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Thanks for Reading & SupportingAwesome update bhai,
padmini ke saundarya ka varnan aapne shandaar tarike se kiya hai,
chakor pakshi bhi uske roop se bhramit hokar use chand samajhane ki bhool kar baithe hai,
vahi mahal me heera mani par ek billi ne aakraman kar diya aur usase dar kar heeramani mahal chhodkar jangal ki taraf chala gaya,
padmini heeramani ke jaane se bahot dukhi hui hai,
vahi dusri taraf maharaj gandharvasen ashvamedh yagya karwane wale hai,
aur idhar jungal me heeramani ek shikari ke jaal me phans gaya hai, ab use samajh me aa raha hai ki apne gyan ke ahankaar ke kaaran usne bujurg pakshi ki baat nhi maani aur phans gaya,
ab in pakshiyo ko shikari se bachane ke liye yamraaj aaya hai,
vahi dark lok me paridhi ki dasha ko dekhkar Raj ki aankhe gusse se laal ho gayi hai ab to un rakshaso ko bhagwaan bhi Raj ke kahar se nhi bacha sakte,
aur iss bhediye ka kya hone wala hai ye to usne kalpana bhi nhi ki hogi,
vahi dusri taraf ghar me diksha puri nangi hokar bathroom me naha rahi thi aur Raj ka shikandar use aise dekhkar bagawat par utaru ho gaya hai,
ab lagta hai ki Raj aur diksha ke beach kuchh romantic sa hone wala hai,
Aur udhar priyadarshani to album me saajan ki photo dekhkar apna sudh budh kho chuki hai,
aakhir kar use maalum chal hi gaya ki Raj hi uska saajan hai,
dekhte hai ab aage kya hota hai,
Waiting for next update
Thanks for Reading & SupportingNice update
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- Update-160
- Superb & Fantastic update
- Divya aur Priyadarshini ki khubsurti ka behad akarshak varnan kiya hai
- Update ki kya tarif karu, shabd kosh me shabd bhi kam padne lage hain
- Sachche prem ki bilkul sahi vyakhya ki hai divya ne
- Heera mani aur divya ka conversation bahut shandar dikhaya hai
- Shayad ye Parrot hi saajan aur divya ke milan ka madhyam bane
- Priyadarshini mata ki tapasya me leen ho gayi
- Sarovar me sakhiyo ki bate ati uttam hain aur sahi bhi
- Ek mature writer ki tarah likhte hain aap
- Mrinal ka ek alag hi nirala andaz hai
- Priyadarshini ne shayad saajan ki vahi bachpan ki photo dekh li hai jiski vajah se uski bechaini badh gayi hai
- Overall Marvelous update
- Great writing skills
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- Update-161
- Divya ke soundarya ka aisa adbhut varnan dil ko mantra mugdh kar gaya
- Incredible, I don't have any words, ki kin shabdo me aisi bemishal upma ki tarif kar saku
- Har update ke sath kahani bahut hi dil ke karib hoti ja rahi hai
- Apki lekhan shaily aur shabd chayan ki kabiliyat bemishal hai
- Agar kahani se incest aur sex scenes hata kar isko print karke market me ye kahani aa jaye to poore desh me tahalka macha degi
- Is kahani ke upar banne wali film ke aage bahu bali bhi fail hai
- Heeramani ahankar me mouka dekh kar bhag gaya aur vaha shikari ke changul me phans gaya
- Lagta hai ab saajan ki entry ka samay aa gaya hai kahani me
- Raj ke raste me bhediya manav aa gaya
- Paridhi ki halat behad chinta janak hai
- Bhediya manav ne raj ke hath me apne daant gada diye hain, ab kya hoga....? kya wo bhi bhediya me badal jayega....ya ...kuch aur hoga...?
- Priyadarshini ko akhir uske saajan ka pata chal hi gaya, lekin uski halat is samay par kate pankshi jaisi ho gayi hai
- Excellent update, You are a Great writer
- Update char part me tha lekin sab ka end suspense ke sath
- waiting next eagerly
Thanks for Reading & SupportingSundar , Super fantastic , Mind Blowing update Bhai
To aapne hero ki entry kara hi di wo bhi Yamraj ke roop me interesting.
Ab lagta he do premiyon ke milan ka samay aa gya hai pr mujhe lagta aap kuch to dhamaal jajur karege.
Aakhir hum hum sabko bhi pata chal hi gaya paridhi ka ab to sab ki bend bajayega raj .
Intzaar rahega update ka...
right broBhai shayad aap bhul rhe hai ki Raj ne apne aap ko teen bhago me baata tha , Unmese se ek dark lok me lad rha hai or dusra gar par he jo udhar bathroom me gya tha...Ok bro
Thanks for Reading & Supportingbadiaya
Thanks for Reading & SupportingMast mast update