Castle2126
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Hii Tania,
Look i am not criticising you that is the first thing I want to say, that you have done a marvelous job in writing this story but I have few suggestions if you want to address you can or will read just like I did till now,
When they are having sex it always the same sentence you use that ahh aur tez and some more but you always use different different sentences to make that feeling a lot more exciting
Look i am not criticising you that is the first thing I want to say, that you have done a marvelous job in writing this story but I have few suggestions if you want to address you can or will read just like I did till now,
When they are having sex it always the same sentence you use that ahh aur tez and some more but you always use different different sentences to make that feeling a lot more exciting