Just awesome and superb start! Please don't hurry up for early sex encounter. Please let there be slow and steady seductions by the main villain and heart and soul resistances by the female characters not to fall into villain's evil sex trap so easily. Please also add erotic and double meaning naughty conversations among the characters. Please don't involve multiple male characters to seduce and fuck the female characters. Please let only one single male characters to seduce and fuck the female characters. If you involve multiple male characters to seduce and fuck the conservative female characters like a cheap street slut, then the excitement and erotism of the story will be spoiled. It is just my suggestions. After all, it is your story and you have 100 percent right to write it according to your own way.
