Sabse pehle congratulations aapki pehli story ke liye...
Kuch kamiya lagi h is story me mujhe I think aap ise positive way me lenge...
Halaki kisi ke kaam me galtiya nikalna to aasan h lekin jb aap khud us kaam ko karege to tb kisi ki mehnat ka pata chalta h...
Pehli story aap ki bahot acchi h lekin kafi fast ja rahi h...
Dusri mana hero ke sath uski family ne bahut galat kiya lekin 1-2salo ki nafrat uske 16salo ke pyar ko puri trha mita dena ye kuch jyada hi ho gaya...
Baki brother ye aap ki rachna h ise mujh se behtar aap hi samajh sakte h...
THANKS FOR THIS GREAT STORY!!!