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Apki story super se bi uper hai bahut bahut bahut acha laga story muje tho
But.....
Ek shikayat hai apse shikayat itna bada nahi chota sa hai bas
Arjun ki virginity (jo uski life ki pehli sex ya chudayi)ko malti jo paisonke liye jism bechti usse nahi kulvana chahiye tha
Or jyoti ke saath kar sakte the usse koi bada antar nahi padta kyunki wo ek kunwari ladki thi
Agar kunwari naa bi hota tho koi fark nahi padta or baki kahi bi koi bi knkad nahi tha poora saaf sutra tha
Jo hogaya so hogaya insaan hai chook ho jaati hai
Yaha sirf meri taraf se ye baat galat lagi hai baki readers ki muje nahi pata
Ham comment karte hame kaisa laga kya hona chahiye tha or kya nahi hona chahiye tha ye sab batana hamara kartavya tha tho bata diya
bura laga tho nath mastak ke saath maafi chahtha hu i am sorry and thank you itni achi story ke liye
But.....
Ek shikayat hai apse shikayat itna bada nahi chota sa hai bas
Arjun ki virginity (jo uski life ki pehli sex ya chudayi)ko malti jo paisonke liye jism bechti usse nahi kulvana chahiye tha
Or jyoti ke saath kar sakte the usse koi bada antar nahi padta kyunki wo ek kunwari ladki thi
Agar kunwari naa bi hota tho koi fark nahi padta or baki kahi bi koi bi knkad nahi tha poora saaf sutra tha
Jo hogaya so hogaya insaan hai chook ho jaati hai
Yaha sirf meri taraf se ye baat galat lagi hai baki readers ki muje nahi pata
Ham comment karte hame kaisa laga kya hona chahiye tha or kya nahi hona chahiye tha ye sab batana hamara kartavya tha tho bata diya
bura laga tho nath mastak ke saath maafi chahtha hu i am sorry and thank you itni achi story ke liye
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Aapka review dekh bahut atcha mehsoos hua. Aisa lag Raha hai ke kuch had Tak bhi likhne ki koshish me aage badh Raha hu. Sir aapki kahani padhne ke baad he yaha apni id banaai thi.
Rahi baat Arjun ki virginity wale bhaag ki toh mujhe uske charitra ko ek Roop Dena tha. Sex ka aisa introduction jisme mukhya Patra ko sahi aur galat ka pata lage. Galat kaam hamesha aasani se kia jaa sakta hai lekin Sacha kaam karne me mehnat lagti hai. Uske kirdaar ko ye ehsaas har us samay ho jab usko pyaar aur vaasna me se ek la chunav karna pade. Aur jaisa shirshak hai toh usko apna pehla kadam har baar galat kaam se rokne me madad Kare.
Bas yahi kaaran tha Maalti wale scene ke piche. Koshish karunga ki ek atchi kahani likh saku.
Tahe-dil se aapka shukriya itne atche se baat kehne ka.
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