Fantasy Prince the devil or hero
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Bhai "PLANET" hota hai Plante nahi.
Tune poori story me galat likha hai.
Bahut spelling mistake hai.
Flow bigad jata hai to maza nahi aata.
Character ke naam ke aage - ye wala symbol laga padhne me maza aayega.
Flow bhi sahi banega.
Post karne se phele khud apne update ko 2 baar padho phir post karo.
Khud ko mistakes bhi pata chal jayegi to sudhar sakte ho in sab ko.
Aur haan gender sahi rakh.
Abhi tak to 1/3 rd hi padha hai lekin ab se likhte time dhyan rakhna.
Tune poori story me galat likha hai.
Bahut spelling mistake hai.
Flow bigad jata hai to maza nahi aata.
Character ke naam ke aage - ye wala symbol laga padhne me maza aayega.
Flow bhi sahi banega.
Post karne se phele khud apne update ko 2 baar padho phir post karo.
Khud ko mistakes bhi pata chal jayegi to sudhar sakte ho in sab ko.
Aur haan gender sahi rakh.
Abhi tak to 1/3 rd hi padha hai lekin ab se likhte time dhyan rakhna.
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Akil
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I don't think ke yeh ladaai ka koi bhi natijan kisiki haar/jeet se nikalega....
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Nice update
Waise koi bhi jite apne ko kya
Tum jise jitao par next update mast hona chahiye with tuff fight
Waise koi bhi jite apne ko kya
Tum jise jitao par next update mast hona chahiye with tuff fight
bahi kahni hero ko chudane ki he aur hero ko powers bhi milna he to ofcourse app koi twist na dalo to sowrd ki raj kumari he hero ko chudane jaye gi and apne khaha ki hero kailash jaye ga aur parvati maa se milegaya matlab kya hero ki traning ke liye beja jjaa raha he ya hero ko rankaal namk villan se takat ke liye ye to prince aman koi he pata
and nice update
waiting for next..................................
and nice update
waiting for next..................................