Heartless H
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Story to Kamal ki hai no doubt.... Detail me ek ek scene likha hai... Emotions se bharpur..... Story me romanch intejaar pyar bhi hai sirf sex nahi hai ...... Lekin kuch bate aur bhi acchi ho sakti thi.... Story gaon me rehne wale aur kheto me kaam karne Wale parivar ki hai lekin wordings sheher walo ke lagte hai..... Kahani aur bhi romanchak hoti agar writer ek hi update me sab kuch na de deta.... Pehele 50-55 pages Tak romance shuru tha sex nahi tha to uske baad ek hi update me 4 baar sex ho gaya kutta bhi add ho gaya.... Ye sab kuch fast fast huwa sa lagta hai......
Khair... Bahot achhi likhawat hai.... Kahani ke liye bahot bahot shukriya.
Khair... Bahot achhi likhawat hai.... Kahani ke liye bahot bahot shukriya.
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