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kabir singh
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hello dear,
aapki story padhne ke baad bahot hi acchi lagi....shuruaat ke kuch updates to bahot hi acchi details ke saath diye gaye hai...jaise ki chat(roof) par laal mirch sukhana aur palatna, imratbaan mein achaar hilana...ghar mein 2-2 jine(stairs) ka hona jo ki 1000 meter wale makaano mein usually ye design follow hota tha....bade bhai ka support - acchai bhi batana aur ulte seedhe kaam bhi karwana....malti se maze bhi dilwaye aur aage se unnecessary sex ke piche na bhagna (bilkul bade bhai wala kaam hai). bade bhai ke paas LML scooter. aur ladkiyon ko sunny dilwana.
family ke andar ke dynamics bhi kaafi ache hai... sab ke beech mein ek jhijak - sharam hai. daada - daadi ka bahut hi balanced sa role hai... matlab 1998 ke time ke hisaab se pote (grandson) ko chut dena aur ladkiyon par pabandi aur sakhti dikhana. ladkiyon ko akele kahin bahar na bhejna..koi na koi male ke saath hi bahar janaa.
1998 ke daur mein mach 1 cycle dilana stadium mein jaane ke liye...us time jo jita wohi sikandar ke baad in cycle ka craze badha tha aur late 90's aur early 2000's mein.
aur stadium mein jyaada tar desi character ka hona...jeera soda ke drinks us time bahot hi aam si cheez thi ..aaj bhi hai but it's not common anymore.
baap bete ke beech mein ek formal sa relation aur bete mein baap ke dande ka darr. bado ka choti choti bato ka dhyaan karna aur unko appriciate karna like subha jaldi uthna. time se pehle ready rehna.
aapne story ke pace bhi acchi rakhi hai ....characters ka accha built up kiya hai. aur ek cheez ye bhi acchi lagiti hai ke aap update ka title bhi daalte ho.
but i am also going to criticize a little bit i hope you don't mind..... jaise ke abhi ke kuch last ke updates mein sab kuch thoda jaldi jaldi ho raha hai- tai ji (lalita ji) se ekdum itni jaldi open hona, thoda sa pyaar se dheere dheere slow seduction dikhate i mean she i like a second mother to him, with sisters its ok they are of new generation but usse pehle ki generation to bahot reserve and shy thi uss time to internet bhi na ke barabar tha so sucking wagarah kon janta tha, atleast it wasn't common in those days.... taiji raat ko bina kapdo ke bathroom se room tak jana.....it's doesn't match her character... i mean kitni bhi sex ko leke frustration ho but koi bhi family lady itni careless nahi hoti...considering those time and culture...jis family mein itna sab kuch strict order mein ho...not possible not in long shot...
i really appreciate ke aap apna important time nikal ke apne commitment ke basis par regular updates de rahe hai.......but i humbly request you to don't rush the story.......
no matter what ...do maintain the quality over commitment........thoda bahut late updates aayenge chalega but jaldi ke chakkar mein story ka maza mat compromise karo.
kuch stories hoti hai jinke character dil ko chu jate hai.....and wo baat aapki story mein hai....
aur writer ji one more thing jis update mein aapne taiji ke saath arjun ka massage cum sex dikhaya hai usme kuch jagah apne taiji ke jagah galti se chachi likh diya hai...agar ho sake to usmein correction kar lena...taaki future mein jo new readers padhe confuse na ho.
i hope aapko mere suggestions bure na lage ho......aur aap unko future updates mein consider kare...that's all.
gud luck for your hard work.... i can only imagine what it takes to write a good story that appeals to the mass...
my wish and desire is to see this story become a masterpiece on this site...and i know you can achieve that...so keep it up...
aapki story padhne ke baad bahot hi acchi lagi....shuruaat ke kuch updates to bahot hi acchi details ke saath diye gaye hai...jaise ki chat(roof) par laal mirch sukhana aur palatna, imratbaan mein achaar hilana...ghar mein 2-2 jine(stairs) ka hona jo ki 1000 meter wale makaano mein usually ye design follow hota tha....bade bhai ka support - acchai bhi batana aur ulte seedhe kaam bhi karwana....malti se maze bhi dilwaye aur aage se unnecessary sex ke piche na bhagna (bilkul bade bhai wala kaam hai). bade bhai ke paas LML scooter. aur ladkiyon ko sunny dilwana.
family ke andar ke dynamics bhi kaafi ache hai... sab ke beech mein ek jhijak - sharam hai. daada - daadi ka bahut hi balanced sa role hai... matlab 1998 ke time ke hisaab se pote (grandson) ko chut dena aur ladkiyon par pabandi aur sakhti dikhana. ladkiyon ko akele kahin bahar na bhejna..koi na koi male ke saath hi bahar janaa.
1998 ke daur mein mach 1 cycle dilana stadium mein jaane ke liye...us time jo jita wohi sikandar ke baad in cycle ka craze badha tha aur late 90's aur early 2000's mein.
aur stadium mein jyaada tar desi character ka hona...jeera soda ke drinks us time bahot hi aam si cheez thi ..aaj bhi hai but it's not common anymore.
baap bete ke beech mein ek formal sa relation aur bete mein baap ke dande ka darr. bado ka choti choti bato ka dhyaan karna aur unko appriciate karna like subha jaldi uthna. time se pehle ready rehna.
aapne story ke pace bhi acchi rakhi hai ....characters ka accha built up kiya hai. aur ek cheez ye bhi acchi lagiti hai ke aap update ka title bhi daalte ho.
but i am also going to criticize a little bit i hope you don't mind..... jaise ke abhi ke kuch last ke updates mein sab kuch thoda jaldi jaldi ho raha hai- tai ji (lalita ji) se ekdum itni jaldi open hona, thoda sa pyaar se dheere dheere slow seduction dikhate i mean she i like a second mother to him, with sisters its ok they are of new generation but usse pehle ki generation to bahot reserve and shy thi uss time to internet bhi na ke barabar tha so sucking wagarah kon janta tha, atleast it wasn't common in those days.... taiji raat ko bina kapdo ke bathroom se room tak jana.....it's doesn't match her character... i mean kitni bhi sex ko leke frustration ho but koi bhi family lady itni careless nahi hoti...considering those time and culture...jis family mein itna sab kuch strict order mein ho...not possible not in long shot...
i really appreciate ke aap apna important time nikal ke apne commitment ke basis par regular updates de rahe hai.......but i humbly request you to don't rush the story.......
no matter what ...do maintain the quality over commitment........thoda bahut late updates aayenge chalega but jaldi ke chakkar mein story ka maza mat compromise karo.
kuch stories hoti hai jinke character dil ko chu jate hai.....and wo baat aapki story mein hai....
aur writer ji one more thing jis update mein aapne taiji ke saath arjun ka massage cum sex dikhaya hai usme kuch jagah apne taiji ke jagah galti se chachi likh diya hai...agar ho sake to usmein correction kar lena...taaki future mein jo new readers padhe confuse na ho.
i hope aapko mere suggestions bure na lage ho......aur aap unko future updates mein consider kare...that's all.
gud luck for your hard work.... i can only imagine what it takes to write a good story that appeals to the mass...
my wish and desire is to see this story become a masterpiece on this site...and i know you can achieve that...so keep it up...
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Lajwaab hu Mai aapke feedback se. Bahut he dhyaan se aapne sab choti badi bat par gor farmaya hai. Mujhe khud ko bhi lag Raha hai ki 2-3 updates me utawalapan Kar dia Maine. Kuch updates Bina recheck kiye upload Kar diye. Wahi par ye chaachi Wala error ho gaya. Kuch characters ke sath thodi raftaar pakad li kyonki aisa nahi karne se ye kahani sirf 1998 me he 2 mahine le legi. Aadhe se jyada Shirshak ek page par likhe toh update 200 ke kareeb ban jaate hai. Ek anchahe darr ki wajah se kahani ko ek saal ke andar khatam karne ki koshish man me baith gai hai. Lekin ab se dhyaan rahega ki raftaar tej karni hai toh sirf updates ki. Story characters ki nahi. Aapka bahut shukriya Jo aapne itne shaleen tarike se samjhaya. Ye Mera likhne ka pehla anubhav hai toh in galtio se abhi se seekhne ki koshish rahegi.
kumarrajnish
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