Adultery Mummy ko bus me ek anjaan ladke ne choda

[Yashu7979]

Zabardast update

 

[dirty_thoughts]

Feedback?

Bahut hi badiya likha hai bhai specially Bus ka pura safar shandar tha

Specially first part

Aisi kahaniya kam hi milti hai
Wonderful

 

[xxxsimplewriterxxx_]

Bahut hi badiya likha hai bhai specially Bus ka pura safar shandar tha

Specially first part

Aisi kahaniya kam hi milti hai
Wonderful

 

[Jannat1972]

Beautifully written story......extra marital affair with love .....

 

[xxxsimplewriterxxx_]

Beautifully written story......extra marital affair with love .....

Thanks

 

[Jannat1972]

Bhai ye story aage b hai ya end ho gaya iska..

 

[Rinkp219]

Superb update

 

[xxxsimplewriterxxx_]

Bhai ye story aage b hai ya end ho gaya iska..

Aur isme kya add kiya jaa sakta hai?

 

[Iam_xxx]

Bahot hi achchi story likhi hai aapne aur bahot hi achche dhng se likha hai.

Kuchh feedback meri taraf se. 2nd plot may chudai ko thoda aur detail may likha jaa sakta tha, jaise pahle plot may tha.
Ek naya plot aur add kiya jaa sakta hai jismy beta train may maa ko dekhta hai chhup kar jaise usne bus may dekha tha.
Ek aur naya character add kiya jaa sakta hai. first ploat may wo ladka maa ka brain wash karne ki kosis karta tha ki 10-12 bf bana lo. issi ke upar ke naya character add kiya jaa sata hai aur iske bare may 1st wale ladke ko nahi pata chalna chahiye.

 

[Blackpearl]

Wonderful story