Non-Erotic PASCHATAP (restarting)
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Thanks a lot bro
Aap mere har story se jud rahe hai iske liye thanks
Bholu jab raja bana to mai kabhi bhi khatam kar hi doonga
Lekin ye meri dream story hai bro
Kyunki mere stories ke list ki second story thi badla ke baad
Lekin mai ise poora na kar paaya aur agent likh daali
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"ah ahh ahh......dard ho raha hai chote zameendar ......bhagwan ke liye baksh dijiye"
"Chup saali......abhi to ek round aur chalega"
TRING TRING
"Hello?? harendra Singh speaking???.......hmmm"
Phone kar jaata hai
"Ye le ...aish kar"paiso ka bundle us ladki ke upar fenk kar harendra Singh kamre se bahar a gaya
"Mai baap....kya ab mai apni beti ko le ja sakta hoon??"kaampte haathon ko jod kar ek vriddh bola.jo thik se khada bhi nahi ho pa raha tha
"Abey ruk.....do din aur pyaas bujhane de fir le jaana"bol harendra Singh ne paiso se bhara bundle us vriddh ke haath me rakh diya aur chala gaya
Vriddh ne rote hue kamre me jhank kar apni beti ko bin kapdo me rote hue dekha to usko khud se sharm aane lagi
Uski nazar diwar me tangi mahabharat ke us drishya par ruk gayi jab shri krishna arjun ko geeta ka upadesh de rahe the
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sirf naam ka enterprise hai
Kuch hi dino me to ye sab khatam hi hone wala hai
Preeti office ke ander aate hi hairani se charo aur dekhne lagi
"Kaka??"Preeti ne awaz lagai aur ek aadmi daudkar aaya
"Ye sab kya hai?? office itna saaf suthra???kisne kiya hai ye sab??"Preeti ne poochha
"Arey Preeti didi ye to kal jo ladka aapne kaam par rakha tha wo subah se aakar sab kuch kar raha hai,saare computers ko thik kiya,fir mujhe sab bills ka hisab manga aur files ko sab padhkar alag alag kiya,aapne sahi aadmi chuna hai didi"office ka peon bohut khush tha
"Lekin kal to maine use aadmi ko liya hi nahi kaam par"Preeti paani peete hue boli
"Fir wo kyun ye sab kar raha hai didi"peon apna sar khujate hue bola
"Dekhte hai ,pehle use bulao"Preeti apne seat par baithi
Kuch der baad wo aadmi aaya
"Krish naam tha na aapka??"Preeti ne poochha
"Ji krishna singh.lekin pet name hai krish"krish bola
"Mujhe aapke pet name se koi lena dena nahi hai mr krishna,maine bataya tha na ki mai aapko job me nahi rakh sakti??"Preeti gusse se boli
"Madam.maine usa se..."krish ne bolna chaha
"I give a damn to where you studied,mere paas salary dene tak ka paisa nahi hai mr krish.ek mahine ke ander company band ho jayegi"Preeti boli
"Pata hai madam isliye to keh raha hoon ki mujhe company join karne dijiye.ek mahine me agar aapko laga ki mai bekar hoon.to mai chala jaunga.without salary kaam karunga yahan"krish bola
"Tum kyun apna career barbad kar rahe ho krish,bohut saari companies hai india me tumhe koi bhi mil jayegi,waise bhi tumhare resume me kaafi sources hai bade bade CEO aur MD's ke"Preeti boli
"Mujhe yahi job karne hai madam.aur waise bhi maine job start kar diya hai.sand extraction ke contract ke liye tender bhej diya hai"krish bola
"Wtf?? Krish??paagal ho??kya kaand kar diya tumne damn it"bol Preeti daudi aur peon se baat karne lagi
Peon ne sar hilaya apna,Preeti gusse se krish ko dekhne lagi
"Sand extraction ka contract sirf zamindar parivar ko hi milta hai.uske aage kisi ne tender bharne ki himmat nahi ki aur tum??"preeti boli
"Ye zamindar ke baare me bohut sun raha hoon koun hai wo??"krish ne poochha
"Wahi jisne poore gaon me......khair chodo mai dekhti hoon ki ye tender ko kaise roka jaaye"bol Preeti apne kamre se bahar nikal gayi
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Ankan apne purane din yaad kar raha tha
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"Aaj se ye tumhare mummy papa hai beta"
Chote ankan ne dekha aur muskurati aurat aur ek aadmi khade the anathalay ke saamne
"Hi beta??hamare saath chaloge??"us aadmi ne bola
Aur wo aurat ankan se lipat kar rone lagi thi
Kuch dino me ankan mr aur mrs ganguly ke ghar me a gaya aur ghul mil gaya
Lekin use pata tha ki wo unka apna beta nahi hai,lekin paalne me mr aur mrs ganguly ne koi kasar nahi chodi thi
Ankan ke dimag me baith gaya ki use perfect beta bankar dikhana hai,bas usi din se usne wo sab kiya jo use perfect banati hai
Sivay is accident ke
Mummy papa ke nazron ke saath apne bhaiya bhabhi ke nazron me bhi gir gaya ankan
Tabhi uska phone baj utha
"Haan krish bhaiya.....abhi??"bol krish jald ready ho gaya
Vivek ke kamre me jab ankan pohuncha tab tak baaki ke chaar wahan a chuke the
"Bro itna late??"raj ne ghadi dekh kar kaha
"Bakwas mat kar, krish bhaiya poori baat batao"ankan bola
"zamindar ke baare me kisi ko kuch pata hai??"krish ne poochha
To sab ek doosre ke.muh dekhne lage
"Chup saali......abhi to ek round aur chalega"
TRING TRING
"Hello?? harendra Singh speaking???.......hmmm"
Phone kar jaata hai
"Ye le ...aish kar"paiso ka bundle us ladki ke upar fenk kar harendra Singh kamre se bahar a gaya
"Mai baap....kya ab mai apni beti ko le ja sakta hoon??"kaampte haathon ko jod kar ek vriddh bola.jo thik se khada bhi nahi ho pa raha tha
"Abey ruk.....do din aur pyaas bujhane de fir le jaana"bol harendra Singh ne paiso se bhara bundle us vriddh ke haath me rakh diya aur chala gaya
Vriddh ne rote hue kamre me jhank kar apni beti ko bin kapdo me rote hue dekha to usko khud se sharm aane lagi
Uski nazar diwar me tangi mahabharat ke us drishya par ruk gayi jab shri krishna arjun ko geeta ka upadesh de rahe the
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sirf naam ka enterprise hai
Kuch hi dino me to ye sab khatam hi hone wala hai
Preeti office ke ander aate hi hairani se charo aur dekhne lagi
"Kaka??"Preeti ne awaz lagai aur ek aadmi daudkar aaya
"Ye sab kya hai?? office itna saaf suthra???kisne kiya hai ye sab??"Preeti ne poochha
"Arey Preeti didi ye to kal jo ladka aapne kaam par rakha tha wo subah se aakar sab kuch kar raha hai,saare computers ko thik kiya,fir mujhe sab bills ka hisab manga aur files ko sab padhkar alag alag kiya,aapne sahi aadmi chuna hai didi"office ka peon bohut khush tha
"Lekin kal to maine use aadmi ko liya hi nahi kaam par"Preeti paani peete hue boli
"Fir wo kyun ye sab kar raha hai didi"peon apna sar khujate hue bola
"Dekhte hai ,pehle use bulao"Preeti apne seat par baithi
Kuch der baad wo aadmi aaya
"Krish naam tha na aapka??"Preeti ne poochha
"Ji krishna singh.lekin pet name hai krish"krish bola
"Mujhe aapke pet name se koi lena dena nahi hai mr krishna,maine bataya tha na ki mai aapko job me nahi rakh sakti??"Preeti gusse se boli
"Madam.maine usa se..."krish ne bolna chaha
"I give a damn to where you studied,mere paas salary dene tak ka paisa nahi hai mr krish.ek mahine ke ander company band ho jayegi"Preeti boli
"Pata hai madam isliye to keh raha hoon ki mujhe company join karne dijiye.ek mahine me agar aapko laga ki mai bekar hoon.to mai chala jaunga.without salary kaam karunga yahan"krish bola
"Tum kyun apna career barbad kar rahe ho krish,bohut saari companies hai india me tumhe koi bhi mil jayegi,waise bhi tumhare resume me kaafi sources hai bade bade CEO aur MD's ke"Preeti boli
"Mujhe yahi job karne hai madam.aur waise bhi maine job start kar diya hai.sand extraction ke contract ke liye tender bhej diya hai"krish bola
"Wtf?? Krish??paagal ho??kya kaand kar diya tumne damn it"bol Preeti daudi aur peon se baat karne lagi
Peon ne sar hilaya apna,Preeti gusse se krish ko dekhne lagi
"Sand extraction ka contract sirf zamindar parivar ko hi milta hai.uske aage kisi ne tender bharne ki himmat nahi ki aur tum??"preeti boli
"Ye zamindar ke baare me bohut sun raha hoon koun hai wo??"krish ne poochha
"Wahi jisne poore gaon me......khair chodo mai dekhti hoon ki ye tender ko kaise roka jaaye"bol Preeti apne kamre se bahar nikal gayi
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Ankan apne purane din yaad kar raha tha
---------
"Aaj se ye tumhare mummy papa hai beta"
Chote ankan ne dekha aur muskurati aurat aur ek aadmi khade the anathalay ke saamne
"Hi beta??hamare saath chaloge??"us aadmi ne bola
Aur wo aurat ankan se lipat kar rone lagi thi
Kuch dino me ankan mr aur mrs ganguly ke ghar me a gaya aur ghul mil gaya
Lekin use pata tha ki wo unka apna beta nahi hai,lekin paalne me mr aur mrs ganguly ne koi kasar nahi chodi thi
Ankan ke dimag me baith gaya ki use perfect beta bankar dikhana hai,bas usi din se usne wo sab kiya jo use perfect banati hai
Sivay is accident ke
Mummy papa ke nazron ke saath apne bhaiya bhabhi ke nazron me bhi gir gaya ankan
Tabhi uska phone baj utha
"Haan krish bhaiya.....abhi??"bol krish jald ready ho gaya
Vivek ke kamre me jab ankan pohuncha tab tak baaki ke chaar wahan a chuke the
"Bro itna late??"raj ne ghadi dekh kar kaha
"Bakwas mat kar, krish bhaiya poori baat batao"ankan bola
"zamindar ke baare me kisi ko kuch pata hai??"krish ne poochha
To sab ek doosre ke.muh dekhne lage
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Sona
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Fantastic update sir
Thakur kitna bura adami hai
May be ye 5 hi thakur ko sabak sikhayege
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Thakur ka raj inke hathon hi khatam hoga
Kab aur kaise wo story me.pata chalega
Saath rahiye
kamdev99008
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amrish puri ko shraddhanjali dene ke liye............china gate movie bana rahe ho kya Swaraj bhai...............
kyon hindi filmo ke racist directors ki tarah.................thakuron ke peechhe pad gaye
ye thakuron ki badaulat hi india hai...............
jahan thakuron ki riyasat aur raaj nahin tha...........wo sab india mein se chala gaya...........bengal, panjab, sindh, balochistan
feel isliye hota hai...........ki humein bhi thakur sahab ke nam se hi pukara jata hai.........apne ilake mein.......................ab thakur hone ka matlab galat hona hi to nahi ho sakta.........
hindu, muslim ki tarah thakur pandit ya other cast mention karnewale shabdon ka istemal karne ki bajay agar characters ke nam tak hi seemit rakha jaye kahaniyon ko ............to kya jyada behtar nahi.........
aisa hi aka3829 ne apni story mein.......character ke nam ki jagah thakur hi use kiya...lekin unhone to story hi adhuri chhod di ...isliye meine kuchh kaha nahi
lekin apne abhi kahani shuru ki hai..............to meri is request par gaur karein
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Sabse pehle to sorry agar aap ko hurt feel hua isse skin kyunki mai is story ke characters ko saja raha tha tab kisi ne protest nahi kiya tha isliye ise continue kar raha tha
Lekin kyunki aapko bura laga mai ise aage se use nahi karunga aur zamindar use karunga
Hope mera step aapko sahi lage
Ek baar fir se maafi mangna chahunga agar story ke kisi part me koi baat buri lage to
Saath rahiye
kamdev99008
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maafi ki koi bat nahi swaraj bhai............sirf yahi nivedan tha mera apse aur sabhi writers se ............ki plz religion or cast mention karne ki bajay characters ke nam mention kiya karein..... jisse us religious ya cast group ke readers ko bura na feel ho.........
zamindar shabd use kar sakte hain.... but zamindari system to 1956 mein khatm ho gaya....... ab to ye kam mla, mp samhalte hain............public representatives for a certain area................................aur ek bat apko shayad pata na ho...........punjab, haryana mein zamindar kisaan (farmer) ko kaha jata hai
....................................................ab ate hain kahani par
ye kahani badla ki tarah aur usi background se shuru hui.............lekin yahan aakar typical bollywood/south indian movies ki tarah........ hoti ja rahi hai............. ek artificial gaon .... jismein bade-bade college aur business chalte hain...aur ek zamindar bhi hai...jisse sab darte hain................. aisa developed koi gaon jo itna backward bhi ho ajeeb lagta hai
Black water
Vasudhaiv Kutumbakam
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Review ke liye thanks bro
Story sirf kuch hi pages complete jar paayi hai
He story gaon aur thakur se zyada in paach ki hai jo apne aap se lad rahe hai
Meri har story me mai ek message chod jata hoon
Yahan bhi Aisa hi karunga
Story south indian jaisi nahi hogi
Na masala movie jaisi hogi mera vishwas kijiye
Saath rahiye