Hello Enigma, i had been reading your story since a week, and i am able to complete only 35 updates of your Story. After reaching this far i was not able to let go the temptation of leaving a comment on your story. So Here is what i want you to know:
1. You are a superb writer. Your story have every thing in it. Its like a perfect dish. With a lot of romance, sex, a bit family drama, and a pinch of action and thrill. I think it is the perfect blend. And for the garnishing, the use of spiritual thoughts and the way you blend them in the story makes it awesome.
2. About the details. The way you work on the details and the explanation to the fraction of the details, simply makes it LIVE. I feel like i am able to live and enjoy the life of Arjun(eventhough he is male). And that's your most important quality. To make the readers not just read your work but to feel it.
3. If i go into the comparison, then i must tell you, you are a professional writer. And so it would be unwise to compare you with the writers here. And belive me because i am not "frog of the well", i had been reading all sorts of stories and novels since the age of 5. So when i present you as a professional writer, i really mean it, and you must take it as a complement.
And i think your intro, at the start of this thread, as a amateur writer just shows your humbleness.
4. About your language. You have a great command over the language, both hindi and English. And when you write in any one language, i had seen that, you make sure, not to use the words of any other language in that.
Although there a some words (like "faarig"), but i think apart from that it is very skillful writing.
5. Like i said earlier, You are very descriptive. Like many other writers you could have also skipped the conversations, training and lectures etc., but you choose not to do that. And i think this is what makes your story, "our story". The way you describe the daily training, boxing training, spritual lectures, show how much you know about that thing and makes us more and more attracted towards it.
The why you shows the practicality of the spritual thoughts is mind blowing.
Conversations are also very beautiful. Keep it up.
6. About the character. I think the way you are building the lead characters is marvelous. Arjun's character is very inspiring.
How smoothly he accepted his boarding school days (his "vanvas"), that seen was very touching. These things make his character more inspiring and shows how much mentally stable he is. Thats just wonderful.
Other characters (male) are very strong too. It is very rare to see such strong male characters in this kind of a story.
Writing a love story is easy. Writing 2 is a bit difficult. But writing sooooo many love storys in the same story is a humungous task. And you are doing it very smoothly and at the same time you are able to maintain the uniqueness of each character. Hats off to you.
And lastly about your updates, they are verrrrry looong and regular. For Giving such long updates and regularly, i am speechless.
Thanks for bringing such a great story to us....
