Fantasy Pyare Rishte - Bhai Bahan Ki Pavitra Prem Ka Ek Safar (part 1 and 2 completed) part 3 in running (restart)
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Hello herry bhai....
Finally I'm here......
First fo all .....a heart full thanks for giving us all........a very good story to read....
Thank you bro.....
As I said....I'll review whenever I'll read....
So maine story complete kar hee li.....
And believe me....you wrote a very nice story.....
OR rahi reviews ki baat to mai iss story par bhi wahi 2 review dunga....
First one.....the positive side.....
And tha other one is....negative side....(which can't consider as negative side....we can say.....aammm....some deficiencies and some kind of.....repeatatio( adaptation)......and so and so.....
you can understand....
So agar aap agree ho to mai evening tak reviews du..??..
And once again thanks.....
Finally I'm here......
First fo all .....a heart full thanks for giving us all........a very good story to read....
Thank you bro.....
As I said....I'll review whenever I'll read....
So maine story complete kar hee li.....
And believe me....you wrote a very nice story.....
OR rahi reviews ki baat to mai iss story par bhi wahi 2 review dunga....
First one.....the positive side.....
And tha other one is....negative side....(which can't consider as negative side....we can say.....aammm....some deficiencies and some kind of.....repeatatio( adaptation)......and so and so.....
you can understand....
So agar aap agree ho to mai evening tak reviews du..??..
And once again thanks.....
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Superb update. Chalo ek Kaal ka raaz to open howa aur Maya logo ko bhi sudhar diya.
Jyoti ne Radha ko kuch had tak maafi de hi di hai dekhte hai behne mil ke kaise Karan ko manane ka mission pura karti hai.
Jyoti ne Radha ko kuch had tak maafi de hi di hai dekhte hai behne mil ke kaise Karan ko manane ka mission pura karti hai.
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First let me clear.....I'll not say a single word.....about mythology.....because that is out of my mind....and i don't believe in such things....and also I'm out of that phenomena.......so we should leave that topic.....
And now let's talk about the other sides of story.....
First of all.....plot.....
Good story plot...and different also...like you introduce hero and heroine both.....like a common man ....that is the best....
Aapki story ka emotional part kaafi strong rakha hai aapne....jo ki apne aap me hee ak plus point hai or bahut hee achchi writing ka ak namuna hai.....
Chahe phir wo story ka koi bhi character ho.....sabhi k emotions ko kaafi achche se dikhaya hai....weather it's.....karan....jyoti...sonam.....kavya.....garima.and there friends or relatives all....
And mostly two moments in hole story......first jyoti and Karan's childhood part......very emotional ......second one......viraaj and maya's so called plan execution....and botha lead characters death......
That both moments...woooooo......what I say......what I say.....brilliant........i mean......brilliantly executed......
And its like a example for.....emotional dramatic phase writing......love that....really....
The other things like...comedy.....action.....fun....fantasy....Thrill....all good....
Let's talk about characters.....
Jyoti.....jyoti's most expressive thing....she is all in one.....a mom....a dad....a friend....a lover....a sister also.....
Ans awesome in all....you wrote a beautiful character of her...and she is perfect for karan as a heroine.....
Karan.....what I say.....karan to puri story me chhaya hua hai....awesome in everything and every condition as he is a hero....but also he is father mother and lover for jyoti....and all of his sisters.....
Sonam......ohh I really like this charactor.....and a best character in itself....and the only charactor who got my attention after leads......i love that character......really man....
Like she is nothing.....even not in blood relationship....with anyone....but her love for karan....jyoti.....and for all...... beyond all boundaries......
Every girl loves karan and jyoti.....because they help and save them....but she loves them only because she do......not for any reason......
Even aapne iss kadar ise saaf bataya hai....KI sonam ko jyoti ke replacement ke tor par dekh sakte hai.....agar kisi kaaran jyoti ko kuch go jata hai to.....sonam is the only one who can handle karan.....
Kaya....is also good.....but uska SAKHA kahna thoda odd lagta hai....ha friend ya MITRA kah sakte hai....that is also suitable....
Radha and Riya has also good part in story.....and they have beautiful places gray shade character after viraaj and maya's act.....and they ruined there life after that....
And Karan's decision.....he will not forgive.....I pike that......I totally like it.....and I'm with him in this.....matlab....
■■ MAINE ISS SITE....EVEN NOT ONLY THIS SITE XOSSIP OR BAHUT SAARI SITES PAR AK HEE CHIJ DEKHI HAI.....
GUESS WHAT.....
(sorry for these..... now I'm using filthy hindi words)
CHUT......PHIR CHAHE WO KAISI BHI HO.....KOI BHI HO.....KISI BHI TARAH KI HO......OR USNE HERO KI BHALE HEE KAISE HEE MAARI HO....BHALE HEE KHUN NIKAAL NIKAAL KAR MAARI HO.....OR AK BAR NAHI HAZAARO BAR MAARI HO....BHALE HEE USKI JAAN LENE KI KOSHISH KI HO.....YA LI HO.......LEKIN......LEKIN....
LEKIN CHUT NE HERO K PAAS AAKAR 2 AANSU......MATLAB BAS 2 AANSU TAPKAA DIYE.....
AND THAAAAAAATSSSSSSS IIIIIIITTTTTTT.....
2 AANSU CHUT KE......OR SARA KIYA KARAYA SAAF.....
HERO.....YA KOI BHI AASANI SE BHUL JATA HAI........ KI KYA HUA THA USKE SAATH.....BAS CHUT KE 2 AANSU OR SAB KUCH CLEAR......
OR YE CHIJ LAGBHAG LAGBHAG SABHI STORIES MAI HAI.....
AND THAT IS OUT OF MY MIND.....MY SYLLABUS....AND ALSO OUT OF MY INTELLECTUAL......
OR MUJHE TO YE SAMAJH NAHI AATA.......WRITERS ISE KAISE AASANI SE JUSTIFY KAR DETE HAI...OR READERS ISE ACCEPT BHI KAR LETE HAI.....
I MEAN REALLY.....????....■■
Is me mera ye matlab nahi hai....KI writers galat he ya readers galat gai.....lekin yar vishwas naam ki bhi koi chij hoti hai.....
VISHWAS KI DOR AK BAR TUT GAYI TO DUBARA KABHI NAHI JUDTI.....
CHAHE KITNI BHI KOSHISH KAR LO.....
OR AGAR JUDI TO USME GAANTH JARUR AA JAAYEGI.....
Jaise ki ak bar kisi tarah dubara hero ya jo bhi hai....usne us ladki ka vishwas kar liya....OR wo sab pahle ki tarah ho gaye.....
Lekin phir kya....phir kabhi bhi hero par dubara aisa ilzaam lagta hai....to bhale hee wo sabke saamne na maane....
Lekin unke dil me ak bar to jarur ye baat aayegi ki.....YAR ISS PAR PAHLE BHI AISA ILZAAM LAGA HAI....LAGTA HAI YE HAI HEE AISA....OR KISI KE SAATH TO AISA NAHI HOTA....
OR agar strong proof diya jaaye..bhale hee false...lekin sabse pahle unka hee vishwas tutega.....
AND THAT IS 100% TRUE...
Baaki characters ko bhi aapne kaafi achchi he tarike se dikhaya hai....phir chahe wo riddhima ho ya her dad....and a good villain.....
At last I just want to say.....a very good story.....and very well written....
Abhi bahut kuch baaki hai story me.....to keep it up.....keep rocking....and entertain us.....
And once again
Thank you bro......
And now let's talk about the other sides of story.....
First of all.....plot.....
Good story plot...and different also...like you introduce hero and heroine both.....like a common man ....that is the best....
Aapki story ka emotional part kaafi strong rakha hai aapne....jo ki apne aap me hee ak plus point hai or bahut hee achchi writing ka ak namuna hai.....
Chahe phir wo story ka koi bhi character ho.....sabhi k emotions ko kaafi achche se dikhaya hai....weather it's.....karan....jyoti...sonam.....kavya.....garima.and there friends or relatives all....
And mostly two moments in hole story......first jyoti and Karan's childhood part......very emotional ......second one......viraaj and maya's so called plan execution....and botha lead characters death......
That both moments...woooooo......what I say......what I say.....brilliant........i mean......brilliantly executed......
And its like a example for.....emotional dramatic phase writing......love that....really....
The other things like...comedy.....action.....fun....fantasy....Thrill....all good....
Let's talk about characters.....
Jyoti.....jyoti's most expressive thing....she is all in one.....a mom....a dad....a friend....a lover....a sister also.....
Ans awesome in all....you wrote a beautiful character of her...and she is perfect for karan as a heroine.....
Karan.....what I say.....karan to puri story me chhaya hua hai....awesome in everything and every condition as he is a hero....but also he is father mother and lover for jyoti....and all of his sisters.....
Sonam......ohh I really like this charactor.....and a best character in itself....and the only charactor who got my attention after leads......i love that character......really man....
Like she is nothing.....even not in blood relationship....with anyone....but her love for karan....jyoti.....and for all...... beyond all boundaries......
Every girl loves karan and jyoti.....because they help and save them....but she loves them only because she do......not for any reason......
Even aapne iss kadar ise saaf bataya hai....KI sonam ko jyoti ke replacement ke tor par dekh sakte hai.....agar kisi kaaran jyoti ko kuch go jata hai to.....sonam is the only one who can handle karan.....
Kaya....is also good.....but uska SAKHA kahna thoda odd lagta hai....ha friend ya MITRA kah sakte hai....that is also suitable....
Radha and Riya has also good part in story.....and they have beautiful places gray shade character after viraaj and maya's act.....and they ruined there life after that....
And Karan's decision.....he will not forgive.....I pike that......I totally like it.....and I'm with him in this.....matlab....
■■ MAINE ISS SITE....EVEN NOT ONLY THIS SITE XOSSIP OR BAHUT SAARI SITES PAR AK HEE CHIJ DEKHI HAI.....
GUESS WHAT.....
(sorry for these..... now I'm using filthy hindi words)
CHUT......PHIR CHAHE WO KAISI BHI HO.....KOI BHI HO.....KISI BHI TARAH KI HO......OR USNE HERO KI BHALE HEE KAISE HEE MAARI HO....BHALE HEE KHUN NIKAAL NIKAAL KAR MAARI HO.....OR AK BAR NAHI HAZAARO BAR MAARI HO....BHALE HEE USKI JAAN LENE KI KOSHISH KI HO.....YA LI HO.......LEKIN......LEKIN....
LEKIN CHUT NE HERO K PAAS AAKAR 2 AANSU......MATLAB BAS 2 AANSU TAPKAA DIYE.....
AND THAAAAAAATSSSSSSS IIIIIIITTTTTTT.....
2 AANSU CHUT KE......OR SARA KIYA KARAYA SAAF.....
HERO.....YA KOI BHI AASANI SE BHUL JATA HAI........ KI KYA HUA THA USKE SAATH.....BAS CHUT KE 2 AANSU OR SAB KUCH CLEAR......
OR YE CHIJ LAGBHAG LAGBHAG SABHI STORIES MAI HAI.....
AND THAT IS OUT OF MY MIND.....MY SYLLABUS....AND ALSO OUT OF MY INTELLECTUAL......
OR MUJHE TO YE SAMAJH NAHI AATA.......WRITERS ISE KAISE AASANI SE JUSTIFY KAR DETE HAI...OR READERS ISE ACCEPT BHI KAR LETE HAI.....
I MEAN REALLY.....????....■■
Is me mera ye matlab nahi hai....KI writers galat he ya readers galat gai.....lekin yar vishwas naam ki bhi koi chij hoti hai.....
VISHWAS KI DOR AK BAR TUT GAYI TO DUBARA KABHI NAHI JUDTI.....
CHAHE KITNI BHI KOSHISH KAR LO.....
OR AGAR JUDI TO USME GAANTH JARUR AA JAAYEGI.....
Jaise ki ak bar kisi tarah dubara hero ya jo bhi hai....usne us ladki ka vishwas kar liya....OR wo sab pahle ki tarah ho gaye.....
Lekin phir kya....phir kabhi bhi hero par dubara aisa ilzaam lagta hai....to bhale hee wo sabke saamne na maane....
Lekin unke dil me ak bar to jarur ye baat aayegi ki.....YAR ISS PAR PAHLE BHI AISA ILZAAM LAGA HAI....LAGTA HAI YE HAI HEE AISA....OR KISI KE SAATH TO AISA NAHI HOTA....
OR agar strong proof diya jaaye..bhale hee false...lekin sabse pahle unka hee vishwas tutega.....
AND THAT IS 100% TRUE...
Baaki characters ko bhi aapne kaafi achchi he tarike se dikhaya hai....phir chahe wo riddhima ho ya her dad....and a good villain.....
At last I just want to say.....a very good story.....and very well written....
Abhi bahut kuch baaki hai story me.....to keep it up.....keep rocking....and entertain us.....
And once again
Thank you bro......
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HA bro next update se regular hee dunga....lekin abhi to.....
Ab tak ki story ke liye de raha hu.....
Ak review de diya hai....ak subah dunga...OK bro...
Thanks