Fantasy ? Raavan ? ( Ek Naam Ya Ek Razz )

[king of darkness0411]

Nice start brother but ek request hai ki story complete Karna
Na ki bich majhadar me band Kar dena
Jaisa aapne The king of death me Kiya tha

Story agar 100-110 update Ka ho to hi accha hai kyonki long Story aap complete Nahi karte hai

Aur readers ko aadhi-adhuri story padh Kar Maja Nahi aayega

Otherwise
Jaisi aapki Marji
Agar ise long story banani hai to pahle The king of death story ko complete kariye

Sorry for writer problem

Comment by RAJ

Thanks​

Thanks bhai par story purani hai king of death hi hai par ismein suruwat update alag honge

 

[king of darkness0411]

for new story thread

Thanks bhai par story purani hai

 

[king of darkness0411]

congratulations for new story

Thanks bhai par story purani hai

 

[king of darkness0411]

update aj rat tak

 

[win_sam201]

Nice update bro waiting for next

 

[Fighter]

Congress bro for new story

 

[Rohit1988]

update 1


To chaliye suru karte hai jese ki lagbhag har fantasy story mae hota hai universe ka nirman kese hua to yaha bhi wese hi hoga

To hum rahte hai earth par aur hamre earth ke alawa 8 aur grh hai aur hamara sun ( Suraj)

To aj se na jane kitno Samy pehle ( kya pata hamre universe ka nirman kis time hua hoga) jab kuch nahi bhi nahi tha us wakt sirf ek bahut hi chamkili urja thi ( isme har rang mile hue the)
Aur urja mae ek wisfot ( blast) hua aur wo urja na jane kitne hi bhago mae bat gaya par iske par ek pramuk urja pind ( jo ek ande jesa tha) iske 3 tukdo hye jinme jivan hua matlab jinhone apna rup liya
Magar usme bahut samya tha aur is samya sirf us paramuk urja aur unke hi jese urja ne rup liya jisko hum parampita ke nan se janege wo bilkul hi ek safed aur golden colour ki unki skin thi jo chamak rahi thi aur chamkile ball bhi aur unke saath unhi ke jese ek stri bhi bani jinko rani maa bolenge un dono ki ankhe band thi kuch samya bad unki chetna ka vikas hua aur unhone apni ankhe koli aur sabhi aur dekhne lage aur sochne loge ki - hame kisne banaya hai aur kis liye tabhi us urja se awaj aai

Urja- tumko mene janam diya hai baccho ek tarha se tum meri hi santan ho

Dono ne urja ko dekha aur juk gae

Urja- utho baccho aur jo bhi sawal hai tum dono ke man man mae bolo Aur haa tum dono pati patni ho

Parmpita- main jan gaya ki app ne hame banaya hai par kyu aur humko kya karna hoga

Urja- ab is universe ki jimedari tumko utani hogi aur ha ek baat dhyan rahe tum dono ke andar meri saktiya hai

Parmpita- tik hai magar muje uske liye kya karna hoga

Urja- tumko sirf intjar karna hoga in do urja ko dekh rahe ho

Paempita ke samne 2 urja ke gole the ek jo safed tha par puri tarha se nahi usme kuch kali roshni bhi thi jabhi dusre mae kali aur lal roshni jada thi

Urja- in dono se 2 jivan ka nirman hoga ek jisko tumhe lord king nam dena hoga aur dusre ko demon king ye dono hi is Universe mae achi aur buri sakti ke malik honge

Parampita - ji tik par duniya ke liye kya- kya lagega

Tab us urja ke anginat tukde the usnese bahut si galaxy ka nirmn hua aur sath hi unke andar taro, grh aur bhi bahut kuch par us pramuk urja se ek 7 rango ( 7 Rambo) ki roshni nikli aur us roshni ne rup lena suru kiya aur ek bahut hi sundar stri mae badal gai

Parampita- ye kon hai

Urja- ye hai prkriti ( nature) hai ye tumhari madad karegi is duniya ko chalne mae ye is puri duniya mae rahegi kisi na kisi rup mae

Aur fir wo nature kai alag alag urja se har ek grh mae chali gai

Parampita- tik hai par ab jivan ka nirman

Fir us urja ne apne andar se anginat chote chote roshni ( atma) jo ki alag alag jiv bane

Urja - ab jo main bol raha dhyan se suno ab in dono urja se jinka nirman hoga unki mili juli adat se ( achi- buri) se insano ki rachna karna aur mujhe ek vachan ( promise) do ki tum inko kabhi pata lagne nahi doge ki tumhare upar bhi koi hai inke liye sirf tum hi inke janamdata ho jawoo aur devo ka nirman karo jo in 5 tatwo ( element) par apna control kare

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In sab ke bad wo urja gaayab ho gya aur parampita aur unki patni ke liye us urja ne mahal ka nirman kiya

Samya apni raftar se chalta gaya aur earth par anyek ( deferent) prakar ke jivan bane aur khatam hua

Aur is bich demon king aur lord king ne parampita aur apni soch mila kar insano ki rachna ki aur un sabhi mae jivn us pramuk urja ( atma) se aai

Aur sun ko chod sabhi 8 grh mae jivan ki rachna hui

Par samya ne apna khel khela aur demon, lord ke bich dusmani badi ( ye dusmani kese hua isliye apko intjar karna hoga iska razz bahut bad open hoga)

To ab Chalate hain sirf 4 grh ke introduction par

1 Tha lighting grh - iska yesa nam is liye pada Kyuki yaha par Phoenix's ka Raz tha
( phoenix - ek yesa jiv jiska asli rup ek chil ki tarah hota hai aur iske pankho ki jagah agg hoti hai phoenix ek tarah se immortal hote hai Kyuki ye fir se apni rakh se wapas jinda ho jate hai inki kai powers hoti hai joki apko story mae pata chalge)

2 Tha lord grh- yaha par lord unki family aur unki Vishal sena ka razz tha Kyuki lord bhi us urja se baane the unke pass bahut si powers thi inki powers aur inki family ke bare mae dhire dhire apko pata chalega


3- Tha dark grh- ya Razz tha demon king unki family aur sena ka inke bare mae bhi baad mae pata chalega


4- earth - yani hamara ghar jaha par kisi ka raj nahi tha balki yaha sabhi jiv jantu aur insaan apne hisab se ji rahe the

Par samya fir badla aur insaan ke andar buraiyo ko apnane lage aur khun, lut- pat rep, jese crime hone lage demon king ki soch se kuch insaan ne kali takto ki puja karna suru kiya
Wahi lord king ki soch se achi takto ki bhi puja hui ( note yaha gods ki puja ka jikr nahi kiya ja raha hai)

Demon king aur lord dono hi duniya par raj karna chahte the par parampita unko rok diya

Samya badta gaya aur lord demon king ki powers bhi badti gai aur insano ka Lalach bhi aur aa gaya 21 century matlab science ka yug ab sab kuch badal chuka tha insaan ne ek dusre se age hone ki hod mae yese yese vinashak weapon ka nirman kar liya jinke upyog se sab kuch barbad ho sakta tha

Story to bahut majedar lag rahi hai aasha hai lambi chale or hame bahut kuch dekhne ko mile or update samaye pe aaye
Ham aapke sath hai
update thore bare rakhna esi ummid hai
God Bless u bhai ji

 

[king of darkness0411]

Update 2

Demon king aur lord dono hi duniya par raj karna chahte the par parampita unko rok diya

Samya badta gaya aur lord demon king ki powers bhi badti gai aur insano ka Lalach bhi aur aa gaya 21 century matlab science ka yug ab sab kuch badal chuka tha insaan ne ek dusre se age hone ki hod mae yese yese vinashak weapon ka nirman kar liya jinke upyog se sab kuch barbad ho sakta tha


Ab age chalte hai

Ab demon king bahut takat war ho chuka tha aur chalak bhi aur wo kuch soch raha tha

Demon king - hmm lord ne bahut si power jama kar li hai ab mujhe kuch yesa karna hoga ki lord aur uski ko sena ( angel) kaap uthe par kya

Kuch der sochna ke baad unko apne sabse budiman (mind) salahkar ko bula liya

Introduce- draco ? -
Wese to demon king ke pass mantri ki kami nahi thi par unsab mae draco sabse jyada budiman tha

Draco- maharaj ki jay ho muje yaha bulane ki wajah maharaj

Demon king - awoo draco betho

Draco apni jagha par beth jata hai

? demon king - draco tumko pata hi hai ki kya ho raha lord apni sakti badha raha

Draco- ji maharaj muje pata hai

Demon king - isliye maine tumko yaad kiya draco tumne hamesa muje ek sahi rasta bataya hai

( Note - dosto mera demon king ek bahut hi kunkhar raja hai par jaha jarurat ho wo apne logo se madad jarur leta hai )

Draco - sukriya maharaj apne meri itni tarif ki uske liye ( fir kuch de ? chup rahne ke baad ) maharaj ab samya aa gaya ki apko ek yesi power ka nirman ( invasion ) karna hoga jo ap ki tarah hi kun kar ho aur saktisali bhi par

Demon king uske par par usko dhyan se dekhne lage

Draco - wo ek khubsurat ladki ? ( sala tarki? ) honi chahiye ?

Demon king - kunkar aur chalak to tik hai par ladki kyu

Draco - maharaj aj tak apne jitni ko banya hai sabhi badsurat ? the aur ? unko dekh kar hi angel ko pata chal jata ki ye apki tarf se hai isliye ab hamko ek bala ki ? sundar ladki jisko dekh hi lalach aa jay yesa banana hoga aur isko hum earth par bejenge

Draco - ab mujh agya de maharaj aur meri batha ko dhyan de

Demon king sochne laga draco ki bato ko aur usko draco ki bate jach gai

Demon king - hmm draco ne sahi kaha mujh yahi karna chaiye

Par muskil ye thi ki uske pure grh mae yesa koi nahi tha jo ek beautiful ladki ho. Tabhi usko kuch yaad aa gaya aur wo turant utha aur apne gupat kamre mae gaya ( note - is kamre mae sirf demon king ja sakta tha aur koi nahi ? )

Waha usne ek kamal ( lots) full ( flower ) ko utha liya

( Note - to ab ap sab soch rahe honge ki is flower ka wo kya karga aur nahi soch rahe ho to scho? To ye flower demon king ko fairies queen ne diya tha ( iska intro update 3 main milega adha ? ) is flower main ye power thi ki iske istmal se demon king ek sundar ladki bana sakta jo uski beti hogi ( yahi shart rakhi thi fairies queen ne )

To demon king ne us flower mae apni kuch khun ( blood ) ki bundo ko dala aur sahth hi apni kali aur lal urja jo roshani ke roop main thi

Aur kuch hi palo mae uske samne ek bahut hi khubsurat ladki aa gai jo yesi dhikti hai



Ladki apna sar juka kar - mera kis kaam ke liye nirman hua hai pitaji

Demon king age bada aur uske Sir par hath rakh diya jiske karan usko kya karna hai aur kese karna hai iska gyaan mil gaya

Demon king - jaoo meri bacchi aur kahatm kar do mere dusmano ko jaao

Ladki - pita ji tik hai par mera koi naam bhi rakh dijiye

Demon king - jarur meri bacchi jarur tumhara naam hoga death queen

Death queen - sukriya pita ji ,

Aur wo chali gai ab demon king muskurakar

Demon king - mene apni chal chal di ab tumhari bari lord king ha ha ha ha





Death queen

 

[king of darkness0411]

Update 3 kal rat tak milega aur bad hoga

 

[ABHISHEK TRIPATHI]

Update 2

Demon king aur lord dono hi duniya par raj karna chahte the par parampita unko rok diya

Samya badta gaya aur lord demon king ki powers bhi badti gai aur insano ka Lalach bhi aur aa gaya 21 century matlab science ka yug ab sab kuch badal chuka tha insaan ne ek dusre se age hone ki hod mae yese yese vinashak weapon ka nirman kar liya jinke upyog se sab kuch barbad ho sakta tha


Ab age chalte hai

Ab demon king bahut takat war ho chuka tha aur chalak bhi aur wo kuch soch raha tha

Demon king - hmm lord ne bahut si power jama kar li hai ab mujhe kuch yesa karna hoga ki lord aur uski ko sena ( angel) kaap uthe par kya

Kuch der sochna ke baad unko apne sabse budiman (mind) salahkar ko bula liya

Introduce- draco ? -
Wese to demon king ke pass mantri ki kami nahi thi par unsab mae draco sabse jyada budiman tha

Draco- maharaj ki jay ho muje yaha bulane ki wajah maharaj

Demon king - awoo draco betho

Draco apni jagha par beth jata hai

? demon king - draco tumko pata hi hai ki kya ho raha lord apni sakti badha raha

Draco- ji maharaj muje pata hai

Demon king - isliye maine tumko yaad kiya draco tumne hamesa muje ek sahi rasta bataya hai

( Note - dosto mera demon king ek bahut hi kunkhar raja hai par jaha jarurat ho wo apne logo se madad jarur leta hai )

Draco - sukriya maharaj apne meri itni tarif ki uske liye ( fir kuch de ? chup rahne ke baad ) maharaj ab samya aa gaya ki apko ek yesi power ka nirman ( invasion ) karna hoga jo ap ki tarah hi kun kar ho aur saktisali bhi par

Demon king uske par par usko dhyan se dekhne lage

Draco - wo ek khubsurat ladki ? ( sala tarki? ) honi chahiye ?

Demon king - kunkar aur chalak to tik hai par ladki kyu

Draco - maharaj aj tak apne jitni ko banya hai sabhi badsurat ? the aur ? unko dekh kar hi angel ko pata chal jata ki ye apki tarf se hai isliye ab hamko ek bala ki ? sundar ladki jisko dekh hi lalach aa jay yesa banana hoga aur isko hum earth par bejenge

Draco - ab mujh agya de maharaj aur meri batha ko dhyan de

Demon king sochne laga draco ki bato ko aur usko draco ki bate jach gai

Demon king - hmm draco ne sahi kaha mujh yahi karna chaiye

Par muskil ye thi ki uske pure grh mae yesa koi nahi tha jo ek beautiful ladki ho. Tabhi usko kuch yaad aa gaya aur wo turant utha aur apne gupat kamre mae gaya ( note - is kamre mae sirf demon king ja sakta tha aur koi nahi ? )

Waha usne ek kamal ( lots) full ( flower ) ko utha liya

( Note - to ab ap sab soch rahe honge ki is flower ka wo kya karga aur nahi soch rahe ho to scho? To ye flower demon king ko fairies queen ne diya tha ( iska intro update 3 main milega adha ? ) is flower main ye power thi ki iske istmal se demon king ek sundar ladki bana sakta jo uski beti hogi ( yahi shart rakhi thi fairies queen ne )

To demon king ne us flower mae apni kuch khun ( blood ) ki bundo ko dala aur sahth hi apni kali aur lal urja jo roshani ke roop main thi

Aur kuch hi palo mae uske samne ek bahut hi khubsurat ladki aa gai jo yesi dhikti hai



Ladki apna sar juka kar - mera kis kaam ke liye nirman hua hai pitaji

Demon king age bada aur uske Sir par hath rakh diya jiske karan usko kya karna hai aur kese karna hai iska gyaan mil gaya

Demon king - jaoo meri bacchi aur kahatm kar do mere dusmano ko jaao

Ladki - pita ji tik hai par mera koi naam bhi rakh dijiye

Demon king - jarur meri bacchi jarur tumhara naam hoga death queen

Death queen - sukriya pita ji ,

Aur wo chali gai ab demon king muskurakar

Demon king - mene apni chal chal di ab tumhari bari lord king ha ha ha ha





Death queen

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