sbhi breakfast karne aa jate he shalu or meera daily ki trh school ke liye ready ho jate he or geeta bhi lunch ready kr ke sab ke tiffin ready kr deti he phir dev apne resereach work me lag jata he or geeta apni betiyo ko lekr school nikl jaati he .

yha dev ab pura smay resereach me lgaa deta he jis se usne kai sare resereach paper pattern bhi kra liye the vo science ko ase leta tha jese koi bhakt god ki lagan me lga ho.uske kai sare resereach paper germany ke news paper me bhi publish huye the.Dev resereach me asa ulja use time ka pta nhi chla kb uski ladliya ghr pr a gyi.jb meera or shalu msti krne lgti he tab unke shorgul se use pta chlta he.Vhi geeta aakr sbhi ko tea bnakr serve krti he or dinner ki teyari krne lgti he vhi dev enegy ki cycle ko modern physics se releated krta he use vha bhut sari termnology pracrtically psyched lagi usne vo sare psyched ko alg se note kr liya or energy ke mathematical expression ko daily routine life me use kr ke dekhne ke liye usne object bnaye or apni resereach ko nya aayam dene ke liye daily ka work or mathematical expression ke example ms – excel pr chdane ke liye decide kiya isi trh usne general physics or modern physics (atomic & nuclear) ke sare effects and error ki alg sheet bnayi usme usne duniya me fail or success huye practical ki sheet bnayi dev ache se janta tha ki “key of success person is knowledge “ isliye vo sare incident ka full proof study kr ke sheet bna rha tha jis se use resereach krne me bhi help mile.vhi geeta dinner ready kr ke sbhi ko bulati he dinner karne ke baad sbhi apne 2 room me chle jate he shalu meera ki mathematical problem solve krne me help krti he or use thoda pdati he vhi geeta dud grm kar ke apne bachcho ko dekr unko sula deti he phir apne dev ke pas jakr use dud deti he jise dev muskurate huye pi leta he or geeta change krne bathroom chali jati he jha vo shower lekr ek sexy si nighty phnti he jb vo room me aati he to dev muh khole use bina palke japkaye dekhta rhta he. Dev ke ase dekhne par geeta shrma jaati he or dev ke pas akr thpki deti he jis se dev hosh me aata he or dev geeta ko apne agosh me le leta he or khta he jan tum kitni khubsurat ho aj bhi muje vhi geetu njar aati ho jise mene phli baar muskurate huye sweets ki shop par apni bhno ke sath dekha tha yh sunkr geeta khti he acha ji to matlab ap muje shadi se phle dekh chuke the yh sunkr dev khta he nhi jan yh aadha sach he asal me muje bhi pta nhi tha ki tum vhi ldki hogi jise me dekh kr mohit ho gya tha.jb shadi hone par tumhe dekha to jana ki tum meri first dream girl hi ho.jis ko sun kr geeta muskurane lgti he or khti he side do muje sona he jis par dev khta he bs tumhara body change ho gye phle santre ki trh gaati thi or ab pakke huye aam ho gye he jise sunkar geeta ki muskuraht ruk jati he vo plat kr khti he kitne gande ho gye ho ap ab pita ban gye kuch to shrm kro jis pr dev khta he ydi shrm krta to dad thona banta vese meri jaan aj to tumhara taja 2 dud pine ka man kr rha he yh khte huye geeta ko apne aagosh me le leta he or geeta bhi dev ki miti 2 pyari 2 baato me aakr madosh ho jati he or dono passionately kiss krne lag jate he dono ase kiss kr rh the jese koi engine fuel tank se fuel leta he. dev geeta ke kano ko bite dene lga usko suck kiya uski gardn(neck) pr bite dene lga dev geeta ko kiss krte huye uske gol 2 aamo ke sath khelne lga…dono asi madhur bela me ase lipt huye ki kab dono ke jism tande huye ho pta bhi nhi chla or puri raat nikl gyi.

Ase hi pyar bhare din niklne lage or ek din geeta phir se pet se ho gyi ab dev geeta ka bhut jyada khyal rkhne lga or jese rishivar ne kha tha vese hi geeta ne varsha ritu me ek pyare se bachhe ko janm diya jis se shalu or meera bhut khush ho rhi thi meera ko to is baat se khushi thi ki us se bhi koi chota hoga or usko khilane ke liye ek pyara sa guddu mil gya tha vhi shalu ki murad puri ho gyi kyuki vo jb bhi raksha bandan aata tha tab vo kis ko rakhi bandhe sochti rhti thi or dekhti thi ki kese uske dost ke bhai unhe pareshan krta he dil me soch rkhti thi khash mera bhi ek bhai hota jo hme pareshan krta or dost ki trh hme company deta koi pareshan kre to use sabak sikhata asi hi choti 2 bhut si khwaishe thi dono bhno ke dil me .vhi geeta ko to uske budape ka shara mil gya ho or dev ko apni family ka complete hone jesa lgta he. dev is khushi me ek chota sa function rkhta he jisme vo sbhi relative ko bulata he or rishivar ko bhi jha uska naam karan hona hota he.

Rishivar ne jab bache ko dekha to dev ko sambodhit kiya “Naya janm bhagwan ki mahima ki chhaya me rahta hai aur hamesha khushi se ghira rahta hai. Aapko hamari or se is naamkaran utsav ki prem purvak badhaiya”

Bahot shaandaar lajawab update dost

 

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Bahot shaandaar lajawab update dost

Naik bhai thoda narvas hu koi suggestions ho mere liye to share jarur kijiyega...kosis krunga or achaa krne ki

 

[Saddemon]

Dosto mene 550 words ka bhut achaa update ms word me likh liya tha jo technical error ke chalte vha ab mil nhi rha he pr file property to pura bta rhi he.Kya koi help kr sakta he is problem par?

 

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Part-2

Geeta ki bdi ldki->shalu ,jise meera pyar se chanu di kh kr bulati he

Choti ldki -> Meera

dev or geeta bhut khush huye rishivar ki baat sunkr,aage rishivar ne kha apko sbr rkhna hoga.uske incident ke baad geeta bhut khush rhne lgi or apni ladli betiyo ke sath vo bhi bachiyo ki trh natkhtpna krne lgi.jis se parivar ki ronak phir lot aayi. Ab dev bhi khush tha kyuki us ki jan ke chahere pr smile lot aayi thi . Rojana ki trh jb dev morning me uta to use gana gun gunane ki avaj aa rhi thi jb usne dekha to kichen me geeta gana gun gunate huye tea bna rhi thi. Dev dhire se jakr geeta ko piche se hug de deta he or geeta us touch ko feel kr ke muskurate huye khti he ki aj bda pyar aa rha he dev khta he pyar to hme daily aata he par ap to notice hi nhi krti ho.asa kh kr dev geeta ke kano(ear)pr bite kr deta he jis se geeta hdbda jati he or khti he oh my dear husband ab to sudhr jaw 2 bachiyo ke baap bn gye ho phir bhi masti suj rhi he shalu meera kbhi bhi aati hi hogi ap bhar jayiye me breakfast ready kr ke lati hu dev khta he jan aj mosam bhi achaa he or meri jan ka mood bhi kyu na aj kabadi kheli jaye yh sunkr geeta shrma kr khti yh bhi koi time he jayiye ap meri gudiya ko utakr aw abhi tk kese nhi uti dev geeta ko piche se jldi se gaalo pr kiss kr ke apni ladli betiyo ko utane chl deta he vhi jb dev shalu meera ke kmre ka gate open krta he to dekhta he uski betiya kitni masum or khubsurat lag rhi he vo jakr unhe utata he vhi shalu to ut jati he pr meera nhi ut rhi thi jis se dev utakr thak jata he par vo tas se mas nhi hoti tab shalu khti he papa yh ase nhi utegi is par yh jag ka pani dal do. Yh sunkr meera turant ut gyi or khti he chanu di ap bhut buri ho mere papa ko galat galat raay deti ho yh kh kr apna muh fula leti he jise dekh kr shalu or dev mushkurane lgte he phir shalu meera ke galo ko pyar se kheechkr aale aale meli pyari gudiya to rut gyi.phir ase hi hasi mjak krte huye shalu or meera daily routine work se ready ho jati he or dev terrace pr jakr apne garden me pani dene lgta he phir geeta ke avaj dene par sbhi breakfast karne aa jate he shalu or meera daily ki trh school ke liye ready ho jate he or geeta bhi lunch ready kr ke sab ke tiffin ready kr deti he phir dev apne resereach work me lag jata he or geeta apni betiyo ko lekr school nikl jaati he .

yha dev ab pura smay resereach me lgaa deta he jis se usne kai sare resereach paper pattern bhi kra liye the vo science ko ase leta tha jese koi bhakt god ki lagan me lga ho.uske kai sare research paper germany ke news paper me bhi publish huye the.Dev research me asa ulja use time ka pta nhi chla kb uski ladliya ghr pr a gyi.jb meera or shalu msti krne lgti he tab unke shorgul se use pta chlta he.Vhi geeta aakr sbhi ko tea bnakr serve krti he or dinner ki teyari krne lgti he vhi dev enegy ki cycle ko modern physics se releated krta he use vha bhut sari termnology pracrtically psyched lagi usne vo sare psyched ko alg se note kr liya or energy ke mathematical expression ko daily routine life me use kr ke dekhne ke liye usne object bnaye or apni research ko nya aayam dene ke liye daily ka work or mathematical expression ke example ms – excel pr chdane ke liye decide kiya isi trh usne general physics or modern physics (atomic & nuclear) ke sare effects and error ki alg sheet bnayi usme usne duniya me fail or success huye practical ki sheet bnayi dev ache se janta tha ki “key of success person is knowledge “ isliye vo sare incident ka full proof study kr ke sheet bna rha tha jis se use research krne me bhi help mile.vhi geeta dinner ready kr ke sbhi ko bulati he dinner karne ke baad sbhi apne 2 room me chle jate he shalu meera ki mathematical problem solve krne me help krti he or use thoda pdati he vhi geeta dud grm kar ke apne bachcho ko dekr unko sula deti he phir apne dev ke pas jakr use dud deti he jise dev muskurate huye pi leta he or geeta change krne bathroom chali jati he jha vo shower lekr ek sexy si nighty phnti he jb vo room me aati he to dev muh khole use bina palke japkaye dekhta rhta he. Dev ke ase dekhne par geeta shrma jaati he or dev ke pas akr thpki deti he jis se dev hosh me aata he or dev geeta ko apne agosh me le leta he or khta he jan tum kitni khubsurat ho aj bhi muje vhi geetu njar aati ho jise mene phli baar muskurate huye sweets ki shop par apni bhno ke sath dekha tha yh sunkr geeta khti he acha ji to matlab ap muje shadi se phle dekh chuke the yh sunkr dev khta he nhi jan yh aadha sach he asal me muje bhi pta nhi tha ki tum vhi ldki hogi jise me dekh kr mohit ho gya tha.jb shadi hone par tumhe dekha to jana ki tum meri first dream girl hi ho.jis ko sun kr geeta muskurane lgti he or khti he side do muje sona he jis par dev khta he bs tumhara body change ho gye phle santre ki trh gaati thi or ab pakke huye aam ho gye he jise sunkar geeta ki muskuraht ruk jati he vo plat kr khti he kitne gande ho gye ho ap ab pita ban gye kuch to shrm kro jis pr dev khta he ydi shrm krta to dad thona banta vese meri jaan aj to tumhara taja 2 dud pine ka man kr rha he yh khte huye geeta ko apne aagosh me le leta he or geeta bhi dev ki miti 2 pyari 2 baato me aakr madosh ho jati he or dono passionately kiss krne lag jate he dono ase kiss kr rh the jese koi engine fuel tank se fuel leta he. dev geeta ke kano ko bite dene lga usko suck kiya uski gardn(neck) pr bite dene lga dev geeta ko kiss krte huye uske gol 2 aamo ke sath khelne lga…dono asi madhur bela me ase lipt huye ki kab dono ke jism tande huye ho pta bhi nhi chla or puri raat nikl gyi.

Ase hi pyar bhare din niklne lage or ek din geeta phir se pet se ho gyi ab dev geeta ka bhut jyada khyal rkhne lga or jese rishivar ne kha tha vese hi geeta ne varsha ritu me ek pyare se bachhe ko janm diya jis se shalu or meera bhut khush ho rhi thi meera ko to is baat se khushi thi ki us se bhi koi chota hoga or usko khilane ke liye ek pyara sa guddu mil gya tha vhi shalu ki murad puri ho gyi kyuki vo jb bhi raksha bandan aata tha tab vo kis ko rakhi bandhe sochti rhti thi or dekhti thi ki kese uske dost ke bhai unhe pareshan krta he dil me soch rkhti thi khash mera bhi ek bhai hota jo hme pareshan krta or dost ki trh hme company deta koi pareshan kre to use sabak sikhata asi hi choti 2 bhut si khwaishe thi dono bhno ke dil me .vhi geeta ko to uske budape ka shara mil gya ho or dev ko apni family ka complete hone jesa lgta he. dev is khushi me ek chota sa function rkhta he jisme vo sbhi relative ko bulata he or rishivar ko bhi jha uska naam karan hona hota he.

Rishivar ne jab bache ko dekha to dev ko sambodhit kiya “Naya janm bhagwan ki mahima ki chhaya me rahta hai aur hamesha khushi se ghira rahta hai. Aapko hamari or se is naamkaran utsav ki prem purvak badhaiya”

nice update

 

[Kingsingh]

Bhai story ki shuruaat to sahi thi bas aap regular basis par update dete rehna aur story complete jaroor karna.
.NICE START.