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Update 245 keemat Posted masti mai padhne ka bindass likes aur revoes pelne ka
Adultery Raj-- hero of the family
- Thread starterSandeep singh nirwan
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Superb update bro finally action packed update aane wala h waiting
Bahut besabri se update ka intezar
Wait update
Tiger 786
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Intezaar rahega bro
Mr.Nirwana....
Story ka plot is mind blowing and your narration is also superb. Mein pichle doh hafton se lagataar apki story padh raha hoon aaj jaakar latest update tak pahuncha toh apko badhayi dene aa gaya.
Aage jo bhi likh raha hoon please dil pe mat lena its just my point of view kyunki mein bhi likhta hoon par hindi mein utni pakad nahin toh only in my mother tongue kannada.
Story bahut hi acchi hai aur aapki presentation is also good par lagta hai apki ghar mein woh ekta kapoor ke serials kuch zyada chalti hai toh kuch jagahon par story ki kheencha tani hogayi.
Ek aur important thing.... Raj ko uske dadaji 5 saal keliye shiksha aur khud ko nikharne keliye ashram bejha tha par lahta nahin shiksha ka sahi
upayog kar raha hai because he doesn't seem to be strong enough mentally sometimes when u r fighting a huge battle mentally u should be very strong than physically.
Jab dushman se badla lena hi hai toh uske ghar mein jaa kar dhindora peetne ki kya zarroorat thi finish the job silently. Jab raj ko ya uske dadaji ko
khud nahin pata ki asli aur main dushman koun hai toh aisi mein khul kar samne anaa not good.
Pasupathi ke ghar mein ja kar usko chetawani dene ki bajaye silently kam karke anth mein samne aata toh accha hota. Its all just my way of
thinking donot take it seriously write the way you are writing the story but with minor changes that too if possible.
Finally dil se thank u dear friend for writing this wonderful story.
Story ka plot is mind blowing and your narration is also superb. Mein pichle doh hafton se lagataar apki story padh raha hoon aaj jaakar latest update tak pahuncha toh apko badhayi dene aa gaya.
Aage jo bhi likh raha hoon please dil pe mat lena its just my point of view kyunki mein bhi likhta hoon par hindi mein utni pakad nahin toh only in my mother tongue kannada.
Story bahut hi acchi hai aur aapki presentation is also good par lagta hai apki ghar mein woh ekta kapoor ke serials kuch zyada chalti hai toh kuch jagahon par story ki kheencha tani hogayi.
Ek aur important thing.... Raj ko uske dadaji 5 saal keliye shiksha aur khud ko nikharne keliye ashram bejha tha par lahta nahin shiksha ka sahi
upayog kar raha hai because he doesn't seem to be strong enough mentally sometimes when u r fighting a huge battle mentally u should be very strong than physically.
Jab dushman se badla lena hi hai toh uske ghar mein jaa kar dhindora peetne ki kya zarroorat thi finish the job silently. Jab raj ko ya uske dadaji ko
khud nahin pata ki asli aur main dushman koun hai toh aisi mein khul kar samne anaa not good.
Pasupathi ke ghar mein ja kar usko chetawani dene ki bajaye silently kam karke anth mein samne aata toh accha hota. Its all just my way of
thinking donot take it seriously write the way you are writing the story but with minor changes that too if possible.
Finally dil se thank u dear friend for writing this wonderful story.
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broWaiting for next update Sandeep bhai
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Thank you samar bhai ....apki behtrin umda pratikriya ke liye....
actually .....abhi kuch chije h .....number one abhi levels increase honge tab raj mai maturity bhi ayegi ....ye bus beginning h ....aur updates 250 plus jayenge toh just begining h galti karega dikhega aur abhi toh aur bahut kuch sikhna h like weapons hitec instruments ..upgrade etc ....
sath bane rahe .....
achinsaha
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Thank you samar bhai ....apki behtrin umda pratikriya ke liye....
actually .....abhi kuch chije h .....number one abhi levels increase honge tab raj mai maturity bhi ayegi ....ye bus beginning h ....aur updates 250 plus jayenge toh just begining h galti karega dikhega aur abhi toh aur bahut kuch sikhna h like weapons hitec instruments ..upgrade etc ....
Jo Wada Kiya woh nibhana padega
250 plus update bhai pura karna padega