Incest Parivar

[kamdev99008]

Good bye all friends kahani pasnd nhi aa rhi hai to mai ise band kar deta hu ab update nhi dunga

kis bewkoof se poonchhkar likhni shuru ki thi..............?????????????

ye attitude dikhane ki jarurat nahi hai..........................
jaise apni marji se kahani shuru ki...............aise hi apni marji se likhte raho

koi like nahin kar raha
comment ya review nahi aa rahe
kisi ko pasand nahin aa rahi
kisi reader ne kuchh kah diya
reader nahin hain
..............................ye sab excuses dekar hoshiyari chodne ki jarurat nahin........................
ye forums aise bahut sare writers ki adhuri kahaniyon se bhari padi hain
likhna ho to likho...........ya band kar do................. lekin attitude mat dikhao

 

[Jassybabra]

Nice update

 

[Nasn]

भाई आप स्टोरी क्लोज्ड क्यों कर रहे हो....
रीडर तो कमेंट करते ही है,कुछ अच्छे कुछ गलत
अगर आपकी writing में दम है तो
write करके ही proved करो....
अगर आपने आरव को हीरो बनाया है
तो कुछ सोचकर ही बनाया होगा,,
आपकी माइंड में भी कुछ theam होगी...
अगर शुरू में हीरो चूतिया बनाया है तो
धीरे धीरे उसे स्ट्रांग बना दो(कृष में हृतिक की तरह)

लेकिन स्टोरी बन्द मत करो...
लिखते रहो रीडर के माइंड को पड़ो
कुछ theam बदल दो...

 

[Rishukumar990]

Sunil " Mujhe aap sab logo se kuchh bate karni hai ARAV khas tour par isme tumhari ray bhut jaruri hai."
ARAV " papa agar aap bhi PRIYA di wali baat ko bolna chahte hai to mai aap ko bata du ki hamari us baare me didi log se baat ho chuki hai isliye aap uski chinta bilakul mat kijiye "
Mohini" pahle papa ki baat to sun lo vo kahana kya chahte hai phir apni ray dena. "
Sunil" dekho beta HM ki beti tumhe pasand hai kya. "
ARAV" papa jaisa aap soch rahe ho abhi aisi koi baat nhi hai. Vah keval meri ek achhi dost hai. "
Sunil" lekin beta MOHINI or sath me pure ghar walo ko vah ladki bhut pasand ayi hai or isliye ham sab chahte hai ki tumhari shadi usase tay kar di jaye. "
Arav" lekin papa pahali baat to yah hai ki abhi hamari shadi ki age to hui nahi hai or dusri baat yah hai ki mai abhi confirm nhi nhi hu ki mai usase pyar karta hu ki nhi ya keval ek attraction matr hai. "
Mohini" dekh bhai mujhe is baat ka pakka yakin hai ki vah ladki tujhse bahut payar karti hai or dusri baat yah hai ki usase achhi ladki milni muskil hai. "
Arav" lekin ek baat meri samjh me nahi aa rahi hai ki is samy in baato ka kya matalb hai abhi to is wakt hame aaj sham ki party ke liye chalna chahiye. "
Arav ki baate sunkar Sunil Mohini ki traf dekhate hai to ispar Mohini unhe ishare me bolti hai ki mai isase baat karungi."
Iske baad sabhi log hotel ke liye nikal liye gadi se janha par Party rakhi gayi thi. Teen gadiyo se vo log nikale ek me Arav ke papa bade papa or dono mammy thi dusri gadi me Nilam. Or Priya thi tisari gadi me Arav pooja or Mohini thi raste me Mohini Arav se bolti hai ki
Mohini " dekh chhotu mai papa se bol kar aaj ki party me jo bolne wale the maine vah karne se mana kar di hu lekin ek baat ka dhayan jarur dena sachha payar jivan me ek baar hi milata hai or maine uski ankho me tere liye sirf payar hi dekha hai or mai pure yakin ke sath bol sakti hu. "
Arav" didi sach kahu to mujhe bhi Riya bahut pasand hai or mai yah bhi janta hu ki vah bhut pyar krti hai mujhse or sayd aaj ke ghatna ke baad mai bhi use pasnad karne laga hu lekin aap meri problem ko kyu nhi samjh rhi hai. "
Pooja" pagal jab tu use pasand karne laga hai to phir kya problem hai tujhe "
Arav" didi mai bhi apni life usi ke sath bitana chahta hu lekin itni jaldi shadi nhi karana chahta hu shadi se pahle mai apni college life uske sath khul kar jina chahta hu"
Mohini " oh to aisa bolo naa ki abhi tu kisi ek sath relationship me nahi rahna chahta hai."
Arav " nahi didi aisi baat nhi hai mai usi ke sath hi relationship me rahunga lekin ek gf ke roop me."
Idhar Ragini apni maa Sunita or Riya ke sath party ke liye nikal chuke thi Ragini baar baar Riya ko chhed rahi thi lekin Riya uski baato par sirf muskura kar rah jati thi aose5 hi chhed chhad ke bich vo log bhi party ki jagah par pahuch jate hai or vanha par Arav ki puri faimly pahuch gayi thi sabhi log ek dusare se apas me mile . Iske baad Ragini Mohini or Pooja teeno apas me saheliya thi to vo ek alag jagah pr jakr apas me baate karne lagi or dusri traf Riya Arav Nilam or Priya apas me ek dusare ke sath baate kar rhi thi. To Chaliye dekhate hai ki Mohini Pooja or Ragini apas me kya baate kar rhi hai
Pooja " Ragini dekh meri baat ka bura mat manana mere dimag me kuchh confessen hai bas usi ko clear karana chahti hu."
Ragini " are isme mai kyu bura meaning ."
Pooja "vo isliye kunki mai tumhari bahan ke bare me baat krne jaa rhi hu."
Ragini "thik hai bol tu mai bura nhi meaning”
Pooja "di meri samjh me ek bat nhi aa rhi hai ki aap Riya or Arab ko lekar itna jyada pareshan kyu hai .Aap yah kyu chahti hai ki Arav ki shadi Riya se hi ho."
Mohini "vo isliye kunki mai yah baat achhi trah se janti hu ki Arab ko agar koi sudhar sakta hai to vah sirf Riya hi hai or dusri bat vo dono ek dusare ko pasand krne lage hai agar tujhe meri baato par yakeen naa ho to udhr dekh lo jidhar vo sab baithe hue hai Arav kaise Riya ko dekhe jaa rha hai ."
Ragini "are yaar use to aaj pata chala hai ki vah itne amir ghar ka ladka hai .Aaj se pahle to vah use ek mideam family ka ladka janane ke baad bhi use utna hi pyar karti thi."
Pooja "tum itane vishvash ke sath kaise bol sakti ho ki Riya use pasand krti thi ."

 

[Nasn]

बहुत ही खूब update था....
ऐसे ही अपडेट देते रहो...

 

[Malikboy07]

next

 

[Rocky2602]

Nice n fantastic update

 

[Black water]

Nice update

 

[MS DHONI]

Haan yaar mein kamdev99008 Bhai ke baat se agree karta hoon..Agar story likhne ka mood nahin hai to saaf saaf boldo yaar ki mera ab story likhne ki interest nahin hai but aisa nahin karte hue ap jaise writers hum readers ko khamkha badnam kar rahe ho.. Comments nahin,likes nahin,reviews nnahi..yaar kitne comments chahiye bolo hum ek update ke baad 5 pages yunhi comments me bhar denge lekin sirf likhenge "Nyc update" aur kuch nahin..Thoda socho tumhe story start karna kitne din hua..12/13 din..aur 25k views ayi hai..Thoda shabar to karo jaise jaise kahani aage badhegi views,comments, reviews badhenge ,lekin nahin apko to 2din me Saand story jaise bhar bhar ke comments aur pyaar 100 baar jaise full on reviews chahiye..Are Bhai Isliye mehnat karni padti hai yaar..Aur agar ap phir bhi story band karne ki soch rahe ho to hum kaun hain apko rokne wale..Hame aadat lag chuki hai aise incomplete stories ke..Sirf me mods ko request karta hoon ki jaise unhone complete stories ke list banayi hai waise incomplete stories ke bhi list bana dijiye...Good bye

 

[Rishukumar990]

Ragini

Haan yaar mein kamdev99008 Bhai ke baat se agree karta hoon..Agar story likhne ka mood nahin hai to saaf saaf boldo yaar ki mera ab story likhne ki interest nahin hai but aisa nahin karte hue ap jaise writers hum readers ko khamkha badnam kar rahe ho.. Comments nahin,likes nahin,reviews nnahi..yaar kitne comments chahiye bolo hum ek update ke baad 5 pages yunhi comments me bhar denge lekin sirf likhenge "Nyc update" aur kuch nahin..Thoda socho tumhe story start karna kitne din hua..12/13 din..aur 25k views ayi hai..Thoda shabar to karo jaise jaise kahani aage badhegi views,comments, reviews badhenge ,lekin nahin apko to 2din me Saand story jaise bhar bhar ke comments aur pyaar 100 baar jaise full on reviews chahiye..Are Bhai Isliye mehnat karni padti hai yaar..Aur agar ap phir bhi story band karne ki soch rahe ho to hum kaun hain apko rokne wale..Hame aadat lag chuki hai aise incomplete stories ke..Sirf me mods ko request karta hoon ki jaise unhone complete stories ke list banayi hai waise incomplete stories ke bhi list bana dijiye...Good bye

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